Randall Stevens
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Thank you for that information. I am now in the process of sending a registered letter to them. I have also documented all the things I have done in the last week and sent all the info to my attorney. This is very disturbing and I will not be trifled with.
Thanx again
Randall Stevens
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I need help!!!!
Last Thursday I changed my PW and now can’t bring up class I’m enrolled into. Professional Rewrite.
I request help from Customer Service. No answer. The phone has been full od messages since Thursday also. What’s going on???
Randall Stevens
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It’s a damn shame I have to resort to this, but I find no other alternative. The Help e-mails never get answered and the phone call message box is always full!!!!
It’s apparent to me this stuff we submit is never read by Hal or his wife.
I’m not even in this class. I’m supposed to be in Professional Rewrite Course, but somehow I was transferred here.
My hope is someone will read this at the center and contact me to correct this BS!!
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Randall Stevens: SCENE RATINGS
I’ve learned like with so many of these lessons is this is a great methodology to dig deep into the script. I didn’t math the results, because I don’t do math well…lol.
I’ve been working on this for the last four years. I’ve seen this movie hundreds of times, but like hal says i skimmed over a lot. This is a great way to isolate and polish.
LOGLINE: A woman who denies she possesses the dominant trait of a Norse goddess gets abducted by a Norse religious cult to be sacrificed. She discovers she must liberate the trait to prevent the end of the world.
ON SCREEN:
“The woman was given two wings of a great eagle, so that she might fly…out of the serpents reach”.
Revelations 12 : 14
1. (E10) EXT SACRIFICIAL ALTAR, HELEN <st1:state><st1:place>TEXAS</st1:place></st1:state> – NIGHT
Two women, Susan and Karin, are chained to a post on an altar platform. They pull back in fear at what grows before them.
ON SCREEN:
Two days earlier.
2. (E10) <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> LARGE DINNING <st1:stockticker>ROOM</st1:stockticker> WITH STAGE – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Susan is a reluctant speaker at a animal rescue symposium.
3. (E8) <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> INTERSECTION, <st1:place><st1:city>DALLAS</st1:city>, <st1:state>TEXAS</st1:state></st1:place> SUBURB – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
While stopped at a stop light Susan encounters an old woman, Anna, that is shocked to see her. Susan’s mind floods into scene of a young woman chained to a sacrificial altar. When jarred back to reality the woman has disappeared. She shakes it off as just an illusion.
4 (E9).<st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> <st1:place><st1:placename>MASTERS</st1:placename> <st1:placename>STORE & GUN</st1:placename> <st1:placetype>RANGE</st1:placetype></st1:place>, <st1:place><st1:city>FT. WORTH</st1:city> <st1:state>TEXAS</st1:state></st1:place> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Sam and Jumper converse about his love interest Susan. Sam is contemplating a break up, but can’t go through with it. Jumper is curious why her and her father are estranged. Sam draws a blank.
5. (E5) <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> RESTAURANT IN <st1:city><st1:place>DALLAS</st1:place></st1:city> – NIGHT
At a restaurant later, Susan fills in Sam about what brought on the estrangement between her and her dad.
6.(E10) <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> SUSAN’S HOME – NIGHT
Anna makes contact at Susan’s home. She is told that her deceased grandmother is alive in the secluded town of <st1:city><st1:place>Helen</st1:place></st1:city>, <st1:state><st1:place>Texas</st1:place></st1:state>. The leader of the town is going to sacrifice her in two days in an attempt to end the world and that she is the only one that possesses the power to stop it. After Anna turns to ash.
7. (E10) EXT HELEN, REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>SITE</st1:stockticker> – NIGHT
Lord Lokan arrives and tells two elders that the revival has commenced. Karin and Erik agree to stay on the plan to escape.
8. (E8) <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> SUSAN’S HOME, KITCHEN – NIGHT
Sam and Susan have a discussion that turns heated when she denies what all has happened to her that day. She suddenly realizes that it’s her dad that did all of it. Its his way to get her to break the ice and contact him first. Yes, he’s that bullheaded. She wants to forget it ever happened. Sam insist it cannot all be explained away, he urges her to at least call her dad for some perspective. She is reluctant.
9. (E8) <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> SUSAN’S BEDROOM – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Susan’s mother appears as an apparition in the dresser mirror. Susan maintains that it was all a trick by her dad and she refuses to adhere to such foolishness.. Her mother implores her to go to her father for his guidance. Susan’s reluctance is somewhat thwarted when a locket appears on the dresser, the locket that Susan put in her mother’s casket.
10. (E8) <st1:place><st1:placename><st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker></st1:placename> <st1:placename>HELEN</st1:placename> <st1:placename>INN</st1:placename></st1:place>, <st1:stockticker>MAIN</st1:stockticker> <st1:stockticker>ROOM</st1:stockticker> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Lord Lokan and Erik’s Father discuss Erik’s motivation for wanting to be the one to abduct Susan. Erik enters the room and receives his orders. He is reminded that the Blessing, (victim), must enter the town of her own free will. He is informed that if he fails his wife Karin will be sacrificed. She will be held in the blessing room until he returns.
11.(E9) <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> SUSAN”<st1:place>S SUV</st1:place> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
On her way to see her Father Susan has a flashback of the time when her Father tried to tell her about the trait she harbors inside her.
12. (E2) <st1:street><st1:address>EXT HIGHWAY</st1:address></st1:street> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
An exit sign appears on the highway denoting Arlene. Susan’s SUV signals for the exit.
END OF ACT <st1:stockticker>ONE</st1:stockticker>:
ACT TWO:
13. (E10) <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> SUSAN’S SUV – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Sam is on the phone surprised to hear that she is driving to see her Dad. After, she runs into a terrible storm with lightning and hail. Her SUV is thrown into a guardrail and she stops. She sees and then drives to the safety of an overpass.
14. (E10) EXT SUSAN’S SUV – NIGHT
Erik meets Susan and persuades her to drive him to his town where there is a phone and his Dad can fix her vehicle. She is reluctant until her Mother’s voice encourages her to trust that which is within.
15. (E4) <st1:place><st1:placename><st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker></st1:placename> <st1:placename>HELEN</st1:placename> <st1:placename>INN</st1:placename></st1:place> UPSTAIRS HALLWAY ? BLEESING <st1:stockticker>ROOM</st1:stockticker> – NIGHT
Lord Lokan attempts a romantic move on Karin, but is interrupted by an Elder Nygaard.
<st1:street><st1:address>16. (10) EXT REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street>, ENTRANCE TO HELEN – NIGHT
Susan is shocked to see that she is now in the town of <st1:city><st1:place>Helen</st1:place></st1:city>. She is subdued and meets Lord Lokan who she thinks she recognizes, but doesn’t know from where.
She’s taken to the revival site where she witnesses the sacrifice of a young woman. It’s the vision she had from Anna at the intersection. Lord Lokan informs her that the next night she will be the sacrifice.
Lord Lokan feels that there will be an attempt to rescue Susan and directs that the trap at the bridge be set.
17.(E8) <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> PROFESSOR OWEN WAYTHILL’S DEN – NIGHT.
Owen tells Sam in a phone conversation that Susan never arrived. Owen is vague when Sam ask for details of what he knows after Sam mention’s the town of <st1:city><st1:place>Helen</st1:place></st1:city>. He tells Owen he’s driving there tonight.
18.(E6) <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> SAMS TRUCK -NIGHT
Jumper has to physically subdue Sam to get him to slow the truck down.
19.(E5) <st1:place><st1:placename><st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker></st1:placename> <st1:placename>MASTERS</st1:placename> <st1:placename>STORE & GUN</st1:placename> <st1:placetype>RANGE</st1:placetype></st1:place>, <st1:place><st1:city>FT. WORTH</st1:city> <st1:state>TEXAS</st1:state></st1:place> – NIGHT
Sam and Jumper stop at the store for supplies. Before leaving Sam opens his desk drawer and pockets the three coins.
20. (E9) <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> PROFESSOR OWEN WAYTHILL’S DEN – NIGHT.
Owen explains things. He is shocked when he sees the coins. There were only rumors that they ever existed. Owen shows them first half of the Seidr Text. It covers only the history of the Seidr. The second half tells how to harness the power. No one knows where the second half is, but if it is in hands of someone in Helen it would explain what’s going on and fears of cataclysmic circumstances that could arise.
21. (E6) <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> ERIK <st1:stockticker>AND</st1:stockticker> KARIN NYGAARD’S CABIN – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Karin tells Erik she’s afraid about what became of Anna. Also that feeling of some part of her is missing is getting stronger.
22. (E8) <st1:street><st1:address>EXT REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street> ENTRANCE – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
The trio meet Sheriff Justin Earlee. Sam exposes a gate behind some brush. The sheriff explains that the woods cover the road and prevent any entrance.
A deputy stops by with three bagged items they discovered at the overpass where they found Erik’s old broken down SUV. The items are clues that Susan was taken in the woods.
Sam refuses to accept that the woods are inaccessible. He’s going to find away in.
23. (E7) <st1:place><st1:placename><st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker></st1:placename> <st1:placename>HELEN</st1:placename> <st1:placename>INN</st1:placename></st1:place>, <st1:stockticker>MAIN</st1:stockticker> <st1:stockticker>ROOM</st1:stockticker> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Lord Lokan and Elder Nygaard inform Erik that his wife is guilty of heresy and will be sacrificed with the blessing that night. Lord Lokan directs that Karin be held in the Blessing room with Susan. He further directs Erik that he is not to see his wife again without Lord Lokan’s permission.
24. (E9) <st1:place><st1:placename><st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker></st1:placename> <st1:placename>HELEN</st1:placename> <st1:placename>INN</st1:placename></st1:place>, BLESSING <st1:stockticker>ROOM</st1:stockticker> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Karin is pushed into the room with Susan. After an awkwardness they talk. Karin tells what she can about the town. One thing is that no one grows older. Susan discovers that Karin is her Grandmother, but doesn’t tell her.
Susan hears a rotor noise and looks out the window. A helicopter is flying over the town.
25. (E7) <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> HELICOPTER COCKPIT – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Sam is the passenger. He directs the pilot to fly over the town and to the revival site. When the pilot attempts to get lower a violent turbulence takes over. The pilot regains control. They circle the town and fly off.
26. (E8) <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> PROFESSOR OWEN WAYTHILL’S LIVING <st1:stockticker>ROOM</st1:stockticker> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Professor Waythill and Jumper are at the table. Jumper goes to use the restroom.
Two men break in and take the professor. Jumper tries to stop them and he’s knocked out.
27.(E10) <st1:place><st1:placename><st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker></st1:placename> <st1:placename>HELEN</st1:placename> <st1:placename>INN</st1:placename></st1:place>, BLESSING <st1:stockticker>ROOM</st1:stockticker> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Susan smashes the barred window with the big chair in the room in an attempt to alert the coppers attention.
