[Ron Chepesiuk]

Ron Has Finished Act 4!

VISION: I want the success and recognition of being an in demand, A-list screenwriter who writes successful films that are financially profitable, award winning and of enduring quality.

Finished first draft! Have started second draft. Amazing!

[Ron Chepesiuk]

Ron’s Continues Act 4

VISION: I want the success and recognition of being an in demand, A-list screenwriter who writes successful films that are financially profitable, award winning and of enduring quality.

Well, actually did it. Worked through all the problems and questions and finished the first draft of the script. Now the hard work begins in revising.

[Ron Chepesiuk]

Ron’s Started Act 4

VISION: I want the success and recognition of being an in demand, A-list screenwriter who writes successful films that are financially profitable, award winning and of enduring quality.

It’s going great. I put the protagonist and antagonist in ultimate. Nowjust got to wrap her up and do a couple of scenes. Then the hard part of rewriting.and revising

I learned that discipline—focus, with slow and steady, will win the race

[Ron Chepesiuk]

Ron’s Finishing Act 3 (place in first line)

VISION: I want the success and recognition of being an in demand, A-list screenwriter who writes successful films that are financially profitable, award winning and of enduring quality.

It’s going great. Once I’ve figured out the structure and the wants, I’m been keeping right on schedule.

[Ron Chepesiuk]

Ron’s Continuing Act 3

VISION: I want the success and recognition of being an in demand, A-list screenwriter who writes successful films that are financially profitable, award winning and of enduring quality.

I am in the home stretch, I figured out the plot and made adjustments to the outline. Once I do that the writing is a lot easier….never easy but easier!

[Ron Chepesiuk]

Ron’s Began Act 3

VISION: I want the success and recognition of being an in demand, A-list screenwriter who writes successful films that are financially profitable, award winning and of enduring quality.

What I learned from doing this assignment is that really believe I have absorbed the course

work from SU given the skills I am exhibiting in my screenwriting.

In writing the screenplay it’s been getting increasingly better as I work out the plot and deal with its holes..

[Ron Chepesiuk]

Ron’s Completed Act 2

VISION: I want the success and recognition of being an in demand, A-list screenwriter who writes successful films that are financially profitable, award winning and of enduring quality.

I seem to be hitting a groove. Solved a couple of problem holes and added a new twist that made the plot stronger.

[Ron Chepesiuk]

Ron’s Continuing Act 1

VISION: I want the success and recognition of being an in demand, A-list screenwriter who writes successful films that are financially profitable, award winning and of enduring quality.

Going well. On schedule. I’ve continuing to readjust the outline, but it seems to be working. I’m still excited about how this script is developing.

[Ron Chepesiuk]

Ron’s Began Act 2

VISION: I want the success and recognition of being an in demand, A-list screenwriter who writes successful films that are financially profitable, award winning and of enduring quality.

I’ve been moving along at a steady pace. As I’ve gone alone, I’ve been changing some of the structure as I had breakthroughs. I’ve been getting to know my characters better. Amazing how the creative subconscious works.

[Ron Chepesiuk]

Ron’s Finished Act 1

VISION: I want the success and recognition of being an in demand, A-list screenwriter who writes successful films that are financially profitable, award winning and of enduring quality.

Going well. On schedule. I’ve had to readjust the outline, but it seems to work. I’m excited about how thias script will develop.

[Ron Chepesiuk]

Module 5 lesson 4

My vision: I want the success and recognition of being an in demand, A-list screenwriter who writes successful films that are financially profitable, award winning and of enduring quality.

What I learned is that more I’m writing the more I am coming to understand my characters. They are coming alive as I write.

Given my brutal schedule, I have still have been able to average about four pages a day.

[Ron Chepesiuk]

Module 5 lesson 3

My vision: I want the success and recognition of being an in demand, A-list screenwriter who writes successful films that are financially profitable, award winning and of enduring quality.

What I learned is that like Tarantino I like to create as I go along. The outline can show me how to get to the end but in itself it won’t get me there.

The draft is coming along better than I hoped for

[Ron Chepesiuk]

Ron’s High Speed Writing Rules

VISION: I want the success and recognition of being an in demand, A-list screenwriter who writes successful films that are financially profitable, award winning and of enduring quality.

I was a little nervous getting started, but with the outline in front of me. The confidence came, the worked flowed, and I was happy with the outcome. .

What I learned from doing this assignment that once I got started I still loved the craft of writing.

