[Renee Johnson]

Renee’s Horror Plot
What I learned… A Lot!! This is the assignment that begins everything. We all attack this assignment different and for me the great layout is my biggest / toughest part.
This assignment cemented in the fact I needed more victims/players. Each plays their unique part in adding to the story, the plot and all the ghoulish gore slashed victim entertainment.

Great assignment. I labored through this one. But man o man I like what I got.

[Renee Johnson]

Renee’s Characters for Horror
What I learned… I was thinking of my boring story with the usual bad boy suspects and realized with this assignment what it needs. More Cow Bell!!!
They are All Sinners. Diirty Rotten all of them and all deserve what they get. Hopefully the audience will see it my way.

They will be One by One, set up, BAM-boozled and slowly have their last breath squeezed out of them.

Ahhhh what fun. Great assignment. Thanks Hal.

[Renee Johnson]

“What I learned doing this assignment is.. I learned so much more. Details. I’m sure more will come to me. This is a great lesson. It so made me think. I have reminded myself of the Dark Triad to help me understand my Monster. I need to stop thinking like an old outdated woman to complete the task of creating my Monster. It is interesting. I really never believed I could achieve what I have so far. Again, what a great lesson. Thank you.

[Renee Johnson]

Hello all,

I’m Renee. I hope to get a good script out of this class. About me…. I need a computer soooo bad. It takes forever to make this thing do what I need it to do. I can’t explain dragging my feet. One of these days I will end my torment and make the leap. Until then I will continue in my dread.

[Renee Johnson]

ASSIGNMENT
What I Learned…
So I think I’m gonna make mine more of a Horror/Comedy. I don’t know, still tossing it around. I watched a few and Zombieland seems to be what I’m looking for. Not a ton of dialogue but the action is BAM! The Zombies are so disgusting. They are quick on their feet and present a very deadly threat. They are tough to kill and will find you.
Title / Concept: Zombieland
Terrorize The Characters: Chased by Zombies
Isolation: They’re everywhere. Bathroom stalls….
Death: To be eaten by a Zombie
Monster/Villain: Zombies – blood drooling, vomiting, broken and limping, half rotting Zombies
High Tension: Being chased by Zombies. Fighting off Zombies. They were Great Scary as Hell Zombies!! And they were Everywhere!!
Departure from Reality: When would it be impossible to find a Twinkie? And when would we ever go around shooting Zombies? Only when we’re the only sane people walking and a Zombie is eating the intestines of their loved one in the street.
Moral Statement: Family and/or belonging to a group we bond with is all we need.
Fun to watch. Made me jump a couple of times.

[Renee Johnson]

I Renee Johnson Agree to this Release Form.
GROUP RELEASE FORM
As a member of this group, I agree to the following:
1. That I will keep the processes, strategies, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class confidential, and that I will NOT share any of this program either privately, with a group, posting online, writing articles, through video or computer programming, or in any other way that would make those processes, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class available to anyone who is not a member of this class.
2. That each writer’s work here is copyrighted and that writer is the sole owner of that work. That includes this program which is copyrighted by Hal Croasmun. I acknowledge that submission of an idea to this group constitutes a claim of and the recognition of ownership of that idea.
I will keep the other writer’s ideas and writing confidential and will not share this information with anyone without the express written permission of the writer/owner. I will not market or even discuss this information with anyone outside this group.
3. I also understand that many stories and ideas are similar and/or have common themes and from time to time, two or more people can independently and simultaneously generate the same concept or movie idea.
4. If I have an idea that is the same as or very similar to another group member’s idea, I’ll immediately contact Hal and present proof that I had this idea prior to the beginning of the class. If Hal deems them to be the same idea or close enough to cause harm to either party, he’ll request both parties to present another concept for the class.
5. If you don’t present proof to Hal that you have the same idea as another person, you agree that all ideas presented to this group are the sole ownership of the person who presented them and you will not write or market another group member’s ideas.
6. Finally, I agree not to bring suit against anyone in this group for any reason, unless they use a substantial portion of my copyrighted work in a manner that is public and/or that prevents me from marketing my script by shopping it to production companies, agents, managers, actors, networks, studios or any other entertainment industry organizations or people.
This completes the Group Release Form for the class.

[Renee Johnson]

4 What I learned…. I went back to this assignment. I see more of each character. Took better notes of who they are. This will go a long way into their dialogue and actions. I have a better understanding of romance and how to get them there. We are all so complicated but in fantasy land of movies /story telling it only takes 4 traits to create great memorable and lovable characters that we hope will succeed. I also have a better understanding how to reel in and capture a better character if I don’t stray away from 4 traits but emphasize them. I will say I am taking more time to think about my stories than I used to.