Lord Lokan sees this and comes to the room with his entourage.
During the confrontation Susan suddenly, realizes who Lord Lokan is. Time stops. Susan’s Mother tells her that now is the time to trust the being inside. It will rise in her when she releases all human emotion.
Time starts again and Susan gains a confidence she hasn’t felt before. She calls out Lord Lokan as Loki.
She knows his plan. She has seen his one son The Serpent Jormungand, but ask where his other son The Wolf Fenrir is located. Lord Lokan acknowledges her. He tells her this time his attempts to raise his daughter Hel from the dark world will not be thwarted by her or her Dad. She will perish and so will her Father. She ask for the meaning of that and he laughs as he exits the room.
Elder Nygaard, at Lord Lokan’s direction attempts to secure Susan and Karin to the beds. Susan fights him off and kills him. She tells Karin that she’ll be back. Susan now knows that her mission is to stop Loki instead of escaping with Karin.
28. (E4) <st1:place><st1:placename>EXT</st1:placename> <st1:placename>REVIVAL</st1:placename> <st1:placename><st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:placename> <st1:placetype>BRIDGE</st1:placetype></st1:place> – NIGHT
The bridge trap is set by Legion Ladnar and Elder Kliest.
29. (E5) <st1:street><st1:address>EXT REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street> ENTRANCE – NIGHT
Sam finds the entrance opened. He parks his truck on the road inside the entrance. He dons his equipment; guns, helmet light, night goggles and walks down the road. He comes upon a trail and decides to take it.
30. (E8) <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> HELEN CHAPEL – NIGHT
Susan gets caught in the chapel. She attempts to fight her way out. She gains an upper hand, but Lord Lokan appears and she’s subdued.
31.(E3) <st1:street><st1:address>EXT REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street> ENTRANCE – NIGHT
Sheriff Earlee arrives and decides to drive into Helen on the road.
32. (E8) <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> CAVERN BENEATH THE TOWN OF <st1:city><st1:place>HELEN</st1:place></st1:city> – NIGHT
Susan is chained to the wall of the cavern. Lord Lokan enters. He shows her who else he has chained to the farthest wall. It’s her Dad.
33.(E10) EXT <st1:place><st1:placename>REVIVAL</st1:placename> <st1:placename><st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:placename> <st1:placetype>BRIDGE</st1:placetype></st1:place> – NIGHT
Sheriff Earlee’s squad stalls on the bridge. A giant wolf comes out of the woods and attacks. It kills Sheriff Earlee and carries him off in his jowls. The bridge devours the squad car.
34. (E5) <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> PROFESSOR OWEN WAYTHILL’S LIVING <st1:stockticker>ROOM</st1:stockticker> – NIGHT
M.J. awakens Jumper. He leaves the house taking M.J. with him.
35. (E7) <st1:street><st1:address>EXT REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street>, HELEN – NIGHT
Karin is strapped to a post on a wagon. The procession starts to the revival site. It stops when two shots echo through the town. Lord Lokan finds that the two that set the trap did not stay to witness the bridge trap stop the intruder. They’re directed to go back with guns and eliminate whoever they find.
36.(E4) EXT REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>SITE</st1:stockticker> PLATFORM ALTAR – NIGHT
Karin is chained to a post. Lord Lokan directs that the others be brought there.
37. (E9) <st1:street><st1:address>EXT REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street>, HELEN – NIGHT
Sam engages to two sent by Lord Lokan in a gun fight. One is killed and soon turns to ash. The other, Legion Ladnar, is wounded in the shoulder. Sam threatens him to reveal Susan’s location.
Erik, who was sent to get the Seidr book by Lord Lokan, meets Sam. Erik knows where Susan is located. They zip tie Legion Ladnar to a pew in the church.
38. (E5) <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> CAVERN BENEATH THE TOWN OF <st1:city><st1:place>HELEN</st1:place></st1:city> – NIGHT
Owen wakens and Susan engages him verbally. She tells him all that’s happened and what’s going to happen.
39. (E7) <st1:street><st1:address>EXT REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street> ENTRANCE – NIGHT
Jumper arrives at the entrance in the professors car. He holds M. J. as he inspects Sam’s truck. The gate suddenly closes, vegetation grows all around the road as it fills with water. Jumper gets the hide a key, gets in the truck and drives.
40. (E9) EXT CAVERN ENTRANCE – NIGHT
Sam and Erik overpower the guards and rescue Susan and her Dad. Susan embraces Sam and her Dad.
Susan tells Sam that Erik is her kidnapper.
Erik explains it was necessary in order for his escape plan to work. Erik pleads for forgiveness.
Susan rejects his plea and has Sam tie him up. Sam takes the guards and Erik into the cave.
41. (E 5) EXT CLEAR BEHIND THE REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>SITE</st1:stockticker> – NIGHT
They are suddenly surrounded by Elders and Lord Lokan.
END OF ACT TWO:
ACT THREE:
42. (E 10) EXT. REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>SITE</st1:stockticker>, PLATFORM ALTAR – NIGHT
All four are chained to the post. The men on one the women the other. Lord Lokan boast at his accomplishments. Erik suddenly appears on the platform. He tells Lord Lokan that they tortured him and made of with the testament. When Lord Lokan points to the altar with the testament Erik attacks him. Lord Lokan kills him and sends him flying off the platform.
Lord Lokan begins the sacrifice.
The tree comes alive with loud rhythmic beats. The huge serpent rises from the middle of the tree. Two of the largest limbs become arms with talons.
The chains clink and remind Sam of something. He tells Owen that he has the coins in his inner pocket. Owen retrieves them. He aligns them in his hand and point at Susan.
The serpent freezes and Lord Lokan is sucked flat to the floor.
A wind in circles Susan who grows wings and manifest into Erindiss, daughter of Odin, She grows larger and soars away from the altar. Sam gets Karin and Owen off the platform.
Arindis destroys the platform with Lord Lokan and the serpent with fire arrows that explode on contact.
After the battle she flies off behind the tree.
43. (E10) EXT. REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>SITE</st1:stockticker> – NIGHT
Villagers run from the town to where Sam and Owen are stand. Fenrir the wolf makes an appearance at the top of <st1:street><st1:address>Revival Road</st1:address></st1:street>. Body parts hang from its jowls.
Owen knows what to do. With the three coins he manifest himself into the God Odin. They charge each other and battle on the road. The hole opening in the earth grows to the side of the road.
44. (E4) EXT. TOP OF <st1:street><st1:address>REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street> – NIGHT
Sam’s truck stops at the top of the road. Driving is Jumper.
45 (E8) EXT. REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker> – NIGHT
Odin sinks his sword into Fenrir’s snout. Fenrir raises onto its hind legs. Sam’s truck smashes into the hind legs sending the combatants over the hole’s edge. Sam finds Owen holding onto the sword that is stabbed in the side of thee hole. Sam tries to help, but Owen won’t release the sword.
46. (E6) EXT. BARREN <st1:stockticker>AREA</st1:stockticker> BEHIND THE <st1:stockticker>TREE</st1:stockticker> – NIGHT
Karin hold’s Erik’s head in his lap. She looks up to Erindiss with a tear soaked face. Erindiss is saddened.
Her Mother’s voice tells her that she can replace her life for his, but for this she will no longer be able to communicate with her. It is Erindiss’s decision. After a long internal inspection she agrees. Erik’s life is renewed.
47. (E9) EXT. <st1:stockticker>SIDE</st1:stockticker> WALL OF HOLE – NIGHT
The hole is closing. Sam pleads with Owen to take his hand. The wall shakes and he loses his grip he starts to fall into the fiery bottom. Erindiss flies into the hole and catches Owen. They retrieve the sword. She lands them safely on the road.
Sam goes to his truck and finds Jumper holding onto M.J. The cat is find, but Jumper is busted up.
48. (E8) EXT. <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker> IN FRONT OF THE <st1:place><st1:placename>HELEN</st1:placename> <st1:placename>INN</st1:placename></st1:place> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
There are emergency vehicles and a school bus parked on the road. Susan and her Father reconcile further. Susan introduces Karin to her Father.
They understand and embrace. Karin exclaims that this was the missing feeling in her and is now gone.
49. (E9) <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker>. SCHOOL BUS – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
The passengers are silent. Focus goes to the rear seat where Legion Ladnar sits with his arm in a sling. His eyes suddenly turn to resemble Lord Lokan’s for a quick moment. He smiles.
50. (E8) <st1:place><st1:placename>EXT.</st1:placename> <st1:placename>HELEN</st1:placename> <st1:placename>INN</st1:placename></st1:place> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Susan’s SUV is the last vehicle to leave. A raven lands on the <st1:place>Inn</st1:place>’s roof apex. It caws once then flies away.
THE END
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BEAT SHEET: <st1:street><st1:address>REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street>
2. I learned that I needed to establish two things about my protagonist. One more of an attachment by the audience, Another way to make them care about her. So I added number 2. I made her involved with animal rescue, no kill kennels for example.
5. The other was to establish her flaw more so I added number 5 to interject, explain more detail, the reason the flaw happened. Estrangement with her Father.
46. I wanted to put the protagonist into a ultimate decision. Bring back the life of her nemesis, the husband of her Grandmother whom she deeply cares about, but in order for her to do that she would have to sacrifice any future solace given by her Mother’s apparition.
LOGLINE: A woman who denies she possesses the dominant trait of a Norse goddess gets abducted by a Norse religious cult to be sacrificed. She discovers she must liberate the trait to prevent the end of the world.
Introduction Line:
ON SCREEN:
“The woman was given two wings of a great eagle, so that she might fly…out of the serpents reach”.
Revelations 12 : 14
1. EXT SACRIFICIAL ALTAR, HELEN <st1:state><st1:place>TEXAS</st1:place></st1:state> – NIGHT
Two women, Susan and Karin, are chained to a post on an altar platform. They pull back in fear at what grows before them.
ON SCREEN:
Two days earlier.
2. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> LARGE DINNING <st1:stockticker>ROOM</st1:stockticker> WITH STAGE – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Susan is a reluctant speaker at a animal rescue symposium.
3. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> INTERSECTION, <st1:place><st1:city>DALLAS</st1:city>, <st1:state>TEXAS</st1:state></st1:place> SUBURB – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
While stopped at a stop light Susan encounters an old woman, Anna, that is shocked to see her. Susan’s mind floods into scene of a young woman chained to a sacrificial altar. When jarred back to reality the woman has disappeared. She shakes it off as just an illusion.
