[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Marketing Campaign

WIL: Conducting a good marketing campaign takes time and intense preparation.

My Choice: Marketing Campaign #6: Marketing to Producers

Strategy 1: Great Writing Is the Key to Success
Action: Complete and elevate my pilot episode, get good coverage, then get it ready for marketing.

Strategy 11: Send out Good Query Letters
Action: Get feedback, elevate if necessary, and get my Bible and QL ready for marketing

Strategy 7: Get a Recommendation
Action: Connect with my extensive network of producers and ask for genre specific introduction to their connections.

Strategy 8: Meet Producers on LinkedIn
Action: Expand my network of producers with the purpose of introduction of my new project

Strategy 14: Select Contests (Pitching Meetings w Network Producers)
Action: I may try to talk myself into pitching via well known pitching platforms

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Query Letter — Draft ONE

Ready for exchange. Here, or via email: TDLREALTY@GMAIL.COM

Title: STOLEN SENSES

Genre: YA Adventure Fantasy Show

What could be worse than causing a feud between the Greek and Hawaiian Gods?

Sola, an orphan Hawaiian teen, delves into a forbidden magic, inadvertently instilling herself with Zeus’ power and unleashing an ancient curse that plunges the divine and mortal realms into chaos.

Now that the fate of Earth hangs in the balance, Sola has to make a fateful choice

As she grapples with her newfound abilities, the Greek Gods scramble to mitigate the curse’s effects and protect their dominion. At the same time, Sola’s emergence draws the attention of the Hawaiian Gods, setting the stage for a divine showdown. Torn between the pantheons, Sola inadvertently banishes the ancient artifacts imbued with the gods’ powers, thrusting her into a quest to save both realms.

But can she handle the sinister force lurking behind the curse?

If you like the concept of STOLEN SENSES, I’d be happy to send you the pilot script.

Natalie Melvin

BIO: Natalie is an optioned screenwriter with two projects in development.

Contact Info:

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Target Market

WIL: I like going to the marketing stage. I’m quite familiar with this process and will be generating producers’/ production companies’ leads daily. Can’t wait.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Phone Pitch

WIL: It’s best to have all strategies ready, as no one knows which one may appeal to the producer, or add value to the pitch.

1. Four strategies to open my pitch:

Lead with credibility:
Aloha, I’m Natalie Melvin. I’m an optioned screenwriter with two projects in development. I have an Adventure/ Fantasy show called “Stolen Senses”. Can I tell you its concept in 30 seconds?

Lead with a great title:
Same as above

Lead with a strong business hook:
“Stolen Senses” is a four-quadrant Adventure/ Fantasy show with a unique blend of Hawaiian mythology, along with other major mythologies from around the world. It offers a fresh and captivating perspective on worldwide ancient myths rarely explored in mainstream media.
This can make it a must-watch for diverse audiences of all ages and interests who appreciate immersive storytelling experiences

Lead with a High Concept:
Aloha, I’m Natalie Melvin, and I have a serialized Star Wars in the Mythology World show.

Short synopsis if they ask:
"Stolen Senses" is a unique blend of Hawaiian mythology, along with other major mythologies from around the world following the journey of a Hawaiian orphan teen who inherits Zeus’ power and inadvertently triggers an ancient curse thrusting the mortal and divine realms into chaos.
She must forge alliances among warring pantheons of gods to bridge mortal and divine realms before the world ends – only if she can handle the sinister force lurking behind the curse.

2. Give us a one or two-sentence answer to the questions a producer may ask:

What’s the budget range?
Probably in the $$3-5 million range.

Who do you see in the main roles?
Sola – Zendaya
Kama – Tony Cox
Hecate – Nicole Kidman
Anteros – Theo James
Ku – Dwayne Johnson
Hera – Elisabeth Moss
Zeus – Jason Momoa

How many pages is the script?
55

Who else has seen this?
You are the first / Two more production companies before you/ etc

Why do you think this fits our company?
I like the XYZ show you worked on.

How does the movie end?
Despite all warnings and eminent threats to her life, Sola decides to rectify the chaos she caused. She harnesses the forbidden power of the necklace, hurtling herself, Kama, and Anteros into the unknown mythical realm.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Pitch Fest Pitch:

WIL: Just working on the assignment

Tell us your credibility.
Hi, my name is Natalie. I’m an optioned screenwriter with two projects in development.

2. Tell us your genre and title.
I have a YA Adventure/ Fantasy script titled “Stolen Senses”

3. What is your one or two-sentence hook?
"Stolen Senses" follows Sola, an orphan Hawaiian teen who inherits Zeus' power and inadvertently triggers an ancient curse, thrusting the divine and mortal realms into chaos. She must embark on a perilous journey through the worldwide mythology realms, forging alliances among warring pantheons of gods to restore balance and prevent the destruction of both realms.

4. Please give your one or two-sentence answer to each of these questions:

A. What is the budget range?
For the pilot episode: $5-6M.

B. What actors do you like for the lead roles?
Sola – Zendaya
Kama – Tony Cox
Hecate – Nicole Kidman
Anteros – Theo James
Ku – Dwayne Johnson
Hera – Elisabeth Moss
Zeus – Jason Momoa

C. Give me the acts of the story.

Teaser: Motivated by her quest to uncover the truth behind her mother's disappearance, Sola ventures into forbidden magic, leading her to an enigmatic encounter in the underworld.

Act 1: As the looming curse threatens both divine and mortal realms, Kahuna Uli warns Apollo against gifting Sola her mother's necklace, containing Zeus' stolen power. Disregarding the caution, Sola seizes the necklace, propelling herself to Mount Olympus.

Act 2: Tensions escalate as news of the curse spreads among the gods, sparking turmoil. Hecate plots to usurp Zeus, enlisting Anteros to allure Sola to Olympus. Meanwhile, Kahuna Uli dispatches Kama to safeguard Sola on the Hawaiki Island of Gods.

Act 3: Amid mounting tensions, Ku, the Hawaiian God of War, discovers Sola's pivotal role in preventing an impending conflict. Tasking Kama with eliminating her, Ku's actions set the stage for further strife. Anteros, employing his charms, complicates matters for Sola.

Act 4: With alliances shifting and betrayal lurking, Ku rallies the Elders for war against Zeus. Hecate and Hera seek powerful alliances while Sola, under Anteros' influence, inadvertently expels the gods' ancient artifacts, leaving them vulnerable to the encroaching curse.

Act 5: Uli unveils Sola's destiny and the dire consequences of wielding the necklace's power. Despite her efforts to rectify the chaos, Sola's actions only exacerbate the situation. Desperate, she harnesses the necklace's power, hurtling herself, Kama, and Anteros into an unknown mythical realm.

D. How does it end? (setup /payoff).
At the end of the pilot episode, Sola is propelled into her journey of self-discovery and the monumental task of uniting the warring pantheons of gods to restore balance to the divine and mortal realms.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Query Letter

WIL: I think I somewhat nailed the big picture of the show. It wasn’t easy, but I did it anyway. :0)

Query Letter

STOLEN SENSES

Genre: YA Adventure Fantasy Show

What could be worse than starting a feud between the Greek and Hawaiian Gods?

Sola, an orphan Hawaiian teen, delves into a forbidden magic, inadvertently instilling herself with Zeus’ power and unleashing an ancient curse that plunges the divine and mortal realms into chaos.

Now that the fate of Earth hangs in the balance, Sola has to make a fateful choice

As she grapples with her newfound abilities, the Greek Gods scramble to mitigate the curse’s effects and protect their dominion, while Sola’s emergence draws the attention of the Hawaiian Gods, setting the stage for a divine showdown. Torn between the pantheons, Sola inadvertently banishes the ancient artifacts imbued with the gods’ powers, thrusting her into a quest to prevent world destruction.

But can she handle the sinister force lurking behind the curse?

If you like the concept of STOLEN SENSES, I’d be happy to send you the pilot script.

Natalie Melvin

BIO: Natalie is an optioned screenwriter with two projects in development.

Contact Info:

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s High Concept /Elevator Pitch

WIL: Having a condensed concept and elevator pitch makes it easier to visualize its essence for a given time, especially if it is short.

High Concept:

In a world where ancient curses threaten to unravel the fabric of reality, one orphaned Hawaiian teen must harness forbidden magic and unite warring pantheons of gods to save both mortal and divine realms.

Elevator Pitch:

I am working on a YA Adventure / Fantasy show called “Stolen Senses”. It’s a fusion of Hawaiian with worldwide mythologies, following the journey of a Hawaiian orphan teen chosen to bridge mortal and divine realms.

With its timely exploration of identity, diverse cast, and celebration of cultures, it’s a first in blending mythologies offering broad audience appeal akin to the worldwide phenomenon of “Game of Thrones” infused with the heroics of “The Last Avenger.”

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Synopsis Hooks

WIL: Writing a query letter became much easier once I looked into the story's essence.

Title: STOLEN SENSES

Genre: One-Hour YA Fantasy /Adventure Show

List of Hooks: Ancient curse /Forbidden magic /Divine confrontation /Ancient artifacts / World Destruction/ Sinister force

Synopsis Draft 1:

What if you triggered an ancient curse that could destroy Greek and Hawaiian Gods?

Sola, an orphan Hawaiian teen, delves into a forbidden magic, inadvertently instilling herself with Zeus’ power and unleashing an ancient curse that plunges the divine and mortal realms into chaos.

Now the fate of Earth hangs in the balance

As the Greek Gods scramble to mitigate the curse’s effects and protect their dominion, Sola’s emergence draws the attention of the Hawaiian Gods, setting the stage for a divine showdown.

When the true stakes surface, Sola makes a fateful choice to bridge divine and mortal realms

She grapples with her newfound abilities, inadvertently banishing the ancient artifacts imbued with the gods’ powers, thrusting her into a quest to prevent world destruction. But can she confront the sinister force lurking behind the curse?

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s 10 Most Interesting Things

WIL: Having hooks and interesting information laid out gives a solid base and creative ideas for the pitch

1. Hooks:

A. Unique Villain and Hero: The uniqueness lies in the fusion of Hawaiian, Greek, and other worldwide mythologies, which sets the hero, Sola, and the villain, Ku, apart from traditional archetypes. Sola’s status as an orphan bridging mortal and divine realms, and Ku’s ambition to exploit ancient powers, offer fresh and multifaceted character dynamics. Hecate’s s uniqueness lies in her cunning and strategic manipulation, distinct from the more overt displays of power by other Greek Gods. As a master of magic and the mistress of crossroads, she operates in the shadows, pulling strings behind the scenes to further her agenda

B. Major Hook of Opening Scene: The opening scene’s major hook is the mesmerizing voice chanting an ancient Hawaiian legend, immediately drawing viewers into the mystical world of the story and setting the stage for the epic adventure that follows.

C. Turning Points: Several turning points include Sola’s discovery of her mother’s necklace, Hecate’s recognition of Sola’s growing power, and the activation of the ancient curse, each propelling the narrative forward and raising the stakes for the characters.

D. Emotional Dilemma: Sola faces an emotional dilemma as she grapples with her forbidden romance with Anteros, knowing that it complicates her alliances and motivations, leading to difficult choices and internal conflicts.

E. Major Twists: The inadvertent triggering of the ancient curse by Sola, the banishment of the Gods’ symbols of power, the artifacts, due to her use of forbidden magic, and the mysterious portal to a mythical world present major twists that upend the characters’ expectations and alter the course of the story.

F. Reversals: Sola’s use of forbidden magic inadvertently leads to unintended consequences, reversing her initial intentions and setting off a chain of events with unforeseen repercussions.

G. Character Betrayals: Betrayals occur as characters like Ku manipulate alliances and exploit vulnerabilities for their gain, leading to shifting loyalties and unexpected alliances throughout the narrative.

H. Big Surprises: The revelation of Sola’s true lineage, the unfolding prophecy about the curse, and the emergence of unforeseen threats from other mythologies serve as big surprises that keep viewers engaged and eager to uncover the next twist in the story.

2. Make a list of any other things in your script that could interest a producer.

Unique Concept: The blend of Hawaiian mythology with Greek and other mythologies offers a fresh and intriguing premise that sets the show apart from a typical fantasy series.

Strong Protagonist: Sola, as a teenage orphan grappling with newfound powers and a quest to unite warring pantheons, provides a compelling central character with a relatable journey of self-discovery and empowerment.

Rich Mythological Lore: The incorporation of Hawaiian legends and deities, along with well-known gods of other mythologies, creates a rich and immersive world full of potential for exploration and expansion.

High Stakes and Conflict: The looming threat of an ancient curse and the potential annihilation of both mortal and divine realms provide high stakes and intense conflict, keeping viewers engaged and invested in the outcome.

Character Dynamics: The complex relationships and alliances between characters, including Sola’s interactions with allies and adversaries alike, offer opportunities for rich character development and compelling interpersonal drama.

Visual Spectacle: From the lush landscapes of Hawaii to the divine realms of Greek, Egyptian, Indian, and other mythologies, the show promises stunning visual imagery and epic set pieces that would appeal to audiences seeking immersive fantasy worlds.

Emotional Depth: Alongside the epic fantasy elements, the show delves into themes of identity, family, and sacrifice, offering emotional resonance and depth that can resonate with a wide audience.

Timely Themes: Themes of unity, redemption, and the balance between power and responsibility resonate with contemporary audiences, adding relevance and depth to the storytelling.

Potential for Franchise Building: With its rich mythology and diverse cast of characters, the show has the potential to spawn spin-offs, tie-in media, and merchandise, offering long-term opportunities for franchise building.

Marketability: The unique blend of mythology, action, and drama, coupled with a strong protagonist and high production values, positions the show as a marketable and potentially lucrative property for networks or streaming platforms.

3. The 10 most interesting things.

Unique Mythological Blend: The fusion of Hawaiian and other world-known mythology creates a fresh and captivating world rich in diverse lore and deities.

Compelling Protagonist: Sola, an orphan teen with burgeoning powers and a quest to unite warring pantheons, offers a relatable and engaging central character on a journey of self-discovery and empowerment.

Epic High Stakes: The looming threat of an ancient curse and the potential destruction of mortal and divine realms sets the stage for high-stakes conflict and epic battles.

Complex Character Dynamics: The intricate relationships and alliances between characters, including Sola’s interactions with allies and adversaries, add depth and nuance to the storytelling.

Emotional Depth: Themes of identity, family, sacrifice, and redemption provide emotional resonance and depth, elevating the narrative beyond traditional fantasy fare.

Visually Stunning: From the lush landscapes of Hawaii to the divine realms of Greek mythology, the show promises breathtaking visuals and epic set pieces that immerse viewers in its fantastical world.

Timely Relevance: Themes of unity, power, responsibility, and redemption resonate with contemporary audiences, adding layers of meaning and relevance to the story.

Rich Mythological Lore: The incorporation of Hawaiian legends and deities, alongside well-known mythology gods, offers a rich tapestry of mythology to explore, providing endless opportunities for world-building and storytelling.

Marketability: With its unique premise, strong protagonist, high stakes, and emotional depth, “Stolen Senses” has the potential to appeal to a broad audience and become a marketable and successful franchise.

Franchise Potential: The expansive world, diverse cast of characters, and rich mythology lay the groundwork for potential spin-offs, tie-in media, and merchandise, offering long-term opportunities for franchise building and expansion.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Producer/Manager

WIL: I am interested in writing/producing my own concepts and prefer to work directly with producers and production companies.

How will you present yourself and your project to the producer?

I am an optioned screenwriter of feature and TV projects in fantasy, sci-fi, and thriller genres with a worldwide audience appeal currently having several projects in the development stage.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Marketable Components

WIL: I like dissecting my show into its most important elements.

1. Show logline: In a world where gods clash and fate hangs in the balance, a Hawaiian orphan teen harnesses forbidden powers to navigate treacherous alliances battling to avert the cataclysmic collision of divine and mortal realms.

2. 10 Components of Marketability:

1. Unique. What sets this project apart is its fusion of Hawaiian with other worldwide mythologies, creating a rich and diverse tapestry of gods, legends, and conflicts rarely explored in mainstream media. Additionally, the protagonist's journey as a Hawaiian orphan teen chosen to bridge the mortal and divine realms offers a fresh perspective on the classic hero's journey trope.

2. Great Title: Stolen Senses.

3. Timely: ”Stolen Senses” is timely as it addresses contemporary themes of identity, diversity, consequences of power, and unity through its blend of Hawaiian, Greek, and other mythologies. By intertwining mythologies, the show celebrates diverse cultures and perspectives, resonating with audiences seeking representation and inclusivity in media.

4. It’s a first. This show can be categorized as the "first" in several ways: It's the first to blend Hawaiian and Greek mythology with other worldwide mythologies in a contemporary setting, the first to feature a diverse cast of characters representing different cultures and backgrounds, and the first to explore the complexities of identity and heritage through the lens of ancient mythology.

5. Ultimate. Worldwide Mythology appeal

6. Wide audience appeal. "Stolen Senses" has broad audience appeal across all demographics, from children and families to teenagers, young adults, and even the elderly, thanks to its blend of adventure, romance, mythology, and cultural richness. It offers something for everyone, from captivating storylines to thought-provoking themes, ensuring widespread engagement and enjoyment.

7. Similarity to a box-office success. "Stolen Senses" combines the exploration of power struggles and intricate world-building of “Game of Thrones” with the heroic journey and supernatural elements of “The Last Avenger.”

3. The two most prominent marketability components of "Stolen Senses" are its uniqueness and wide audience appeal.

UNIQUENESS: The blend of Hawaiian, Greek, and other major worldwide mythologies.
This can be pitched by highlighting the show's innovative approach to storytelling, offering a fresh and captivating perspective on ancient myths rarely explored in mainstream media. Emphasizing the rich cultural backdrop and the infusion of diverse mythological elements can attract attention from audiences seeking original and thought-provoking content.

WIDE AUDIENCE APPEAL: Multi-dimensional characters, gripping storyline, and universal themes of power, betrayal, and self-discovery.
Pitching the show as a captivating blend of fantasy, adventure, and drama ensures its appeal to a broad demographic, including fans of mythology, supernatural genres, and character-driven narratives. Highlighting the show's ability to resonate with viewers across different age groups and interests can position it as a must-watch for diverse audiences craving immersive storytelling experiences.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Project and Market
WIL: Although I’m still working on my pilot, I am excited to start working on my marketing materials.

1. Title: STOLEN SENSES
Genre: One Hour Adventure Fantasy Show

Concept: In a world where gods clash and fate hangs in the balance, a Hawaiian orphan harnesses forbidden powers to navigate treacherous alliances, battling to avert the cataclysmic collision of divine and mortal realms.

2. The story’s appeal lies in its captivating blend of Hawaiian, Greek, and other Worldwide Mythologies, divine conflict, the power struggle, and a courageous orphan's quest to forge alliances across warring pantheons to save both divine and mortal realms from destruction.

3. Targeting PRODUCERS would be the priority. Producers have the power to green-light projects, secure financing, and oversee the creative and logistical aspects of production. By pitching the TV show directly to producers, there's a greater chance of getting the project off the ground and into production. Once a producer is on board, they can then collaborate with managers, actors, and production companies to further develop and cast the project. Therefore, focusing on producers initially can be the most effective strategy for advancing the TV show from concept to reality.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Teaser / High-Speed Writing

WIL: It wasn’t easy to steam through the scenes at a high speed, but I guess, I managed it somehow.

I also added the action scene introducing Protagonist-Antagonist which I planned to be revealed in a dialogue, but the way it intertwines with that scene has much better intrigue.

Former version:

1. EXT. CAMPGROUNDS, CITY OF REFUGE, HAWAII – DAY – 1

Characters: SOLA, ASH, POLLY, STORYTELLER

Mystery/ Strange Behavior/ Intriguing World

Description: SOLA, panic stroke, flees from an ominous unseen force, followed by the bewildered gazes of her friends, POLLY, and ASH.

Open Loop: What caused ancient Hawaiian people to fall from the sky?

Mystery: Sola is the only one who sees ancient people falling

Empathy/Distress: Sola is terrified of something unseen

Payoff:

Irony:

Setup: Why does Sola see what no one else can see?

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Actual Draft

TEASER

FADE IN

EXT. DARK RAINFOREST, UNDERWORLD – NIGHT

Drums roll at a distance, overlapped by Kahuna’s mesmerizing voice as she chants Hawaiian legend.

Lightning zaps Tiki torches. They ignite, swaying, as if in a dream, casting eerie shadows at a fragile girl’s FIGURE in a dark, hooded robe, slouched on an ancient obsidian throne.

She sits, head bowed over the pages of an open “Book of Spells” anchored on her lap by her ghostly bare-bone fingers.

KAHUNA (V.O.)

Long, long ago, before time was

given its meaning, people called

the Children of the Rainbow lived

in Heaven on Earth as immortals,

without concern or disease.

The Kahuna’s voice dissipates, swallowed by a gust of wind. It intensifies and pulls out from behind the Girl’s throne SOLA, a 16 y.o. Hawaiian girl, in a sports bra and jeans.

She clutches onto the throne, torn by the wind, dodging flying twigs and foliage as much as she can.

SOLA

Who are you..? What do you–

GIRL’S EERIE VOICE

Sola… Leaving so soon..?

EXT. CAMPGROUNDS, CITY OF REFUGE, HAWAII – NIGHT

The sound of waves beating the shore.

Lush overgrowth careens under the breeze in the glow of the bonfire’s flickering shadows.

A diverse group of Art Exchange STUDENTS sits on the large lava rocks encircling a middle-aged Hawaiian KAHUNA. She shuffles a few flaming logs with a stick, and:

KAHUNA

Those Children had an invisible link

with the Universal God force and could

travel upon the Rainbow to other worlds

and dimensions.

POLLY, (16), Goth clothes, makeup, and funky hair, bored, shares a large rock with ASH, (18), clean cut, eyes with depths beyond his years, enthralled with the tale.

POLLY

Ash, can we just skip–

Ash frowns pressing his finger to his mouth. Polly sighs.

KAHUNA

At nightfall, the Rainbow inverted itself

into a mirror, and the Children played with

their ancestors, hearing stories filled with

happiness and joy. Until…

EXT. DARK RAINFOREST, UNDERWORLD – CONT’D

Lightning strikes, followed by rumbles of thunder.

KAHUNA (V.O.)

One day, the kahuna children created

a silly concept called darkness to contrast

the limitless boundaries of their joy.

That night, the Moon goddess Laka Hina,

sojourned across the sky without the

Rainbow… The link was lost.

Dark, misty clouds converge in a vortex as they form into a gaping MAW. It expands out of proportion above Sola’s head.

KAHUNA

The kahunas who caused the ruckus,

pretended as though they still had a

connection with God, thinking they

were better than the others.

Sola shrieks, holding on to the throne as much as she can, then, — SNAP! She disappears, sucked into the Maw.

KAHUNA ( V.O.)

At that moment, a little black cloud

hovered over their heads… The

severing was set in stone.

The Girl sits as she was, bowed above the “Book of Spells.”

GIRL’S EERIE VOICE

(laughing echoes)

Until we meet AGAIN. Again. again.

END OF TEASER

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Setting Up The Future

WIL: I think it will be better to think of setups for the first season and the whole show when working on actual scenes of the pilot.

Teaser:

A. Possible reveal in a future episode: Sola’s hidden lineage and her connection to the ancient Hawaiian gods.

B. Setup: The mesmerizing voice chanting the legend subtly hints at ancient conspiracies and hidden agendas that will be revealed later in the season.

C. How it could be set up in the pilot: As the voice narrates the legend, the camera could pan over ancient artifacts or symbols related to Hawaiian mythology, creating intrigue about Sola’s origins and the secrets surrounding her.

Act 1:

A. Possible reveal in a future episode: Hecate’s hidden agenda to manipulate Sola’s growing power for her own purposes.

B. Setup: Hecate’s subtle manipulations and interactions with Hera foreshadow her larger role in the divine conspiracy.

C. How it could be set up in the pilot: Hecate’s expressions and dialogue could hint at her ulterior motives during her encounters with other gods, setting the stage for future conflicts.

Act 2:

A. Possible reveal in a future episode: The true extent of Ku’s plans to undermine the balance of power among the gods.

B. Setup: Ku’s actions and conversations with Kama reveal his ambitious schemes and desire for supremacy.

C. How it could be set up in the pilot: Ku could be shown plotting behind the scenes, subtly manipulating events to his advantage while maintaining a facade of loyalty to the other gods.

Act 3:

A. Possible reveal in a future episode: Anteros’ true identity and his connection to Sola’s past.

B. Setup: Anteros’ interactions with Sola and his involvement in Hecate’s plans hint at his hidden agenda and his conflicted loyalties.

C. How it could be set up in the pilot: Anteros could exhibit behavior or knowledge that suggests he knows more about Sola’s past than he lets on, creating intrigue about his true motives.

Act 4:

A. Possible reveal in a future episode: The consequences of Sola’s use of forbidden magic and its impact on the divine realms.

B. Setup: Sola’s struggles with her newfound power and the unintended consequences of her actions foreshadow the larger ramifications of her choices.

C. How it could be set up in the pilot: Sola’s experiments with forbidden magic could result in minor disruptions or manifestations of divine power, hinting at the chaos that will unfold later in the season.

Act 5:

A. Possible reveal in a future episode: The significance of the disappearing gods’ artifacts and the portal to a mythical world.

B. Setup: The disappearance of the artifacts and the mysterious portal serve as a major turning point, signaling a shift in the nature of Sola’s quest and the challenges she will face.

C. How it could be set up in the pilot: The pilot could end with a cliffhanger as Sola, Kama, and Anteros are drawn into the portal, leaving viewers eager to learn more about the mysteries of the mythical world and its connection to Sola’s destiny.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie added Empathy/Distress

WIL: I will add more empathy/ distress once I lay out the scenes and conflicts. I did the same for other characters which I will combine once I outline the scenes

For Sola:

Undeserved misfortune: Sola experiences undeserved misfortune when she is blamed for the chaos caused by the awakening of the ancient curse, despite her intentions being pure and her actions driven by curiosity rather than malice. This unfair attribution of blame adds depth to her character and elicits empathy from the audience.

External character conflicts: Sola faces external character conflicts when she becomes entangled in the power struggles and machinations of the Gods, thrusting her into a world of danger and uncertainty where she must navigate alliances and betrayals while grappling with her own burgeoning powers.

Plans that failed: Sola’s plans to uncover the secrets of her past and her missing mother through experimentation with forbidden magic ultimately fail when her actions inadvertently trigger the ancient curse, setting off a chain of events that she struggles to control.

Witnessing the pain of others: Throughout the pilot, Sola witnesses the pain and suffering of those around her, including the Gods whose realm is thrown into chaos by her actions, as well as her companions who are swept up in the turmoil of her journey.

Extreme consequences: Sola faces extreme consequences for her actions when she inadvertently banishes the Gods’ artifacts, setting off a cataclysmic chain of events that threatens to unravel the fabric of reality and forces her to confront the full extent of her power and its potential consequences.

Major loss: Sola experiences a major loss when she realizes the extent of the damage caused by her actions, including the loss of trust and stability in the divine realms, as well as the potential loss of her companions and loved ones.

Brings their wound present: Sola’s journey brings her own personal wounds and insecurities to the surface as she grapples with her identity, her past, and her place in the world, adding depth and complexity to her character.

Crucible: Sola is thrust into a crucible of danger and uncertainty, where she must confront her fears, navigate treacherous alliances, and make difficult decisions that will shape the fate of both mortal and divine realms.

Betrayal: Sola experiences betrayal when she discovers that those she trusted and relied on have their own agendas and ulterior motives, forcing her to question her alliances and motivations.

Forced decision: Sola is faced with a forced decision when she must choose between embracing her destiny and risking everything or retreating into obscurity and safety, each option carrying its own set of consequences and sacrifices.

Hurt those they love: Sola inadvertently hurts those she loves when her actions trigger the ancient curse and set off a chain of events that threatens the safety and stability of both mortal and divine realms, placing her companions and loved ones in harm’s way.

Emotional dilemma: Sola grapples with an emotional dilemma as she navigates the complex web of alliances, betrayals, and power struggles that define her journey, torn between her desire to do what is right and her fear of the consequences of her actions.

Exposed: Throughout the pilot, Sola’s true nature and potential are exposed as she confronts the challenges and obstacles that stand in her way, revealing her strength, resilience, and capacity for both greatness and fallibility.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Amazing Inciting Incident

WIL: I like the way Hal presented definitions of Act 1, not just as a normal life of the character in their status quo, but a cover-up for Midpoint; Midpoint, not just some turning point out of the blue, but a representation of the intriguing concept for the whole show; and Lock-in, as the no turning back situation. Brilliant game changer. Thanks, Hal.

1. Inciting Incident:

Sola’s inability to control her newfound power unleashes an ancient curse that affects mythical gods’ ability to protect Earth from Chaos

1. Components of the Inciting Incident:

Intriguing Concept: When mysteriously disappearing artifacts of mythical gods hinder their ability to protect Earth from Chaos, a Hawaiian orphan teen must forge alliances across pantheons to avert the annihilation of divine and mortal realms.

Act 1: Sola’s inability to control her newfound power unleashes an ancient curse that awakens mythical gods Midpoint: Sola learns a closely guarded prophecy about Gods’ imminent loss of power and their feud that threatens to obliterate humanity

Lock In: Sola must find the origins of the curse, and locate stolen artifacts of feuding Gods to save humanity

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Visually Appealing Bible

WIL: I stumbled upon an amazing artist who created a database of professional art perfectly matching my show. His illustrations are congruent and drawn with the same style and intensity. I’d like to tinker with the AI at some point, but for now, my Bible looks professional. Couldn’t be any happier.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Improved Pitch Bible

WIL: rethinking and starting over from ground zero is doable, even at this point, and is not as bad as I thought it would be.

Luv my new version

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Big Picture Components

WIL: Doing this assignment centered my attention around the main pillars of the show

1. BASIC SERIES INFO:

World: A mysterious realm where ancient gods from Hawaiian, Greek, Egyptian, and other diverse mythologies vie for supremacy, plunging both divine and mortal realms into perilous chaos

Main mystery: Sola’s relation to the pantheons of gods

Impossible Goal: reuniting warring pantheons of gods competing for supremacy

Main Conflict: an ancient curse affecting Gods’ powers

Second Mystery: How can Sola reinstate Gods’ power and bring peace to the realms

Season 1 Arc: From unleashing the curse to searching for its origins to bringing a temporary peace between the Greek and Hawaiian gods

Season 1 Protagonist Internal Journey: From Self-discovery, and self-doubt, to Embracing her Chosen One role

2. BASIC PILOT INFO:

Pilot Conflict: Sola’s inability to control her newfound godly power

Characters Introduced: Sola, Kama, Uliuli, Ku, Anteros, Hecate, Hera, Apollo, Zeus, Demigods

Inciting Incident of Season 1: Sola unleashes an ancient curse that diminishes Gods’ power and affects their ability to prevent chaos on Earth

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Episode Titles

WIL: Doing this assignment drastically improved my first seasons’ episodes’ titles.

First Season’s Episodes

Episode 1: The City of Refuge (former Cursed Awakening)

Episode 2: The Cauldron of Fate (former The Messenger)

<b style=”background-color: var(–bb-content-background-color); font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit; color: var(–bb-body-text-color);”>Episode 3: Trails of Enchantment (former Divine Machinations)

<b style=”background-color: var(–bb-content-background-color); font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit; color: var(–bb-body-text-color);”>Episode 4: The Mother’s Choice (former Veil of Deceit)

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<b style=”background-color: var(–bb-content-background-color); font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit; color: var(–bb-body-text-color);”>Episode 6: The Price of Black Magic (former Threads of Destiny)

<b style=”background-color: var(–bb-content-background-color); font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit; color: var(–bb-body-text-color);”>Episode 7: To Live or To Die (former Divine Discord)

<b style=”background-color: var(–bb-content-background-color); font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit; color: var(–bb-body-text-color);”>Episode 8: The Curse of the Blind (former Battles Beyond)

Episode 9: Trial by the Gods (former Eclipsed Allegiances)

<b style=”background-color: var(–bb-content-background-color); font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit; color: var(–bb-body-text-color);”>Episode 10: I, the Goddess (former Bound by Destiny)

<b style=”background-color: var(–bb-content-background-color); font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit; color: var(–bb-body-text-color);”>Episode 11: Way of Unrequited Love (former The Final Stand)

<b style=”background-color: var(–bb-content-background-color); font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit; color: var(–bb-body-text-color);”>Episode 12: Spoils of War (former Harmony Reclaimed)

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie presents non-stop intrigue

WIL: going backwards helped me elevate and condence seasons’ and episodes’ description. Getting there.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s TV Pitch Bible Investigation

WIL: I actually had to redo my whole bible including five seasons from the scratch because I found a better way to convey my main story congruently. It definitely took time and I fell behind, but I couldn’t move forward until I was happy with the whole story. Now it all makes sense.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Show Summary

WIL: I like having options to choose from. I tries pilot and season summary versions. Posting both.

Pilot Summary Version:

In the serene landscape of Hawaii, Sola, an orphaned teenager, navigates life with her adoptive family, unaware of her divine heritage or the ancient curse that lies dormant within her.

During a school trip to a sacred site, Sola inadvertently awakens the ancient curse, unleashing untold chaos and attracting the attention of both Greek and Hawaiian gods.

As Sola grapples with the consequences of her actions, she discovers her connection to a world beyond her wildest imagination, facing empathy for the mortals caught in the crossfire and distress over her newfound responsibilities.

Ku, a powerful Hawaiian deity, senses Sola’s awakening and sees an opportunity to tip the balance of power, setting in motion a divine conflict with dire consequences for humanity.

With the feud between gods escalating and the fate of humanity hanging in the balance, Sola must navigate treacherous alliances and unearth ancient secrets to prevent annihilation, but the true extent of the curse and its connection to her remains shrouded in mystery.

Can Sola harness her newfound powers and unite gods from two worlds to avert catastrophe, or will the ancient feud consume both realms in a cataclysmic war that spells doom for all?

Season Summary Version:

Orphaned Hawaiian teen, Sola, grapples with her ordinary life until awakening an ancient curse that imbues her with Zeus’ power, and thrusts her into a divine conflict between Greek and Hawaiian gods competing for world domination. Tasked with uniting gods to prevent humanity’s obliteration, Sola’s newfound powers attract attention of both warring pantheons, setting the stage for divine confrontations and unexpected alliances.

While Sola grapples with the weight of her divine responsibilities, facing conflicting allegiances, betrayals, and avoiding Ku’s traps, Hecate’s dark forces, fueled with Antony’s secret agenda, conspire to exploit her potential. As Sola delves into the mysteries of her lineage and confronts adversaries, Antony’s true identity as Anteros emerges, threatening to unravel her plans.

The escalating divine rivalry, sparked by Zeus’ infidelity, Hera’s unexpected alliances, and Hecate’s dark schemes, presents an insurmountable conflict with catastrophic consequences for both realms.

Hera’s unexpected alliances and Hecate’s dark schemes intensify the divine rivalry, adding layers of complexity to Sola’s mission.

As war erupts between pantheons, Sola must navigate betrayals and make sacrifices to prevent catastrophic consequences, with the fate of both realms hanging in the balance.

Can Sola navigate the web of divine conspiracies, make the ultimate sacrifice, and prevent the cataclysmic clash between pantheons, or will the gods’ feuds plunge humanity into eternal chaos?

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Five Seasons

WIL by doing this assignment is that I operate out of the perfectionist’s mode. I do have an insanely complex story based on mythological characters, and I need to make sure they are congruent with their existing, well known profiles.

1. Brainstorm to find the arc of the entire journey, from Season One to Five.

SEASON 1 START: Sola inadvertently unleashes an ancient curse that imbues her with Zeus’ power and has to learn to control it.

SEASON 5 END: Armed with her knowledge and experience, Sola bridges mortal and divine realms and brings peace to Earth.

2. Brainstorm the Stair Step version.

Each season:

Needs to have a major transformation

Is part of the huge transformation that happens over 5 seasons.

Raises the game.

Bigger Mystery: The source of the curse

Bigger Conflict: Sola’s magic power turns into a culprit for power seekers

Bigger Opponent: Sola’s magic ability becomes known to and desired by major Greek and Hawaiian Gods in their race for supremacy

Major Layer Exposed: Hecate, Hera and Ku pursue their own agenda

Exploring more dangerous ground: Loss of Zeus’ and Olympians’ power create chaos and disasters on Earth

Bigger arena for the fight: Mythical realm, witchcraft, and bizarre creatures

STAIR STEPS:

Season 1: Sola, imbued with Zeus’ magic power, struggles to control it

Season 2: Sola’s magic power becomes wanted by major Greek and Hawaiian gods pursuing world’s domination

Season 3: Sola’s magic abilities create more trouble

Season 4: Sola is torn between both warring pantheons of Gods

Season 5: Sola returns Zeus’ power and restores order on Earth and mythical realms

3. For each season, brainstorm the Building Blocks.

Season 1: Title: The power of Zeus – blessing or curse?

A. High Concept or major hook of the season: Sola inadvertently unleashes an ancient curse that imbues her with Zeus’ power,, her burden and desirable force for power seekers

B. Big Picture Arc/Journey: Sola’s magic ability becomes wanted by Zeus’ opponents for their own interests

C. Main Conflict: Sola’s inability to control her new power while becoming a target for seekers of Zeus’ power

D. Mystery/Open Loops: Find the origin of the curse and stop its effect in time to save the world

E. Cliffhanger: Sola embarks on a perilous journey to find the source of the curse’s origin

Season 2: Title: The division of the Gods

1. High Concept or major hook of the season: Affected by the curse, Greek and Hawaiian gods pursue Sola to strip her off of Zeus’ power

B. Big Picture Arc/Journey: From confusion and fear of the curse to making alliances to win the war for World’s domination

C. Main Conflict: Sola is pursued by the seekers of Zeus’ power

D. Mystery/Open Loops: Division of the Gods in favor/ against the war

E. Cliffhanger: Traps set to lure Sola by he opposing pantheons of Gods

Season 3: Title: Rise of darkness

A. High Concept or major hook of the season: While Sola searches for the Gods’ Artifacts of Power, she becomes a target for elimination by the Gods who lost hope to gain Zeus’ power

B. Big Picture Arc/Journey: Having lost any hope to take control over the world, the opposing camps of the Gods form alliances in preparation for the war

C. Main Conflict: Sola finds the Olympian Gods in the Underworld and meets Iris

D. Mystery/Open Loops: How can Sola resist Iris’ dark magic and free the Olympians

E. Cliffhanger: Iris strips Sola off her power and takes her place in the real world

Season 4: Title: On the brink of the war

A. High Concept or major hook of the season:

B. Big Picture Arc/Journey: From gathering forces to steak out of the pantheons of Gods

C. Main Conflict: Bedazzled by Iris’ dark magic, Sola becomes physically impaired

D. Mystery/Open Loops: How can Sola escape in time to prevent the war

E. Cliffhanger: Sola strikes an impossible deal to leave the Underworld for a hefty price

Season 5: Title: Family reunion

A. High Concept or major hook of the season: Defeat and victory of the Gods

B. Big Picture Arc/Journey: From fight to victory and reunion of Gods and mortals

C. Main Conflict: Sola faces off with Iris

D. Mystery/Open Loops: Hera conspires against Zeus with her powerful friends, Gods from other mythology

E. Cliffhanger: Is the peace still hangs on a balance?

PROMPT 1:

Season 1:

Beginning: Sola discovers her newfound powers and the responsibility thrust upon her, setting out to understand and control Zeus’ power.

Ending: She faces her first major challenge as the conflict between Greek and Hawaiian gods escalates, putting humanity at risk.

Stair Steps:

Bigger conflict: Sola learns of the ancient feud between the Greek and Hawaiian gods, realizing the magnitude of the task ahead.

Major layer exposed: The true extent of Zeus’ power and its consequences for humanity are revealed, deepening the stakes.

Exploring more dangerous ground: Sola delves into the mythical realms, encountering mythical creatures and uncovering hidden agendas.

Season 2:

Beginning: Sola embarks on a quest to find the source of the curse that awakened her powers, seeking answers and artifacts.

Ending: She confronts the dark forces behind the curse, but suffers a personal setback that leaves her questioning her abilities.

Stair Steps:

Bigger mystery: The origins of the curse and its connection to Sola’s past become clearer, leading to more questions than answers.

Bigger opponent: Sola faces off against powerful adversaries who seek to exploit her powers for their own gain, posing a greater threat.

Bigger arena for the fight: The conflict expands beyond the mortal realm as Sola navigates the divine realms, facing gods and monsters.

Season 3:

Beginning: Sola, with the help of her allies, continues her quest to gather the artifacts of the Olympian gods, facing challenges and betrayals along the way.

Ending: She obtains the final artifact, but at a cost, as she discovers the true intentions of those closest to her.

Stair Steps:

Major layer exposed: The complexities of loyalty and betrayal come to light as alliances shift and secrets are revealed.

Exploring more dangerous ground: Sola ventures into forbidden territories, encountering ancient guardians and divine obstacles.

Bigger conflict: The feud between the gods intensifies, with Sola caught in the middle of a divine power struggle with dire consequences.

Season 4:

Beginning: Sola faces a new challenge as she becomes physically impaired, forcing her to adapt and rely on her inner strength.

Ending: Despite her limitations, Sola reaches a pivotal moment where she bridges the mortal and divine realms, altering the course of the conflict.

Stair Steps:

Bigger mystery: The nature of Sola’s impairment and its connection to her powers become a central mystery, driving her journey of self-discovery.

Major layer exposed: The true extent of Sola’s role as the chosen one is revealed, as she learns to wield her powers in new and unexpected ways.

Bigger arena for the fight: The conflict reaches a climax as Sola confronts the gods in an epic showdown that will determine the fate of humanity.

Season 5:

Beginning: With the conflict reaching its peak, Sola and her allies face their greatest challenge yet as they strive to prevent the obliteration of humanity.

Ending: In a final showdown, Sola must make the ultimate sacrifice to save both the mortal and divine realms, leading to a new era of peace and unity.

Stair Steps:

Bigger opponent: Sola confronts the ultimate adversary, a force of darkness that threatens to consume everything she holds dear.

Major layer exposed: The truth behind the ancient feud is finally revealed, exposing the motivations and machinations of the gods.

Bigger conflict: The battle for world domination reaches its climax, as Sola and her allies fight for the future of humanity against overwhelming odds.

PROMPT 2:

Season 1:

Beginning: Sola discovers her newfound powers and the responsibility thrust upon her, setting out to understand and control Zeus’ power.

Ending: She faces her first major challenge as the conflict between Greek and Hawaiian gods escalates, putting humanity at risk.

Stair Steps:

Bigger conflict: Sola learns of the ancient feud between the Greek and Hawaiian gods, realizing the magnitude of the task ahead.

Major layer exposed: The true extent of Zeus’ power and its consequences for humanity are revealed, deepening the stakes.

Exploring more dangerous ground: Sola delves into the mythical realms, encountering mythical creatures and uncovering hidden agendas.

Season 2:

Beginning: Sola embarks on a quest to find the source of the curse that awakened her powers, seeking answers and artifacts.

Ending: She confronts the dark forces behind the curse, but suffers a personal setback that leaves her questioning her abilities.

Stair Steps:

Bigger mystery: The origins of the curse and its connection to Sola’s past become clearer, leading to more questions than answers.

Bigger opponent: Sola faces off against powerful adversaries who seek to exploit her powers for their own gain, posing a greater threat.

Bigger arena for the fight: The conflict expands beyond the mortal realm as Sola navigates the divine realms, facing gods and monsters.

Season 3:

Beginning: Sola, with the help of her allies, continues her quest to gather the artifacts of the Olympian gods, facing challenges and betrayals along the way.

Ending: She obtains the final artifact, but at a cost, as she discovers the true intentions of those closest to her.

Stair Steps:

Major layer exposed: The complexities of loyalty and betrayal come to light as alliances shift and secrets are revealed.

Exploring more dangerous ground: Sola ventures into forbidden territories, encountering ancient guardians and divine obstacles.

Bigger conflict: The feud between the gods intensifies, with Sola caught in the middle of a divine power struggle with dire consequences.

Season 4:

Beginning: Sola faces a new challenge as she becomes physically impaired, forcing her to adapt and rely on her inner strength.

Ending: Despite her limitations, Sola reaches a pivotal moment where she bridges the mortal and divine realms, altering the course of the conflict.

Stair Steps:

Bigger mystery: The nature of Sola’s impairment and its connection to her powers become a central mystery, driving her journey of self-discovery.

Major layer exposed: The true extent of Sola’s role as the chosen one is revealed, as she learns to wield her powers in new and unexpected ways.

Bigger arena for the fight: The conflict reaches a climax as Sola confronts the gods in an epic showdown that will determine the fate of humanity.

Season 5:

Beginning: With the conflict reaching its peak, Sola and her allies face their greatest challenge yet as they strive to prevent the obliteration of humanity.

Ending: In a final showdown, Sola must make the ultimate sacrifice to save both the mortal and divine realms, leading to a new era of peace and unity.

Stair Steps:

Bigger opponent: Sola confronts the ultimate adversary, a force of darkness that threatens to consume everything she holds dear.

Major layer exposed: The truth behind the ancient feud is finally revealed, exposing the motivations and machinations of the gods.

Bigger conflict: The battle for world domination reaches its climax, as Sola and her allies fight for the future of humanity against overwhelming odds.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Character Descriptions

WIL: Right now it’s hard to know exact character actions and arc, even for the AI, because I haven’t worked out the details of the pilot and season episodes. So, this assignment is just a generic description.

SOLA

Who is the character? Role in the show? Orphan teen, linchpin uniting gods, protagonist.

Noteworthy traits: Pragmatic, truth-seeker, imbued with power stolen from Zeus

Intriguing history: Hidden prophecy, ancient godly heritage, mother’s mystery.

Intrigue? Mystery? Unraveling prophecy, stolen divine power, mother’s disappearance.

How do they support or drive the conflict with others? Truth-driven conflicts, reluctant leader, divine power dynamics

Irony — Opposites or paradoxes that exist with the character: Irony of wielding Zeus’s power, committed to truth

Opposing agendas/etc. that naturally causes conflict with other characters: Clashes with gods, divine conflicts, reluctant hero

Unpredictable? Unpredictable alliances, defying divine norms, heart-rending sacrifices

Intriguing relationship with one or more characters: Complicated bond with Antony, secrets, divine connections

Character Description: SOLA

In the mystical tapestry of Stolen Senses, Sola emerges as the chosen orphan straddling the mortal and divine realms, bearing the weight of uniting warring gods. A sharp thinker with a penchant for truth-seeking, she grapples with the moral dilemma of balancing loyalty amid wielding powers that shape both worlds.

Unpredictable in her defiance of protocols, Sola’s journey is a resilient search for identity, shrouded in hidden agendas, unexpected alliances, and the secret of powers stolen from Zeus. As an orphan with a concealed lineage, Sola’s emotional depth unravels through her hope to fulfill destiny and fear of failure, masking insecurities behind a rebellious facade and escaping through forbidden magic to cope with the burdens of her chosen role.

START: Meet Sola, a relatable orphan navigating the challenges of adolescence with a touch of rebellious spirit.

MIDDLE: As she discovers her role as the chosen one, Sola faces the conflict of uniting warring gods, unraveling hidden agendas, and embracing her extraordinary powers, all while grappling with the complexities of trust and loyalty.

ENDING: In this captivating journey, Sola’s struggle becomes the linchpin between mortal and divine realms, promising a future filled with mythical intrigue, self-discovery, and the fate of humanity hanging in the balance.

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IRIS:

Who is the character? Role in the show? Crippled seeker of healing, antagonist

Noteworthy traits: Possesses potent dark magic, resilient, manipulative.

Intriguing history: Cursed past, seeks revenge, dark magical origins

Intrigue? Mystery? Mystery of dark magic, hidden motives, vengeful past

How do they support or drive the conflict with others? Aims to strip Sola’s power, antagonizes divine unity

Irony — Opposites or paradoxes that exist with the character: Irony of seeking healing through dark magic

Opposing agendas/etc. that naturally causes conflict with other characters:

Unpredictable? Unpredictable actions, moments of vulnerability, hidden motives

Intriguing relationship with one or more characters: Intriguing dynamic with Hecate, Sola, Antony, and other gods

Character Description: IRIS

In the intricate web of Stolen Senses, Iris emerges as the enigmatic antagonist, a crippled seeker of health and power fueled by a complex mix of revenge and vulnerability. Proficient in dark magic and tormented by the blurred lines between justice and retribution, Iris harbors a hidden agenda to exploit her powers for personal gain.

As the daughter of Hawaiian gods and Sola’s crippled twin sister, Iris adds a layer of emotional depth, with her quest for retribution, internal struggles, and a public mask concealing her true intentions, creating a character whose unpredictable actions and dark schemes cast a shadow of intrigue over the delicate balance between mortal and divine realms.

START: Enter Iris, a crippled seeker of health on a quest for power and revenge.

MIDDLE: Iris navigates a web of dark magic, hidden agendas, and a thirst for retribution, all while wrestling with the moral implications of her actions and the delicate balance between realms.

ENDING: In a world where power and vulnerability collide, Iris’s journey promises an exploration of strength, darkness, and the blurred lines between justice and revenge, offering a glimpse into a complex character whose choices will shape the fate of both mortal and divine realms.

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ANTONY (ANTEROS):

Who is the character? Role in the show? Sola’s companion with divine secrets, conflicted god

Noteworthy traits: God of unrequited love, empathetic, conflicted

Intriguing history: Tragic past, seeks redemption, divine love dynamics

Intrigue? Mystery? Mystery of cursed love, hidden divine identity

How do they support or drive the conflict with others? Supports and challenges Sola, divine redemption journey.

Irony — Opposites or paradoxes that exist with the character: Irony of a love god experiencing unrequited love.

Opposing agendas/etc. that naturally causes conflict with other ch: Opposes own godly duties, torn loyalties, redemption quest

Unpredictable? Unpredictable shifts, moments of vulnerability, divine complexity

Intriguing relationship with one or more characters: Intriguing relationships with Sola, Hecate, and other gods

Character Description: ANTONY (ANTEROS)

In the multifaceted tapestry of Stolen Senses, Antony, also known as Anteros, takes center stage as a pivotal Olympian God grappling with the complexities of love, redemption, and divine duty. An intriguing blend of an unrequited lover and a deity on a quest for forgiveness, Antony’s character introduces a unique paradox.

Cursed and torn between loyalty to gods and personal desires, Antony weaves an intricate narrative as he navigates divine conflicts and forms unexpected alliances. With his captivating mix of stoicism, vulnerability, and a hidden wound stemming from past mistakes, Antony becomes a compelling character, adding layers of emotional depth and unpredictability to the mythical world of the show.

START: Meet Antony, an enigmatic god of unrequited love torn between loyalty and personal redemption.

MIDDLE: Antony’s mysterious past, opposing agendas, and a complex web of divine relationships unfold as he grapples with the intricate balance between his divine duties, personal desires, and the pursuit of redemption.

ENDING: In a realm where love and duty intertwine, Antony’s journey promises an exploration of divine conflicts, emotional turmoil, and the quest for authentic redemption, offering a captivating glimpse into a character whose choices will reverberate across the realms.

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KAMA

Who is the character? Role in the show? Trickster, guide, protector, dwarf, divine emissary

Noteworthy traits: Versatile trickster, cunning, mischievous, audacious, resourceful.

Intriguing history: Cursed trickster seeking freedom, playful yet vulnerable.

Intrigue? Mystery? Mystery of Tiki curse, hidden divine vulnerabilities

How do they support or drive the conflict with others? Aids Sola, navigates divine conflicts, tricky alliances

Irony — Opposites or paradoxes that exist with the character: Irony of a trickster entangled in divine duties

Opposing agendas/etc. that causes conflict with other ch.: Balances loyalty and obligation, divine rivalries, secret goals

Unpredictable? Unpredictable antics, humorous facade, deeper responsibilities.

Intriguing relationship with one or more characters: Intriguing relationships with Sola, Ash, gods, divine beings

Character Description: KAMA

In the enchanting realm of Stolen Senses, Kama emerges as a mischievous and resourceful minor Hawaiian deity, tasked with a dual role of guiding and protecting Sola while balancing allegiances with powerful gods. This versatile trickster, known for his audacity and unpredictability, holds a secret vulnerability—cursed to transform into a wooden Tiki statue when he lies.

Kama’s character introduces a unique blend of humor, resourcefulness, and a perpetual struggle with past mistakes and obligations, making him an intriguing and relatable figure in the divine conflicts and conspiracies that unfold within the series.

START: Enter Kama, the mischievous trickster deity, juggling loyalty, debts, and the art of survival.

MIDDLE: Kama’s resourcefulness, hidden vulnerabilities, and a dual commitment to divine duty and personal freedom create a character entangled in divine conflicts, rivalries, and unpredictable alliances.

ENDING: In a world where trickery meets responsibility, Kama’s escapades and struggles promise a rollercoaster of humor, danger, and unexpected alliances, setting the stage for a character whose antics will shape the fate of both mortal and divine realms.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie is ready for feedback!

Would love to offer / exchange feedback.

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[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Creating Irony

WIL: AI’s suggestions gave plenty ideas for episodes. It also threw a lil compliment:

“Considering the unique elements of your TV series, here are more forms of irony that could enhance the narrative.

I also run the irony scenarios between all main characters, and generated more episodes and conflicts ideas.

GOT Season 1 Irony:

Situational Irony:

Ned Stark’s Fate: The honorable Ned Stark, known for his sense of duty and justice, faces a cruel and unjust execution in King’s Landing, highlighting the irony of his tragic end.

Dramatic Irony:

Jon Snow’s Parentage: The audience is made aware of Jon Snow’s true parentage, creating dramatic irony as characters in the show remain oblivious. This adds tension and anticipation as viewers wait for the revelation.

Verbal Irony:

Tyrion’s Wit: Tyrion Lannister’s sharp and witty remarks often contain verbal irony. His humor and sarcasm, especially in the face of adversity, serve as a contrast to the gravity of the situations he encounters.

Irony in Character Actions:

Cersei’s Manipulations: Cersei’s scheming and manipulative actions, undertaken to secure power for her children, ultimately lead to dire consequences for her and her family. The irony lies in her pursuit of protection causing greater vulnerability.

Irony in Relationships:

Sansa’s Dream of Royalty: Sansa Stark’s idealized dreams of marrying a prince and living a fairy-tale life clash with the harsh realities of her engagement to Joffrey Baratheon. The irony lies in the vast contrast between her expectations and the actual outcome.

Irony in Plot Twists:

The Death of Robert Baratheon: The death of King Robert Baratheon, initially portrayed as an accident while hunting, is revealed to be a result of political maneuvering. The irony lies in the unexpected nature of his demise and the true motives behind it.

Irony in Dialogue:

Eddard Stark’s Honesty: Eddard Stark’s unwavering honesty and commitment to justice contribute to his downfall. The irony is that his principles, which are typically virtues, become a vulnerability in the political landscape of King’s Landing.

Irony in Symbolism:

The Iron Throne Itself: The Iron Throne, a symbol of power and authority, is constructed from the swords of vanquished foes. The irony lies in the fact that this symbol of strength is also a seat of constant danger and political intrigue.

Irony in Relationships:

Daenerys and Drogo’s Marriage: Initially presented as a forced and uneasy union, Daenerys and Khal Drogo’s relationship undergoes an ironic transformation. The love and mutual respect that develop between them contrast with the expectations set by the arranged marriage.