[Ron Chepesiuk]

Ron’s High Speed Writing Rules

VISION: I want the success and recognition of being an in demand, A-list screenwriter who writes successful films that are financially profitable, award winning and of enduring quality.

I was a little nervous getting started, but with the outline in front of me. The confidence came, the worked flowed, and I was happy with the outcome. .

What I learned from doing this assignment that once I got started I still loved the craft of writing.

[Ron Chepesiuk]

I’ve been trying to copy and paste my assignment to this dysfunctional system over the last two days to no avail. In any case, I can exchange.

[Ron Chepesiuk]

Ron’s Scene Requirements

VISION: I want the success and recognition of being an in demand, A-list screenwriter who writes successful films that are financially profitable, award winning and of enduring quality.

.What I learned from doing this is that planning is the key to composing a well structured screenplay.

2. List Slugline and short description of what happens in the scene.

After writing 14 scripts, I have my own method for scene requirements, a modification of this assignment.

` MAIL ORDER GODMOTHER

Ext- Street- New York City- Night

The godfather and wife arrive at the restaurant. It is a happy occasion: their 25^th wedding anniversary.

Int. Restaurant –New York City- Day

The party is on. Godfather makes toast to the occasion. The godfather’s son flirts with pretty waitress.

Later at the Party

Godfather asks where is his son, who is responsible for his security?

Int. Restaurant – Pantry – New York City – Night

We see son having sex with the pretty waitress.

Int. Restaurant-New York City – Day

Godfather and wife leave.

Ext. Car – New York City Night

Godfather and wife ambushed. Attack on car.

Int. Restaurant – New Year City – Night

Son hears the gunshots. Hurriedly puts on his pants and makes it out the pantry door.

Ext. Street –New York City – Night

Shootout. Godfather’s wife killed. Godfather’s loyal mute consigliere throws himself in front of Godfather saves him. but is wounded severely. Son arrives but is too late.

Int. House –Rome, Italy- Day

Lucia is on the computer surfing the mail order bride sites. Her neurotic mother yells at her to help her with dinner. You need to help your poor overworked mother.

Ext. Street – New York City

The shootout is now a crime scene. Detective Jack Roache arrives. Godfather mum about details of shooting

INT. HOSPITAL – DAY

Godfather comes to see how consigliere recovering. There is obviously a bond.

Int. Godfather’s Mansion – New York City- Day

Godfather meets with son. Angry with him. I could have been killed. Takes his role as head of his security away. Son fumes. Storms out of meeting.

Int. Taxi—Rome, Italy – Night

Lucia and boyfriend in the car. They argue. He wants to marry. She doesn’t. Boyfriend slaps Lucia, bruises her.

Int. Godfather’s Mansion –NewYork City- Night

Godfather meets with informant who tells him that Paulie Colosimo of a rival mafia was the one who tried to kill him.

Int. Colosimo Social Club – NewYear City – Night

Godfather’s son warns Colosimo via phone of forthcoming attack.

Int/Ext. Colosimo Club House – New York City – Night

Godfather attacks but Colosimo survives.

Int. Godfather’s Mansion- New York City- Night

An angry Colosimo calls Godfather. They are at war.

Int. Godfather’s Mansion –New York City- Day

Godfather is despondent at wife’s death. Consigliere tries to cheer him up. Godfather goes on computer. He stumbles on to Lucia at a mail order bride sight. He is enamored by her picture and how much she looks like his wife. Strikes up a message chat.

MONTAGE: LUCIA AND GODFATHER COREPSONDING ON INTERNET

Connection blossoms.

Int. Car- New York City – Night

Son secretly meets with Colosimo. They strike a deal to get rid of godfather.

Int. Lucia’s House – New York City – Day

Godfather calls Lucia, Says he is coming to see her.

Int., Restaurant –Rome, Italy – Night

Lucia tells her boyfriend, Ricco, she want to break up. They argue. Ricco learns about Godfather. Angry with Ricco, Lucia dashes out of Cafe,

Ext. Street –Rome, Italy -Night

Lucia continues to argue with boyfriend. She starts to walk away. He beats her up. Leaves her there.

Int. Hospital – Rome, Italy- Day

Lucia is being released. She doesn’t want to press charges. Her mother is there. Berates her, Blames her for her beating.

Ext. Airport- Rome, Italy – day

Godfather arrives in Italy. Lucia is not at airport. She is at home recovering.

