Philip Neale
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Philips Act 4 First Scenes
What I learned doing this assignment is whether I can closed the loop
Key Scene 1: Reaction to 3rd Act Turning Point.
The band regroup, Dimtri resolved to take the magic dust to help him play despite its effect on him
Key Scene 2: Protagonist faces their Dilemma.
Dmitri can save himself or the band or save Virginia
Key Scene 3: Climax – The Ultimate Expression of The Conflict.
Dmitri tricks the manager into ripping up the contract in a double or nothing
maybe because the devil cant have all the best tunes after all
Key Scene 4: Resolution – Wrap it up and
Dmitr and the band get back home, with Virginia to celebrate
but the Manager isnt finished and Toady seizes Virgina after her wedding to Dmitri
If they want to find her, they have to go back to the underworld
with new music ready to slay their audiences once again
show us the new status quo.
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Philips Completed Act 3
What I learned doing this assignment is trying to tye up loose ends”
1. The manager needs to discover Vincents true identity
2. The rules for the zombies of death need to be built up as part of the Managers Forces
3. The hells angels need to be introduce as weapons for the band which turn against them
4. Dmitri may have to follow a learning path to use the power
5. Dmitris may need to use the magic dust to believe in himself
6. Maybe the key is that he can play a tune that the Manager hasnt heard – an earworm
7. Dmitri and Percy need to feud as do Pricy and Percy
8. Dmitri might be the cause of Digger to get hospitalised
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Philips Act 3 Turning Point
What I learned doing this assignment is trying to maintain credibility in the story logic
1. Outline Key Scene 4 – Turning Point 3.
2. Write Turning Point 3 – Protagonist faces their lowest low
1. Virginia rejects him and gets kidnapped by the manager
2. The tour bus is destroyed and the wont be able to travel
3. They realise they have been tricked and there is no going back
4. The band have split up and are lost
5 . He tries to play for a bit and then loses the ability when he sees
the manager holds Virgina hostage at knife point
6. The audience realise that sunglasses will stop the blinding lights and tear their ears off to stop listening
7. The audience go crazy and attack the band
8. The band get attacked by hells angels and are incapable of playing
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Philips Act 3 Middle Scenes
What I learned doing this assignment is Im relying on rewriting the scenes to get through the course?”
2. Dmitris asks Toady what is the secret of L’Dalba’ powers to find a way out of the contract
3. Toady ask Dmitri to gather his band mates together to maximise their Unconscious powers
As all go into a trance, L’Dabla appears to each and offers them their wildest dreams – each one falls for the same contract
If Dmitri fails to keep the whole band together and complete his end of the bargain – they will all go to hell
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Philips Act 3 Reaction to Midpoint
What I learned doing this assignment is I can make more sense of the story with hindsight
Key Scene 1: React/Rethink the new reality revealed by Midpoint
Key Scene 2: Makes a new plan.
Key Scene 3: Things start going well, until…
Key Scene 4: Turning Point – Protagonist faces their lowest low.
1. Using your Beat Sheet, outline your Act 3 Key Scenes.
2. Write Key Scene 1: Reaction/Rethink.
The turning point was when Dmitri decided to help Virginia escape and risk the wrath of L’Dabla
Scene 1: Reaction to the Turning Point – Reaction/Rethink.
Dmitri realises that by taking Viginia with him, the contract might be sabotaged and he will have no chance of escaping
from Hell, so he abandons at a overnight stop. Virginia has no where else to go, so becomes Percey’s girlfriend and stays on the tour
He realises that the band need to write their own songs instead, and his new found powers allow him to drive the band forward
Scene 2: Protagonist makes a plan and executes it.
Dmitri corners Toady and asks for help to get out of the contract. Toady tells him of a book of spells which might defeat L’Dabla
Scene 3: Not only does their plan fail, but…
Dmitri tries to conjure powers to defeat L’Dabla but he only succeeds in binding his bandmates to the same arrangement as himself.
Now they will not only have to tour hell but they may never leave
Key Scene 4: Turning Point – Protagonist faces their lowest low.
The magic dust provided by Toady is turning him into a skeletal zombie which is revealed when he looks into the miror.
He realises it is killing him slowly and he may not survive to complete the contract
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Philip Has Completed Act 2
What I learned doing this assignment is that the story was a bit light on the villains plan so I added some plot points
Antagonist
Scene 1: Reaction to the Turning Point.
Confides in Toady to leave nothing to chance to defeat Dmitri.
Continues the search for Virginia
Scene 2: Protagonist makes a plan and executes it.