2. My Show:

Character Irony:

Sola, the orphaned protector with Zeus’ destructive force, holds the power to harm those she’s destined to safeguard.

Iris, in her quest for healing, possesses the most potent dark magic.

Kama, tasked to kidnap Sola, becomes her protector.

Antony (Anteros), the god of unrequited love, seeks redemption from a lost love in his pursuit of Sola’s safeguard.

Hecate, a manipulative sorceress plotting end of patriarchy, empowers those she seemingly opposes.

Situational Irony:

City of Refuge Setting: A sacred place intended for protection becomes the epicenter of a divine turmoil

Sola’s Innate Power: Attempts to prevent a prophecy’s fulfillment accelerate its occurrence.

Plot to Overthrow Patriarchy: Hecate attempts to manipulate fate realizes that fate cannot be controlled.

The Olympian Gods’ Lost Artifacts: A revered artifact thought to contain immense power is revealed to be a symbol, not a source.

Kama’s Thievery: The key to resolving a conflict is concealed in an artifact thought to be insignificant.

Hawaiian & Greek Pantheons: Attempts to reconcile conflicting pantheons lead to unforeseen rivalries.

Plot Twist: A prophecy meant to save the world turns out to be the catalyst for its destruction.

Anteros’ Loss of Power: Betrayal committed for love ends up causing irreparable damage.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Big Picture Open Loops

WIL: Properly thought through and set up open loops help create intrigue and story’s season’s structure.

Assignment 1: GOT Pilot Open loops

Big Picture Open Loops:

Who are the White Walkers, why are they killing people, and what threat do they represent to people?

What happened to Jon Snow’s mother?

What happens if the Dragon awakens?

What happened to Targaryens and their kingdom?

Will Daenerys’ marriage help her brother get the Iron Throne back?

What secret had John Arryn discovered and died for, and who killed him?

Will Daenerys adjust to living her life Dothraki way?

Will Ned Stark be in danger as the King Robert’s hand?

Will Sansa marry Jeoffrey?

Will John Snow join the Night Watch?

Will Cersei and Jamie’s affair be revealed?

Small Picture Open Loops:

Will Brandon Stark survive the fall?

Assignment 2: My Show’s Open Loops Opportunities for Season 1:

Sola:

GOALS: Sola overhears Uli’s conversation with Apollo that hints at a hidden sanctuary where she might find crucial information about the curse. However, the journey is fraught with challenges, and reaching the sanctuary becomes a pressing goal.

CONSEQUENCES: The theft of Zeus’ power has inadvertently alerted other divine beings, including Hera, to Sola’s existence. As she struggles to control her abilities, the consequences of her actions escalate, drawing the attention of both allies and enemies.

SOLVING PROBLEMS: Sola realizes that breaking the curse requires unlocking the secrets hidden within her mother’s necklace. However, each attempt to decipher its magic unveils new layers of complexity, leading to unforeseen consequences and complications.

RELATIONSHIPS: Sola’s growing closeness to Antony triggers feelings of jealousy in Polly, complicating their friendship. Meanwhile, her interactions with Ash unveil hidden layers of their connection, raising questions about the nature of their feelings and shared destiny.

DANGER / SURVIVAL / RISKS: Sola’s quest takes her to the brink of the divine realms, where she must confront mythical creatures, ancient guardians, and powerful adversaries. The risk of succumbing to the curse amplifies, and Sola grapples with the question of whether the ends justify the means.

Polly:

GOALS: Polly, fueled by her obsession with Hawaiian myths, stumbles upon a prophecy that hints at a potential solution to the clash between the pantheons. Her goal becomes deciphering the prophecy and understanding its significance.

CONSEQUENCES: Polly’s secret infatuation with Anteros deepens, leading to emotional turmoil. The consequences of her unrequited love become more pronounced as Sola’s journey unravels the intricate connections between the gods.

SOLVING PROBLEMS: Polly’s knowledge of Hawaiian myths becomes a crucial asset, but the cryptic nature of the prophecies poses challenges. Her attempts to interpret the messages inadvertently set events into motion, creating a domino effect of complications.

RELATIONSHIPS: Polly’s loyalty to Sola is tested as she grapples with conflicting emotions. Her connection to Anteros becomes a double-edged sword, influencing her decisions and potentially putting her at odds with Sola.

DANGER / SURVIVAL / RISKS: Polly’s delve into forbidden knowledge attracts the attention of divine entities protective of their secrets. As she uncovers more about the prophecies, the risk of becoming entangled in divine conflicts escalates.

Kama:

GOALS: Kama’s mission to escort Sola to the Island of Hawaiian Gods faces unexpected challenges when he discovers a secret prophecy hinting at unforeseen consequences. His goal shifts to deciphering the prophecy and ensuring Sola’s safety, all while trying to delay fulfilling Ku’s demands for preventing Sola from successfully achieving her goals

CONSEQUENCES: Kama’s tricks and debts catch up with him, leading to a revelation that he unknowingly triggered events that intensified the war between the pantheons. The consequences of his past actions threaten to unravel the delicate balance between gods and mortals.

SOLVING PROBLEMS: Kama must navigate the treacherous alliances and rivalries between gods while fulfilling his duty to protect Sola. His attempts to outsmart divine beings lead to unexpected alliances but also sow seeds of discord.

RELATIONSHIPS: Kama’s allegiance to Ku becomes strained as he uncovers the true nature of Sola’s destiny. His interactions with Hecate, driven by mutual goals, create a complex dynamic that tests his loyalty and puts him at the center of divine power struggles.

DANGER / SURVIVAL / RISKS: Kama’s reliance on wit and trickery exposes him to unforeseen dangers. As the prospect of gods’ war intensifies, he must navigate the shifting allegiances, risking entanglement in divine conflicts that threaten his very existence.

Ku:

GOALS: Ku’s goal of leading the Hawaiian gods in the war against the Greek gods is challenged when he discovers a prophecy that hints at a potential resolution without further bloodshed. His goal transforms into finding a path to preventing peace between the pantheons. .

CONSEQUENCES: Ku’s aggressive pursuit of victory places him on a collision course with divine entities who question the morality of his methods. The consequences of his decisions amplify as the war unfolds, jeopardizing the stability of the Hawaiian realm.

SOLVING PROBLEMS: Ku grapples with the ethical dilemma of sacrificing his principles for victory. The revelation of the prophecy forces him to reconsider his approach, but the shift in strategy triggers internal conflicts among the Hawaiian gods.

RELATIONSHIPS: Ku’s relationship with Hecate becomes strained as her hidden agenda emerges. His interactions with Uli, a voice of reason and empathy, create tension within the pantheon. The evolving dynamics test Ku’s leadership and loyalty.

DANGER / SURVIVAL / RISKS: Ku’s commitment to war places him in the crosshairs of divine retribution. As the conflict intensifies, he faces the risk of losing not only the war but also the trust of his fellow gods.

Uli:

GOALS: Uli’s goal to protect Sola and guide her to the Island of Hawaiian Gods is complicated when she discovers a hidden prophecy that hints at a connection between Sola and an unknown deity. Her goal evolves into unraveling the mystery surrounding Sola’s lineage.

CONSEQUENCES: Uli’s role as a guardian takes an unexpected turn when he becomes entangled in the divine conflicts. The consequences of his allegiance to Sola extend beyond protecting her, revealing a forgotten power that could alter the balance between gods.

SOLVING PROBLEMS: Uli faces the challenge of deciphering ancient texts and prophecies to understand the true nature of Sola’s destiny. Her quest for knowledge leads her to question the motives of other gods and goddesses, introducing layers of complexity to the narrative.

RELATIONSHIPS: Uli’s relationship with Sola deepens as she unveils the secrets surrounding her heritage. Interactions with other gods, particularly Ku and Hecate, force Uli to navigate the intricate web of alliances and rivalries, testing her patience and diplomatic skills.

DANGER / SURVIVAL / RISKS: Uli’s involvement in the divine conflict exposes her to the wrath of gods with opposing agendas. The risks escalate as she becomes a key player in the unfolding events, challenging her ability to safeguard Sola and maintain neutrality.

Paul (Apollo):

GOALS: Apollo’s goal to protect the demigods seeking refuge on Refuge Island is jeopardized when he uncovers a hidden threat tied to the curse. His goal shifts to maintaining the sanctuary while uncovering the true source of the curse.

CONSEQUENCES: Apollo’s efforts to shield the demigods from divine conflicts result in unintended consequences. The consequences of his decisions lead to a revelation about the curse’s origin, linking it to events from the distant past and threatening the safety of Sola’s very existence.

SOLVING PROBLEMS: Apollo faces the challenge of reconciling his role as protector with the need to confront the growing danger. His investigation into the curse unravels secrets about his fellow Olympians, creating internal conflicts and exposing vulnerabilities.

RELATIONSHIPS: Apollo’s relationships with other demigods become strained as the truth behind the curse unfolds. Interactions with divine beings, including Hera and Zeus, force him to navigate conflicting loyalties and test his commitment to maintaining the island’s sanctuary.

DANGER / SURVIVAL / RISKS: Apollo’s efforts to shield the demigods put him in the crossfire of divine conflicts. As the curse’s true nature is revealed, he faces the risk of losing the very sanctuary he sought to preserve.

Tula (Laka):

GOALS: Laka’s goal to reunite with her twin daughters and protect them from divine conflicts is thwarted when she discovers the prophecy surrounding Sola’s destiny. Her goal transforms into finding a way to alter the course of the clash between pantheons.

CONSEQUENCES: Laka’s attempts to shield her daughters from the consequences of divine wars lead to unexpected revelations. The consequences of her choices intertwine with the fate of both Greek and Hawaiian gods, setting the stage for a complex family reunion.

SOLVING PROBLEMS: Laka grapples with the challenge of altering prophecies that seem inevitable. Her quest to change the course of events involves interactions with powerful beings, unveiling forgotten powers, and confronting her own past actions.

RELATIONSHIPS: Laka’s reunion with her daughters introduces tension as they grapple with the consequences of their shared destiny. Interactions with Zeus and Hades force Laka to confront her role in shaping the events that led to the impending clash of realms.

DANGER / SURVIVAL / RISKS: Laka’s involvement in divine affairs places her at risk of being caught in the crossfire. The risks escalate as she becomes a central figure in altering the course of a prophecy with far-reaching consequences.

Antony (Anteros):

GOALS: Anteros’ goal to break Zeus’ curse by winning Laka’s love sets the stage for a complicated journey. As his love for Laka is intertwined with the fate of both pantheons, new goals emerge, and the pursuit of love becomes a catalyst for unforeseen challenges.

CONSEQUENCES: Anteros’ quest for love has consequences that ripple through both the Greek and Hawaiian realms. The consequences of his actions create a web of relationships and conflicts, forcing him to question the true cost of breaking the curse and the impact on the balance between gods.

SOLVING PROBLEMS: Anteros faces the challenge of navigating the complexities of love and duty. His pursuit of Laka’s affection brings him into the crossfire of divine conflicts, requiring him to make decisions that will not only impact his fate but also influence the unfolding clash of realms.

RELATIONSHIPS: Anteros’ relationships with both mortals and gods become increasingly intricate. Interactions with Laka, Zeus, and Hecate expose layers of deception and hidden agendas, testing the strength of his alliances and pushing the boundaries of loyalty.

DANGER / SURVIVAL / RISKS: Anteros’ involvement in the curse-breaking quest exposes him to the risks of love turning into a weapon. The danger escalates as he becomes a pawn in a larger game, with potential consequences for both the mortal and divine worlds.

Ash (Asclepius):

GOALS: Asclepius’ goal to heal and protect becomes more complex as he discovers the intertwining fates of the Greek and Hawaiian realms. His goal expands to find a way to reconcile the conflicts between pantheons while preserving the delicate balance between life and death.

CONSEQUENCES: Asclepius’ actions in pursuit of his healing goals have unforeseen consequences on the mortal and divine realms. The consequences of his medical interventions and attempts to mitigate the curse’s effects lead to a revelation about the fragility of the cosmic order.

SOLVING PROBLEMS: Asclepius faces the challenge of healing wounds that extend beyond the physical. His quest for solutions involves delving into ancient lore, seeking guidance from mystical sources, and confronting the moral dilemmas that arise when life and death are manipulated.

RELATIONSHIPS: Asclepius’ relationships with mortals and gods become strained as the curse’s impact intensifies. Interactions with Hades, Zeus, and Sola force Asclepius to reevaluate his role in the unfolding events and confront the limitations of his healing abilities.

DANGER / SURVIVAL / RISKS: Asclepius’ attempts to mediate the curse’s effects place him at the center of divine conflicts. The risks escalate as he grapples with the ethical implications of his interventions, potentially jeopardizing the delicate equilibrium between life and death.

Hecate:

GOALS: Hecate’s goal to exploit the clash between Greek and Hawaiian gods to seize power is shrouded in secrecy. Her goal involves manipulating key players and events to establish a matriarchal dominion, setting the stage for a power struggle with unforeseeable consequences.

CONSEQUENCES: Hecate’s clandestine agenda has far-reaching consequences on the mortal and divine realms. The consequences of her manipulation create a volatile environment, with potential repercussions for gods and mortals alike, as she weaves a web of deceit to achieve her ultimate goal.

SOLVING PROBLEMS: Hecate faces the challenge of maintaining the illusion of loyalty while executing her hidden plans. Her quest for dominance involves intricate schemes, alliances, and the exploitation of divine conflicts, with each move bringing her closer to achieving or unraveling her ambitions.

RELATIONSHIPS: Hecate’s relationships with other gods become increasingly treacherous as her true intentions come to light. Interactions with Hera, Persephone, and Sola force Hecate to navigate a complex landscape of alliances and betrayals, where trust is a rare commodity.

DANGER / SURVIVAL / RISKS: Hecate’s pursuit of power places her in the crossfire of divine conflicts and mortal repercussions. The risks escalate as she becomes a puppet master in a cosmic game, where the line between victory and defeat is blurred by the unpredictable nature of gods and destiny.

Hera:

GOALS: Hera’s goals extend beyond preserving the Olympian order. The revelation of Zeus’ stolen power and the impending clash with Hawaiian gods prompts her to reconsider her objectives, introducing new dimensions to her goals and the preservation of divine harmony.

CONSEQUENCES: Hera’s actions in response to the unfolding events carry consequences that reverberate through the realms. The consequences of her decisions affect her relationships with other gods, challenging the foundations of trust and loyalty within the divine pantheon.

SOLVING PROBLEMS: Hera faces the challenge of adapting to unforeseen circumstances and protecting her divine legacy. Her quest involves navigating the intricate web of divine politics, making alliances, and confronting the moral dilemmas that arise as she redefines her role in the cosmic order.

RELATIONSHIPS: Hera’s relationships with Zeus, Hecate, and other gods undergo transformations as the clash of realms intensifies. Interactions force Hera to confront her assumptions about power, loyalty, and the sacrifices necessary to maintain divine equilibrium.

DANGER / SURVIVAL / RISKS: Hera’s involvement in the escalating conflicts places her in a precarious position. The risks escalate as she grapples with the repercussions of Zeus’ actions and the challenges posed by external threats, potentially reshaping the dynamics of Olympian authority.

Zeus:

GOALS: Zeus’ goals, initially centered on maintaining divine dominance, take a turn with the revelation of the curse and the theft of his power. New goals emerge as Zeus seeks to reclaim his stolen essence, setting the stage for a transformative journey that challenges his understanding of power and responsibility.

CONSEQUENCES: Zeus’ pursuit of his goals carries consequences that transcend the boundaries of the divine realms. The consequences of his actions create a ripple effect, influencing the relationships between gods, the balance of power, and the fate of both mortals and immortals.

SOLVING PROBLEMS: Zeus faces the challenge of reconciling his desire for dominance with the consequences of his past actions. His quest involves navigating the intricate politics of the divine realm, confronting the limitations of his authority, and making decisions that redefine his role in the cosmic order.

RELATIONSHIPS: Zeus’ relationships with Hera, Hecate, and other gods undergo profound shifts as the clash of realms unfolds. Interactions force Zeus to confront the consequences of his choices and the complexities of divine responsibility, testing the bonds that once seemed unbreakable.

DANGER / SURVIVAL / RISKS: Zeus’ involvement in the escalating conflicts places him at the epicenter of a cosmic storm. The risks escalate as he grapples with the repercussions of the curse, the challenges posed by external threats, and the potential loss of divine supremacy, reshaping the very foundation of Olympian rule.

Hades:

GOALS: Hades’ goals extend beyond his traditional role as the ruler of the Underworld. As the events unfold, new goals emerge, driven by a desire to navigate the changing dynamics among the gods, protect the balance of the realms, and secure the stability of his dominion.

CONSEQUENCES: Hades’ actions carry consequences that reach beyond the boundaries of the Underworld. The consequences impact relationships with other gods, potentially altering the perception of Hades’ realm and his role in the divine order.

SOLVING PROBLEMS: Hades faces the challenge of maintaining the delicate equilibrium between life and death amid the escalating conflicts. His quest involves navigating the complexities of divine politics, managing the influx of souls affected by the curse, and making decisions that redefine the Underworld’s place in the cosmic balance.

RELATIONSHIPS: Hades’ relationships with other gods, especially Persephone, undergo transformations as external threats and internal conflicts intensify. Interactions force Hades to reassess his alliances, confront moral dilemmas, and address the challenges posed by the shifting dynamics of divine power.

DANGER / SURVIVAL / RISKS: Hades’ involvement in the unfolding events places the Underworld at risk. The risks escalate as he grapples with the repercussions of the curse, the potential disruptions in the cycle of life and death, and the external threats that challenge the stability of his realm.

Persephone:

GOALS: Persephone’s goals, initially tied to her connection with the cycle of life, take on new dimensions. Motivated by the unfolding events, her goals shift towards protecting the natural order, maintaining harmony between gods, and preserving the integrity of her relationship with Hades.

CONSEQUENCES: Persephone’s actions carry consequences that extend beyond her personal domain. The consequences impact relationships with other gods, influencing perceptions of the Underworld, and challenging Persephone to confront the complexities of her divine identity.

SOLVING PROBLEMS: Persephone faces the challenge of reconciling her role as the goddess of spring with the unfolding conflicts. Her quest involves navigating the intricacies of divine politics, addressing the consequences of the curse on mortal and divine realms, and making decisions that redefine her position in the cosmic balance.

RELATIONSHIPS: Persephone’s relationships, particularly with Hades, undergo profound shifts as external threats and internal conflicts intensify. Interactions force Persephone to assert her agency, confront moral dilemmas, and address the challenges posed by the changing dynamics of divine power.

DANGER / SURVIVAL / RISKS: Persephone’s involvement in the escalating conflicts places her at the crossroads of mortal and divine realms. The risks escalate as she grapples with the repercussions of the curse, the potential disruptions in the cycle of seasons, and the external threats that challenge the stability of her divine influence.

Poseidon:

GOALS: Poseidon’s goals extend beyond his traditional role as the god of the sea. Faced with the consequences of the curse, new goals emerge, pushing Poseidon to safeguard the oceans from divine upheavals, navigate conflicts among gods, and secure his dominion over maritime realms.

CONSEQUENCES: Poseidon’s actions have consequences that ripple through the seas and beyond. The consequences impact relationships with other gods, altering perceptions of Poseidon’s realm, and challenging him to assert his influence amid the changing dynamics of divine power.

SOLVING PROBLEMS: Poseidon grapples with the challenge of preserving the balance of the oceans amid escalating conflicts. His quest involves navigating the complexities of divine politics, addressing the consequences of the curse on aquatic life, and making decisions that redefine the seas’ place in the cosmic balance.

RELATIONSHIPS: Poseidon’s relationships with other gods, especially those associated with water and sea creatures, undergo transformations as external threats and internal conflicts intensify. Interactions force Poseidon to reassess alliances, confront moral dilemmas, and address the challenges posed by the shifting dynamics of divine power.

DANGER / SURVIVAL / RISKS: Poseidon’s involvement in the unfolding events places the oceans at risk. The risks escalate as he grapples with the repercussions of the curse, potential disruptions in marine life, and the external threats that challenge the stability of his maritime dominion.

Hermes:

GOALS: Hermes, the messenger of the gods, finds new goals emerging as communication among gods becomes essential in the face of the curse. His goals include maintaining order in divine communication, deciphering cryptic messages related to the curse, and preserving his status as a trusted intermediary.

CONSEQUENCES: Hermes’ actions in the realm of divine communication have consequences that impact the effectiveness of messages among gods. The consequences influence relationships, alter perceptions of Hermes’ role, and present challenges as he navigates the intricate web of divine information exchange.

SOLVING PROBLEMS: Hermes faces the challenge of deciphering messages related to the curse, ensuring accurate communication among gods, and addressing the consequences of misinformation. His quest involves unraveling cryptic prophecies, managing divine correspondence, and making decisions that impact the effectiveness of divine cooperation.

RELATIONSHIPS: Hermes’ relationships with other gods, particularly those reliant on his messenger role, undergo transformations as external threats and internal conflicts intensify. Interactions force Hermes to navigate diplomatic challenges, confront moral dilemmas in delivering crucial information, and address the challenges posed by the shifting dynamics of divine power.

DANGER / SURVIVAL / RISKS: Hermes’ involvement in divine communication places him at the center of potential misinterpretations, misunderstandings, and conflicts among gods. The risks escalate as he grapples with the repercussions of misinformation, potential breakdowns in divine cooperation, and the external threats that challenge the stability of his messenger role.

Iris:

GOALS: Iris, the goddess of the rainbow and messenger of the Olympian gods, adopts new goals as divine messages become integral to overcoming the curse. Her goals include ensuring the clarity and accuracy of divine communication, interpreting signs related to the curse, and preserving her role as a conduit between gods.

CONSEQUENCES: Iris’ actions in facilitating divine communication have consequences that impact the perception of divine messages. The consequences influence relationships, alter the effectiveness of communication among gods, and present challenges as she navigates the intricate web of divine information exchange.

SOLVING PROBLEMS: Iris faces the challenge of interpreting signs related to the curse, ensuring the accuracy of divine messages, and addressing the consequences of miscommunication. Her quest involves deciphering cryptic prophecies, managing divine correspondence, and making decisions that impact the effectiveness of divine cooperation.

RELATIONSHIPS: Iris’ relationships with other gods, particularly those dependent on her messenger role, undergo transformations as external threats and internal conflicts intensify. Interactions force Iris to navigate diplomatic challenges, confront moral dilemmas in delivering crucial information, and address the challenges posed by the shifting dynamics of divine power.

DANGER / SURVIVAL / RISKS: Iris’ involvement in divine communication places her at the center of potential misinterpretations, misunderstandings, and conflicts among gods. The risks escalate as she grapples with the repercussions of miscommunication, potential breakdowns in divine cooperation, and the external threats that challenge the stability of her messenger role.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Show Mysteries

WIL: Additional navigating questions helped to explore the depth of my concept.

Assignment 1: Example Show GOT S1.E8.

A. Shocking Event: Death of the King Robert

B. Secret: King Robert vested his power to Ned Stark

C. Investigation: Robert’s brother offered Ned his help to take over the throne

WWWWW and How:

Who: Cercei

What: Designated the Throne to her son, Jeoffrey

When: After King Robert’s death

Where: In the palace

Why: To protect her son and secure legacy of her lineage

How: Destroyed King Robert’s letter

Part Withheld:

Jeoffrey’s actual birth father

Mysteries:

What will happen to Ned Stark

Will Robb Stark be able to defeat Tywin Lannister

What will happen to Sansa Stark

What will happen to Arya Stark

Big Picture Mysteries:

How King Robert’s death will affect the realm

Assignment 2: My Show Mysteries

1. Create your Shocking Event Mystery and tell us the WWWWW and H, along with the part withheld.

1. Shocking Event: Sola’s supernatural powers manifest when she takes possession of her mother’s necklace, infused with the power stolen from Zeus, which, in their turn, unleash the curse. Hecate, armed with knowledge of the impending curse, uses her influence to manipulate Hera and Persephone into believing that overthrowing Zeus is the only way to prevent catastrophic consequences.

B. Secret: Hecate conceals her true intention to not just overthrow Zeus but to exploit the chaos and seize power for herself, creating a world of matriarchy where she holds dominion.

C. Investigation: Sola, with the help of her unlikely companions, Antony, Polly, and Ash, delves into ancient prophecies, and seeks guidance from Kama to understand her role and the impending clash of realms.

Who: Sola, a teenage orphan with newfound supernatural abilities; Antony (Anteros), Polly, and Ash (Asclepius), her unlikely companions; Hecate, an enigmatic and manipulative figure; Hera and Persephone, unsuspecting pawns in Hecate’s plan.

What: Sola inadvertently triggers her latent powers by acquiring her mother’s necklace, setting off the curse prophesied to clash Hawaiian and Greek God’s realms. Simultaneously, Hecate convinces Hera and Persephone to rebel against Zeus to avert the impending catastrophe.

When: Sola’s journey begins on her 16th birthday when the curse is set to be unleashed.

Where: The story unfolds on Refuge Island, a mystical haven protected by a location spell, and delves into ancient prophecies and realms of both Hawaiian and Greek gods.

How: Sola, guided by prophecies and the assistance of Antony, Polly, and Ash, starts to unravel the secrets of her heritage, the impending clash of realms, and the true motives behind Hecate’s manipulations.

Withheld:

The true origin and significance of Sola’s connection to both Greek and Hawaiian gods.

Hecate’s concealed intention to exploit the chaos and establish a matriarchal dominion.

2. Create the Over Time Mystery and tell us the WWWWW and H, along with the part withheld.

A. Cover-up: Hecate manipulates events to conceal her true intentions, diverting attention from her involvement in orchestrating conflicts between the gods.

B. Secret: Hecate secretly aims to exploit the clash between Hawaiian and Greek gods to create a global war, enabling her to seize power and reshape the world according to her vision of matriarchy.

C. Reveals: The revelation suggests a deeper, intertwined history between Hawaiian and Greek gods, unveiling secrets that have been obscured for centuries. Over time, Hecate’s double agenda is slowly unraveled as Sola, with the help of Kama, her team, and insights from other Greek and Hawaiian gods, discovers the true extent of Hecate’s manipulation and her plans for world domination.

Who: Sola, her team, Hawaiian & Greek Gods, and mythical creatures

What: Sola’s perilous quest to find the origin of the curse that threatens to unleash chaos upon both mortal and divine realms. The quest is not only about reversing Hecate’s magic but also about restoring the symbols of power to the Olympian Gods and, in the process, reconciling the warring Hawaiian Gods.

When: Sola’s journey begins on her 16th birthday when the curse is set to be unleashed.

Where: The story unfolds on Refuge Island, a mystical haven protected by a location spell, and delves into ancient prophecies, legends, and realms of both Hawaiian and Greek gods.

How: Sola, guided by prophecies and the assistance of Kama, Antony, Polly, and Ash, starts to unravel the secrets of her heritage, the impending clash of realms, and the true motives behind Hecate’s manipulations.

Withheld: Sola’s decision on the brink of the battle between the Greek and Hawaiian Gods.

The mystery of Sola’s mother’s disappearance remains unsolved

[Nat Melvin]

LESSON 6: Natalie’s Character Relationship Map

WIL: Character Relationship Map renders more depth into character relationship. The AI is still pleasantly keeping up with my story.

GOT: TYRION LANNISTER

Tyrion Lannister and Jon Snow:

Surface: Mutual respect and camaraderie as fellow members of the Night’s Watch.

Common Ground: Both feel like outsiders in their respective families and share a sense of honor and duty.

Conflict: Initially, Tyrion’s wit and Jon’s sense of duty clash, but they eventually find a mutual understanding.

History: They first meet at Winterfell when Tyrion visits as part of the royal procession. They later serve together at Castle Black.

Subtext: Both struggle with their identities and wrestle with their family legacies.

Relationship Arc: Starts as a tentative alliance, evolves into a genuine friendship built on trust and shared experiences.

Tyrion Lannister and Daenerys Targaryen:

Surface: Advisor and Hand of the Queen to Daenerys Targaryen, providing strategic counsel.

Common Ground: Both are outsiders with a desire to reclaim their birthright and prove themselves as leaders.

Conflict: Tyrion’s pragmatism sometimes clashes with Daenerys’s more idealistic approach to ruling.

History: Tyrion pledges his allegiance to Daenerys after fleeing Westeros. He becomes one of her most trusted advisors.

Subtext: Tyrion sees potential in Daenerys to be a just ruler, while Daenerys values Tyrion’s intellect and experience.

Relationship Arc: Begins as a transactional alliance, grows into a genuine bond of mutual respect and reliance on each other’s strengths.

Tyrion Lannister and Cersei Lannister:

Surface: Sibling rivalry and deep-seated animosity due to Tyrion being blamed for their mother’s death during childbirth.

Common Ground: Both are members of House Lannister, though they rarely see eye to eye on family matters.

Conflict: Cersei harbors intense hatred and resentment towards Tyrion, often plotting against him.

History: From childhood, Cersei has held Tyrion in contempt, viewing him as a stain on the Lannister name.

Subtext: Cersei’s disdain for Tyrion is rooted in her belief that he is responsible for their mother’s death.

Relationship Arc: Marked by a longstanding feud, it remains antagonistic and devoid of trust or affection.

Tyrion Lannister and Jaime Lannister:

Surface: Brotherly camaraderie and mutual affection.

Common Ground: They share a close bond as brothers and often find themselves aligned in family matters.

Conflict: While they care for each other deeply, they sometimes differ on matters of morality and honor.

History: Tyrion and Jaime have a history of mutual support and understanding, with Jaime often standing up for Tyrion within the family.

Subtext: Despite their differences, there is a profound love and loyalty between them.

Relationship Arc: Begins with a strong foundation of brotherly love, further tested by the complex dynamics of their family, but remains a steadfast bond.

ASSIGNMENT 2: My Show — Sola, Protagonist

Sola and Polly:

Surface: Childhood friends, united by a shared sense of adventure and curiosity.

Common Ground: Both harbor a deep fascination for Hawaiian mythology and its intersection with the divine world.

Conflict: Polly’s occasional jealousy towards Sola’s ancestry can lead to strained moments.

History: Grew up together forming an unbreakable bond.

Subtext: Polly’s admiration for Sola’s heritage is sometimes overshadowed by her own insecurities.

Relationship Arc: Evolves from childhood friends to indispensable allies in the quest to unite the gods, but not without ups and downs, betrayals and heartbreaks.

Sola and Kama:

Surface: Initially, a mysterious guide enlisted to bring Sola to the Island of Gods for protection.

Common Ground: Both driven by curiosity and desire to protect the balance between mortal and divine realms.

Conflict: Kama’s overconfidence and penchant for trickery can sometimes clash with Sola’s earnestness.

History: Kama’s initial trick on Ku leads to his servitude and eventually dual role in Sola’s journey.

Subtext: Kama’s fear for his own security and hidden sense of responsibility towards Sola often clashes in crucial moments.

Relationship Arc: Develops from a contractual duty to a deep bond forged through shared trials.

Sola and Anteros:

Surface: Sola’s protector, initially tasked by Hecate with watching over her due to her role in the war.

Common Ground: Both share a desire to find Sola’s mother, break Zeus’s curse, and restore Hawaiian gods’ power.

Conflict: Anteros’s inner turmoil, personal agenda, and guilt over past decisions may create moments of tension.

History: Anteros’s curse stems from his tragic love story intertwined with Hawaiian goddess Laka, Sola’s mother.

Subtext: Sola’s innate ability to heal Anteros’s emotional wounds becomes a pivotal element.

Relationship Arc: Evolves from a sense of duty to a profound connection forged through adversity.

Sola and Hecate:

Surface: Initially, an oblivious orphan teen whose curiosity leads to crossing path with Hecate

Common Ground: Both harbor a desire to challenge the established order of the gods.

Conflict: Hecate’s hidden agenda and manipulative nature may clash with Sola’s earnestness.

History: Their alliance emerges from a shared goal of challenging Zeus’s dominion, both for their own cause.

Subtext: Hecate’s feminist ideals and thirst for power add layers of complexity to their dynamic.

Relationship Arc: Begins as an alliance of convenience, but twists and turns may redefine their dynamic.

[Nat Melvin]

WIL: The right prompts make working with the AI truly enjoyable. I am stoked how close It follows my story, even on a deeper level.

Assignment 1: GOT Main Characters Internal Struggle

Character Name: JOHN SNOW

Situational:

Hope: Jon holds onto the hope of uniting the Seven Kingdoms and creating a lasting peace.

Fear: He fears being rejected and ostracized due to his status as a “bastard” and his true Targaryen lineage.

Motivation:

Want: Jon wants to be accepted, to find his place in the world, and to live up to the Stark name.

Need: He needs to grapple with his true identity and the responsibilities that come with it.

Mask:

Base Negative Emotion: Insecurity and feeling like an outsider.

Public Mask: Strength, honor, and a sense of duty.

Weaknesses:

Jon’s sense of honor and duty can sometimes lead to him making difficult, morally complex decisions.

Triggers:

Betrayal and feeling like he’s being kept in the dark about important information.

Coping Mechanism:

Jon tends to find solace in solitude and contemplation, seeking advice from those he trusts.

Character Name: DAENERYS TARGARYEN

Situational:

Hope: Daenerys hopes to create a just and prosperous kingdom for all, free from oppression.

Fear: She fears becoming like her father, the Mad King, and being consumed by her own power.

Motivation:

Want: Daenerys wants to reclaim the Iron Throne and restore her family’s legacy.

Need: She needs to balance her desire for power with a sense of compassion and justice.

Mask:

Base Negative Emotion: Anger and frustration at the injustices she witnesses.

Public Mask: Confidence, determination, and a sense of destiny.

Weaknesses:

Daenerys’ unwavering pursuit of power can sometimes blind her to the consequences of her actions.

Triggers:

Betrayal or any perceived threat to her vision of a just and liberated world.

Coping Mechanism:

Daenerys often seeks counsel from her advisors and values their perspectives in decision-making.

3. Character Name: CERSEI LANNISTER

Situational:

Hope: Cersei hopes to secure her family’s power and maintain control over the Iron Throne.

Fear: She fears losing her position of authority and being vulnerable to her enemies.

Motivation:

Want: Cersei wants to protect her children and ensure their legacy as rulers.

Need: She needs to confront her inner demons and find a sense of fulfillment beyond political power.

Mask:

Base Negative Emotion: Paranoia and a deep-seated need for control.

Public Mask: Poise, cunning, and an aura of regal authority.

Weaknesses:

Cersei’s fierce loyalty to her family can sometimes blind her to their flaws and lead her to make rash decisions.

Triggers:

Perceived threats to her children or challenges to her authority.

Coping Mechanism:

Cersei often resorts to manipulation and strategic alliances to maintain her grip on power.

Assignment 2: My Show

1. Character Name: SOLA

Situational:

Hope: Sola hopes to fulfill her destiny and save both the mortal and divine realms from destruction.

Fear: She fears being overwhelmed by her newfound powers and the weight of her responsibilities.

Motivation:

Want: Sola wants to reunite her fractured family and discover the truth about her heritage.

Need: She needs to embrace her role as the Chosen One and learn to balance her mortal and divine identities.

Mask:

Base Negative Emotion: Insecurity and self-doubt about her ability to live up to her destiny.

Public Mask: Determination, courage, and a sense of purpose.

Weaknesses: Sola’s strong sense of empathy can sometimes lead her to prioritize others’ needs over her own.

Triggers: Witnessing any harm or desecration to her ancestral home and moments of self-doubt about her capabilities.

Coping Mechanism: Sola often seeks guidance from trusted allies and draws strength from her deep connections with others.

2. Character Name: KAMA

Situational:

Hope: Kama hopes to fulfill his duty to protect Sola and find a sense of purpose beyond his tricks and deceptions.

Fear: He fears failing in his mission and being unable to repay his debt to Uli and Ku.

Motivation:

Want: Kama wants to prove his worth and redeem himself in the eyes of the gods and himself.

Need: He needs to confront his past mistakes and find a way to balance his duty to Uli with his debt to Ku.

Mask:

Base Negative Emotion: Guilt and shame over past failures.

Public Mask: Confidence, resourcefulness, and a sense of humor.

Weaknesses: Kama’s overconfidence and occasional recklessness can put him in precarious situations.

Triggers: Confrontations with his past and moments of self-reflection about his role in Sola’s journey.

Coping Mechanism: Kama often employs humor and wit to diffuse tense situations and relies on his resourcefulness to navigate challenges.

3. Character Name: POLLY

Situational:

Hope: Polly hopes to find a sense of belonging and acceptance, especially in the face of her insecurities.

Fear: She fears being left behind or overshadowed by the powerful figures in Sola’s journey.

Motivation:

Want: Polly wants to be a reliable and indispensable ally to Sola, contributing to their shared mission.

Need: She needs to confront her own insecurities and find her unique strengths beyond her knowledge of mythology.

Mask:

Base Negative Emotion: Insecurity and a fear of not measuring up to others.

Public Mask: Loyalty, intelligence, and a strong sense of camaraderie.

Weaknesses: Polly’s occasional self-doubt can lead her to question her role in Sola’s journey.

Triggers: Instances where she feels overlooked or underestimated, especially in matters related to mythology.

Coping Mechanism: Polly often leans on her extensive knowledge of mythology to provide valuable insights and contributions to the group.

4. Character Name: Asclepius (Ash)

Situational:

Hope: Asclepius hopes to prove himself worthy of his father Apollo’s legacy and gain his approval.

Fear: He fears failing in his duty to protect Sola and losing the trust of the gods.

Motivation:

Want: Asclepius wants to redeem himself for past mistakes and fulfill his role as Sola’s protector.

Need: He needs to find a way to balance his loyalty to the gods with his growing affection for Sola.

Mask:

Base Negative Emotion: Despite his self-assured exterior, Asclepius harbors a deep-seated fear of disappointing those he cares about.

Public Mask: He projects an image of unwavering confidence and competence, masking his inner insecurities.

Weaknesses: Asclepius’s determination to protect Sola can sometimes border on overprotectiveness, potentially stifling her independence.He struggles with feelings of inadequacy, stemming from past failures and the weight of his responsibilities.

Triggers: Witnessing Sola in moments of vulnerability or danger serves as a powerful trigger for Asclepius’s protective instincts. Any mention of his past failures or reminders of the consequences of his mistakes can stir feelings of self-doubt.

Coping Mechanism: Asclepius often channels his insecurities and fears into a fierce determination to improve and prove himself. He seeks solace in his medical expertise, finding comfort in the tangible impact he can have on others’ well-being.

5. Character Name: ANTEROS (TONY)

Situational:

Hope: Anteros hopes to break Zeus’s curse and find redemption for his past actions.

Fear: He fears that his feelings for Tula may cloud his judgment and hinder his ability to help Sola.

Motivation:

Want: Anteros wants to regain his ability to love and find a way to be with Tula once again.

Need: He needs to confront his guilt over his past actions and find a way to reconcile his feelings for Tula.

Mask:

Base Negative Emotion: Guilt and regret over his role in Tula’s fate.

Public Mask: Determination, resilience, and a commitment to helping Sola fulfill her destiny.

Weaknesses: Anteros’s emotional attachment to Laka can sometimes cloud his judgment and lead him to make impulsive decisions.

Triggers: Moments where his past actions and their consequences come to the forefront of his mind.

Coping Mechanism: Anteros often channels his guilt and regret into a fierce determination to make amends and protect Sola.

6. Character Name: HECATE

Situational:

Hope: Hecate hopes to achieve a shift in the balance of power among the gods and reshape the world to her vision.

Fear: She fears being betrayed or undermined by those around her, especially in her quest to challenge Zeus.

Motivation:

Want: Hecate wants to end Zeus’s reign and establish a new order that aligns with her feminist ideals.

Need: She needs to confront her complicated feelings towards power, love, and her place in the divine hierarchy.

Mask:

Base Negative Emotion: Ambition and a desire for revenge against Zeus.

Public Mask: Confidence, cunning, and a veneer of unwavering determination.

Weaknesses: Hecate’s desire for power and revenge can sometimes blind her to the potential consequences of her actions.

Triggers: Moments where her past interactions with Zeus and her own vulnerabilities come to the forefront.

Coping Mechanism: Hecate relies on her sharp intellect and strategic thinking to navigate the complex web of gods and alliances.

7. Character Name: Apollo (Paul)

Situational:

Hope: Apollo hopes to protect Sola from the dangers that surround her and find a way to reconcile with his family.

Fear: He fears that his past mistakes and secrets may come to light, potentially jeopardizing Sola’s safety.

Motivation:

Want: Apollo wants to make amends for his role in the curse and ensure Sola fulfills her destiny.

Need: He needs to find a way to balance his responsibilities as a protector with his desire for redemption.

Mask:

Base Negative Emotion: Despite his outward confidence, Apollo grapples with guilt and regret over his past actions.

Public Mask: He presents an image of wisdom and authority, concealing his inner turmoil from those around him.

Weaknesses: Apollo’s sense of duty and protectiveness towards Sola can sometimes lead him to make decisions that may not align with her desires. He struggles with feelings of unworthiness, stemming from the burden of his past transgressions.

Triggers: Confrontations with powerful deities from both the Greek and Hawaiian pantheons can trigger Apollo’s anxieties about the potential dangers Sola faces. Encountering reminders of his past, such as artifacts or places tied to the curse, can stir up feelings of guilt and remorse.

Coping Mechanism: Apollo channels his guilt and remorse into a fierce determination to ensure Sola’s safety and guide her on her journey. He seeks solace in his role as a mentor, finding purpose in providing guidance and support to Sola.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Character Emotions

WIL: The right prompts make working with the AI enjoyable. I am stoked how close It follows nuances of my story on a deeper level.

Assignment 1: GOT Main Characters Internal struggle

Character Name: JOHN SNOW

Situational:

Hope: Jon holds onto the hope of uniting the Seven Kingdoms and creating a lasting peace.

Fear: He fears being rejected and ostracized due to his status as a “bastard” and his true Targaryen lineage.

Motivation:

Want: Jon wants to be accepted, to find his place in the world, and to live up to the Stark name.

Need: He needs to grapple with his true identity and the responsibilities that come with it.

Mask:

Base Negative Emotion: Insecurity and feeling like an outsider.

Public Mask: Strength, honor, and a sense of duty.

Weaknesses:

Jon’s sense of honor and duty can sometimes lead to him making difficult, morally complex decisions.

Triggers:

Betrayal and feeling like he’s being kept in the dark about important information.

Coping Mechanism:

Jon tends to find solace in solitude and contemplation, seeking advice from those he trusts.

Character Name: DAENERYS TARGARYEN

Situational:

Hope: Daenerys hopes to create a just and prosperous kingdom for all, free from oppression.

Fear: She fears becoming like her father, the Mad King, and being consumed by her own power.

Motivation:

Want: Daenerys wants to reclaim the Iron Throne and restore her family’s legacy.

Need: She needs to balance her desire for power with a sense of compassion and justice.

Mask:

Base Negative Emotion: Anger and frustration at the injustices she witnesses.

Public Mask: Confidence, determination, and a sense of destiny.

Weaknesses:

Daenerys’ unwavering pursuit of power can sometimes blind her to the consequences of her actions.

Triggers:

Betrayal or any perceived threat to her vision of a just and liberated world.

Coping Mechanism:

Daenerys often seeks counsel from her advisors and values their perspectives in decision-making.

3. Character Name: CERSEI LANNISTER

Situational:

Hope: Cersei hopes to secure her family’s power and maintain control over the Iron Throne.

Fear: She fears losing her position of authority and being vulnerable to her enemies.

Motivation:

Want: Cersei wants to protect her children and ensure their legacy as rulers.

Need: She needs to confront her inner demons and find a sense of fulfillment beyond political power.

Mask:

Base Negative Emotion: Paranoia and a deep-seated need for control.

Public Mask: Poise, cunning, and an aura of regal authority.

Weaknesses:

Cersei’s fierce loyalty to her family can sometimes blind her to their flaws and lead her to make rash decisions.

Triggers:

Perceived threats to her children or challenges to her authority.

Coping Mechanism:

Cersei often resorts to manipulation and strategic alliances to maintain her grip on power.

Assignment 2: My Show

1. Character Name: SOLA

Situational:

Hope: Sola hopes to fulfill her destiny and save both the mortal and divine realms from destruction.

Fear: She fears being overwhelmed by her newfound powers and the weight of her responsibilities.

Motivation:

Want: Sola wants to reunite her fractured family and discover the truth about her heritage.

Need: She needs to embrace her role as the Chosen One and learn to balance her mortal and divine identities.

Mask:

Base Negative Emotion: Insecurity and self-doubt about her ability to live up to her destiny.

Public Mask: Determination, courage, and a sense of purpose.

Weaknesses:

Sola’s strong sense of empathy can sometimes lead her to prioritize others’ needs over her own.

Triggers:

Witnessing any harm or desecration to her ancestral home and moments of self-doubt about her capabilities.

Coping Mechanism:

Sola often seeks guidance from trusted allies and draws strength from her deep connections with others.

2. Character Name: KAMA

Situational:

Hope: Kama hopes to fulfill his duty to protect Sola and find a sense of purpose beyond his tricks and deceptions.

Fear: He fears failing in his mission and being unable to repay his debt to Uli and Ku.

Motivation:

Want: Kama wants to prove his worth and redeem himself in the eyes of the gods and himself.

Need: He needs to confront his past mistakes and find a way to balance his duty to Uli with his debt to Ku.

Mask:

Base Negative Emotion: Guilt and shame over past failures.

Public Mask: Confidence, resourcefulness, and a sense of humor.

Weaknesses:

Kama’s overconfidence and occasional recklessness can put him in precarious situations.

Triggers:

Confrontations with his past and moments of self-reflection about his role in Sola’s journey.

Coping Mechanism:

Kama often employs humor and wit to diffuse tense situations and relies on his resourcefulness to navigate challenges.

3. Character Name: POLLY

Situational:

Hope: Polly hopes to find a sense of belonging and acceptance, especially in the face of her insecurities.

Fear: She fears being left behind or overshadowed by the powerful figures in Sola’s journey.

Motivation:

Want: Polly wants to be a reliable and indispensable ally to Sola, contributing to their shared mission.

Need: She needs to confront her own insecurities and find her unique strengths beyond her knowledge of mythology.

Mask:

Base Negative Emotion: Insecurity and a fear of not measuring up to others.

Public Mask: Loyalty, intelligence, and a strong sense of camaraderie.

Weaknesses:

Polly’s occasional self-doubt can lead her to question her role in Sola’s journey.

Triggers:

Instances where she feels overlooked or underestimated, especially in matters related to mythology.

Coping Mechanism:

Polly often leans on her extensive knowledge of mythology to provide valuable insights and contributions to the group.

4. Character Name: ANTEROS (TONY)

Situational:

Hope: Anteros hopes to break Zeus’s curse and find redemption for his past actions.

Fear: He fears that his feelings for Tula may cloud his judgment and hinder his ability to help Sola.

Motivation:

Want: Anteros wants to regain his ability to love and find a way to be with Tula once again.

Need: He needs to confront his guilt over his past actions and find a way to reconcile his feelings for Tula.

Mask:

Base Negative Emotion: Guilt and regret over his role in Tula’s fate.

Public Mask: Determination, resilience, and a commitment to helping Sola fulfill her destiny.

Weaknesses:

Anteros’s emotional attachment to Laka can sometimes cloud his judgment and lead him to make impulsive decisions.

Triggers:

Moments where his past actions and their consequences come to the forefront of his mind.

Coping Mechanism:

Anteros often channels his guilt and regret into a fierce determination to make amends and protect Sola.

5. Character Name: HECATE

Situational:

Hope: Hecate hopes to achieve a shift in the balance of power among the gods and reshape the world to her vision.

Fear: She fears being betrayed or undermined by those around her, especially in her quest to challenge Zeus.

Motivation:

Want: Hecate wants to end Zeus’s reign and establish a new order that aligns with her feminist ideals.

Need: She needs to confront her complicated feelings towards power, love, and her place in the divine hierarchy.

Mask:

Base Negative Emotion: Ambition and a desire for revenge against Zeus.

Public Mask: Confidence, cunning, and a veneer of unwavering determination.

Weaknesses:

Hecate’s desire for power and revenge can sometimes blind her to the potential consequences of her actions.

Triggers:

Moments where her past interactions with Zeus and her own vulnerabilities come to the forefront.

Coping Mechanism:

Hecate relies on her sharp intellect and strategic thinking to navigate the complex web of gods and alliances.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Intriguing Character Layers

WIL: Doing assignments with the AI has become a breather.

Assignment 1: GOT Character Intrigue

1. Character Name: JON SNOW

Role: Bastard son of Eddard Stark, a sworn member of the Night’s Watch, and later revealed as the legitimate son of Rhaegar Targaryen and Lyanna Stark.

Hidden Agendas: Jon navigates conflicting loyalties to his Stark heritage, his sworn duty to the Night’s Watch, and his true Targaryen lineage.

Competition: Jon contends with political rivals within the Night’s Watch and later vies for power in the larger political landscape of Westeros.

Conspiracies: He becomes embroiled in the grander political machinations surrounding the Iron Throne, including the revelation of his true parentage.

Secrets: Jon carries the weight of his parentage, a secret that, if revealed, could alter the course of Westerosi history.

Deception: Jon grapples with his identity and the expectations placed upon him by those who hold power in Westeros.

Wound: Jon bears the emotional scars of growing up as a “bastard” and not fully belonging to any one family.

Secret Identity: Jon’s true parentage as Aegon Targaryen which is initially hidden from him

2. Character Name: DAENERYS TARGARYEN

Role: Last surviving member of the Targaryen dynasty, Mother of Dragons, and contender for the Iron Throne.

Hidden Agendas: Daenerys seeks to reclaim her family’s throne, but also grapples with the darker impulses that come with wielding power.

Competition: She competes with other claimants to the Iron Throne and faces opposition from those who fear the return of the Targaryens.

Conspiracies: Daenerys is drawn into various plots and alliances as she strives to secure her position in Westeros.

Secrets: Her true identity as a Targaryen is initially known to only a few, adding a layer of complexity to her quest for power.

Deception: Daenerys must navigate political intrigue and make calculated moves to achieve her goals, even if it means hiding her true intentions.

Wound: Her traumatic experiences, including the loss of family members and betrayal

Secret Identity: Daenerys’ true identity as a Targaryen is a well-guarded secret that carries immense political weight.

3. Character Name: CERSEI LANNISTER

Role: Queen Regent of the Seven Kingdoms, later Queen of the Andals and the First Men, and protector of the Seven Kingdoms.

Hidden Agendas: Cersei is driven by a desire for power and control, often resorting to manipulation and ruthlessness to maintain her position.

Competition: She contends with rivals within her own family and faces external threats to her rule.

Conspiracies: Cersei is known for her cunning and involvement in various plots to solidify her power, including strategic alliances and betrayals.

Secrets: Her covert actions and schemes remain hidden from those around her, allowing her to wield power from the shadows.

Deception: Cersei is a master of political intrigue, using deception to further her own interests and maintain her grip on the throne.

Wound: Her past traumas, including a loveless marriage and loss of her children, contribute to her ruthless and unyielding nature.

Secret Identity: While her identity as a Lannister is well-known, Cersei’s true motivations and the extent of her deviousness are often hidden.

4. Character Name: JAMIE LANNISTER

Role: Knight of the Kingsguard, later Lord Commander, and conflicted member of House Lannister.

Hidden Agendas: Jaime grapples with his loyalty to his family and his own sense of honor, often torn between conflicting loyalties.

Competition: He contends with his own reputation as the “Kingslayer” and faces external threats to the Lannister family’s power.

Conspiracies: Jaime is drawn into political intrigues and family dynamics

Secrets: His internal struggles and moments of vulnerability are concealed beneath a facade of stoicism and bravado.

Deception: Jaime’s public image as a skilled warrior and loyal Lannister masks his inner turmoil.

Wound: The burden of being labeled a “Kingslayer” and the complexities of his relationships, especially with his sister Cersei

Secret Identity: Jaime’s true self, often hidden behind his public persona

Assignment 2: My Show

1. SOLA:

Role: Protagonist, the teenage Hawaiian orphan destined to end the feud of the Greek and Hawaiian gods.

Hidden agendas: Unearthing her latent powers and reuniting the gods while discovering the truth about her lineage.

Competition: Navigating the conflicting interests of both Greek and Hawaiian gods, who each have their own motives.

Conspiracies: Uncovering the ancient prophecies and the forgotten truths that have been kept hidden by the gods.

Secrets: Possesses the power stolen from Zeus, which could reshape both mortal and divine realms.

Deception: Apollo’s masquerade as her uncle to protect her from the complexities of the divine world.

Wound: The loss of her parents and growing up as an orphan, unaware of her true heritage.

Secret Identity: Unbeknownst to her, she is the key to saving the world from obliteration.

2. KAMA:

Role: Emissary, tasked with bringing Sola to Hawaiki Island of Gods for protection.

Hidden agendas: Balancing his loyalty to Uli with his contractual debt obligation to Ku, while aiding Sola on her journey.

Competition: Navigating the power dynamics and rivalries among the gods, while keeping his true intentions concealed.

Conspiracies: Using his skills as a trickster and thief to manipulate situations in favor of Sola’s mission.

Secrets: Habitually steals from gods and conceals important items in his body tattoos for critical moments.

Deception: Presents himself as a carefree trickster, masking his deeper responsibilities and debts.

Wound: Struggling with the consequences of past encounters with the gods and the weight of his obligations.

Secret Identity: A minor Hawaiian deity with a range of talents and a penchant for audacious schemes.

3. POLLY:

Role: Sola’s confidante and steadfast companion on their perilous journey to unite the Greek and Hawaiian gods. She compensates for her looks by dressing up like a Goth and has a deep fascination with Hawaiian myths and legends.

Hidden Agendas: Polly harbors a hidden agenda tied to an ancient prophecy. She is bound by an oath to guide and protect Sola, but also to safeguard a long-buried secret.

Competition: Polly’s unique knowledge of Hawaiian myths and rituals puts her in a position of influence, leading to subtle rivalries with Kama and among those who seek to control or manipulate Sola’s destiny.

Conspiracies: Polly becomes entangled in a web of ancient prophecies and divine scheming, as various gods and mortals vie for control over Sola’s fate.

Secrets: Polly possesses a deep understanding of Hawaiian mythology and arcane knowledge, which she guards closely. Her obsession with this knowledge arises from jealousy regarding Sola’s ancestry.

Deception: While Polly is Sola’s trusted companion, she hides her true identity, extent of her knowledge and the depths of her involvement in the larger divine conflict.

Wound: Polly carries the weight of her own insecurities and the feeling of inadequacy due to her appearance. Her fascination with Hawaiian myths stems from a longing for a deeper connection to her own heritage.

Secret Identity: Underneath her gothic exterior lies a person who is deeply connected to the ancient myths and prophecies, making her a linchpin in the unfolding events.

Secret Infatuation: Polly harbors a secret and intense infatuation with Anteros. Her feelings for him create internal conflict, making it challenging for her to conceal her emotions. This infatuation may lead her to make potential wrong choices and even betrayals, as she grapples with her desires and the loyalty she owes to Sola.

4. ANTEROS (TONY):

Role: Cursed Greek God of Unrequited Love, working with Hecate in her quest for power against Zeus.

Hidden agendas: Seeking to break Zeus’s curse by winning Laka’s love and reclaiming his full powers.

Competition: Negotiating the delicate alliances between the gods while concealing his true intentions.

Conspiracies: Maneuvering through the divine conflicts to achieve his own goals, often in conflict with the broader agenda.

