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  • Patty Rice

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    September 12, 2022 at 10:58 pm in reply to: Day 1 Assignments

    Logline and One Pager for Patty Rice

    What I learned doing this assignment: That you can fit a whole story on one page

    Working Title: His Own Heart

    Logline: A jaded businessman who gets a second chance at success, uncovers explosive corruption behind his mentor’s violent murder while fighting for his life, family, and his company’s future.


    David King is no longer the celebrated wonder boy of New York’s commercial real estate world. His jealous father-in-law, Stan Benjamin fired him, blackballed him, and broke up his marriage. Now ten years later, David has lost his ambition and is flipping ugly houses with his friend and business partner, Nate Hoffman.

    Nate tries to tempt David back into big stakes real estate with a juicy development deal in Miami. But David is sure Stan’s company, Dominion Development Group is hot for the deal, and he doesn’t want to rock the boat.

    Meanwhile, Stan’s company has suffered major losses without David. He’s on the brink of layoffs and plans to blackmail the Selection Committee into giving Dominion the Miami contract. Stan and his son, Jon are killed by a team sent to find a flash drive called, “The Key to the City.” But the killers come up empty.

    At the funeral, David is asked to be Dominion’s new CEO. He refuses. However, a pivotal conversation with Nate (and a revisit to his past) changes David’s mind on one condition: he must run the company his way and bring in his own team. The team includes his oldest son, Monte in Business Development, his middle child, Aaron as COO, his daughter, Taylor as head of marketing, and Nate as CFO. In addition, Nate agrees to quietly help David investigate who murdered Stan and Jon and why.

    As the killers search for the “Key to the City,” Monte tells David that Dominion does NOT have the Miami contract like everyone thought. They learn that Stan lied. What’s worse, the Board Chair finds out that the Selection Committee has cut Dominion from the bidding process.

    Without the Miami contract, the company will either fold or David must cut several hundred jobs. His back against the wall, David finds a silver key under Stan’s desk with a note that mentions Dominion’s biggest competitor, Orco. Desperate to get Dominion back into the vetting process, David sends Monte to Miami where he bribes a contract manager for information that might help.

    David attends his welcome reception where he spots Bree Hylton. Bree is the sexy, young wife of his employee, Ryan. Their powerful attraction ends in a one-night stand. But David gets back to business with a quick trip to Miami where he convinces the Selection Committee to reconsider Dominion’s bid.

    David’s appearance unsettles Michael Blackwell, one of the Selection Committee members. Blackwell orders the killers to get David when the time is right. He’s in cahoots with Orco to get the Miami contract by any means. Just as David learns Bree is pregnant with his baby, one of Blackwell’s bad guys tries to strangle David, but Nate saves his life.

    Blackwell decides to handle the hit himself. He heads to New York and invites David to dinner, pretending to offer David help to win the contract. However, Nate finds out the hit man’s van is part-owned by Orco’s CEO, Dominic Russo. Russo and Blackwell are old friends and business associates.

    David sends Bree’s husband, Ryan to meet Blackwell and Ryan is killed. David also finds the “Key to the City” and has the FBI capture Blackwell. Afterward, Nate figures out that David and Bree had an affair, and David admits to wanting Ryan out of the way. Nate issues a judgement that the pain David caused is the pain he will see in his own house. This precipitates a series of traumas that unravel David’s life. The news of Ryan’s death causes Bree to have a miscarriage. Taylor has a nervous breakdown. Monte is murdered by a mafia figure. And after David elopes with Bree, his son, Aaron steals the company.

    At rock bottom, David has nowhere to go but God. He is remorseful and seeks forgiveness for his sins. Then, Aaron shows up and announces that he has been fired. Dominion wants David back because Archie Williams, Chair of the Selection Committee for Miami, refuses to do business without David. Aaron pulls a gun but is killed when Nate stops him from shooting David.

    In the end, David is restored. He’s humble and aware of lessons learned. He gets the Miami project but ends up turning one of his house flips into a home for boys with Nate, Taylor, Bree and their newborn there to help him celebrate a brighter future.

  • Patty Rice

    Member
    September 12, 2022 at 9:52 pm in reply to: Confidentiality Agreementdentiality

    Patty Rice

    “I agree to the terms of this release form.”


    GROUP RELEASE FORM

    As a member of this group, I agree to the following:

    1. That I will keep the processes, strategies, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class confidential, and that I will NOT share any of this program either privately, with a group, posting online, writing articles, through video or computer programming, or in any other way that would make those processes, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class available to anyone who is not a member of this class.

    2. That each writer’s work here is copyrighted and that writer is the sole owner of that work. That includes this program which is copyrighted by Hal Croasmun. I acknowledge that submission of an idea to this group constitutes a claim of and the recognition of ownership of that idea.

    I will keep the other writer’s ideas and writing confidential and will not share this information with anyone without the express written permission of the writer/owner. I will not market or even discuss this information with anyone outside this group.

    3. I also understand that many stories and ideas are similar and/or have common themes and from time to time, two or more people can independently and simultaneously generate the same concept or movie idea.

    4. If I have an idea that is the same as or very similar to another group member’s idea, I’ll immediately contact Hal and present proof that I had this idea prior to the beginning of the class. If Hal deems them to be the same idea or close enough to cause harm to either party, he’ll request both parties to present another concept for the class.

    5. If you don’t present proof to Hal that you have the same idea as another person, you agree that all ideas presented to this group are the sole ownership of the person who presented them and you will not write or market another group member’s ideas.

    6. Finally, I agree not to bring suit against anyone in this group for any reason, unless they use a substantial portion of my copyrighted work in a manner that is public and/or that prevents me from marketing my script by shopping it to production companies, agents, managers, actors, networks, studios or any other entertainment industry organizations or people.

  • Patty Rice

    Member
    September 12, 2022 at 9:45 pm in reply to: Introduce Yourself To The Group

    Hi. I’m Patty. I’ve written about 14 scripts. I want to elevate the first feature I wrote. I’m on draft 8 and it still needs a bit of work. Something unique. Probably that my focus is the faith-based Christian genre and I want to advocate for faith-based and clean content inclusion.

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