[Roger Tribble]

ROGER

CHARLES —

A) Soft spoken B) Follower C) Observant D) Loudly Vehement When he observes scary objects/situations

MAXFIELD

A) Loud B) Suspicious C) Pushes into others conversations D) Wants the credit for any “discoveries.

MICHELE:

A) Epilepsy B) When in trance sees into physical and mental environment C) Panic attacks

D) Sees into others inner thoughts. Gets violent in seizures.

THING – (Organometallic)

A) Discordant English B) Insider with knowledge into each “discovery”. C) Rarely reveals whole story D) Frequently speaks in word salad — needs to be interpreted.

WHAT I LEARNED:

— I am surprised at the effectiveness of this assignment. However, I will need to come back to this to fill it out and make it “whole”. Needs to be completed. However — this is great training.

[Roger Tribble]

Roger Puts Essence to Work

What I learned — The need to look beneath the scene itself — what essence is reveled.

Kali’s Death Song

Scene ONE: (pg2)

<font face=”inherit”>Location — Secure office </font>in Corporate building.

LOG LINE: Character 1 (Dr Born) is ordered to a meeting to answer for the catastrophic release of virulent mutated Prion particles attacking both biological and physical objects.

ESSENCE: I’ve Discovered– Scientist is being setup to take the blame for Corporate’s mistakes. .He is terrified as his family is in danger if he does not do exactly as ordered.

NEW LOGLINE– Corporate is looking for scapegoats to cover their catastrophic failure to contain a new, mutated and horrifying Prion release.

SCENE TWO: Outside Corporate Humvee — small clearing enclosed by Granite cliffs on 3 sides. Three security guards have carried a medicated Dr. Born outside to get him into the secure Lab. The one exit road is on other side of electrified fence. Thick forest borders the group.

LOG LINE: Terrified guards have carried Dr Born (drugged) onto ground adjacent to Lab entrance. Prion mutated creatures are growing in numbers. The environmental destruction has destroyed the continental shelfs throughout the world.

ESSENCE I’VE DISCOVERED. — Environmental collapse, deadly mutations and corporate corruption are endemic. Destroying life on Earth. Can anything be done?

NEW LOGLINE: Can three ostracized scientists, with disabilities, solve the Prion scourge?

SCENE THREE

Location: Main laboratory — The three scientists are standing in a circle.

LOG LINE — Three scientists argue about what to do. How are they to continue after discovery of enormous underground facilities. Michele has an epileptic seizure, in the midst, describes what she sees. Revealing the magnitude of the structures

ESSENCE I’VE DISCOVERED. Their purpose here is partially revealed. How can they proceed? Everything has changed.

<font face=”inherit”>NEW LOGLINE: The mysteries keep growing. What has happened to the population of scientists? Why are they really here? Their disabilities are helping them. What happened to the small group </font>preceding them?

SCENE FOUR:

Location: Primary lab. All three standing around a mysterious box.

LOG LINE: The three scientists open a mysterious box. Inside is a metallic objects glowing slightly with a greenish hue.

ESSENCE I’VE DISCOVERED: Keep looking below the obvious. What feelings? What behavior? What does all this mean?

NEW LOGLINE: New mystery reveals the depth of the entire operation. A box contains a mailable, greenish glowing metal object. It reacts to the touch — a mix of metal and organic structure. Is this dangerous? We have been threatened. What’s worse? Thorium Corporation or the strange events here?

SCENE FIVE:

Location: Small room with food dispensers. On a level down from original lab.

LOGLINE: The three scientists discover an other person hiding in the corner. Why is he here? What does he want? Why is he so frightened?

ESSENCE I’VE DISCOVERED: Allow events to “pop-up” . keep looking for situations that can expand or grow.

NEW LOGLINE: The team is exploring new vistas in the complex. They come upon a survivor — what can he reveal? Is he dangerous? Why does he have a weapon in his hand. Should he come with us?

[Roger Tribble]

Roger

Roger Finds The Essence

What I learned is — These perspectives (essence) is far removed from my “normal” writing — technical/analytic. Thus I am behind. I’m learning to expand my horizons — my initial horizons — feeling; action; situation (opinions). However the assignment lists these differently: Concept; Story; Situation; Character; Conflict; Action; and Dialogue.

Roger Puts Essence to Work

SCRIP ONE I CHOSE: HEAT

LOCATION: Office in a financial company.

LOGLINE 1: Business transaction falls terribly apart. Character 1 calls Character 2. “you can keep your money” and “I’m speaking to a dead man”.

I’VE DISCOVERED — Every scene can be presented differently differently

LOGLINE 2:When running risky business dealings — reactions can go terribly awry.