Secrets: Carries the weight of his guilt for trading Sola’s twin sister to Hades in exchange for aid against Zeus.

Deception: Utilizes his irresistible charm and appearance as a strategic tool in achieving his objectives.

Wound: Wrestling with the consequences of his past actions and the complexities of his curse.

Secret Identity: Known as Tony in the mortal realm, he embodies the dichotomy of love and unrequited longing.

5. HECATE:

Role: Powerful Greek Witch aligned in her power with Zeus, determined to overthrow Zeus and patriarchy.

Hidden agendas: Concealing her conflicting desires for power and her own complex history with Zeus.

Competition: Maneuvering in the intricate web of alliances and rivalries among the gods to further her own goals.

Conspiracies: Plotting to divide the Greek pantheon and instigate a worldwide war against Zeus’s rule.

Secrets: Holds knowledge of a forgotten prophecy that could alter the fate of both gods and mortals.

Deception: Balancing her outwardly vengeful demeanor with her internal turmoil and dual allegiances.

Wound: Navigating the scars of past betrayals and the complexities of her own desires for power.

Secret Identity: An enigmatic and feared Greek Goddess, keeper of the mystical Crossroads between worlds.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Engaging Main Characters

WIL: Diving deep into character profiles adds layers of complexity and intrigue.

Assignment 1: GOT — JON SNOW

A. Role in the Show: Jon Snow is a central character in “Game of Thrones,” initially introduced as the illegitimate son of Eddard Stark. He rises to prominence as a key leader in the Night’s Watch and later, as the legitimate heir to the Iron Throne.

B. Unique Purpose / Expertise: Jon’s unique expertise lies in his strong sense of honor, leadership, and combat skills. He proves to be an exceptional warrior and a capable commander, making him invaluable in battles against both the White Walkers and rival factions.

C. Intrigue: Secret beneath the Surface: One of the central intrigues surrounding Jon is his true parentage. Initially believed to be the illegitimate son of Eddard Stark, it is later revealed that he is the legitimate son of Rhaegar Targaryen and Lyanna Stark, making him a potential claimant to the Iron Throne.

D. Moral Issue: What Moral Boundaries Jon is Crossing: Jon often grapples with difficult moral decisions, such as choosing between duty and personal feelings. His decision to ally with the Free Folk and seek peace with them, despite opposition from his own people, showcases his willingness to prioritize the greater good over political allegiances.

E. Unpredictable: What Will He Do Next? Jon’s actions are often driven by his sense of duty and honor, which can lead to unexpected outcomes. His willingness to make difficult choices, even when they are personally costly, adds an element of unpredictability to his character.

F. Empathetic: Why Do We Care? Jon’s journey from being the presumed illegitimate son to a respected leader, as well as his internal struggle with identity and honor, make him a highly empathetic character. Viewers are drawn to his integrity, selflessness, and the challenges he faces in a complex and morally gray world. His relatability and sense of nobility make him a character viewers can root for.

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Assignment 2: My Show

The Journey of the show: From clueless, insecure pawn in a divine feud to learning the true nature of power and weight of responsibility, to uniting the realms of mortals and gods.
Characters that sell the show: Sola, Kama, Anteros (Tony), Hecate <div>

Character Engaging Profile:

1. SOLA:

A. Role in the Show: Sola is the central protagonist, a teenage Hawaiian orphan unwittingly thrust into a world of warring gods. Her journey is the linchpin in uniting the realms of mortals and gods

B. Unique Purpose / Expertise: Sola wields the stolen power of Zeus, a force that exerts its influence across both the mortal and divine domains. She realizes her destiny is intertwined with the fate of both, Greek and Hawaiian Gods pantheons, and that true strength lies not in dominance, but in unity and understanding.

C. Intrigue: Secret beneath the Surface: Unbeknownst to Sola, her true lineage is intertwined with both the Greek and Hawaiian gods. She is the key to a forgotten prophecy that could save or doom the world, and her heritage is steeped in ancient power.

D. Moral Issue: Crossing Boundaries: Sola grapples with the ethical dilemma of wielding immense power that affects both gods and mortals. Her decisions hold weighty consequences, and she must navigate the blurred lines between human agency and divine destiny. Her journey is marked by a struggle to balance her loyalty to her Hawaiian heritage with the growing connections she forms with Greek deities.

E. Unpredictable: What will they do next? Sola is willing to see beyond ancient rivalries and seek common ground. She may forge unexpected alliances with deities who were once adversaries. Driven by her empathy for both gods and mortals, she might undertake acts to protect those in need. This could involve defying traditional divine protocols. Leveraging the stolen power, Sola may alter the course of events in ways no one anticipates. Sola might make heart-rending sacrifices to put the greater good above all else.

F. Empathetic: Why do we care? Sola’s journey is a universal one of self-discovery, resilience, and the search for identity. Her vulnerabilities, coupled with the immense responsibility thrust upon her, evoke empathy from viewers. As she grapples with her newfound abilities, Sola’s struggle becomes a relatable narrative of a young person finding their place in a world of immense challenges.

2. KAMA

A. Role in the Show: Kama plays a crucial supporting role in Sola’s journey, acting as Uli’s emissary and tasked with bringing Sola to Hawaiki Island of Gods for protection. He serves as a guide and occasional comic relief, but also harbors his own complexities.

B. Unique Purpose / Expertise: Kama is a minor Hawaiian deity with a range of talents. He is a versatile trickster, jack of all trades, and a dwarf, making him valuable in a variety of situations. His expertise lies in navigating the mortal and divine realms, using his wits and cunning to overcome challenges. His unique ability to steal from Gods and hide important items in his body tattoos adds an extra layer of resourcefulness.

C. Intrigue: Secret beneath the Surface: Kama’s insatiable thirst for adventure, his wits, and his overconfidence in his ability to outsmart even gods, got him in trouble when he tried to use his tricks on formidable Ku. This resulted in him being cursed to turn into a wooden Tiki statue when he lies. This secret vulnerability adds obstacles and depth to his character. Additionally, his habit of stealing from Gods and utilizing his tattoos as secret storage becomes a vital tool during critical moments.

D. Moral Issue: Crossing Boundaries: Kama, while tasked with bringing Sola to safety, grapples with the question of how involved he should be in the divine conflict. His loyalty to Uli, his contractual debt obligation to Ku, and his own sense of duty may sometimes conflict with what he believes is best for Sola.

E. Unpredictable: What Will He Do Next? Kama’s actions are marked by a blend of audacity, resourcefulness, and a penchant for unpredictability. His methods may seem unorthodox, and his decisions are guided by his own unique understanding of the world.

F. Empathetic: Why Do We Care? Kama’s endearing mixture of pluckiness and vulnerability makes him a character to root for. His loyalty to Sola and his willingness to put himself on the line for her safety engenders empathy from viewers. His struggles with his own limitations and the weight of his responsibilities, including his duality between duty to Uli and contractual debt obligation to Ku, make him a relatable figure in the larger narrative. His habit of stealing from Gods and utilizing his tattoos also adds an element of intrigue and resourcefulness to his character.

3. ANTEROS (TONY)

A. Role in the Show: Anteros (Tony) serves as a complex character, straddling the line between ally and adversary. Initially aligned with Hecate, he becomes a pivotal figure in Sola’s journey, offering unexpected insights and challenges.

B. Unique Purpose / Expertise: Anteros possesses a unique ability to navigate the intricacies of both mortal and divine worlds. His expertise lies in understanding the dynamics of love, unrequited or otherwise, which grants him a distinct perspective in the unfolding events.

C. Intrigue: Secret beneath the Surface: Anteros harbors a hidden agenda tied to his love for Laka, his guilt for trading Sola’s twin sister to Hades, and his desire to break Zeus’ curse. This triple burden adds layers of complexity to his character. He holds the key to a potential resolution of the ancient conflict.

D. Moral Issue: Crossing Boundaries: Anteros faces a profound moral dilemma in choosing between his loyalty to Hecate, his guilt over his past actions, and his genuine affection for Sola. He must navigate the intricate web of allegiances, ultimately deciding where his true loyalties lie.

E. Unpredictable: What Will He Do Next? Anteros’ actions are characterized by a blend of calculation, genuine emotion, and the weight of his guilt. His allegiances may shift, and his decisions may surprise those around him, making it difficult to predict his next move.

F. Empathetic: Why Do We Care? Anteros’ internal conflict, guilt, and genuine affection for Sola humanize him, despite his divine nature. Viewers are drawn to his struggle to reconcile his loyalties with his personal desires, making him a compelling and relatable character in the unfolding narrative.

4. HECATE

A. Role in the Show: Hecate serves as a formidable and enigmatic character, positioned as a powerful figure aligned with the Greek pantheon. She plays a pivotal role in the unfolding conflict between the Greek and Hawaiian gods.

B. Unique Purpose / Expertise: Hecate’s unique expertise lies in her mastery of witchcraft and her knowledge of the mystical Crossroads between worlds. She possesses formidable magical abilities that make her a force to be reckoned with.

C. Intrigue: Secret beneath the Surface: Beneath Hecate’s outwardly vengeful demeanor and her determination to harm Zeus, lies a hidden conflict within herself. She grapples with her love for Zeus and her desire for power, a duality that adds depth to her character.

D. Moral Issue: Crossing Boundaries: Hecate is willing to go to extreme lengths to achieve her goals, including instigating a worldwide war to overthrow patriarchy. Her ruthless pursuit of power raises moral questions about the lengths one should go to in order to achieve their objectives.

E. Unpredictable: What Will She Do Next? Hecate’s actions are marked by a blend of strategic calculation and emotional depth. Her motivations and allegiances may shift, making it difficult to predict her next move. Her cunning and ability to adapt to changing circumstances add an element of unpredictability to her character.

F. Empathetic: Why Do We Care? While Hecate’s goals and methods may be ruthless, her internal conflict and complex motivations make her a character worth exploring. Viewers may find themselves drawn to understanding the layers of her character and what drives her actions, even if they may not always agree with her choices. Her multifaceted nature adds depth to the overall narrative.

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[Nat Melvin]

ASSIGNMENT 1:

WIL: GOT S1. E 2. It was somewhat challenging to decide which character belongs to which of the three circles in this episode, perhaps because some of them did not have much of the screen time.

A. Main Characters Circle: (in order of appearance)

Dani, Tyrion, Jamie, Jon, Arya, Catelyn

B. Connected Circle:

Viserys, Khal, Jorah, Joffrey, The Hound, Cersei, Ned, Rob, Uncle Benjen, Robert Baratheon, Maester Luwin, Theon, Sansa, Peter Baylish, Varys

C. Environment Circle:

Blacksmith, peasants, Bran, Robert’s escort horsemen, Dothraki tribe, Night Watch Recruits, (Bran’s “Killer”)

ASSIGNMENT 2: MY SHOW

Title: Stolen Senses, 1hr YA fantasy thriller/ drama

Logline: When a teen Hawaiian orphan unwittingly awakens an ancient curse, she’s tasked with uniting Greek and Hawaiian gods before their feud obliterates humanity.

Main World:

Refuge Island located on the Big Island of Hawaii

Art Museum in LA

Paul’s (Apollo’s) House

Sub-World:

Mount Olympus – Greek Gods domain

Hawaiki – Hawaiian Gods domain

Tartarus – Underworld kingdom ruled by Greek God Hades

A. Main Characters: 3 – 5 key characters that the journey is about.

Protagonist: SOLA

Unique Role: Sola is a teenage Hawaiian orphan, unknowingly chosen for a destined purpose, and raised in secrecy by Uli, the Mother of Hawaiian Gods, also Sola’s Grandmother, revealed later.

Secret or Intrigue:

Secret: Sola is the daughter of Laka, Hawaiian Goddess, who has been kidnapped by Zeus. Sola’s true father is revealed at the end of the show.

Intrigue: Uli, Sola’s grandmother, has been safeguarding an ancient prophecy that foretells Sola’s pivotal role in uniting the Greek and Hawaiian gods.

Antagonist: HECATE

Unique Role: Hecate is a mysterious and formidable Greek Goddess, serving as the keeper and guardian of the mystical Crossroads between worlds. Her power rivals that of Zeus. She champions feminist ideals and seeks to dismantle the reign of Zeus, advocating for the end of patriarchy.

Secret or Intrigue: Beneath her outward support for Hera’s quest for power, Hecate harbors a hidden agenda. She clandestinely schemes to sow discord within the Greek Gods’ pantheon, aiming to instigate a global conflict that would ultimately lead to the overthrow of patriarchy.

POLLY, an arts student with a penchant for Gothic fashion

Unique Role: Sola’s girlfriend and unwavering confidante

Secret or Intrigue: Polly has delved deep into Hawaiian myths, legends, and rituals, driven by a mixture of fascination and envy towards Sola’s ancestral heritage. In addition, she harbors a clandestine affection for Tony, the very person Sola has secret affections for as well.

ANTEROS, the Greek God of Unrequited Love, known as Tony in the mortal realm

Unique Role: Cursed by Zeus for falling in love with Laka, Anteros was banished from Mount Olympus and reluctantly allied with Hecate in her pursuit of power against Zeus. Despite his cooperation with Hecate, Anteros maintains his own hidden agenda.

Secret or Intrigue: Anteros masterfully wields his irresistible charm and captivating appearance as a calculated strategy. This talent, kept veiled from both mortal and divine eyes, allows him to deftly navigate obstacles and accomplish his goals on this arduous quest to reclaim his capacity for love. Legend holds that if Laka were to reciprocate Anteros’ feelings, it would shatter Zeus’ curse.

KAMA, minor Hawaiian Deity, trickster, jack of all trades for hire, dwarf

Unique Role: Uli’s emissary enlisted to bring Sola to Hawaiki Island of Gods for protection.

Secret or Intrigue: Kama’s insatiable thirst for adventure, paired with his sharp wit and an audacious belief in his ability to outsmart even the gods, led him into perilous territory. In a fateful encounter with the formidable Ku, his confidence turned against him. Now indebted for life to Ku, Kama transforms into a wooden Tiki statue every time he tells a lie. As Kama embarks on his mission to deliver Sola to the Island of Hawaiian Gods, unforeseen complications arise when Ku learns of Sola’s destiny. This revelation prompts Ku to form an unexpected alliance with Hecate against Zeus, which subsequently alters the course of Kama’s journey.

B. Connected Characters:

Greek Gods Pantheon:

APOLLO (also Paul, a Curator at an Art Museum in LA in the mortal realm)

Secret or Intrigue: Apollo, disguised as Sola’s uncle, guards a hidden truth to shield her from the complexities of the divine realm. He harbors a secret about Sola’s long-lost twin sister, whom he vowed to safeguard, but lost under mysterious circumstances.

ASCLEPIUS, the Greek Deity of Healing, Apollo’s offspring (known as Ash in the human realm)

Secret or Intrigue: Ash, a dedicated medical student, bears the responsibility of guarding Sola. Beneath his composed exterior, he conceals his deep feelings for Sola, careful not to reveal his true emotions.

HERA, the Greek Goddess and ally of Hecate, the vengeful wife of Zeus

Secret or Intrigue: While Hera outwardly seeks vengeance and power against Zeus, she grapples with an internal conflict. Her feelings of love for Zeus are entangled with her desire for supremacy. Hera holds a closely guarded secret—an ancient prophecy that could shift the course of destiny for gods and mortals alike. If unveiled, this prophecy might rewrite the impending conflict and redefine the future of the pantheons.

ZEUS, the mighty king of the Olympian Gods

Secret or Intrigue: Zeus once formed a powerful alliance with a mysterious deity from a forgotten realm. This alliance, which he has kept hidden from both Greek and Hawaiian pantheons, holds the key to a secret plan he has been orchestrating for centuries. Zeus guards a well-kept secret about an offspring born from a forbidden union. This hidden heir, whose existence he has kept concealed, possesses a potential for power that rivals even the mightiest of gods.

HADES, the mighty king of the Underworld

Secret or Intrigue: Hades, ruler of the Underworld, Deep within the depths of Tartarus, Hades has concealed a repository of forbidden knowledge. This cache contains ancient truths and prophecies that, if revealed, could unravel the very foundations of the pantheons.

PERSEPHONE, Hades’ captured and melancholic wife

Secret or Intrigue: Beneath her resigned exterior, Persephone harbors a deeply guarded yearning for a life beyond the confines of the Underworld. Her innocent nature makes her susceptible to influence, especially if it promises the prospect of brief reprieves and the companionship of visitors, even if only for a fleeting moment longer.

Hawaiian Gods Pantheon:

ULI, the Mother of Hawaiian Gods and Sola’s grandmother. Her ancient wisdom and knowledge of Hawaiian traditions is instrumental in guiding Sola on her destined path.

Secret or Intrigue: Uli guards a well-kept secret about an ancient ritual that could potentially tip the scales in favor of the Hawaiian pantheon. This knowledge, passed down through generations, may hold the key to breaking the curse and restoring harmony between the gods.

LAKA, Hawaiian Goddess of Hula and Forests, Sola’s true mother

Secret or Intrigue: While imprisoned in Zeus’ dungeon, Laka lived in constant fear of his wrath for rejecting him and Hera’s impending vengeance against the women Zeus favored. In a daring act of defiance, she stole the power of Zeus’ lightning bolt and concealed it within her wooden necklace. This necklace, bestowed upon one of her twin baby daughters, was entrusted to Apollo and Anteros, who managed to secretly smuggle them out of Zeus’ palace. The infant girl chosen by fate to receive the necklace when she turns 16, was prophesied to hold the key to saving the world from impending doom.

LONO, Hawaiian God of Agriculture and Fertility, Laka’s husband.

Secret or Intrigue: Lono’s heartbreak over the loss of his beloved wife, Laka, not only shattered his divine strength but also led to a period of famine, droughts, and the disappearance of the vibrant rainbows. The tragic event of Laka’s vanishing is intricately tied to Zeus’ insatiable desires, setting in motion the epic conflict between the Greek and Hawaiian gods.

KU, Hawaiian God of War, Lono’s elder brother, Zeus’ main opponent with equivalent power

Secret or Intrigue: Ku’s formidable strength and unwavering assertiveness have rightfully earned him recognition as a fearless leader. Yet, his unyielding competitiveness and unrelenting pursuit of victory, regardless of the cost, often lead him perilously close to the line between virtue and malevolence. Laka’s mysterious disappearance served as the last straw for Ku’s patience, ultimately galvanizing him to persuade the gods to wage war against the dominion of the Greek Gods.

HINA, Elderly Hawaiian Wisdom Keeper

Secret or Intrigue: Hina imparts vital knowledge about the curse’s origins and the ancient prophecies. She guides Sola on her path and serves as a beacon of cultural wisdom.

C. Environment Characters:

Art Students from LA

Healer Hali

Island Hunter Keoni

Keeper of the Flame, Malia

Seer Kahuna

Guardian of the Sacred Grove, Ikaika

Fisherman Pono

Storyteller Lokelani

Pythia, Greek Oracle, Bridge between Worlds

[Nat Melvin]

WIL: The 5-star model helps to identify major pillars of the show

Example show: GOT. (Funny, I just rewatched it – for the third time.)

1. Big Picture Hook(s):

The pilot episode sets the stage for the overarching themes of power, loyalty, identity, and the struggle for survival in a ruthless and unpredictable world, among which:

The power struggle for the Iron Throne

The intricate web of alliances and betrayals

The supernatural threat beyond the wall, the White Walkers, the ancient danger that poses a significant threat to all of humanity.

The struggles for identity and belonging

The moral ambiguity and complexity of characters

The exploration of familial dynamics, particularly the Starks and the Lannisters.

The high stakes and consequences of decisions

<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>2. Intriguing characters:

Eddard Stark (Ned): the honorable and stoic head of House Stark, known for his sense of duty, justice, and moral compass in a world filled with political intrigue and betrayal.

Catelyn Stark: Ned’s wife, the Lady of Winterfell, fiercely protective of her family with a strong sense of duty, driven by love for her children and loyalty to her husband.

Daenerys Targaryen (Dany): a young and submissive bride, who is used as a pawn in a political marriage for Dothraki Khal.

Tyrion Lannister: “the Imp,” a sharp-witted and clever member of House Lannister, who navigates the world that underestimates him due to his physical stature.

Jon Snow: Jon is Ned Stark’s illegitimate son, raised at Winterfell, a “bastard” on a quest for honor.

Arya Stark: the youngest Stark daughter, a fiercely independent tomboy

Viserys Targaryen: Viserys is Daenerys’ arrogant older brother, obsessed with reclaiming the Iron Throne.

Cersei Lannister: the cunning and ambitious Queen of the Seven Kingdoms, married to King Robert Baratheon , while in love with her twin brother, Jamie. Cersei possesses an unyielding desire for power and will to use any means to achieve her goals.

Jaime Lannister: the eldest son of Tywin Lannister, renowned knight with a reputation as a skilled and fearless warrior, juxtaposed with his complicated moral compass.

3. Empathy/ Distress:

Execution of the Night’s Watch deserter, which establishes the harsh and unforgiving nature of the world

Bran’s discovery of Cersei and Jaime Lannister in the tower which leads to his fall

Daenerys’ marriage to Khal Drogo as part of a political alliance

Eddard Stark’s reluctance to leave Winterfell to become Hand of the King

Catelyn’s apprehension about Jon Snow as a constant reminder of Ned’s infidelity

Jon’s relationship with the Stark children, and his longing for acceptance

Tyrion’s interaction with Jon Snow where he offers some genuine advice and

acknowledges Jon’s feelings of alienation

4. Layers/ Open loops:

Layers:

Political intrigue: The pilot establishes the complex web of political alliances, rivalries, and power struggles that define the world of Westeros. The tension between the Starks and the Lannisters, as well as the broader dynamics of the Seven Kingdoms

Family dynamics: The relationships within families, particularly the Starks and the Lannisters

Cultural and geographic diversity

Moral ambiguity

Open Loops:

The White Walkers, a major unresolved threat beyond the Wall shrouded in mystery

Bran’s destiny after the fall

Daenerys’ journey from a timid bride to a potential claim to the Iron Throne

The consequences of Ned Stark’s acceptance of the Hand of the King position

Cersei and Jaime’s secret relationship and the implications for the Iron Throne

Lannister conspiracies in pursuit of power and their conflict with the Starks

5. Inviting Obsession:

GOT invites obsession through a combination of compelling elements, such as:

complex characters, intricate political intrigue, moral ambiguity, high stakes, twists and

turns, strong female characters, fantasy elements, rich dialogue and world building,

visual spectacle and emotional resonance combined with masterful storytelling and

overall exceptional performances.

[Nat Melvin]

Aloha, fellow talented writers,

1. My name is Natalie; “Natalia” was a mistake on my passport, but it hardly seems worth the hassle to rectify. :0) I’m Canadian, who’ve chosen to call Honolulu, Hawaii home.

2. With eight scripts completed (cue “Fade Out”), several in the developmental pipeline, and a handful adapted into three TV pilots—following the advice of industry experts involved in my projects—there’s an overwhelming work-in-progress flow, and a tremendows lack of time.

3. The advent of AI was a game-changer for me, as I am an ESL writer, and especially in the exhaustive research required for my TV series. I’m truly grateful for this incredible opportunity, eagerly ready to propel my projects towards their final stages.

4. For over three decades, I’ve charted my own course, excelling in the establishment and management of successful enterprises, including my very own film production company. A seasoned Executive Producer, boasting a portfolio of over 300 financed, produced, and globally distributed features, docu, and TV series, is poised to debut my inaugural mystery thriller feature at Cannes.

5. ProSeries 50B, Writing Incredible Movies, MSC4, Binge Worthy TV, and many, many more.

I’m looking forward to working with and getting to know you all!

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie Melvin

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[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Unique Action.

WIL: Doing this assignment added new character and plot twists and increased complications and conflicts

1. Looking at your entire story, what is unique about each of these places:

Environment: The story takes place on Halloween at the fairground

Rules: Stay close, stay safe, supervision by an adult

Villain: Heroine’s future stepfather, a commercial land developer who hired two henchmen

Mission: Initially, popularity rating junkie self promoting YouTube video blogging, then following and recording villain and his henchmen, and finally, trying to prevent sabotage and save lives of her family and fairgoers

Struggle: Being taken seriously, seeking and finding help in overly crowded place

Unique Skillset: Videography, people watching, keen eye for interesting situations

Meaning: popularity rating wannabe junkie who inadvertently turned hero

Allies: Jordan, Brie (mother), Turner (Grandpa)

Weapon: iPhone camera, wit and creativity

2. Brainstorm ways to make one or more of those places unique:

What if…?

Struggle: Sarah’s avoiding responsibility

Allies: Ronnie, Sarah’s father, one of Cooper’s henchmen became an ally?

B. Take to an extreme.

Unique skillset: Sarah can read lips form a distance

E. Go opposite.

Weapon: Impair Sarah’s phone to create more obstacles

F. What haven’t we seen?

Teenage action hero facing off powerful adult nemesis

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Level 3 Action Emotions: DANGER, EXCITEMENT, AND ADRENALINE

WIL: It was fun going through the scene alternating emotions.

SETUP: Sarah hurts herself while escaping from the maintenance room. She needs to warn Jordan (the Ferris Wheel operator she likes) about the sabotage on the Ferris Wheel.

INT. BOOTH, FERRIS WHEEL AREA – NIGHT

EXCITEMENT: Festive lights blink and alternate, blending in with the Halloween festivities.

SUSPENSE: Jordan stands before the control panel, pushing multiple levers upward. The cabins move in synchrony, gliding forward and swaying, as the passengers step in and take their seats.

ADRENALINE: In a b.g., Sarah forges ahead, navigating through the dense, oblivious to her plight crowd, lost in their own world of merriment. She greets her teeth, suppressing any sign of pain, with her gait compromised by a swollen ankle.

SUSPENSE: Jordan exhales, as the last cabin slots into place: The giant is ready for its grand performance.

He inputs the ride’s parameters in a small digital display, and sets the timer, watching the numbers blink in agreement. His hand hovers over the launch button, and then, with a decisive push, he initiates the ride.

FEAR: The Ferris Wheel comes to life, its mighty frame creaking and groaning, as it begins its ascent. The cabins rise, one after the other, carrying their eager occupants to their exhilarating experience, and, – impeding doom.

SARAH (O.S.)

Stop the wheel, Jordan, Now!

SHOCK: Jordan startles, taken aback by Sarah’s voice.

SURPRISE: Sarah, hair a mess, torn and bloodied clothes hang on her frame, too real to be a perfect Halloween illusion. She drops onto his stool, cradling her injured arm against her chest.

JORDAN

What the heck happened to you?

DANGER:

SARAH

Not now. Stop the wheel. Trust me!

(off his stare)

I fell into bushes. Please, stop the wheel. It’s gonna blow!

JORDAN

What are you talking about?

Sarah throws her hand into the air, and moans with pain.

SHOCK:

SARAH

Listen, Cooper did something to the wheel. He’s… We must stop it.

JORDAN

(skeptical)

Something..? Cooper is a mechanical genius now, who knows how to compromise… And why would he–

SARAH

To force my Grandpa sell the land. I couldn’t reach my mom, ‘cuz my phone died, and I also have her phone. I couldn’t find Grandpa. So, please, believe me.

ANXIETY: Jordan frowns, torn between his sense of trust and duty.

JORDAN

Your mom is on the wheel, few cabins away from Liam. Turner took him for a ride.

SHOCK: Sarah numbs, realizing gravity of the situation, as she scans the passing by cabins for Turner, Liam and her mom.

SARAH

My whole family..? They’re gonna die… Jordan, how do I stop it?

(decisively)

I’ll do it. I’ll take all responsibility. Please.

ANXIETY: Jordan stares at the digital display showing a few minutes left.

JORDAN

(realizing something)

Wait. The new guy. I haven’t seen him before. We left him here when your mom and me–

SARAH

Green shirt, stocky, short mohawk spikes, kind of rough looking?

DANGER: Jordan, consumed with studying the levers and controls, checks beneath the panel for anything suspicious.

JORDAN

(recollecting)

Um, he wore a uniform, but, yeah, sounds like him.

RELIEF:

SARAH

(gasps)

Yes! That’s it! That’s him! The second dude that Cooper hired.

(pleading)

Do you believe me now?

SUSPENSE: Jordan nods in affirmation, and then… the timer dings the end of the ride, making him jolt.

ADRENALINE: Both, Sarah and Jordan freeze in anticipation, eyes glued at the Ferris Wheel making another steady round.

RELIEF: Sarah exhales, and grins, relieved.

FEAR: Jordan stares at the digital display blinking: “0 min.” Puzzled, he presses the stop button, then pushes it again, and again.

DANGER: The Ferris Wheel whirrs, groaning, noticeably gaining speed.

JORDAN

Sarah..? I think, you’re right. It should’ve stopped. But, it didn’t. I…

I don’t know what he did. I don’t know how to stop it.

ANXIETY:

SARAH

(panic stroke)

Do something! Call someone. Call the Police!

FEAR:

JORDAN

Um, I left my phone with your mom.

(finger in the air)

Up there.

FEAR: Sarah stares at the Wheel, as if for the last time, then backs away.

SUSPENSE:

SARAH

I know what to do…. Tell mom… I love her.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Level 2 Action Emotions — SURPRISE, SHOCK, SUSPENSE

WIL: My normal way of writing a high octane scene is by starting with a Suspense, then Surprise, then Shock, which becomes an impactful hook at the end of the scene. I tried to write a scene the way desribed in this lesson, and it worked. The suspense in the scene I selected can also serves as a hook.

Scene:

Setup: My protagonist accidentally stumbles upon her future stepfather conspiring against her Grandfather with the two henchmen involved to sabotage the grand opening of the Ferris Wheel.

Surprise: She follows one of the henchmen to an electrical maintenance room, who turns out to be her biological father, who used to work in the fairground.

Shock: Her father ties her up and locks her in the room without any possibility for escape. Now she can’t warn and save her family (Turning Point 2).

Suspense: She helps a maintenance guy who was electrocuted and left to die by her father, who knows the way out. Will she get out it in time to stop her father from creating massive life threatening disaster?

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Action One Emotions.

WIL: Adding Anxiety, Fear and Relief to a scene causes emotions and that’s what we want for the audience to experience, – emotions.

While I was doing this assignment, I discovered that my Protagonist is more passive than active. And, – that’s not going to work.

I think, this is due to her being torn between ensuring her autistic son is entertained & safe, and tyring to stop antagonistic forces from sabotaging grand opening of the Ferris Wheel. As a mother myself, making sure my kid is safe will be definitely my priority number one.

As a result, I changed my protagonist to someone who can dedicate their time entirely to the problem at hand. Thanks god, it’s only an outline, and it was super easy to tweak, because my new Protagonist was already doing what they supposed to do – in shadows. All that was required is give them a spotlight. Additionally, I can’t recollect this type of a Protagonist being explored in action movies before, and, as of now, I think it’s going to work.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Favorite Twists!

WIL: Adding twists to the outline helped me to find plot holes and improve story flow in general.

Scene 1: DECEIVED – SURPRISING TRUTH

Setup: Cooper brings Brie to sway Turner to agree to sell his land

Twist: Brie thinks that Cooper is trying to help her make amends with her estranged father who hasn’t spoken to her for years.

OR:

Setup: Brie hopes Cooper is helping her to make amends with her estranged father by providing financing for refurbishing needs of the fair

Twist: Cooper is not investing in the fairground, but rather wants to buy the land and level up the fair to build a commercially viable high-end mall

Scene 2: PLAN FAILS – PLAN SUCCEEDS

Setup: Cooper meets Turner in his office to finalize the acquisition deal. But, influenced by community support against the acquisition, Turner refuses to sell his land. Outraged, Cooper threatens with severe consequences, including legal actions, if need be, etc., and storms out.

Twist: Cooper makes a call to Ari, his business partner with questionable ethics, and learns that his men are on the way to ensure that the deal goes through as planned.

Scene 3: UNEXPECTED WEAPON – SURPRISING RESPONSE

Setup: After the meeting with Turner, Cooper gives Brie a choice: imake her father sell the land, or lose his financial support. Brie refuses to get involves because she wants Cooper help Turner rebuild the fair.

Twist: Cooper says he’ll be filing for a divorce.

Scene 4: NEW THREAT – UNEXPECTED SUPPORT

Setup: Turner joins protesters, and is approached by a reporter who asks how he feels about losing the battle to the big guys, and what are Turner’s plans after the acquisition.

Twist: Turner receives unexpected support from the local community and calls to fight for the fair.

Scene 5: PLAN FAILS – PLAN SUCCEEDS

Setup: Cooper loses the deal to Turner

Twist: Cooper’s partner sends two henchmen to sabotage the opening of the Ferris Wheel, which will bring down the value of the land and force Turner to sell.

Scene 6: TRAP – ESCAPE

Setup: Ronnie locks Brie in the electrical room with no ways out

Twist: Brie uses her training and physical strength to climb high to the ceiling and escape through a tiny window.

Scene 7: IT JUST GOT WORSE – IT JUST GOT BETTER

Setup: Liam gets lost in the crowd and accidentally bumps into Cooper

Twist: Turner saves Liam from his stepfather’s punishment for disobeying

Scene 8: REVERSAL – REVERSE THE REVERSAL

Setup: Phil and Ronnie watch the Ferris Wheel spin faster

Twist: Phil tells Ronnie that his daughter is inside of the cabin of the Wheel

Scene 9: NEW THREAT – UNEXPECTED SUPPORT

Setup: The Ferris Wheel spins out of control due to a mechanical failure

Twist: Ronnie shuts the electricity off bringing it to a halt

Scene 9: IT JUST GOT WORSE – IT JUST GOT BETTER

Setup: Liam refuses to jump out of the cabin

Twist: Cables break off, and propel Liam into his mother’s arms

Scene 10: REVERSAL – REVERSE THE REVERSAL

Setup: Cooper pretends to assist Brie to safety

Twist: Cooper dies under the falling debris of the collapcing Ferris Wheel

Scene 11:

1. UNEXPECTED WEAPON – SURPRISING RESPONSE

Setup: Liam speaks for the first time – calling his Grandfather to see his mom

Twist: Turner makes amends with Brie

2. REVERSAL – REVERSE THE REVERSAL

Setup: Turner says farewell to Brie expecting to spend the rest of his life in jail

Twist: Sarah shows videos of Cooper, Ronnie and Phil plotting to sabotage the Wheel

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Likability/ Empathy/ Justification

WIL: Ways to understand/ justify Protagonist’s actions / reflections based on duress.

Likability / Lovability

1. Nurturing and compassionate. Displays understanding and patience in dealing with Liam’s autism

2. Resourceful. Efficiently organizes the snacks, and keeps track of Liam’s belongings

3. Devoted mother. Committed to ensure Liam has a memorable day

4. Displays emotional connection to her childhood experiences at the fairground

5. Inner strength. Faces challenges calmly while being overwhelmed and unsupported

6. Creative and dedicated with ensuring fun and engaging Halloween experience for Liam and his friends

7. Light-hearted. Connects with children on a personal level with jokes and compliments

8. Kind. Interacts with other fairgoers in a compassionate and helpful way

9. Resilient. Processes Cooper’s harsh words without letting him completely break her spirit

10. True and fair. Engages with picketing community members, but also respects Cooper’s dedication to secure family financial needs

11. Sympathetic by contrast to Cooper and his callous and dismissive behavior

12. Strong-willed. Despite the conflict and challenges she faces, Brie doesn’t complain, but takes responsibility for her duties

Empathy / Distress

1. Cooper scolds Brie for being poorly organized and makes derogatory comments about her life choices

2. Brie’s teen daughter, records the argument between her mother and her stepdad to post it on her YouTube channel for amusement. This disrespectful act shows that she is not receiving the support or respect she deserves from her own family.

3. The sight of local community members picketing in protest against demolishing the fairground is distressing for Brie because of her strong attachment to the fairground,

4. When Cooper dismisses Brie’s concerns about the fairground and simply states that it’s a done deal, it showcases his disregard for her feelings and opinions.

5. When Sarah, frustrated with the situation, leaves Brie to deal with Liam on her own, it adds to Brie’s stress and feeling of being overwhelmed.

6. Cooper’s public endorsement of the commercial plaza further emphasizes his lack of consideration for Brie’s perspective.

Justification

1. Abusive behavior of her husband <div>

2. Lack of respect and support from family

3. Disrespect of her opinion and feelings

4. Broken relationship with her father

5. Previously failed marriage

6. Dealing with her autistic son without support or help from others

7. Impending loss of beloved fairground and childhood memories

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[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Map Out Your Story

WIL: Improvements keep falling into grace, as I continue Hal’s lessons. It’s getting much clear and better, story-wise, with the new additions and characters’ journey. I had no time to condense, read through, or edit this, just wrote as I see things come to play. I did spend some lovely time reaserching Ferris Wheel operation and potential malfunctions, which made me believe that I can pull this off successfully. I do like where this is going, but, still, admittedly, it’s a ginormic mess.

OPENING

Action 1. Brie navigates her car in the busy parking lot under duress for being late for her chaperone duty at her son’s Halloween Trick or Treat field trip she helped organize.

Villain 1. Cooper, Brie’s husband, scolds her for always being poorly organized, making bad choices in her life, and not helping him to influence her father’s decision to sell the land. Sarah, Brie’s teen daughter from a previous marriage, records their fight for amusement.

Mission 1. Numerous TV reporters tape local community folks picketing by the entrance to the fair in protest against demolishing the fair and building large commercial strip on its grounds.

Villain 2. Cooper is appalled by the situation, stating that Turner, Brie’s father, will sell the land one way or another. Cooper will build a high scale shopping strip on this land. It’s a done deal.

Mission 2. Brie argues that the value of the fairground, where she grew up, is more important to the local community then a shopping mall. Cooper argues opposite values, then leaves, mad. Fed up with Cooper’s attitude toward her mother, Sarah, Brie’s teen daughter, takes off to the fair by herself, leaving Brie on her own with her 7 y.o. son, Liam. Now Brie has no help she was counting on. She quickly grabs her bag, and asks Liam to behave and stay close.

Villain . Cooper, caught by a camera man, throws a few words in support of building new commercial plaza for the benefits of the community, while cutting through the crowd.

Action . Brie follows Cooper, wishes him good luck and asks him to meet her at the Trick or Treat grounds where she’ll be the whole day with Liam and his group. Cooper just walks away.

Mission Brie joins a group of Liam’s classmates and their moms, and leads them toward a dedicated area, explaining the agenda, layout of the rides, and safety rules.

INCITING INCIDENT

Villain . Cooper meets Turner in his office to finalize the deal. But, influenced by community support against the acquisition, Turner refuses to sell his land. Outraged, Cooper threatens with severe consequences, including legal actions, if need be, etc., and storms out.

Mission Brie tries to manage Liam’s behavior, who demands letting him go on his favorite Ferris Wheel ride, because Grandpa always brings him there. Brie explains that he has to wait for the Grand Opening later in the day.

Villain . Cooper makes a call to Ari, his business partner with a questionable ethics, and learns that his men are on the way to ensure that the deal goes through as planned.

Mission . Brie talks to the children about the rides, asking them to stay within dedicated area to ensure safety and most fun on their Trick or Treat hunt. Let the frenzy begin!

Villain . Cooper delivers news to Brie about her father’s decision and tells her to make amends with her father, whatever it takes to convince him stick with the deal, for his own interest, above all.

END OF ACT ONE – FIRST TURNING POINT

Action . Brie reminds Cooper that her father hasn’t spoken to her since the accident due to her ex’s negligence, where she tried to help them both. So, no, she won’t get involved again. They argue and Brie asks Cooper if he’s deliberately trying to sabotage her father’s integrity for his own financial gain. Cooper threatens with the divorce, and walks away.

Mission . Turner joins protesters, and is approached by a reporter for an interview. He reluctantly agrees – he’s not much of a spokes person, but, the crowd cheers in support. They truly love him.

Villain . Cooper meets Ronnie, Brie’s ex, the father of her kids, and Phil, Ronnie’s buddy, a rugged looking man. Ronnie offers to take down Turner, but Cooper wants to destroy him in more effective and painful way by tampering with his pride, a newly refurbished Ferris Wheel. A tragedy of this magnitude will devalue the land, hence, more profits. It will collapse tonight at its grand opening.

Action . Cooper sends the two henchmen to work out the details, and heads toward the protesters. He waits for a camera man finish taping Turner’s now full blown pro-fair speech, then calls him aside and bribes him to make a video blog about Ferris Wheel grand opening, his prized possession after all.

Mission . Brie supervises overly excited children having fun playing games, running around in search for the hidden treats. Seeing his mother destructed, Liam sneaks away. Brie realizes he is missing, may be gone to his Grandpa, and asks another chaperone to keep the children safe while she’s looking for her disobedient son.

Action Sarah wonders around, recording everything she finds useful for her video blog.

MID-POINT

Villain . Cooper follows the camera man filming folks on the rides, all while giving him inside info of the cost for refurbishing old rides vs undeniable value of a commercial strip, – for the safety and growing needs of local community.

Villain Phil approaching the Ferris Wheel, as if to adore its enormity. He spots Cooper, exchange meaningful, silent glances, then initiates a conversation with Jordan, a maintenance guy, sitting bored inside the steamy hot operating booth by the Ferris Wheel.

Action Sarah, two ice cream cones in her hands, approaches the booth, then stops short seeing Jordan showing control panel to Phil. She asks a girl to hold her ice creams for a second, and videotapes Phil and Jordan. Phil notices Jordan’s shy motion, follows his gaze, and tells him to go have fun with his girl. It’s ok, he used to be young himself He’ll watch the booth for Jordan, it’s too hot in the sun anyway, – as long as Jordan returns in time for the grand opening to start the Ferris Wheel.

Action Jordan takes off his employee’s jacket, thanks Phil for being so kind, and takes off.

Villain Phil watches Jordan and Sarah evaporate into the crowd, then puts Jordan’s jacket on. He glances around, then fishes out an elongated box, wrapped into a dark clothes, and studies the control panel.

Villain Ronnie picks the lock to the electrical room, – it gives. He pauses, hearing fast approaching footsteps.

Mission . Brie rushes by toward her father’s office, but gets tripped and dragged inside the electrical room.

Action . Shocked to see Ronnie, Brie tries to figure out why he’s at the fair, after been disgracefully discharged by her father. She navigates questions to extract the truth, all while progressing toward the door.

Villain 1. Ronnie blocks her way out, and leans against the door. He brags about being clean for awhile, and that he’ll have his own decent place soon. He wants his visitation rights restored, otherwise, he’ll involve lawyers. He has friends in high places now, – anything goes to destruct Brie.

SECOND TURNING POINT AT THE END OF ACT 2

Action . Brie says that Liam maybe at the office and she needs to get him back. Ronnie attacks Brie, clutching her neck in his grip, – she won’t trick him again. This time, he wins, and they lose, big time. Too bad she won’t see the grand shebang. He pushes Brie aside, opens the breaker box, and switches one breaker off. Brie gets up and jumps at Ronnie, trying to turn the breaker back on. Ronnie grabs her by her neck, and cracks her head at the door – hard. She collapses onto the ground. He checks her neck for a pulse, then steps over her body, and locks the door behind his back. He stands outside, staring at the giant Ferris Wheel, now drowning in darkness by the sound of stampede, and panic screams.

Action Inside a cabin of the Ferris Wheel, Sarah and Jordan stop making out as the lights go off. Sarah grabs her phone and starts recording, a bit worried about getting down. Jordan reassures her that someone will fix it soon, it’s the grand opening after all, but he’ll lose his job if someone finds them up there. Sarah keeps recording the commotion below. She sees Cooper.

Action Cooper pushes through the anxious fairgoers, making way for the camera man as they head toward spectators surrounding someone hysterical, in distress. Cooper peeks to check the commotion, feeling a sudden bump from behind. He turns to find Liam, eyes wide open with fear. Cooper grabs Liam by his shoulders, scolding him for running away from his mom. And where the hell is she anyway?

Mission Brie comes to, and gets up, disoriented. She pries the door, – to no avail. She wobbles toward the breaker box and pushes the breaker back up. She spots a tiny window below the ceiling. She folds onto a desk, pulls her feet up and climbs on top of the desk. She stands up on the desk, and grabs onto a top of the cabinet, struggling to pull herself up, near losing balance.

Action Turner grabs Conner by his arm squeezing it hard until he releases his stepson. Conner yanks Turner’s hands off of him, near starting the fist fight, but stops realizing multiple phone cameras pointing at his face.

Action Jordan and Sarah watch from above her stepdad and grandpa’s confrontation as she records it. Jordan decides to climb down so he can make it in time for the opening, assuring Sarah that no-one will even notices her when her cabin gets down. All she needs to do is just get off and mingle with the crowd.

Mission Brie spreads her legs wide trying to distribute her weight evenly over the cabinet’s ramshackle surface. She grabs an empty metal wire spool, and launches it at the window, breaking its glass into shards. She struggles to squeeze through a narrow opening, cutting herself as she does.

She pulls herself out and falls, landing onto bushes, then bounces onto the rocks, screaming at a sound of cracking bones.

Villain Ronnie breaks through the crowd sand discovers his son next to Turner.

Mission Brie, torn in two directions by the pain, pulls herself together. She glances at the dark windows of the office, holds her lifeless arm with her other arm for support, then limps dragging her swollen ankle toward the Ferris Wheel standing bright and tall in a glory of the multitudes of lights.

Action Cooper peels Liam off of Grandpa to get him to his mom, but the boy bites Cooper’s hand. Ronnie steps forward to hug his son, but Liam screams and leaches his hand into Grandpa’s hand. Cooper tells Ronnie to get lost. Ronnie squeezes his fists, spits, then backs away. Turner turns away from Cooper, announces the opening ceremony and lets Liam lead the crowd toward the Ferris Wheel.

Villain Cooper experiences a second of conflicting emotions, then regroups, spots the camera man, and pulls him away from the Ferris Wheel assuring he knows a better spot for filming the ceremony.

Action Sarah spots Ronnie, her biological dad, and Phil striding away from the Ferris Wheel, confused about them being together. Something is not right. She texts Jordan.

Mission Jordan climbs down the last cabin, – not fast enough. He jumps to the ground, and limps toward the booth as Sarah watches him from the cabin above. His phone dings with Sara’s message.

Mission Turner makes an inspirational speech, lets Liam cut the banner, and they embark into the first cabin, watching the wheel move up as the excited fairgoers fill up the rest of the available cabins.

CRISIS

Mission Brie makes it to the Wheel in severe pain, bleeding. She searches for Cooper, Ronnie or her dad, can’t find them, then heads toward the control booth.

Mission Jordan operates control panel, moving forward the cabins until the last cabin fills with passengers. then sets the timer. Brie borrows Jordan’s phone, sees Sarah’s text, and gives her a call. She learns that the rugged looking man spent time in the booth while they were gone. Brie and Jordan search for any devices or damages, but everything functions normal until Jordan tries to stop the wheel. It starts spinning faster, generating more speed. Jordan is helpless. Bree throws the phone to Jordan and yells to call ambulance and the police.

Action Spectators and folks on the Wheel call the police. Panic ensues. Some riders jump out of their cabin when they can, piling up on top of each other on the ground.

Villain The camera man takes off. Cooper stops him and yells to keep rolling no matter what.

Mission Brie rushes toward the Wheel helping fallen folks to safety. She freezes hearing Liam’s voice screaming her name.

Mission Turner waves to Brie, prepping Liam to jump out of the cabin into his mommy’s arms when they get closer.

Villain Phil tells Ronnie that his daughter was messing around with a guy who operates the Wheel. Probably still up there in one of the cabins. Ronnie runs to the electrical room, Phil chases him, they fight. Ronnie beats up Phil, and yanks the breaker.

Mission Turner holds Liam close to the edge of the cabin, and — the lights go off, jolting the Wheel. Liam flies out of the cabin, landing on another person on the ground.

Action The wheel grinds, then halts to a sudden stop. The support cables break under enormous pressure. The wheel careens, barely holding on two deformed support beams. Lose cabins break out and drop onto the ground. People fall, scream, crawl – CHAOS. STAMPEDE. EVERYWHERE.

CLIMAX

Villain Cooper notices approaching helicopters, police and ambulances, yanks the camera man’s arm to follow him and rushes toward the wheel.

Mission Brie falls onto her knees, crawls helping folks if she can, while searching for Liam. Finds him stuck under a dead body.

Action Cooper grabs Brie by her arm, she accuses him for sabotaging this. Cooper slaps her. The camera man records. Brie hears Sarah’s call. She finds Sarah stuck between two broken cabins, barely hanging on their safety cables.

Action The Wheel cracks. Sarah’s cabin jolts and careens at a dubious angle. She screams. Brie tells Liam run away as far as he can to safety. She’ll find him. She starts climbing up the metal beams, but Cooper grabs her by the broken ankle, pulling back. She screams with pain. Sarah pleads for help.

Mission Turner limps toward Liam, and leads him to safety.

Action Brie pushes Cooper hard. He grabs her by her hand. She frees it from his grip and throws his wedding ring into the air. He releases Brie, tries to grab the ring, and — Sarah’s cabin breaks off, and collapses, landing on Cooper.

Mission Brie catches Sarah, and they fall onto the ground together. Safe, as the part of the Wheel breaks off the cable and heads their way.

RESOLUTION

Action Paramedics, people, police officers help people to safety. Brie, on a gurney, is carried toward the ambulance, followed by Liam and Sarah. Turner watches Brie’s gurney loaded into the car. Liam waves at him, encouraging him to come see mom. Turner hesitates for a moment, then approaches Brie. She squeezes his hand, grateful. He says that they are in a heap of trouble, asks for forgiveness as they may never see each other again, at least not outside of the jail. Sarah laughs, and says that they will. She got them covered, and shows a glimpse of videos she took with Ronnie, Phil and Cooper.

• This reply was modified 1 year, 10 months ago by  Nat Melvin.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Creating Your Action Structure

WIL: Having looked at my story from different perspectives, dilemmas, and turning points, it greatly improved the flow, added more tension, escalating conflict, and elevated story logic. Great lesson! Can’t wait to get to a writing phase.

3-Act structure:

A lead character in an action scene – Brie navigates her car in the busy parking lot under duress

A challenging situation that creates conflict – community protesters picket the entrance, Brie and Cooper argue against/ in support of fairgrounds acquisition.

Gives us an insight into the character – Brie’s values are community oriented, Cooper’s values are profit and control based

Opens a question that is key to the story – Story question: Will the fairgrounds stand against Cooper’s aggressive acquisition scheme?

Opening

While having difficulty finding parking to the State Fair, Brie and her (husband/or fiancé?), Cooper, witness community protesters holding banners, picketing entrance to the fair. Brie supports protesters, Cooper opposes, based on his deal with Brie’s father who agreed to sell the land to Cooper’s development company.

Brie’s two children from a previous marriage fuss, eager to get on the rides. Brie is late for her chaperone duties she signed up for her son’s class. Cooper blames Brie for not being properly organized and not being a better mother.

Inciting Incident

Cooper meets with Turner, Brie’s father who owns the fair. But, influenced by community moves against the acquisition, Turner has a second thought and refuses to sell the land to Cooper’s development company. Cooper is pissed, and threatens Turner with legal actions, etc.

Cooper makes a call to his mafia partner asking to bring his goons to proceed with the Plan B.

First Turning Point at end of Act 1

Brie continues her chaperone duties, but her son wants to see Grandpa, and takes off. While looking for her son, Brie runs into her ex, Ronnie, a man with a shady past, former fair employee fired for negligence. Ronnie brags that he cleaned up, soon will have a decent place, and will get back visitation rights (mentions friends in high places). Brie has bad feelings about all his. (Maybe sees him exchange glances with Cooper).

Mid-Point

Brie’s Halloween “Trick or Treat” rides start malfunction, causing frustration among kids and their parents. She asks Cooper to find the cause and see if he can fix it while she tries to keep kids busy with something else.

Second Turning Point at end of Act 2

With the escalating frequency of rides’ malfunctions, Brie realizes that Cooper devised a plan to sabotage her father’s integrity by doing something devastating, and tragic – collapsing the Ferris Wheel. Cooper tries to sway Brie to his side, as in “save your father from embarrassment”, threatens with the law suits and potential jail time. Cooper offers her to make a choice between her family, or her useless, drunkard father with his dilapidated fair. And – Cooper threatens Brie to withdraw financing of her passion project – building her own Pilates studio.

Crisis

Brie runs to tell her father about Cooper’s sabotage plan, but gets locked in the maintenance room by Cooper’s goons.

Climax

Brie manages to break free, but she can’t find her father anywhere. Finally, she spots him together with her son — inside the Ferris Wheel’s cabin, as it starts to move.

Resolution

Brie saves her son, her father near dies, but manages to stop the wheel, Cooper falls to his death.

• This reply was modified 1 year, 10 months ago by  Nat Melvin.

[Nat Melvin]

Lesson 5: Natalie’s Action Track!

WIL: God knows I’m not a blood spilling/ chase driven action writer, so this lesson was a fit. My action list looks like a thriller with more questions then answers. More obstacles? More blood/ murder? Ugh. I’m just filling in the blanks for now.

Answer the Action Questions:

Considering the concept from Lesson 2 [new], what action could naturally show up in this movie?

Ride Malfunctions: Action scenes can involve the dramatic malfunction of fairground rides, causing perilous situations for the characters. Brie must act swiftly to rescue students trapped on malfunctioning rides.

Chase Scenes: Brie may engage in thrilling chase scenes as she pursues her fiancé, Cooper, or his henchmen through the fairground, trying to uncover their plot. (Or vice versa)

Rescue Missions: As fairground attractions go haywire, Brie embarks on high-stakes rescue missions to save students and fairgoers in danger.

Confrontations: Brie confronts Cooper and his henchmen multiple times throughout the movie, leading to intense confrontations, such as physical altercations, verbal battles, and daring escapes.

Evasion and Hiding: Brie may need to evade Cooper’s henchmen or hide from them as she investigates the fairground’s problems and unravels Cooper’s plan.

Explosive Situations: If explosives are involved in Cooper’s plot, action sequences could revolve around Brie’s attempts to disarm or diffuse these devices before they detonate.

Fight for Survival: As the fairground descends into chaos, characters, including Brie and her students, may find themselves in life-or-death situations that require quick thinking and decisive action.

Showdown on the Ferris Wheel: The climax of the movie could involve a heart-pounding action sequence on the Ferris wheel, where Brie faces off against Cooper and his henchmen in a desperate bid to prevent disaster.

Evacuation: Brie may organize and lead the evacuation of fairgoers and students as the crisis escalates, leading to action-packed scenes of people rushing to safety.

Racing Against Time: Throughout the movie, there can be a recurring theme of racing against time to prevent catastrophe, with action sequences showcasing the urgency of the situation.

B. Considering the Mission and Villain Tracks, what action could work for this track?

Mission Tracks:

Investigation and Discovery: This track revolves around Brie’s efforts to uncover the extent of Cooper’s plot. It includes scenes of her gathering evidence, analyzing clues, and piecing together the puzzle of Cooper’s sabotage.

Rescue and Evacuation: As fairground attractions malfunction and chaos ensues, action sequences centered on Brie’s mission to rescue and evacuate students and fairgoers can be intense and high-stakes.

Sabotage Neutralization: This track involves Brie’s actions to neutralize the hidden sabotage mechanisms within the fairground rides. It showcases her problem-solving skills and determination to prevent disaster.

Confrontations and Standoffs: Brie’s confrontations with Cooper and his henchmen are key action tracks. These scenes can be filled with tension, physical altercations, and verbal battles, highlighting the personal and emotional stakes of the mission.