Int. Lucia’s House –Rome, Italy – Day

Godfather arrives at Lucia’s house. Sees she has been beate. Finds out it is Ricco, her boy friend. Angry, godfather wants to talk to him, but Lucia dissuades him.

Int. Restaurant- Rome, Italy – Night

Lucia and godfather dine. He is enamored with Lucia. He proposes marriage. She accepts. Lucia’s boyfriend spies on them,

Int. Lucia’s House- Patio – Rome, Italy – Day

Ricco comes to see Lucia. He is desperate. Doesn’t want her to go to America. He grabs Lucia. She twists him around. Pushes off the second floor patio. Ricco break his neck and is dead. Lucia, horrified, calls godfather.

Later

Godfather shows up, says he will fix it.

Int. Car – Rome, Italy – Day

Godfather meets with police chief, pays him off.

Ext/Int. Airplane- Rome, Italy – Day

Lucia, Godfather and his entourage leave for the U.S.

Int. Godfather’s Mansion – New York City

Godfather introduces Lucia to his crime family. There is a little uneasiness and resentment. Lucia introduced to Godfather’s mother who appears to have Alzheimer’s. but feigns it. Lucia meets son. There is spark there.

Int. Godfather’s Mansion – Dining Room – New York City – Day

Lucia, Godfather, son and mother have dinner. Son plays with Lucia’s leg under table. She gently pushes his hand away.

Ext. Godfather’s Mansion – New York City – Day

The godfather surprises Lucia’s with a brand new Mercedes.

MONTAGE: SON ATTEMPTING TO SEDUCE LUCIA

In various settings. Lucia tries her best to resist.

Ext. Parking Lot –New York City- Night

Godfather and Colosimo meet to work out differences. Uneasy. Meeting ends with guns drawn. Detective Roache watches from a distance

Int. Godfather’s Mansion- Living Room – New York City- Day

Godfather suggests that he is busy today and why don’t Son take Lucia shopping. She looks bored. Lucia hesitates but agrees.

Int. Car – New York City – Day

Son stops the car and makes out with Lucia

Int. Hotel – Room- New York City – Day

Lucia and the son make love. Lucia feels guilty, but she has fallen for the son

Int. Car – New York City – Night

The son and Colisimo. Son tells him about his plan to seduce Lucia and get her to help kill Godfather. Colosimo agrees to son’s plan.

Int. Concert Hall- New York City – Night

Godfather and Lucia attend a concert. Godfather looks happy. Lucia looks troubled, guilty.

Ext/Int. Car – New York City – Night

Godfather and Lucia leave concert.

Int. Restaurant – New York City – Night

At dinner, Godfather gives Lucia beautiful diamond ring, professes his love, further troubling Lucia.

Int. Godfather’s Mansion – Bedroom -New York City – Night

Son and Lucia meet secretly to plan murder of godfather. Son says they will use polonium 210, highly radioactive substance for which no antidote. Put it in his tea. Lucinda makes excuses for postponing. Son will not hear it.

The door to the bedroom is open. Godmother’s mother walks by and hears the plot. Sneaks away, but makes noise. Son goes to the door, sees grandmother sneaking away.

Int. Godfather’s Mansion – Study – New York City – Day

Godfather’s mother tries to warn Godfather about plot. He dismisses her.

Int. Godfather’s Mansion- Bedroom – New York City – Night

Lucia puts polonium 210 in Godfather’s tea. Brings it you to him. She purposely spills the poisoned drink. He does not drink it.

Int. Godfather’s Mansion – Bedroom – New York City- Night

Lucia makes excuses for not poisoning husband.

Int. Godfather’s Mansion- Mother’s bedroom – New York City – Night

Son confronts Grandmother about what was she doing outside bedroom and what did she hear. She tells him she knows about his plot to kill godfather. They argue. He pushes grandmother off balcony to her death.

Int. Church – New York – Day

Funeral of Mother. Godfather has a stroke.

Ext. Streets of New York – Day

Ambulance rushes godfather to hospital. Lucia is beside him.

Int. Hospital- New York City – Day

Godfather recovering. Lucia is at his side. Son comes in. Says to her we are going to have to have to end this once and for all.

Int. Colosimo Social Club – New York City- Night

Son and Colosimo meet. They agree that Colosimo’s men will go hospital and kill the godfather.

Int. Hospital –New York City- Night

Lucia has made her decision. She is going to save the Godfather. She puts him a chair and whisks him out of hospital room and out of hospital.