4 .<st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> <st1:place><st1:placename>MASTERS</st1:placename> <st1:placename>STORE & GUN</st1:placename> <st1:placetype>RANGE</st1:placetype></st1:place>, <st1:place><st1:city>FT. WORTH</st1:city> <st1:state>TEXAS</st1:state></st1:place> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Sam and Jumper converse about his love interest Susan. Sam is contemplating a break up, but can’t go through with it. Jumper is curious why her Father is estranged. Sam draws a blank.
5. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> RESTAURANT IN <st1:city><st1:place>DALLAS</st1:place></st1:city> – NIGHT
At a restaurant later, Susan fills in Sam about what brought on the estrangement between her and her Dad.
6. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> SUSAN’S HOME – NIGHT
Anna makes contact at Susan’s home. She is told that her deceased grandmother is alive in the secluded town of <st1:city><st1:place>Helen</st1:place></st1:city>, <st1:state><st1:place>Texas</st1:place></st1:state>. The leader of the town is going to sacrifice her in two days in an attempt to end the world and that she is the only one that possesses the power to stop it. After Anna turns to ash.
7. EXT HELEN, REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>SITE</st1:stockticker> – NIGHT
Lord Lokan arrives and tells two elders that the revival has commenced. Karin and Erik agree to stay on the plan to escape.
8. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> SUSAN’S HOME, KITCHEN – NIGHT
Sam and Susan have a discussion that turns heated when she denies what all has happened to her that day. She wants to forget it ever happened. Sam urges her to at least call her Dad for some perspective. She is reluctant.
9. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> SUSAN’S BEDROOM – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Susan’s Mother appears as an apparition in the dresser mirror. Susan refuses at first to get involved with such foolishness. Her Mother implores her to go to her Father for his guidance. Susan’s reluctance is thwarted when a locket appears on the dresser, the locket that Susan put in her Mother’s casket.
10. <st1:place><st1:placename><st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker></st1:placename> <st1:placename>HELEN</st1:placename> <st1:placename>INN</st1:placename></st1:place>, <st1:stockticker>MAIN</st1:stockticker> <st1:stockticker>ROOM</st1:stockticker> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Lord Lokan and Erik’s Father discuss Erik’s motivation for wanting to be the one to kidnap Susan. Erik enters the room and receives his orders. He is reminded that the Blessing, (victim), must enter the town of her own free will. He is informed that if he fails his wife Karin will be sacrificed. She will be held in the blessing room until he returns.
11. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> SUSAN”S SUV – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
On her way to see her Father Susan has a flashback of the time when her Father tried to tell her about the trait she harbors inside her.
<st1:street><st1:address>12. EXT HIGHWAY</st1:address></st1:street> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
An exit sign appears on the highway denoting Arlene. Susan’s SUV signals for the exit.
END OF ACT <st1:stockticker>ONE</st1:stockticker>:
ACT TWO:
13. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> SUSAN’S SUV – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Sam is on the phone surprised to hear that she is driving to see her Dad. After, she runs into a terrible storm with lightning and hail. Her SUV is thrown into a guardrail and she stops. She sees and then drives to the safety of an underpass.
14. EXT SUSAN’S SUV – NIGHT
Erik meets Susan and persuades her to drive him to his town where there is a phone and his Dad can fix her vehicle. She is reluctant until her Mother’s voice encourages her to trust that which is within.
15. <st1:place><st1:placename><st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker></st1:placename> <st1:placename>HELEN</st1:placename> <st1:placename>INN</st1:placename></st1:place> UPSTAIRS HALLWAY ? BLEESING <st1:stockticker>ROOM</st1:stockticker> – NIGHT
Lord Lokan attempts a romantic move on Karin, but is interrupted by an Elder Nygaard.
16. <st1:street><st1:address>EXT REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street>, ENTRANCE TO HELEN – NIGHT
Susan is shocked to see that she is now in the town of <st1:city><st1:place>Helen</st1:place></st1:city>. She is subdued and meets Lord Lokan who she thinks she recognizes, but doesn’t know from where.
She’s taken to the revival site where she witnesses the sacrifice of a young woman. It’s the vision she had from Anna. Lord Lokan informs her take the next night she will be the sacrifice.
Lord Lokan feels that there will be an attempt to rescue Susan and directs that the trap at the bridge be set.
17. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> PROFESSOR OWEN WAYTHILL’S DEN – NIGHT.
Owen tells Sam in a phone conversation that Susan never arrived. Owen is vague when Sam ask for details of what he knows after Sam mention’s the town of <st1:city><st1:place>Helen</st1:place></st1:city>. He tells Owen he’s driving there tonight.
18. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> SAMS TRUCK -NIGHT
Jumper has to physically subdue Sam to get him to slow the truck down.
19. <st1:place><st1:placename><st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker></st1:placename> <st1:placename>MASTERS</st1:placename> <st1:placename>STORE & GUN</st1:placename> <st1:placetype>RANGE</st1:placetype></st1:place>, <st1:place><st1:city>FT. WORTH</st1:city> <st1:state>TEXAS</st1:state></st1:place> – NIGHT
Sam and Jumper stop at the store for supplies. Before leaving Sam opens his desk drawer and pockets the three coins.
20. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> PROFESSOR OWEN WAYTHILL’S DEN – NIGHT.
Owen explains things. He is shocked when he sees the coins. There were only rumors that they ever existed. Owen shows them first half of the Seidr Text. It cover only the history of the Seidr. The second half tells how to harness the power. No one knows where the second half is.
21. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> ERIK <st1:stockticker>AND</st1:stockticker> KARIN NYGAARD’S CABIN – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Karin tells Erik she’s afraid about what became of Anna. Also that feeling of some part of her is missing is getting stronger.
22. <st1:street><st1:address>EXT REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street> ENTRANCE – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
The trio meet Sheriff Justin Earlee. Sam exposes a gate behind some brush. The sheriff explains that the woods cover the road and prevent any entrance.
A deputy stops by with three bagged items they found at the overpass where they found Erik’s old broken down SUV. The items are clues that Susan was taken in the woods.
Sam refuses to accept that the woods are inaccessible. He’s going to find away in.
23. <st1:place><st1:placename><st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker></st1:placename> <st1:placename>HELEN</st1:placename> <st1:placename>INN</st1:placename></st1:place>, <st1:stockticker>MAIN</st1:stockticker> <st1:stockticker>ROOM</st1:stockticker> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Lord Lokan and Elder Nygaard inform Erik that his wife is guilty of heresy and will be sacrificed with the blessing that night. Lord Lokan directs that Karin be held in the Blessing room with Susan. He further direct Erik that he is not to see his wife again without Lord Lokan’s permission.
24. <st1:place><st1:placename><st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker></st1:placename> <st1:placename>HELEN</st1:placename> <st1:placename>INN</st1:placename></st1:place>, BLESSING <st1:stockticker>ROOM</st1:stockticker> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Karin is pushed into the room with Susan. After an awkwardness they talk. Karin tells what she can about the town. One thing is that no one grows older. Susan discovers that Karin is her Grandmother, but doesn’t tell her.
Susan hears a rotor noise and looks out the window. A helicopter is flying over the town.
25. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> HELICOPTER COCKPIT – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Sam is the passenger. He directs the pilot to fly over the town and to the revival site. When the pilot attempts to get lower a violent turbulence takes over. The pilot regains control. They circle the town and fly off.
26. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> PROFESSOR OWEN WAYTHILL’S LIVING <st1:stockticker>ROOM</st1:stockticker> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Professor Waythill and Jumper are at the table. Jumper goes to use the restroom.
Two men break in and take the professor. Jumper tries to stop them and he’s knocked out.
27. <st1:place><st1:placename><st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker></st1:placename> <st1:placename>HELEN</st1:placename> <st1:placename>INN</st1:placename></st1:place>, BLESSING <st1:stockticker>ROOM</st1:stockticker> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Susan smashes the barred window with the big chair in the room trying to get the coppers attention.
Lord Lokan sees this and comes to the room with his entourage.
During the confrontation Susan suddenly, realizes who Lord Lokan is. Time stops. Susan’s Mother tells her that now is the time to trust the being inside. It will rise in her when she releases all human emotion.
Time starts again and Susan gains a confidence she hasn’t felt before. She recognizes him as Loki.
She knows his plan. She has seen his one son The Serpent Jormungand, but ask where his other son The Wolf Fenrir is located. Lord Lokan acknowledges her. He tells her this time his attempts to raise his daughter Hel from the dark world will not be thwarted by her or her Dad. She will perish and so will her Father. She ask for the meaning of that and he laughs as he exits the room.
Elder Nygaard, at Lord Lokan’s direction attempts to secure Susan and Karin to the beds. Susan fights him off and kills him. She tells Karin that she’ll be back. Susan now knows that her mission is to stop Loki instead of escaping with Karin.
28. <st1:place><st1:placename>EXT</st1:placename> <st1:placename>REVIVAL</st1:placename> <st1:placename><st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:placename> <st1:placetype>BRIDGE</st1:placetype></st1:place> – NIGHT
The bridge trap is set by Legion Ladnar and Elder Kliest.
<st1:street><st1:address>29. EXT REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street> ENTRANCE – NIGHT
Sam finds the entrance opened. He parks his truck past the entrance. He dons his equipment; guns, helmet light and night goggles and walks down the road. He comes upon a trail and decides to take it.
30. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> HELEN CHAPEL – NIGHT
Susan gets caught hiding in the chapel.
<st1:street><st1:address>31. EXT REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street> ENTRANCE – NIGHT
Sheriff Earlee arrives and decides to drive into Helen on the road.
32. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> CAVERN BENEATH THE TOWN OF <st1:city><st1:place>HELEN</st1:place></st1:city> – NIGHT
Susan is chained to the wall of the cavern. Lord Lokan enters. He shows her who else he has chained to the farthest wall. It’s her Dad.
<st1:street><st1:address>33. EXT REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street> BRIDGE – NIGHT
Sheriff Earlee’s squad stalls on the bridge. A giant wolf comes out of the woods and attacks. It kills Sheriff Earlee and carries him off in his jowls. The bridge devours the squad car.
34. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> PROFESSOR OWEN WAYTHILL’S LIVING <st1:stockticker>ROOM</st1:stockticker> – NIGHT
M.J. awakens Jumper. He leaves the house taking M.J. with him.
<st1:street><st1:address>35. EXT REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street>, HELEN – NIGHT
Karin is strapped a post on a wagon. The procession starts to the revival site. It stops when two shots echo through the town. Lord Lokan finds that the two that set the trap did not stay to witness the bridge trap stop the intruder. They’re directed to go back with guns and eliminate whoever they find.
36. EXT REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>SITE</st1:stockticker> PLATFORM ALTAR – NIGHT
Karin is chained to a post. Lord Lokan directs that the others be brought there.
37. <st1:street><st1:address>EXT REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street>, HELEN – NIGHT
Sam engages to two sent by Lord Lokan in a gun fight. One is killed and soon turns to ash. The other, Legion Ladnar, is wounded in the shoulder. Sam threatens him to say where Susan is located.