Race Against Time: Throughout the movie, there’s a continuous race against time as Brie strives to prevent catastrophe. This track emphasizes the urgency of the situation and keeps the audience on the edge of their seats.

Villain Tracks:

Sabotage Escalation: This track follows Cooper’s actions as he escalates the sabotage of fairground rides and attractions. It includes scenes of him planting additional tampering devices and creating more chaos.

Psychological Manipulation: Cooper’s manipulation of Brie and his attempts to undermine her confidence can be portrayed in this track. It focuses on the psychological aspects of the villain’s tactics.

Henchmen Pursuit: Scenes involving Cooper’s henchmen pursuing Brie and causing obstacles. It showcases their relentless pursuit and the physical threats they pose.

Last-Ditch Efforts: As Brie gets closer to uncovering Cooper’s plan, this track follows his desperate last-ditch efforts to salvage his scheme. It may include him taking more direct and dangerous actions.

Showdown and Death: The climax of the movie involves a dramatic showdown between Brie and Cooper, leading to his death. This track captures the final confrontation and the resolution of the villain’s actions.

C. How can the action start well, build in the 2nd Act, and escalate to a climax in the 3rd Act?

Act 1 – Starting Strong:

Establish Normalcy: Begin by establishing the normal, everyday life of Brie and the students on the fairground field trip. This sets the stage for the impending chaos.

Inciting Incident: Introduce the inciting incident early, such as the first signs of ride malfunctions or strange occurrences at the fairground. Brie can also overhear Cooper giving orders to henchmen, or henchmen talk among themselves. She becomes suspicious and starts investigating.

Initial Action: Brie’s initial actions involve small-scale rescue missions, fixing the rides, and attempts to understand the cause of the incidents. These scenes serve as the foundation for the action to come.

Introduction of the Villain: Reveal Cooper’s true intentions and actions gradually, creating a sense of mystery and suspense. Show him actively sabotaging the fairground rides and manipulating those around him — Starting with Cooper trying to bribe Brie’s father, cutting him a hefty cash check, rejection of his offer, and Cooper’s call to bring in the henchmen.

Act 2 – Building Action:

Rising Tensions: As Brie delves deeper into her investigation, the action intensifies. Ride malfunctions become more frequent and dangerous, raising tensions among fairgoers and students.

Rescue Sequences: Build the action with compelling rescue sequences. Brie and her group face increasingly perilous situations, requiring quick thinking and daring actions to save lives.

Uncovering the Plot: Brie’s investigation leads her closer to uncovering Cooper’s plot. Action sequences involve her gathering evidence, confronting suspicious characters, and dealing with obstacles.

Psychological Warfare: Introduce psychological warfare tactics by Cooper. He may start targeting Brie’s emotional vulnerabilities, leading to intense confrontations, threats to cut his financial support, and apparent mind games. He can also threaten office worker, bribe maintenance crew, and mislead, or blackmail a police officer, etc.

Act 3 – Climactic Escalation:

Major Set Piece: introduce a major set piece action sequence that marks the climax of the movie. This could be the Ferris wheel showdown or a high-stakes confrontation between Brie and Cooper somewhere close to the Ferris Wheel. (Not quite sure what would motivate Cooper to go after Brie all the way up to Ferris Wheel which he knows will collapse. We’ll see.)

Chaos and Catastrophe: As Brie gets closer to thwarting Cooper’s plan, his desperation escalates. Fairground attractions spiral out of control, leading to chaos and danger on a grand scale.

Showdown: The final confrontation between Brie and Cooper is action-packed and emotionally charged. This is where all the built-up tension and conflict come to a head.

Resolution: After the climactic showdown, the action gradually winds down as Brie, together with her father and authorities, secures the fairground and ensures the safety of all involved.

Cooper’s hefty check written on the name of Brie’s father remains intact.

2. Select the types of action you’ll use.

Chase/Pursuit – After noticing Brie’s active involvement in fixing the rides, Cooper sends a few henchman to interfere /neutralize her. This is an ongoing problem Brie has to face.

Purpose: To set a ticking clock and show Cooper’s resilience, dedication and true villainous nature.

B. Fight – Brie may fight a couple of henchmen utilizing her Pilates skills in an improvised fight. Purpose: Shows character growth, determination and willingness to risk her well-being for a cause.

D. Rescue – On a numerous occasions, Brie rescues students and other folks from malfunctioning rides.

Purpose: Shows Brie’s courageous nature, kind-heartedness, self-reliance and stubbornness

E. Escape/Evade – Brie, her father, and some office employees may escape from confinement, creating more obstacles, change of plans and impeding progress of the villain’s plan.

G. Dangerous Situations – multiple occurrences designed to escalate intensity of actions

3. Sequence the action scenes to deliver your story. Give us your list of action scenes and the purpose of each scene.

Act 1

DISCOVERY: Brie learns that dedicated rides for Halloween treasure hunt she requested were not tested and may be prone to glitches. Purpose: Set the stage for impeding chaos.

FAILED MANIPULATION: Cooper offers Brie’s father infusion of funds to refurbish old rides in exchange for 60% profit share, and gives him downpayment. Pops, (Brie’s father), throws Cooper out of his office. Purpose: Introduce Cooper’s intentions and trigger alternative actions.

CONFRONTATION: Brie confronts her father for sabotaging her Halloween project. Purpose: A glimpse at their problematic relationship. There’s history untold.

DESPERATION: Cooper proposes Brie and gives her an expensive engagement ring. She accepts, uneasy of his sudden move. Purpose: to control Brie. Additionally, the ring is a set up which plays a significant role in Cooper’s future.

PLAN INITIATION: Cooper receives a call from his mob boss and wants to proceed with a backup plan as soon as the guys arrive. Purpose: Expose Cooper’s desperation to control the situation

CONFRONTATION: Brie catches parts of Cooper’s conversation and asks questions. He avoids explanation, making her mad. Purpose: Cooper’s first action creates Brie’s suspicion of the foul play.

OUTBURST: Brie’s son demands a ride on a Ferris Wheel. Brie denies, as it’s very old and dangerous. He throws her a fit. Purpose: Setting up stakes for a future scene

CONSPIRACY: Cooper briefs Ronnie and the thugs and devises a plan with Ronnie’s help, who knows the fairgrounds as a former employee. Cooper appoints Ronnie to lead the group and goes back to Brie. Purpose: Cooper wants to avoid suspicion of his involvement in sabotage.

BLAST FROM THE PAST: Brie runs into a group of rough looking individuals lead by her ex, Ronnie, who claims that he works for her father aa a maintenance man. They argue about his visitations rights. Purpose: Up the stakes for Brie & create a potential alliance when kids get stuck on the Ferris Wheel.

SABOTAGE: Ronnie and his team sets timers for specific rides to go off in sequence, with the Ferris wheel being the last in the chain. Purpose: Foreboding future disaster

MALFUNCTIONS: Brie plunges into small-scale rescue missions, trying to fix the rides, to no avail. Torn between her chaperone duties, she realizes she needs a maintenance man. She spots one tinkering with another ride, who turns out to be a guy she saw with Ronnie.

She leaves Cooper to supervise students, and runs off. Purpose: serve as the foundation for suspicion

ORDER: Cooper calls a thug to prevent Brie from getting help. Purpose: to avoid disruption of the plan

AMBUSH: Brie looks for the maintenance folks and gets locked inside a maintenance room. Purpose: escalating obstacle for achieving her goals.

BOLD MOVE: Brie’s son demands going on the Ferris Wheel, argues with Cooper, then runs off toward the wheel. Cooper does nothing. Purpose: bring tension and expose Cooper’s evil nature

ESCAPE: Brie uses her flexibility and skills to break free and runs to her father for help. Finding him drunk, she leaves. She sees commotions within the crowd. Purpose: to show that mayhem begun.

CONFRONTATION /THREAT: Cooper attempts to open Brie’s eyes to severity of her father’s decision, which will undoubtably result in destroying his reputation, lawsuits and potential jail time, if god forbid, something happens. Purpose: Using fear as a psychological manipulation to achieve his goal

REALIZATION/ DISCOVERY: Brie realizes Cooper’s motivations. Then notices her son high on the wheel and runs toward it. Purpose: Expose Coopers true motivations.

CHASE: Cooper tries to stop Brie from trying to find means to slow down spinning out of control wheel with her terrified son on it. Near being snatched by Cooper’s men, she starts climbing.

FAILED ATTEMPT Cooper tries to grab Brie by her ankles, gets tangled by the wire with lights and gets pulled onto the spinning wheel.

DILEMMA/FIGHT: torn between her son and Cooper, Brie slips and falls near Cooper, barely holding onto a cabin with her sweaty hands. She untangles Cooper while accusing him of being pure evil without noticing Ronnie climbing toward Cooper, then pulling him by his feet. Brie throws the ring into the air. Cooper leans to grab it, and falls to his death, dragging Ronnie behind.

UNEXPECTED MOVE: Brie climbs into her son’t cabin, comforting him in terror, as the wheel starts cracking from fast spinning. She stares at the ground with terror, noticing her father, as he manages to slow down the wheel until its full stop.

HAPPY RESOLVE: Brie resolves issues with her father, watching ambulance personnel helping Ronnie, the only witness, on a gurney. etc. etc.

[Nat Melvin]

Lesson 4: Natalie’s Villain Track

WIL: This lesson helped me to add more puzzle pieces to the structure.

1. Ask the Villain Track questions to discover your Villain’s plan, decisions, and actions.

A. What might be the Villain’s plan to accomplish an evil outcome or to annihilate the hero? The plan could be pre-existing or created on the spot.

VERSION 1 PLAN: Created on the spot.

Driven by his ruthless ambition and greed, Cooper’s motivation for his nefarious plan gains a devious twist when he learns from Brie about her father’s financial struggle to upkeep aging fairground rides.

Seizing this opportunity, Cooper devises a plan to become a majority controlling partner in the fairground, or buy the owner out, and sabotage it so he can claim insurance money to build a profitable commercial strip on this land.

Facing Brie’s father’s resistance, Cooper’s plan shifts from mere financial gain to a ruthless attempt to eliminate local community’s cherished tradition, betraying Brie’s trust and putting the fair’s legacy in grave jeopardy.

VILLAIN: Cooper, a wealthy commercial real estate developer

HERO: Brie, his fiancé, personal Pilate’s instructor

B. How many ways can the Villain attack or destroy the hero?

Direct Confrontation: Cooper sends his henchmen to physically confront Brie, attempting to intimidate or harm her directly.

Psychological Manipulation: uses mind games and psychological tactics to undermine Brie’s confidence and resolve, making her doubt herself and her mission.

Sabotage: continues to sabotage the fairground rides and attractions, specifically targeting those that Brie interacts with, putting her life and the lives of the students at risk.

Blackmail: threatens to expose Brie’s past mistakes or use sensitive information against her, coercing her into backing down from her mission.

Isolation: attempt to isolate Brie by cutting off her communication with her father and the fairground maintenance team, or trapping her in a confined space, leaving her vulnerable.

Kidnapping: resort to kidnapping Brie’s children, using them as leverage to manipulate her decisions and actions.

Deception: create fake alliances or present false information to mislead Brie, leading her into traps or making her act against her own interests.

Ambushes: Cooper’s henchmen could set up ambushes and traps along Brie’s path, catching her off guard and overpowering her.

Exploiting Weaknesses: may attempt to exploit Brie’s emotional vulnerabilities, using her love for her family and her desire for reconciliation with her father to manipulate her decisions.

Destroying Evidence: destroy any evidence Brie gathers against him or any proof of his sabotage, making it harder for her to expose his plan.

Financial Pressure: threaten to cut his financial resources and hinder Brie’s dream to own her own Pilate’s studio

Frame for Crimes: set Brie up to appear as if she is the one behind the fairground incidents, leading to her arrest.

Engaging Law Enforcement: Having the influence within law enforcement, he uses this power to target Brie, making it difficult for her to operate without interference.

Utilizing Henchmen: direct his henchmen to continuously pursue and harass Brie, creating a persistent threat.

C. What advantage does the Villain have and how can they exploit that in this movie?

Access to Fairground Infrastructure: As someone with thick pockets, Cooper bribes access to financial documents, fairground’s layout, rides, and facilities.

Influence Over Fairground Employees: including security personnel and maintenance workers. He can exploit bribery or fear to feed him information about Brie’s actions and hinder her progress.

Financial Resources: Cooper’s substantial financial resources allow him to hire skilled henchmen, to obstruct Brie’s mission.

Hidden Surveillance: gains access to hidden cameras and listening devices throughout the fairground to monitor Brie’s movements, gather intelligence, and stay one step ahead.

Employee Manipulation: bribe fairground employees to act as informants or saboteurs, making it difficult for Brie to trust anyone within the fairground.

Sabotage: Cooper can order fairground maintenance teams to continue sabotaging rides and attractions, ensuring that Brie remains occupied with crisis management.

False Alibis: Cooper can create false alibis and provide fake evidence to divert suspicion away from himself, leading Brie and authorities on wild goose chases.

Psychological Warfare: intensify manipulative tactics, playing on Brie’s emotions and fears to create inner conflict and wear down her determination.

Diversion: engineer distractions within the fairground to divert Brie’s attention away from critical areas, buying him time to further his plan.

D. What would be a “fitting end” for this Villain where they pay for what they’ve done?

Fitting End: During the climactic showdown between Brie and Cooper at the fairground, his true intentions and the extent of his villainy are exposed to the public and law enforcement.

Confrontation: Brie confronts Cooper on the Ferris wheel, where the final battle takes place. With fairgoers and authorities watching, she exposes the evidence of Cooper’s sabotage, and betrayal, including conspiracy to commit harm, endangerment, and attempted financial fraud, making it impossible for him to shield himself from the mounting evidence. The confrontation becomes a public spectacle.

Family Reconciliation: Brie’s dedication and exposure of Cooper’s plot, together with her brave face-to-face showdown prompts a change of heart in her father. He realizes the extent of Cooper’s greed and manipulation and offers Brie to repair the fairground and preserve its legacy together.

Closure for Brie: She finds closure not only in bringing Cooper to justice but also in mending her relationship with her father and protecting the fairground’s future for her children and the community.

2. Include labels with each step of their plan.

Act 1:

Opening: Cooper, posing as a wealthy real estate developer and Brie’s loving fiancé, establishes himself as a trusted figure within the local community, including her father, maintenance team, and employees.

Inciting Incident: Cooper learns about the fairground’s financial struggles due to its aging rides from Brie. This critical information sparks the beginning of his nefarious plan.

1. PLAN/ OFFER: Cooper appears at Brie’s father’s office, offers partnership and gives a downpayment check as a symbol of trust from his future son in law. He receives access to document files and fairground layout. <div>

2. PLAN/ HITMEN REQUEST: Cooper calls his partner, a local mob, about the opportunity of building a profitable commercial strip on this land and requests to send a few men to help him alter the rides.

Act 1 Turning Point: Cooper decides to exploit the opportunity in its depth, recognizing the potential to manipulate the situation to his advantage. He begins laying the groundwork for his scheme, such as subtly increasing his control over the fairground’s operations by gaining trust of its employees.

Act 2:

3. PHYSICAL MANIPULATION: Cooper uses mind games and psychological tactics to undermine Brie’s confidence and resolve, making her doubt herself and her mission.

4. DIRECT CONFRONTATION: Cooper’s reaction to Brie’s investigation interferes with his plans. He orders his henchmen to physically confront Brie, attempting to intimidate her directly.

5. SABOTAGE: continues to sabotage the fairground rides and attractions, specifically targeting those that Brie interacts with, putting her life and the lives of the students at risk.

Midpoint: Cooper’s plan escalates as he infiltrates the fairground maintenance team, strategically planting hidden sabotage mechanisms within amusement rides and attractions.

6. PSYCHOLOGICAL WARFARE: Coopers carefully structureD sabotage begins to create minor incidents that raise concerns among fairgoers.

Act 2 Turning Point: As Brie continues investigating the mounting issues at the fairground, Cooper realizes that he needs to intensify the chaos.

7. SPECIFIC TARGETS: Cooper orders additional sabotage, targeting specific rides and creating a pattern of failures that heightens fear among fairgoers and the community.

Climax: The climax of Cooper’s plan centers around the Ferris wheel. He plans for it to malfunction spectacularly during its grand finale ride, causing shock and terror. He orchestrates a chaotic and dangerous situation at the fairground, diverting attention away from his true intentions.

Act 3:

Resolution: Cooper’s sabotage efforts have created a full-blown crisis at the fairground, drawing the attention of authorities, fairgoers, and Brie. However, his ultimate goal remains hidden. At this point, he realizes that his actions may attract more scrutiny than he anticipated.

8. KIDNAPPING: Cooper orchestrates kidnapping of Brie’s son, sending him on a Ferris wheel by himself.

Climax: Brie confronts Cooper on the Ferris wheel, revealing her knowledge of his plot and exposing the evidence of his sabotage and betrayal to the public.

9. FITTING ENDING: Cooper notices Brie using her physical abilities and knowledge to fix Ferris wheel’s mechanical failure, and gets on the Ferris wheel to stop her. Brie uses his greed to come up with a clever move, which propels him to lose his balance and fall to the ground to his death. Her father manipulates the mechanics of the Ferris wheel to safety.

Resolution: Brie saves the children from the Ferris wheel tragedy. She reconciles with her father who offers her to work together to preserve fairground legacy.

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[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Creating The Mission Track

WIL: That this concept holds this far and will be elevated with future assignments.

1. Ask the Mission Track questions to discover your Hero’s mission.

What is it about this Hero that will have them go straight into the face of the overwhelming odds?

Brie, the single mom, possesses an unwavering determination to protect her children and students under her care, driven by her sense of responsibility, love and fierce maternal instinct that compels her to confront the danger head-on.

B. What is the mission that would be an impossible goal?

Brie’s impossible mission becomes unraveling a web of intricate sabotage on the State Fair’s rides and attractions, a race against time as she faces challenges that test her physical skills, problem-solving acumen, and emotional resilience while she must figure out which ride has been set to collapse.

C. What strong internal and external motivation could drive the hero?

Internal Motivation:

Maternal Instinct: Brie’s deep love for her two children. She would do anything to ensure their safety and well-being, even if it means risking her own life.

Sense of Responsibility: As the chaperone of the group of students on the field trip, Brie’s sense of duty drives her to protect them from the impending danger.

Personal Redemption: Brie carries the weight of past decisions and regrets, particularly her failed marriage. Resolving the crisis at the fair becomes a chance for personal redemption and making amends with her father and herself.

External Motivation:

Preventing Disaster: Brie’s external motivation is to prevent Cooper’s catastrophic plan from unfolding. She knows that if she doesn’t act, the consequences will be dire, affecting not only her family but also the fairgoers and the fairground itself.

Reconnecting with Her Father: Repairing her strained relationship with her father and preserving the family legacy provide an added incentive to confront the crisis.

Saving Her Father’s Reputation: Brie realises that if the disaster strikes the fairground, it will destroy her father’s reputation.

Community Impact: Brie is motivated by the broader impact on the community. She understands that the fair is a cherished tradition for many, and she feels responsibility to protect it.

D. Imagine that mission playing out across a story. What could naturally happen if this hero went on this mission against this villain?

Challenges and Obstacles: physical confrontations with Cooper’s henchmen, mechanical malfunctions on fairground rides, and psychological mind games to test her resolve.

Tense Confrontations: high-stakes confrontations as Brie attempts to outsmart and defeat the man she once trusted, leading to intense verbal exchanges and emotional showdowns.

Character Growth: As she faces adversity, she becomes more resourceful, resilient, and confident. Her journey also includes confronting her past mistakes and finding inner strength.

Rescue and Heroism: successfully rescues students and fairgoers from perilous situations.

Alliances and Betrayals: Brie may form unexpected alliances with other characters, including fairground employees, fellow parents, or even her estranged father. However, the story might also reveal betrayals from individuals she thought she could trust.

Race Against Time: The story is punctuated by moments of urgency as Brie races against the clock to defuse a critical situation or stop a ride from malfunctioning. These moments of suspense add to the intensity of the narrative.

Emotional Reconciliation: Brie’s mission provides opportunities for emotional reconciliation and healing. She may have heartfelt conversations with her children, make amends with her father, and even confront her own inner demons.

The Fairground as a Character: with its attractions and mechanisms as they become a battleground and a symbol of the challenges Brie must overcome.

Sacrifices and Losses: Brie may face difficult choices and experience personal losses as she strives to protect others and prevent disaster.

Climactic Showdown: The story builds toward a climactic showdown between Brie and Cooper, where their conflicting goals and values come head to head.

Resolution and Redemption: resolution to the crisis and the potential for redemption, both for Brie and for other characters, a moment of reflection and closure as the fairground and community begin to heal.

2. Use the Mission Steps to outline the mission.

Clear Mission: Brie’s clear mission is to prevent her fiancé Cooper’s catastrophic plan from unfolding at the State Fair, safeguard her children, the students, and the fairgoers, and repair her strained relationship with her father.

Motivation: Brie’s unwavering love for her family, sense of responsibility for the students, and a deep desire to make amends for her past mistakes.

Inciting Incident: Brie accidentally overhears a conversation between Cooper and his henchmen at the fairground, revealing Cooper’s nefarious plot.

First Action: Brie’s first action is to discreetly obtain a schematic of the sabotage mechanisms planted on fairground rides, laying the foundation for her mission.

Obstacle: Brie encounters numerous obstacles, including Cooper’s manipulative mind games, mechanical malfunctions on rides, and her own internal doubts and fears, all while she’s doing everything she can to prevent stampede and chaos.

Escalation: The situation escalates as fairgoers unknowingly enter dangerous rides, and students inadvertently get separated. Chased by Cooper’s henchmen, Brie’s mission becomes a race against time as she navigates escalating chaos.

Overwhelming Odds: Brie faces overwhelming odds, including her own fiancé’s betrayal, the potential for casualties, and the risk of permanent damage to the fairground’s reputation.

New Plan: When Brie realizes the extent of the sabotage, she adjusts her plan to focus on dismantling and fine-tuning the rides and the Ferris wheel to prevent catastrophe.

Full Out Attack: Brie uses her knowledge of the Ferris wheel and fairground layout to neutralize the threats and outsmart Cooper’s henchmen.

Success: Through Brie’s determination, resourcefulness, and love for her family, she successfully dismantles the sabotage mechanisms on the Ferris wheel and other rides, preventing disaster. Her actions not only save lives but also repair her relationship with her father, and the fairground is ultimately preserved.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Hero and Villain

What I learned in this assignment is that things will evidently change as I dive deeper into my story.

1. Concept: A single mom leads a group of students on a State Fair field trip, unaware her fiancé’s plot could turn the amusement park into a battlefield.

Hero Morally Right: Brie fights to stop her fiancé’s plan to destroy her father’s reputation, to stop the hitmen from damaging the rides and Ferris Wheel, to save lives of fairgoers and her own children

Villain Morally Wrong: Carry out his plans for land development, even if it means putting Brie’s life and her family in danger.

Hero: Brie, mother of two children, Pilate’s instructor

A. Unique Skill Set: Exceptional physical strength, flexibility, agility and balance; ability to remain calm under pressure, control over her body movements, accurate and focused strikes, resourcefulness and intimate familiarity with the fairgrounds as she grew up on her father’s land

B. Motivation: Protect her children and find a way to escape the danger, while mending her relationship with her estranged father

C. Secret or Wound: Struggles with guilt over her past decisions against her father’s will, which resulted in her failure in marriage and broken relationship with her father

Villain: Cooper

A. Unbeatable: Vast wealth and connections at his disposal, strategic brilliance, dirty tactics, unwavering determination to his commitments and goals, charismatic facade, no moral boundaries, total control over his goons

B. Plan/Goal: to acquire Brie’s father’s land by orchestrating a crisis during the fair that would not only create chaos, but also lead to devaluation of the land, so he can strong-arm Brie’s father into selling the property at a fraction of its worth

C. What they lose if Hero survives: immense financial profits, his reputation as an unbeatable force, control over Brie

Impossible Mission: To find a complex and dangerous network of explosives that Cooper and his associates ostensibly have placed throughout the State Fairgrounds

A. Puts Hero in Action: She believes that the explosives are set to detonate at the climax of the State Fair, endangering lives of thousands of innocent fairgoers and causing irreparable damage to the fairground property.

B. Demands They Go Beyond Their Best: Brie figures out a schematic of the explosive network. However, she soon finds out that the network is ingeniously designed to be untraceable and virtually impossible to find and disarm conventionally.

C. Destroy the Villain: In a final confrontation with Cooper, Brie uses nontraditional way to get him killed.

2. Improved answers: Brie becomes suspicious that the explosives may have been a decoy designed to mislead from something else Cooper will use to demolish the rides so that it will look like mechanical failure due to negligence. Now she needs her wits to figure out how.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Concept

What I learned is that being predominantly a thriller writer, I can derivate to action genre with a marketable concept, and Hal’s phenomenon program.

Concept: A family’s impending divorce takes an unexpected turn when a State Fair disaster forces them to grapple with survival challenges to save their kids.

Conventions:

Highly Skilled Hero: Pilate’s instructor, mother of two kids

Demand for Action: Saving children from a catastrophic collapse of a giant Ferris Wheel

Mission: To save her own kids and other State Fair visitors

Antagonist: Mob boss, aka loan shark / land developer

Escalating Action: to prevent mob’s hitmen from destroying State Fair attractions

A. Amazing Character – Brie, personal Pilates trainer

B. Impossible Mission – A woman against the mob

C. Engaging Journey – Brie is torn between her ex who wants to keep their kids from relocating to another state, and her fiancé who turns out to be a ruthless head of the mob all while trying to save people and her kids from a disaster

D. Incredible Action – from fixing the attractions, to taking out hit men, to preventing a major disaster

E. Intriguing World – Regular Jane female against trained hitmen

[Nat Melvin]

1. Natalie Melvin

2. Numerous, including the rewrites. :0)

3. I write in thriller genre for drama, mystery, fantasy, scifi feature and TV, and would love to elevate some action scenes, not necessarily action genre in its glory. Although, you never know.

4. I have been propelled to Hollywood arena with my first mystery thriller feature, which is now in development via my own production company.

[Nat Melvin]

I agree to the terms of this release form.

Natalie Melvin

[Nat Melvin]

Anyone wants to swap outline for a feedback?

Genre: Mystery Thriller Drama

Concept: Hot on a trail of bizarre murders, an amnesiac survivor of a mysterious cult must relive her traumatic experience by following clues drawn under hypnosis to save her missing daughter from a sacrifice.

[Nat Melvin]

M4 LESSON 9: Natalie’s Scene requirements

My vision: Create and produce award winning stories that make an unforgettable emotional impact on a worldwide audience.

What I learned from this assignment: It is simply mind blowing how minor but very important details start showing up.

ACT 1:

Scene Arc: From confusion to the moment of clarity

INT. ABANDONED TUNNEL – NIGHT

Essence: Emily tries to recollect bizarre sacrificial ritual that caused her an emotional trauma

Conflict: Emily needs hypnosis to unblock her memories

Subtext: Emily’s trauma led her to developing a Dissociative Identity Disorder (DID)

Hope/fear: Hope her baby is alive. Fear that Emily didn’t survive

Scene Arc: From enjoying routine chore to feeling threat

INT. FAMILY CHAPEL, VICTORIAN ESTATE — DAY

Essence: Walter arranges trophy plaster phantoms molded off the relatives he killed. He is too friendly with Detective Mike

Conflict: Lady Winslet calls Hagan for a chat

Subtext: Hagan represents a threat to Walter’s plans to obtain inheritance

Hope: Hagan has nothing to do with his father’s death. Fear: Hagan is in trouble

Scene Arc: From memory gap to realization

INT. EMILY’S ROOM, VICTORIAN ESTATE – DAY

Essence: Emily’s memories can be triggered by her sketches drawn under hypnosis

Conflict: Emily becomes obsessed with the idea that her baby girl is alive

Subtext: Emily needs her sketches to keep her memory intact

Hope: Emily’s daughter survived. Fear: Emily is blinded by grief of losing her child

Scene Arc: From hoping for news about the inheritance to being rejected and threatened to lose his child

INT. LADY WINSLET’S BEDROOM, VICTORIAN ESTATE – DAY

Essence: Hagan is rejected by his snobbish white suprematists’ family on his father’s side

Conflict: Hagan doesn’t have proof of his birth to be a heir

Subtext: LW wants Hagan leave Emily for good

Hope: Hagan finds proof of his birth Fear: Hagan will forever lose his child if he stay

Scene Arc: From eavesdropping to nearly being caught

INT. CORRIDOR, VICTORIAN ESTATE – DAY

Essence: Walter (as Cherimoya) is watching Hagan

Conflict: LW calls Walter deranged, unsuitable for anything, especially to run the estate

Subtext: Cherimoya is an interested party

Hope: Cheri gets caught Fear: Cheri is plotting something bad against Hagan or LW

Scene Arc: From interrogation to murder

INT. LADY WINSLET’S ROOM, VICTORIAN ESTATE – DAY

Essence: Walter (as Cheri) is after the will

Conflict: LW refuses to disclose information about the will

Subtext: Walter will stop at nothing to achieve his goal of becoming the heir of the estate

Hope: LW survives Fear: The will is lost with LW’s death

Scene Arc: From being disturbed to escaping confinement

INT. EMILY’S ROOM, VICTORIAN ESTATE — DAY

Essence: Emily wants to speak to Hagan about their child

Conflict: Emily is torn between feeing guilty for killing Hagan’s wife (flashback) and needing his help. She makes a child-like drawing of the stick people, then snaps back to being an adult when she sees Hagan

Subtext: Emily wants to escape

Hope: Emily will talk to Hagan Fear: Emily is making a big mistake by leaving her safety net

Scene Arc: From paying a farewell to his deceased father to being suspected of his murder

INT. FAMILY CHAPEL, VICTORIAN ESTATE — DAY

Essence: Hagan wants to collect a sample of his father’s skin for DNA test

Conflict: Detective Mike throws an accusation of Hagan being a suspect in his father’s death

Subtext: Hagan wants to prove his innocence

Hope: Hagan is related to this deceased man Fear: Hagan killed his father

Scene Arc: From hiding while witnessing a murder to being discovered

INT. MAID’S QUARTERS, VICTORIAN ESTATE – NIGHT

Essence: Flashback to Hagan’s mother being killed by his father

Conflict: Younger Hagan vs his raging drunkard father

Subtext: Hagan recollects an episode from his childhood when his mother was killed

Hope: Hagan will avoid his father’s axe Fear: Hagan will burn his father to death

Scene Arc: From hoping to talk to Hagan to being caught by Walter

INT. FAMILY CHAPEL, VICTORIAN ESTATE — DAY

Essence: Emily tries to speak to Hagan

Conflict: She can’t because Detective Mike won’t leave Hagan alone

Subtext: Emily wants to escape with Hagan

Hope: Emily will get a chance to catch up with Hagan Fear: Emily is in danger of being locked down

Scene Arc: from waiting for Emily to leaving

EXT. YARD, VICTORIAN ESTATE – DAY

Essence: Hagan is looking for a sign from Emily

Conflict: Emily’s window is curtained and Emily is not in sight

Subtext: Hagan plans Emily’s escape

Hope: Hagan sees Emily Fear: He leaves without seeing her

Scene Arc: From captive to fugitive runaway

EXT. FRONT YARD, VICTORIAN ESTATE — DAY

Essence: Emily escapes from her confinement

Conflict: Walter tries to stop Emily

Subtext: Emily needs Walter seeing her drawings, as a thread that she remembers

Hope: Emily will catch Hagan before he leaves Fear: Emily is too sick to be out in the world by herself

ACT 2:

1. Scene Arc: From losing Emily to coming up with a new plan

EXT. FRONT YARD, VICTORIAN ESTATE — DAY

Essence: Walter swallows Emily’s bate

Conflict: Emily is gone chasing Hagan

Subtext: Walter needs to keep Emily under control and away from Hagan

Hope: Walter sincerely means no harm to Emily Fear: He’s into something no good

2. Scene Arc: From smoking dope to chasing Emily’s car

I./E. CAR/ COUNTRY ROAD, SUBURBAN NOLA — DAY

Essence: Detective Mike pursues Emily

Conflict: He is intoxicated.

Subtext: Mike is a crooked cop

Hope: Mike will let Emily go Fear: Emily gets caught by Mike

3. Scene Arc: from purposelessly frisking Emily’s room to finding her sketches book

INT. EMILY’S ROOM, VICTORIAN ESTATE — DAY

Essence: Walter has keys to Emily’s room. He has a flashback to Susan dying in blood. He replaces Emily’s pills with prescription drugs, fixes the room neat, then takes Emily’s sketches book

Conflict: Emily’s pills were not prescription drugs, bu something other from Walter

Subtext: Walter uses drugs to control Emily

Hope: Emily is going to make it without pills Fear: Walter has his own agenda

4. Scene Arc: From driving to hitting a tree

EXT. COUNTRY ROAD, SUBURBAN NOLA — DAY

Essence: Emily accelerates, loses hold of her vehicle and slams into a tree

Conflict: Emily can’t control her seizures

Subtext: Emily has a DID (flashback to a young girl in the tunnel)

Hope: She won’t get hurt Fear: Emily will be taken back to the estate, or worse, to jail

5. Scene Arc: From studying Emily’s sketches to prepping chapel’s altar to resemble her drawings

INT. OLD CHAPEL, VICTORIAN ESTATE — DAY

Essence: Walter has a secret plan

Conflict: Some pages of Emily’s sketches are missing. LW’s drunkard husband messes up Walter’s arrangement

Subtext: Walter starts executing his plan of humiliating Emily publicly

Hope: Emily will be safe Fear: Something bad is going to happen to Emily

6. Scene Arc: from being confused to remembering why she pursues Hagan

INT. CAR – MOVING, SUBURBAN NOLA — DAY

Essence: Emily wants to convince Detective Mike to bring her to Hagan

Conflict: Mike is edgy, more interested in fishing out information about Hagan

Subtext: Emily needs a ride to Hagan’s club (does she or Mike have Halloween party flyer?

Hope: Mike will agree to help Fear: Emily won’t find her daughter

7. Scene Arc: from dwelling into a flashback to being interrupted by Cherimoya’s call

INT. HAGAN’S OFFICE, CAVE NIGHTCLUB – DAY

Essence: Hagan is haunted by his past

Conflict: Younger Hagan is too scared to stand against his father even to help his dying mother

Subtext: Hagan has issues with self-confidence

Hope: Hagan won’t get killed Fear: He won’t make it out of the house alive

8. Scene Arc: from Mike’s car to meeting Teresa

I./E. CAR /PARKING LOT, CAVES NIGHTCLUB – DAY

Essence: Emily convinces Mike to bring her to Hagan’s club

Conflict: Mike leaves Emily with Teresa and goes alone

Subtext: Mike wants something from Hagan

Hope: Emily gets to see Hagan Fear: Emily will be taken to jail

9. Scene Arc: From being interrogated to being surprised

INT. NAGAN’S OFFICE, CAVES NIGHTCLUB – DAY

Essence: Mike pushes Hagan to admit killing his wife

Conflict: Hagan is genuinely surprised when hearing about Walter sleeping with his wife

Subtext: Mike is hired to corner Hagan, who seemingly knows more about Susan’s death

Hope: Hagan tells the truth Fear: Hagan is involved or knows more about Susan’s death

10. Scene Arc: from feeling guilty of losing her baby to hoping for Cherimoya’s help

INT. BAR, CAVES NIGHTCLUB – DAY

Essence: Emily shares her feelings of hopelessness with Teresa

Conflict: Emily doesn’t know where to start or whom to ask for help

Subtext: Emily needs to find out who knows about her daughter

Hope: Emily finds answers from Cherimoya Fear: Cherimoya can’t help (follow the Frankenstein)

11. Scene Arc: from going to see Hagan to backing away

INT. HAGAN’S OFFICE, CAVES NIGHTCLUB – DAY

Essence: Emily feels guilty and backs away

Conflict: Emily can’t talk with Hagan in the presence of Teresa and Mike

Subtext: Emily wants Hagan to be aware that she broke out of the estate

Hope: Emily gets to talk to Hagan Fear: She backs away

12. Scene Arc: Hagan offers Mike a bribe

INT. HAGAN’S OFFICE, CAVES NIGHTCLUB – DAY

Essence: Hagan tries to recruit Mike to help him find the records book

Conflict: Mike rushes to catch Emily

Subtext: Hagan knows that Mike is a crooked cop

Hope: Hagan finds the records book Fear: Mike lies that he can help

13. Scene Arc: from running away from Teresa and Mike to finding her way into the tunnel

I./E. CAVES NIGHTCLUB/ STREET – DAY

Essence: Emily pursues her goal of meeting Cherimoya

Conflict: Emily doesn’t know where to go

Subtext: Emily is determined to find Cherimoya

Hope: Emily won’t get caught Fear: She gets lost and falls into the wrong hands

14. Scene Arc: from hesitation to taking action to pursue Emily

INT. HAGAN’S OFFICE, CAVES NIGHTCLUB – DAY

Essence: either flashback to burning his father (or uncertainty about his feelings and actions)

Conflict: Hagan has Halloween party in his club

Subtext: Hagan is torn between his obligations and feelings for Emily

Hope: He will go after Emily Fear: His obligations are more important to him

15. Scene Arc: from learning about Emily going to the tunnel to deciding to go after her

INT. BAR, CAVES NIGHTCLUB – DAY

Essence: Hagan learns that Emily will be meeting Cherimoya in the tunnel from Teresa’s conversation (Borrows some guy’s Phantom costume)

Conflict: Cherimoya reminds Hagan about ceremony

Subtext: Hagan has feelings for Emily

Hope: Hagan finds Emily Fear: Cherimoya gets to Emily first

16. Scene Arc: from panic to enchantment

INT. MANHOLE, STREET — NIGHT / CHAMBER- NIGHT

Essence: Emily has panic episode while descending down the manhole. She gets enchanted by the enormity of the place and unfolding fiesta madness. She asks about Cherimoya, then waits

Conflict: the way back is sealed, no way out

Subtext: Emily is traumatized by darkness of the tunnels

Hope: Emily will stay safe Fear:

ACT 2

17-1 Scene Arc: from being lost to being found by Hagan/ Phantom

INT. UNDERGROUND CHAMBER, ABANDONED TUNNEL – NIGHT

Essence: Emily is looking for Cherimoya

Conflict: dangerous crowd, easy to get lost

Subtext: Emily pursues her goal of finding her daughter

Hope: Emily stays safe Fear: Emily will get another seizure episode and can be raped

18-2. Scene Arc: from being lost to dancing w Hagan/ Phantom

INT. UNDERGROUND CHAMBER, ABANDONED TUNNEL – NIGHT

Essence: Emily admits being in love with Hagan / flashback to a break up scene under the rain

Conflict: Emily undergoes withdrawal from drugs

Subtext: Emily never stopped loving Hagan

Hope: Hagan confesses his love for Em Fear: Hagan will conceal his feelings

19-3. Scene Arc: flashback – from being submissive to defending love

INT. LADY WINSLET’S BEDROOM, VICTORIAN ESTATE – DAY – FLASHBACK

Essence: Lady Winslet conditions Emily to become white suprematist

Conflict: Emily is too obedient to stand up against LW

Subtext: Lady Winslet stands for keeping her bloodline clean

Hope: Emily won’t betray Hagan Fear: Emily will obey LW

20-4. Scene Arc: from being alone/helpless to meeting Cherimoya /hopeful

INT. UNDERGROUND CHAMBER, ABANDONED TUNNEL – CONT’D

Essence: Cherimoya wants to keep Em under control

Conflict: Too many witnesses, Emily is on a brink of a seizure

Subtext: Cherimoya needs to incapacitate Em to humiliate her

Hope: Emily won’t have her seizure Fear: Cherimoya will take advantage of Em

21-5. Scene Arc: from pre-seizure to hallucinations

INT. RITUAL CAVERN, ABANDONED TUNNEL – NIGHT

Essence: Cherimoya convinces Emily to take Ayahuasca

Conflict: Emily doesn’t feel well

Subtext: Cherimoya wants to publicly humiliate Em by making her look insane

Hope: Emily can keep it together Fear: Emily can die

22-6. Scene Arc: from searching for the book to being trapped

INT. OLD CHAPEL, VICTORIAN ESTATE – NIGHT

Essence: Hagan finds clues to find family records book

Conflict: Evans interferes with bringing plaster phantoms for the ceremony

Subtext: Hagan is determined to prove his rights to the estate

Hope: Hagan will find the book Fear: Hagan will be killed

23-7. Scene Arc: from purging to seeing Hagan as the leader of the cult

INT. CEREMONIAL ROOM, ABANDONED TUNNEL – NIGHT

Essence: Emily’s vision reveals Hagan as the leader of the cult

Conflict: Emily is affected by Ayahuasca

Subtext: Emily is easily swayed

Hope: Emily’s vision is just a nightmare Fear: Emily is right about Hagan being the leader of the cult

ACT 3

24-1. Scene Arc: from being under influence to being taken back to the estate

I./E. TUNNEL/ CAVES NIGHTCLUB PARKING LOT – NIGHT

Essence: Emily is convinced that Hagan is the cult’s leader (COA in his office) who wants to take her daughter and the estate from her

Conflict: Cherimoya tries to keep Emily and Hagan apart from each other

Subtext: Emily wants to confront Hagan

Hope: Emily will find Hagan Fear: Emily doesn’t know what she’s up against

25-2. Scene Arc: from being oblivious to getting herself trapped

INT. FAMILY CRYPT, CHAPEL, VICTORIAN ESTATE – NIGHT

Essence: Emily finds secret hideout with manikins and Teresa wearing a mask of Emily’s face

Conflict: Emily doesn’t realize that she’s trapped

Subtext: Emily has been played

Hope: Emily will find her way out Fear: Emily is headed directly into a snake pit

26-3. Scene Arc: from finding secret underground passage to

INT. OLD CHAPEL, VICTORIAN ESTATE – NIGHT

Essence: Hagan searches for family records book (because of the rush funeral)

Conflict: His father’s funeral ceremony commences

Subtext: per LW’s order, Hagan’s father’s ceremony is rushed to seal him in a crypt

Hope: Hagan will remain unnoticed Fear: Hagan will be discovered

27-4. Scene Arc: from falling into a trap to believing in Walter’s lies

INT. FAMILY CRYPT, CHAPEL, VICTORIAN ESTATE – NIGHT

Essence: Emily frees Walter

Conflict: Walter accuses Hagan of being the leader of the cult who forces folks to do his dirty business

Subtext: Walter misleads Emily to win her back

Hope: Emily won’t trust Walter Fear: Walter is right about Hagan

28-5. Scene Arc: from avoiding being caught to falling into Walter’s trap

INT. FAMILY CRYPT, CHAPEL, VICTORIAN ESTATE – NIGHT

Essence: Hagan finds Emily in Walter’s embrace

Conflict: Emily seems to be having sex with Walter

Subtext: Walter set Hagan up

Hope: Hagan will believe Emily Fear: Hagan will believe in Emily’s betrayal

29-6. Scene Arc: from being tied up to freeing herself and saving Teresa

INT. FAMILY CRYPT, CHAPEL, VICTORIAN ESTATE, NIGHT – CONT’D

Essence: Emily tries to free herself and save Teresa

Conflict: Emily accidentally starts fire

Subtext: Emily realizes Walter’s betrayal

Hope: Emily manages ton escape Fear: Emily will die

30-7. Scene Arc: from being contempt to being vengeful

INT. CHAPEL, VICTORIAN ESTATE, NIGHT – CONT’D

Essence: Hagan fights for his rights

Conflict: LW /Walter demands rebuking Hagan’s rights to the estate or he’ll never see his daughter

Subtext: Walter wants Hagan dead

Hope: Hagan won’t get involved in a fight Fear: Hagan will be killed

31-8. Scene Arc: from conflict to disaster

INT. CHAPEL, VICTORIAN ESTATE, NIGHT – CONT’D

Essence: Hagan stands against LW /Walter

Conflict: Emily is forced to choose between Hagan and her daughter

Subtext: Walter wants Emily to kill Hagan

Hope: Emily misses Fear: Emily and Hagan will not survive building collapse

ACT 4

32-1. Scene Arc: from taking a fall to surviving

INT. CRYPT, CHAPEL, VICTORIAN ESTATE, NIGHT – CONT’D

Essence: Emily finds Hunter

Conflict: the building collapses

Subtext: Emily’s dream came true

Hope: Hunter survives Fear: Emily and Hunter will be buried under a debris

33-2. Scene Arc: from desperation to relief

INT. HOSPITAL, SMALL TOWN – DAY

Essence: Hunter survies

Conflict: Hunter doesn’t remember Emily

Subtext: Emily finds happiness

Hope: Emily reunites with Hagan Fear: Hagan can’t forgive Emily

34-3. Scene Arc: from hopelessness to happy ending

INT. CHAPEL, VICTORIAN ESTATE, NIGHT – CONT’D

Essence: Emily destroys the will so Hagan can inherit the estate

Conflict: Walter is disguised as LW to obtain the will

Subtext: Emily proclaims her love to Hagan

Hope: Emily, Hunter and Hagan will become a family Fear: Hagan will leave

[Nat Melvin]

M4 LESSON 8: Natalie’s Intriguing Moments

My vision is to create and produce award winning stories that make an unforgettable emotional impact on a worldwide audience.

What I learned from this assignment: In Hal’s mastery call 11 he discussed intrigue techniques, and suddenly out of nowhere, a major twist for my story showed up. I absolutely love this new idea which adds unexpected, clever reveal at the end. Lesson learned: Always… ALWAYS listen to Hal’s calls. Amazing!

ACT 1:

Secret: What happened to Emily’s baby after birth?

Mystery: Who killed Hagan’s father and why?

Hidden identity: Walter impersonates black crossdresser woman Cherimoya to get the will

ACT2:

Covert agenda: Emily and Hagan act strangely opposite from expected in front of detective Mike

Secret: Emily confesses to the Phantom her love for the boy she fell in love with as a child – while Walter/Cherimoya eavesdrops their conversation

Scheme: While purging Ayahuasca, Emily tells Cherimoya her vision of Hagan being the leader of the cult

ACT 3:

Secret: Hagan attacks Walter for sleeping with his wife

Mystery: Who makes and collects latex face masks of Emily’s deceased relatives and why?

Scheme: Walter stages sex scene with Emily to hurt and humiliate Hagan

ACT 4:

Mystery: Who has Hunter?

Hidden Identity: Walter impersonates LW to force Emily shoot Hagan

Covert agenda: Emily shoots LW

EPILOGUE:

Intrigue: Emily and Hagan played Walter to make a mistake and reveal his identity publicly

Covert agenda: Emily tears off the will naming her a heir to give Hagan his legacy of being a true heir of the estate

[Nat Melvin]

M4 LESSON 7: Natalie’s Emotional Moments

My vision is to create and produce award winning stories that make an unforgettable emotional impact on a worldwide audience.

What I learned from this assignment: It’s amazing how the same event portrayed via emotions opens a deeper layer for the character and makes his choice plausible

ACT 1:

Distress: While under a hypnosis, Emily relieves her traumatic experience with the cult and losing her child

Bonding: Susan feels sympathetic for Emily’s discovery of realizing that her daughter is alive

Wounds/Distress: Mike accuses Hagan of killing his father. There is a following flashback where Younger Hagan witnesses his mother being killed by his father

Wound/Hidden weakness: Hagan reacts to LW’s announcement of him not being a heir of his father’s estate because of his wedlock origin

Distress: Cherimoya eavesdrops LW’s conversation with Hagan where Walter is referred to as deranged and unfit to be the heir of the estate

Wound: Emily has a flashback to where she pushed Susan and it looks like she killed her

Surprise/ Excitement: Emily sees Hagan and escapes her confinement in hopes to talk to him

Emotional Dilemma: Emily wants to tell Hagan about her accidentally killing his wife, but fears to be arrested by Mike before she can find her daughter

Wound: Emily rejects Walter’s attempt to protect her from Hagan, stating her despise for him

ACT 2:

Moral Issue: Walter’s flashback where he leaves wounded Susan to die

Surprise: Mike sees Emily’s car accelerating and makes a call to the station where he finds out that she was driving a car registered to a deceased person

Distress: Emily hits a tree trying to outrun Mike’s police car

Hidden Weakness: Walter arranges candles in the chapel that resemble Emily’s drawing

Success/Winning: Emily convinces Mike to bring her to Hagan’s place

Wound: Hagan’s flashback to near burning his father to death

Wound: Mike interrogates Hagan accusing him of killing his wife and their child

Wound: Emily confides Teresa about her love for her daughter whom she never saw in her life

Moral Issue: Emily hears about hagan being accused of killing his wife, but doesn’t tell the truth about what happened to Susan

Success: Cherimoya agrees to meet Emily in the tunnels at midnight

Distress: At Hagan’s office, Emily can’t face him and backs away

Courage: Emily overcomes her fear of the tunnels and descends into a manhole

Love: Emily’s flashback to her childhood with Younger Hagan

Bonding: Cherimoya offers help to Emily who is having a withdrawal

Distress: While purging from Ayahuasca, Emily sees Hagan conducting sacrificial ritual involving a child

ACT 3:

Betrayal: Cherimoya snatches Emily before Hagan’s eyes and takes her back to the estate

Distress: Emily finds manikins with her deceased family member’s face masks made of latex

Hidden Weakness: Hagan learns that Emily was taken back to the estate and rushes after her

Love: Walter dressed as the Phantom, dances with Emily

Surprise: Walter sees that Hagan has arrived, and vanishes from Emily’s sight

Hidden weakness: Hagan looks for Emily, finds the way to the underground warehouse

Surprise: Emily finds Cherimoya’s dress, then sees Teresa wearing latex mask resembling Emily’s face

Emotional Dilemma: Emily releases Walter from his bond

Betrayal: Walter tears off Emily’s clothes and stages a sex scene when Hagan walks in

Moral Issue: Hagan attacks Walter for sleeping with his wife, then leaves

Wound/ Sacrifice: Walter accuses Hagan of being a leader of the cult, states that Hunter is his daughter, not Hagan’s, and ties up Emily to protect her from Hagan and goes to save Hunter from a sacrifice (maybe also mentions saving LW)

ACT 4:

Moral Issue: Walter sneaks into LW’s bedroom and takes her clothes and a wheelchair

Distress: Emily tries to free herself up and sets underground warehouse of fire

Distress: Hagan finds Hunter’s plaster statue and crushes his father’s statue in anger

Bonding: Teresa unties Emily, who subdues the fire and drags Teresa into a safer place, but she dies. Emily takes a hooded cape from the manikin and leaves

Wound: Emily passes through a tunnel, having a flashback to someone dragging her to the chapel

Betrayal: LW orders ceremonial phantoms to capture Hagan and bring him to the altar

Courage: Emily emerges from the hole into the chapel in the middle of the ceremony

Emotional Dilemma: Emily is torn between Hagan and LW (Walter in disguise)

Distress: Walter as LW orders Emily to kill Hagan, using a motivational word that Emily recognizes

Surprise/ Sacrifice: Emily shoots /or pierces her with a sword, then drops it

Distress: LW manages to throw a sword at Hagan, wounding him, then slams onto a decrepit pole

Distress: Everyone falls into the hole on the floor

Surprise/Success: Emily rescues Hunter from under a debris and discovers that Walter was wearing LW’s face mask

Surprise/Distress: LW’s lawyer announces that her body was never found, which means that no-one can inherit the estate

Success/ Bonding: Hunter reunites with Hagan, who proclaims his love to Emily

EPILOGUE:

Surprise: Evans fixes Walter’s body in a coffin, then puts LW’s face mask onto Walter’s head, puts LW’s pillow onto “her stomach, then notices an old records book with an envelope sticking out

Wound: LW’s (Walter’s) funeral

Love/Sacrifice: Emily receives the will naming her a heir, and tears it into pieces, making Hagan the rightful heir of the estate

[Nat Melvin]

M4 LESSON 6: Natalie’s Reveals

My vision is to create and produce award winning stories that make an unforgettable emotional impact on a worldwide audience.

What I learned from this assignment: It’s actually fun seeing setups and reveals planted in the story organically

Reveal 1: Emily’s belief that her daughter is alive

Setup where: Act 1. Her drawing of a child

Reveal /mislead where: Act 1 or 2. LW’s conversation w/ Hunter about Angels

Reveal: Whose daughter is Hunter

Setup where: Act 1. LW’s conversation with Hagan

Reveal where: Act 4. In the hospital where Emily realizes that Hunter is Hagan’s & Susan’s daughter

Reveal: Who makes plaster phantoms and why

Setup where: Act 1. Walter arranges plaster phantoms in the chapel, each with a recognizable item related to a real person who’s been killed

Reveal where: Act 2. Evans asks Hunter to get undressed so he can make her phantom

Act 3. Hagan finds Hunter’s phantom in the chapel

Reveal: Who is the killer of family members

Setup where: Act 1. Detective Mike accuses Hagan of killing his father

Act 1: LW tells Hagan about strange disappearances/ deaths of family members and asks him to leave town and leave Emily alone

Reveal where: Act 3. Emily realizes that Walter is wearing LW’s mask, and shoots him

Act 3. Emily finds corpses beneath the chapel’s floor

Reveal: Who killed Susan

Setup where: Act 1. Emily’s flashback of her pushing Susan too hard

Reveal where: Act 1. Walter’s flashback where Susan, barely alive, asks for his help

Act 2. Teresa tells Emily that Susan committed suicide and Hagan is a suspect

Reveal: Where is the will and who is named heir of the estate

Setup where: Act 1. LW tells Hagan about the will

Reveal where: Act 4. Evans (?) finds the will inside LW’s pillow

Reveal: Who is Cherimoya

Setup where: Act 2. Teresa tells Emily about Cherimoya being Hagan’s club manager

Reveal where: Act 3. Emily finds Cherimoya’s mask and realizes that Cherimoya is someone else

[Nat Melvin]

M4 LESSON 5: Natalie’s Character Action Tracks

My vision is to create and produce award winning stories that make an unforgettable emotional impact on a worldwide audience.

What I learned from this assignment: A few new things showed up unexpectedly. Just need to be open for story developing in its way

BLOODHUNTER

Mystery Thriller / Drama

CHR: EMILY KINGSLEY, protagonist

Emily PJ 1: Emily describes the source of her emotional trauma (as a witness of a cult’s sacrificial ritual), and makes sketches from her memory – while under a hypnosis

CHR ACTION: Emotional wreck. Fragile & confused. Breaks down, uncertain with her answers

Emily PJ 2: Emily’s drawing of a girl triggers her belief that her daughter is alive

CHR ACTION: Aggressive. Stunned with her discovery. Becomes obsessed with the idea of saving her daughter from a sacrifice

Emily PJ 3: Emily sees Hagan headed to the chapel through the window, attacks her psychiatrist, Susan, who is Hagan’s wife, tears off a few pages with her drawings, Susan’s rain coat and takes off

CHR ACTION: Reckless. Leaves safety of her confinement into a dangerous world

Emily PJ 4: Emily eavesdrops a conversation where detective Mike interrogates and tries to corner Hagan for his father’s bizarre death

CHR ACTION: Insecure, scared. Hides and holds back. Misses her chance to speak to Hagan

Emily PJ 5: Emily waits for Mike to leave, then rushes after Hagan toward the door

CHR ACTION: Hesitates. Waits for too long, then takes action. It’s too late. Hagan’s gone

Emily PJ 6: Emily frees herself up from Walter’s clutches, runs toward Susan’s car and drives off

CHR ACTION: Despised and reckless. Rebells Walter’s reasoning and warning signs

Emily PJ 7: Steams by Detective Mike’s car

CHR ACTION: Reckless. Takes things in her own hands instead of asking for help

Emily PJ 8: Emily notices police car chasing her, accelerates, looses control and slams into a tree

CHR ACTION: Guilt driven, tries to get away

Emily PJ 9: Emily gets a ride in detective Mike’s car, who asks navigating questions to confuse Emily. She tells Mike her visions about the cult, the tunnel, mentions her missing daughter, ostensibly in danger, and pleads to allow her meet with Hagan. Mike is intrigued. They arrive at Hagan’s nightclub. Mike cuffs (???) Emily’s hands and takes her inside.