[Renee Johnson]

So…. my existing project I knew has an unclear direction – a good beginning and …. the end. I learned so much more about how to form the direction with a great logline. Still not great but it’s a start. I realize how to give my lead characters the direction their story needs to go in. It’s embarrassing to admit but I labored over this. My logline is coming together. My script is a comedy farce with many characters and their stories. It might make a better TV series but I’m going to complete the feature and see where it takes me/it.

[Renee Johnson]

Renee’s Rom Com Project
What I Learned… I have a really good idea. It’s fresh and ridiculous but it’s so incomplete. I discovered some of the pieces my story needed. I may not have the complete new story layout but I do believe I am on the road to fix my comedy. Great assignment.

[Renee Johnson]

1. Renee Johnson
2. How many scripts you’ve written? several but…..
3. What you hope to get out of the class? I have a comedy that needs work. With the help of your AI class and some re-thinking I’m hoping to finally pull it off.
4. Something unique, special, strange or unusual about you? I really don’t think there’s anything special about me. I’m plainer than plain. So I do like flowers. I believe flowers in a room or growing in a pot or garden is everything. Even fake flowers where there’s now sun or water. They’re everything. anyway, that’s me. Nice to meet you all.
We look forward to working with you all!

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[Renee Johnson]

Below is the release form. You have one of two choices here:
AGREE, in which case, you Reply to this topic and include three things at the top of the page:
1. Renee Johnson
2. “I agree to the terms of this release form.”
3. Please leave the entire text below to confirm what you agree to.

If you agree to the terms of the release form, then you can post your assignments into the group and your cohort can give feedback on them.
Also, if you don’t agree to this group confidentiality agreement, you’ll still need to sign an agreement that says you will keep the strategies, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class confidential.

GROUP RELEASE FORM
As a member of this group, I agree to the following:
1. That I will keep the processes, strategies, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class confidential, and that I will NOT share any of this program either privately, with a group, posting online, writing articles, through video or computer programming, or in any other way that would make those processes, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class available to anyone who is not a member of this class.
2. That each writer’s work here is copyrighted and that writer is the sole owner of that work. That includes this program which is copyrighted by Hal Croasmun. I acknowledge that submission of an idea to this group constitutes a claim of and the recognition of ownership of that idea.
I will keep the other writer’s ideas and writing confidential and will not share this information with anyone without the express written permission of the writer/owner. I will not market or even discuss this information with anyone outside this group.
3. I also understand that many stories and ideas are similar and/or have common themes and from time to time, two or more people can independently and simultaneously generate the same concept or movie idea.
4. If I have an idea that is the same as or very similar to another group member’s idea, I’ll immediately contact Hal and present proof that I had this idea prior to the beginning of the class. If Hal deems them to be the same idea or close enough to cause harm to either party, he’ll request both parties to present another concept for the class.
5. If you don’t present proof to Hal that you have the same idea as another person, you agree that all ideas presented to this group are the sole ownership of the person who presented them and you will not write or market another group member’s ideas.
6. Finally, I agree not to bring suit against anyone in this group for any reason, unless they use a substantial portion of my copyrighted work in a manner that is public and/or that prevents me from marketing my script by shopping it to production companies, agents, managers, actors, networks, studios or any other entertainment industry organizations or people.
This completes the Group Release Form for the class.

[Renee Johnson]

Subject line: Renee’s Hero and Villain
W.I.L. …. I am seeing one of my mistakes. You worded it pretty good above – I do it more than I realize and I recognize (in parts) that I stray. I’ll explain – I tend to let my characters slip away from the storyline of ACTION and slide into DRAMA. It’s obvious it takes away from their great traits of ACTION /ADVENTURE down the rabbit hole of Drama and also significantly alters dialogue and then the storyline is off track.
I like my Hero. I really dislike my Villain. So that’s all good.
This was a great assignment. I’m not sure how I want it to end yet. But the cogs are turning. The Villain will die for sure but my Hero and his girl may die also because of their story. My one thought on that is that in 3:10 to Yuma, several people stated they were disappointed to see Christian Bale’s character die in the end. Something to think about. I don’t want the audience leaving feeling cheated. I guess that settles that.

[Renee Johnson]

Hello All, I’m Renee.
I’ve written a few scripts that I really enjoyed but none are good enough. I have two that I think have the best possibilities.
I am hoping to redo the storyline, improve my characters, create better dialogue and end up with a script with legs.
ODD / NEW I lead a very boring life. Mundane. I live in a small gated senior community and I have a stalker. It leaves something askew to let me know it was around/watching. It is not friendly. I could say more but can’t give it too much of my time as it has given me chills (thinking I was alone outside at night – I wasn’t) and disrupted my life.
So I will sink into my writing and maybe it will get bored and move on to someone else.