Arranges prestige gig to undermine the bands confidence, gets Toady to pull the plug on sound etc
Gets Toady to follow Dmitri
Scene 3: Not only does their plan fail, but…
The band adapt to the challenges and emerge stronger, so Toady is impressed
Toady realises Virgina loves Dmitri
Scene 4: Turning Point = Midpoint.
Raises the stakes to increase the risk and reward. Ensures the band members are included in the contract
and offers a way out for Virginia
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Philips Act 2 TP – Midpoint
“What I learned doing this assignment is finding a deeper meaning for the hero to complete his goal”
The manager destroys Dmitris’ trailer in order to make him play, and reveals himself to be the demon
The manager discovers Vincents true identity and offers Dmitri a deal – he can save Virginia and himself but includes the band if he fails
Different Meaning: …now she is doing it for herself, not to win Werner bac
Same journey Different Meaning now Dmitri wants to complete the contract to save not just him but Virginia and the band
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Philips Act 2 TP – Midpoint
“What I learned doing this assignment is finding a deeper meaning for the hero to complete his goal”
The manager destroys Dmitris’ trailer in order to make him play, and reveals himself to be the demon
The manager discovers Vincents true identity and offers Dmitri a deal – he can save Virginia and himself but includes the band if he fails
Same journey Different Meanting now Dmitri wants to complete the contract to save not just him but Viginia and the band
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Philips Act 2 Reaction to TP 1
What I learned doing this assignment is there must be a reaction to the Turning Point
Key Scene 1:
INT.LAS VEGAS. LOUNGE. NIGHT
The manager has arranged a small introductory gig for the record company executives. The lights go down
and the band play the hits of Dmitris old band, as the audience transforms into lizards with suits.
There is deathly silence when the set finishes and only the manager claps echoing around the room
INT.LAS VEGAS HOTEL. EARLY HOURS
Dmitri and the band agree the performance sucked and get together to discuss options
Percy plays some blues standards and the decide to include them into the set.
The manager suggests they busk before the gig to assess the reaction. The people passing by
pelt them with rotten fruit and the band retreat back to the hotel
INT.LAS VEGAS HOTEL. EARLY DAY
Dmitri finds recordings of other bands in his kit and listens to them. He finds it easy to pick up the tunes
and begins to play the best ones for the band. He spices them up with riffs from the blues songs and Vincent
writes new lyrics. Percy doesnt want to sing them onstage and there performance was terrible, they get booed off stage
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“What I learned doing this assignment is the need to be logical in terms of timeline and plot”
Subject line: Philip Finished Act 1
EXT/INT. dining hall – DAY/NIGHT
BEGINNING: L’Diabla is eating breakfast after returning from slaughtering the band, she summons Toady to report on Dimitris progress
Toady tells her that her daughter Virginia has runaway with Dmitri after he seduce her to start a new life in showbusiness.
L’Diabla vows to take revenge and kill Virginia just like the other girls because of their betrayl
MIDDLE: L’Diabla needs to transform into a different form to continue the search against Toady’s advice She decides to kill 2 birds with 1 stone by becoming the bands new manager, in the form of a world heavyweight wrestler. However this means L’Dialbla loses his powers and can only act as a human
END: As Diabolo The Great she kills the current manager and steals the bands contract to prevent them from completing the tour.
Toady is assigned to becoming the roadie while they search for Virginia
INT. Record company offices – DAY
BEGINNING: Dmitri is summoned to meet their new manager – Diabolo The Great and they go through the terms of the contract and the tour dates.
Diabolo realises that the terms of the contract mean Dmitri will never be able to repay his debt and Diabolo will lose his gold
MIDDLE: Diabolo the Great doesnt recognise Virginia in her disguise as Vincent the androgenous member of the band so the search goes on
END: Toady warns Dmitri that the locations may look like 1970s America but its actually a lot like Hell. The manager decides to plot the bands downfall when he realises how good they are
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What I learned doing this assignment is all it takes to challenge the Old Ways is to simply have them fail
Philips Act 2 Middle Scenes
1. Outline Key Scenes 2 & 3.
Key Scenes 2
The band decide on no expenses spared hotel and travel accomodation, Dmitri points out they won’t have any money left to pay the debt
Intead they hire a cheap touring bus to drive to their gigs. They try playing the songs from Dmtris old band but the audience reaction is poor
and they get booed off stage
Key Scenes
The manager tries to sabotage the bus to prevent them getting to the next gig and they are forced to hitch hike while toady brings the gear.