CHR ACTION: Fear. Desperation. Emotional wreck.

Emily PJ 10: Mike leaves Emily with Teresa, a barista, and asks her to bring Emily to Hagan’s office in 15 minutes

CHR ACTION: Vulnerable, emotional wreck

Emily PJ 11: Teresa, who claims attending same boarding school as Emily, listens to Emily’s cry about her missing daughter being in danger and suggests talking to Cherimoya who knows Hagan well. They call Cherimoya

CHR ACTION: Insecure. Gullible.Tries to avoid meeting Hagan. Relies on other people’s help

Emily PJ 12: Teresa brings Emily to Hagan’s office. Mike watches their reaction. Emily backs away

CHR ACTION: Backs away. Can’t stomach facing Hagan. Feels guilty for killing his wife

Emily PJ 13: Emily convinces Mike to meet Cherimoya in an abandoned tunnel

CHR ACTION: Pursues her obsession to find her daughter

Emily PJ 14: Emily and Mike find a manhole on the street to get into the tunnel. Reluctantly, Emily goes in

CHR ACTION: Reckless

Emily PJ 15: In the tunnel, Emily, enchanted by a wild Halloween party, looses sight of Mike and gets lost She asks around for Cherimoya

CHR ACTION: Agressive. Creates a scene to get away from Mike

Emily PJ 16: Emily confesses her feelings for Hagan, the boy she fell in love with. Flashback to her childhood where they break up under the rain

CHR ACTION: Vulnerable, insecure. Confesses her love to a “stranger”

Emily PJ 17: While purging from Ayahuasca, Emily experiences petrifying visions from her past, the cult’s ritual and a bizarre creature abolishing her family trying to get to Hunter

CHR ACTION: Petrified, emotional wreck

Emily PJ 18: Emily sees vivid visions of the Phantoms, Cherimoya, and LW gathered for a sacrificial ritual

CHR ACTION: Insecure, lost, petrified

Emily PJ 19: Emily wakes up naked, in the basement’s warehouse (under the chapel) in someone else’s made up bed. She finds her clothes neatly stacked up on bed (does Walter have an OCD – show this throughout the script). She gets dressed and wonders around

CHR ACTION: Curiosity, determined to find Hunter or Hagan?

Emily PJ 20: Emily finds manikins concealed under a veil. (Later revealed as wearing facial latex masks resembling her relatives who’ve been missing or killed). She stumbles upon a manikin resembling Teresa,

(OR: Teresa wearing Emily’s face latex mask, which starts shedding tears. In this case, Emily can yank it off, revealing Teresa). (NOTE: Need a scene before where Teresa gets drugged by Cherimoya/ Walter?? Is she in the car with Em? Does Walter feel threatened by Teresa?)

CHR ACTION: Determination, curiosity, recklessness.

Emily PJ 21: Looking for Hagan, Emily walks into a shady nook with Walter, sitting alone, tied up onto a chair. OR: Could be same place, just somewhere hidden

CHR ACTION: Surprised, aggressive? Attacks Walter?

Emily PJ 22: Emily unties Walter’s hands

CHR ACTION: Gullible, naive

Emily PJ 23: Emily fights Walter, trying to go after Hagan

CHR ACTION: Rebellious, determined to do things by herself

Emily PJ 24: Emily tries to free herself up and knocks a few candles off the bed. The fire catches curtains engulfing everything on its way. Teresa, barely alive, manages to crawl toward Emily, unties her hands, then faints. Emily subdues the fire, pulls Teresa to a safe corner, then grabs a hooded cloak from a manikin, and leaves

CHR ACTION: Reckless, angry, determined

Emily PJ 25: Emily goes through a narrow tunnel.

(Need this here?) She hears a soft sobbing, then stops to listen

FLASHBACK HERE?: An a dark tunnel, an 8 y.o. girl is led by a Man.They talk about Angels

CHR ACTION: Determined, reckless, on a mission

Emily PJ 26: Emily climbs up the ladder and pushes stone slate aside, and comes up in the middle of the ritual. She approaches the altar blending in between the Phantoms dressed in hooded cloaks. They chant around a body on a pedestal under a cape embroidered with the COA

CHR ACTION: Confident, protective

Emily PJ 27: Emily breaks through the circle of Phantoms, and gets caught. She pleads LW to stop the ceremony.

CHR ACTION: Insecure, vulnerable, hopeless

Emily PJ 28: Emily responds with hesitation (dilemma)

NOTE: Emily has to be given a gun OR has a gun. By whom? How did she get it? From Evans?

CHR ACTION: Hesitation, cautious, self-aware

Emily PJ 29: Emily recognizes the word, switches her aim at Lady Winslet, misfires, then drops the gun in terror

CHR ACTION: Furious

Emily PJ 30: Emily sees Hunter under a debris, and digs her out, barely alive. Just then, the ceiling of the chapel gives in and collapses, covering everyone with deteriorated planks and dust. It’s unclear if anyone survives

CHR ACTION: Protective, overwhelmed, happy

Emily PJ 31: In the hospital visits Hagan bound to bed. Lady Winslet’s lawyer comes with announcement that Lady Winslet’s body was never found, which means that there’s no heir to the estate. The Lawyer steps out and brings Hunter in. She runs to Hagan calling him Daddy, and proclaiming her love to him

CHR ACTION: Joyful, satisfied, emotional

Emily PJ 33: Emily experiences a vision of her Younger Self dancing with Younger Hagan, where they almost seal their love with a kiss

CHR ACTION: Relief, self respect, allowing love into her life

Emily PJ 33: Emily attends Lady Winslet’s funeral, holding Hagan’s hand, and the will in her other hand where she is named a sole heir

CHR ACTION: Tears down the will, thus recognizing Hagan as an equal owner of the estate

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CHR: WALTER KINGSLEY, antagonist

Walter AJ 1: In preparation for his Great Uncle’s funeral, Walter arranges plaster phantoms on pews

Deeper Layer: Walter molds trophy plaster phantoms off his relatives’ bodies whom he kills

CHR ACTION: Crafty, deceitful

Walter AJ 2: Walter becomes unsettled about Hagan’s visit to LW, slides stone slates aside on the floor and descends into a hole

CHR ACTION: Unsettled, scheming

Walter/ as Cherimoya AJ 3: Cherimoya eavesdrops Hagan’s and LW’s conversation about the will

CHR ACTION: Scheming, hurt

Walter/ as Cherimoya AJ 4: Cherimoya enters LW’s room after Hagan leaves, forcing her to give her LW’s brother’s will. He leaves her sitting in her wheelchair, barely alive.

CHR ACTION: Determined, vengeful, ruthless

Walter AJ 5: Walter grabs Emily by her ankles, trying to pull her into the hole on the floor, justifying as trying to protect her from Hagan

CHR ACTION: Jealous, protective

Walter AJ 6: Walter watches Emily driving off in Susan’s car. He glances at Emily’s window, and limps in the direction toward the house

CHR ACTION: Hurt, disappointed

Walter AJ 7: Walter gets into Emily’s room finding Susan in a pool of blood on the floor. He asks about what Emily remembered and what she wants, then grabs Emily’s sketches book. He uses Susan’s finger to dial 911 and leaves her barely alive with a phone in her hand

(OR: No Susan, no blood, just Emily’s sketches book, and Walter seeing Susan in a pool of blood in a flashback)

CHR ACTION: Scheming

Walter AJ 8: Walter returns to the chapel, skims through Emily’s notebook, arranges a circle of candles by the altar in a way that resembles her drawing, then descends into the hole on the floor

(OR: threatens Evans so he can reveal where Hunter is)

CHR ACTION: Determined, scheming

Walter/ as Cherimoya AJ 9: In VO, Cherimoya agrees to meet Emily in an abandoned tunnel at midnight

CHR ACTION: Daring, plotting

Walter/ as Cherimoya AJ 10: Cherimoya learns from Teresa that Emily thinks that her daughter is alive

CHR ACTION: Scheming

Walter/ as Cherimoya AJ 11: Cherimoya calls Hagan to inform him about Ayahuasca meeting

CHR ACTION: Manipulative

Walter as Cherimoya AJ 12: Cherimoya watches Emily dance with the Phantom (Hagan), and sends a messenger to notify Hagan that everything is ready for the ceremony

CHR ACTION: Jealous, manipulative

Walter/ as Cherimoya AJ 13: Cherimoya catches Emily having withdrawal from meds and offers help. She takes Emily to a secret Ayahuasca gathering where during a bizarre ritual, Emily takes the drink

CHR ACTION: Scheming

Walter /Cherimoya AJ 14: Cherimoya asks questions about Emily’s visions while driving back to the estate. Emily gets sick and throws up.

CHR ACTION: crafty

Walter/ Phantom AJ 15: Walter, dressed as the Phantom, dances with Emily. The lights from the approaching car beam through a narrow hole in the window blinding Emily. After a moment, she finds herself alone staring at Phantom’s cape and the mask on the floor

CHR ACTION: Deceitful, scheming

Walter AJ 16: Walter tries to convince Emily that he knows where Hunter is. He lures her closer, asking her help to untie his hands

CHR ACTION: scheming

Walter AJ 17: He grabs Emily and rips her clothes off. (IMPORTANT! For Emily to get the cloaks). She fights back. Walter threatens to reveal that Emily murdered Hagan’s wife, Susan. Emily subsides, drowning in guilt.

CHR ACTION: Manipulative, protective, vulnerable

Walter AJ 18: Walter ties Emily’s hands and tells her that Hagan is the leader of the cult who disguises himself as his victims, and that Hagan is deviously dangerous, he forces everyone to do his dirty job for him. Walter runs after Hagan ostensibly to stop him hurting Hunter

CHR ACTION: Vengeful, controlling

Walter AJ 19: Walter slips into LW’s bedroom, grabs her empty wheelchair and rolls it toward the closet. He takes LW’s funeral dress, and smirks: Show time, Lady Winslet! Show time.

NOTE: (does he find Hunter there, in tears, scared to death?)

CHR ACTION: Vengeful, deceitful, determined, vicious

Walter/Lady Winslet TJ 20: Lady Winslet sits on a wheelchair squeezing an embroidered pillow

CHR ACTION: Deceitful, calculated moved

Walter/ Lady Winslet 21: Does something (OR says something) provocative to set up Hagan

CHR ACTION: Impatient, vengeful

Walter/ as Hagan AJ 22: Impatient, screams at Emily a certain word of encouragement

CHR ACTION: Impatient, vengeful

Walter/ LW 23: manages to grab the gun and shoots at Hagan, wounding him, then careens and hits a decrepit pole, which crashes, making a huge gap on the floor. Everyone falls into the hole

CHR ACTION: Aggressive, vengeful, desperate

Walter/ LW 24: Flashback: Evans puts Lady Winslet’s latex mask over Walter’s head, who is in a coffin, making sure he resembles Lady Winslet.

CHR ACTION: Dead

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CHR: HAGAN VALENTINE, triangle chr, love interest

Hagan TJ 1: Comes to the chapel to bid farewell to his estranged father, and is called to see his sister, Lady Winslet (LW)

CHR ACTION: Wants to belong

Hagan TJ 2: LW reveals her terminal illness and notifies Hagan that he won’t be the heir of the estate, per his father’s will. She orders him to leave this town immediately, while his daughter, Hunter, will remain in LW’s custody until he sets his roots in a new place somewhere else

CHR ACTION: wants to belong, fight for fairness, vulnerable

Hagan TJ 3: Hagan expresses his intent to fight for his rights and swears to find proof of his relation to the family, no matter what or who stands on his way, then leaves, outraged.

CHR ACTION: anger, determination, fight for the estate

Hagan TJ 4: Hagan returns to the chapel and is approached by Detective Mike who is investigating Hagan’s father’s death

CHR ACTION: Risk avert, content

Hagan TJ 5: Hagan gets a sample of his late father’s charred skin and leaves. Mike threatens to catch Hagan for what he did

CHR ACTION: determined, desolate, prideful

Hagan TJ 6: Hagan takes a drink and dives into a flashback of the Younger self running away from his deranged drunkard father

CHR ACTION: Sorrow, fear for life

Hagan TJ 7: Gets interrogated by Mike who pressures him to admit killing his wife and his missing child

CHR ACTION: guarded, outraged, defensive

Hagan TJ 8: Hagan offers Mike a bribe to find Kingsley’s family records book. Mike agrees, then leaves

CHR ACTION: Determined, fair fight

Hagan TJ 9: Hagan has a flashback where his drunken father kills his mother, Younger Hagan sets him on fire, and Younger Emily pulls Younger Hagan out of the maid’s quarters, barely alive

CHR ACTION: Fear, vengeance, helplessness

Hagan TJ 10: Teresa tells Hagan that Emily and Mike were talking about abandoned tunnels

CHR ACTION: Hides his feelings for Emily by expressing light curiosity

Hagan/ as Phantom TJ 11: Hagan, in a Phantom’s costume, finds Emily. They dance. He asks navigating questions about what she remembers from her past

CHR ACTION: Vulnerable, shy, holds back his feelings, manipulative

Hagan/ as Phantom TJ 12: The Phantom apologizes to Emily and leaves, asking his employees to keep an eye on Emily

CHR ACTION: Determined, caring

Hagan/ as Phantom TJ 13: The Phantom sends Cherimoya to bring Emily back to the estate.

CHR ACTION: disappointment, caring

Hagan TJ 14: Hagan receives a call about family records book on his way to the estate

(OR as he does, then heads to the Estate. NEED to make a stronger reason for him to go there, such as making his decision on a competitive basis or out of threat to either Emily or the estate)

CHR ACTION: Determined, anxious

Hagan TJ 15: Hagan looks for Arthur Kingsley’s relief statue in the chapel/ OR Hunter, gets knocked down by Walter?

CHR ACTION: Determined, obsessed, protective, helpless

Hagan TG 16: Hearing noise from under the ground, Hagan descends into a hole on the floor, OR: wakes up in Walter’s warehouse to see Emily half naked, in Walter’s embrace. Heartbroken, he backs away

CHR ACTION: Desperation, pain

Hagan TG 17: Hagan passes by hooded phantoms busy arranging the pedestal with a small figure under the cape. He notices Hunter’s plaster phantom, and stops to investigate

CHR ACTION: Protective, investigating

Hagan TG 18: Tries to debunk LW’s (Walter’s) accusations that he is a threat to Emily, that he killed his father and Hunter (Hunter’s plaster statue) so he can inherit the estate

CHR ACTION: Aggravated, aggressive

Hagan TJ 19: Hagan whispers words of love to Emily

CHR ACTION: Forgiving, reconciled

Hagan TJ 20: Hagan reunites with Emily and Hunter

CHR ACTION: Happy

[Nat Melvin]

M4 LESSON 3: Natalie’s New Outline Beats

My vision is to create and produce award winning stories that make an unforgettable emotional impact on a worldwide audience.

What I learned from this assignment: It’s ok to let go off of perfection and to vomit the first draft, and… OMG! I discovered so many new plot twists and deeper levels that make total sense and also cover up a few plot holes. Loving this! However, Act 4 still gave me a huge three weeks long of agonizing frustration.

BLOODHUNTER

Mystery Thriller / Drama

ACT 1: A sudden death of a wealthy aristocrat triggers the race for inheritance

Emily PJ 1: Emily describes the source of her emotional trauma (as a witness of a cult’s sacrificial ritual), and makes sketches from her memory – while under a hypnosis

Walter AJ 1: In preparation for his Great Uncle’s funeral, Walter arranges plaster phantoms on pews

Deeper Layer: Walter molds trophy plaster phantoms off his relatives’ bodies whom he kills

Hagan TJ 1: Comes to the chapel to bid farewell to his estranged father, and is called to see his sister, Lady Winslet (LW)

Walter AJ 2: Walter becomes unsettled about Hagan’s visit to LW, slides stone slates aside on the floor and descends into a hole

Deeper layer: Walter uses network of old tunnels to get anywhere in the estate

INCITING INCIDENT: / PJ 2: Emily’s drawing of a girl triggers her belief that her daughter is alive

Deeper layer: Emily has a DID and lives a double life, that of a mother, and her 8 y.o. girl

Hagan TJ 2 (Turning Point 1): LW reveals her terminal illness and notifies Hagan that he will not be the heir of the estate, per his father’s will. She orders him to leave this town immediately, while his daughter, Hunter, will remain in LW’s custody until he sets his roots in a new place somewhere else

Deeper Layer: Hagan is half African American man, adopted by LW’s deceased brother, who is born out of wedlock. He’s been rejected by his father’s snobbish white suprematists’ family

Walter/ as Cherimoya AJ 3: Cherimoya eavesdrops Hagan’s and LW’s conversation about the will

Hagan TJ 3: Hagan expresses his intent to fight for his rights and swears to find proof of his relation to the family, no matter what or who stands on his way, then leaves, outraged.

Walter/ as Cherimoya AJ 4: Cherimoya enters LW’s room after Hagan leaves, forcing her to give her LW’s brother’s will. He leaves her sitting in her wheelchair, barely alive.

Emily PJ 3: Emily sees Hagan headed to the chapel through the window, attacks her psychiatrist, Susan, grabs her notebook, Susan’s rain coat and runs away

Deeper level: What if Emily’s psychiatrist was Susan, Hagan’s wife whom Emily pushed and accidentally killed a while ago? She can have a flashback triggered by Hagan when she sees him

Hagan TJ 4: Hagan returns to the chapel and is approached by Detective Mike who is investigating Hagan’s father’s death

Emily PJ 4: Emily eavesdrops a conversation where detective Mike interrogates and tries to corner Hagan for his father’s bizarre death

Deeper layer: Younger Hagan attempted to burn his drunken father to death when he saw him killing his mother

Hagan TJ 5: Hagan gets a sample of his late father’s charred skin and leaves. Mike threatens to catch Hagan for what he did

Emily PJ 5: Emily waits for Mike to leave, then rushes after Hagan toward the door, but…

Walter AJ 5: Walter grabs Emily by her ankles, trying to pull her into the hole on the floor, justifying as trying to protect her from Hagan

Deeper layer: Walter was Emily’s boyfriend for a short while before she fell in love with Hagan.The three of them grew up together in Hagan’s father’s estate

Emily PJ 6: Emily frees herself up from Walter’s clutches, runs toward Susan’s car and drives off clumsily

TURNING POINT 1: Emily escapes from her self-induced confinement

ACT 2: Emily seeks Hagan’s help finding her daughter

Walter AJ 6: Walter watches Emily steering away in Susan’s car. He glances at Emily’s window, and limps in the direction toward the house

Emily PJ 7: Steams by a stalled police car with Detective Mike looking under its hood.

Walter AJ 7: Walter gets into Emily’s room finding Susan in a pool of blood on the floor. He asks about what Emily remembered and what she wants, then grabs Emily’s sketches book. He uses Susan’s finger to dial 911 and leaves her barely alive with a phone in her hand

(OR: No Susan, no blood, just Emily’s sketches book, and Walter seeing Susan in a pool of blood in a flashback)

Deeper layer: Detective Mike receives a call from the police about Kingsleys’ estate, then drives off after Emily.

(OR: He sees Emily accelerating by and calls to inquire about her license plate – revealed as Hagan’s dead wife’s car)

Emily PJ 8: Emily notices police car chasing her, accelerates, looses control and slams into a tree

Walter AJ 8: Walter returns to the chapel, skims through Emily’s notebook, arranges a circle of candles by the altar in a way that resembles her drawing, then descends into the hole on the floor

(OR: threatens Evans so he can reveal where Hunter is)

Emily PJ 9: Emily gets a ride in detective Mike’s car, who asks navigating questions to confuse Emily. She tells Mike her visions about the cult, the tunnel, mentions her missing daughter, ostensibly in danger, and pleads to help her meet Hagan. Mike is intrigued. They arrive at Hagan’s nightclub. Mike cuffs Emily’s hands and takes her inside.

Hagan TJ 6: Hagan sips Ayahuasca drink and dives into a flashback of the Younger self running away from his deranged drunkard father

Emily PJ 10: Mike leaves Emily with Teresa, a barista, and asks her to bring Emily to Hagan’s office in 15 minutes

Hagan TJ 7: Gets interrogated by Mike who pressures him to admit killing his wife and his missing child

Deeper layer: Hagan’s wife is said to commit suicide in the tunnel by his club. Hagan is a suspect. They had a daughter who is presumed missing, but in reality she’s raised by LW.

(New version: Walter has a flashback of seeing Susan (Hagan’s wife) killed, and dragging her away. He could have brought her into the tunnel and left her by Hagan’s club to set him up).

Emily PJ 11: Teresa, who claims attending the same boarding school as Emily, listens to Emily’s cry about her missing daughter being in danger and suggests talking to Cherimoya who knows Hagan well. They call Cherimoya

Deeper level: Teresa wants to marry Walter and is jealous of his love for Emily

Walter/ as Cherimoya AJ 9: In VO, Cherimoya agrees to meet Emily in an abandoned tunnel at midnight

Emily PJ 12: Teresa brings Emily to Hagan’s office. Mike watches their reaction. Emily backs away

Hagan TJ 8: Hagan offers Mike a bribe to find Kingsley’s family records book. Mike agrees, then leaves

Emily PJ 13: Emily convinces Mike to meet Cherimoya in an abandoned tunnel

Walter/ as Cherimoya AJ 10: Cherimoya learns from Teresa that Emily thinks that her daughter is alive

Hagan TJ 9: Hagan has a flashback where his drunken father kills his mother, Younger Hagan sets him on fire, and Younger Emily pulls Hagan out of the maid’s quarters, barely alive

Emily PJ 14: Emily and Mike find a manhole on the street to get into the tunnel. Reluctantly, Emily goes in

Hagan TJ 10: Teresa tells Hagan that Emily and Mike were talking about abandoned tunnels

Walter/ as Cherimoya AJ 11: Cherimoya calls Hagan to inform him about Ayahuasca meeting

Deeper layer: Hagan runs Ayahuasca healing retreat for troubled youth and misfits

Emily PJ 15: In the tunnel, Emily, enchanted by an unfolding, wild Halloween party, looses sight of Mike and gets lost. She asks around for Cherimoya

Hagan/ as Phantom TJ 11: Hagan, in a Phantom’s costume, finds Emily. They dance. He asks navigating questions about what she remembers from her past

Emily PJ 16: Emily confesses her feelings for Hagan, the boy she fell in love with, in a flashback to their childhood where they break up under the rain

Walter as Cherimoya AJ 12: Cherimoya watches Emily dance with the Phantom (Hagan), and sends a messenger to notify Hagan that everything is ready for the ceremony

Hagan/ as Phantom TJ 12: The Phantom apologizes to Emily and leaves, asking his employees to keep an eye on Emily

Walter/ as Cherimoya AJ 13: Cherimoya catches Emily having withdrawal from meds and offers help. She takes Emily to a secret Ayahuasca gathering where during a bizarre ritual, Emily takes the drink

Emily PJ 17: While purging from Ayahuasca, Emily experiences petrifying visions from her past, the cult’s ritual, and bizarre creature abolishing her family so he can get to Hunter

TURNING POINT 2/ MIDPOINT: In her vision, Hagan is revealed as a leader of the cult, where he conducts a sacrificial ritual on Hunter all covered in blood

ACT 3: Character rethinks their journey and makes a real change to solve things

Emily suspects Hagan of being the leader of the cult who threatens her daughter’s life

Emily PJ 18: Emily sees vivid visions of the Phantoms, Cherimoya, and LW gathered for a sacrificial ritual

Hagan/ as Phantom TJ 13: The Phantom sends Cherimoya to bring Emily back to the estate.

(OR: Cherimoya snatches Emily before Hagan, lying that he asked her to bring Emily to his place to meet. In this case, need Hagan learn that Emily was taken by Cherimoya, so he goes back to the estate looking for her. Also, set up in a prior scene that he asks his assistant (or Cherimoya) to bring Emily to the ceremony

Walter /Cherimoya AJ 14: Cherimoya asks questions about Emily’s visions while driving back to the estate. Emily gets sick and throws up.

(NOTE: May need to add a scene of Cheri carrying Emily to the chapel.

Emily PJ 19: Emily wakes up in the basement warehouse (under the chapel) in someone else’s made up bed, naked. She finds her clothes neatly stacked up on bed (does Walter have an OCD – show this throughout the script). She gets dressed and wonders around

Hagan TJ 14: Hagan receives a call about family records book on his way to the estate

(OR as he does, then heads to the Estate. NEED to make a stronger reason for him to go there, such as making his decision on a competitive basis or out of threat to either Emily or the estate)

Emily PJ 20: Emily finds manikins concealed under a veil. (Later revealed as wearing facial latex masks resembling her relatives who’ve been missing or killed). She stumbles upon a manikin resembling Teresa,

(OR: Teresa wearing Emily’s face latex mask, which starts shedding tears. In this case, Emily can yank it off, revealing Teresa). (NOTE: Need a scene before where Teresa gets drugged by Cherimoya/ Walter?? Is she in the car with Em? Does Walter feel threatened by Teresa?)

Walter/ Phantom AJ 15: Walter, dressed as the Phantom, dances with Emily. The lights from the approaching car beam through a narrow hole in the window blinding Emily. After a moment, she finds herself alone staring at Phantom’s cape and the mask on the floor

Hagan TJ 15: Hagan looks for Arthur Kingsley’s relief statue in the chapel

OR: Looks for Hunter (NEED to set this up), and finds her plaster phantom’s statue, devastated.

NOTE: Does he get attacked/ fights with Walter? Who tells him about Arthur’s statue?

Emily PJ 21: Looking for Hagan, Emily walks into a shady nook with Walter, sitting alone, tied up onto a chair

(NOTE: set his ability to tie up knots earlier). Also need to set up Walter’s disappearance earlier

Walter AJ 16: Walter tries to convince Emily that he knows where Hunter is. He lures her closer, asking her help to untie his hands

Emily PJ 22: Emily unties Walter’s hands

Walter AJ 17: He grabs Emily and rips her clothes off. (IMPORTANT! For Emily to get the cloaks). She fights back. Walter threatens to reveal that Emily murdered Hagan’s wife, Susan. Emily subsides, drowning in guilt.

Hagan TG 16: Hearing noise from under the ground, Hagan descends into a hole on the floor, and finds Emily half naked, in Walter’s embrace. Heartbroken, he backs away

Emily PJ 23: Emily fights Walter, trying to go after Hagan

TURNING POINT 3: MAJOR TWIST: Walter takes over Emily’s quest to pursue Hagan

Walter AJ 18: Walter ties Emily’s hands and tells her that Hagan is the leader of the cult who disguises himself as his victims, and that Hagan is deviously dangerous, he forces everyone to do his dirty job for him. Walter runs after Hagan ostensibly to stop him hurting Hunter

(NOTE: Show Walter seeing Hagan parking his car before he tries to seduce Emily)

ACT 4: Climax. The Ultimate Expression of the Conflict:

EVERYTHING in this act is a PLACEHOLDER. No sense of direction – yet.

Walter AJ 19: Walter slips into LW’s bedroom, grabs her empty wheelchair and rolls it toward the closet. He takes LW’s funeral dress, and smirks: Show time, Lady Winslet! Show time.

NOTE: (does he find Hunter there, in tears, scared to death?)

Emily PJ 24: Emily tries to free herself up and knocks a few candles off the bed. The fire catches curtains engulfing everything on its way. Teresa, barely alive, manages to crawl toward Emily, unties her hands, then faints. Emily subdues the fire, pulls Teresa to a safe corner, then grabs a hooded cloak from a manikin, then heads out.

Hunter: Hunter sobs in semi-darkness sitting next to the wrapped, mummified corpse. She freaks out hearing screeching of the door.

??? Emily PJ 25: Emily goes through a narrow tunnel.

(Need tis here?) She hears soft sobbing, then stops to listen

FLASHBACK HERE?: An a dark tunnel, an 8 y.o. girl is led by a Man.They talk about Angels

Hagan TG 17: Hagan passes by hooded phantoms busy arranging the pedestal with a small figure under the cape. He notices Hunter’s plaster phantom, and stops to investigate

Walter/Lady Winslet TJ 20: Lady Winslet sits on a wheelchair squeezing an embroidered pillow

Emily PJ 24: Emily climbs up the ladder and pushes stone slate aside, and comes up in the middle of the ritual. She approaches the altar blending in between the Phantoms dressed in hooded cloaks. They chant around a body on a pedestal under a cape embroidered with the COA

Celebrant: A celebrant face concealed under the hood, mumbles Gregorian chant, circling the body on the pedestal. The Phantoms point swords at the body

Emily PJ 25: Emily breaks through the circle of Phantoms, and gets caught. She pleads LW to stop the ceremony.

Walter/ Lady Winslet 21: Does something (OR says something) provocative to set up Hagan

Emily PJ 26: Emily responds with hesitation (dilemma)

NOTE: Emily has to be given a gun OR has a gun. By whom? How did she get it? From Evans?

Walter/ as Hagan AJ 21: Impatient, screams at Emily a certain word of encouragement

Emily PJ 27: Emily recognizes the word, switches her aim at Lady Winslet, misfires, then drops the gun in terror

Walter/ LW 22: manages to grab the gun and shoots at Hagan, wounding him, then careens and hits a decrepit pole, which crashes, making a huge gap on the floor. Everyone falls into the hole

Emily PJ 28: Emily sees Hunter under a debris, and digs her out, barely alive. Just then, the ceiling of the chapel gives in and collapses, covering everyone with deteriorated planks and dust

Resolution: Their world has changed

Emily PJ 29: In the hospital visits Hagan bound to bed. Lady Winslet’s lawyer comes with announcement that Lady Winslet’s body was never found, which means that no one can inherit the estate. The Lawyer steps out and brings Hunter in. She runs to Hagan calling him Daddy, and proclaiming her love to him

Hagan TJ 18: Hagan whispers words of love to Emily

Emily PJ 30: Emily experiences a vision of her Younger Self dancing with Younger Hagan, where they almost seal their love with a kiss

Epilogue:

Flashback: Evans puts Lady Winslet’s latex mask over Walter’s head, who is in a coffin, making sure he resembles Lady Winslet. He puts Lady Winslet’s pillow into her hands, then discovers something inside it. He rips the pillow apart, and finds an envelope.

Hunter, Hagan and Emily attend Lady Winslet’s funeral. Emily holds Hagan’s hand, and the will in her other hand, where they both are made an equal heir.

[Nat Melvin]

M4 LESSON 3: Natalie’s Beat Sheet – Draft 1

My vision is to create and produce award winning stories that make an unforgettable emotional impact on a worldwide audience.

What I learned from this assignment: It’s ok to let go off of perfection and to vomit the first draft, and… OMG! I discovered so many new plot twists and deeper levels that make total sense and also cover up a few plot holes. Loving this! However, Act 4 still gave me a huge three weeks long of agonizing frustration.

BLOODHUNTER

Mystery Thriller / Drama

ACT 1: A sudden death of a wealthy aristocrat triggers the race for inheritance

Emily PJ 1: Emily describes the source of her emotional trauma (as a witness of a cult’s sacrificial ritual), and makes sketches from her memory – while under a hypnosis

Walter AJ 1: In preparation for his Great Uncle’s funeral, Walter arranges plaster phantoms on pews

Deeper Layer: Walter molds trophy plaster phantoms off his relatives’ bodies whom he kills

Hagan TJ 1: Comes to the chapel to bid farewell to his estranged father, and is called to see his sister, Lady Winslet (LW)

Walter AJ 2: Walter becomes unsettled about Hagan’s visit to LW, slides stone slates aside on the floor and descends into a hole

Deeper layer: Walter uses network of old tunnels to get anywhere in the estate

INCITING INCIDENT: / PJ 2: Emily’s drawing of a girl triggers her belief that her daughter is alive

Deeper layer: Emily has a DID and lives a double life, that of a mother, and her 8 y.o. girl

Hagan TJ 2 (Turning Point 1): LW reveals her terminal illness and notifies Hagan that he will not be the heir of the estate, per his father’s will. She orders him to leave this town immediately, while his daughter, Hunter, will remain in LW’s custody until he sets his roots in a new place somewhere else

Deeper Layer: Hagan is half African American man, adopted by LW’s deceased brother, who is born out of wedlock. He’s been rejected by his father’s snobbish white suprematists’ family

Walter/ as Cherimoya AJ 3: Cherimoya eavesdrops Hagan’s and LW’s conversation about the will

Hagan TJ 3: Hagan expresses his intent to fight for his rights and swears to find proof of his relation to the family, no matter what or who stands on his way, then leaves, outraged.

Walter/ as Cherimoya AJ 4: Cherimoya enters LW’s room after Hagan leaves, forcing her to give her LW’s brother’s will. He leaves her sitting in her wheelchair, barely alive.

Emily PJ 3: Emily sees Hagan headed to the chapel through the window, attacks her psychiatrist, Susan, grabs her notebook, Susan’s rain coat and runs away

Deeper level: What if Emily’s psychiatrist was Susan, Hagan’s wife whom Emily pushed and accidentally killed a while ago? She can have a flashback triggered by Hagan when she sees him

Hagan TJ 4: Hagan returns to the chapel and is approached by Detective Mike who is investigating Hagan’s father’s death

Emily PJ 4: Emily eavesdrops a conversation where detective Mike interrogates and tries to corner Hagan for his father’s bizarre death

Deeper layer: Younger Hagan attempted to burn his drunken father to death when he saw him killing his mother

Hagan TJ 5: Hagan gets a sample of his late father’s charred skin and leaves. Mike threatens to catch Hagan for what he did

Emily PJ 5: Emily waits for Mike to leave, then rushes after Hagan toward the door, but…

Walter AJ 5: Walter grabs Emily by her ankles, trying to pull her into the hole on the floor, justifying as trying to protect her from Hagan

Deeper layer: Walter was Emily’s boyfriend for a short while before she fell in love with Hagan.The three of them grew up together in Hagan’s father’s estate

Emily PJ 6: Emily frees herself up from Walter’s clutches, runs toward Susan’s car and drives off clumsily

TURNING POINT 1: Emily escapes from her self-induced confinement

ACT 2: Emily seeks Hagan’s help finding her daughter

Walter AJ 6: Walter watches Emily steering away in Susan’s car. He glances at Emily’s window, and limps in the direction toward the house

Emily PJ 7: Steams by a stalled police car with Detective Mike looking under its hood.

Walter AJ 7: Walter gets into Emily’s room finding Susan in a pool of blood on the floor. He asks about what Emily remembered and what she wants, then grabs Emily’s sketches book. He uses Susan’s finger to dial 911 and leaves her barely alive with a phone in her hand

(OR: No Susan, no blood, just Emily’s sketches book, and Walter seeing Susan in a pool of blood in a flashback)

Deeper layer: Detective Mike receives a call from the police about Kingsleys’ estate, then drives off after Emily.

(OR: He sees Emily accelerating by and calls to inquire about her license plate – revealed as Hagan’s dead wife’s car)

Emily PJ 8: Emily notices police car chasing her, accelerates, looses control and slams into a tree

Walter AJ 8: Walter returns to the chapel, skims through Emily’s notebook, arranges a circle of candles by the altar in a way that resembles her drawing, then descends into the hole on the floor

(OR: threatens Evans so he can reveal where Hunter is)

Emily PJ 9: Emily gets a ride in detective Mike’s car, who asks navigating questions to confuse Emily. She tells Mike her visions about the cult, the tunnel, mentions her missing daughter, ostensibly in danger, and pleads to help her meet Hagan. Mike is intrigued. They arrive at Hagan’s nightclub. Mike cuffs Emily’s hands and takes her inside.

Hagan TJ 6: Hagan sips Ayahuasca drink and dives into a flashback of the Younger self running away from his deranged drunkard father

Emily PJ 10: Mike leaves Emily with Teresa, a barista, and asks her to bring Emily to Hagan’s office in 15 minutes

Hagan TJ 7: Gets interrogated by Mike who pressures him to admit killing his wife and his missing child

Deeper layer: Hagan’s wife is said to commit suicide in the tunnel by his club. Hagan is a suspect. They had a daughter who is presumed missing, but in reality she’s raised by LW.

(New version: Walter has a flashback of seeing Susan (Hagan’s wife) killed, and dragging her away. He could have brought her into the tunnel and left her by Hagan’s club to set him up).

Emily PJ 11: Teresa, who claims attending the same boarding school as Emily, listens to Emily’s cry about her missing daughter being in danger and suggests talking to Cherimoya who knows Hagan well. They call Cherimoya

Deeper level: Teresa wants to marry Walter and is jealous of his love for Emily

Walter/ as Cherimoya AJ 9: In VO, Cherimoya agrees to meet Emily in an abandoned tunnel at midnight

Emily PJ 12: Teresa brings Emily to Hagan’s office. Mike watches their reaction. Emily backs away

Hagan TJ 8: Hagan offers Mike a bribe to find Kingsley’s family records book. Mike agrees, then leaves

Emily PJ 13: Emily convinces Mike to meet Cherimoya in an abandoned tunnel

Walter/ as Cherimoya AJ 10: Cherimoya learns from Teresa that Emily thinks that her daughter is alive

Hagan TJ 9: Hagan has a flashback where his drunken father kills his mother, Younger Hagan sets him on fire, and Younger Emily pulls Hagan out of the maid’s quarters, barely alive

Emily PJ 14: Emily and Mike find a manhole on the street to get into the tunnel. Reluctantly, Emily goes in

Hagan TJ 10: Teresa tells Hagan that Emily and Mike were talking about abandoned tunnels

Walter/ as Cherimoya AJ 11: Cherimoya calls Hagan to inform him about Ayahuasca meeting

Deeper layer: Hagan runs Ayahuasca healing retreat for troubled youth and misfits

Emily PJ 15: In the tunnel, Emily, enchanted by an unfolding, wild Halloween party, looses sight of Mike and gets lost. She asks around for Cherimoya

Hagan/ as Phantom TJ 11: Hagan, in a Phantom’s costume, finds Emily. They dance. He asks navigating questions about what she remembers from her past

Emily PJ 16: Emily confesses her feelings for Hagan, the boy she fell in love with, in a flashback to their childhood where they break up under the rain

Walter as Cherimoya AJ 12: Cherimoya watches Emily dance with the Phantom (Hagan), and sends a messenger to notify Hagan that everything is ready for the ceremony

Hagan/ as Phantom TJ 12: The Phantom apologizes to Emily and leaves, asking his employees to keep an eye on Emily

Walter/ as Cherimoya AJ 13: Cherimoya catches Emily having withdrawal from meds and offers help. She takes Emily to a secret Ayahuasca gathering where during a bizarre ritual, Emily takes the drink

Emily PJ 17: While purging from Ayahuasca, Emily experiences petrifying visions from her past, the cult’s ritual, and bizarre creature abolishing her family so he can get to Hunter

TURNING POINT 2/ MIDPOINT: In her vision, Hagan is revealed as a leader of the cult, where he conducts a sacrificial ritual on Hunter all covered in blood

ACT 3: Character rethinks their journey and makes a real change to solve things

Emily suspects Hagan of being the leader of the cult who threatens her daughter’s life

Emily PJ 18: Emily sees vivid visions of the Phantoms, Cherimoya, and LW gathered for a sacrificial ritual

Hagan/ as Phantom TJ 13: The Phantom sends Cherimoya to bring Emily back to the estate.

(OR: Cherimoya snatches Emily before Hagan, lying that he asked her to bring Emily to his place to meet. In this case, need Hagan learn that Emily was taken by Cherimoya, so he goes back to the estate looking for her. Also, set up in a prior scene that he asks his assistant (or Cherimoya) to bring Emily to the ceremony

Walter /Cherimoya AJ 14: Cherimoya asks questions about Emily’s visions while driving back to the estate. Emily gets sick and throws up.

(NOTE: May need to add a scene of Cheri carrying Emily to the chapel.

Emily PJ 19: Emily wakes up in the basement warehouse (under the chapel) in someone else’s made up bed, naked. She finds her clothes neatly stacked up on bed (does Walter have an OCD – show this throughout the script). She gets dressed and wonders around

Hagan TJ 14: Hagan receives a call about family records book on his way to the estate

(OR as he does, then heads to the Estate. NEED to make a stronger reason for him to go there, such as making his decision on a competitive basis or out of threat to either Emily or the estate)

Emily PJ 20: Emily finds manikins concealed under a veil. (Later revealed as wearing facial latex masks resembling her relatives who’ve been missing or killed). She stumbles upon a manikin resembling Teresa,

(OR: Teresa wearing Emily’s face latex mask, which starts shedding tears. In this case, Emily can yank it off, revealing Teresa). (NOTE: Need a scene before where Teresa gets drugged by Cherimoya/ Walter?? Is she in the car with Em? Does Walter feel threatened by Teresa?)

Walter/ Phantom AJ 15: Walter, dressed as the Phantom, dances with Emily. The lights from the approaching car beam through a narrow hole in the window blinding Emily. After a moment, she finds herself alone staring at Phantom’s cape and the mask on the floor

Hagan TJ 15: Hagan looks for Arthur Kingsley’s relief statue in the chapel

OR: Looks for Hunter (NEED to set this up), and finds her plaster phantom’s statue, devastated.

NOTE: Does he get attacked/ fights with Walter? Who tells him about Arthur’s statue?

Emily PJ 21: Looking for Hagan, Emily walks into a shady nook with Walter, sitting alone, tied up onto a chair

(NOTE: set his ability to tie up knots earlier). Also need to set up Walter’s disappearance earlier

Walter AJ 16: Walter tries to convince Emily that he knows where Hunter is. He lures her closer, asking her help to untie his hands

Emily PJ 22: Emily unties Walter’s hands

Walter AJ 17: He grabs Emily and rips her clothes off. (IMPORTANT! For Emily to get the cloaks). She fights back. Walter threatens to reveal that Emily murdered Hagan’s wife, Susan. Emily subsides, drowning in guilt.

Hagan TG 16: Hearing noise from under the ground, Hagan descends into a hole on the floor, and finds Emily half naked, in Walter’s embrace. Heartbroken, he backs away

Emily PJ 23: Emily fights Walter, trying to go after Hagan

TURNING POINT 3: MAJOR TWIST: Walter takes over Emily’s quest to pursue Hagan

Walter AJ 18: Walter ties Emily’s hands and tells her that Hagan is the leader of the cult who disguises himself as his victims, and that Hagan is deviously dangerous, he forces everyone to do his dirty job for him. Walter runs after Hagan ostensibly to stop him hurting Hunter

(NOTE: Show Walter seeing Hagan parking his car before he tries to seduce Emily)

ACT 4: Climax. The Ultimate Expression of the Conflict:

EVERYTHING in this act is a PLACEHOLDER. No sense of direction – yet.

Walter AJ 19: Walter slips into LW’s bedroom, grabs her empty wheelchair and rolls it toward the closet. He takes LW’s funeral dress, and smirks: Show time, Lady Winslet! Show time.

NOTE: (does he find Hunter there, in tears, scared to death?)

Emily PJ 24: Emily tries to free herself up and knocks a few candles off the bed. The fire catches curtains engulfing everything on its way. Teresa, barely alive, manages to crawl toward Emily, unties her hands, then faints. Emily subdues the fire, pulls Teresa to a safe corner, then grabs a hooded cloak from a manikin, then heads out.

Hunter: Hunter sobs in semi-darkness sitting next to the wrapped, mummified corpse. She freaks out hearing screeching of the door.

??? Emily PJ 25: Emily goes through a narrow tunnel.

(Need tis here?) She hears soft sobbing, then stops to listen

FLASHBACK HERE?: An a dark tunnel, an 8 y.o. girl is led by a Man.They talk about Angels

Hagan TG 17: Hagan passes by hooded phantoms busy arranging the pedestal with a small figure under the cape. He notices Hunter’s plaster phantom, and stops to investigate

Walter/Lady Winslet TJ 20: Lady Winslet sits on a wheelchair squeezing an embroidered pillow

Emily PJ 24: Emily climbs up the ladder and pushes stone slate aside, and comes up in the middle of the ritual. She approaches the altar blending in between the Phantoms dressed in hooded cloaks. They chant around a body on a pedestal under a cape embroidered with the COA

Celebrant: A celebrant face concealed under the hood, mumbles Gregorian chant, circling the body on the pedestal. The Phantoms point swords at the body

Emily PJ 25: Emily breaks through the circle of Phantoms, and gets caught. She pleads LW to stop the ceremony.

Walter/ Lady Winslet 21: Does something (OR says something) provocative to set up Hagan

Emily PJ 26: Emily responds with hesitation (dilemma)

NOTE: Emily has to be given a gun OR has a gun. By whom? How did she get it? From Evans?

Walter/ as Hagan AJ 21: Impatient, screams at Emily a certain word of encouragement

Emily PJ 27: Emily recognizes the word, switches her aim at Lady Winslet, misfires, then drops the gun in terror

Walter/ LW 22: manages to grab the gun and shoots at Hagan, wounding him, then careens and hits a decrepit pole, which crashes, making a huge gap on the floor. Everyone falls into the hole

Emily PJ 28: Emily sees Hunter under a debris, and digs her out, barely alive. Just then, the ceiling of the chapel gives in and collapses, covering everyone with deteriorated planks and dust

Resolution: Their world has changed

Emily PJ 29: In the hospital visits Hagan bound to bed. Lady Winslet’s lawyer comes with announcement that Lady Winslet’s body was never found, which means that no one can inherit the estate. The Lawyer steps out and brings Hunter in. She runs to Hagan calling him Daddy, and proclaiming her love to him

Hagan TJ 18: Hagan whispers words of love to Emily

Emily PJ 30: Emily experiences a vision of her Younger Self dancing with Younger Hagan, where they almost seal their love with a kiss

Epilogue:

Flashback: Evans puts Lady Winslet’s latex mask over Walter’s head, who is in a coffin, making sure he resembles Lady Winslet. He puts Lady Winslet’s pillow into her hands, then discovers something inside it. He rips the pillow apart, and finds an envelope.

Hunter, Hagan and Emily attend Lady Winslet’s funeral. Emily holds Hagan’s hand, and the will in her other hand, where they both are made an equal heir.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Beat Sheet – Draft 1

My vision is to create and produce award winning stories that make an unforgettable emotional impact on a worldwide audience.

What I learned from this assignment: It’s ok to let go off of perfection and to vomit the first draft, and… OMG! I discovered many new plot twists and deeper levels that now make total sense and also cover up a few plot holes. Loving this!

BLOODHUNTER

Mystery Thriller / Drama

ACT 1: A sudden death of a wealthy aristocrat triggers race for the inheritance

Emily PJ 1: Emily describes a source of her emotional trauma (witness a cult’s sacrificial ritual), and makes sketches from her memory – while under a hypnosis

Walter AJ 1: In preparation for his Great Uncle’s funeral, Walter arranges plaster phantoms on pews

Deeper Layer: Walter molds trophy plaster phantoms off his relatives’ bodies whom he kills

Hagan TJ 1: Comes to the chapel to bid farewell to his estranged father, and gets called to see his sister, Lady Winslet (LW)

Walter AJ 2: Walter becomes unsettled about Hagan’s visit to LW, slides aside a stone slate on the floor and descends into a hole

Deeper layer: Walter uses a network of old tunnels to get anywhere in the estate

INCITING INCIDENT: / PJ 2: Emily’s drawing of a girl triggers her belief that her daughter is alive

Hagan TJ 2 (Turning Point 1): LW reveals her terminal illness and quotes her late brother’s will that Hagan will not be a heir of the estate. She orders him to leave this town immediately, while his daughter, Hunter, will remain in LW’s custody until he sets his roots somewhere in a new place

Deeper Layer: Hagan is half African American adopted son of LW’s deceased brother born out of wedlock who’s been rejected by his father’s family of snobbish white suprematists

Walter/ as Cherimoya AJ 3: Cherimoya eavesdrops Hagan’s and LW’s conversation about the will

Hagan TJ 3: Hagan expresses his intent to fight for his rights and swears to find a proof of his relation to the family, no matter what or who stands on his way, and leaves, outraged.

Walter/ as Cherimoya AJ 4: Cherimoya enters LW’s room after Hagan leaves, trying to get a word about the will, choking LW to death

Emily PJ 3: Emily sees Hagan headed to the chapel through the window, attacks her psychiatrist, Susan, grabs her notebook, disguises herself with Susan’s rain coat and runs away

Deeper level: What if Emily’s psychiatrist was Hagan’s wife whom Emily accidentally killed a while ago? And she’s having a flashback which is triggered when she sees Hagan?

Hagan TJ 4: Hagan returns to the chapel and is approached by Detective Mike who is investigating Hagan’s father’s death

Emily PJ 4: Emily eavesdrops their conversation where detective Mike interrogates Hagan about his father’s bizarre death

Deeper layer: Younger Hagan attempted to burn his father when Hagan’s mother was killed

Hagan TJ 5: Hagan gets a sample of his late father’s charred skin and leaves. Mike threatens to corner him, and that this conversation is not over

Emily PJ 5: Emily waits for Mike to leave, then rushes toward the door, but…

Walter AJ 5: Walter grabs Emily by her ankles, trying to pull her into the hole on the floor, justifying it as trying to protect her from Hagan

Deeper layer: Walter was Emily’s boyfriend for a short while before she fell in love with Hagan.The three of them grew up together in Hagan’s father’s estate

Emily PJ 6: Emily frees herself up from Walter’s clutches, runs toward Susan’s car and drives off clumsily

TURNING POINT 1: Emily escapes from her self-induced confinement

ACT 2: Emily seeks Hagan’s help finding her daughter

Walter AJ 6: Walter watches Emily steering away in Susan’s car, then glances at Emily’s window, and limps in the direction toward the house

Emily PJ 7: Steams by a stalled police car with Detective Mike looking under its hood.

Walter AJ 7: Walter gets into Emily’s room finding Susan in a pool of blood on the floor. He asks about what Emily remembers and what she wants, then grabs Emily’s sketches book. He uses Susan’s finger to dial 911 and leaves her barely alive with a phone in er hand (OR: No Susan, no blood, just Emily’s sketches book)

Deeper layer: Detective Mike receives a police call about Kingsleys’ estate, then drives off after Emily. (OR: He sees Emily accelerating by and calls to inquire about her license plate – revealed as Hagan’s dead wife’s car)

Emily PJ 8: Emily notices police car chasing her, accelerates, looses control and slams into a tree

Walter AJ 8: Walter returns to the chapel, skims through Emily’s notebook, arranges a circle of candles by the altar similar to her drawing, then descends into the hole on the floor

Emily PJ 9: Emily gets a ride in detective Mike’s car, who asks navigating questions to confuse Emily. She tells Mike her visions about the cult, the tunnel, mentions her missing daughter, ostensibly in danger, and pleads to help her finding Hagan. Mike is intrigued. They arrive at Hagan’s nightclub. Mike cuffs Emily’s hands and takes her inside.

Hagan TJ 6: Hagan sips an Ayahuasca drink and dives into a flashback of the Younger self running away from his deranged drunkard father

Emily PJ 10: Mike leaves Emily with a barista, named Teresa, and asks her to bring Emily to Hagan’s office in 15 minutes

Hagan TJ 7: Gets interrogated by Mike who pressure him to admit killing his wife and his missing child

Deeper layer: Hagan’s wife is said to commit suicide in the tunnel by his club. Hagan is a suspect. They had a daughter who is presumed missing, but in reality she’s raised by LW. (New version: Walter has a flashback of seeing Susan (Hagan’s wife) killed, and dragging her away. He could have brought her into the tunnel and left her by Hagan’s club to set him up).

Emily PJ 11: Teresa, who claims attending the same boarding school as Emily, listens to Emily’s cry about her missing daughter being in danger and suggests talking to Cherimoya who knows Hagan well. They make a call

Deeper level: Teresa wants to marry Walter and is jealous of his love for Emily

Walter/ as Cherimoya AJ 9: Cherimoya agrees to meet Emily in an abandoned tunnel at midnight

Emily PJ 12: Teresa brings Emily to Hagan’s office. Mike watches their reaction. Emily backs away

Hagan TJ 8: Hagan offers Mike a bribe to find Kingsley family records book. Mike leaves

Emily PJ 13: Emily convinces Mike to meet Cherimoya

Walter/ as Cherimoya AJ 10: Cherimoya learns from Teresa that Emily knows about her daughter

Hagan TJ 9: Hagan has a flashback where his drunken father kills his mother, Younger Hagan sets him on fire, and Younger Emily pulls Hagan out of the flaming maid’s quarters, barely alive

Emily PJ 14: Emily and Mike find a manhole to get into the tunnel. Reluctantly, Emily goes in

Hagan TJ 10: Teresa tells Hagan that Emily and Mike were talking about abandoned tunnels

Walter/ as Cherimoya AJ 11: Cherimoya calls Hagan to inform him about the Ayahuasca meeting

Deeper layer: Hagan runs Ayahuasca healing retreat for troubled youth and misfits

Emily PJ 15: In the tunnel, Emily, enchanted by an unfolding, wild Halloween party, looses sight of Mike and gets lost. She asks around for Cherimoya

Hagan/ as Phantom TJ 11: Hagan, in a Phantom’s costume, finds Emily. They dance. He asks questions about her childhood

Emily PJ 16: Emily confesses her feelings for Hagan, the boy she fell in love with, and starts having a flashback to their childhood where they break up under the rain

Walter as Cherimoya AJ 12: Cherimoya watches Emily dance with the Phantom (Hagan), and sends a messenger to notify Hagan that Shaman has arrived

Hagan/ as Phantom TJ 12: The Phantom apologizes to Emily and leaves, asking his employees to keep an eye on Emily

Walter/ as Cherimoya AJ 13: Cherimoya catches Emily having withdrawal from meds and offers help. She takes Emily to a secret Ayahuasca gathering where during a bizarre ritual, Emily takes the drink

Emily PJ 17: While purging from Ayahuasca, Emily experiences petrifying visions from her past, the cult, and bizarre creatures abolishing her family

TURNING POINT 2/ MIDPOINT: In her vision, Hagan is revealed as a leader of the cult, where he conducts sacrificial ritual on a child

ACT 3: Character rethinks their journey and makes a real change to solve things

Emily suspects Hagan of being the leader of the cult and a threat to her daughter’s life

Emily PJ 18: Emily sees vivid visions of the Phantoms, Cherimoya, and LW gathered for a sacrificial ritual

Hagan/ as Phantom TJ 13: The Phantom sends Cherimoya to bring Emily back to the estate

Walter as/ Cherimoya AJ 14: Cherimoya asks questions about Emily’s visions while driving back to the estate. Emily gets sick from withdrawal and throws up

Emily PJ 19: Emily wakes up in someone else’s bed, naked. She finds her clothes neatly stacked up on bed, gets dressed and goes looking for Hagan

Hagan TJ 14: Hagan enters the building, seen inside a surveillance camera on an iPad

Emily PJ 20: Emily wonders into a basement where she finds manikins wearing facial latex masks of her relatives who’ve been missing or killed. She sees a manikin of Teresa

Walter AJ 15: Walter, dressed as the Phantom, dances with Emily. Lights go off and come back up. She finds herself holding Cherimoya’s latex mask staring at the Phantom’s cape on the floor

Emily PJ 21: Emily runs out of the basement and stumbles upon Walter alone in the room

Walter AJ 16: Walter reveals that Hinter is their daughter and tricks Emily to believe that he knows where she is. He confesses his love to her and forces her to undress and get into bed with him

Hagan TG 15: Hagan looks for Emily and walks into the room, seeing Emily in bed with Walter. Speechless, he storms away

Walter AJ 17: Walter reveals that Hagan is the killer and the leader of the cult, who disguises himself as people he kills. He ties up Emily to keep her safe and runs after Hagan to stop him from hurting Hunter

TURNING POINT 3: MAJOR TWIST: Emily finds herself in the middle of the fire and cries for help. Teresa, barely alive, crawls toward Emily and tries to untie her hands. She passes away half way done

ACT 4: Climax. The Ultimate Expression of the Conflict:

Emily PJ 22: Emily manages to escape fire and runs toward a chapel.