Erik, who was sent to get the Seidr book meets Sam. Erik knows where Susan is located.
38. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> CAVERN BENEATH THE TOWN OF <st1:city><st1:place>HELEN</st1:place></st1:city> – NIGHT
Owen wakens and Susan engages him verbally. She tells him all that’s happened and what’s going to happen.
<st1:street><st1:address>39. EXT REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street> ENTRANCE – NIGHT
Jumper arrives at the entrance in the professors car. With M. J. he inspects Sam’s truck. The gate suddenly closes the road starts to fill with water. Jumper gets the hide a key, gets in the truck and drives.
40. EXT CAVERN ENTRANCE – NIGHT
Sam and Erik ambush and overpower the guards as they escort Susan and her Dad out of the cavern
Susan tells Sam that Erik is her kidnapper.
Erik explains his plan for him and Karin to escape. It was necessary to do it. Erik pleads for forgiveness.
Susan rejects his plea and has Sam tie him up. Sam takes the guards and Erik into the cave.
41. EXT CLEAR BEHIND THE REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>SITE</st1:stockticker> – NIGHT
They are suddenly surrounded by Elders and Lord Lokan.
END OF ACT TWO:
ACT THREE:
42 EXT. REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>SITE</st1:stockticker>, PLATFORM ALTAR – NIGHT
All four are chained to the post. The men on one the women the other. Lord Lokan boast at his accomplishments. Erik suddenly appears on the platform. He tells Lord Lokan that they tortured him and made of with the testament. When Lord Lokan points to the altar with the testament Erik attacks him. Lord Lokan kills him and sends him flying off the platform.
Lord Lokan begins the sacrifice.
The tree comes alive with loud rhythmic beats. The huge serpent rises from the middle of the tree. Two of the largest limbs become arms with talons.
The chains clink and remind Sam of something. He tells Owen that he has the coins in his inner pocket. Owen retrieves them. He aligns them in his hand and point at Susan.
The serpent freezes and Lord Lokan is sucked flat to the floor.
A wind in circles Susan who grows wings and manifest into Erindiss, daughter of Odin, She grows larger and soars away from the altar. Sam gets Karin and Owen off the platform.
Arindis destroys the platform with Lord Lokan and the serpent with fire arrows that explode on contact.
After the battle she flies off behind the tree.
43 EXT. REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>SITE</st1:stockticker> – NIGHT
Villagers run from the town to where Sam and Owen are stand. Fenrir the wolf makes an appearance at the top of <st1:street><st1:address>Revival Road</st1:address></st1:street>. Body parts hang from its jowls.
Owen knows what to do. With the three coins he manifest himself into Odin. They charge each other and battle on the road. The hole in the earth gets larger to the side of the road.
44 EXT. TOP OF <st1:street><st1:address>REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street> – NIGHT
Sam’s truck stops at the top of the road.
<st1:street><st1:address>45 EXT. REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street> – NIGHT
Odin sinks his sword into Fenrir’s snout. Fenrir raises onto its hind legs. Sam’s truck smashes into the hind legs sending the combatants over the hole’s edge. Sam finds Owen holding onto the sword that is stabbed in the side of thee hole. Sam tries to help, but Owen won’t release the sword.
46 EXT. BARREN <st1:stockticker>AREA</st1:stockticker> BEHIND THE <st1:stockticker>TREE</st1:stockticker> – NIGHT
Karin hold’s Erik’s head in his lap. She looks up to Erindiss with a tear soaked face. Erindiss is saddened.
Her Mother’s voice tells her that she can replace her life for his, but for this she will no longer be able to communicate with her. It is Erindiss’s decision. After a long internal inspection she agrees. Erik’s life is renewed.
47 EXT. <st1:stockticker>SIDE</st1:stockticker> WALL OF HOLE – NIGHT
The hole is closing. Sam pleads with Owen to take his hand. The wall shakes and he loses his grip he starts to fall into the fiery bottom. Erindiss flies into the hole and catches Owen. They retrieve the sword. She lands the safely them on the road.
Sam goes to his truck and finds Jumper holding onto M.J. The cat is find, but Jumper is busted up.
48 EXT. <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker> IN FRONT OF THE <st1:place><st1:placename>HELEN</st1:placename> <st1:placename>INN</st1:placename></st1:place> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
There are emergency vehicles and a school bus park on the road. Susan and her Father reconcile. Then Susan introduces Karin to her Father.
They understand and embrace. Karin exclaims that this was the missing feeling in her and is now gone.
49 <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker>. SCHOOL BUS – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
The passengers are silent. Focus goes to the rear seat where Legion Ladnar sits with his arm in a sling. His eyes suddenly turn to resemble Lord Lokan’s for a quick moment. He smiles.
50 <st1:place><st1:placename>EXT.</st1:placename> <st1:placename>HELEN</st1:placename> <st1:placename>INN</st1:placename></st1:place> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Susan’s SUV is the last vehicle to leave. A raven lands on the <st1:place>Inn</st1:place>’s roof apex. It caws once then flies away.
THE END
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Randall Stevens; Character profiles: <st1:street><st1:address>Revival Road</st1:address></st1:street>
LOG <st1:stockticker>LINE</st1:stockticker>:
A woman who denies she possesses the hidden dominant trait of a Norse goddess gets abducted by a Norse religious cult to be sacrificed to bring about the end of the world. She discovers she must liberate the trait to prevent it.
What I learned from this assignment is that I have no idea what the subtext is on these characters. What I wrote is pure speculation.
NOTE: It was very difficult, like most assignments so far, when one cannot ask questions of the teacher.
Character Name: Susan Waythill
ROLE: Protagonist
Core Character Traits
– Serious
– Likes animals more than people
– Self reliant
– Suspicious
FLAW: Trust issues that affect her life negatively.
CHARACTER ARC:
Estranged from her Father, because of opposite beliefs.
CHARACTER DOESN’T ADMIT ABOUT HERSELF:
She lives in fear.
SUBTEXT:
Goes on this quest to prove her Father wrong.
CHARACTER NAME: Sam Masters
ROLE: Protagonist love interest.
<st1:stockticker>CORE</st1:stockticker> CHARACTER TRAITS:
– In charge
– Self Confident
– Few Friends
Identifies mission and makes it a priority.
SUBTEXT:
None.
CHARACTER NAME : Lord Lokan
ROLE: Antagonist.
<st1:stockticker>CORE</st1:stockticker> CHARACTER TRAITS:
– Kill his enemy in process of new world order.
– Evil
– In control
– Has a secret passion for Karin.
This character uniqueness is that he is a mythological God.
SUBTEXT:
He must have revenge on his antagonist Susan who is responsible foe revival’s in the past.
CHARACTER NAME: Erik Nygaard
ROLE: Nemesis
SUBTEXT:
He must act as one of the towns leaders while at the same time plotting he and his wife’s escape.
CHARACTER NAME Karin Nygaard
ROLE: Wife of Erik.
What makes her unique is that she’s only twenty and is Susan’s Grandmother and Susan’s Dads Mother.
SUBTEXT:
She’s becoming slowly becoming aware of what happened to her, but unsure where it leads.
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BEAT SHEET: <st1:street><st1:address>REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street>
2. I learned that I needed to establish two things about my protagonist. One more of an attachment by the audience, Another way to make them care about her. So I added number 2. I made her involved with animal rescue, no kill kennels for example.
5. The other was to establish her flaw more so I added number 5 to interject, explain more detail, the reason the flaw happened. Estrangement with her Father.
46. I wanted to put the protagonist into a ultimate decision. Bring back the life of her nemesis, the husband of her Grandmother whom she deeply cares about, but in order for her to do that she would have to sacrifice any future solace given by her Mother’s apparition.
LOGLINE: A woman who denies she possesses the dominant trait of a Norse goddess gets abducted by a Norse religious cult to be sacrificed. She discovers she must liberate the trait to prevent the end of the world.
Introduction Line:
ON SCREEN:
“The woman was given two wings of a great eagle, so that she might fly…out of the serpents reach”.
Revelations 12 : 14
1. EXT SACRIFICIAL ALTAR, HELEN <st1:state><st1:place>TEXAS</st1:place></st1:state> – NIGHT
Two women, Susan and Karin, are chained to a post on an altar platform. They pull back in fear at what grows before them.
ON SCREEN:
Two days earlier.
2. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> LARGE DINNING <st1:stockticker>ROOM</st1:stockticker> WITH STAGE – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Susan is a reluctant speaker at a animal rescue symposium.
3. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> INTERSECTION, <st1:place><st1:city>DALLAS</st1:city>, <st1:state>TEXAS</st1:state></st1:place> SUBURB – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
While stopped at a stop light Susan encounters an old woman, Anna, that is shocked to see her. Susan’s mind floods into scene of a young woman chained to a sacrificial altar. When jarred back to reality the woman has disappeared. She shakes it off as just an illusion.
4 .<st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> <st1:place><st1:placename>MASTERS</st1:placename> <st1:placename>STORE & GUN</st1:placename> <st1:placetype>RANGE</st1:placetype></st1:place>, <st1:place><st1:city>FT. WORTH</st1:city> <st1:state>TEXAS</st1:state></st1:place> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Sam and Jumper converse about his love interest Susan. Sam is contemplating a break up, but can’t go through with it. Jumper is curious why her Father is estranged. Sam draws a blank.
5. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> RESTAURANT IN <st1:city><st1:place>DALLAS</st1:place></st1:city> – NIGHT
At a restaurant later, Susan fills in Sam about what brought on the estrangement between her and her Dad.
6. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> SUSAN’S HOME – NIGHT
Anna makes contact at Susan’s home. She is told that her deceased grandmother is alive in the secluded town of <st1:city><st1:place>Helen</st1:place></st1:city>, <st1:state><st1:place>Texas</st1:place></st1:state>. The leader of the town is going to sacrifice her in two days in an attempt to end the world and that she is the only one that possesses the power to stop it. After Anna turns to ash.
7. EXT HELEN, REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>SITE</st1:stockticker> – NIGHT
Lord Lokan arrives and tells two elders that the revival has commenced. Karin and Erik agree to stay on the plan to escape.
8. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> SUSAN’S HOME, KITCHEN – NIGHT
Sam and Susan have a discussion that turns heated when she denies what all has happened to her that day. She wants to forget it ever happened. Sam urges her to at least call her Dad for some perspective. She is reluctant.
9. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> SUSAN’S BEDROOM – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Susan’s Mother appears as an apparition in the dresser mirror. Susan refuses at first to get involved with such foolishness. Her Mother implores her to go to her Father for his guidance. Susan’s reluctance is thwarted when a locket appears on the dresser, the locket that Susan put in her Mother’s casket.
