Ramon Espinoza
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DAY7
Applying Plot and CharacterArc to Your Outline
ASSIGNMENT
1. Logline:
On the day of his daughter’s dead, a government official finds out she was part of a prostitution ring that work for higher government officials. While investigating this, he discovers a conspiracy to steal pension money by members of the government that now want him dead. He will have to decide between clean his daughter’s name or expose the conspiracy before they get to him.
2. Plot/Plot Summary: Riddle: Robert, a government official, has to figure out why his daughter killed herself. First, he learns that it was due to gossip about her being a slut in college and some photos running around. Then, trying to find out who leaked the images, he finds out the photos are genuine, and the rumors go beyond that. His daughter was the leader of a prostitution ring on campus. She provided the service to higher government officials. Then he discovers that she did not kill herself; she was murdered.
The next piece on the puzzle is that Robert finds out that her daughter discovered a conspiracy to steal pension money from government members. Then he finds out His best friend and daughter’s godfather, Thomas, is the leader of this conspiracy, and not only he was involved with her daughter, but he has been abusing her since she was 14. And wants him dead for asking too many questions.
When he finds out everything, he wants vengeance and does everything in his hands to achieve this goal. Still, in the end, he finds himself between letting the crime being committed survive and letting his daughter’s reputation be clean or trashing her daughter’s reputation and dying himself by exposing the corruption.
1. Structure:
1. Opening:
We open with a benefit dinner, attended by Robert, a government official, his college daughter; their relationship has been distant since his wife died of cancer four years ago. And his best friend and daughter’s godfather, Thomas.
2.Inciting Incident.
A day after he reconnects with his daughter, Robert finds out that she has committed suicide; when he asks why the university tells him that it is due to a rumor, and some photos circulated the university, calling her a slut..
3. By page 10, you know what the movie is about:
Robert sets out to investigate the facts to clear his daughter’s name. So he sends a detective he knows very well from his days as a CIA agent.
4. First turning point at end of Act 1:
The detective investigates and finds out that his daughter did have a secret life: she was part of a group of university prostitutes who provided services to high-ranking government officials. And that she did not commit suicide, they killed her; however, the detective does not finish to inform him why he is killed.
5. Mid-Point
Robert, full of rage and thirst for revenge, now tries to find out who killed his daughter and why to unmask them and clear her name.
6. Second turning point at end of Act 2
Robert discovers that his daughter belonged to a prostitution network and that she was the leader of it and that his best friend and daughter’s godfather abused her since she was 14 years old. And that, in a session with an official, she discovered a conspiracy to steal workers’ pensions. She was most likely killed for it. Then Robert suffers an attack. Someone wants to kill him. And they kill the people who bring him closer to the truth. Investigating like this has become impossible.
7.Crisis
Robert realizes what this could mean for him, for his daughter’s reputation, and for the rest of his friends and family. His friend contacts him and gives him a choice, telling him that he can clean up the image of his dead daughter and stop persecuting him if he accepts a part of the pension money and stops investigating further. Or he will release the truth about his daughter, to stain more her name, and will end up killing him.
8.Climax
Robert decides to reveal everything. So he goes for the papers with his contact, but he is killed just as he hands him the papers, to which Robert has to run for his life.
9.Resolution
Robert has to get to a point where he will send things to one of his contacts, a journalist who will publish the information right then and there. Robert succeeds, but at the price of his life.
In the end, the culprits are arrested, the truth of his daughter comes to light. And he dies as one more victim of government corruption.
4. Protagonist Character Arc:
Part to be changed: To be a good father and husband, you must accept your faults.
Biggest fear: Being exposed as a bad father and a bad husband
Completion of arc: Robert must accept and expose his flaws and their consequences to the world in
order to expose the public pension conspiracy.
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What I’ve learned doing this assignment is that when you have a great concept, the outline writes itself.
Logline- Robert, a government official, has to figure out why his daughter killed herself, first, he learns that it was due to a gossip, about her being a slut in college, and some photos running around. Then, trying to find out who leak the photos, he finds out the photos are true, and the rumors goes beyond that. His daughter was the leader of a prostitution ring on campus. She provided the service to higher government officials. Then he discovers that she did not kill herself, she was murdered. The next piece on the puzzle is that Robert finds out that her daughter discovered a conspiracy to steal pension money by members of he government. Then he finds out His best friend and daughter’s godfather, Thomas, is the leader of this conspiracy. And wants him dead too for asking too many questions. When he finds out everything, he wants vengeance and does everything in his hands to achieve this goal. Still, in the end, he finds himself between letting the crime being committed survive and letting his daughter’s reputation be clean or trashing her daughter’s reputation and dying himself by exposing the corruption.