Hagan / as Lady Winslet TJ 16: Lady Winslet (Hagan) sits on her wheelchair squeezing an embroidered pillow, tied up, mouth clutched with a clothes

Emily PJ 23: Emily sneaks inside the chapel and approaches the altar blending between the Phantoms dressed in hooded capes in the middle of the ritual with a small body of a person on a pedestal under a bed sheet

Walter /as Hagan AJ 18: Hagan (Walter) sings Gregorian chant, circling the victim under the bed sheet, then orders to commence sacrifice

Emily PJ 24: Emily breaks into the circle of the Phantoms, screaming Hunter’s name, pleading Hagan to stop, trying to save her

Walter/ as Hagan AJ 19: Orders the Phantoms to point swords at the person on a pedestal and catch Emily, then offers her a choice – to kill Lady Winslet or her daughter dies

Emily PJ 25: Emily hesitated, paralyzed by impossible decision, holding a pistol in her trembling hands, aiming at Lady Winslet

Walter/ as Hagan AJ 20: Impatient, screams at Emily a certain word to encourage her

Emily PJ 26: Emily recognizes the word, switches her aim at Hagan (Walter), fires up at him, then drops her pistol in terror

Walter/ as Hagan AJ 21: Hagan (Walter) folds with pain and manages to grab the pistol and shoots at Lady Winslet (Hagan), wounding her, then careens and hits a decrepit pole, which crashes making a huge gap on the floor. Everyone falls into the hole

Emily PJ 27: Emily sees Hunter under a debris, and digs her out, barely alive. Just then, the ceiling of the chapel gives in and collapses, covering everyone with deteriorated planks and dust

Resolution: Their world has changed

Emily PJ 28: In the hospital visits Hagan bound to bed. Lady Winslet’s lawyer comes with announcement that Lady Winslet’s body was never found, which means that no one can inherit the estate. The Lawyer steps out and brings Hunter in. She runs to Hagan calling him Daddy, and proclaiming her love to him

Hagan TJ 17: Hagan whispers words of love to Emily

Emily PJ 29: Emily experiences a vision of her Younger Self dancing with Younger Hagan, where they almost seal their love with a kiss

Epilogue:

Flashback: Evans puts Lady Winslet’s latex mask over Walter’s head, who is in a coffin, making him look like Lady Winslet. He puts Lady Winslet’s pillow into her hands, then discovers something inside it. He rips the pillow apart, and finds an envelope.

Hunter, Hagan and Emily attend Lady Winslet’s funeral. Emily holds Hagan’s hand, and the will in her other hand, where they both are made an equal heir.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Deeper Layer!

My vision is to create and produce award winning stories that make an unforgettable emotional impact on a worldwide audience.

What I learned from this assignment: Things are slowly taking a better shape. Great lesson!

Surface Layer: Emily discovers from her sketches drawn under hypnosis that her baby daughter maybe alive and becomes obsessed with finding her.

Deeper Layer: Emily has a Dissociative Identity Disorder caused by a serious mental trauma, and one of her personalities is an 8 y.o. girl she thinks is her missing daughter

Major Reveal: is in the final scene where she finds her psychiatrist’s hypnotic sessions notes explaining her condition.

Influences Surface Story: The 8 y.o. girl appears in Emily’s childhood flashbacks where she is confused with Emily. Also, Hagan’s daughter, Hunter, serves to mislead the audience. When Emily finds Hunter in a debris, she thinks that she is her daughter, but Hunter’s appearance at the last scene in the hospital when she calls Hagan Daddy, makes things clear to Emily and the audience.

Hints: No one believes that Emily had a child. In her conversation with Hagan (also could be Walter or Mike – I’ll decide it later), he mentions that he has a daughter, Hunter, and needs to find her.

Changes Reality: Emily accepts truth about her condition and welcomes Hunter as her own daughter. OR this could be revealed to the audience and other characters only, and Emily will believe that she found her missing daughter. Either way, her DID should be cured one way or the other.

Beginning: Emily is in a confinement undergoes a hypnotic session where she describes the most traumatic event of her life, where she supposedly witnessed a mysterious cult’s sacrifice.

Inciting Incident: Emily discovers from her own sketches that her and Hagan’s daughter may be alive.

Turning Point 1: Emily sees Hagan and breaks out of her confinement to find out about Hunter.

Act 2: During a Halloween party in an abandoned tunnel, Emily dances with Hagan wearing cape and mask of the Phantom, where she confesses about being in love with him.

Turning Point 2 / Midpoint: While influenced by Ayahuasca, Emily sees a vision of Hagan being a leader if the cult conducting sacrificial ritual of their daughter.

Act 3: Emily finds evidence in a warehouse that leads her to believe that Hagan indeed is the leader of the cult

Turning Point 3: Hagan catches Emily and Walter naked in bed in a stages by Walter sex scene, and rushes away. Walter ties up and locks away Emily to prevent her from going after him, and leaves.

Act 4 Climax: Emily finds Hunter underneath the chapel’s floor

Resolution: Emily finds Lady Winslet’s pillow which contains an old family records book and Hagan’s father’s will. She receives her Psychiatrist’s notes from a hypnotic session which explains her mental condition, reunites with Hunter and Hagan, who proclaims his love to Emily.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Character Structure

My vision is to create and produce award winning stories that make an unforgettable emotional impact on a worldwide audience.

What I learned from this assignment: Love going through character arch and plot points for each character, but what a mighty mess! LOL. Need to redo the whole thing for each character separately. Hope to close those loopholes as the story develops further.

BLOODHUNTER, mystery thriller

Emily Kingsley, protagonist

Walter Kingsley, antagonist

Hagan Valentine, triangle, love interest

Beginning: Where does the character start?

EMILY: In confinement in her grandmother’s estate (Lady Winslet)

WALTER: working for his distant relative, Lady Winslet, in an old chapel

HAGAN: Coming to his father’s funeral, and is called to see Lady Winslet

Inciting incident: What propels them on their journey?

EMILY: After a hypnotic session sees her drawing of giving birth to a babygirl and becomes obsessed that she is alive

WALTER: After an unexpected appearance of Hagan at is father’s funeral, Walter becomes obsessed that Hagan will become a heir of his father’s estate, especially when Hagan is called to see Lady Winslet

HAGAN: News about his father’s death

Turning Point 1: A major twist that locks them into a conflict.

EMILY: Sees Hagan after a decade of isolation and becomes obsessed with the idea that he may have her child,. She escapes, but misses him by a minute, then follows him in a car and slams into a tree.

WALTER: Sees Emily getting away from the estate to chase Hagan, follows her, and so is detective Mike.

HAGAN: Learns that he is not a heir of his father’s estate because there is no proof that he is, and that the custody of his daughter, Hunter, remains with Lady Winslet, who asks him to leave the town for good. That pisses him off.

Act 2: The character has a “normal response” to this change in their lives.

EMILY: Follows Hagan with Walter to the nightclub, meets Teresa, Hagan’s barista who refers her to Cherimoya, club’s manager.

Sees detective Mike and runs away, but he catches her, then takes Emily to the tunnel.

Gets lost in the tunnel and dances w/ a masked Phantom (Hagan)

Meets Cherimoya (Walter in disguise), who takes her to a secret shamanistic ritual place ostensibly to “meet” Hagan

WALTER: Learns from Teresa, Hagan’s barista, that Emily is looking to find Hagan, but she run away from detective Mike. Walker gets an idea of where to find her.

HAGAN: Gets interrogated by detective Mike, then hires him to locate old family records book

Turning Point 2 / Midpoint: A twist that causes everything to change but keeps the character on the same journey.

EMILY: While purging Ayahuasca, has a disturbing vision of Hagan conducting sacrificial ritual, passes out.

WALTER: Disguised as Cherimoya, drugs Emily with Ayahuasca, learns that Hunter is alive, takes her back to Lady Winslet’s estate

HAGAN: Dances with Emily as a masked Phantom and learns that she’s still in love with him. He gets a message from detective Mike about where the family book of records is. He asks his employee to keep an eye on Emily and rushes away.

Act 3: The character rethinks their journey and makes a real change to solve things.

EMILY: Wakes up in a strange warehouse and finds Teresa barely alive, she unties her, and then finds Walter holding Cherimoya’s latex mask

WALTER: Convinces Emily that Hagan is the cult’s leader, who uses costumes and disguises to full people, but he, Walter, knows Hagan’s plan and how to stop him from hurting Hunter.

HAGAN: Searches the old chapel for family records book, gets knocked out by someone.

Turning Point 3: Another major twist that takes them to the biggest conflict.

EMILY: Teresa unties Emily

WALTER: Walter ties up Emily to prevent her getting herself in trouble, runs to save Hunter

HAGAN: Is dressed up in a cape, face concealed under a hoodie

4th Act Climax: The ultimate experience/expression of this conflict.

EMILY: Fights the phantoms and tries to save the victim, realizes who Lady Winslet truly is and soots at her. After the floor collapses, finds Hunter and other Walter’s victims beneath the chapel’s floor. Emily takes Lady Winslet’s face mask off, revealing Walter. Finds her embroidered pillow

WALTER: disguised as Lady Winslet orders Emily shoot Hagan, gets shot, and manages to fire back at haha, wounding him. Falls into a hole beneath the floor

HAGAN: Can’t help, gets shot, falls into a hole beneath the floor

Resolution: Their world has changed. How did they end up after going through this journey?

EMILY: In the hospital, finds her Great Uncle’s will in the family records book, has a vision of younger self in love with Hagan

WALTER: is shown in a coffin wearing Lady Winslet’s mask

HAGAN: reunites with Hunter, conveys his love to Emily

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Supporting Characters

My vision is to create and produce award winning stories that make an unforgettable emotional impact on a worldwide audience.

What I learned from this assignment: I love creating supporting characters who add additional layers to the story.

Supporting Characters:

Support 1: Lady Winslet

Role: Emily’s dying grandmother, Hagan’s father’s sister who holds his will to the estate

Main purpose: Initiates a fight within the family for the estate

Value: Controlling, snobbish aristocrat who represents family values, carries out plot points and serves as a decoy in the final scene pushing Emily to commit murder. Humiliates Hagan by cutting him off from the estate and keeps his daughter, Hunter, which sets Hagan off on his journey.

Support 2: Detective Mike

Role: Corrupt detective who investigates Hagan’s father’s murder.

Main purpose: makes a deal with Hagan to find a family records book, interferes with Walter’s plan, maybe appears at the showdown which complicates things, and potentially covers up Lady Winslet’s / Walter’s murder.

Value: Serves as Emily’s sidekick to get her into the tunnel

Support 3: Cherimoya

Role: Hagan’s night club manager, Walter disguised as a black crossdresser woman

Main purpose: Part of Walter’s plan to be in the know

Value: Misleading character who seems to be carrying out Hagan’s orders and his murder weapon in a scene with Lady Winslet when Cherimoya tries to get info about the will, which results in Lady Winslet’s death, later revealed.

Support 4: Evans Kingsley

Role: Emily’s grandfather

Main purpose: Hunter’s up-bringer, old chapel’s keeper

Value: ties up loopholes in Emily’s memory and fills in missing information

Support 5: Susan

Role: Emily’s psychiatrist

Main purpose: Appears in Emily’s flashbacks as a V.O. where Emily explains what happened, answers to, agues with or asks for an advise

Value: Story development/ questions filler

Support 6: Teresa Moore

Role: Emily’s childhood friend, works as a barista at Hagan’s night club

Main purpose: Shapeshifter, Walter’s girlfriend

Value: Serves as a connection between Walter and Emily, plays on his side

Background Characters:

Lady Winslet’s Lawyer — brings Hagan’s father’s will and Hunter’s custody papers

Lisa — Hagan’s girlfriend who works in a hospital’s lab to reveal Hagan’s origin

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Character Profiles Part 2

My vision is to create and produce award winning stories that make an unforgettable emotional impact on a worldwide audience.

What I learned from this assignment: Discovered new depth and understanding of my characters.

Character 1: EMILY KINGSLEY, protagonist

A. High Concept: An amnesiac survivor of a mysterious cult who follows her own clues drawn under a hypnosis to save her ostensibly missing child from a sacrifice.

B. Character’s journey: from paranoid, insecure recluse with the DID living two different lives, to a bold, confident woman who takes chances at love

C. Actor Attractors for this character: Dual personalities, insecure, character arch from gullible recluse to a kick arse confident woman who takes down her dysfunctional family and succumbs to her love

Character Subtext: Afraid facing her fears

Character Intrigue: Unspoken wound

Flaw: Undervalues herself

Values: Love

Character Dilemma: Please others vs being independent

Role in the Story: an amnesiac woman with DID, obsessed with saving her ostensibly missing daughter, who breaks out of a confinement and thwarts antagonist’s plan to eliminate potential heirs of the estate

Age range and Description: Fit, sleep deprived, dark circles under her dreamy eyes, in her late 20’s

Core Traits: headstrong, reckless, insecure, protective

Motivation: To prove her sanity

Want: To gain trust Need: to believe in herself

Wound: guilt-driven for not saving a child from a sacrifice

Likability, Relatability, Empathy: Liked by most people, guilt-driven, loss of a child

Character 2: WALTER KINGSLEY, antagonist

High Concept: Emily’s manipulative, vengeful ex-boyfriend pretending to be her friend, who secretly plots to publicly humiliate Emily and eliminate every potential heir standing on his way to the inheritance.

Character’s journey: from pitiful, unfit cripple disregarded by the family to an elusive, powerful mastermind in disguise

Actor Attractors for this character: Walter is a multifaceted relatable and deceiving character who masterfully impersonates and kills family members standing on his way to the inheritance

Character Subtext: Plotting

Character Intrigue: Hidden agenda

Flaw: Overdoing things/ over confidence

Values: Winning

Character Dilemma: Winer vs loser

Role in the Story: Emily’s entitled, eccentric cousin with a distant-poor relative complex, who’s wildest dream is to publicly humiliate Emily and inherit wealthy family’s estate

Age range and Description: tall, slim, insignificant appearance underneath a wild, vicious, calculating man in his early 30’s

Core Traits: scheming, manipulative, deceitful, vulnerable

Motivation: eliminate anyone standing between himself and family’s fortune

Want: To take control Need: learn to share

Wound: being rejected and publicly humiliated by Emily

Likability, Relatability, Empathy: being in love, but rejected, crippled and publicly humiliated

Character 3: HAGAN VALENTINE, triangle, love interest

High Concept: An African-American man born out of wedlock into a snobbish, white family who tries to prove his aristocratic roots and reinstate his rights as a rightful heir of the estate

Character’s journey: from humble and polite to outraged, determined and vulnerable.

Actor Attractors for this character: An underdog who struggles to prove his identity, earns respect and fights for love

Character Subtext: Being polite? Withholding? Not 100% sure.

Character Intrigue: Unspoken wound

Flaw: Can’t take risks

Values: Family

Character Dilemma: Wealthy vs being a good person

Role in the Story: Emily’s lost love interest, an ostensibly rightful heir of the estate

Age range and Description: tall, fit, charismatic, discerning, humble in his views of life, in his early 30’s

Core Traits: content, astute, loyal, unforgiving

Motivation: to prove his innocence and gain rights as a heir

Want: To belong Need: learn to let go

Wound: rejected by family

Likability, Relatability, Empathy: astute, content, black man born in wedlock to a snobbish white family, cast away reject

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Character Profiles Part 1

My vision is to create and produce award winning stories that make an unforgettable emotional impact on a worldwide audience.

What I learned from this assignment: It’s another wonderful tool for dissecting characters

Character 1: EMILY KINGSLEY, protagonist

High Concept: An amnesiac survivor of a mysterious cult who follows her own clues drawn under a hypnosis to save her ostensibly missing child from a sacrifice.

Character’s journey: from paranoid, insecure recluse with the DID living two different lives, to a bold, confident woman who takes chances at love

Actor Attractors for this character: Emily’s dual personalities, her journey from insecure, gullible recluse to a kick arse, confident woman who takes down her dysfunctional family and succumbs to her love

Role in the Story: an amnesiac woman with DID, obsessed with saving her ostensibly missing daughter, who breaks out of a confinement and thwarts antagonist’s plan to eliminate potential heirs of the estate

Age range and Description: Fit, sleep deprived, dark circles under her dreamy eyes, in her late 20’s

Core Traits: headstrong, reckless, insecure, protective

<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Motivation: To prove her sanity

Want: To gain trust Need: to believe in herself

Wound: guilt-driven for not saving a child from a sacrifice

Likability, Relatability, Empathy: Liked by most people, guilt- driven, loss of a child

Character 2: WALTER KINGSLEY, antagonist

High Concept: Emily’s manipulative, vengeful ex-boyfriend pretending to be her friend, who secretly plots to publicly humiliate Emily and eliminate every potential heir standing on his way to the inheritance.

Character’s journey: from pitiful cripple disregarded by the family as unfit candidate to the estate, to secret powerful antagonist in disguise

Actor Attractors for this character: Walter is a multifaceted character who masterfully impersonates other characters whom he kills while being likable and misleading on a surface

Role in the Story: Emily’s entitled, eccentric cousin with a distant-poor relative complex, who’s wildest dream is to publicly humiliate Emily and inherit wealthy family’s estate

Age range and Description: tall, slim, insignificant appearance underneath a wild, vicious, calculating man in his early 30’s

Core Traits: scheming, manipulative, deceitful, vulnerable

Motivation: eliminate anyone standing between himself and family’s fortune

Want: To take control Need: learn to share

Wound: being rejected and publicly humiliated by Emily

Likability, Relatability, Empathy: being in love, but rejected, crippled and publicly humiliated

Character 3: HAGAN VALENTINE, triangle, love interest

High Concept: An African-American man born out of wedlock into a snobbish, white family who tries to prove his aristocratic roots and reinstate his rights as a rightful heir of the estate

Character’s journey: from humble and polite to outraged, determined, devious (not him), and vulnerable.

Actor Attractors for this character: An underdog who struggles to prove his identity, earns respect and fights for love

Role in the Story: Emily’s lost love interest, an ostensibly rightful heir of the estate

Age range and Description: tall, fit, charismatic, discerning, humble in his views of life, in his early 30’s

Core Traits: content, astute, loyal, unforgiving

Motivation: to prove his innocence and gain rights as a heir

Want: To belong Need: learn to let go

Wound: rejected by family

Likability, Relatability, Empathy: astute, content, black man born in wedlock to a snobbish white family, cast away reject

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Likability/Relatability/Empathy

My vision is to create and produce award winning stories that make an unforgettable emotional impact on a worldwide audience.

What I learned from this assignment is that by doing it, I closed another loophole from the opening scene. Loving this!

Character: Emily Kingsley, protagonist

Likability: During hypnotic session, Emily’s psychiatrist clearly adores her.

Relatability: Emily feels guilty and is deeply pained for not being able to save a child during a sacrificial ritual because she was snatched away by a mysterious man.

Empathy: Emily is pregnant and is drugged into an abandoned tunnel in an attempt to escape from the cult. Shaken and traumatized, she starts giving birth and loses her child in a fight with Walter, her abusive ex-boyfriend whom she shoots at before she passes out.

Character: Walter Kingsley, antagonist

Likability: Walter is clearly in love with Emily. He warns her about the danger of following Hagan if she leaves the estate. He swears to protect her and follow her whenever she goes regardless, however difficult it will be for him to do.

Relatability: Walter’s expressions and actions appear genuine, that of an unrequited love.

Empathy: Walter acts crippled and limping, but expressed forgiveness even after Emily shot him in the tunnel, giving her reasons as being tricked and influenced by Hagan. He mourns and cries for a loss of their child, to which Emily humiliates him by responding that the child was not even his.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Character Intrigue

My vision is to create and produce award winning stories that make an unforgettable emotional impact on a worldwide audience.

What I learned from this assignment is that there is more room to enrich characters

1. Character Name: EMILY KINGSLEY

Role: Protagonist

Hidden agendas: To be together with Hagan

Secrets: Has been in love with Hagan since their childhood

Unspoken Wound: Believes she is unworthy of anything good

Secret Identity: Switches between mother & child

How that character’s subtext might show up: Breaks away from her self-inflicted confinement to follow Hagan; Makes risky and dangerous moves just to see Hagan; Wants to find their “child” so she can get him back; Blocks her memories, has flashbacks of the child being in danger

2. Character Name: WALTER KINGSLEY

Role: Antagonist

Hidden agendas: To eliminate potential heirs to the estate

Competition: Walter wants to kill Hagan because of being rejected by Emily for Hagan.

Conspiracies: Conspires with Emily’s friend, Teresa, to lure Emily into the tunnel

Secrets: Kills to prove his power; In love with Emily, wants her back

Deception: Crossdresser who impersonates family members to his advantage

Unspoken Wound: Being rejected by Emily and family as the rightful heir

Secret Identity: Entitled heir of the estate

How that character’s subtext might show up: Walter interacts with all characters mostly as someone else

3. Character Name: HAGAN VALENTINE

Role: Love interest

Hidden agendas: to get his daughter back

Competition: Lady Winslet who keeps Hagan’s daughter away

Conspiracies: Hires detective Mike to find family records book

Secrets: Wants to destroy his snobbish family

Unspoken Wound: Childhood trauma of seeing his mother killed by his father

How that character’s subtext might show up: Plots against Lady WInslet to take his daughter back

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Subtext Characters

My vision is to create and produce award winning stories that make an unforgettable emotional impact on a worldwide audience.

What I learned from this assignment is that subtext enriches the story and brings out characters’ depth in their own unique way.

Movie Title: BLOODHUNTER

Character With the Most Subtext: WALTER KINGSLEY, antagonist

Subtext Identity: Emily’s scheming ex-boyfriend, her distant cousin who pretends to be her friend

Subtext Trait: Impersonator, vengeful, entitled

Subtext Logline: Walter is Emily’s scheming ex-boyfriend, her distant cousin who pretends to be her friend.

Possible Areas of Subtext: Walter uses his artistic creativity to recreate his relatives’ faces using latex masks, acts as a crossdresser disguises as Hagan’s club manager, Cherimoya, impersonates family folks whom he kills to get them out of his way to the inheritance

Character Name: EMILY KINGSLEY, protagonist

Subtext Identity: Insecure, paranoid recluse

Subtext Trait: fixated on her past, fear of persecution, in denial

Subtext Logline: Emily is an insecure recluse with DID triggered by a childhood trauma

Possible Areas of Subtext: Acting like two different personalities, obsessed with saving her “daughter” , paranoid of being persecuted by a mysterious cult, deprives herself of relationship and love

Character Name: HAGAN VALENTINE, love interest

Subtext Identity: Bastard son of aristocratic family

Subtext Trait: Disowned and denied of his birth rights

Subtext Logline: Hagan is a disowned castaway half-blood son of an aristocratic family whose birth right is denied

Possible Areas of Subtext: Pursues finding family records book to prove his aristocratic roots

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Characters Actor attractors!

My vision is to create and produce award winning stories that make an unforgettable emotional impact on a worldwide audience.

What I learned from this assignment is that having looked at the characters with this structure helps to dig deeper into their inner self.

Lead Character Name: EMILY KINGSLEY / protagonist

1. Why would an actor WANT to be known for this role? Emily is an intriguing character who lives in her own unique world. She has a mind case of the DID and undergoes a definitive transformational journey from insecure, confined recluse living life of two personalities to a bold, confident woman who takes chance at love.

2. What makes this character one of the most interesting characters in the movie? Emily is vulnerable, flawed, insecure and gullible who hasn’t been exposed to the outside world. She makes mistakes and is easily manipulated by the antagonist. Definitely a unique playground for a talented actor to enjoy and show their range of skills.

3. What are the most interesting actions the Lead takes in the movie? Aside from Emily actively living two lives of that of her missing daughter and herself as a mother, she takes proactive actions toward her obsessive goal of saving her child from a sacrifice.

4. How is this character introduced that could sell it to an actor? Emily is vulnerable, flawed, insecure and gullible. She hasn’t been exposed to the outside world, makes mistakes and is easily manipulated by the antagonist. Her situation and journey is relatable to a wide audience. Definitely a unique playground for a skilled actor to enjoy.

5. What is this character’s emotional range? Emily from insecure, confused and paranoid recluse, to naive fish out of the water character, to emotional wreck, to a proactive seeker of truth, to taking actions for protecting her labored ones, to believer in her self-worthiness, to a forgiving woman who allows love into her live.

6. What subtext can the actor play? Emily’s inner world is dark and insecure. She blocked her memories to avoid an unbearable pain of losing her child at a childbirth. She is confused and misled by her own overthinking and other characters and makes her moves based on her own sketches drawn under a hypnosis.

7. What’s the most interesting relationships this character has? With her inner self, her love interest and the antagonist.

8. How is this character’s unique voice presented? Emily has flashbacks and jolts of memory drawn from her drawings and places she goes into. Her voice is that of a confused, insecure woman who doesn’t trust even her own self.

9. What makes this character special and unique? Emily’s duality and insecurity as well as her strong will to overcome her illness and find peace and love in her life.

10. (Fill in a scene that shows the character fulfilling much of the Actor Attractor model.) Emily visits Hagan at the hospital, where Lady Winslet’s lawyer brings Hunter in. She runs to hug Hagan. As they reunite, Hagan silently pronounces his love for Emily. Overwhelmed, she has a flashback to her childhood where instead of losing Hagan, they reunite with a kiss.

Lead Character N2: WALTER KINGSLEY / antagonist

1. Why would an actor WANT to be known for this role? Walter is a talented, manipulative and crafty character who will stop at nothing to eliminate potential heirs to family fortune.

2. What makes this character one of the most interesting characters in the movie? Walter is a crossdresser who uses his multiple talents to impersonate other characters whom he kills. He acts as an ally, but deep down inside, he is driven by vengeance and determination to achieve his ultimate prize – Emily’s public humiliation and the inheritance.

3. What are the most interesting actions the Lead takes in the movie? Walter plays different characters using trust and deceit. Too many to mention.

4. How is this character introduced that could sell it to an actor? Walter’s character is extravagant, daring, vengeful and conniving, but he is also a vulnerable underdog who struggles to be appreciated and loved.

5. What is this character’s emotional range? from ruthless to vulnerable

6. What subtext can the actor play? that of an underdog who is unfairly treated, neglected and hurt.

7. What’s the most interesting relationships this character has? with Emily and Hagan.

8. How is this character’s unique voice presented? He plays different characters and changes his body moves, voice and emotional involvement.

9. What makes this character special and unique? His skillful deceitful presence

10. (Fill in a scene that shows the character fulfilling much of the Actor Attractor model.) Too many to mention.

Lead Character 3: HAGAN VALENTINE / Love interest

Why would an actor WANT to be known for this role? Hagan’s character is likable and relatable to a wide audience. because of his origin. Being half African American man born to a wealthy aristocratic father and a black maid, Hagan is rejected by the family, deprived of the love of his life, and cut off from the inheritance.
What makes this character one of the most interesting characters in the movie? Hagan’s character is interesting because he steps out of his comfort zone in order to fight for the love of his life.

3. What are the most interesting actions the Lead takes in the movie? Hagan is a recluse, he runs his night club and lives alone after his wife’s murder. His daughter, Hunter, is taken care of Lady Winslet and his love, Emily is nowhere to be found. Although he appears to be doing most manipulations in pursuit of his covert plan for the inheritance, the only thing he wants is to reinstate his status in the family, find love and belong. With that said, Hagan appears desolate and vengeful, although we realize at the end, that it was Walter’s masterful disguise and hagan has nothing to do with threatening Emily’s life.

4. How is this character introduced that could sell it to an actor? Hagan’s character is presented as a strong, courageous man who tries to save his love and fight for his rights.

5. What is this character’s emotional range? from polite to outraged, determined, devious (not him), and vulnerable.

6. What subtext can the actor play? Hagan’s character is an underdog who struggles with his identity, but is strong enough to prove his self-worthiness

7. What’s the most interesting relationships this character has? With Emily and Walter (disguised as Hagan’s assistant, Cherimoya).

8. How is this character’s unique voice presented? Hagan’s voice is distinguished by sorrow, un fairness and pride.

9. What makes this character special and unique? His ability to withstand the family and Walter’s schemes.

10. (Fill in a scene that shows the character fulfilling much of the Actor Attractor model.) Hagan’s character is likable Disguises himself as the Phantom and dances with Emily trying to trigger her memory toward remembering their love.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Actor Attractors for THE CELL (2000)

My vision is to create and produce award winning stories that make an unforgettable emotional impact on a worldwide audience.

What I learned from this assignment is that sometimes main character doesn’t change, but the unique world of the story can provide intrigue and satisfaction of the well structured and written story.

Movie Title: THE CELL (2000)

Lead Character Name: Catherine Dean (Jennifer Lopez)

1. Why would an actor WANT to be known for this role? This is one of the unique stories that has merits on its on where the lead is a positive character which can set a certain actor stereotype (like Tom Hanks’s roles).

2. What makes this character one of the most interesting characters in the movie? Catherine’s unique ability to gain trust and to access other person’s world

3. What are the most interesting actions the Lead takes in the movie? Makes her own decision to jump into a very dangerous situation when two save a child from his own dark side.

4. How is this character introduced that could sell it to an actor? Catherine appears as a mysterious horse rider in a desert where she symbolically climbs sand mountains to save a child stuck in his perpetual coma. We later realize that this is her unique job.

5. What is this character’s emotional range? Calm, confident, sometimes uncertain and insecure, to going back to gaining confidence and control to overpower the patient’s dark side.

6. What subtext can the actor play? Understanding what her patients are going through via her compassionate nature.

7. What’s the most interesting relationships this character has? With the antagonist, Carl, inside his dark and torturous world.

8. How is this character’s unique voice presented? Catherine speaks from confidence and is recognized by her special talent.

9. What makes this character special and unique? Her ability to gain trust and befriend patients with difficult illnesses.

10. (Fill in a scene that shows the character fulfilling much of the Actor Attractor model.) Catherine’s strength is mostly portrayed at the showdown scene where she returns into a criminal patient’s mind to save his pure inner child from torture.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Genre Conventions

My vision is to create and produce award winning stories that make an unforgettable emotional impact on a worldwide audience.

What I learned from this assignment is that having genre conventions in mind while plotting the outline, is an amazing tool that enriches the story.

Title: BLOODHUNTER

Concept: An emotionally vulnerable survivor of a mysterious cult must relive her traumatic experience as she follows clues drawn under a hypnosis to save her ostensibly missing child from a sacrifice.

Genre: Thriller

Conventions:

High Stakes:

Suspense:

Plot Twists:

Life and Death Situations: Physically / Emotionally / Mentally

Mystery / Intrigue / Suspense:

Villain’s Plan:

Danger:

Act 1: 25 to 30 pages – Set up and See Old Ways

Opening:

— A bizarre sacrificial ritual overlapped by Emily’s V.O., as she draws sketches of what we see unfolding on screen (Younger, pregnant Emily watches a sacrificial ritual and then is snatched away by a mysterious man, who is later revealed as Hagan. As they escape into an abandoned tunnel, Walter, Emily’s ex-boyfriend catches up with them and starts a fight w Hagan. Terrified, Emily starts giving birth. Before she passes out, she shoots someone, triggering rocks collapsing from the ceiling. We don’t know whom she shoot and if they survived – CONVENTIONS USED: suspense, high stakes, intrigue, danger, life and death situation, intrigue, mystery) as she relives her story – under a hypnosis.

— When awaken from her trance, Emily becomes disturbed by a drawing of herself giving birth to her stillborn babygirl whom she believes may be still alive (CONVENTIONS USED: emotional situation, intrigue).

— Hagan, the only son of a recently deceased wealthy aristocrat and his black maid, meets Emily’s snobbish grandmother, Lady Winslet, his father’s terminally ill sister. She requests that Hagan leaves town right after his father’s funeral, stressing out that Hagan will never become a heir of a noble family’s fortune for the lack of his aristocratic roots. (and to ensure that he does, LW will keep Hagan’s daughter, Hunter, until she is a teen. CONVENTIONS USED: high stakes, intrigue, emotional situation, villain’s plan). Hagan swears to fight for his birth rights and leaves, enraged. (Note: Hagan has a daughter with another woman, who mysteriously disappeared – later revealed. CONVENTIONS: intrigue, plot twist, mystery, high stakes.)

Inciting Incident: Hagan’s father’s bizarre death puts the family into a feud for the inheritance (CONVENTIONS: high stakes, mystery, dangerous situation)

Turning Point: Emily sees Hagan for the first time in a decade and breaks away from her self-inflicted confinement into the outside world she is terrified of to find out what happened to their daughter, whom she believes is alive. (CONVENTIONS: mystery, emotional & mental situation, danger, intrigue)

Act 2: 20 to 30 pages — Challenge the Old Ways

Reaction: Emily finds Hagan in an old family chapel decorated for his father’s funeral. She eavesdrops his conversation with detective Mike who (interrogates Hagan as a suspect in killing his wife, who ostensibly was sleeping with Walter. Hagan counters Mike with rather him doing his job as a hired gun and insists on finding an old family records book. CONVENTIONS: intrigue, mystery, plot twist, high stakes) and points out at a potential family feud for the inheritance. Hagan secretly obtains a sample of his deceased father’s DNA and leaves. (CONVENTIONS: intrigue, high stakes, emotional situation, mystery).

New plan: To follow Hagan

Plan in action: Emily follows Hagan, but gets noticed by her weird cousin, Walter, a chapel keeper, who triggers Emily’s episode of a flashback, and she loses the sight of Hagan. (Walter, Emily’s ex boyfriend, pretends to have mental issues which terrifies Emily).

Emily catches detective Mike before he drives off. They follow Hagan to his nightclub, but its entry is open only to those with invitations.

Mike finds a way to get into an abandoned tunnel, adjacent to Hagan’s club. (CONVENTIONS: high stakes, suspense, emotional, mental and physical danger, villain’s plan.)

Having a withdrawal from her meds, Emily gets lost in the tunnel. Cherimoya, Hagan’s club manager, takes Emily to a secret shamanistic ritual in Hagan’s club where she gives her Ayahuasca. (CONVENTIONS: high stakes, suspense, emotional, mental and physical danger, villain’s plan).

Turning Point 2: MIDPOINT: While purging, Emily has disturbing visions from her past and her future, where she clearly sees Hagan conducting a sacrificial ritual in the chapel. She passes out. (CONVENTIONS: high stakes, suspense, emotional, mental and physical danger, villain’s plan).

Act 3: 20 to 30 pages — With Midpoint change, Profound moments that give us new ways.

Rethink everything: Emily suspects Hagan of being the leader of the cult. (CONVENTIONS: mystery, high stakes, suspense, emotional, mental and physical danger).

Emily wakes up in a dark warehouse full of props and manikins in costumes with their faces concealed underneath the latex masks. (CONVENTIONS: mystery, high stakes, suspense, emotional, mental and physical danger, villain’s plan).

New plan: While still under the influence of Ayahuasca, Emily dances with a masked manikin dressed as a Phantom, whom she believes is Hagan, trying to find out where her daughter is. He stages a sex scene, where he threatens Emily to not be able to find her daughter if she refuses to oblige. She does.

Turning Point: All is lost/ Huge failure / Major shift: Hagan walks in. (CONVENTIONS: mystery, high stakes, suspense, emotional, mental and physical danger, villain’s plan).

Act 4: 25 pages — Test the change in this character! Prove New Ways!

Emily attacks the Phantom and pulls his mask off, revealing Walter, who claims of being Emily’s protector, insisting that she must stay away from the chapel and that he alone will save her child from the cult. He ties her up to the bed and rushes away. (CONVENTIONS: mystery, high stakes, suspense, emotional, mental and physical danger, villain’s plan).

Climax/Ultimate expression of the conflict:

Emily manages to escape from the warehouse and sneak into the chapel, where she blends in with the Phantoms surrounding a pedestal with their next victim concealed under a cape. (Hagan’s father – what’s left of him). Mistaking the remains of her Great Uncle for her daughter, and in an attempt to save her, Emily reveals herself. Lady Winslet orders Emily to choose the victim between Hagan and the person on a pedestal, who may or may not be her daughter. Torn between her choices, Emily hesitates. Impatient and edgy, Lady Winslet calls Emily a certain name which triggers a flashback and a sudden revelation. She shoots and wounds Lady Winslet, who yanks the pistol off from Emily and shoots at Hagan. Panic ensues. The ramshackle floor of the chapel gives in dragging everyone via a hole into a dilapidated crypt beneath it. Emily finds Hunter tied up next to the corpses of missing family murder victims. As Emily tries to free Hunter, she is suddenly attacked by Lady Winslet. As they fight, Emily snatches LW’s mask off of her face, revealing Walter underneath. Just as Walter chokes Emily near death, old ceiling gives in, and collapses into the crypt, filling it with a debris. (CONVENTIONS: mystery, high stakes, suspense, emotional, mental and physical danger, villain’s plan, plot twist).

Resolution

Emily, on a hospital bed, meets Lady Winslet’s lawyer (OR detective Mike), who confirms that Lady Winslet was not found in the crypt, which means that until her body is discovered, or Emily’s Great Uncle’s will is found, no-one can inherit the estate. More importantly, Emily is facing jail time for shooting Walter, unless…

Emily, on a wheelchair, attends Lady Winslet’s funeral as she holds LW’s embroidered pillow. She exchanges meaningful glances with detective Mike, having a flashback of detective Mike putting Lady Winslet’s latex mask on Walter’s face.

Back to the funeral. Emily discovers something hidden inside the pillow, tears its corner of, finding an old family records book with her Great Uncle’s will.

[Decide if Emily hides the fact that Hagan was adopted by her Great Uncle, or they are still blood related].

Emily visits Hagan at the hospital, where Lady Winslet’s lawyer brings Hunter in. She runs to hug Hagan. As they reunite, Hagan silently pronounces his love for Emily. Overwhelmed, she has a flashback to her childhood where instead of losing Hagan, they reunite with a kiss.

(CONVENTIONS: high stakes, mystery, intrigue, suspense, emotional moments, plot twists).

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Four Act Transformational Structure

My vision is to create and produce award winning stories that make an unforgettable emotional impact on a worldwide audience.

What I learned from this assignment is that it’s easier to structure the events from protagonist’s POV.

Title: BLOODHUNTER

Concept: An emotionally vulnerable survivor of a mysterious cult must relive her traumatic experience as she follows clues drawn under a hypnosis to save her ostensibly missing child from a sacrifice.

Main Conflict: Emily’s grandmother announces her terminal illness which stirs up a feud between the potential heirs to the estate.

Old Ways: Emily Kingsley, Protagonist

Apathetic — gave up on her life, lives in her family estate in self-inflicted confinement

Paranoid — convinced of being persecuted by a mysterious cult

Fixated — obsessed with the idea that her stillborn daughter is alive and in danger

Contemptuous — easily manipulated by her family and confused by her own overthinking

Self-deprived — lacks self-worthiness and trust, lost ability to love

Living in her past – traumatized by her childhood experience with the cult

New Ways:

Proactive — overcomes her fear of the cult, takes bold actions to achieve her goals

Confident — acquires self-appreciation and self-love

Trusting — trusts her heart, opens to a relationship, accepts Hagan’s love

Lives in the present moment – Lets go off of her past, accepts changes, takes faith in her future with Hagan

External Journey: From a low self-esteemed underdog to a bold, rightful heir of the estate

Internal Journey: From a lonesome, withdrawn recluse to a confident lover

Act 1: 25 to 30 pages – Set up and See Old Ways

Opening:

— A bizarre sacrificial ritual overlapped by Emily’s V.O., as she draws sketches of what we see unfolding on screen and tells her story – under a hypnosis.

— When awaken from her trance, Emily becomes disturbed by a drawing of herself giving birth to her stillborn babygirl whom she believes maybe still alive.

— Hagan, the only son of a recently deceased, wealthy aristocrat and his black maid, meets Emily’s snobbish grandmother, Lady Winslet, his father’s terminally ill sister. She requests that Hagan leaves town right after his father’s funeral, stressing out that Hagan will never become a heir of a noble family’s fortune without a proof of his aristocratic roots. Hagan swears to fight for his birth rights and leaves, enraged.

Inciting Incident: Hagan’s father’s bizarre death puts the family onto a feud for the inheritance

Turning Point: Emily sees Hagan for the first time in a decade and breaks away from her self-inflicted confinement into the outside world to find out about their daughter, whom she believes is alive.

Act 2: 20 to 30 pages — Challenge the Old Ways

Reaction: Emily finds Hagan in a family chapel decorated for his father’s funeral. She eavesdrops his conversation with detective Mike who points out at a potential family feud for the inheritance. Hagan secretly obtains a sample of his deceased father’s DNA and leaves.

New plan: To follow Hagan

Plan in action: Emily follows Hagan, but runs into her autistic cousin, Walter, a chapel keeper, who blocks her way out. Hagan drives away.

Emily jumps into detective MIke’s car. They follow Hagan to his nightclub, but can’t get in.

Mike finds a way to get into an abandoned tunnel adjacent to Hagan’s club.

Having a withdrawal from her meds, Emily gets lost in the tunnel. Cherimoya, Hagan’s club manager, takes Emily to a secret shamanistic ritual in Hagan’s club where she gives her Ayahuasca.

Turning Point 2: MIDPOINT: While purging, Emily has disturbing visions from her past and future, where Hagan conducts sacrificial ritual in the chapel. She passes out.

Act 3: 20 to 30 pages — With Midpoint change, Profound moments that give us new ways.

Rethink everything: Emily suspects Hagan of being the leader of the cult.

Emily wakes up in a warehouse full of props and manikins in costumes with their faces made of the latex masks.

New plan: While still influenced by Ayahuasca, Emily dances with a masked manikin of a Phantom, whom she believes is Hagan, trying to find out where her daughter is. He stages a sex scene, where he threatens Emily to never see her daughter if she refuses to oblige. She does.

Turning Point: All is lost/ Huge failure / Major shift: Hagan walks in.

Act 4: 25 pages — Test the change in this character! Prove New Ways!

Emily attacks the Phantom and pulls his mask off, revealing Walter, who claims of being Emily’s protector, insisting that she must stay away from the chapel and that he alone will save her child from a sacrifice. He ties her up to the bed and rushes away.

Climax/Ultimate expression of the conflict:

Emily manages to escape from the warehouse and sneak into the chapel, where she blends in with the Phantoms surrounding a pedestal with their next victim under a cape. (Hagan’s father – what’s left of him). Emily tries to save the victim and reveals herself. Lady Winslet orders Emily to choose her new victim between Hagan and a person on a pedestal, ostensibly her daughter. Emily hesitates. Impatient, Lady Winslet calls Emily a certain word which gives Emily a sudden revelation, and she shoots Lady Winslet, who manages to shoot at Hagan. Panic ensues, and the old chapel collapses dragging everyone beneath the floor into a dilapidated crypt, where Emily finds Hunter. The old ceiling gives in, filling the crypt with a debris.

Resolution

Emily visits Hagan at the hospital, where Lady Winslet’s lawyer gives Hagan a letter from his father stating that he was adopted, where Emily is names a heir to the estate. A nurse brings Hunter who runs to hug Hagan as he confesses his love to Emily, Emily has a vision from her childhood where instead of losing Hagan, they reunite with a kiss.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Subtext Plot

My vision is to create and produce award winning stories that make an unforgettable emotional impact on a worldwide audience.

What I learned from this assignment is that I can incorporate other subtext plots into the story.

1. Scheme and Investigation: Emily is convinced that someone within her past affiliation with a mysterious cult kidnapped her daughter and is preparing her to be sacrificed during their ritual on Halloween. She plunges into an investigation after she discovers her under hypnosis drawings and follows her own leads based on that.

2. Layering: I can see this structure work because Emily has a DID and acts as two different personalities, which is revealed at the end. One is being a mother of an 8 y.o. daughter, two is her non-exixting daughter.

3. Competitive Agendas: In a way this may work because Emily (protagonist) is hellbent on saving her daughter’s life, and Walter, although being under the surface antagonist, is killing heirs threatening his rights to the estate.

On surface: Walter is Emily’s cousin who seemingly tries to help her find her daughter

Under surface: Walter is vengeful for being rejected by Emily and wants to humiliate her publicly. He impersonates other characters and messes up her fragile mental state by misleading and provoking her to take reckless actions

[Nat Melvin]

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What I learned from this assignment is that this is another worthy tool to dive deeper into characters.

Protagonist: Emily Kingsley

Arc Beginning: Insecure, lost in her own beliefs

Arc Ending: Confident in her choices, go getter, bold

Internal Journey: From confused, easily manipulated closed up hermit to a strong willed heir of the estate

External Journey: from being in a confinement to complete freedom

Old Ways: Paranoid, submissive, hopeless, living in her past

New Ways: Trusting, open to a relationship, accepting love

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Intentional Lead Characters

My vision is to create and produce award winning stories that make an unforgettable emotional impact on a worldwide audience.

What I learned from this assignment is that it’s nice to proof relation of the characters to the concept

Title: BLOODHUNTER

Concept: An amnesiac survivor of a mysterious cult must relive her traumatic experience by following clues drawn under a hypnosis to save their next sacrificial victim, her supposedly missing child.

Character Structure: Dramatic Triangle

1. Character: Emily Kingsley, protagonist

Logline: Emily is the only female heiress left of a dyeing aristocratic family who believes that her non-existent half-blood daughter is kidnapped to be sacrificed by a mysterious cult

Unique: Emily suffers from a DID (Dissociative Identity Disorder) and is convinced that her younger eight years old self personality is her daughter (a girl Emily found in her own drawings)

2. Character: Walter Kingsley, antagonist

Logline: Walter is Emily’s crafty cousin who believes he is entitled to the estate

Unique: Walter is an eccentric, artistic, vengeful crossdresser rejected by Emily, who uses his deceitful skills to impersonate and eliminate potential heirs to family fortune who stand on his way to the inheritance

3. Character: Hagan Valentine, triangle character, Emily’s love interest

Logline: Hagan is the only son of a recently deceased owner of the estate born of a wedlock relationship with a maid who intends to prove his rights to the estate

Unique: Hagan is a half African American man who remains secretly in love with Emily

Additional note: All three characters grew up in the same estate, where Emily was supposed to marry Walter, a pure blood relative, but fell in love with Hagan, and she believes that they have a daughter

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Title, Concept & Character Structure

My vision is to create and produce award winning stories that make an unforgettable emotional impact on a worldwide audience.

What I learned from this assignment is that I am super excited to work on this project that has been put aside for some time.

Title: BLOODHUNTER

Concept: An amnesiac survivor of a mysterious cult must relive her traumatic experience following clues drawn under a hypnosis to save their next sacrificial victim, thought to be her missing child.

Character Structure: It’s a little difficult to decide at this point because this is a mystery thriller feature where the protagonist tries to puzzle out the antagonist whom she believes is her love interest, where in reality the real antagonist is revealed at the end when she finally figures out who he really is.

Choice 1: Protagonist vs Antagonist

Choice 2: Dramatic Triangle

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[Nat Melvin]

Natalie Melvin here from Hawaii with warmest aloha,

I’m excited to meet new folks and to mingle with my fellow talented scribes from the numerous genre classes, ProSeries, MSC & BingeWorthy TV, whom I respect and absolutely adore!

I write drama supernatural, mystery and sci-fi thrillers, which I’ve written, rewritten, elevated…, and continuously doing so for a numerous feature projects and TV shows, a few of which are currently in development with a notable folks from Hollywood via a partnership with my own production company.

What I’m looking for is discipline, accountability, feedback and elevation (that hellish word again) of my mystery thriller feature which was set aside due to its complexity and unforeseen circumstances.

Aside from writing, I’m a three times mother, three times grandma who owns a few successful businesses, each of which immensely contribute to pulling my hair, massive headaches, lack of time and fair exhaustion. Regardless, I’m super excited to get back on track and move my projects forward!

Happy creating to all!

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[Nat Melvin]

Natalie Melvin

I agree to the terms of this agreement:

As a member of Writing Incredible Movies, I agree to the following:

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3. I also understand that many stories and ideas are similar and/or have common themes and from time to time, two or more people can independently and simultaneously generate the same concept or movie idea.

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[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Outline With Intrigue

WIL: Things change as I go.

1. EXT. CAMPGROUNDS, CITY OF REFUGE, HAWAII – DAY – 1

Characters: SOLA, ASH, POLLY, STORYTELLER

Mystery/ Strange Behavior/ Intriguing World

Description: SOLA, panic stroke, flees from an ominous unseen force, followed by the bewildered gazes of her friends, POLLY, and ASH.

Open Loop: What caused ancient Hawaiian people to fall from the sky?

Mystery: Sola is the only one who sees ancient people falling

Empathy/Distress: Sola is terrified of something unseen

Payoff:

Irony:

Setup: Why does Sola see what no one else can see?

2. EXT. NEAR CAMPGROUNDS, CITY OF REFUGE – CONTINUED – 1

SOLA, ASH, POLLY

Conspiracy / Secret: Ash tells Sola that Uncle Paul is called to see Kahuna Uli, and she rushes to see him.

Open Loop: Uli and Paul have a secret

Mystery:

Empathy/Distress: Paul didn’t come to see Sola first.

Payoff:

Irony:

Setup: Uli and Paul hide something important from Sola

3. INT. ULI’S HALE, CITY OF REFUGE – DAY – 2.5

ULI, PAUL (APOLLO IN DISGUISE)

Secret/ Secret Identity: ULI warns PAUL about Sola’s mother’s gift and wants to keep it a secret from Sola

Open Loop: Why is this gift dangerous?

Mystery: What happened to Sola’s mother?

Empathy/Distress: Disappearance of Sola’s mother is kept secret from her

Payoff:

Irony:

Setup: Sola decides to find out about her lineage and her mother

4. INT. THRONE ROOM, PALACE, MT. OLYMPUS – FLASHBACK – DAY 1.5

APOLLO, TULA

Intriguing World/ Hidden agenda/ Imminent Threat: Apollo sees Tula stealing a Lightning Bolt’s power

Open Loop: Tula steals Zeus’ power to protect her people

Mystery: Who is Tula and why she is in captivity

Empathy/Distress: Tula feels threatened by Hera and Zeus

Payoff:

Irony:

Setup: Apollo saves Sola from Hera’s wrath. Zeus’ power hidden in Tula’s necklace gives Sola his power

5. INT. ULI’S HALE, CITY OF REFUGE – CONT’D – 6/8

ULI, PAUL

Conspiracy/ Hidden Agenda: Paul argues that he promised Sola’s mother to give Sola a necklace for protection. Uli insists on keeping it safe somewhere else for the time being.

Open Loop: What does the necklace do

Mystery: Protection from what?

Empathy/Distress: Obligation vs potential danger

Payoff: Uli reveals an ancient prophecy

Irony: The necklace meant to protect Hawaiian people gives Sola the distractive power of Zeus

Setup: Sola is a chosen one

6. EXT. NEAR ULI’S HALE, CITY OF REFUGE – DAY – 1

SOLA, POLLY

Wound/ Secret/ Conspiracy: Polly catches Sola eavesdropping on Uli’s and Paul’s conversation about her mother’s gift. She asks Polly for her help finding her mother’s necklace. She reluctantly agrees.

Open Loop: What happens when Sola finds the necklace

Mystery: Why did Paul never tell Sola about her mother

Empathy/Distress: Sola doesn’t know who and where her mother is

Payoff: The secret kept from Sola makes her want to find the necklace

Irony:

Setup:

7. INT. ULI’S HALE, CITY OF REFUGE – DAY – 1.5

ULI, PAUL, EARTH SPIRIT

Secret/ Imminent Threat: Uli summons Earth Spirit who reveals an ancient curse that coincides with Sola’s BD.

Open Loop: Sola is important

Mystery: what will curse do

Empathy/Distress: The curse is imminent

Payoff: The secret of Sola’s importance is revealed

Irony:

Setup: A-Storyline; The war is imminent

8. INT. PAUL’S TENT, CAMPGROUNDS, CITY OF REFUGE – DAY – 2

SOLA, POLLY

Hidden Layer/ Imminent Threat: The necklace zaps Sola with a bolt of lightning, making her disappear.

Open Loop: What makes Sola special

Mystery: What happens to Sola

Empathy/Distress: Sola’s motivation to find her mother

Payoff: Necklace gives Sola Zeus’ power

Irony:

Setup: C-Storyline; Sola’s newfound abilities

END OF ACT 1

Turning Point: Sola’s mother’s necklace activates Zeus’ power.

Act 2: (11.5)

9. INT. ULI’S HALE, CITY OF REFUGE – DAY – 2.5

ULI, PAUL, POLLY

Imminent Threat/ Suspicion: Uli and Paul discuss the ramifications of the curse. Polly informs about Sola’s disappearance.

Open Loop: What can Sola do with her newfound power

Mystery: What will happen to Gods

Empathy/Distress: potential loss of Sola’s life

Payoff: The secret about the curse is revealed

Irony: Sola unleashed the curse

Setup: A- Storyline; Main conflict between the Gods

10. INT. HERA’S PARLOR, PALACE, MT. OLYMPUS – DAY – 2.5

SOLA, HECATE, HERA

Conspiracy/ Deception/ Hidden Agenda/ Suspicion: Sola overhears HECATE and HERA plotting a coup against Zeus.

Open Loop: How will Sola get back to the real world

Mystery: Hecate’s agenda

Empathy/Distress: Sola may be caught/ trapped in the mythical world

Payoff:

Irony:

Setup: A-Story; Sola has opponents, Hecate & Hera

11. INT. ULI’S SHRINE, HAWAIKI ISLAND – DAY – 1 1/8

ULI, LONO

Secret/ Imminent Threat: Uli tells LONO about the prophecy, Paul, and his students, and asks Lono to get the Elders involved

Open Loop: Will Lono help Uli, Sola, and Paul

Mystery: What happens to Paul and his students

Empathy/Distress: Lono is reluctant to help

Payoff: Uli takes action to prevent the war

Irony: Lono is Sola’s father

Setup: Uli needs to find someone else to help Sola

12. EXT. CAMPGROUNDS, CITY OF REFUGE – DAY – 1

PAUL, ASH

Mystery/ Conspiracy/ Hidden Agenda: Imminent Threat: Paul asks Ash to keep students in the City of Refuge while he goes to awaken the Gods.