Ext. Street – New York City – Night

In the ambulance parking lot, Lucia puts godfather in car. Across the street detective Roache and a colleague watch.

Ext. Colosimo Social Club- New York City – Night

Two of Colosimo’s men leave to go and kill Godfather. The son is with them. They arrive at hospital just as Lucia is putting godfather in car. She seems them and speeds out with them in pursuit. Detective Roache picks up the chase.

Lucia drives down a dead end street. They have her cornered. She reaches into the glove compartment and pulls out a glock, gets out of car and positions herself. A shootout starts. She is almost out of bullets when Detective Roache arrives. Colosimo’s two men surrender. But Son makes a dash for freedom. Lucia chases. A shootout. Lucia kills Son. Godfather is okay.

Int. Godfather’s Mansion – Living room- New York City

Godfather in wheelchair. Meeting. Godfather tells crew while he is recovering Lucia will head the mafia.

Lucia and Godfather talk. He tells her he knew she was in a plot to kill him, but he had faith in her to do the right thing.

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[Ron Chepesiuk]

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Ron’s Intriguing Moments

VISION: I want the success and recognition of being an in demand, A-list screenwriter who writes successful films that are financially profitable, award winning and of enduring quality.

“What I learned from doing this assignment Is that each of these lessons build on each other, and if you do them faithfully, slowly but surely, you will eventually have a solid out line for the script. ”

2. Give us a one sentence explanation of the intriguing moments in each Act of your project. Like the example above.

Intrigue
Secret
Covert agenda
Hidden identity
Conspiracy
Scheme
Superior position
Cover up
Mystery

Act 1:

Intrigue The godfather and wife are ambushed; wife dies. Who is responsible for the assassination?

Intrigue A devastated Godfather is intrigued by a picture he sees of a woman on a mail order bride site who reminds him of his late dead wife

Scheme:The son is willing to undercut his father as an act of revenge for humiliation of being taken off heading his security control

Secret: We see a bruised Lucia using the Internet. She hides the fact that she is being abused by boyfriend

Cover up: Lucia accidently kills abusive boyfriend and Godfather helps cover it up, thus avoiding a murder charge

ACT 2

Covert agenda: Not fully accepted by the Godfather’s mob, Lucia must learn to maneuver in a criminal jungle. Superior position: The mob underestimates her

Covert agenda: Godfather’s son seduces Lucia. While she thinks its love, it’s actually a plot by son to recruit her to kill husband, the godfather.

Mystery: Lucia agrees to help son kill his father. Will she be clever enough to figure out god son’s plan?

Cover up: Lucia sabotages son’s plan to kill father, the godfather, as she melts to godfather’s killing her with kindness

Act 3

Scheme: Son becomes suspicious of Lucia who keeps putting off son about killing godfather and, enraged, decides to kill her

Intrigue: Mother overhears son’s plan to kill Lucia and warns Lucia

Covert agenda: Godfather has a stroke, which makes her plans to hide godfather from son difficult, but somehow she does with the help of godfather’s mother.

ACT 4

Covert agenda: Lucia sets trap for her ex lover and saves godfather

While he recovers Godfather puts Lucia in charge of the mob. He reveals to her that he knew she was planning to kill him, but had faith in her that she wouldn’t.

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[Ron Chepesiuk]

Ron’s emotional moments!

VISION: I want the success and recognition of being an in demand, A-list screenwriter who writes successful films that are financially profitable, award winning and of enduring quality.

“What I learned from doing this assignment is to always do an exercise in which you scrutinize the emotional impact of your script”

Like the example above, give us a one or two sentence explanation of the emotional moments in each act of your project.

Act 1

Love: Set up At their 25^th wedding anniversary, the godfather professes his love to wife of 25 years. Hard to live without her. Hopes they have 25 more.

Distress: In an attempted assassination, the godfather’s wife is killed. Godfather survives.

Moral issue: The son responsible for the godfather’s security is busy having sex with a woman

Lucia accidently kills boyfriend

Excitement: Discovers Lucia, who reminds him of his wife

Betrayal: Son plots revenge against his father

Act 2

Distress: Lucia faces rigid reception in Mob

Betrayal: Consigliere discovers Lucia is having affair, tries to warn Godfather

Betrayal Suggests to Lucia they kill the godfather by poisoning him

Love: Godfather is killing Lucia with kindness, softening her heart

Act 3

Emotional dilemma: Son meets with rival godfather and they plan to ambush the godfather and kill him

Surprise: Godfather has a stroke, making him highly vulnerable to getting killed

Distress: Son finds where Lucia is hiding and goes to kill her.