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LOCATION: Upscale hotel room.

LOGLINE 1: Prostitute learns how not to treat a dangerous client,

I’VE DISCOVERED — Describing scenes is not the way to find the essence.

LOGLINE 2: Danger spins over to police, crooks and public. The stakes keep getting worse.

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LOCATION: Kitchen in a small coffee shop.

LOGLINE 1: Hard working cook, Excon on probation is abused by employer. Entire shop is filled by unhappy workers and customers. Cook is presented with dangerous job — he leaves. (Anything is better tha here).

I’VE DISCOVERED: Up the anti and anything can happen.

LOGLINE 2: Anger and despair grow inside shop — pushing to boiling point, Character cracks, making a dangerous choice.

…

LOCATION: Nighttime: Side of road, Car is pulled over by a cop car.

LOGLINE: Cop approaches driver side window. Driver and Cop now recognize each other. A long time feud — “good” versus “bad”. Could go any direction. They meet at neutral location. Both “Good” and “Bad” say how this will end.

I’VE DISCOVERED: Looking below the surface reveals more ways to “go”,

PS — This class is frankly very difficult. I find technical subjects SO much easier!

[Roger Tribble]

1. Roger Tribble

2.I agree to the terms of this release form.”

3. Please leave the entire text below to confirm what you agree to.

GROUP RELEASE FORM

As a member of this group, I agree to the following:

1. That I will keep the processes, strategies, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class confidential, and that I will NOT share any of this program either privately, with a group, posting online, writing articles, through video or computer programming, or in any other way that would make those processes, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class available to anyone who is not a member of this class.

2. That each writer’s work here is copyrighted and that writer is the sole owner of that work. That includes this program which is copyrighted by Hal Croasmun. I acknowledge that submission of an idea to this group constitutes a claim of and the recognition of ownership of that idea.

I will keep the other writer’s ideas and writing confidential and will not share this information with anyone without the express written permission of the writer/owner. I will not market or even discuss this information with anyone outside this group.

3. I also understand that many stories and ideas are similar and/or have common themes and from time to time, two or more people can independently and simultaneously generate the same concept or movie idea.

4. If I have an idea that is the same as or very similar to another group member’s idea, I’ll immediately contact Hal and present proof that I had this idea prior to the beginning of the class. If Hal deems them to be the same idea or close enough to cause harm to either party, he’ll request both parties to present another concept for the class.

5. If you don’t present proof to Hal that you have the same idea as another person, you agree that all ideas presented to this group are the sole ownership of the person who presented them and you will not write or market another group member’s ideas.

6. Finally, I agree not to bring suit against anyone in this group for any reason, unless they use a substantial portion of my copyrighted work in a manner that is public and/or that prevents me from marketing my script by shopping it to production companies, agents, managers, actors, networks, studios or any other entertainment industry organizations or people.

This completes the Group Release Form for the class.

[Roger Tribble]

Having computer issues. Ugh! I might have already posted.

Roger Tribble

I have worked with my wife on 4 screenplays; One on my own; currently have one in process. What I want to get from the class — Become a better writer; understand as many aspects of Screenwriting as possible. Background in Mental health field; Followed by working with unemployed and underemployed folks. Connect them with best fit to businesses for on-the-job-training. This was a private company working a federal grant. Thank god I had a severe childhood trauma. Difficult — but this allowed me to connect with folks from all backgrounds. I was crazy god at this. Helped so many folks. The woo-woo part – I didn’t feel I was working. Next into work with at risk youth in high schools in San Francisco. Same — did not feel like I was working. This program then came in number one of 22 (or 24) operations in major cities.

Recently I was in charge of R&D on recovery techniques on complex ores. Quite a change — amazing challenge.

I love creative work. (play). I have always written nonfiction. I had no idea I can write fiction (with technical input, cell biology, metallurgy, multiple analytic devices, etc). I love the “teachers” and the dedication they have. Took classes from them a few years ago. Have groan as a writer — but still a beginner. (really).

I’m already behind in the lessons. AND I’m taking another course on the 15th.
This fiction writing is quit a challenge.

Thank you for reading my intro.

[Roger Tribble]

1. Name? Roger Tribble

2. How many scripts you’ve written? 4 with my wife, 1 myself & another in process

3. What you hope to get out of the class? A hell of a lot! Improve my writing; Narrative; Composition; Dialogue; Character Development; How to Integrate science and education knowledge into writing a story.

4. Something unique, special, strange or unusual about you? Atheist until numerous Spiritual experiences convinced me otherwise; Career in R&D in Metallurgical mining – holistic; At-risk youth integrate with companies — On-The-Job-Training; Very effective — from insane childhood. More “stuff”.