Open Loop: Will Paul succeed in warning the Gods

Mystery: how the curse will affect the Gods

Empathy/Distress: Paul and Ash are stressed out about the curse

Payoff: Paul wants to prepare the Olympians

Irony: Paul’s students (Greek demigods) seek refuge in the Hawaiian City of Refuge

Setup: B-storyline

13. INT. THRONE ROOM, PALACE, MT. OLYMPUS – DAY (FLASHBACK) – 1.5

SOLA, TULA, APOLLO, ANTEROS

Mystery/ Conspiracy/ Hidden Layer/ Imminent Threat/ Secret Identity: Sola witnesses Tula giving Anteros one of her twin baby girls

Open Loop: The twins/

Mystery: what happens to the twins

Empathy/Distress: Tula feels threatened

Payoff: Sola suspects that she has Tula’s necklace

Irony:

Setup: C- Storyline; Sola has twin

14. INT. ULI’S HALE, CITY OF REFUGE – DAY – 1.5

ULI, KAMA

Suspicion/ Uli and KAMA prepare to summon Sola back from the mythical realm. Kama steals Uli’s amulet for healing and protection.

Open Loop: Will Sola help to prevent the war between the Gods

Mystery: What will Sola do with the information she learned in Mt. Olympus

Empathy/Distress: Uli needs allies

Payoff: Uli has a plan to save Sola

Irony: Kama is not reliable

Setup: B-Storyline; Uli’s plan to prevent the war

15. INT. HERA’S PARLOR, PALACE, MT. OLYMPUS – DAY 2.5

HECATE, ULI, KAMA, SOLA, HERA

Conspiracy/ Hidden Agenda: Hecate spies on Uli, Kama, and Sola, and (decides she wants the girl). She says they’ll get the war.

Open Loop: What will Hera do

Mystery:

Empathy/Distress: Hecate learns about Sola’s power

Payoff:

Irony:

Setup: B-storyline; Hecate knows about the curse and Uli’s plan to prevent the war

END OF ACT 2

Turning Point: Hecate learns about the curse and Sola’s role in winning the war.

Act 3: (12 )

16. EXT. ULI’S SHRINE, HAWAIKI ISLAND – DAY – 2

ULI, LONO, KAMA

Hidden Agenda/ Secret: Uli asks Lono to advocate for protecting Sola and enlists Kama to bring her to Hawaiki Island.

Open Loop: What will Hawaiian Gods do

Mystery: Why Sola needs protection

Empathy/Distress: Lono doesn’t want to get involved

Payoff:

Irony:

Setup: A-storyline;

17. EXT. CAMPGROUNDS, CITY OF REFUGE – DAY – 1

SOLA, ASH, POLLY

Secret/ Suspicion: Sola looks for Uncle Paul. Ash tells her that Paul is getting ready to leave for LA. She tells Polly ab. Mt.Olympus.

Open Loop: Paul and the Olympians

Mystery: How will the Olympians react to the news about the curse

Empathy/Distress: Sola needs answers from Paul

Payoff:

Irony:

Setup: A-storyline; C-storyline

18. INT. PAUL’S TENT, CAMPGROUNDS, CITY OF REFUGE – DAY – 1

PAUL

Mystery/ Hidden Agenda/ Strange Behavior: Paul gathers the Olympian Gods’ artifacts and teleports to Mt. Olympus

Open Loop: Will Paul’s trip be a success

Mystery: What do the artifacts do

Empathy/Distress: Paul forgets to take the artifacts

Payoff:

Irony:

Setup: A-storyline

19. INT. HERA’S PARLOR, MT. OLYMPUS – DAY – 2.5

HECATE, HERA, ANTEROS

Hidden Agenda/ Deception/ Would/ Suspicion: Hecate tells Hera about a beautiful woman in Zeus’ Hall of Thrones. Hera leaves to face Zeus, while Hecate summons ANTEROS and orders him to bond with Sola and find out who she is.

Open Loop: Hera’s actions, Hecate’s new agenda

Mystery: Anteros

Empathy/Distress: Hera struggles with Zeus’ infidelity

Payoff: Hecate uses information about the curse to her advantage

Irony:

Setup: A-storyline, B-storyline

20. EXT. VILLAGE, HAWAIKI ISLAND – DAY – 2

LONO, KU

Conspiracy/ Hidden Agenda: Lono tells Ku Uli’s idea of bringing Sola to Hawaiki Island. Ku suggests Kama will do his job.

Open Loop: Ku’s agenda

Mystery: Relationship between Kama and Ku

Empathy/Distress: Kama is trouble

Payoff:

Irony:

Setup: B-storyline

21. EXT. CAMPGROUNDS, CITY OF REFUGE – DAY – 1

SOLA, POLLY, ANTEROS

Mystery/ Hidden Layer: Sola talks about a handsome guy she saw in Mt.Olympus and her strange powers

Open Loop: Sola’s power

Mystery: What happens in Mt. Olympus

Empathy/Distress: Sola’s inability to control her power

Payoff:

Irony:

Setup: Necklace has a destructive power

22. EXT. VILLAGE, HAWAIKI ISLAND – DAY – 2

KU, KAMA

Conspiracy/ Hidden Agenda: Ku calls Kama’s debt, curses him to turn into a Tiki Statue if he lies, and enlists him to bedazzle Sola and deliver her to the Land of the Dead. Kama steals Ku’s war club and shrinks it into his body tattoos.

Open Loop: Ku’s agenda

Mystery: What is Kama’s debt?

Empathy/Distress: Kama’s obligation to Uli vs his debt to Ku

Payoff:

Irony:

Setup: B-storyline

23. INT. THRONE ROOM, PALACE, MT. OLYMPUS – DAY – 1.5

HERA, ZEUS, APOLLO

Wound/ Imminent Threat: Hera accuses Zeus of infidelity. Apollo comes to life and brings in the news about the curse. Zeus sets to find the thief who stole his power.

Open Loop: what will Zeus do to the thief

Mystery: Who is the beautiful woman Zeus is in love with

Empathy/Distress: Hera’s wound

Payoff: Hecate’s plan to overthrow Zeus

Irony:

Setup: B-storyline

24. EXT. CAMPGROUNDS, CITY OF REFUGE – DAY – 2

ASH, POLLY, SOLA. ANTEROS

Ash, Polly, and Sola are relocating the camp. Sola talks about Mt. Olympus. Anteros introduces himself as Antony, Paul’s intern from the Art Museum in LA. Sola falls in love with Anteros.

Open Loop: Will Anteros fulfill Hecate’s order

Mystery: History of Anteros and Hecate

Empathy/Distress: Sola is in danger

Payoff:

Irony:

Setup: A-storyline; Hecate’s plan

END OF ACT 3:

Turning Point: Sola falls for Anteros

Act 4: (12)

25. EXT. VILLAGE, HAWAIKI ISLAND – DAY – 1

ULI, KANE

Suspicion: Uli asks KANE for support, but he relies on the majority opinion

Open Loop: Hawaiian Gods’ reaction to the news about the curse

Mystery: Will Uli succeed in convincing Hawaiian Gods to help

Empathy/Distress: No one believes in the curse

Payoff:

Irony:

Setup: A-storyline

26. INT. THRONE ROOM, PALACE, MT. OLYMPUS – DAY – 1.5

APOLLO, OLYMPIANS

Hidden Layer/ Imminent Threat/ Suspicion: Apollo discusses the curse and its ramifications with the Olympians, who are overwhelmed by fear. He pretends that their artifacts are safe.

Open Loop: What happens to the artifacts

Mystery: what is the power of artifacts

Empathy/Distress: Apollo has to lie about the artifacts

Payoff:

Irony:

Setup: A-storyline, B-storyline

27. EXT. CITY OF REFUGE – DAY – 1.5

SOLA, KAMA, ASH, ANTEROS

Wound/ Hidden Agenda/ Suspicion: Sola shares her suspicion that Tula may be her missing mother. Anteros and Kama suggest using her power and offer their help to look for Sola’s mother

Open Loop: will Kama and Anteros succeed

Mystery:

Empathy/Distress: Sola’s gullibility

Payoff:

Irony: Sola shares her thoughts with those who have an agenda against her wellbeing

Setup: C-storyline, B-storyline

28. INT. HERA’S PARLOR, MT. OLYMPUS – DAY – 2.5

HECATE, HERA

Conspiracy/ Hidden Agenda: Hecate attempts to convince Hera to ally with Goddesses against Patriarchy, but Hera strikes Hecate with magic trying to find out what she knows about the woman Zeus loves

Open Loop: Hera’s relationship with Hecate and Zeus; Hecate’s plan to overthrow Zeus

Mystery: What is Hecate’s plan

Empathy/Distress:

Payoff:

Irony:

Setup: B-storyline

29. INT. HALE MUA, HAWAIKI ISLAND – DAY – 2

KU, LONO, KANE, ELDERS, ULI

Deception? Hidden Agenda: Ku meets with the Elders and insists on taking control of Earth before the curse takes effect

Open Loop: Will the curse affect the Hawaiian Gods

Mystery: Who created the curse and why

Empathy/Distress: Uli is outnumbered

Payoff: Ku uses the information he learned from Lono to his advantage

Irony:

Setup: B-storyline

30. INT. THRONE ROOM, HADES’ PALACE, UNDERWORLD – 1.5

HECATE, PERSEPHONE, IRIS

Secret/ Deception/ Conspiracy/ Hidden Agenda: Hecate visits PERSEPHONE to convince her that Hera is dangerous to sway her to her side. She tells IRIS that her time is coming and that she would do anything to get her out, even if it involves using dark magic

Open Loop: Hecate’s relationship with Iris

Mystery: Who is Iris and how did she get to the Underworld

Empathy/Distress: Iris is disabled

Payoff: Hecate’s fight with Hera prompted her to look for allies

Irony:

Setup: B-storyline

31. INT. PAUL’S TENT, CAMPGROUNDS, CITY OF REFUGE – DAY – 2

KAMA, SOLA

Conspiracy/Deception/ Imminent Threat: Kama steals Apollo’s artifact and tries bedazzling Sola. Sola tries her necklace and gets imbued with Zeus’ power that banishes the Gods’ artifacts

Open Loop: What happens to Gods’ artifacts

Mystery: How Sola’s power affects herself and everybody else

Empathy/Distress: Sola is Kama’s target

Payoff: The necklace served its purpose

Irony: Made to protect, the necklace has a destructive force

Setup: A-storyline

END OF ACT 4

Turning Point: Sola banishes the Gods’ artifacts

Act 5: (5.5)

32. INT. THRONE ROOM, PALACE, MT. OLYMPUS – DAY – 1.5

APOLLO, OLYMPIANS

Imminent Threat: Apollo disappears, and the Olympians start losing their power and elope from Mt. Olympus

Open Loop: What Happens to Apollo and the Olympians

Mystery:

Empathy/Distress: Olympians’ loss of power will affect the order of Earth

Payoff:

Irony:

Setup: B-storyline

33. INT. ULI’S HALE, CITY OF REFUGE – DAY – 1.5

ULI, SOLA

Secret/ Hidden layer/ Imminent Threat/ Suspicion: Uli reveals to Sola her destiny and importance in preventing the war and saving the world from annihilation

Open Loop: is Sola cut out for this task

Mystery: What is the Hawaiian Gods’ plan

Empathy/Distress: Gods’ absence affects the order of Earth

Payoff: The prophecy is real

Irony: Sola has Zeus’ destructive power

Setup: A-storyline, B-storyline

34. INT. HERA’S PARLOR, MT. OLYMPUS – DAY – 1

HECATE, HERA, ANTEROS

Conspiracy/ Suspicion: Hera leaves Mt.Olympus to gather allies. Hecate wants Sola’s power and orders Anteros to bring Sola to Mt. Olympus

Open Loop: Hera’s agenda

Mystery: Who are Hera’s friends

Empathy/Distress: Hecate knows Anteros’ secret

Payoff: Hecate recognizes Zeus’ power in Sola

Irony:

Setup: B-storyline

35. INT. PAUL’S TENT, CAMPGROUND, CITY OF REFUGE – DAY – 1. 5

ASH, KAMA, SOLA, POLLY, ANTEROS

Mystery/ Hidden Agenda/ Conspiracy: Sola discusses ways to search for the Olympian Gods’ artifacts. Kama fails at his magic, and Anteros tries to charm Sola. She uses her powers and gets them swept away into a mysterious portal to a mythical world.

Open Loop: What happens to Sola and her companions

Mystery:

Empathy/Distress: Sola is a target in Gods’ game; the future of mankind depends on Sola

Payoff: Sola possesses Zeus’ power

Irony:

Setup: A, B, & C- storylines

END OF THE PILOT EPISODE

Cliffhanger: Sola uses her power and sweeps Kama and Anteros into a mythical world

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Scene Requirements

WIL: I did this assignment in my previous BWTV class. Just needed to input scenes with minor changes. Example:<b style=”background-color: var(–bb-content-background-color); font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit; color: var(–bb-body-text-color);”>

Scene 1:

Characters: SOLA, ASH, POLLY

Essence: ASH and POLLY notice SOLA racing by in distress

Start: Students of the Art class sit by the campfire listening to a Hawaiian storyteller

Challenging Situation: What she says starts turning into reality

Conflict: Sola’s magic opened a portal to a mythical world

Action: Sola, in distress, runs from an unseen otherworldly entity

Finish: Sola storms by her friends without stopping by

1. EXT. CAMPGROUNDS, CITY OF REFUGE, HAWAII – DAY

Characters: STORYTELLER, SOLA, POLLY, ASH

In the glow of the campfire’s flickering light, students from the Art class encircle a HAWAIIAN STORYTELLER whose mesmerizing voice weaves ancient tales. As she gains momentum, a subtle shift occurs manifesting the storyteller’s narratives into tangible existence.

SOLA flees from an ominous unseen force in panic, followed by the ancient Hawaiian figures falling from the sky and the bewildered gazes of her friends, POLLY, and ASH.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Beat Sheet

WIL: Things are finally taking some congruent, definitive shape.

A Storyline: Sola’s journey to unite the warring pantheons of gods to avert the annihilation of divine and mortal realms.

This storyline focuses on Sola’s growth, challenges, and ultimate quest to fulfill her destiny as the chosen orphan with the power to bridge the realms and restore balance.

B Storyline: Divine conflict, power struggles, and conspiracies among the gods.

This storyline explores the machinations and conspiracies within the divine realms

C Storyline: Sola’s journey of self-discovery, relationships, and lineage.

This storyline delves into Sola’s journey as she grapples with her identity, relationships, and the mystery of her lineage.

Show Concept:

In a bid to prevent the annihilation of divine and mortal realms, a Hawaiian orphan teen must embark on a perilous quest to forge alliances among warring pantheons of gods stricken by an ancient curse.

Inciting Incident: Sola’s inability to control her newfound power unleashes an ancient curse that affects Hawaiian gods’ ability to protect Earth

Teaser: (1)

EXT. CAMPGROUNDS, CITY OF REFUGE, HAWAII – DAY 1

SOLA, ASH, POLLY

ASH notices SOLA racing by in distress

Act 1: (8.5)

EXT. NEAR CAMPGROUNDS, CITY OF REFUGE – CONTINUED – 1

SOLA, ASH, POLLY

Ash tells Sola that Uncle Paul is called to see Kahuna Uli, and she leaves to see him.

INT. ULI’S HALE, CITY OF REFUGE – DAY – 2.5

ULI, PAUL

ULI warns PAUL about Sola’s mother’s gift and wants to keep it a secret from Sola

INT. THRONE ROOM, PALACE, MT. OLYMPUS – FLASHBACK – DAY – 1.5

APOLLO, TULA

Apollo sees Tula stealing a Lightning Bolt’s power

5. INT. ULI’S HALE, CITY OF REFUGE – CONT’D – 6/8

ULI, PAUL

Paul argues that he promised Sola’s mother to give Sola a necklace for protection. Uli insists on keeping it safe somewhere else for the time being.

6. EXT. NEAR ULI’S HALE, CITY OF REFUGE – DAY – 1

SOLA, POLLY

Polly catches Sola eavesdropping on Uli’s and Paul’s conversation about her mother’s gift. She asks Polly for her help finding her mother’s necklace. She reluctantly agrees.

INT. ULI’S HALE, CITY OF REFUGE – DAY – 1.5

ULI, PAUL, EARTH SPIRIT

Uli summons Earth Spirit who reveals an ancient curse that coincides with Sola’s BD.

8. INT. PAUL’S TENT, CAMPGROUNDS, CITY OF REFUGE – DAY – 2

SOLA, POLLY

The necklace zaps Sola with a bolt of lightning, making her disappear.

END OF ACT 1

Turning Point: Sola’s mother’s necklace activates Zeus’ power.

Act 2: (11.5)

9. INT. ULI’S HALE, CITY OF REFUGE – DAY – 2.5

ULI, PAUL, POLLY

Uli and Paul discuss the ramifications of the curse. Polly informs about Sola’s disappearance.

10. INT. HERA’S PARLOR, PALACE, MT. OLYMPUS – DAY – 2.5

SOLA, HECATE, HERA

Sola overhears HECATE and HERA plotting a coup against Zeus.

11. INT. ULI’S SHRINE, HAWAIKI ISLAND – DAY – 1 1/8

ULI, LONO

Uli tells LONO about the prophecy, Paul and his students, and asks him to get the Elders involved

12. EXT. CAMPGROUNDS, CITY OF REFUGE – DAY – 1

PAUL, ASH

Paul tells Ash to keep students in the City of Refuge while he goes to awaken the Gods.

13. INT. THRONE ROOM, PALACE, MT. OLYMPUS – DAY – 1.5

SOLA, TULA, APOLLO, ANTEROS

Sola witnesses Tula giving Anteros her baby girl.

14. INT. ULI’S HALE, CITY OF REFUGE – DAY – 1.5

ULI, KAMA

Uli and KAMA prepare to summon Sola back from the mythical realm. Kama steals Uli’s amulet for healing and protection.

15. INT. HERA’S PARLOR, PALACE, MT. OLYMPUS – DAY 2.5

HECATE, ULI, KAMA, SOLA, HERA

Hecate spies on Uli, Kama, and Sola, and (decides she wants the girl). She says they’ll get the war.

END OF ACT 2

Turning Point: Hecate learns about the curse and Sola’s role in winning the war.

Act 3: (12? )

16. EXT. ULI’S SHRINE, HAWAIKI ISLAND – DAY – 2

ULI, LONO, KAMA

Uli asks Lono to advocate for protecting Sola and enlists Kama to bring her to Hawaiki Island.

17. EXT. CAMPGROUNDS, CITY OF REFUGE – DAY – 1

SOLA, ASH, POLLY

Sola looks for Uncle Paul. Ash tells her that Paul is getting ready to leave for LA. She tells Polly ab. Mt.Olympus.

18. INT. PAUL’S TENT, CAMPGROUNDS, CITY OF REFUGE – DAY – 1

PAUL

Paul gathers the Olympian Gods’ artifacts and teleports to Mt. Olympus

19. INT. HERA’S PARLOR, MT. OLYMPUS – DAY – 2.5

HECATE, HERA, ANTEROS

Hecate tells Hera about a beautiful woman in Zeus’ Hall of Thrones. Hera leaves to face Zeus, while Hecate summons ANTEROS and orders him to bond with Sola and find out who she is.

20. EXT. VILLAGE, HAWAIKI ISLAND – DAY – 2

LONO, KU

Lono tells Ku Uli’s idea of bringing Sola to Hawaiki Island. Ku suggests Kama will do his job.

21. INT. HERA’S PARLOR, MT. OLYMPUS – DAY – 2.5

HECATE, HERA, ANTEROS

Hecate tells Hera about a beautiful woman in Zeus’ Throne Room, then summons ANTEROS to bond with Sola and find out who she is without knowing that Hera’s spy sees them

22. EXT. VILLAGE, HAWAIKI ISLAND – DAY – 2

KU, KAMA

Ku calls Kama’s debt, curses him to turn into a Tiki Statue if he lies, and enlists him to bedazzle Sola and deliver her to the Land of the Dead. Kama steals Ku’s war club and shrinks it into his body tattoos.

23. EXT. CAMPGROUNDS, CITY OF REFUGE – DAY – 1

SOLA, POLLY, ANTEROS

Sola talks about Mt.Olympus and her strange powers

24. INT. THRONE ROOM, PALACE, MT. OLYMPUS – DAY – 1.5

HERA, ZEUS, APOLLO

Hera accuses Zeus of infidelity. Apollo comes to life and brings in the news about the curse. Zeus sets to find the thief who stole his power.

25. EXT. CAMPGROUNDS, CITY OF REFUGE – DAY – 2

ASH, POLLY, SOLA. ANTEROS

Ash, Polly, and Sola are relocating the camp. Sola talks about Mt. Olympus. Anteros introduces himself as Antony, Paul’s intern from the Art Museum in LA. Sola falls in love with Anteros.

END OF ACT 3:

Turning Point: Sola falls for Anteros

Act 4: (12)

26. EXT. VILLAGE, HAWAIKI ISLAND – DAY – 1

ULI, KANE

Uli asks KANE for support, but he relies on the majority opinion

27. INT. THRONE ROOM, PALACE, MT. OLYMPUS – DAY – 1.5

APOLLO, OLYMPIANS

Apollo discusses the curse and its ramifications with the Olympians, overwhelmed by fear. He says, nothing to worry about, their artifacts are safe.

28. EXT. CITY OF REFUGE – DAY – 1.5

SOLA, KAMA, ASH, ANTEROS

Sola shares her suspicion that Tula may be her missing mother. Anteros and Kama suggest using her power to offer their help to look for Sola’s mother

29. INT. HERA’S PARLOR, MT. OLYMPUS – DAY – 2.5

HECATE, HERA

Hecate attempts to convince Hera to ally with Goddesses against Patriarchy, but Hera strikes Hecate with magic trying to find out where Tula is, threatening to use Sola as a bate.

30. INT. HALE MUA, HAWAIKI ISLAND – DAY – 2

Ku meets with the Elders and insists on taking control of Earth before the curse takes effect

31. INT. THRONE ROOM, HADES’ PALACE, UNDERWORLD – 1.5

HECATE, PERSEPHONE, IRIS

Hecate visits PERSEPHONE to convince her that Hera is dangerous and sway her to her side. She tells IRIS that her time is coming and that she would do anything to get her out, even if it involves dark magic

32. INT. PAUL’S TENT, CAMPGROUNDS, CITY OF REFUGE – DAY – 2

KAMA, SOLA, (ASH & POLLY?)

Kama steals Apollo’s artifact and tries bedazzling Sola. Sola tries her necklace and gets imbued with powers, that banish the Gods’ artifacts

END OF ACT 4

Turning Point: Sola banishes the Gods’ artifacts

Act 5: (5.5)

33. INT. THRONE ROOM, PALACE, MT. OLYMPUS – DAY – 1.5

APOLLO, OLYMPIANS

Apollo disappears, and the Olympians lose their power, then decide to evacuate Mt. Olympus

34. INT. ULI’S HALE, CITY OF REFUGE – DAY – 1.5

ULI, SOLA

Uli reveals to Sola her destiny and importance in preventing the war and saving the world from annihilation

35. INT. HERA’S PARLOR, MT. OLYMPUS – DAY – 1

HECATE, HERA

Hera leaves Mt.Olympus to gather allies. Hecate wants Sola’s power and confronts Anteros ordering him to bring Sola to Mt. Olympus

36. INT. PAUL’S TENT, CAMPGROUND, CITY OF REFUGE – DAY – 1. 5

ASH, KAMA, SOLA, POLLY, ANTEROS

Sola discusses ways to search for the Olympian Gods’ artifacts. Kama fails at his magic, Anteros tries to charm Sola. She uses her powers and gets them swept away into a mysterious portal to a mythical world.

END OF THE PILOT EPISODE

Cliffhanger: Sola uses her power and sweeps Kama and Anteros into a mythical world

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Open Loops and Mysteries

WIL: I had to rethink main Mystery 1 and Mystery 2. It makes more sense now

Mystery 1: Sola’s newfound power

A. Shocking Event: Sola’s inadvertent use of forbidden magic leads to the awakening of a powerful curse, shaking the divine realms and endangering both mortal and divine beings.

B. Secret: The true origin and extent of Sola’s newfound power remain shrouded in mystery, hinting at a deeper connection to her past and her missing mother.

C. Investigation: As Sola delves deeper into the mysteries surrounding her mother’s necklace and the ancient curse, she begins to uncover hidden truths about her lineage and the role she plays in the fate of both worlds.

Improve:

A. Enhance the shock factor of Sola’s use of forbidden magic by foreshadowing its consequences more effectively and amplifying its impact on the world around her.

B. Increase the intrigue surrounding Sola’s power by dropping more hints and clues about its true nature and significance, keeping the audience guessing and invested in uncovering the secrets of her past.

C. Strengthen Sola’s investigative journey by introducing more obstacles and challenges that force her to confront the mysteries of her heritage and the dangers lurking in the shadows.

Mystery 2: Sola’s quest to retrieve stolen artifacts, restore balance, and save both mortal and divine realms.

A. Cover-up: The theft of the Gods’ artifacts and the ensuing chaos is shrouded in secrecy, with various factions vying for control and concealing their true intentions.

B. Secret: The quest to retrieve the stolen artifacts and restore balance to the divine realms is fraught with hidden agendas, betrayals, and revelations, as Sola and her companions uncover the truth behind the conspiracy.

C. Reveals: As Sola delves deeper into her quest, she uncovers shocking revelations about the true nature of the Gods, their hidden agendas, and the role she must play in shaping the destiny of both mortal and divine realms.

Improve:

A. Heighten the sense of mystery surrounding the theft of the artifacts by introducing more layers of deception and intrigue among the Gods and other powerful beings.

B. Increase the complexity of Sola’s quest by introducing unexpected twists and turns that challenge her perceptions and force her to question the motives of those around her.

C. Amp up the stakes of Sola’s journey by revealing shocking truths about the Gods’ past actions and their impact on the present, driving her toward a climactic confrontation with the forces of darkness and chaos.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie Stacks Intrigue

WIL: Stacking intrigue added a few new layers of character depth.

Teaser:

Intrigue 1: Intriguing World: The mesmerizing voice hints at an ancient Hawaiian legend, shrouded in mystery and peril, drawing viewers into a world where destiny and danger intertwine.

Intrigue 2: Mystery: Why is Sola racing through the City of Refuge, and who or what is pursuing her?

Intrigue 3: Secret: The unseen force chasing Sola hints at hidden threats lurking in the shadows, adding suspense and intrigue to the mysterious pursuit.

Intrigue 4: Mystery: The disappearance of ancient Hawaiian figures hints at a deeper mystery surrounding the City of Refuge, leaving viewers curious about its significance and connection to Sola’s journey.

Turning Point: Sola’s frantic race through the City of Refuge, coupled with the enigmatic disappearance of the figures, sets the stage for an exhilarating adventure and propels the story into motion.

Act 1:

Intrigue 1: Secret Identity: Sola’s experiments with forbidden magic hint at her hidden identity and untapped potential, laying the groundwork for revelations about her true nature.

Intrigue 2: Conspiracy: The forbidden magic Sola delves into unveils hints of a larger conspiracy surrounding her missing mother and the secrets of her lineage, leaving viewers eager to uncover the truth.

Intrigue 3: Hidden Layer: The discovery of Sola’s mother’s necklace hints at a hidden layer of significance and power, teasing viewers with the mystery of its origin and connection to Sola’s destiny.

Intrigue 4: Hidden Agenda: What ulterior motives does Hecate have for sensing Sola’s growing power and conspiring against Zeus?

Turning Point: Hecate’s recognition of Sola’s growing power and her alliance with Hera foreshadow the brewing conflict among the Gods, signaling a shift in power dynamics and setting the stage for intrigue and betrayal.

Improvement: Strengthen the connection between Sola’s experiments with forbidden magic and the overarching conspiracy surrounding her lineage, enhancing the sense of mystery and urgency driving her quest for answers.

Act 2:

Intrigue 1: Deception: Ku’s manipulation of Kama to lure Sola into a trap hints at hidden agendas and betrayal within the ranks of the Gods, adding complexity to the unfolding conflict.

Intrigue 2: Hidden Layer: What secrets lie within the ancient curse triggered by Sola, and how will it affect the balance of power among the Gods?

Intrigue 3: Secret Identity: Sola’s inadvertent triggering of the ancient curse reveals hints of her hidden identity as the key to unlocking dormant powers and ancient prophecies, heightening the stakes of her journey.

Intrigue 4: Hidden Agenda: The awakening of dormant Gods and the chaos that ensues hint at hidden agendas at play, driving the Gods toward conflict and setting the stage for Sola’s pivotal role in restoring balance.

Turning Point: Sola’s unwitting activation of the ancient curse marks a point of no return, thrusting her into a world of chaos and danger, where her actions have far-reaching consequences for both mortal and divine realms.

Improvement: Increase the tension and stakes surrounding Sola’s discovery of her mother’s necklace, highlighting its significance in unlocking the ancient curse and driving the Gods toward conflict.

Act 3:

Intrigue 1: Wound: The spreading news of the curse sparks turmoil and uncertainty among the Gods, revealing deep wounds and divisions within their ranks.

Intrigue 2: Conspiracy: Hecate’s enlistment of Anteros to capture Sola reveals the extent of her machinations and the lengths she will go to maintain control, deepening the intrigue surrounding her plans.

Intrigue 3: Strange Behavior: What unusual behavior does Anteros exhibit as he seeks redemption by capturing Sola, and how will it impact their interactions?

Intrigue 4: Deception: Anteros’ disguise as Antony and his forbidden romance with Sola introduce layers of deception and betrayal, blurring the lines between ally and enemy, and complicating Sola’s alliances.

Intrigue 5: Hidden Relationships: Sola’s encounter with Anteros hints at hidden connections and unresolved tensions, adding depth to their burgeoning relationship and foreshadowing conflicts to come.

Turning Point: Sola’s forbidden romance with Anteros complicates her alliances and motivations, setting the stage for emotional turmoil and difficult choices as she grapples with her feelings and the consequences of her actions.

Improvement: Enhance the emotional stakes of Sola’s forbidden romance with Anteros, highlighting the conflict between her growing affection for him and the dangers it poses to her mission and the divine realms.

Act 4:

Intrigue 1: Accusation: Sola faces accusations of causing chaos with her use of forbidden magic, leading to doubts about her ability to save the world and causing conflicts among the Gods.

Intrigue 2: Betrayal: Ku’s betrayal and manipulation of Sola reveal the depth of his ambition and thirst for power, leading to a shocking betrayal that tests Sola’s resolve and forces her to confront her inner demons.

Intrigue 3: Hidden Agenda: Hecate and Zeus’ maneuvering behind the scenes unveils their hidden agendas and conflicting interests, setting the stage for a showdown between the Gods and the revelation of long-held secrets.

Intrigue 4: Mystery: Sola’s use of forbidden magic inadvertently banishes the Gods’ artifacts, triggering a chain of events with dire consequences and revealing the true extent of her power and the mysteries surrounding her destiny.

Turning Point: Sola’s unwitting use of forbidden magic sets off a cataclysmic chain of events that threatens to unravel the fabric of reality, forcing her to confront the consequences of her actions and make a fateful decision that will determine the fate of both mortal and divine realms.

Improvement: Intensify the emotional stakes of Sola’s betrayal by Ku, highlighting the personal and political ramifications of his actions on her journey and relationships with other characters.

Act 5:

Intrigue 1: Conspiracy: The disappearance of the Gods’ artifacts hints at a larger conspiracy at play, as Sola, Kama, and Anteros embark on a perilous quest to recover them and unravel the mystery behind their disappearance.

Intrigue 2: Conspiracy: Ku’s manipulation of ancient prophecies sets the stage for a clash of titans, as hidden agendas and alliances are revealed.

Intrigue 3: Hidden Relationships: Sola’s growing bond with her companions deepens as they face increasingly dangerous obstacles together, revealing hidden layers of loyalty and trust that strengthen their resolve to overcome adversity.

Intrigue 4: Secret Identity: Sola’s true identity as the key to restoring balance between the mortal and divine realms is finally revealed, as she confronts the assembly of Hawaiian Gods and embraces her destiny as the chosen one.

Turning Point: With the artifacts disappearing and the fate of both worlds hanging in the balance, Sola, Kama, and Anteros are swept into a mysterious portal to a mythical world, where they must confront their greatest challenges yet and unlock the secrets of their intertwined destinies.

Improvement: Heighten the sense of urgency and peril as Sola and her companions venture into the unknown, facing new dangers and revelations that push them to their limits and set the stage for future adventures and conflicts.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Layers and Reveals

WIL: Adding more layers and reveals make the story more intriguing

Surface: Teaser:

Layer: Ongoing conspiracies.

How the layer is revealed: The mesmerizing voice chanting the legend subtly hints at ancient conspiracies that still linger in the present, setting the stage for hidden agendas to unfold.

Surface: Sola experiments with forbidden magic to uncover her past.

Character Layer: Secret identity.

How the Layer is Revealed: As Sola delves into forbidden magic, hints of her hidden lineage and powerful ancestry begin to emerge, suggesting a secret identity beyond her orphan status.

Surface: Act 2:

Layer: A scheme to undermine.

How the layer is revealed: Hecate and Hera’s clandestine alliance against Zeus gradually becomes apparent as their manipulations behind the scenes sow discord and chaos among the Gods.

Surface: Hecate senses Sola’s growing power and sees an opportunity to manipulate the situation.

Plot Layer: Ongoing conspiracies.

How the Layer is Revealed: Through subtle conversations and clandestine meetings, viewers witness Hecate’s ongoing scheming and manipulation, hinting at a larger conspiracy to seize power and undermine the balance of the divine realms.

Surface: Act 3:

Layer: Deception.

How the layer is revealed: Anteros’ disguise as Antony and his hidden agenda to capture Sola on behalf of Hecate adds a layer of deception and intrigue to their forbidden romance subplot, leading to unexpected twists and betrayals.

Surface: Sola’s encounter with Antony sparks a forbidden romance.

Character Layer: Hidden relationships.

How the Layer is Revealed: Antony’s true identity as Anteros, banished and seeking redemption, is gradually unveiled as viewers learn about his complicated past and his connection to Sola, adding layers of intrigue to their budding romance.

Surface: Act 4:

Layer: Betrayal.

How the layer is revealed: As Sola grapples with her choice between embracing her destiny or retreating, the revelation of Ku’s betrayal and manipulation exposes the depth of deception and betrayal lurking within the Gods’ ranks.

Surface: Sola’s use of forbidden magic inadvertently banishes the Gods’ artifacts.

Situation Layer: A trap.

How the Layer is Revealed: Sola’s attempt to control her newfound power results in unintended consequences, leading to the banishment of the Gods’ artifacts and exposing her to unforeseen dangers, turning her actions into a trap with far-reaching implications for both mortals and Gods alike.

Surface: Act 5:

Layer: Major shift in meaning.

How the layer is revealed: The disappearance of the Gods’ artifacts and the unexpected portal to a mythical world signifies a major shift in the meaning of Sola’s quest, revealing deeper layers of the divine conspiracy and the true extent of the challenges ahead.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Character Storylines

WIL: I needed more details for the AI to come up closer to my ideas.

Character: SOLA, Protagonist

Beginning: Races through the City of Refuge, pursued by an unseen force, while ancient Hawaiian figures cascade from the sky, disappearing into the ground.

Turning Point: Blames herself for causing chaos, and resorts to experimenting with forbidden magic to fix it, which allows her to eavesdrop on Uli’s conversation with Uncle Paul (Apollo in disguise), where she learns about her missing mother’s necklace.

Midpoint: Sola steals the necklace and unlocks hidden secrets, delving into a world of mystery and danger. She inadvertently triggers an ancient curse, awakening the dormant Gods and setting chaos in motion, attracting unwelcome the attention of both, Greek and Hawaiian Gods

Turning Point 2: Sola learns of her destiny to save the world from chaos, confronting her doubts and fears.

Major Conflict: Wields dual-world-affecting power stolen from Zeus, easily becoming a coveted prize for those seeking to tip the scales of divine power in their favor.

Dilemma: whether to accept her role as the peacekeeper and embrace her destiny or retreat from the dangerous path laid out before her

Ending: Sola confronts the assembly of Gods, determined to restore balance and save both mortal and divine realms.

My version of the structure

Teaser:

Beginning: A mesmerizing voice chants an ancient Hawaiian legend, setting the stage for a tale of destiny and peril.

Turning Point: Sola races through the City of Refuge, pursued by an unseen force, while ancient Hawaiian figures cascade from the sky, disappearing into the ground.

Act 1:

Beginning:

Sola’s curiosity leads her to experiment with forbidden magic, seeking answers about her past and her missing mother.

Uli meets with Paul to inform him about the prophecy involving Sola.

Midpoint:

With the help of forbidden magic, Sola learns about her mother’s necklace.

Turning Point: Hecate feels Sola’s presence and learns about the prophecy. She decides to use the situation to her advantage and schemes with Hera to overthrow Zeus.

Act 2:

Beginning:

Sola unlocks hidden secrets within her missing mother’s necklace, delving into a world of mystery and danger.

Uli enlists Kama to bring Sola to Hawaiki Island for protection against power seekers.

Ku overhears Uli discussing with Kama an ancient prophecy and Sola’s pivotal role as a peacekeeper.

Zeus discovers his lightning bolt missing and confronts Hera, accusing her of scheming against his reign.

Turning Point/Midpoint: Sola inadvertently triggers an ancient curse, awakening the dormant Gods and setting chaos in motion.

Hecate sows discord among the Greek Gods, and seeks to extract Zeus’ power from the thief of his Lighting Bolt.

Turning Point: Ku recruits Kama to lure Sola into the Land of the Dead.

Act 3:

Beginning:

News of the curse causes turmoil among the Gods, threatening the balance of power in the divine realms.

Ku gathers an assembly of the Elders, trying to sway them toward the war with the Greek Gods.

Sola learns of her destiny to save the world from chaos, confronting her doubts and fears.

Midpoint: Hecate learns about Sola’s power and enlists Anteros, cursed and banished, who seeks redemption against Zeus, to bring Sola, the thief, to Mt. Olympus.

Kama tries Ku’s magic on Sola, but fails, grappling with conflicting loyalties and uncertain alliances.

Turning Point: Sola meets Antony (Anteros in disguise) and immediately falls in love with him.

Act 4:

Beginning:

Sola faces a choice: embrace her destiny and risk the safety of her world or retreat and leave her fate to uncertainty.

She decides to learn to control her newly found power, practicing on Kama

Midpoint: Hecate tries to decide whether to risk exposure to her plans or retreat and lose her chance at power.

Zeus seeks to rally the Olympian Gods, while Hecate makes a clandestine deal with Iris in the Underworld.

Antony hints at his knowledge of Sola’s mother’s whereabouts, instigating Sola to use forbidden magic to get there.

Sola uses her new power and accidentally banishes Gods’ artifacts.

Turning Point: Sola realizes the magnitude of her mistake and her role and prepares to embark on a perilous quest to find the artifacts.

Act 5:

Beginning:

Sola confronts the assembly of the Hawaiian Gods, determined to restore balance and save both mortal and divine realms.

Midpoint: Ku, hungry for power, manipulates ancient prophecies to further his agenda.

Lock In: As the Gods’ artifacts vanish one by one, Sola, Kama, and Anteros, her new companions, prepare for a perilous quest, only to be swept into a mysterious portal to a mythical world, where the true extent of their challenges awaits.

ChatGPT’s <b style=”background-color: var(–bb-content-background-color); font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit; color: var(–bb-body-text-color);”>Enhanced Pilot Structure:

Teaser:

Beginning: A mesmerizing voice chants an ancient Hawaiian legend, setting the stage for a tale of destiny and peril.

Turning Point: Sola races through the City of Refuge, pursued by an unseen force, while ancient Hawaiian figures cascade from the sky, disappearing into the ground.

Act 1:

Beginning: Sola, driven by curiosity, experiments with forbidden magic to uncover secrets about her past and her missing mother.

Midpoint: With the aid of forbidden magic, Sola discovers her mother’s necklace, setting her on a path of discovery and danger.

Turning Point: Hecate senses Sola’s growing power and sees an opportunity to manipulate the situation to her advantage, joining forces with Hera to overthrow Zeus.

Act 2:

Beginning: Sola delves deeper into the mysteries surrounding her mother’s necklace, unlocking hidden secrets and attracting the attention of powerful allies and enemies.

Midpoint: Sola inadvertently triggers an ancient curse, awakening dormant Gods and throwing the divine realms into chaos.

Turning Point: Ku, driven by ambition, enlists Kama to lure Sola into a trap, setting the stage for betrayal and conflict.

Act 3:

Beginning: News of the curse spreads among the Gods, sparking turmoil and uncertainty in the divine realms.

Midpoint: Hecate, recognizing Sola’s potential threat, enlists Anteros, a banished God seeking redemption, to capture Sola and bring her to Mt. Olympus.

Turning Point: Sola’s encounter with Antony (Anteros in disguise) sparks a forbidden romance, complicating her alliances and motivations.

Act 4:

Beginning: Sola faces a pivotal choice: embrace her destiny and risk everything or retreat into obscurity and safety.

Midpoint: As Sola struggles with her newfound power, Hecate and Zeus maneuver behind the scenes, each with their own agendas.

Turning Point: Sola’s use of forbidden magic inadvertently banishes the Gods’ artifacts, setting off a chain of events with dire consequences.

Act 5:

Beginning: Sola confronts the assembly of Hawaiian Gods, determined to restore balance and save both mortal and divine realms.

Midpoint: Ku, hungry for power, manipulates ancient prophecies to further his own ambitions, setting the stage for a clash of titans.

Lock In: With the artifacts disappearing, Sola, Kama, and Anteros embark on a perilous quest, only to be swept into a mysterious portal to a mythical world, where their true challenges await.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Pilot Structure

WIL: doing assignments elevated the story and improved the Basic Series Info (Lesson 1), as follows:

Intriguing Concept: In a bid to prevent the annihilation of divine and mortal realms, a Hawaiian orphan teen embarks on a perilous quest to find stolen ancient artifacts and forge alliances among warring pantheons stricken by a malevolent curse

World: A mythical realm where ancient gods from Hawaiian, Greek, Egyptian, and other diverse mythologies vie for supremacy, plunging both divine and mortal realms into perilous chaos

Main mystery: Sola’s quest to retrieve stolen artifacts.

Impossible Goal: Uniting warring pantheons of gods

Main Conflict: External forces seeking to exploit Sola’s burgeoning power

Second Mystery: Discerning Sola’s true allies and foes.

Season 1 Arc: From unwittingly unleashing an ancient curse to seeking out ancient artifacts, ultimately leading to a fragile peace between Greek and Hawaiian gods.

Protagonist Internal Journey: Evolving from self-doubt to self-discovery and ultimately embracing her role as the Chosen One.

NEW PILOT STRUCTURE:

Teaser:

Essence: A mesmerizing voice chants an ancient Hawaiian legend, setting the stage for a tale of destiny and peril.

Turning Point: Sola races through the forest, pursued by an unseen force, while ancient Hawaiian figures cascade from the sky, disappearing into the ground.

Act 1:

Essence: Sola’s curiosity leads her to experiment with forbidden magic, unaware of the consequences.

Turning Point: Ku overhears Uli discussing an ancient prophecy and Sola’s pivotal role as a peacekeeper, and plots a new plan, sparking intrigue and uncertainty.

Act 2:

Essence: Sola unlocks hidden secrets within her mother’s necklace, delving into a world of mystery and danger.

Turning Point/Midpoint: Sola inadvertently triggers an ancient curse, awakening the dormant Gods and setting chaos in motion.

Act 3:

Essence: News of the curse causes turmoil among the Gods, threatening the balance of power in the divine realms.

Turning Point: Hecate conspires with Hera and sends Anteros to capture Sola, while Ku and Kama grapple with conflicting loyalties and uncertain alliances.

Act 4:

Essence: Sola learns of her destiny to save the world from chaos, confronting her doubts and fears.

Turning Point: Zeus seeks to rally the Olympian Gods, while Hecate makes a clandestine deal with Iris in the Underworld.

Act 5:

Essence: Sola confronts the Gods, determined to restore balance and save both mortal and divine realms.

Lock In: As the Gods’ artifacts vanish, Sola and her companions prepare for a perilous quest, only to be swept into a mysterious portal to a mythical world, where the true extent of their challenges awaits.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Intrigue Patterns

WIL: Each and every assignment brings something new, deep, and intriguing to the characters, storyline or the plot. I rewrote my entire seasons and had to change concept (logline sentence) I worked on in this assignment, and I’m finally comfortable with the latest version, as such:

Logline: When the mythical gods face imminent loss of power, a Hawaiian teen must recover stolen artifacts and unite feuding pantheons to avert the annihilation of divine and mortal realms.

[Nat Melvin]

Posting here, as the main thread doesn’t allow me to post. :0(

Natalie’s Episode Descriptions

WIL: I had to open new Chat GPT, as my regular one got overwhelmed with prompt information. I told Chat GPT to regenerate its responses, and ultimately like both versions.

Episode 1: Awakening

Sola grapples with newfound powers as Ku learns of her potential. Tasked with uniting gods, Sola faces conflicting allegiances, setting the stage for divine conflict. Hecate discovers Sola’s existence, plotting ominous plans with Anteros.

Episode 2: The Messenger

Kama navigates conflicting orders, and Sola faces the choice to embrace or reject her abilities. The true extent of Ku’s plans surfaces, leading to a moral crossroads. Hecate manipulates Hera, sparking tensions and setting the stage for divine confrontations.

Episode 3: Divine Machinations

Sola forms an uneasy alliance with Kama, intensifying the rivalry between gods. Uliuli reveals the stakes, forcing Sola into a fateful choice. Hera uncovers Zeus’ infidelity, forming unexpected alliances, while Hecate conspires with Iris, setting dark plans in motion.

Episode 4: Veil of Deceit

Sola delves into mythology, uncovering hidden truths. Hera and Hecate target Sola, shattering trust. Sola taps into her strength, revealing Zeus’ stolen power and a mystery involving twin sisters. Antony’s true identity as Anteros surfaces, threatening Sola’s plans.

Episode 5: Whispers of Fate

Echoes of a forgotten prophecy hint at Sola’s pivotal role. She seeks insights into her destiny, facing Ku’s intensified efforts. Sola’s journey uncovers a divine artifact and deepens the web of divine conspiracies. Hecate exploits discord among gods, setting ominous plans.

Episode 6: Threads of Destiny

Sola unravels fate, (USES FORBIDDEN MAGIC) transforming gods’ artifacts into Kama’s tattoos. A journey to reverse the magic unfolds. Ku teams up with Pele, intensifying chaos. Hecate exploits Olympian discord, setting the stage for a celestial battle and Hera’s sinister plans.

Episode 7: Divine Discord

Sola grapples with dark magic’s allure. Iris manipulates events, deepening the mortal-divine divide. Sola discovers a common enemy, unifying pantheons. Hecate seizes the opportunity to lure Sola into Mt. Olympus with Anteros, triggering a celestial discord.

Episode 8: Battles Beyond

Sola confronts trust issues and faces the prophecy’s implications. Iris schemes to swap places with Sola. Antony reveals Iris’ curse, and Hecate’s dark forces amass, threatening both pantheons. A cosmic convergence unfolds, risking reality’s unraveling.

Episode 9: Eclipsed Allegiances

War erupts, endangering mortals. Sola races to prevent catastrophic consequences. Hera amplifies the curse, and Iris confronts a mysterious force draining her magic. A celestial eclipse signals a turning point, setting the stage for divine fury.

Episode 10: Bound by Destiny

Sola negotiates peace, facing authority challenges. Iris seizes power, altering balance. Anteros confronts Hecate, and a cosmic convergence threatens realms. The battle unfolds, and a new destiny emerges, hinting at ultimate sacrifices.

Episode 11: The Final Stand

Anteros faces echoes of his past as Sola rallies allies for a final confrontation. Ku unleashes an ancient force, and the war erupts, with divine and mortal realms at stake. Sola discovers a prophecy, and Anteros makes a sacrificial choice, setting the stage for divine reckoning.

Episode 12: Harmony Reclaimed

Sola makes the ultimate sacrifice, confronting divine consequences. Ku reveals a cataclysmic weapon. The City of Refuge becomes a battleground, demigods unite, and Tula resurfaces. Peace is reinstated, but Hera’s powerful friends from other mythologies set the stage for new divine conflicts.

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REJENERATE:

Episode 1: Awakening

Sola discovers her divine powers, attracting the attention of both Greek and Hawaiian gods, while Kama struggles with conflicting loyalties.

Episode 2: The Messenger

Kama grapples with Ku’s plans for Sola as divine tensions escalate, while Sola delves into the complexities of her newfound abilities and alliances.

Episode 3: Divine Machinations

Sola forms an uneasy alliance with Kama as gods plot against each other, while Hera and Hecate manipulate events to their advantage.

Episode 4: Veil of Deceit

Sola uncovers hidden truths amidst divine schemes, confronting betrayal and unlocking the mysteries of her lineage.

Episode 5: Whispers of Fate

Prophecies resurface, hinting at Sola’s pivotal role in averting catastrophe, while alliances shift and the stakes escalate.

Episode 6: Threads of Destiny

Sola’s power transforms artifacts as gods intensify their efforts, setting the stage for a celestial showdown.

Episode 7: Divine Discord

Sola faces the allure of dark magic as gods clash and alliances fracture, while Hecate schemes to exploit the chaos.

Episode 8: Battles Beyond

Sola confronts trust and loyalty amidst escalating conflicts, while Iris plots to seize power at any cost.

Episode 9: Eclipsed Allegiances

War erupts as Sola races to prevent catastrophe, facing betrayals and sacrifices in a climactic showdown.

Episode 10: Bound by Destiny

Sola negotiates peace amidst escalating chaos, while Iris makes a desperate bid for power with cataclysmic consequences.

Episode 11: The Final Stand

Sola defies fate in a final confrontation with gods, facing ancient forces and discovering the true purpose of the curse.

Episode 12: Harmony Reclaimed

Sola makes the ultimate sacrifice to restore balance, as divine clashes reach a cosmic scale and a new era dawns with lingering intrigue.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Episode List – Rough Draft

I can’t find the way to post the lesson here, so this option, as it seems available. Sorry, Margaret.

WIL: after a month and a half of struggling with waivering the events, putting things in a congruent order, I can finally breathe with this somewhat decent first draft of my episodes.

Episode 1: Awakening

Teaser: Sola awakens Zeus’ dormant energy and discovers her newfound powers

Main Character journey: Sola grapples with the reality of her divine abilities.

Reaction: Kama is tasked by Uliuli with protecting Sola but has conflicting allegiances.

Twist: Ku learns about Sola, intrigued by the potential of controlling Zeus’ power within her.

Major Challenge/Conflict: Sola grapples with the weight of her newfound powers and the responsibility thrust upon her.

Midpoint: Sola’s initial attempts to control her newfound abilities lead to unintended consequences, attracting the attention of both Olympian and Hawaiian gods.

Cliffhanger: Hecate discovers Sola’s existence, setting ominous plans with Anteros.

Episode 2: The Messenger

Teaser: Kama receives conflicting orders from Uliuli and Ku, both involving Sola.

Main Character journey: Sola grapples with the choice between embracing or rejecting her newfound abilities.

Major Challenge/Conflict: Sola grapples with realization of her role in the divine conflict.

Midpoint: Kama discovers the true extent of Ku’s plans for Sola, leading to a moral crossroads.

Action/Reaction: In his search for a thief of his power, Zeus questions the Olympians

Twist: Hecate manipulates Hera to further her agenda against Zeus.

Action/Reaction: Hera, fueled by anger, hatches a plan to take over Mt. Olympus.

Action/Reaction: Uliuli, sensing the rising tensions, warns Kama of an impending betrayal that could affect the outcome of the divine conflict.

Action/Reaction: Kama agrees to bring Sola to the Hawaiki Island for protection

Cliffhanger: Ku perceives Sola’s emergence as a threat and decides to interfere with her fate.

Episode 3: Divine Machinations

Teaser: Hecate visits the Underworld to conspire with Iris in exchange for a gift of dark magic.

Main Character journey: Sola forms an uneasy alliance with Kama.

Major Challenge/Conflict: Sola’s presence in Hawaiki Island intensifies the rivalry between gods, leading to divine confrontations.

Midpoint: Sola meets Kama, a mysterious protector, discovering a prophesy linking her fate with the impending war.

Action/Reaction: Zeus’ attempt of uniting Olympians to gather their strength against the curse fails

Twist: Hera uncovers Zeus’ infidelity and forms an unexpected alliance of her own

Action/Reaction: Uliuli reveals true stakes of the ancient curse, forcing Sola to make a fateful choice.

Cliffhanger: Sola and Kama elope to the City of Refuge to prepare demigods for the curse (or war?)

Episode 4: Veil of Deceit

Teaser: Sola’s nightmare produces a mysterious figure with a hidden connection to Sola

Action/ Reaction: Antony spreads the news about the prophesy, making cryptic warnings about the curse, tempting promises, casting doubts on his allegiance.

Main Character journey: Sola delves into Hawaiian and Greek mythology, uncovering hidden truths and secret alliances, as she searches for a solution to the curse

Major Challenge/Conflict: Hera and Hecate pull strings to target Sola for their own secret purpose

Action/ Reaction: Kama’s revelation of Ku’s plans and allegiance shatters Sola’s trust

Midpoint: Sola steals a necklace which manifests Zeus’ power, endangering Sola’s health.

Twist: Sola taps into her inner strength and unleashes a surge of divine energy.

Action/ Reaction: Sola teleports to Mt. Olympus where she learns about a woman who stole Zeus’ power and her twin baby girls, whose fate remains a mystery

Twist: Antony reveals his true identity as Anteros, the God of Unrequited Love, sent by Hecate to ensure Sola’s compliance.

Cliffhanger: Sola is torn between love and duty as Antony’s betrayal threatens to unravel her plans.

EPISODE 5: “Whispers of Fate”

Teaser: The echoes of a forgotten prophecy resurface, hinting at Sola’s pivotal role in uniting the pantheons and averting a cataclysmic war.

Main Character journey: Sola delves into the forgotten prophecies, seeking insights into her destiny and the key to preventing divine catastrophe.

Major Challenge/Conflict: Ku intensifies his efforts for world domination, forming alliance of supporters

Action/Reaction: The demigods reveal a plan to counteract the curse, involving Olympian Gods’ artifacts.

Midpoint: Sola’s journey leads her to ancient archives and mystical realms, uncovering a divine artifact holding the key to Sola’s destiny.

Action/ Reaction: Zeus grapples with the division of the Olympians, seeking alliance with Poseidon and Hades

Action/ Reaction: Sola seeks guidance from Uliuli, uncovering the tangled web of divine conspiracies

Action/ Reaction: Anteros explains his complicated allegiance, torn between duty and personal goals Action/Reaction: Sola confronts Anteros, leading to a heated confrontation that unveils deeper truths.

Cliffhanger: Hecate, observing the chaos, sets in motion a plan to exploit the discord among the gods.

EPISODE 6: “Threads of Destiny”

Teaser: Hecate meets with Iris asking her for help with the Fates in hope to set a trap for Sola

Main Character journey: Sola unravels the threads of fate, discovering interconnected destinies between the mythical and mortal realms.

Major Challenge/Conflict: Sola’s unexpected burst of power transforms Gods’ artifacts into Kama’s body tattoos that strip off the Olympian Gods of their power

Midpoint: Sola & Kama embarks on a journey to find a sorcerer to reverse her magic and release the artifacts in hopes to shift the balance of power.

Action/ Reaction: Hera locates Tula and sets to use her as a bait to trap Sola

Action/ Reaction: Anteros returns to the City of Refuge to reveal identity of Sola’s mother and her fate

Action/Reaction: Hecate exploits discord among the Olympian gods to sway Goddesses to her side in a fight to overthrow Patriarchy.