There money gets stolen and they have to busk for money to eat.
They start rehearsing old blues songs which again their audience finds dated. They need to find a new direction so they include riffs from the blues
songs into their own which starts to get interesting
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Philip’s Turning Point 1 Scenes
What I learned doing this assignment is that a Turning Point makes the story more interesting, escalates the stakes, and increases the emotional attachment to your characters.
ACT 1 OUTLINE
INT. LIBRARY – DAY
BEGINNING: Dmitri wanders around the library looking for books to read to keep him entertained, he notices virginia dancing outside and asks her for help, they end up in bed
MIDDLE: Virginia tells Dmitri that Lady D’Abla has discovered their affair and plans to take revenge and kill her like the others
END: Dmtri decides escape and take Virginia on tour with him
INT. STUDIO – NIGHT
BEGINNING: Dmitri is waiting for the ban to arrive but no-one has showed
MIDDLE: Dimitri discovers that each member of the band has died in dreadful circumstances
END: Dimitri meets his new manager and they start recruiting new members
INT. – DAY
BEGINNING: The band assemble and perform for the manager and toady
MIDDLE: The band listen while Dmitri asks them to include Virginia and gets them to sign up
END: The manager convinces the band to go to Hell and save Dmitri and Virginia
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What I learned doing this assignment is you dont need to have all the ideas to write a scene at the start
Write your Inciting Incident scene.
BEGINNING
Toady asks for Dmitris help in bringing in some wooden logs, otherwise he wont get paid
MIDDLE
Dmitris dutifully helps out loading the logs off a trailer and then onto a machine which saws the logs into strips
Toady starts the machine and tells Dmitri to stand back, when one of the logs gets stuck, Toady goes back to switch off the machine
as Dmitri reaches in to move the log – it shifts and moves other logs on top of Dmitris outstretched arms – he is trapped
END
As Dmitri yells out – Toady deliberately mistakes the call to start the machine. Dmitri frantically tries to free his arms but his cuffs are still
caught between the heavy pieces and his hands are drawn towards the saw.
His hands are severed and he screams in agony. Blood is spurting from his hands
like soda fountain as he falls to the floor unconcious with shock
3. Write the scene for the Reaction to the Inciting Incident.
Write the scene for the Reaction to the Inciting Incident.
BEGINNING
Dmitri wakes up in bed,as if recovering from a terrible nightmare, hes stares at the ceiling and goes to scratch his head – His hands are wrapped in giant bandages
He screams into the air, as Lady D’Abola watches him from a chair. He wails at his fate as all seems lost. He needed those hands without them he has no future.
MIDDLE
Lady D’Abola
starts to test him to emphasising what he has lost, and offers him the possibility of a way back and more. Dmitri considers the offer, most rock stars die young anyway
and he gets to live forever. He does not believe and wants proof.
END
Lady D’Abola takes a bat from a cage and bites its head off , but with a few words and special atmospheric lighting she coaches it back to life.
It flies away free to take its revenge. Dmitri asks for the details in writing and someone to turn the pages. Toady obliges and after some time Dmitri
agrees to sign in blood, from the dripping bandage. Lady D’Abola performs a spell and Toady removes the bandages. Dmitri’s fingers are restored and demands
a guitar, he plays better than he ever had.
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OPENING SCENE BEAT SHEET
Protagonist
INT.BEDROOM- DAWN
A car horn sounds in the morning and a woman urgently rouses from her beautific sleep and reaches out across the bed to an empty place.
She pats around frantically and finding no-one there wakes up abruptly, and hears muted sounds of lovemaking coming from the next room.
As she launches half-naked out of bed, and bumps into a bedside table, a magazine falls off to the floor with a young mans face on the cover.
with “Next Big Thing” written in large letters. The womans shouts and bangs on the wall for the noise to stop which it does. She grabs an axe from a drawer
INT.CORRIDOR- DAWN
She rushes to the bedroom door into the corridor brandishing the axe. As she burst into the other rooom. The young man from the cover
looks back half dressed,climbing out of the window. while the womans’ daughter is sitting up in bed covering her modesty.
EXT.ROOF BACK OF FARM- DAWN
The young man slides down the roof and onto a haystack as the axe whistles past his ear and lands in a wooden beam. The woman drags her daughter
by the hair back into her bedroom, opening the window. She leans out and hails her husband returning from a business trip and points to the back of the house
dragging her daughter to the window.
EXT.FRONT OF FARM – DAWN
The man reaches into the boot of the car and lifts out a shotgun. He rushes around the back of the house and fires at the fleeing young man who is racing towards
his parked car.