10. <st1:place><st1:placename><st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker></st1:placename> <st1:placename>HELEN</st1:placename> <st1:placename>INN</st1:placename></st1:place>, <st1:stockticker>MAIN</st1:stockticker> <st1:stockticker>ROOM</st1:stockticker> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Lord Lokan and Erik’s Father discuss Erik’s motivation for wanting to be the one to kidnap Susan. Erik enters the room and receives his orders. He is reminded that the Blessing, (victim), must enter the town of her own free will. He is informed that if he fails his wife Karin will be sacrificed. She will be held in the blessing room until he returns.
11. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> SUSAN”S SUV – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
On her way to see her Father Susan has a flashback of the time when her Father tried to tell her about the trait she harbors inside her.
<st1:street><st1:address>12. EXT HIGHWAY</st1:address></st1:street> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
An exit sign appears on the highway denoting Arlene. Susan’s SUV signals for the exit.
END OF ACT <st1:stockticker>ONE</st1:stockticker>:
ACT TWO:
13. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> SUSAN’S SUV – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Sam is on the phone surprised to hear that she is driving to see her Dad. After, she runs into a terrible storm with lightning and hail. Her SUV is thrown into a guardrail and she stops. She sees and then drives to the safety of an underpass.
14. EXT SUSAN’S SUV – NIGHT
Erik meets Susan and persuades her to drive him to his town where there is a phone and his Dad can fix her vehicle. She is reluctant until her Mother’s voice encourages her to trust that which is within.
15. <st1:place><st1:placename><st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker></st1:placename> <st1:placename>HELEN</st1:placename> <st1:placename>INN</st1:placename></st1:place> UPSTAIRS HALLWAY ? BLEESING <st1:stockticker>ROOM</st1:stockticker> – NIGHT
Lord Lokan attempts a romantic move on Karin, but is interrupted by an Elder Nygaard.
16. <st1:street><st1:address>EXT REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street>, ENTRANCE TO HELEN – NIGHT
Susan is shocked to see that she is now in the town of <st1:city><st1:place>Helen</st1:place></st1:city>. She is subdued and meets Lord Lokan who she thinks she recognizes, but doesn’t know from where.
She’s taken to the revival site where she witnesses the sacrifice of a young woman. It’s the vision she had from Anna. Lord Lokan informs her take the next night she will be the sacrifice.
Lord Lokan feels that there will be an attempt to rescue Susan and directs that the trap at the bridge be set.
17. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> PROFESSOR OWEN WAYTHILL’S DEN – NIGHT.
Owen tells Sam in a phone conversation that Susan never arrived. Owen is vague when Sam ask for details of what he knows after Sam mention’s the town of <st1:city><st1:place>Helen</st1:place></st1:city>. He tells Owen he’s driving there tonight.
18. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> SAMS TRUCK -NIGHT
Jumper has to physically subdue Sam to get him to slow the truck down.
19. <st1:place><st1:placename><st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker></st1:placename> <st1:placename>MASTERS</st1:placename> <st1:placename>STORE & GUN</st1:placename> <st1:placetype>RANGE</st1:placetype></st1:place>, <st1:place><st1:city>FT. WORTH</st1:city> <st1:state>TEXAS</st1:state></st1:place> – NIGHT
Sam and Jumper stop at the store for supplies. Before leaving Sam opens his desk drawer and pockets the three coins.
20. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> PROFESSOR OWEN WAYTHILL’S DEN – NIGHT.
Owen explains things. He is shocked when he sees the coins. There were only rumors that they ever existed. Owen shows them first half of the Seidr Text. It cover only the history of the Seidr. The second half tells how to harness the power. No one knows where the second half is.
21. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> ERIK <st1:stockticker>AND</st1:stockticker> KARIN NYGAARD’S CABIN – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Karin tells Erik she’s afraid about what became of Anna. Also that feeling of some part of her is missing is getting stronger.
22. <st1:street><st1:address>EXT REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street> ENTRANCE – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
The trio meet Sheriff Justin Earlee. Sam exposes a gate behind some brush. The sheriff explains that the woods cover the road and prevent any entrance.
A deputy stops by with three bagged items they found at the overpass where they found Erik’s old broken down SUV. The items are clues that Susan was taken in the woods.
Sam refuses to accept that the woods are inaccessible. He’s going to find away in.
23. <st1:place><st1:placename><st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker></st1:placename> <st1:placename>HELEN</st1:placename> <st1:placename>INN</st1:placename></st1:place>, <st1:stockticker>MAIN</st1:stockticker> <st1:stockticker>ROOM</st1:stockticker> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Lord Lokan and Elder Nygaard inform Erik that his wife is guilty of heresy and will be sacrificed with the blessing that night. Lord Lokan directs that Karin be held in the Blessing room with Susan. He further direct Erik that he is not to see his wife again without Lord Lokan’s permission.
24. <st1:place><st1:placename><st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker></st1:placename> <st1:placename>HELEN</st1:placename> <st1:placename>INN</st1:placename></st1:place>, BLESSING <st1:stockticker>ROOM</st1:stockticker> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Karin is pushed into the room with Susan. After an awkwardness they talk. Karin tells what she can about the town. One thing is that no one grows older. Susan discovers that Karin is her Grandmother, but doesn’t tell her.
Susan hears a rotor noise and looks out the window. A helicopter is flying over the town.
25. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> HELICOPTER COCKPIT – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Sam is the passenger. He directs the pilot to fly over the town and to the revival site. When the pilot attempts to get lower a violent turbulence takes over. The pilot regains control. They circle the town and fly off.
26. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> PROFESSOR OWEN WAYTHILL’S LIVING <st1:stockticker>ROOM</st1:stockticker> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Professor Waythill and Jumper are at the table. Jumper goes to use the restroom.
Two men break in and take the professor. Jumper tries to stop them and he’s knocked out.
27. <st1:place><st1:placename><st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker></st1:placename> <st1:placename>HELEN</st1:placename> <st1:placename>INN</st1:placename></st1:place>, BLESSING <st1:stockticker>ROOM</st1:stockticker> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Susan smashes the barred window with the big chair in the room trying to get the coppers attention.
Lord Lokan sees this and comes to the room with his entourage.
During the confrontation Susan suddenly, realizes who Lord Lokan is. Time stops. Susan’s Mother tells her that now is the time to trust the being inside. It will rise in her when she releases all human emotion.
Time starts again and Susan gains a confidence she hasn’t felt before. She recognizes him as Loki.
She knows his plan. She has seen his one son The Serpent Jormungand, but ask where his other son The Wolf Fenrir is located. Lord Lokan acknowledges her. He tells her this time his attempts to raise his daughter Hel from the dark world will not be thwarted by her or her Dad. She will perish and so will her Father. She ask for the meaning of that and he laughs as he exits the room.
Elder Nygaard, at Lord Lokan’s direction attempts to secure Susan and Karin to the beds. Susan fights him off and kills him. She tells Karin that she’ll be back. Susan now knows that her mission is to stop Loki instead of escaping with Karin.
28. <st1:place><st1:placename>EXT</st1:placename> <st1:placename>REVIVAL</st1:placename> <st1:placename><st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:placename> <st1:placetype>BRIDGE</st1:placetype></st1:place> – NIGHT
The bridge trap is set by Legion Ladnar and Elder Kliest.
<st1:street><st1:address>29. EXT REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street> ENTRANCE – NIGHT
Sam finds the entrance opened. He parks his truck past the entrance. He dons his equipment; guns, helmet light and night goggles and walks down the road. He comes upon a trail and decides to take it.
30. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> HELEN CHAPEL – NIGHT
Susan gets caught hiding in the chapel.
<st1:street><st1:address>31. EXT REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street> ENTRANCE – NIGHT
Sheriff Earlee arrives and decides to drive into Helen on the road.
32. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> CAVERN BENEATH THE TOWN OF <st1:city><st1:place>HELEN</st1:place></st1:city> – NIGHT
Susan is chained to the wall of the cavern. Lord Lokan enters. He shows her who else he has chained to the farthest wall. It’s her Dad.
<st1:street><st1:address>33. EXT REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street> BRIDGE – NIGHT
Sheriff Earlee’s squad stalls on the bridge. A giant wolf comes out of the woods and attacks. It kills Sheriff Earlee and carries him off in his jowls. The bridge devours the squad car.
34. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> PROFESSOR OWEN WAYTHILL’S LIVING <st1:stockticker>ROOM</st1:stockticker> – NIGHT
M.J. awakens Jumper. He leaves the house taking M.J. with him.
<st1:street><st1:address>35. EXT REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street>, HELEN – NIGHT
Karin is strapped a post on a wagon. The procession starts to the revival site. It stops when two shots echo through the town. Lord Lokan finds that the two that set the trap did not stay to witness the bridge trap stop the intruder. They’re directed to go back with guns and eliminate whoever they find.
36. EXT REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>SITE</st1:stockticker> PLATFORM ALTAR – NIGHT
Karin is chained to a post. Lord Lokan directs that the others be brought there.
37. <st1:street><st1:address>EXT REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street>, HELEN – NIGHT
Sam engages to two sent by Lord Lokan in a gun fight. One is killed and soon turns to ash. The other, Legion Ladnar, is wounded in the shoulder. Sam threatens him to say where Susan is located.
Erik, who was sent to get the Seidr book meets Sam. Erik knows where Susan is located.
38. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> CAVERN BENEATH THE TOWN OF <st1:city><st1:place>HELEN</st1:place></st1:city> – NIGHT
Owen wakens and Susan engages him verbally. She tells him all that’s happened and what’s going to happen.
<st1:street><st1:address>39. EXT REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street> ENTRANCE – NIGHT
Jumper arrives at the entrance in the professors car. With M. J. he inspects Sam’s truck. The gate suddenly closes the road starts to fill with water. Jumper gets the hide a key, gets in the truck and drives.
40. EXT CAVERN ENTRANCE – NIGHT
Sam and Erik ambush and overpower the guards as they escort Susan and her Dad out of the cavern
Susan tells Sam that Erik is her kidnapper.
Erik explains his plan for him and Karin to escape. It was necessary to do it. Erik pleads for forgiveness.
Susan rejects his plea and has Sam tie him up. Sam takes the guards and Erik into the cave.
41. EXT CLEAR BEHIND THE REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>SITE</st1:stockticker> – NIGHT
They are suddenly surrounded by Elders and Lord Lokan.
END OF ACT TWO:
ACT THREE:
42 EXT. REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>SITE</st1:stockticker>, PLATFORM ALTAR – NIGHT
All four are chained to the post. The men on one the women the other. Lord Lokan boast at his accomplishments. Erik suddenly appears on the platform. He tells Lord Lokan that they tortured him and made of with the testament. When Lord Lokan points to the altar with the testament Erik attacks him. Lord Lokan kills him and sends him flying off the platform.