[Renee Johnson]

Renee Johnson, “I agree to the terms of this release form.”

If you agree to the terms of the release form, then you can post your assignments into the group and your cohort can give feedback on them.

Also, if you don’t agree to this group confidentiality agreement, you’ll still need to sign an agreement that says you will keep the strategies, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class confidential.

GROUP RELEASE FORM

As a member of this group, I agree to the following:

1. That I will keep the processes, strategies, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class confidential, and that I will NOT share any of this program either privately, with a group, posting online, writing articles, through video or computer programming, or in any other way that would make those processes, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class available to anyone who is not a member of this class.

2. That each writer’s work here is copyrighted and that writer is the sole owner of that work. That includes this program which is copyrighted by Hal Croasmun. I acknowledge that submission of an idea to this group constitutes a claim of and the recognition of ownership of that idea.

I will keep the other writer’s ideas and writing confidential and will not share this information with anyone without the express written permission of the writer/owner. I will not market or even discuss this information with anyone outside this group.

3. I also understand that many stories and ideas are similar and/or have common themes and from time to time, two or more people can independently and simultaneously generate the same concept or movie idea.

4. If I have an idea that is the same as or very similar to another group member’s idea, I’ll immediately contact Hal and present proof that I had this idea prior to the beginning of the class. If Hal deems them to be the same idea or close enough to cause harm to either party, he’ll request both parties to present another concept for the class.

5. If you don’t present proof to Hal that you have the same idea as another person, you agree that all ideas presented to this group are the sole ownership of the person who presented them and you will not write or market another group member’s ideas.

6. Finally, I agree not to bring suit against anyone in this group for any reason, unless they use a substantial portion of my copyrighted work in a manner that is public and/or that prevents me from marketing my script by shopping it to production companies, agents, managers, actors, networks, studios or any other entertainment industry organizations or people.

This completes the Group Release Form for the class.

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[Renee Johnson]

Renee’s Character Interviews

What I learned… again this is a rewrite for me. I enjoyed the questions as they revealed more about the characters I fell in love with. A great opportunity for enhancement.

My Protag shows much more emotion. He will go from confident but naive to nervous and struggling with cluelessness until he bursts, ending with his confidence back but wiser.

My first Antag is Very full of emotion. His emotion starts the story and keeps it going. If I do this correctly the audience should be able to look back and see how he carefully (with a few calculated mis-steps) disguised himself.

My second Antag – I Love, Love, Love him. He is So Cool, So Calculating and On and So Very Handsome. Who wouldn’t be taken by him? Again if done correctly, the audience should be able to look back and see how he disguised himself.

This assignment is again very good to refresh secondary characters also.

[Renee Johnson]

Renee’s Character Profiles Part 2

What I learned…. to exagerate an target the traits of not only my main characters but my secondary characters. They ALL have a purpose and need to bring their personalities along with their professions to fulfill their roles and properlycomplete the story.

As I am doing a rewrite, I see errors I did not notice before. I did not keep characters true to their traits and focused on their roles. I also did not give them their due. I now have my opportunity to make them shine.

Great Assignment. Made me think. I’ve been busy with this one. Thank you

[Renee Johnson]

Renee’s Character Profiles Part 1

What I learned… I love this ridiculous story. It still makes me laugh. I do see where I need to amp it up. Great class!

Protag – Angel – Runner – if skirt chasing was a profession this guy puts in overtime. He got himself in too deep staring at Hot Wife in her bikini and ends up ducking buckshot from a very jealous Oil Baron. Now he’s on the run. Good Luck, Angel.

3. Pick the type of role your Antagonist will play and give us a few sentences on how they will fulfill that role.

I have 2 Antagonists

Antag 1 – Oil Baron – Villain – So jealous of anyone looking at his Hot Wife that he loses control of himself. The more side Characters stir the pot the more He keeps the chase going.

Antag 2 – The Enigma – Change Agent – He’s so smooth and brilliant – What a fucking hustler. Always on top of the game, because it is only a game to him. Who the fuck is he anyway?

4. Other characters

Supporting characters: Hot Wife, Snarky Housekeeper at mansion,
Enigma’s friends at trailer park
Minor roles: Naïve Maid,
trailer park residents
Background characters: Trailer
park residents

5. Genre.

Rom-Com or Buddy Movie – I have
a Comedy Farce. I get that it’s a
tough sell but I believe I have a good handle on it. WTF do I have to lose?

Running behind . will post what I have

[Renee Johnson]

Lesson 1

Renee’s Transformational journey.

What I learned doing this assignment … his Old Ways need to be more extreme and noticeable.

Angel is my Hero. His Character Arc that represents a transformation – He actually cares about crazy old Granny and the where and how she spends her last years.