INT.CAR – DAWN
He dives into the driving seat, as the back window explodes, although the car initially stalls he manages to drive away out of
the reach of the husbands shotgun before he can reload.
EXT.VILLAGE – DAWN
As the car careers out of the village and down a hill,the same magazine falls from a stack on the back seat,
onto a pristine guitar lying on the floor. The young man laughs in panic and drives on with a triumphant smile on his face
EXT. FRONT OF FARM – DAWN
The husband reloads the gun and places it back in the car. He turns to look at his wife and reaching into his shirt retrieves a chain from around
his neck with several odd charms attached. He brandishes a particular satanic symbol at the wife with a vengeful smile. The wife looks on in horror and crosses herself
moving her daughter away and closing the bedroom window
Antagonist
INT.BARN – MORNING
The barn is dark and lit only by candles. A goat lies in the straw ,its throat bloodied and severed. The farmers daughter is laying on an altar of sorts and dressed as if for a sacrifice. The farmer is anointing
her head with blood from a chalice. The mother is weeping as she watches the screne. After several incantations. The farmer awaits for something to happen
Something imperceptably moves from the shadows in the barn behind the group.
INT. BARN – SHADOWS
A pale, woman – Lady D’Abola – with a beautiful but cruel face appears out of the shadows and addresses them.
The farmer and his wife crying even more kneel down before their master.
She listens to the farmers request and stabs their daughter through the heart, as the mother shrieks in dispair
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Philip’s Beat Sheet Draft 2
“What I learned doing this assignment is having the same goals causes a more interesting conflict
Theme cheats never prosper/Truth will out
EXT.COUNTRY LANE – DAY
Atagon orders Toady to ambush Dmitri on the highway and cause an accident and pretend to die
1. He has a car accident and nearly kills someone
PLACEHOLDER – Toady manipulates Dmitri to driving him back to the Grange
Atag asks Toady to report on Dmitris prospects
INT.GRANGE.CHAMBERS – NIGHT
Atag sends Toady to spy on Dmitri and finds that he is a fraud
2. He is discovered miming to records
PLACEHOLDER – debate with Cherry about his fraud
EXT.FARM -DAY
Atag discovers what Dmitri has been up to decides to escalate the stakes by cutting off his fingers
3. His fingers are sliced off deliberately
PLACEHOLDER – Toady’s pretext ask for help with farm equipment and traps Dmitris fingers
INT.GREAT HALL- NIGHT
Atag creates a one-sided contract design to send Dmitri to hell and lose the gift of music to the world
4. He signs a contract with the she-devil
PLACEHOLDER – Massive negotiations before he signs
Act2
INT.LOCATION1-DAY
Atag reduces Dmitris chances of completing the contract by killing his band and manager
5. His band have been slaughtered
PLACEHOLDER- Dmitri contacts people when the band don’t show up
INT.LOCATION1-DAY
Drummer
PLACEHOLDER Drummer gets killed by SheDevil using drumsticks
INT.LOCATION1-NIGHT
PLACEHOLDE- SINGER dies being choked to death
INT.LOCATION1-DAY
BASS GUITARIST
PLACEHOLDER – Bass guitaris is pushed off a scaffold and falls to his death
INT.LOCATION1-NGHT
PLACEHOLDER – MANAGER drowns in his own VAT of wine before signing over the band’s contract to Atag
6. He recruits new members for his tour
Toady accompanies Atag as the new manager with Dmitris as he tries to recruit new members to his band – the most unlikely candidates that Atag could find
INT.LOCATION1-NIGHT
SINGER
PLACEHOLDER – Audition takes place in front of some stoned students
INT.LOCATION1-DAY
Drummer
PLACEHOLDER Drummer is working as a gravedigger and meets them later on to discuss money
BASS GUITARIST
PLACEHOLDER – Interview takes place in a fancy golf club after a round of golf
INT.LOCATION1-NGHT
MANAGER
PLACEHOLDER – The band are called into the studios by their new manager who has bought their contract from the record company
Act3
Atag and Toady discuss the plan while Dmitri listens
7. He discovers they are being sent to Hades
PLACEHOLDER – Toady accidentally reveals the plan about sending them to play in Hell
INT.AIRPORT-NIGHT
MANAGER
Atag as the manager orders a change in the tour which is straight to hell
PLACEHOLDER – Dmitri confronts the manager but can’t persuade him to change the tour
8. Dilemma : Does he tell the band that they are going to hell
Dmitri holds a pep talk with the band to discuss the tour