Action/ Reaction: Zeus discovers Sola’s existence, and sets to ignite a confrontation with Ku

Cliffhanger: Ku, angered by Sola’s interference, teams up with Pele and intensifies efforts to unleash chaos upon the mortal realm.

EPISODE 7: “Divine Discord”

Teaser: Iris begins tapping into dark magic, seeking to manipulate the unfolding events.

Main Character Journey: Sola encounters the dangers of forbidden magic, but uncovering Iris’ involvement remains a secret.

Major Challenge/Conflict: Sola grapples with the allure and risks of dark magic, testing her resolve.

Midpoint: Sola faces an internal struggle as the consequences of her choices manifest.

Action/Reaction: Iris exploits Sola’s vulnerability, deepening the divide between mortal and divine realms.

Twist: Sola discovers a common enemy unifying the pantheons against Ku and Zeus.

Cliffhanger: Hecate, sensing the destabilization, decides to seize the opportunity to further her own agenda to lure Sola into Mt. Olympus (where her power can be stripped off) with Anteros’ help.

Action/Reaction: Anteros follows Sola’s steps while grappling with conflicting loyalties.

Cliffhanger: A celestial battle erupts in the City of Refuge, threatening to endanger the mortal realm.

EPISODE 8: “Battles Beyond”

Teaser: Based on Sola’s strained relationships with Kama and Anteros, she decides to resolve problems on her own.

Main Character journey: Sola confronts the complexities of trust and loyalty among her friends and makes rush decisions

Major Challenge/Conflict: Sola confronts the truth of the prophecy and its implications for her future and the fate of humanity.

Midpoint: Mislead by Iris, Sola faces a crisis that requires her to make difficult choices about alliances.

Action/ Reaction: Iris, weakened by her connection to Sola, faces a new threat that endangers her existence.

Twist: Iris fails to harness dark magic and concocts a scheme to swap places with Sola at all cost

Action/Reaction: Hecate reveals her true intentions for the cursed power and forges alliances with dark forces to overthrow Zeus.

Twist: Antony, secretly working against Hecate and pursuing his own agenda, reveals origins of Iris’ curse

Action/ Reaction: Hecate’s dark forces amass, threatening both pantheons

Action/ Reaction: Zeus’ last attempt to preserve balance fails

Cliffhanger: Sola uncovers a prophecy hinting at her ultimate sacrifice to save both realms

EPISODE 9: “Eclipsed Allegiances”

Teaser: War erupts between the pantheons, endangering mortals.

Main Character journey: Sola races to prevent catastrophic consequences while grappling with moral dilemmas and betrayals.

Major Challenge/Conflict: Hera schemes to amplify the curse’s destructive potential.

Action/ Reaction: Kama takes risks to protect Sola, defying Ku’s orders.

Action/ Reaction: Seeking to sever her connection to Sola, Iris confronts a mysterious force draining her magic (health?)

Midpoint: Sola finds her mother, Tula, and uncovers a plan to reverse the curse but faces sacrifices.

Action/Reaction: Ku’s influence grows, intensifying the divine war.

Action/Reaction: Sola confronts the gods directly, challenging their authority and demanding answers to their manipulation.

Action/ reaction: Hecate, aware of the impending threat, forges an alliance with unlikely allies to preserve her own interests.

Cliffhanger: A celestial eclipse signifies a turning point in the fate of gods and mortals.

Cliffhanger: In a climactic showdown with the gods, Sola’s defiance sparks divine fury, unleashing cataclysmic consequences that threaten to consume the realms in chaos.

EPISODE 10: “Bound by Destiny”

Teaser: The gods intensify their maneuvers, plunging the mortal realm into chaos.

Action/ Reaction: Sola confronts both pantheons to negotiate peace, while her authority being questioned

Main Character journey: Sola embraces her role in uniting the pantheons, seeking to prevent the catastrophe, and rallies allies to counter Ku’s growing influence in his pursuit of world domination

Major Challenge/Conflict: Iris makes a last-ditch effort to seize power, and succeeds in taking Sola’s place

Midpoint:

Action/Reaction: Anteros, torn between loyalty and personal redemption, confronts Hecate threatening to reveal her source of resisting the curse (NOTE: Iris’s energy)

Action/ Reaction: Iris’ battle with Ku leads to a devastating revelation about the true cost of the war.

Action/ Reaction: Antony crosses paths with Iris, revealing his involvement in her destiny and fate

Action/ Reaction: Hecate confronts Iris, and in a crossfire of dark magic, manages to drain Iris’ last energy

Twist: As Sola returns, Zeus regains some of his power, altering balance

Cliffhanger: As the battle unfolds, a cosmic convergence threatens to unravel the fabric of reality

EPISODE 11: “The Final Stand”

Teaser: Anteros faces echoes of his past, revisiting moments that shaped his cursed existence.

Action/ Reaction: Sola rallies her allies for a final confrontation with the gods, determined to defy fate and forge a new destiny.

Main Character journey: Sola navigates the aftermath of Iris’ actions and divine clashes.

Major Challenge/Conflict: Ku unleashes an ancient force to dominate the realms.

Action/ Reaction: The war between pantheons erupts, with mortal and divine realms at stake.

Action/Reaction: Uliuli reveals the true purpose of the curse

Midpoint: Sola discovers a prophecy entwining her fate with the gods and sacrifice she must make

Action/Reaction: Anteros makes a sacrificial choice, setting the stage for a divine reckoning

EPISODE 12: “Harmony Reclaimed”

Teaser: Sola confronts the divine consequences of her journey.

Main Character journey: Sola must make the ultimate sacrifice to restore balance.

Action/ Reaction: Ku reveals a cataclysmic divine weapon of destruction

Major Challenge/Conflict: The clash between gods escalates to a cosmic scale.

Midpoint: The City of Refuge becomes the battleground for divine forces. The demigods unite their power to counteract the curse’s lingering effects.

Action/Reaction: Hecate’s final gambit risks catastrophic consequences.

Twist: Kama, grappling with his own redemption, faces an unexpected threat that endangers his newfound purpose.

Action/ Reaction: Sola unleashes forbidden power of Zeus at Kama releasing Gods’ artifacts from his body tattoos, and passes away

Action/ Reaction: Tula, a deity long thought dead, resurfaces, altering the course of the war.

Action/ Reaction: As the curse vanishes, the Gods gain their power, reinstating peace and order on Earth

Action/ reaction: Tula, aka Laka, revives Sola and Iris, turning them into the rain and the rainbow

Action/Reaction: Anteros asks Tula for forgiveness and choses to remain on Earth

Action/ reaction: Uliuli, Lono, Ku, and other Hawaiian Gods return to their divine realm in peace

Action/ Reaction: Zeus gains his power, reinstates order in Mt. Olympus and proclaims celebration for all

Cliffhanger: Hera, surrounded by powerful Gods and Deities from other world-known mythological realms, grins suspiciously, setting the stage for a new divine era, or another season to come. :0)

[Nat Melvin]

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Natalie’s Intriguing Concept and World

WIL: Finessing the concept into a more concise format.

Concept (25 words or less): A Hawaiian orphan triggers an ancient curse, compelling her to reconcile warring Greek and Hawaiian gods to avert the impending doom threatening humanity.

A. Engaging and highly proactive hero or group…

B. …up against a major conflict…

C. …goes on unique transformational journey…

D. …Into an intriguing world.

A. A proactive Hawaiian orphan discovers forbidden magic, thrust into a role to unite warring Greek and Hawaiian gods.

B. The major conflict revolves around an ancient curse triggered by the protagonist, endangering humanity’s existence.

C. Of reconciling deities, the heroine undergoes a transformative journey to embrace her destiny and newfound powers.

D. The intriguing world seamlessly blends Hawaiian and Greek mythology, with the City of Refuge as the epicenter and the clash of gods threatening both realms.

HOOK 1: What if a Hawaiian orphan is forced to unite the warring Greek and Hawaiian gods?

HOOK 2: How does an insecure teenager navigate a mythical world of gods in conflict, preventing an imminent doom threatening humanity?

Intriguing World (paragraph): Embark on a captivating journey where the City of Refuge, a nexus of Hawaiian and Greek mythology, intertwines mortal and divine realms. Amid mystical landscapes, the clash of deities unfolds, blurring lines between earth and divinity. In this unique world, cultures collide, destinies entwine, and humanity’s fate hangs in the balance.

2. Discovering the intrigue of this world:

Unique Sub-World: A mythical fusion of Hawaiian and Greek legends

Previously unexplored: An epic power struggle between Hawaiian and Greek gods

The unknown: Uncharted divine realms that hold secrets waiting to be unraveled

The unseen: An orphan teen journeys alongside mythical beings

Unheard of Dangers: Confront mythical creatures, mysterious magic, profound destiny, and deadly intrigue

Reason to explore it: Embark on a self-discovery journey in a captivating mythical realm

STOLEN SENSES WORLD: A self-discovery journey to save humanity in a captivating mythical realm of Hawaiian and Greek legends confronting mythical creatures through navigating deadly intrigue.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Elevating Character Profiles

WIL: I love digging deep into characters.

1. SOLA:

ROLE IN THE SHOW: Chosen orphan bridging mortal and divine realms.

UNIQUE PURPOSE: Wields Zeus’ stolen power, pivotal to uniting gods.

EXPERTISE: Sharp thinker navigating ethical dilemmas, truth-seeker.

INTRIGUE: Key to a prophecy, with a heritage of ancient power.

MORAL ISSUE: Balancing loyalty, wielding immense, dual-world-affecting power.

UNPREDICTABLE: Defies divine protocols, forms unexpected alliances, sacrifices for the greater good.

EMPATHETIC: Relatable journey of self-discovery, resilience, and identity search.

HIDDEN AGENDA: Unearthing powers, finding her mother, discovering lineage.

COMPETITION: Navigates conflicting interests of gods and her team.

CONSPIRACIES: Uncovers ancient prophecies and hidden truths.

SECRETS: In love with Antony; Possesses Zeus’ stolen power.

DECEPTION: Overstates confidence, hides insecurities behind rebellious facade.

WOUND: Orphaned, unaware of true heritage.

SECRET IDENTITY: Daughter of Hawaiian Gods.

HOPE: Fulfill destiny, save mortal and divine realms.

FEAR: Failing in her savior role, driving extreme measures.

WANT/NEED: Want: Normal teen life / Need: Embrace Chosen One role.

BASE NEGATIVE EMOTION: Insecurity and self-doubt.

PUBLIC MASK: Overconfidence, false optimism, secrecy, rebellion.

WEAKNESSES: Analytical thinking, commitment to truth.

TRIGGERS: Mistrust, skepticism, fabrication, manipulation, deceit.

COPING MECHANISM: Escapism through Forbidden Magic, hiding struggles behind nonchalance and humor.

2. IRIS

ROLE: Crippled seeker of dark magic for revenge and power.

UNIQUE PURPOSE: Reclaim lost senses, seek vengeance, and seize power.

EXPERTISE: Proficient in dark magic, manipulates based on human weaknesses.

INTRIGUE: Harbors dark power, aims to strip Sola’s magical strength.

MORAL ISSUE: Struggles with revenge jeopardizing the balance of realms.

UNPREDICTABLE: Shows vulnerability, challenging her malevolent image.

EMPATHETIC: Unveils pain behind actions, generating viewer empathy.

HIDDEN AGENDA: Seeks to heal herself, exploits dark magic.

COMPETITION: Believes stripping Sola will restore her strength.

CONSPIRACIES: Allies with Hecate and engages in dark schemes.

SECRETS: Possesses dark magic, plans to exploit for healing.

DECEPTION: Feigns seeking healing while plotting immense power seizure.

WOUND: Lost senses at birth, unaware of Hera’s involvement.

SECRET IDENTITY: Sola’s older twin sister with birth defects.

HOPE: Regain lost senses, restore physical prowess.

FEAR: Condemnation to a life of disability and powerlessness.

WANT/NEED: Want – Retribution; Need – Prove strength and worth.

BASE NEGATIVE EMOTION: Resentment towards perceived injustices.

PUBLIC MASK: Appears fragile, concealing true intentions and dark magic.

WEAKNESSES: Physical disability and emotional wounds.

TRIGGERS: Lost senses reminders, disability, perceived injustices.

COPING MECHANISM: regain control, channel resentment and bitterness into a quest for power

3. KAMA

ROLE IN THE SHOW: Crucial guide with complexities, balancing humor and danger.

UNIQUE PURPOSE: Versatile trickster deity aiding Sola’s divine journey.

EXPERTISE: Navigates realms, steals from gods, hides secrets in tattoos.

INTRIGUE: Cursed trickster facing dilemmas and wooden transformation for lies.

MORAL ISSUE: Balancing loyalty, contractual debts, and duty to Sola.

UNPREDICTABLE: Audacious, resourceful, unpredictable with unique understanding of the world.

EMPATHETIC: Endearing mix of pluckiness and vulnerability, struggles with limitations.

HIDDEN AGENDA: Seeks freedom by aiding Sola and balancing loyalties.

COMPETITION: Navigates power dynamics, rivalries among gods, keeps true intentions concealed.

CONSPIRACIES: Manipulates situations for Sola using trickery and thievery.

SECRETS: Conceals vital items in body tattoos for critical moments.

DECEPTION: Carefree trickster masks pride, honor, and responsibilities.

WOUND: Burdened by past mistakes, consequences, obligations, and desire for freedom.

SECRET IDENTITY: Minor Hawaiian deity with audacious schemes.

HOPE: Fulfills duty, finds purpose, proves worth, and redeems himself.

FEAR: Failing in mission, unable to pave the way to freedom.

WANT/NEED: Want: to prove worth and redeem/ Need: balance and confrontation

BASE NEGATIVE EMOTION: Guilt for failure and past mistakes.

PUBLIC MASK: Confidence, resourcefulness, ease, and sense of humor.

WEAKNESSES: Overconfidence, occasional recklessness, precarious situations.

TRIGGERS: Confrontations with past, self-reflection about role in Sola’s journey.

COPING MECHANISM: Humor and wit in tense situations, relies on resourcefulness.

4. ANTONY (ANTEROS)

ROLE IN THE SHOW: Sola’s complex companion, Anteros, an Olympian God, straddling ally and adversary.

UNIQUE PURPOSE: Accompanies Sola, contributing to divine unity.

EXPERTISE: Navigates mortal and divine worlds with skill and insight.

INTRIGUE: Conceals divine identity, torn between loyalty and personal goals.

MORAL ISSUE: Balances conflicting loyalties to Sola, gods, and personal desires.

UNPREDICTABLE: Reveals vulnerability, defying expectations of a stoic god.

EMPATHETIC: Struggles with personal conflicts, past decisions, and debt to Hecate.

HIDDEN AGENDA: Break Zeus’ curse and regain power by winning Tula’s love.

COMPETITION: Competes with gods, managing duties and personal attachments.

CONSPIRACIES: Entangled in divine plots, past bargains, and secrets.

SECRETS: Traded Tula’s twin to Hades in exchange for aid against Zeus.

DECEPTION: Masks vulnerability, uses charm strategically.

WOUND: Longs for authentic love, burdened by divine expectations and conflicts.

SECRET IDENTITY: Anteros, Olympian God of unrequited love.

HOPE: Find genuine love and acceptance, transcending divine constraints.

FEAR: Failing in divine duties and losing redemption.

WANT/NEED: Want: Regain ability for authentic love / Need: Balance desires with responsibility.

BASE NEGATIVE EMOTION: Conflicting inner state, guilt, and regret.

PUBLIC MASK: Conceals vulnerability, projects determination, resilience, and commitment.

WEAKNESSES: Vulnerable to emotions, prone to impulsive decisions.

TRIGGERS: Intense emotional moments and others’ pain.

COPING MECHANISM: Stoicism, isolation, fierce determination.

5. HECATE

ROLE IN THE SHOW: Manipulative sorceress, orchestrates divine conflicts, weaves intricate plots.

UNIQUE PURPOSE: Pursues power and chaos, aims to reshape divine realms.

EXPERTISE: Master of dark magic, cunning strategist, adept manipulator.

INTRIGUE: Conceals motives, enigmatic alliances, drives major plot twists.

MORAL ISSUE: Balances pursuit of power with consequences for mortals and gods.

UNPREDICTABLE: Shrouded in mystery, alternates between ally and adversary.

EMPATHETIC: Hidden struggles, occasional displays of fake empathy for pawns.

HIDDEN AGENDA: Ascend to supreme power, rewrite divine hierarchy.

COMPETITION: Rivalry with gods, seeks dominance in divine conflicts.

CONSPIRACIES: Orchestrates secret plans, influences key events.

SECRETS: Dark past, obscured motives, alliances with unforeseen entities.

DECEPTION: Master manipulator, uses illusions and cunning strategies.

WOUND: Past betrayals, quest for ultimate power, inner conflicts.

SECRET IDENTITY: Enigmatic sorceress with deep ties to ancient forces.

HOPE: Attain supreme power, reshape divine realms according to her vision.

FEAR: Failure in grand schemes, losing control, betrayal.

WANT/NEED: Want: Supreme power, chaos, and dominance / Need: To overcome past wounds and insecurities.

BASE NEGATIVE EMOTION: Deep-seated ambition, resentment, and thirst for control.

PUBLIC MASK: Projects authority, enigma, concealing vulnerabilities and fears.

WEAKNESSES: Vulnerable to emotional attachments, blinded by ambition.

TRIGGERS: Threats to her plans, betrayal, reminders of past betrayals.

COPING MECHANISM: Maintains an illusion of control, schemes for power.

[Nat Melvin]

Natalie’s Intriguing Layers

WIL: I enjoyed doing this lesson thoroughly. It took time, but I discovered major reveals and characters’ history that enhances the storyline.

1. Plot Layers for Season 1:

Major Scheme Revealed:

Hidden beneath divine politics, an enigmatic organization orchestrates a grand scheme to disrupt the delicate balance between the Hawaiian and Greek realms, pushing Sola and her allies to the forefront of a cosmic conflict.

Mystery Revealed:

A cryptic ancient tablet, long overlooked, surfaces, unraveling a hidden lineage connecting Sola, Iris, and others. The revelation of Tula’s twins’ disappearance sets the stage for a complex interplay of destinies.

Thought the Story Was One Thing, But It Is Another:

The presumed origins of the curse are upended when an ancient artifact resurfaces, challenging the characters’ accepted narrative and forcing them to reevaluate their understanding of good and evil.

Major Shift in Meaning:

Sola’s destructive powers, once perceived as a curse, undergo a transformative revelation during her quest, revealing that they hold the potential to reshape the fabric of reality itself. Sola’s choice between the Greek and Hawaiian pantheons poised to tip in a cosmic clash between the forces of good and evil.. The narrative takes an unexpected turn as the true significance of her abilities is unveiled.

Hidden History:

Ku’s stoic facade crumbles as his intricate and tumultuous history interacting with Hecate is revealed. Their shared past becomes a focal point, adding layers to their present conflicts and reshaping the outcome and dynamics among the characters.

Hidden Plan:

A covert plan to manipulate the clash between the Hawaiian and Greek realms is exposed, unveiling the intricate machinations of a mysterious figure (Iris). The characters grapple with the revelation of this hidden plan that seeks to exploit the chaos for personal gain.

2. Character Layers for Season 1:

Secret Identity:

Iris, a former acolyte secretly seeks revenge against the gods. Iris’ motives might be rooted in a history of mistreatment, turning her into a formidable adversary seeking to disrupt the established order.

Intrigue Layers:

Antony’s loyalty to Sola is brought into question as his enigmatic history with Iris surfaces, casting doubt on his true motivations. His guilt, originated from a mysterious past, becomes a source of intrigue, leaving characters and viewers uncertain about his allegiances.

Hidden Relationships and Conspiracies:

Hecate’s secret alliance with a secret deity is unveiled, exposing a shared history and a conspiracy that transcends the divine realm. Their collaboration holds the key to shaping the future of both worlds.

Hidden Character History:

Ash’s involvement with forbidden magic is revealed, exposing a history of experimentation and a connection to a curse. This revelation adds layers to Ash’s character, fueling internal and external conflicts.

Hidden Agenda:

Polly, initially a supportive friend, conceals a hidden agenda tied to her familial lineage (daughter of a mystical character). Her true motivations become a driving force, creating a rift between her and the other characters as her hidden agenda unfolds.

Wound:

Ku grapples with the emotional scars of a tragic loss from centuries past, influencing his actions and decisions. The revelation of this ancient wound becomes a turning point in Ku’s character arc, impacting his relationships and choices.

3. Possible Sequence of Reveals:

PLOT SURFACE:

The City of Refuge on the Kona Coast of the Big Island of Hawaii served as a sanctuary, offering a place of forgiveness and redemption for those who had violated kapu (sacred laws) in ancient times. Today, it connects present-day visitors with the sacred history of Hawaii, its rich traditions and governance of ancient Hawaiian society, and spiritual and social aspects of Hawaiian culture, but not only that.

Layer 1: Mystery: A mysterious occurrence in the City of Refuge coincides with Sola’s attempt to use forbidden magic. What is the connection and the following ramification of this event?

Layer 2: Intrigue: An ancient curse unleashes on the day of Sola’s 16th birthday. Who set the curse and why does it revolve around Sola, feared by her Uncle, his students, and everyone in the City of Refuge?

Layer 3: Secret: A mystical wooden necklace stolen by Sola opens a portal to Mount Olympus, where she sees a beautiful woman in Zeus’ captivity giving her newborn twin girls to Apollo and Anteros, the Olympian Gods. One of them wears the same necklace. Who is the woman, what happened to the girls, and how did this necklace reappear in the City of Refuge?

Layer 4: Hidden Agenda: Uli, a revered Hawaiian woman, forewarns the elders about the impending curse and insists on transferring Sola to the sacred grounds for protection. Her desire stirs Ku’s unspoken wound. He enlists his debtor, Kama, to ensnare Sola in a place of no escape. What is his agenda?

Layer 5: Conspiracy: Hecate exploits the curse’s threat to manipulate Hera, urging her to conspire against Zeus. Using Goddess Iris as a messenger, Hecate delivers tainted scrolls to weaken Zeus. Why?

Layer 6: Surprise: Kama’s enchantment goes awry, turning him into a magical magnet that drains Olympian Gods’ artifacts, rendering them vulnerable to the curse’s effects and impeding their power to protect Earth from evil.

Layer 7: Future Consequences: Sola’s burgeoning magical powers emerge as humanity’s last hope for restoring balance and peace on Earth – only if she embraces the daunting challenge before her.

CHARACTER SURFACE:

IRIS is a crippled teenage girl who came to find a powerful healer thought to reside in the City of Refuge.

Layer 1: Intrigue: Iris, thought to be Zeus’ child, died in Anteros’ arms. Terrified of Zeus’ wrath, he made a deal of servitude with Hecate, who revived Iris in the Underworld but kept her there as a future bargaining chip with Zeus.

Layer 2: Hidden Agenda: Iris needs to be healed so she can live in the human world.

Layer 3: Hidden character History: In the Underworld, Iris watched and learned Hecate’s dark magic with the purpose of healing herself

Layer 4: Secret Identity: Iris is Sola’s crippled twin sister

Layer 5: Wound: Iris befriended Persephone, who learned from Hera that Iris lost her senses and health at birth under Hera’s spell.

Layer 6: Competition: Iris believes she can restore her health and strength if she strips Sola of her magic power.

[Nat Melvin]

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Natalie’s Show Empathy / Distress

WIL: This tool makes structuring an episode so easy. It helps to create an episodes centered around one main character. Doing this assignment helped me to discover new revelations, and new plot twists for my show. Invaluable tool for structuring a great episode with depth of emotions.

Assignment 1: GOT S1.E7.

Main Character: Ned Stark

Distress:

A. Undeserved misfortune. Unwillingly becoming Hand of the King.

B. External Character conflicts. King Robert’s absence; Learning the truth about Jeoffrey’s father

C. Plot intruding on life: Faces tough decision to call Tywin Lannister to answer for Mountain’s crimes while the King is hunting; nominated to take over the kingdom after Robert’s death; Jeoffrey becoming the King

D. Moral dilemmas: Stand against Tywin Lannister; Tell Cersei that he knows the truth about Jeoffrey’s father

E. Forced decisions they’d never make. Tell Cersei to leave the kingdom; Rule the Kingdom

Empathy:

A. Put them in distress. Make decisions under the pressure and duress

B. Make them relatable. Overcome fear and stand for honesty and integrity

C. Universal experiences that are emotional. Love for his children; Carry out his responsibilities with dignity

Assignment 2: My Show

1. SOLA:

Distress:

A. Undeserved misfortune. An orphan raised by a strict Grandmother who lives in an overly protected environment. She learns that her mother was kidnapped and wants to find her, but she’s not trusted with family affairs. The revelation of her divine destiny, burdening her with unforeseen responsibilities. Emphasize Sola’s isolation and the weight of her responsibilities. Highlight her yearning for normalcy and family connections.

B. External Character conflicts. Can’t leave the Refuge Island (bonded by a location spell?). Sola wants to be someone and strives to prove it. For that, she ventures into learning forbidden magic and spells and tries it on her own, which results in disasters. She is not allowed to attend LA Art School she was admitted to with Apollo’s help, and finally, she clashes with external forces seeking to exploit her powers.

C. Plot intruding on life. The curse-driven plot intrudes on her ordinary life, disrupting her sense of normalcy. Sola pilfered a necklace infused with Zeus’ power, setting in motion the foretold curse that entangles the Hawaiian and Greek Gods realms in their struggle for dominion over the human world. Endowed with Zeus’ power, Sola now stands as the prime target in Hecate’s scheme to dismantle Zeus’ patriarchy.

D. Moral dilemmas. Moral dilemmas arise as she navigates between loyalty to family and saving the world. The possession of Zeus’ power jeopardizes the equilibrium within the realm of the Hawaiian Gods.

E. Forced decisions they’d never make. Making decisions that challenge her moral compass and endanger loved ones. Sola decides to leave home to protect people from her newly acquired Zeus’ destructive power she can’t control

Empathy:

A. Put them in distress. Place her in distress by unveiling the weight of her destiny, evoking empathy for her internal struggles.

B. Make them relatable. Make her relatable by highlighting her initial reluctance, self-doubt, and the desire for a normal life. Showcase Sola’s desire to prove herself and be someone, a universal theme of self-discovery in adolescence. Illustrate the conflict between her protective environment and her quest for independence.

C. Universal experiences that are emotional. Explore universal experiences of self-discovery, identity crises, and the pressure of balancing conflicting responsibilities. Depict Sola’s journey as a search for identity and belonging, universal themes that resonate with the audience. Explore her internal struggles with power, responsibility, and the sacrifices she makes for the greater good.

2. POLLY

Distress:

A. Struggles with societal judgment due to her unconventional appearance.

B. External conflicts with those who misunderstand or mistreat her based on stereotypes.

C. The plot intrudes as Polly’s academic pursuits clash with her mystical involvement.

D. Moral dilemmas arise when she must choose between personal desires and the greater good.

E. Forced into decisions that challenge her beliefs and push her out of her comfort zone.

Empathy:

A. Put her in distress by highlighting the societal pressures and biases she faces.

B. Make her relatable through her quest for acceptance and friendship.

C. Explore universal experiences of overcoming societal expectations and finding one’s identity.

3. KAMA

Distress:

A. Faces repercussions for past trickery, putting his life in danger.

B. External conflicts with powerful deities seeking to exploit or punish him.

C. The plot intrudes as Kama’s carefree existence collides with the impending divine war.

D. Moral dilemmas arise as he grapples with loyalties to gods and mortals.

E. Forced decisions that force him to confront the consequences of his past actions.

Empathy:

A. Put him in distress by showcasing the dangers he faces due to his mischievous past.

B. Make him relatable through his desire for freedom and the burden of past mistakes.

C. Explore universal experiences of seeking redemption and the consequences of a mischievous past.

4. ASCLEPIUS (ASH)

Distress:

A. Confronts the challenge of healing Sola’s curse-related afflictions.

B. External conflicts with adversaries seeking to prevent his assistance.

C. The plot intrudes on his medical studies as mystical forces disrupt his life.

D. Moral dilemmas arise as he grapples with the ethics of divine intervention.

E. Forced into decisions that challenge his commitment to the Hippocratic Oath.

Empathy:

A. Put him in distress by depicting the challenges of balancing his divine responsibilities with mortal concerns.

B. Make him relatable through his pursuit of knowledge and a desire to help others.

C. Explore universal experiences of ethical dilemmas in the medical field and the challenges of balancing duty and personal aspirations.

5. ANTEROS (TONY)

Distress:

A. Cursed by Zeus, he faces unrequited love and eternal separation from Laka.

B. External conflicts with divine forces aiming to manipulate him against Sola.

C. The plot intrudes on his earthly existence as the divine feud disrupts his life.

D. Moral dilemmas arise as he navigates conflicting loyalties to gods and his personal desires.

E. Forced into decisions that challenge his loyalty and commitment to breaking the curse.

Empathy:

A. Put him in distress by highlighting the pain of unrequited love and separation.

B. Make him relatable through his internal conflict and longing for resolution.

C. Explore universal experiences of enduring the consequences of forbidden love and the pursuit of redemption.

6. HECATE

Distress:

A. Faces opposition from both divine pantheons due to her dual allegiance.

B. External conflicts with gods suspicious of her true intentions.

C. The plot intrudes as she struggles to maintain balance between the pantheons.

D. Moral dilemmas arise as she juggles loyalty to both Hera and the quest for power.

E. Forced into decisions that challenge her allegiances and invoke divine retribution.

Empathy:

A. Put her in distress by showcasing the difficulties of being caught between two powerful forces.

B. Make her relatable through her internal struggles and the pursuit of her goals.

C. Explore universal experiences of navigating conflicting allegiances and the quest for personal power.

7. APOLLO (PAUL)

Distress:

A. Conceals the truth about Sola’s heritage, causing internal conflict.

B. External conflicts with fellow gods skeptical of his alliance with Sola.

C. The plot intrudes on his human life as divine matters disrupt his routine.

D. Moral dilemmas arise as he grapples with the consequences of past actions.

E. Forced into decisions that challenge his loyalty to family and divine duty.

Empathy:

A. Put him in distress by unveiling the weight of the secrets he carries.

B. Make him relatable through his internal conflict and desire to protect Sola.

C. Explore universal experiences of grappling with family loyalty and the consequences of past choices.

8. ULI:

Distress:

A. Struggles with the impending threat to her family and the divine realms.

B. External conflicts with gods who question her allegiance to both pantheons.

C. The plot intrudes on her peaceful existence as the curse threatens her family.

D. Moral dilemmas arise as she navigates the delicate balance between divine duty and family.

E. Forced into decisions that challenge her wisdom and connection to the Hawaiian gods.

Empathy:

A. Put her in distress by highlighting the threat to her family and the impending war.

B. Make her relatable through her role as a protective grandmother and guardian of secrets.

C. Explore universal experiences of family bonds and the challenges of balancing duty with personal connections.

[Nat Melvin]

Hi, Brent. You’re right. He did the table on the vid, which, admittedly, I failed to create by not knowing the how to prompt.

I don’t even have Lesson 6 & 7 posted (to be unlocked later) on my “Your Screenwriting Classes” thread. idk. I made it up to Example of Queen’s Gambit and it won’t let me go any further than that.

Notably, Hal’s first intro recording vid shows 12 lessons for module 1.

[Nat Melvin]

Hi, Helen,

Thanks for posting. It seems missing a PROMPT. I have lessons from the regular BWTV course I took awhile ago, but not the AI PROMPTS for this lesson.

I tried to create a table via Chat GPT, and struggled, until I straight forward asked AI to give me a prompt to create a table prompt. Bizarre, right? It did suggest a prompr, but, it seems like an extra effort to write, so, I gave up.

So… I wonder, if you have a current lesson with the AI prompt, or used the old one? :0)

[Nat Melvin]

BWTV-AI Module 1 – Lesson 4: Layers of Character Intrigue

cheryl croasmun October 13, 2023

When the TV Show LOST was at its peak, tens of thousands of people were discussing, debating, and desperately trying to figure out what was happening for the characters of that show. It may have been the first time that happened at that level, but it wasn’t the last time…

…because it can happen for your show.

Here’s the great news: Right now, you are 100% in control of how intriguing you make your characters. All you need to do is to focus on the exact parts that will cause people to obsess about the people in your show.

OBJECTIVE: To build the kind of intrigue into your lead characters that will cause viewers to be obsessed about this show. Not just to have our characters be interesting, but to cause obsession about them!

We’re not looking for the standard details of a character profile here. We will flesh that out later. Right now, we are looking for the specific things that make your lead characters intriguing.

INTRIGUE: Secrets beneath the surface: Clandestine moves, covert activity, underhanded dealing, schemes, lies, secrets, cover ups.

To have a show that is intriguing, that means that there is clandestine stuff beneath the surface. To do that have things going on under the surface. Today, we’re going to explore what is beneath the surface for your characters.

BRING ON THE INTRIGUING LAYERS

This time, our focus is on character layers, but not just any layers; intriguing layers. To do that, we’ll consider 7 possible forms of hidden layers that each character might have. They are:

Hidden agendasCompetitionConspiracySecretsDeceptionWoundSecret Identity

I’ll explain these below, but there is something important you need to understand about them that might be a bit surprising.

DOES INTRIGUE HAVE TO BE BAD?

Think about the last time you were part of a surprise birthday party. You and a group planned the party, then lured the recipient into a room, telling them it was for a completely different purpose. Hopefully, it surprised them and created a great birthday for that person.

But notice that it also included a Hidden Agenda, a Conspiracy, Secrets, and Deception.

My point? A character doesn’t have to be a bad person to have these layers. Good people often have these layers. Take a look at some of these:

Your Friday night poker game where players bluff each other.In the school PTA meeting where parents fight each other to protect their own children.When siblings undermine each other…just to gain favor or position.In a police interrogation room where an innocent person is accused of crimes.In church where people struggle with living good lives, even though they have sinned.

In each of these situations, layers of intrigue show up in good people’s lives.

In fact, if your lead characters don’t have these kind of layers, they might be better being background characters. You need your main characters to have all kinds of depth that you can work with through season after season. So please don’t try to make them sweet and innocent unless it covers up other layers beneath the surface.

IMPORTANT: Don’t let your desire to have likable characters prevent you from having GREAT characters with multiple layers that can be discovered over time.

<hr>EXAMPLE: WESTWORLD

The oldest “Host” in Westworld is Dolores Abernathy. The Hollywood Reporter said that Dolores is “the quintessential farm girl of the frontier West — who is about to discover that her entire idyllic existence is an elaborately constructed lie.”

We know that Dolores is a robot who often plays the victim. But it is worse than that. Dolores has been programmed to be the sweetest person in Westworld, but when Bernard encourages her to search for who she really is, she becomes more adventurous. She takes up with William and travels to the outskirts of Westworld. At one point, when William is in danger, she shoots three outlaws. William asks her how she did that. She says, “I imagined a storyline where I wasn’t the damsel.”

In one of the later episodes of Season 1, she discovers that she may have been part of a mass murder. And in the final episode, it is revealed that she has a much darker past that has been lurking under the surface of her programming; one that I’ll let you discover when you watch it.

As you’ll see, the sweetest person in Westworld has layers, including secrets, hidden agendas, a deep wound, a secret identity, and is part of a major conspiracy.

<hr>MAKE IT OKAY FOR GOOD PEOPLE TO DO BAD THINGS

Some writers fail in love with their characters and believe the character’s cover story. They want the character to be a good person, so they don’t look beneath the surface. They even stand up for those characters and fight for their virtue.

They’ll give their character a sweet secret, a nice hidden agenda, or the secret identity of a hero. In reality, they are missing some of the most amazing opportunities for creating a great TV show and great characters.

What should you do? Let your good characters do bad things. Let them have secrets, hidden agendas, and wounds that will damage them if exposed. Make them the kind of characters that people talk about endlessly!

<hr>

KEY: Assume that your characters will have all of these layers of intrigue and your job is to discover them. You don’t have to be perfect, especially on the first time through.

<hr>BUILDING IN INTRIGUING LAYERS

In today’s assignment, you are going to discover and build these intriguing layers into your main characters. As you read these explanations, think about how these layers might be part of your lead characters. Remember that we are looking for big picture layers, not episodes or scenes.

IMPORTANT: These layers are capable of causing major twists or cliffhangers when revealed. Make sure you search for the kind of layers that can accomplish this valuable goal.

HIDDEN AGENDAS:

The character has a covert plan. Implementing a strategy or taking action to accomplish a goal that affects others without their knowledge. Often, the reason for hidden agendas is to get their way without opposition. Sometimes, the covert plan is to do something illegal or immoral and the character just doesn’t want to be judged.

How to: Think about what the character might want or need that could be unacceptable to the other characters.

Questions: What strategy or plan might this character put into action that they would hide from others? What hidden agenda could be most damaging to the other characters?

COMPETITION:

They are competitive with someone — spouse, partner, sibling, co-worker, opposition, other party, etc. — and are trying to defeat them. They are motivated to beat them. That means they are going to actively try to win, gain power, or be right. But it could be worse than that. Their entire focus might be on making the other person lose at any cost. These kinds of competitions create interesting drama.

Competition implies there isn’t enough of something and only one or a few can have that resource. It may be approval, power, winning the prize, being seen as the leader, or who is in front when the picture is taken. This may be a real competition or an imagined competition or the person may have an emotional problem that requires they win so they don’t feel like a loser.

How to: Look at the other characters. There are likely some obvious targets that this character may need to gain power over or fight against to maintain their self image?

Questions: Who are the obvious targets? Why would they be in competition? What could they do to cause themselves to win and the other person to lose?

CONSPIRACY:

A secret plan by two or more people to do something unlawful or harmful. There is an agreement, either spoken or unspoken, to work covertly against someone else.

How to: Involve this character in a covert plan that requires other characters to carry out.

Questions: What covert plan could require a conspiracy to accomplish? Which characters could be working together covertly against others?

SECRETS:

Something has been kept hidden that impacts the situation. People can have lots of secrets that don’t matter. But these secrets will cause the other characters pain or will shift the direction of the story. Secrets show up in three areas – something they said, something they did, or something happened to them.

How to: Assume your character has a secret that is important to this story. Considering the plot and other characters, brainstorm possible secrets.

Question: What secrets could this character have that will shock the audience when revealed?

DECEPTION:

Causing someone to believe something that is not true; especially to gain some personal advantage.

Characters don’t always tell the truth. But it is much more interesting when the deception is an ongoing campaign. It might be them lying about their secrets or hidden agendas or some scheme they are involved in. It might be them lying to “win the competition,” or to make themselves look good. It could be a cover up after-the-face about a crime they committed. But on a big picture level, this deception is an important part of the drama.

How to: Make a list of all the reasons this character might deceive others. As you do, consider times they might choose to lie, but also situations where they may be forced to hide something.

Questions: What major deception could they either cause or be part of? When are they lying and what are they lying about?

WOUND:

This is a tramautic experience with a major loss that haunts the character and shapes a lot of their coping decisions. The character could be overcompensating because of that wound, either through action or through a “mask” that covers the wound. The wound can also cause the character to avoid, hide, distract or over-react. Others can recognize the wound and use it to humiliate, introvert, or discredit that character.

Essentially, it is a fear or weakness related to a major loss in their past.

How to: Search for a wound that would cause this character to react in ways that either incapacitate them or cause damage to others.

Question: What might be this person’s biggest loss in their past that fits this show? What coping mechanisms might that cause? What problems might it cause for the other characters?

SECRET IDENTITY:

A secret identity could be real or it could be an internal state the character has assigned themselves. A real secret identity — undercover cop, spy, reporter, con man, saboteur, etc. — will cause major problems for the target. An internal secret identity, where they think and behave like an activist, member of the resistance, or a silent protestor, will cause emotional problems for their friends and family . Also, the secret identity could be a role they play, like the secret dominatrix role that Wendy plays in BILLIONS.

How to: Not all characters have a secret identity, but for today’s assignment, assume that each of your characters do and then work to find it. Try on different possibilities to see if any of them fit for the character and the story.

Questions: What possible secret identities could this character have? How could that cause problems for this character and/or the other characters in the show?

<hr>EXAMPLE: HOUSE OF CARDS — Frank UnderwoodRole: The Majority Whip who was promised the Secretary of State position.Hidden agendas: Steal back the Secretary of State position and the VP Position.Competition: For power and position. With current Secretary of State, the Chief of Staff, the Vice President, and the President.Conspiracies: With Doug, Claire, Zoe, Senator Catherine Durant, Congressman Russo, and Raymond Tusk.Secrets: He is actively sabotaging the President. He killed Russo.Deception: Deceiving Chief of Staff, the President, the upcoming Secretary of State, Russo, and many others.Wound: Betrayed by the President.Secret Identity: Sociopath.<hr>EXAMPLE: HOUSE OF CARDS — Claire UnderwoodRole: Political WifeHidden agendas: Keep control of Frank. Her own political ambitions.Competition: With Zoe, to maintain control of Frank. With Frank, for who is really in control of this relationship.Conspiracy: With Frank for the Presidency. With Remi to get money.Secrets: Her affair with the artist. Deal with Remi.Deception: Sets manager up to fire 18 people, then fires her. Destroys Frank’s deal by getting Remi to fund her project.Wound: Choose power over love. Wishes she had kids.Secret Identity: President Claire Underwood!<hr>

Even if you love your characters, it is still okay for them to have intrigue under the surface. It is especially important for the main characters because the audience will need to discover what is beneath the surface. If there is nothing there, the show dies.

Discovering possible layers of intrigue doesn’t mean you are required to use them. But going through this process can lead to some of the best moments in your show!

My advice: Give yourself permission to explore each of these areas of character intrigue. You’ll love what it does for your show!

<hr>ASSIGNMENT 1:

1. Think about your Example Show. Make a list of the places you’ve already seen Character Intrigue in the previous episodes.

2. Watch the next episode and see how Character Intrigue is being used to create the need to see more episodes.

Deadline: 24 hours

ASSIGNMENT 2

1. For your Inner Circle characters, fill in any of the Intrigue items that apply.

Character Name:Role:Hidden agendas:Competition:Conspiracies:Secrets:Deception:Wound:Secret Identity:

2. Answer the question, “What I learned doing this assignment is…?” and put it at the top of your work.

3. Go to AI and use this prompt to generate the Intrigue items for your main characters:

For each of the [main characters] for this [genre] about this [concept], please brainstorm the [Intriguing Layers] of that character that have the fit this TV series well.

Intriguing Layers =

Character Name:

Role:

Hidden agendas: Competition: Conspiracies: Secrets: Deception: Wound: Secret Identity:

Genre =

Concept =

Main characters =

4. Post your assignment in the forums at https://www.screenwritingclasses.com/forums/

Subject line: (Your Name’s) Intriguing Character Layers (place in first line)

Deadline: 2 Days (24 hours for Assignment 1, 24 hours for Assignment 2)

<hr>

As you do this assignment, just assume that each of your lead characters have these layers and your job is to discover them.

Fill in whatever answers come to you and be okay with it. There is no stress here, just discovery. And remember, as you work with these characters, other layers or different versions of these layers will naturally emerge. So you don’t have to have the perfect answers right now.

Have fun uncovering the intriguing layers of your characters!

Hal

[Nat Melvin]

Eclipse: Lesson 5 is not unlocked yet. Cheers

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BWTV-AI Module 1 – Lesson 4: Layers of Character Intrigue

cheryl croasmun October 13, 2023

When the TV Show LOST was at its peak, tens of thousands of people were discussing, debating, and desperately trying to figure out what was happening for the characters of that show. It may have been the first time that happened at that level, but it wasn’t the last time…

…because it can happen for your show.

Here’s the great news: Right now, you are 100% in control of how intriguing you make your characters. All you need to do is to focus on the exact parts that will cause people to obsess about the people in your show.

OBJECTIVE: To build the kind of intrigue into your lead characters that will cause viewers to be obsessed about this show. Not just to have our characters be interesting, but to cause obsession about them!

We’re not looking for the standard details of a character profile here. We will flesh that out later. Right now, we are looking for the specific things that make your lead characters intriguing.

INTRIGUE: Secrets beneath the surface: Clandestine moves, covert activity, underhanded dealing, schemes, lies, secrets, cover ups.

To have a show that is intriguing, that means that there is clandestine stuff beneath the surface. To do that have things going on under the surface. Today, we’re going to explore what is beneath the surface for your characters.

BRING ON THE INTRIGUING LAYERS

This time, our focus is on character layers, but not just any layers; intriguing layers. To do that, we’ll consider 7 possible forms of hidden layers that each character might have. They are:

Hidden agendasCompetitionConspiracySecretsDeceptionWoundSecret Identity

I’ll explain these below, but there is something important you need to understand about them that might be a bit surprising.

DOES INTRIGUE HAVE TO BE BAD?

Think about the last time you were part of a surprise birthday party. You and a group planned the party, then lured the recipient into a room, telling them it was for a completely different purpose. Hopefully, it surprised them and created a great birthday for that person.

But notice that it also included a Hidden Agenda, a Conspiracy, Secrets, and Deception.

My point? A character doesn’t have to be a bad person to have these layers. Good people often have these layers. Take a look at some of these:

Your Friday night poker game where players bluff each other.In the school PTA meeting where parents fight each other to protect their own children.When siblings undermine each other…just to gain favor or position.In a police interrogation room where an innocent person is accused of crimes.In church where people struggle with living good lives, even though they have sinned.

In each of these situations, layers of intrigue show up in good people’s lives.

In fact, if your lead characters don’t have these kind of layers, they might be better being background characters. You need your main characters to have all kinds of depth that you can work with through season after season. So please don’t try to make them sweet and innocent unless it covers up other layers beneath the surface.

IMPORTANT: Don’t let your desire to have likable characters prevent you from having GREAT characters with multiple layers that can be discovered over time.

<hr>EXAMPLE: WESTWORLD

The oldest “Host” in Westworld is Dolores Abernathy. The Hollywood Reporter said that Dolores is “the quintessential farm girl of the frontier West — who is about to discover that her entire idyllic existence is an elaborately constructed lie.”

We know that Dolores is a robot who often plays the victim. But it is worse than that. Dolores has been programmed to be the sweetest person in Westworld, but when Bernard encourages her to search for who she really is, she becomes more adventurous. She takes up with William and travels to the outskirts of Westworld. At one point, when William is in danger, she shoots three outlaws. William asks her how she did that. She says, “I imagined a storyline where I wasn’t the damsel.”

In one of the later episodes of Season 1, she discovers that she may have been part of a mass murder. And in the final episode, it is revealed that she has a much darker past that has been lurking under the surface of her programming; one that I’ll let you discover when you watch it.

As you’ll see, the sweetest person in Westworld has layers, including secrets, hidden agendas, a deep wound, a secret identity, and is part of a major conspiracy.

<hr>MAKE IT OKAY FOR GOOD PEOPLE TO DO BAD THINGS

Some writers fail in love with their characters and believe the character’s cover story. They want the character to be a good person, so they don’t look beneath the surface. They even stand up for those characters and fight for their virtue.

They’ll give their character a sweet secret, a nice hidden agenda, or the secret identity of a hero. In reality, they are missing some of the most amazing opportunities for creating a great TV show and great characters.

What should you do? Let your good characters do bad things. Let them have secrets, hidden agendas, and wounds that will damage them if exposed. Make them the kind of characters that people talk about endlessly!

<hr>

KEY: Assume that your characters will have all of these layers of intrigue and your job is to discover them. You don’t have to be perfect, especially on the first time through.

<hr>BUILDING IN INTRIGUING LAYERS

In today’s assignment, you are going to discover and build these intriguing layers into your main characters. As you read these explanations, think about how these layers might be part of your lead characters. Remember that we are looking for big picture layers, not episodes or scenes.

IMPORTANT: These layers are capable of causing major twists or cliffhangers when revealed. Make sure you search for the kind of layers that can accomplish this valuable goal.

HIDDEN AGENDAS:

The character has a covert plan. Implementing a strategy or taking action to accomplish a goal that affects others without their knowledge. Often, the reason for hidden agendas is to get their way without opposition. Sometimes, the covert plan is to do something illegal or immoral and the character just doesn’t want to be judged.

How to: Think about what the character might want or need that could be unacceptable to the other characters.

Questions: What strategy or plan might this character put into action that they would hide from others? What hidden agenda could be most damaging to the other characters?

COMPETITION:

They are competitive with someone — spouse, partner, sibling, co-worker, opposition, other party, etc. — and are trying to defeat them. They are motivated to beat them. That means they are going to actively try to win, gain power, or be right. But it could be worse than that. Their entire focus might be on making the other person lose at any cost. These kinds of competitions create interesting drama.

Competition implies there isn’t enough of something and only one or a few can have that resource. It may be approval, power, winning the prize, being seen as the leader, or who is in front when the picture is taken. This may be a real competition or an imagined competition or the person may have an emotional problem that requires they win so they don’t feel like a loser.

How to: Look at the other characters. There are likely some obvious targets that this character may need to gain power over or fight against to maintain their self image?

Questions: Who are the obvious targets? Why would they be in competition? What could they do to cause themselves to win and the other person to lose?

CONSPIRACY:

A secret plan by two or more people to do something unlawful or harmful. There is an agreement, either spoken or unspoken, to work covertly against someone else.

How to: Involve this character in a covert plan that requires other characters to carry out.

Questions: What covert plan could require a conspiracy to accomplish? Which characters could be working together covertly against others?

SECRETS:

Something has been kept hidden that impacts the situation. People can have lots of secrets that don’t matter. But these secrets will cause the other characters pain or will shift the direction of the story. Secrets show up in three areas – something they said, something they did, or something happened to them.

How to: Assume your character has a secret that is important to this story. Considering the plot and other characters, brainstorm possible secrets.

Question: What secrets could this character have that will shock the audience when revealed?

DECEPTION:

Causing someone to believe something that is not true; especially to gain some personal advantage.

Characters don’t always tell the truth. But it is much more interesting when the deception is an ongoing campaign. It might be them lying about their secrets or hidden agendas or some scheme they are involved in. It might be them lying to “win the competition,” or to make themselves look good. It could be a cover up after-the-face about a crime they committed. But on a big picture level, this deception is an important part of the drama.

How to: Make a list of all the reasons this character might deceive others. As you do, consider times they might choose to lie, but also situations where they may be forced to hide something.

Questions: What major deception could they either cause or be part of? When are they lying and what are they lying about?

WOUND:

This is a tramautic experience with a major loss that haunts the character and shapes a lot of their coping decisions. The character could be overcompensating because of that wound, either through action or through a “mask” that covers the wound. The wound can also cause the character to avoid, hide, distract or over-react. Others can recognize the wound and use it to humiliate, introvert, or discredit that character.

Essentially, it is a fear or weakness related to a major loss in their past.

How to: Search for a wound that would cause this character to react in ways that either incapacitate them or cause damage to others.

Question: What might be this person’s biggest loss in their past that fits this show? What coping mechanisms might that cause? What problems might it cause for the other characters?

SECRET IDENTITY:

A secret identity could be real or it could be an internal state the character has assigned themselves. A real secret identity — undercover cop, spy, reporter, con man, saboteur, etc. — will cause major problems for the target. An internal secret identity, where they think and behave like an activist, member of the resistance, or a silent protestor, will cause emotional problems for their friends and family . Also, the secret identity could be a role they play, like the secret dominatrix role that Wendy plays in BILLIONS.

How to: Not all characters have a secret identity, but for today’s assignment, assume that each of your characters do and then work to find it. Try on different possibilities to see if any of them fit for the character and the story.

Questions: What possible secret identities could this character have? How could that cause problems for this character and/or the other characters in the show?

<hr>EXAMPLE: HOUSE OF CARDS — Frank UnderwoodRole: The Majority Whip who was promised the Secretary of State position.Hidden agendas: Steal back the Secretary of State position and the VP Position.Competition: For power and position. With current Secretary of State, the Chief of Staff, the Vice President, and the President.Conspiracies: With Doug, Claire, Zoe, Senator Catherine Durant, Congressman Russo, and Raymond Tusk.Secrets: He is actively sabotaging the President. He killed Russo.Deception: Deceiving Chief of Staff, the President, the upcoming Secretary of State, Russo, and many others.Wound: Betrayed by the President.Secret Identity: Sociopath.<hr>EXAMPLE: HOUSE OF CARDS — Claire UnderwoodRole: Political WifeHidden agendas: Keep control of Frank. Her own political ambitions.Competition: With Zoe, to maintain control of Frank. With Frank, for who is really in control of this relationship.Conspiracy: With Frank for the Presidency. With Remi to get money.Secrets: Her affair with the artist. Deal with Remi.Deception: Sets manager up to fire 18 people, then fires her. Destroys Frank’s deal by getting Remi to fund her project.Wound: Choose power over love. Wishes she had kids.Secret Identity: President Claire Underwood!<hr>

Even if you love your characters, it is still okay for them to have intrigue under the surface. It is especially important for the main characters because the audience will need to discover what is beneath the surface. If there is nothing there, the show dies.

Discovering possible layers of intrigue doesn’t mean you are required to use them. But going through this process can lead to some of the best moments in your show!

My advice: Give yourself permission to explore each of these areas of character intrigue. You’ll love what it does for your show!

<hr>ASSIGNMENT 1:

1. Think about your Example Show. Make a list of the places you’ve already seen Character Intrigue in the previous episodes.

2. Watch the next episode and see how Character Intrigue is being used to create the need to see more episodes.

Deadline: 24 hours

ASSIGNMENT 2

1. For your Inner Circle characters, fill in any of the Intrigue items that apply.

Character Name:Role:Hidden agendas:Competition:Conspiracies:Secrets:Deception:Wound:Secret Identity:

2. Answer the question, “What I learned doing this assignment is…?” and put it at the top of your work.

3. Go to AI and use this prompt to generate the Intrigue items for your main characters:

For each of the [main characters] for this [genre] about this [concept], please brainstorm the [Intriguing Layers] of that character that have the fit this TV series well.

Intriguing Layers =

Character Name:

Role:

Hidden agendas: Competition: Conspiracies: Secrets: Deception: Wound: Secret Identity:

Genre =

Concept =

Main characters =

4. Post your assignment in the forums at https://www.screenwritingclasses.com/forums/

Subject line: (Your Name’s) Intriguing Character Layers (place in first line)

Deadline: 2 Days (24 hours for Assignment 1, 24 hours for Assignment 2)

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As you do this assignment, just assume that each of your lead characters have these layers and your job is to discover them.

Fill in whatever answers come to you and be okay with it. There is no stress here, just discovery. And remember, as you work with these characters, other layers or different versions of these layers will naturally emerge. So you don’t have to have the perfect answers right now.

Have fun uncovering the intriguing layers of your characters!

Hal

[Nat Melvin]

Hi, Helen, so nice to see you here.

Looking forward to reading what’cha will be working on.

Natalie

[Nat Melvin]

Claire, both are interesting concepts. :0)

[Nat Melvin]

Hi, Claire, thanks for your comment. Yes, I’ve taken Hal’s Thriller class, as well as few other folks’ Mystery Thriller classes. I am debating between those two because the real antagonist acts beneath the surface until the end. The love interest appears ambiguous, as we are continuosly mislead to believe that he is the antagonist, then we’re proven wrong, and so back and forth until the end. It’s complicated. :0)

[Nat Melvin]

Title: Marple Poirot? ;0)

[Nat Melvin]

Aloha, Farrin, likewise, finally, we’re in the same class. :0)