Lord Lokan begins the sacrifice.
The tree comes alive with loud rhythmic beats. The huge serpent rises from the middle of the tree. Two of the largest limbs become arms with talons.
The chains clink and remind Sam of something. He tells Owen that he has the coins in his inner pocket. Owen retrieves them. He aligns them in his hand and point at Susan.
The serpent freezes and Lord Lokan is sucked flat to the floor.
A wind in circles Susan who grows wings and manifest into Erindiss, daughter of Odin, She grows larger and soars away from the altar. Sam gets Karin and Owen off the platform.
Arindis destroys the platform with Lord Lokan and the serpent with fire arrows that explode on contact.
After the battle she flies off behind the tree.
43 EXT. REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>SITE</st1:stockticker> – NIGHT
Villagers run from the town to where Sam and Owen are stand. Fenrir the wolf makes an appearance at the top of <st1:street><st1:address>Revival Road</st1:address></st1:street>. Body parts hang from its jowls.
Owen knows what to do. With the three coins he manifest himself into Odin. They charge each other and battle on the road. The hole in the earth gets larger to the side of the road.
44 EXT. TOP OF <st1:street><st1:address>REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street> – NIGHT
Sam’s truck stops at the top of the road.
<st1:street><st1:address>45 EXT. REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street> – NIGHT
Odin sinks his sword into Fenrir’s snout. Fenrir raises onto its hind legs. Sam’s truck smashes into the hind legs sending the combatants over the hole’s edge. Sam finds Owen holding onto the sword that is stabbed in the side of thee hole. Sam tries to help, but Owen won’t release the sword.
46 EXT. BARREN <st1:stockticker>AREA</st1:stockticker> BEHIND THE <st1:stockticker>TREE</st1:stockticker> – NIGHT
Karin hold’s Erik’s head in his lap. She looks up to Erindiss with a tear soaked face. Erindiss is saddened.
Her Mother’s voice tells her that she can replace her life for his, but for this she will no longer be able to communicate with her. It is Erindiss’s decision. After a long internal inspection she agrees. Erik’s life is renewed.
47 EXT. <st1:stockticker>SIDE</st1:stockticker> WALL OF HOLE – NIGHT
The hole is closing. Sam pleads with Owen to take his hand. The wall shakes and he loses his grip he starts to fall into the fiery bottom. Erindiss flies into the hole and catches Owen. They retrieve the sword. She lands the safely them on the road.
Sam goes to his truck and finds Jumper holding onto M.J. The cat is find, but Jumper is busted up.
48 EXT. <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker> IN FRONT OF THE <st1:place><st1:placename>HELEN</st1:placename> <st1:placename>INN</st1:placename></st1:place> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
There are emergency vehicles and a school bus park on the road. Susan and her Father reconcile. Then Susan introduces Karin to her Father.
They understand and embrace. Karin exclaims that this was the missing feeling in her and is now gone.
49 <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker>. SCHOOL BUS – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
The passengers are silent. Focus goes to the rear seat where Legion Ladnar sits with his arm in a sling. His eyes suddenly turn to resemble Lord Lokan’s for a quick moment. He smiles.
50 <st1:place><st1:placename>EXT.</st1:placename> <st1:placename>HELEN</st1:placename> <st1:placename>INN</st1:placename></st1:place> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Susan’s SUV is the last vehicle to leave. A raven lands on the <st1:place>Inn</st1:place>’s roof apex. It caws once then flies away.
THE END
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BEAT SHEET
2. I learned that I needed to establish two things about my protagonist. One more of an attachment by the audience, Another way to make them care about her. So I added number 2. I made her involved with animal rescue, no kill kennels for example.
5. The other was to establish her flaw more so I added number 5 to interject, explain more detail, the reason the flaw happened. Estrangement with her Father.
46. I wanted to put the protagonist into a ultimate decision. Bring back the life of her nemesis, the husband of her Grandmother whom she deeply cares about, but in order for her to do that she would have to sacrifice any future solace given by her Mother’s apparition.
LOGLINE: A woman who denies she possesses the dominant trait of a Norse goddess gets abducted by a Norse religious cult to be sacrificed. She discovers she must liberate the trait to prevent the end of the world.
Introduction Line:
ON SCREEN:
“The woman was given two wings of a great eagle, so that she might fly…out of the serpents reach”.
Revelations 12 : 14
1. EXT SACRIFICIAL ALTAR, HELEN <st1:state><st1:place>TEXAS</st1:place></st1:state> – NIGHT
Two women, Susan and Karin, are chained to a post on an altar platform. They pull back in fear at what grows before them.
ON SCREEN:
Two days earlier.
2. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> LARGE DINNING <st1:stockticker>ROOM</st1:stockticker> WITH STAGE – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Susan is a reluctant speaker at a animal rescue symposium.
3. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> INTERSECTION, <st1:place><st1:city>DALLAS</st1:city>, <st1:state>TEXAS</st1:state></st1:place> SUBURB – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
While stopped at a stop light Susan encounters an old woman, Anna, that is shocked to see her. Susan’s mind floods into scene of a young woman chained to a sacrificial altar. When jarred back to reality the woman has disappeared. She shakes it off as just an illusion.
4 .<st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> <st1:place><st1:placename>MASTERS</st1:placename> <st1:placename>STORE & GUN</st1:placename> <st1:placetype>RANGE</st1:placetype></st1:place>, <st1:place><st1:city>FT. WORTH</st1:city> <st1:state>TEXAS</st1:state></st1:place> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Sam and Jumper converse about his love interest Susan. Sam is contemplating a break up, but can’t go through with it. Jumper is curious why her Father is estranged. Sam draws a blank.
5. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> RESTAURANT IN <st1:city><st1:place>DALLAS</st1:place></st1:city> – NIGHT
At a restaurant later, Susan fills in Sam about what brought on the estrangement between her and her Dad.
6. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> SUSAN’S HOME – NIGHT
Anna makes contact at Susan’s home. She is told that her deceased grandmother is alive in the secluded town of <st1:city><st1:place>Helen</st1:place></st1:city>, <st1:state><st1:place>Texas</st1:place></st1:state>. The leader of the town is going to sacrifice her in two days in an attempt to end the world and that she is the only one that possesses the power to stop it. After Anna turns to ash.
7. EXT HELEN, REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>SITE</st1:stockticker> – NIGHT
Lord Lokan arrives and tells two elders that the revival has commenced. Karin and Erik agree to stay on the plan to escape.
8. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> SUSAN’S HOME, KITCHEN – NIGHT
Sam and Susan have a discussion that turns heated when she denies what all has happened to her that day. She wants to forget it ever happened. Sam urges her to at least call her Dad for some perspective. She is reluctant.
9. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> SUSAN’S BEDROOM – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Susan’s Mother appears as an apparition in the dresser mirror. Susan refuses at first to get involved with such foolishness. Her Mother implores her to go to her Father for his guidance. Susan’s reluctance is thwarted when a locket appears on the dresser, the locket that Susan put in her Mother’s casket.
10. <st1:place><st1:placename><st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker></st1:placename> <st1:placename>HELEN</st1:placename> <st1:placename>INN</st1:placename></st1:place>, <st1:stockticker>MAIN</st1:stockticker> <st1:stockticker>ROOM</st1:stockticker> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Lord Lokan and Erik’s Father discuss Erik’s motivation for wanting to be the one to kidnap Susan. Erik enters the room and receives his orders. He is reminded that the Blessing, (victim), must enter the town of her own free will. He is informed that if he fails his wife Karin will be sacrificed. She will be held in the blessing room until he returns.
11. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> SUSAN”S SUV – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
On her way to see her Father Susan has a flashback of the time when her Father tried to tell her about the trait she harbors inside her.
<st1:street><st1:address>12. EXT HIGHWAY</st1:address></st1:street> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
An exit sign appears on the highway denoting Arlene. Susan’s SUV signals for the exit.
END OF ACT <st1:stockticker>ONE</st1:stockticker>:
ACT TWO:
13. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> SUSAN’S SUV – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Sam is on the phone surprised to hear that she is driving to see her Dad. After, she runs into a terrible storm with lightning and hail. Her SUV is thrown into a guardrail and she stops. She sees and then drives to the safety of an underpass.
14. EXT SUSAN’S SUV – NIGHT
Erik meets Susan and persuades her to drive him to his town where there is a phone and his Dad can fix her vehicle. She is reluctant until her Mother’s voice encourages her to trust that which is within.
15. <st1:place><st1:placename><st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker></st1:placename> <st1:placename>HELEN</st1:placename> <st1:placename>INN</st1:placename></st1:place> UPSTAIRS HALLWAY ? BLEESING <st1:stockticker>ROOM</st1:stockticker> – NIGHT
Lord Lokan attempts a romantic move on Karin, but is interrupted by an Elder Nygaard.
16. <st1:street><st1:address>EXT REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street>, ENTRANCE TO HELEN – NIGHT
Susan is shocked to see that she is now in the town of <st1:city><st1:place>Helen</st1:place></st1:city>. She is subdued and meets Lord Lokan who she thinks she recognizes, but doesn’t know from where.
She’s taken to the revival site where she witnesses the sacrifice of a young woman. It’s the vision she had from Anna. Lord Lokan informs her take the next night she will be the sacrifice.
Lord Lokan feels that there will be an attempt to rescue Susan and directs that the trap at the bridge be set.
17. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> PROFESSOR OWEN WAYTHILL’S DEN – NIGHT.
Owen tells Sam in a phone conversation that Susan never arrived. Owen is vague when Sam ask for details of what he knows after Sam mention’s the town of <st1:city><st1:place>Helen</st1:place></st1:city>. He tells Owen he’s driving there tonight.
18. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> SAMS TRUCK -NIGHT
Jumper has to physically subdue Sam to get him to slow the truck down.
19. <st1:place><st1:placename><st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker></st1:placename> <st1:placename>MASTERS</st1:placename> <st1:placename>STORE & GUN</st1:placename> <st1:placetype>RANGE</st1:placetype></st1:place>, <st1:place><st1:city>FT. WORTH</st1:city> <st1:state>TEXAS</st1:state></st1:place> – NIGHT
Sam and Jumper stop at the store for supplies. Before leaving Sam opens his desk drawer and pockets the three coins.
20. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> PROFESSOR OWEN WAYTHILL’S DEN – NIGHT.
Owen explains things. He is shocked when he sees the coins. There were only rumors that they ever existed. Owen shows them first half of the Seidr Text. It cover only the history of the Seidr. The second half tells how to harness the power. No one knows where the second half is.
21. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> ERIK <st1:stockticker>AND</st1:stockticker> KARIN NYGAARD’S CABIN – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Karin tells Erik she’s afraid about what became of Anna. Also that feeling of some part of her is missing is getting stronger.