Atag offers each of them a reward/curse for going along
INT.AIRPORT.BAR-NIGHT
Dmitri decides to order enhancements to the stage equipment to fight the demons
9. He discovers the manager is trying to sabotage their tour
Atag tries to get them arrested and make them fail to complete the contract
PLACEHOLDER – Dmitri tries to kill the manager who fights the band
Dmitri pleas with Toady to help him in return for his freedom
INT.AIRPORT.BAR-NIGHT
Act4
INT.HOLLYWOOD.BOWL FROM HELL.BAR-NIGHT
Atag coordinates the attacks on the band via Toady who is caught in the middle
PLACEHOLDER – Dmitri realises the crowd is full of acolytes who are trying to tear down the stage and he must find a way to stop them
and
Atag attempts to stop the concert in various ways but is blown away by the audiences reaction
10 He finds the real power of music to tame the savage beasts in the audience
PLACEHOLDER – Dmitri’s guitar playing is so magical that he wins over the audience and they escape from hell
INT.GRANGE.DAY
Atag licks his wounds to fight another day
11.The band complete the tour and return victorious but Dmitri has not yet escaped the claws of SD
PLACEHOLDER – The band gather at the Grange to record their next album, and discover that the manager returns to haunt them
Atag proves that they have not completed their contract and Dmitris curse lives on
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Philips High Speed Beat Sheet
Act 1
EXT.COUNTRY LANE – DAY
1. He has a car accident and nearly kills someone
PLACEHOLDER – Toady manipulates Dmitri to driving him back to the Grange
INT.GRANGE.CHAMBERS – NIGHT
2. He is discovered miming to records
PLACEHOLDER – debate with Cherry about his fraud
EXT.FARM -DAY
3. His fingers are sliced off deliberately
PLACEHOLDER – Toady’s pretext ask for help with farm equipment and traps Dmitris fingers
INT.GREAT HALL- NIGHT
4. He signs a contract with the she-devil
PLACEHOLDER – Massive negotiations before he signs
Act2
INT.LOCATION1-DAY
5. His band have been slaughtered
PLACEHOLDER- Dmitri contacts people when the band dont show up
INT.LOCATION1-DAY
Drummer
PLACEHOLDER Drummer gets killed by SheDevil using drumsticks
INT.LOCATION1-NIGHT
PLACEHOLDE- SINGER dies being choked to death
INT.LOCATION1-DAY
BASS GUITARIST
PLACEHOLDER – Bass guitaris is pushed off a scafold and falls to his death
INT.LOCATION1-NGHT
PLACEHOLDER – MANAGER drowns in his own VAT of wine
6. He recruites new members for his tour
INT.LOCATION1-NIGHT
SINGER
PLACEHOLDER – Audition takes place in front of some stoned students
INT.LOCATION1-DAY
Drummer
PLACEHOLDER Drummer is working as a gravedigger and meets them later on to discuss money
BASS GUITARIST
PLACEHOLDER – Interview takes place in a fancy golf club after a round of golf
INT.LOCATION1-NGHT
MANAGER
PLACEHOLDER – The band are called into the studios by their new manager who has bought their contract from the record company
Act3
7. He discovers they are being sent to Hades
PLACEHOLDER – Toady accidentally reveals the plan about sending them to play in Hell
INT.AIRPORT-NIGHT
MANAGER
PLACEHOLDER – Dmitri confronts the manager but can’t persuade him to change the tour
8. Dilemma : Does he tell the band that they are going to hell
Dmitri holds a pep talk with the band to discuss the tour
INT.AIRPORT.BAR-NIGHT
9. He discovers the manager is trying to sabotage their tour
PLACEHOLDER – Dmitri tries to kill the manager
INT.AIRPORT.BAR-NIGHT
Act4
INT.HOLLYWOOD.BOWL FROM HELL.BAR-NIGHT
PLACEHOLDER – Dmitri realises the crowd is full of acolytes who are trying to tear down the stage and he must find a way to stop them
10 He finds the real power of music to tame the savage beasts in the audience
PLACEHOLDER – Dmitri’s guitar playing is so magical that he wins over the audience and they escape from hell
INT.GRANGE.DAY
11.The band complete the tour and return victorious
PLACEHOLDER – The band gather at the Grange to record their next album, and discover that the manager returns to haunt them
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What I learned doing this assignment is – its an iterative process “
Old Ways
Didnt believe in developing ability
Takes undeserved credit
Bound by the terms of the contract
Ignorant of the consequences
Lets others determine his future
New Ways
Leads the band
Gets free of the contract
Gives credit where due
Looks before he leaps
Takes care of the band
3. Make a list of 6 – 8 changes or steps that need to happen for that character to go from who they are in the beginning (Old Ways) to who they are in the ending (New Ways).