1. Opening:
We open with a benefit dinner, attended by Robert, a government official, his college daughter; their relationship has been distant since his wife died of cancer four years ago. And his best friend and daughter’s godfather, Thomas.
2. Inciting Incident.
A day after he reconnects with his daughter, Robert finds out that she has committed suicide; when he asks why the university tells him that it is due to a rumor, and some photos circulated the university, calling her a slut..
3. By page 10, you know what the movie is about:
Robert sets out to investigate the facts to clear his daughter’s name. So he sends a detective he knows very well from his days as a CIA agent.
4. First turning point at end of Act 1:
The detective investigates and finds out that his daughter did have a secret life: she was part of a group of university prostitutes who provided services to high-ranking government officials. And that she did not commit suicide, they killed her; however, the detective does not finish to inform him why he is killed.
5. Mid-Point
Robert, full of rage and thirst for revenge, now tries to find out who killed his daughter and why to unmask them and clear her name.
6. Second turning point at end of Act 2
Robert discovers that his daughter belonged to a prostitution network and that she was the leader of it and that his best friend and daughter’s godfather abused her since she was 14 years old. And that, in a session with an official, she discovered a conspiracy to steal workers’ pensions. She was most likely killed for it. Then Robert suffers an attack. Someone wants to kill him. And they kill the people who bring him closer to the truth. Investigating like this has become impossible.
7.Crisis
Robert realizes what this could mean for him, for his daughter’s reputation, and for the rest of his friends and family. His friend contacts him and gives him a choice, telling him that he can clean up the image of his dead daughter and stop persecuting him if he accepts a part of the pension money and stops investigating further. Or he will release the truth about his daughter, to stain more her name, and will end up killing him.
8.Climax
Robert decides to reveal everything. So he goes for the papers with his contact, but he is killed just as he hands him the papers, to which Robert has to run for his life.
9.Resolution
Robert has to get to a point where he will send things to one of his contacts, a journalist who will publish the information right then and there. Robert succeeds, but at the price of his life.
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What
I’ve learned doing this assignment is the questions, honestly, I did not know, and they are vital for the creation on early stage.a. Concept: Robert, a government official, has to figure out why his daughter killed herself. First, he learns that it was due to gossip about her being a slut in college and some photos running around. Then, trying to find out who leaked the images, he finds out the photos are genuine, and the rumors go beyond that. His daughter was the leader of a prostitution ring on campus. She provided the service to higher government officials. Then he discovers that she did not kill herself; she was murdered.
The next piece on the puzzle is that Robert finds out that her daughter discovered a conspiracy to steal pension money from government members. Then he finds out His best friend and daughter’s godfather, Thomas, is the leader of this conspiracy, and not only he was involved with her daughter, but he has been abusing her since she was 14. And wants him dead for asking too many questions.
When he finds out everything, he wants vengeance and does everything in his hands to achieve this goal. Still, in the end, he finds himself between letting the crime being committed survive and letting his daughter’s reputation be clean or trashing her daughter’s reputation and dying himself by exposing the corruption.
b. Dramatic Question:
Will Robert be able to find and punish those responsible for his daughter’s death?
c. Main conflict: Between Robert and the group that orchestrated the conspiracy, who try to stop him from asking more questions.
d. Dilemma: he begins his journey looking to clean his daughter’s reputation, and at the end, he has to choose, between dying and exposing his daughter’s secret life, or living while maintaining her daughter’s name clean.
e. Theme: despite the pain, a family should stay together.
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I learned not to stay with the first way to telling a story.
1. Looking through the 10 plots above, select two that could possibly work for your story.
17. Discovery-This plot is more about the character making the discovery than it is about
the discovery itself. This story is often about having to reconcile past
versus the new present for the character. “You were, you are, you will be”
is how the story is delivered. The characters are searching to understand something fundamental about themselves.
Usually, the character is already on the cusp of change. We get a glimpse of the main character’s “former life,” but quickly move into the present and future. A catalyst forces a significant change and the character moves
into the crisis. Revelations are made along the way in proportion to the
events of the story. The character is being forced to look at their life
for real and take stock of who he or she really is. In the end, they emerge much wiser, although often, they do so only just before dying.