22. <st1:street><st1:address>EXT REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street> ENTRANCE – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
The trio meet Sheriff Justin Earlee. Sam exposes a gate behind some brush. The sheriff explains that the woods cover the road and prevent any entrance.
A deputy stops by with three bagged items they found at the overpass where they found Erik’s old broken down SUV. The items are clues that Susan was taken in the woods.
Sam refuses to accept that the woods are inaccessible. He’s going to find away in.
23. <st1:place><st1:placename><st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker></st1:placename> <st1:placename>HELEN</st1:placename> <st1:placename>INN</st1:placename></st1:place>, <st1:stockticker>MAIN</st1:stockticker> <st1:stockticker>ROOM</st1:stockticker> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Lord Lokan and Elder Nygaard inform Erik that his wife is guilty of heresy and will be sacrificed with the blessing that night. Lord Lokan directs that Karin be held in the Blessing room with Susan. He further direct Erik that he is not to see his wife again without Lord Lokan’s permission.
24. <st1:place><st1:placename><st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker></st1:placename> <st1:placename>HELEN</st1:placename> <st1:placename>INN</st1:placename></st1:place>, BLESSING <st1:stockticker>ROOM</st1:stockticker> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Karin is pushed into the room with Susan. After an awkwardness they talk. Karin tells what she can about the town. One thing is that no one grows older. Susan discovers that Karin is her Grandmother, but doesn’t tell her.
Susan hears a rotor noise and looks out the window. A helicopter is flying over the town.
25. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> HELICOPTER COCKPIT – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Sam is the passenger. He directs the pilot to fly over the town and to the revival site. When the pilot attempts to get lower a violent turbulence takes over. The pilot regains control. They circle the town and fly off.
26. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> PROFESSOR OWEN WAYTHILL’S LIVING <st1:stockticker>ROOM</st1:stockticker> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Professor Waythill and Jumper are at the table. Jumper goes to use the restroom.
Two men break in and take the professor. Jumper tries to stop them and he’s knocked out.
27. <st1:place><st1:placename><st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker></st1:placename> <st1:placename>HELEN</st1:placename> <st1:placename>INN</st1:placename></st1:place>, BLESSING <st1:stockticker>ROOM</st1:stockticker> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Susan smashes the barred window with the big chair in the room trying to get the coppers attention.
Lord Lokan sees this and comes to the room with his entourage.
During the confrontation Susan suddenly, realizes who Lord Lokan is. Time stops. Susan’s Mother tells her that now is the time to trust the being inside. It will rise in her when she releases all human emotion.
Time starts again and Susan gains a confidence she hasn’t felt before. She recognizes him as Loki.
She knows his plan. She has seen his one son The Serpent Jormungand, but ask where his other son The Wolf Fenrir is located. Lord Lokan acknowledges her. He tells her this time his attempts to raise his daughter Hel from the dark world will not be thwarted by her or her Dad. She will perish and so will her Father. She ask for the meaning of that and he laughs as he exits the room.
Elder Nygaard, at Lord Lokan’s direction attempts to secure Susan and Karin to the beds. Susan fights him off and kills him. She tells Karin that she’ll be back. Susan now knows that her mission is to stop Loki instead of escaping with Karin.
28. <st1:place><st1:placename>EXT</st1:placename> <st1:placename>REVIVAL</st1:placename> <st1:placename><st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:placename> <st1:placetype>BRIDGE</st1:placetype></st1:place> – NIGHT
The bridge trap is set by Legion Ladnar and Elder Kliest.
<st1:street><st1:address>29. EXT REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street> ENTRANCE – NIGHT
Sam finds the entrance opened. He parks his truck past the entrance. He dons his equipment; guns, helmet light and night goggles and walks down the road. He comes upon a trail and decides to take it.
30. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> HELEN CHAPEL – NIGHT
Susan gets caught hiding in the chapel.
<st1:street><st1:address>31. EXT REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street> ENTRANCE – NIGHT
Sheriff Earlee arrives and decides to drive into Helen on the road.
32. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> CAVERN BENEATH THE TOWN OF <st1:city><st1:place>HELEN</st1:place></st1:city> – NIGHT
Susan is chained to the wall of the cavern. Lord Lokan enters. He shows her who else he has chained to the farthest wall. It’s her Dad.
<st1:street><st1:address>33. EXT REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street> BRIDGE – NIGHT
Sheriff Earlee’s squad stalls on the bridge. A giant wolf comes out of the woods and attacks. It kills Sheriff Earlee and carries him off in his jowls. The bridge devours the squad car.
34. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> PROFESSOR OWEN WAYTHILL’S LIVING <st1:stockticker>ROOM</st1:stockticker> – NIGHT
M.J. awakens Jumper. He leaves the house taking M.J. with him.
<st1:street><st1:address>35. EXT REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street>, HELEN – NIGHT
Karin is strapped a post on a wagon. The procession starts to the revival site. It stops when two shots echo through the town. Lord Lokan finds that the two that set the trap did not stay to witness the bridge trap stop the intruder. They’re directed to go back with guns and eliminate whoever they find.
36. EXT REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>SITE</st1:stockticker> PLATFORM ALTAR – NIGHT
Karin is chained to a post. Lord Lokan directs that the others be brought there.
37. <st1:street><st1:address>EXT REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street>, HELEN – NIGHT
Sam engages to two sent by Lord Lokan in a gun fight. One is killed and soon turns to ash. The other, Legion Ladnar, is wounded in the shoulder. Sam threatens him to say where Susan is located.
Erik, who was sent to get the Seidr book meets Sam. Erik knows where Susan is located.
38. <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker> CAVERN BENEATH THE TOWN OF <st1:city><st1:place>HELEN</st1:place></st1:city> – NIGHT
Owen wakens and Susan engages him verbally. She tells him all that’s happened and what’s going to happen.
<st1:street><st1:address>39. EXT REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street> ENTRANCE – NIGHT
Jumper arrives at the entrance in the professors car. With M. J. he inspects Sam’s truck. The gate suddenly closes the road starts to fill with water. Jumper gets the hide a key, gets in the truck and drives.
40. EXT CAVERN ENTRANCE – NIGHT
Sam and Erik ambush and overpower the guards as they escort Susan and her Dad out of the cavern
Susan tells Sam that Erik is her kidnapper.
Erik explains his plan for him and Karin to escape. It was necessary to do it. Erik pleads for forgiveness.
Susan rejects his plea and has Sam tie him up. Sam takes the guards and Erik into the cave.
41. EXT CLEAR BEHIND THE REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>SITE</st1:stockticker> – NIGHT
They are suddenly surrounded by Elders and Lord Lokan.
END OF ACT TWO:
ACT THREE:
42 EXT. REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>SITE</st1:stockticker>, PLATFORM ALTAR – NIGHT
All four are chained to the post. The men on one the women the other. Lord Lokan boast at his accomplishments. Erik suddenly appears on the platform. He tells Lord Lokan that they tortured him and made of with the testament. When Lord Lokan points to the altar with the testament Erik attacks him. Lord Lokan kills him and sends him flying off the platform.
Lord Lokan begins the sacrifice.
The tree comes alive with loud rhythmic beats. The huge serpent rises from the middle of the tree. Two of the largest limbs become arms with talons.
The chains clink and remind Sam of something. He tells Owen that he has the coins in his inner pocket. Owen retrieves them. He aligns them in his hand and point at Susan.
The serpent freezes and Lord Lokan is sucked flat to the floor.
A wind in circles Susan who grows wings and manifest into Erindiss, daughter of Odin, She grows larger and soars away from the altar. Sam gets Karin and Owen off the platform.
Arindis destroys the platform with Lord Lokan and the serpent with fire arrows that explode on contact.
After the battle she flies off behind the tree.
43 EXT. REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>SITE</st1:stockticker> – NIGHT
Villagers run from the town to where Sam and Owen are stand. Fenrir the wolf makes an appearance at the top of <st1:street><st1:address>Revival Road</st1:address></st1:street>. Body parts hang from its jowls.
Owen knows what to do. With the three coins he manifest himself into Odin. They charge each other and battle on the road. The hole in the earth gets larger to the side of the road.
44 EXT. TOP OF <st1:street><st1:address>REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street> – NIGHT
Sam’s truck stops at the top of the road.
<st1:street><st1:address>45 EXT. REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker></st1:address></st1:street> – NIGHT
Odin sinks his sword into Fenrir’s snout. Fenrir raises onto its hind legs. Sam’s truck smashes into the hind legs sending the combatants over the hole’s edge. Sam finds Owen holding onto the sword that is stabbed in the side of thee hole. Sam tries to help, but Owen won’t release the sword.
46 EXT. BARREN <st1:stockticker>AREA</st1:stockticker> BEHIND THE <st1:stockticker>TREE</st1:stockticker> – NIGHT
Karin hold’s Erik’s head in his lap. She looks up to Erindiss with a tear soaked face. Erindiss is saddened.
Her Mother’s voice tells her that she can replace her life for his, but for this she will no longer be able to communicate with her. It is Erindiss’s decision. After a long internal inspection she agrees. Erik’s life is renewed.
47 EXT. <st1:stockticker>SIDE</st1:stockticker> WALL OF HOLE – NIGHT
The hole is closing. Sam pleads with Owen to take his hand. The wall shakes and he loses his grip he starts to fall into the fiery bottom. Erindiss flies into the hole and catches Owen. They retrieve the sword. She lands the safely them on the road.
Sam goes to his truck and finds Jumper holding onto M.J. The cat is find, but Jumper is busted up.
48 EXT. <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker> IN FRONT OF THE <st1:place><st1:placename>HELEN</st1:placename> <st1:placename>INN</st1:placename></st1:place> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
There are emergency vehicles and a school bus park on the road. Susan and her Father reconcile. Then Susan introduces Karin to her Father.
They understand and embrace. Karin exclaims that this was the missing feeling in her and is now gone.
49 <st1:stockticker>INT</st1:stockticker>. SCHOOL BUS – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
The passengers are silent. Focus goes to the rear seat where Legion Ladnar sits with his arm in a sling. His eyes suddenly turn to resemble Lord Lokan’s for a quick moment. He smiles.
50 <st1:place><st1:placename>EXT.</st1:placename> <st1:placename>HELEN</st1:placename> <st1:placename>INN</st1:placename></st1:place> – <st1:stockticker>DAY</st1:stockticker>
Susan’s SUV is the last vehicle to leave. A raven lands on the <st1:place>Inn</st1:place>’s roof apex. It caws once then flies away.
THE END
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Found it, thanx. I’m after horror / fantasy. I’d like to see it on the screen also before I cash it in, lol.
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I see that you sent me a message. Every time I try to bring it up it disappears. What am I doing wrong?
Randall
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SCRIPT STRUCTURE.