1. Get the talent to reach his goals
2. Convince the band to follow his lead
3. Let the band reach their potential
5. Become the greatest
6. Pay his dues
4. Defeat the manager
2. Find a way out of the contract
Transformational Events
Act 1
1. He has a car accident and nearly kills someone
2. He is discovered miming to records
3. His fingers are sliced off deliberately
4. He signs a contract with the she-devil
Act2
5. His band have been slaughtered
6. He recruites new members for his tour
Act3
7. He discovers they are being sent to Hades
8. Dilemma : Does he tell the band that they are going to hell
9. He discovers the manager is trying to sabotage their tour
Act4
10 He finds the real power of music to tame the savage beasts in the audience
11.The band complete the tour and return victorious
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What I learned doing this assignment is – its useful to see both sides of the conflict
Act 1:
Opening
After Dmitris leaps from an bedroom window he is chased to his car by a shotgun firing farmer,
while the farmers wife waves to him from the bedroom window. He starts his car and drives off into the countryside while stacks
of magazines in the car with his picture on the cover fall onto the floor. His guitar lies across the back seat, the shot narrowly missing
as the penetrate the cars leather. The farmer realising he missed, looks at his wife and with a vengeful smile, holds a chain with many strange
symbols attached from around his neck. The wife recoils in horror and shuts the window
Inciting Incident
Dmitri narrowly misses a tree after his car slides to avoid hitting Toadie who had deliberately walked into the path of his on coming car
Dmitri is obliged to drive Toadie to Headless Fold, an ancient stately home where he works for his master – Lady D’Abla.
As they drive through the vast grounds , Toadie listens while Dmitri brags of talent and accomplishments,
As they pull up in front of the manor Dmitri notices several young woman playing a enchanting game of netball
Turning Point
Dimitri agrees to stay for a week while Toadie gets back to full health and plays his music much to the delight of the young women
Dmitris loses his fingers in a contrived accident, and is distraught to realise he will never play guitar again. Toadie says master can help him out
when she returns from a trip abroad. The young women take it in turns to tend to his wounds and Dmitri gets to know them very well.
Lady Di’ Abla returns after much negoitation promise to mend Dmitris hand and contract to make his dreams come true in return for his immortal soul before he reaches the age of thirty
Act 2:
New plan
Dimitri leaves the manor and returns home to find his bandmates have been killed in the most suspicious circumstans. Dmitri must
find a new band and a manager to meet the deadlines set by Lady D’Abla
Plan in action
Dmitris uses all his contacts to find and audtion the new members of the band a mixed bunch of newbies and misfits
They are each contracted to join the band without really reading the smallprint which binds them to the terms of Dmitris own contract with Lady Dia Ablo
Midpoint Turning Point
Dmitri is satisfied that the band are ready to tour a few small gigs in London when their new manager reveals a different destination. They have been booked to perform three concerts
in the realms of hell to an audience of demons and suchlike. It might look like America in the 1970s but in fact its Hades
Act 3:
Rethink everything
Dmitri realises his team wont return with the journey without weapons, so he confides in New who comes up with a plan
New plan
Turning Point: Huge failure / Major shift
They touch down in America on Christmas Day with a mission to complete their first gig in the city of glass which is a complete disaster
The flee from the wreckage of the stadium lucky to be alive and onto their next gig at the city of sands
Act 4:
Climax/Ultimate expression of the conflict
Unless they complete their next gig in the city of fire – they will not fufil the terms of the contract
Resolution
Dmitri comes up with a plan to save the band and defeat Lady Dia Obola
Act 1:
Opening
Lady Dia Obola an other worldley being has to operate in the realm of man in order to perform her diabolical duties. She receives a call
from one of her acolytes – the farmer and his wife. She listens to his demands and sees an develish opportunity, she summons Toadie to do her bidding.