16. Sacrifice-This plot has a strong moral dilemma at its center. The protagonist is playing for high stakes and a sacrifice must be made at a great personal cost. They should undergo a major transformation during the course of the story, moving from a lower moral state to a higher one, with events forcing their decisions throughout the story.
1. Tell us your original concept.
When a school gossip comes to light about his daughter having an only fans account, a government official embarks on an in-depth investigation to find out where the word came from and force the culprit to repair his daughter’s reputation, even if she has already taken her own life. But everything changes when he finds out her daughter was not only guilty but was the leader of a prostitution ring of college girls serving high government officials, and that she didn’t kill herself, she was murdered for finding out a conspiration to rob millions of dollars from the public pensions. And now, the same men who killed her are trying to kill him.
2. Tell the name of the plot selection and write a logline for each one.
Discovery- After the death of his daughter, Robert insists on discovering what he did wrong as a father, in the process, he must assume his lousy work as a father because he did not realize that his daughter was being abused by his best friend, and This prompted her to commit suicide. However, he finds a way to redeem himself by clearing his name.
Sacrifice- After discovering that his daughter died because he discovered a conspiracy to rob millions of citizens of their pension money, Robert, a government official, must sacrifice his reputation and that of his daughter, to expose the crime.
3. Then, looking at the four plots (two from yesterday and two from today) tell us which plot you would like to use throughout the Outlining module.
I think THE RIDDLE WITH A POINT ON REVENGE and a little sacrifice at the end is the one.
Riddle: Robert, a government official, has to figure out why his daughter killed herself. First, he learns that it was due to gossip about her being a slut in college and some photos running around. Then, trying to find out who leaked the images, he finds out the photos are genuine, and the rumors go beyond that. His daughter was the leader of a prostitution ring on campus. She provided the service to higher government officials. Then he discovers that she did not kill herself; she was murdered.
The next piece on the puzzle is that Robert finds out that her daughter discovered a conspiracy to steal pension money from government members. Then he finds out His best friend and daughter’s godfather, Thomas, is the leader of this conspiracy, and not only he was involved with her daughter, but he has been abusing her since she was 14. And wants him dead for asking too many questions.
When he finds out everything, he wants vengeance and does everything in his hands to achieve this goal. Still, in the end, he finds himself between letting the crime being committed survive and letting his daughter’s reputation be clean or trashing her daughter’s reputation and dying himself by exposing the corruption.
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I learned to tell a story focusing on different ways of telling it.
1. Looking through the 10 plots above, select two that could possibly work for your story.
7. The Riddle
This one challenges the viewer to solve the riddle before the protagonist does. The core of your riddle should be cleverness: hiding that which is
in plain sight. You set up a mystery, provide clues and misdirection, and
finally give the solution, explaining the motives of the antagonist and the real sequence of events (as opposed to what seemed to have happened).
6. Revenge
Your hero has a moral justification for vengeance and seeks retaliation against the antagonist.
The natural progression: normal life, a crime against the hero, normal channels fail to resolve it, plans for revenge, pursuit of the antagonist, the confrontation, apparent failure that requires improvising, final revenge.
2. Tell the name of the plot selection and write a one paragraph synopsis for each one.
Riddle: Robert, a government official, has to figure out why his daughter killed herself, first, he learns that it was due to a gossip, about her being a slut in college, and some photos running around. Then, trying to find out who leak the photos, he finds out the photos are true, and the rumors goes beyond that. His daughter was the leader of a prostitution ring on campus. She provided the service to higher government officials. Then he discovers that she did not kill herself, she was murdered. The next piece on the puzzle is that Robert finds out that her daughter discovered a conspiracy to steal pension money by members of he government. Then he finds out His best friend and daughter’s godfather, Thomas, is the leader of this conspiracy. And wants him dead too for asking too many questions.
Revenge: Robert, a government official, doesn’t get along with his daughter after his wife dies of cancer and tries to reconnect with her, but she commits suicide. Obsessed by this, Robert embarks on an investigation of why his daughter died, and it turns out it was because of college gossip. Obsessed with getting revenge and clearing his daughter’s name, he decides to find the one who released the story, only to find that his daughter didn’t kill herself; she was murdered. His desire for revenge then increases, transmitting all his self-loathing to his daughter’s killers. Everything gets complicated when he discovers a conspiracy to steal pension money and his friend, who ordered to kill his daughter, abused her when she was a minor. Robert will stop at nothing to make him pay for his betrayal.
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1. List your concept.