Internal Journey: The more she displays the loss of memory and her emotional rollercoaster, the more Angel is truly concerned. (So initially he is stumped at her odd behavior. )

External Journey: Initially he makes excuses for her because he needs a place to stay. He then covers for her and eventually changes the world around her to make her comfortable.

Old Ways – selfish & arrogant, only wants the best of everything, user, Total f’ing skirt chaser

New Ways – understanding, focused on dating lady cop, caring

[Renee Johnson]

Hello All, My name is Renee Johnson. I’ve written several scripts but none with legs. Been in many SU classes. Love you Hal and Cheryl. I’ve been hiding for a few years. I hope to collect my thoughts, my keen sense of humor and redo a favorite correctly.

I’ve been preoccupied and took this leap back into writing. I feel I recently got one of my lives back. Life is too much fun to miss.

[Renee Johnson]

Renee Johnson “I agree to the terms of this release form.”

[Renee Johnson]

Hello All, I’m Renee. I’ve been out of the writing loop for a while. I have a couple of good scripts that didn’t go anywhere so my intent is to dust one of them off and fix it.

I’m nobody 9 – 5’er. I’m at a chop shop all day and am in the process of packing and moving mid February. Apologizes in advance for falling behind but I’ve been looking forward to getting back in the swing of things and my fun fun script.

Odd?…. hmmm well the shelves are almost bare. Boxes and boxes (some stacked to the ceiling) and I don’t miss a thing. I am so not looking forward to unpacking all this crap.

Anyway, Hey Hal and Cheryl – good to be home. This is going to be fun.

[Renee Johnson]

“I agree to the terms of this release form.”

3. Please leave the entire text below to confirm what you agree to.

GROUP RELEASE FORM

As a member of this group, I agree to the following:

1. That I will keep the processes, strategies, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class confidential, and that I will NOT share any of this program either privately, with a group, posting online, writing articles, through video or computer programming, or in any other way that would make those processes, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class available to anyone who is not a member of this class.

2. That each writer’s work here is copyrighted and that writer is the sole owner of that work. That includes this program which is copyrighted by Hal Croasmun. I acknowledge that submission of an idea to this group constitutes a claim of and the recognition of ownership of that idea.

I will keep the other writer’s ideas and writing confidential and will not share this information with anyone without the express written permission of the writer/owner. I will not market or even discuss this information with anyone outside this group.

3. I also understand that many stories and ideas are similar and/or have common themes and from time to time, two or more people can independently and simultaneously generate the same concept or movie idea.

4. If I have an idea that is the same as or very similar to another group member’s idea, I’ll immediately contact Hal and present proof that I had this idea prior to the beginning of the class. If Hal deems them to be the same idea or close enough to cause harm to either party, he’ll request both parties to present another concept for the class.

5. If you don’t present proof to Hal that you have the same idea as another person, you agree that all ideas presented to this group are the sole ownership of the person who presented them and you will not write or market another group member’s ideas.

6. Finally, I agree not to bring suit against anyone in this group for any reason, unless they use a substantial portion of my copyrighted work in a manner that is public and/or that prevents me from marketing my script by shopping it to production companies, agents, managers, actors, networks, studios or any other entertainment industry organizations or people.

This completes the Group Release Form for the class.

[Renee Johnson]

Renee’s Guidelines

What I learned… what a fun project. Really got me thinking and moving forward.

ASSIGNMENT PART 1: My Project

A. It can be done as a contained story. Yes

B. You can write a pitch in one or two sentences. Yes

C. There is something unique about it. Yes

ASSIGNMENT PART 2: AS THEY DID – TITLE: formerly Kindergarten Cop to …

A. People – a lot of people

B. Stunts – some fist fights, a car chase scene

C. Extras – mall crowds – school full of students – class of kindergarteners

D. Wardrobe – takes place over many many days – big wardrobe

E. Hair and Make Up – it’s Arnold, plus many women and it was the trail end of ‘big hair 80’s’

F. Kids and Animals – lots of kids and a ferret

COVID GUIDELINE VERSION: Summer School Math Balls (not to be another Breakfast Club)

A. People – 3 students but Arnold will be played by a Senior Citizen/Retired Cop

B. Stunts – maybe a driving lesson in the parking lot and a couple of fender benders

C. Extras – hmmm a couple of office staff, an EMT and a Security Guard

D. Wardrobe – Nope, he’s old and they’re small town high school kids.

E. Hair and Make Up – Nope – see wardrobe

F. Kids and Animals – Nope

G. Quarantine – not a problem

[Renee Johnson]

Deni, still in Az. Still working. Will call sun morning or Tuesday

[Renee Johnson]

DENI !!!!! Hello. I missed you!!!! It’s me Renee. Sooo good to see you. REALLY!!!!