Toadie is dispatched to trap Dmitri by faking a road accident while she leaves to take revenge on Dmitri’s bandmates – who are not nice people anyway
Inciting Incident
Toadie is instructed keep Dmitri a prisoner and to severe his fingers
Turning Point
Lady Dia Obola discovers that Dmitri has seduced each of the vestal virgins and plans her revenge
Act 2:
New plan
Lady Dia Obola transmogrifies into an all in wrestler who becomes Dmitris new manager – Diabolo The Great, and creates a contract so unfair that Dmitri will never complete
his side of the bargain and will lose his immortal soul and pay his body weight in gold in return
Plan in action
Posing as DiaBolo the great she arranges to audition the most unlikely candidates for Dmitris new band to sabotage his prospects
Midpoint Turning Point
Diabolo The great orgainises the forces of evil to destroy the stadium in the city of glass causing Dmitri to fail at the first hurdle
Act 3:
Rethink everything
Dmitri has some tricks up his sleeve as he tries to wriggle out of one contract, but complete the terms of the other to save his soul
New plan
Turning Point: Huge failure / Major shift
Act 4:
Diabolo The Great reveals himself in the city of fire to be Lady Dia Abla, and tries to destroy the band live on stage using all the power
of her demonic army
Climax/Ultimate expression of the conflict
The band complete the gig against all odds and return to the back home to lick their wounds and record their album which is an immediate success which they think fufils their contract
Resolution
The small print in their contract means they must complete another tour or the curse is past onto their descendants
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QUESTIONS FOR YOUR PROTAGONIST
Tell me about yourself.
Im a pretty ambitious guy and there’s no mountain too high for me to climb
I wanna get to the top and be bigger than Elvis, Beatles and Rolling Stones put together
Why do you think you were called to this journey? Why you?
I had no choice, its a vision thing, if you’ve got a gift you gotta go with – y’know what I mean
You are up against . What is it about them that makes this journey even more difficult for you?
They keep shifting the goal posts, nothing’s ever straight forward on this tour and I’m convinced the bands wants me to fail – take over – y’know
They don’t follow my lead – is that enough for you
In order to survive or accomplish this, you are going to have to step way outside of your box.
What changes do you expect to make and which of them will be the most difficult?
To get out of this – Id do anything – I need to beat them at their own game – destroy the contract, smash the deal by any means – play a gig at hells door if need be
What habits or ways of thinking do you think will be the most difficult to let go of?
The magic dust – I need that to get where Im going – looking after the others – its my band right, otherwise it all falls apart
What fears, insecurities and wounds have held you back?
I’m a total control freak, we never make any money I can’t let go of the leadership – I’m work vampire hours – the wheel never stops turning
fear of failure – Im not a natural – I have to practice hard – a miss is as good as a mile – we might not make it with everything thats stacked against us
What skills, background or expertise makes you well-suited to face this conflict or antagonist?
you stand on the soldiers of giants – my axe is my weapon – i’ve played on every record thats ever been made in the past two years but nobody knows my name – we’ll take them all by surpris – I could die in a ditch and no-one would know – I can conjure fireworks and banshees from this guitar
What are you hiding from the other characters? What don’t you want them to know?
If we dont complete the tour – it all goes to hell – everythings on the line – music, the future everything- and they wont see a penny
What do you think of ?
Old Nicks? She’s a devil, vindictive, curious creature- brutal and viscious – out for revenge
Tell me your side of this whole conflict / story.
Well I could have done without the jepardy – I was setup – just a pawn in the bigger game
Now I have to win to save music for the world – as well as saving my immortal soul
What does it do for your life is you succeed here?
Beyond my wildest dream – glory, wealth, women and a number one album
Ask any other questions about their character profile that will help you.
whats your plan/goal
QUESTIONS FOR YOUR ANTAGONIST
Tell me about yourself.
I’m not a bad person – I just punish bad people – in ways appropriate to the crimeby any means necessary- you know judge,jury and executioner – as well as entrapment, lies and deception
Im just doing my job- its one hell of a task but someone’s got to do the necessary
Having to do with this journey, what are your strengths and weaknesses?
Well there’s the hordes of demons at my disposal, vast resources of outstanding promises, a life lived in the shadows watching what make people tick and burn and such
Weaknesses – I’m too damn good at my job- I got pigen holed as a bad angel and its been like that ever since – you know
Why are you committed to making the agonist fail? Or for alationship movie, why are you committed to making them change?
I had assets lined up- the deals I had to make – seven vestals virgins – and then he came to stay under my hospitality – now Ive got none – I’ll make him suffer – ive murdered thousands for less
What do you get out of winning this fight / succeeding in your plan / taking down your competition?
My reputation, meeting my quotas – his head on a plate and exclusive access to all the music that ever was and will be made
What drives you toward your mission / agenda, even in the face of danger, ruin, or death?
Well thats my stock in trade danger, ruin and death – its over confidence I worry about
What secrets must you keep to succeed? What other secrets do you keep out of fear / insecurity?