1- When a school gossip comes to light about his daughter having an only fans account, a government official embarks on an in-depth investigation to find out where the word came from and force the culprit to repair his daughter’s reputation, even if she has already taken her own life. But everything changes when he finds out her daughter was not only guilty but was the leader of a prostitution ring of college girls serving high government officials, and that she didn’t kill herself, she was murdered for finding out a conspiration to rob millions of dollars from the public pensions. And now, the same men who killed her are trying to kill him.
2. Tell us the Character Structure you choose for your story.
Thriller
4. Dramatic Triangle
A dramatic triangle has three characters wrapped up in a web where there are deeper implications to their relationships than what we see in the beginning. Much of the drama is based around how the three people are connected as the layers are revealed.
2. Give us one sentence on each of your lead characters.
1 Robert is a government official who investigates why her daughter Audrey killed herself.
2Audrey is a college girl who had a prostitution ring and discovered a conspiration before being assassinated.
3Thomas is a government senator who is conspiring with a group of powerful people to steal the pension money, and wont stop at anything to do it.
3. In one or two paragraphs, tell us how you see the character structure playing out in your story.
Robert, un oficial del gobierno, su hija Audrey, una joven universitaria que no tiene una gran relacion con su padre desde que su madre murio de cancer. Y Thomas, un senador con muchas conexiones, amigo de la infancia de Robert y padrino de Audrey. Thomas, se vuelve cliente del círculo de prostitución de Audrey, y ellos dos se vuelven amantes. Hasta que ella descubre la conspiración, y Thomas manda a matarla. Robert investiga y se entera de la relacion entre su mejor amigo y su hija, y de cómo su amigo sedujo a su hija siendo ella menor de edad y como fue conectándose ella para formar su negocio de scort service, aprovechando que muchas chicas no tienen dinero para pagar su universidad y no pueden darse el lujo de quedar endeudadas de por vida.
Robert, a government official, and his daughter Audrey, a college girl who doesn’t have much relationship with her father since her mother died of cancer. And Thomas, a senator with many connections, Robert’s childhood friend and Audrey’s godfather. Thomas becomes a client of Audrey’s prostitution ring, and they become lovers. Until she discovers the conspiracy and Thomas has her killed.
5. Answer the question, “What I learned doing this assignment is…?” and put it above your work.
I learned about the different structures and how they connect with genre.
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Ramon Espinoza
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Watch 1<sup>st</sup> time for:
Where is Junah coming
from?He was a player who lost his swing.
Where is Bagger Vance coming
from?He has been a caddie.
What makes them right for
their roles in this movie?Junah-An important match is coming, and he is a very good player, invited, but he couldn’t, due to his posttraumatic stress.
Bager. He is a caddy, who believes in him. And can help him opvercome this trauma and find his swiing again.
Watch 2<sup>nd</sup> time for:
What drama was this scene built
around?Junah is frustrated, and is shoting in the dark. Trying to figure out what happened, because, despite deniying it, he is hurt that he cant swing anymore.
What traits showed up in these two
character’s words and actions?Junah- depressed, posttraumatic, inquisitive, generous.
Bagger-
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Watch 1st time for:
What traits
do you see or hear in these main characters –
Will- GENIOUS,
, PRIDE, protective, troublemaker
Skylar- AUTHENTIC,
NICE, INTELIGENT, SPEAKS HER MIND.
Chuckie- LIAR-
STORYTELLER, LOVERBOY,What drama did the writers
create to trigger and deliver these traits?-to deliver wills trait,of protective, and pride, they manage to put his friend in a position of abuse, so Will could show up and defend him.
-to show his genius- they put a situation when Chuky lied about going to a class with the girls, and then got the bully talk about that class and start to showing off about it. Will simply enter and finished him in a matter of 5 minutes, showing him that he knows more about books than he.
To show his troublemaker side, Will ask this guy to step outside.
Why do you think the group
picked a Harvard bar?Will work on the campus. To pick up girls way above their leage. To see what it felt like.
insights/breakthroughs what
makes this character great from a writing perspective.:-He is a genius locked in a rebellious young man.
-think about create scenes specifically to make the character’s traits come out, I had not thought about it and I had not used it.
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HI!, My name Ramon Espinoza.
2. I have writen 10 scripts, all for comic books.
3. I hope to become a better writer and to jump from comics to movies.
4. Something unique, special, strange or unusual about me, well, I paint, I do animation, and Im currently working on a animated short film.
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Ramon Espinoza
I agree with the confidentiality agreement.