What I learned from this was that more background from Susan’s childhood needed to be added in the opening to give the audience more of a bond to her
LOG <st1:stockticker>LINE</st1:stockticker>
A woman who refuses to accept she possesses the hidden dominant trait of a Norse goddess gets kidnapped by a Norse religious cult to be sacrificed. She discovers she must liberate the trait to escape and prevent the end of the world.
1. Opening:
On screen shows Bible quote. “The woman was given two wings of a great eagle, so that she might fly…
out of the serpents reach”.
Revelations 12 : 14
Two women, Susan and Karin, are chained to a post on an altar platform they pull back in fear at what grows before them.
On screen shows: Two days earlier.
Susan addresses a large audience that supports animal rescue.
2. Inciting Incident:
An old woman shows up at Susan’s house and informs her that her dead grandmother is alive being and held with the population in a small secluded town of <st1:city><st1:place>Helen</st1:place></st1:city>, <st1:state><st1:place>Texas</st1:place></st1:state>. She furthers that Susan solely possess the power to save the town and world from extinction. Before the woman turns to ash she’s given three coins said to have knowledge in them.
3. By page ten:
To Susan the only person that knows anything about mythological cults is her estranged father. Her love interest Sam encourages her to at least call her father. Susan balks and wants to let it go. Her Mother’s aberration encourages her to go see her Father. She leaves Susan proof, a locket the Susan put in her coffin.
First turning point at end of act one:
Susan drives to her Father’s house ninety miles away. On the way she gets kidnapped and taken to the town of <st1:city><st1:place>Helen</st1:place></st1:city>. She meets the evil protagonist Lord Lokan, who for some unknown reason she slightly recognizes.
Mid-point:
Susan’s held captive in a room and is soon accompanied by a young woman, Karin, who is there for heresy. She tells Susan that Lord Lokan is going to sacrifice Susan at a ceremony that evening and the world is going to be destroyed. Susan knows who Karin is, but can’t get over how young she is. Karin informs her that in the town no one ages. Susan keeps the secret.
Second turning point at end of act two:
During an appearance by Lord Lokan Susan unexpectedly recognizes him. Her Mother’s voice tells her how to release her harbored power that she had denied possessing. Susan does it and is fulfilled with confidence and a knowledge of what has to be done. She confronts Lord Lokan and stands up to him before he leaves.
Crisis:
Susan escapes and tells Karin she’ll be back for her. Susan is soon caught again and chained to a wall in a cavern. Lord Lokan shows her who else is chained in the cave, her father. He vows that both of them will be sacrificed.
Sam and his friend Jumper have been on Susan’s trail with the sheriff of the nearby town. The sheriff enters the road to Helen gets killed and carried off by a giant wolf. His squad is devoured by the small bridge that leads to the town. Sam makes his way to the town on foot. After a gunfight, he meets up with Erik, Karin’s husband, the one who originally kidnapped Susan. Sam does not know this. They team up and rescue Susan and her Father Owen. Karin tells Sam what Erik did and wants revenge. Erik explains his motive for the act. Susan has doubts. Sam ties him up at the entrance to the cave.
Sam, Susan and Owen are captured and secured on the sacrifice altar; the men chained to one post, the women on the other.
Erik gets free from his shackles and interrupts the ceremony by getting on the platform and informing Lord Lokan of a plot by the victims to kill him. When Lord Lokan looks away Erik attacks him, but is killed and cast off the altar.
Climax:
Lord Lokan commences the sacrifice ceremony. Focus is on the women’s scene from the beginning. A huge serpent grows before them. Lord Lokan raises his hand and loosens the chains so the serpent and devour the victims. The chains clink remind Sam that he has the three coins in his inner pants pocket. He tells Owen who retrieves them and lines them up in his hand, points at Susan and says a chant.
Simultaneously, Lord Lokan collapses and a whirl of wind surrounds Susan. She grows to a nine foot armored woman with wings, a bow and quiver of flaming arrows. She is Arindis the secret daughter of Odin. She flies away from the serpent just in time.
Sam gets Karin and Owen off the platform. Karin runs off to find Erik.
Arindis shoots her arrows at the fallen Lord Lokan and he explodes off the platform. Arindis then destroys the serpent and the tree from which it came. The ground opens and swallows all the structures. Arindis flies off.
At the top of the road, that leads down to the area, stands the wolf. It has blood and body parts hanging from its jowls. Owen directs Sam to stand away.
Owen opens his hand and chants. rapidly, he starts growing with a gold sword in his hand. He transforms into Odin. The wolf and Odin battle on the road as the hole in the earth enlarges. Odin is stabs stands on the wolfs muzzle and stabs at its eyes. The wolf stands on its hind legs as its front paws desperately try to sweep Odin off.
Arindis finds Karin beside her dead husband. Arindis feels helpless and ashamed. Her Mother’s voice intercedes and tells Arindis that she can give him life, but will disappear forever. After a moment of reflection, she her mother gives a heartfelt nod.
At the top of the road enters Sam’s truck. Jumper is behind the wheel he floors it down the hill and into the wolf’s hind legs. The wolf and Odin are cast into the hole. Sam rushes to the side and sees Owen now holding on to the sword that is plunged into the side of the hole. Sam can’t reach him. Arindis flies to the rescue and saves the day.
Resolution:
Susan and Owen reconcile as father and daughter. She ask for forgiveness and Owen says there is nothing to forgive.
Then Susan introduces her Father to his Mother Karin.
On the bus that takes the survivors of the town away. Focus is on the back seat. Legion Ladnar, one of the men Sam shot, sits with his arm in a sling. His eyes suddenly form exactly like Lord Lokan’s then back to normal. He smiles.
OPENING:
I added a conversation between Susan and Sam at a restaurant where she divulges why she is estranged from her Father.
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not agree, I’ll do the course privately
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REVIVAL <st1:stockticker>ROAD</st1:stockticker>
Horror / Fantasy
LOG <st1:stockticker>LINE</st1:stockticker>
A woman who refuses to accept she possesses the hidden dominant trait of a Norse goddess gets kidnapped by a Norse religious cult to be sacrificed. She discovers she must liberate the trait to escape and prevent the end of the world.
Susan Waythill Is told by an old woman, before she perishes to dust, that her grandmother is still alive in the secluded town of <st1:city><st1:place>Helen</st1:place></st1:city>. She needs to be saved and Susan is the only one that has the power do it. The only person she knows that has any knowledge of the town is her estranged father. She wants to forget about the whole thing, but is enticed by her deceased Mother’s apparition.
On her way she gets kidnapped and taken to the town of <st1:city><st1:place>Helen</st1:place></st1:city> where she meets and has a feeling she the evil leader Lord Lokan. She’s locked in a room at the <st1:place>Inn</st1:place>
Sam Masters, Susan’s love interest, finds out that Susan never made it to her fathers house. He and a friend Jumper discover at the house the secret her father, Professor Owen Waythill, knows about Susan. When Sam shows the three coins to him, his fears are realized. They meet up with the town’s Sheriff Justin Tyme Earlee who tells them that the woods that surround the Helen make it inaccessible. Sam finds the road to Helen opened and sets out on foot well armed. He gets off on a trail. Sheriff Earlee sees Sam’s truck at the entrance and drives in to stop him. His squad car gets destroyed by a giant wolf and the sheriff is eaten.
Karin Nygaard, Susan’s grandmother, is accused of subversion by Lord Lokan and put in the same room as Susan. Karin tells Susan of the attempted revival of an entity by Lord Lokan to begin a new world order and that Susan has to be sacrificed for it to happen. Lord Lokan goes to the room of the captives. During their conversation Susan suddenly realizes who Lord Lokan is. Time stops and Susan’s Mother tells her how to access the power within her. Lord Lokan confirms who he is and tells her that this time he will not be stopped.
Susan kills the guard and escapes, but is recaptured. She’s chained to a cave wall. Lord Lokan lifts the head of an old man also chained to the darkened wall and smiles. Its her dad!
Sam makes his way to the town. After a gunfight he meets Erik Nygaard, Karin’s husband. She has been taken to the sacrifice altar. One of the men he shot, Legion Ladnar, is still alive and Sam entices him to reveal where Susan was taken. Sam and Erik Get the Seidr testament from the chapel and rescue Susan and her Dad. Her dad scans the Seidr. They are captured without Erik by Lord Lokan’s men. All four are chained to the sacrifice altar. They are all doomed.
Erik attacks Lord Lokan, but is killed and is set sailing off the altar.
The clinking of the chains reminds Sam that he has the coins in his inner pants pocket. Owen retrieves them and uses their power to reverse their situation. Sam gets Karin off the altar. Owen points the coins at Susan and she is whirl winded into Arindis, the secret child of Odin. A woman with a bow, a golden quiver of fire arrows and wings. She defeats Lord Lokan and the serpent in the tree. The earth opens and swallows up all the structures. Karin rushes to find Erik. Arindis helps bring Erik back to life.
The huge wolf from the bridge appears at the top of the road from the town. It has bloody human body parts dripping from its Jowls. Owen recognizes the wolf is there for him. He opens the hand with the coins. He turns into Odin with a golden sword. The wolf attacks and they battle. The hole in the earth is widening.
Sam’s truck appears at the top of the road. Sam’s friend Jumper is driving. It races to the rear of the wolf and crashes into it knocking the wolf and Odin into the hole. Sam rushes to the side and sees Professor Owen holding onto the sword that is plunged into the side of the hole. Arindis flies into the hole and saves him. The next morning in the town Susan introduces Karin to her son, Professor Owen Waythill
On the back seat of the bus that carries the survivors of the town away on <st1:street><st1:address>Revival Road</st1:address></st1:street> sits Legion Ladnar.
Focus is on his eyes that suddenly turn to the same that Lord Lokan had then back to normal.
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Randall Stevens
I’m seventy three years old, retired US Army and worked several civilian jobs. Before calling it quits in 2010. I live in San Antonio, Texas and originally from WisCOLDsin.
I wrote and self published a novel back in 2006. Ten years later I decided to try to make it into a script. I have entered many contest ,LA, international, Santa Barbara, and Wiki to name a few. I received many laurels and been a finalist in Wiki twice.
I’ve decided there has to be something missing from my script and so when this class came to my attention I entered.
I’m not looking for a career at my age. I just would like this script to be the best it can be. I have worked on a sequel to the script, but stop to focus on this one.
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Randall Stevens
I agree to the terms of this release form.
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I’m using an old word program. I’ll try one more time.
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OMG You’re right. I copied the beat sheet then rated each scene. Guess it didn’t take. I’m really frustrated. Maybe I’ll just do for my self. No self pity, just fact.
Thanx for noticing.
Randall
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I’m using word but it’s an old version.
Randall
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I am using word. Its a very old version though. Thanx for writing.
Randall
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Thank you Ed. I’ll try to do this.
Randal1