Every contract has its loophole – its part of the torment you see – I do worry they’ll spot it – but they never do – overconfidence – not in this millenia anyway
Compared to other people like you, what makes you special?
It a mans mans world – but where would it be without a woman or a girl – there’s only one of me but I play all parts
What do you think of ?
The little shit- I trusted him – I fed him – I even listend to that racket he calls music – and he bit me – not once but seven times
I’ll make him rot in hell and obliterate all music past,present and future from this noisy planet
Tell me your side of this whole conflict / story.
It was a simple plan – a straight forward promise – but he turned it into a vendetta – he’s got to pay
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Philip Character Profile Part 2
What draws us to Jimmy?
What makes this the right character for this role?
He’s at the start of a new era, and has the talent and the looks to create something new and fufill his dreams
Traits: Driven, Expert, Vision, Charming
Subtext: Hides his fear of Devil, Keeps band at arms length
Flaw: mean with money, egotist
Values: Influence,Power, Fellowship, The Band
Irony: His drive and lies are destroying the band from within
What draws us to Devil?
What makes this the right character for this role?
He resents change, being threatend and does everything in his power to resist
to reach his goals
Traits: Jealous, Lonely, Vision, Cunning, Tricky. Humour
Subtext: Opportunist, Dumb, Overconfident
Flaw: old fashioned, has to fit in, wants to trick
Values: Influence,Power and winning the game
Irony:No matter how long he lives humans always surprise him
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What I learned doing this assignment is a story can fall into many genres?”
Genre Horror/Thriller/Comedy
Hero/Dreamer
Villain
Minor Supporting Characters
Digger – drummer
Percy – singer
Ned – Bass player
Toady – Roadie
Virginia – Devils Daughter
Role in the story: Teenage prodigy must form a band to conquer the world and save his soul from the devil
Age range and Description:
Internal Journey: from naive follower to worldly leader
External Journey: from unknown muscian to king of rocknroll
Motivation: to best the best rocknroll band and live the dream
Wound: the devil will make him burn in hell if he doesnt succeed
Mission/Agenda: try to outwit the devil and break free of the contract
Secret: he has signed a contract with the devil to remove music from the world
What makes them special? He’s a musical prodigy
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Jimmy’s Transformational Journey
the outcomes appear to need to be the opposite of the situation at the start
2. Who is your Hero and what is their Character Arc that represents a transformation?
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from a desperate gigging musician to having the guile to beat the devil himself
External Journey:
from a self obessesed despot who pushes his band to the limits to a champion for good
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3. What are the Old Ways and New Ways?
old ways
– ignorant of the contract but bindly obeys
– session musician for hire
-desperate, blind to own ambition
-breaks the rules
-doesnt believe in the band
new ways
-becomes the new king of rocknroll
-now understands the consequences of his demands
-fights to rescue his bandmates
– learns to outwit the devils and gain his freedom
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1.Philip Neale
2. One completed, started many
3. To complete a second
4. I’m from the future
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As a member of this group, I agree to the following:
1. That I will keep the processes, strategies, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class confidential, and that I will NOT share any of this program either privately, with a group, posting online, writing articles, through video or computer programming, or in any other way that would make those processes, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class available to anyone who is not a member of this class.
2. That each writer’s work here is copyrighted and that writer is the sole owner of that work. That includes this program which is copyrighted by Hal Croasmun. I acknowledge that submission of an idea to this group constitutes a claim of and the recognition of ownership of that idea.
I will keep the other writer’s ideas and writing confidential and will not share this information with anyone without the express written permission of the writer/owner. I will not market or even discuss this information with anyone outside this group.
3. I also understand that many stories and ideas are similar and/or have common themes and from time to time, two or more people can independently and simultaneously generate the same concept or movie idea.
4. If I have an idea that is the same as or very similar to another group member’s idea, I’ll immediately contact Hal and present proof that I had this idea prior to the beginning of the class. If Hal deems them to be the same idea or close enough to cause harm to either party, he’ll request both parties to present another concept for the class.
5. If you don’t present proof to Hal that you have the same idea as another person, you agree that all ideas presented to this group are the sole ownership of the person who presented them and you will not write or market another group member’s ideas.
6. Finally, I agree not to bring suit against anyone in this group for any reason, unless they use a substantial portion of my copyrighted work in a manner that is public and/or that prevents me from marketing my script by shopping it to production companies, agents, managers, actors, networks, studios or any other entertainment industry organizations or people.