Act 4

Love: The godfather recovers under Lucia’s tender loving care

Bonding: Godfather appoints Lucia acting head of the mafia. She is the only person he trusts.

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[Ron Chepesiuk]

Ron’s Reveals!

VISION: I want the success and recognition of being an in demand, A-list screenwriter who writes successful films that are financially profitable, award winning and of enduring quality.

What I learned from doing this assignment is that in outlining the script a writer should always remember that, in a script, all actions have consequences

Act 1:

Set up At their 25^th wedding anniversary, the godfather professes his love to wife of 25 years. Hard to live without her. Hopes they have 25 more.

Reveal: In an attempted assassination, the godfather’s wife is killed. Godfather survives.

Setup: The son responsible for the godfather’s security is busy having sex with a waitress at the wedding party.

Reveal: Attempted assassination. Mother killed. Son blamed.

Setup: Godfather relieves son of responsibility for his security

Reveal: Son plots revenge against his father

Setup Godfather is lonely, misses his wife

Reveal: Discovers Mail order bride services on Internet

Setup: Godfather cruises Internet

Reveal: Discovers Lucia, who reminds him of his wife

Set up: Lucia has abusive boyfriend

Reveal: Lucia accidently kills him

Setup: Lucia has always dreamed of going to America

Reveal: Godfather takes her there to marry her.

ACT 2:

Setup Lucia faces rigid reception in Mob

Reveal: All except Stefano the son who plans to seduce her and recruit her to his side

Setup: Consigliere, Godfather’s right hand man, does not trust son

Reveal: Consigliere discovers Lucia is having affair, tries to warn Godfather

Setup: Son tells Lucia it would be nice they could be together always

Reveal Suggests to Lucia they kill the godfather by poisoning him

Setup: Godfather is killing Lucia with kindness

Reveal: Lucia feels guilty and reneges on killing godfather.

Act 3

Set up: Son meets with rival godfather and they plan to ambush the godfather and kill him

Reveal: Godfather has a stroke, making him highly vulnerable to getting killed

Set up: Godfather’s mother over hears grandson planning godfather’s murder

Reveal: She warns Lucia.

Setup: Lucia hides the godfather from son

Reveal: Son finds where Lucia is hiding and goes to kill her.

Set up: Son findsLucia

Reveal Son tries to kill Lucia, but she kills him

ACT 4

Setup: Godfather recovers is recovering from stroke and is in no position to head mafia

Reveal: Godfather appoints Lucia acting head of the mafia. She is the only person he trusts..

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[Ron Chepesiuk]

Ron’s Character Reactions!

VISION: I want the success and recognition of being an in demand, A-list screenwriter who writes successful films that are financially profitable, award winning and of enduring quality.

What I learned from doing this assignment is that the pieces of my script are starting to come together.

High concept: After the son of a powerful Mafia godfather convinces the godfather’s mail order bride, the son’s lover, to kill the godfather and take over his criminal empire, she has second thoughts and looks for a way to extricate herself from this treacherous plot.

Activity: …creating interesting action for my characters.

2. Select your Protagonist and go through the process above to make sure every beat has action that comes from their Profile.

3. Do the same with your Antagonist.

4. If there is a Triangle character, do the process with that character.

CHANGES

TO THE OUTLINE NOTED IN

Italics

PJ1- Lucia

AJ1- Godfather’s son

AJ2 Godfather

Beginning:

PJ1- Lucia is on the Internet dreaming of meeting a man and escaping her environment. Her mother berates her for wasting her time dreaming

AJ2—The godfather is at a party with wife celebrating his 25^th wedding anniversary.

AJ1- is in back room having sex with worker instead of minding his father’s protection

AJ2, the godfather, and wife ambushed by rival. His wife is killed.

Godfather’s consigliere saves Godfather’s life, is wounded but survives. Godfather vows revenge on rival

AJ2 takes AJI off security management, angering AJ! Godfather appoints his consigliere. AJI vows revenge.

Short tempered, AJI goes into a fit of rage and trashes bedroom

AJ2 kills the gangsters who kill his wife, setting up mob war.

PJ1 is beat up by abusive boyfriend, makes her more determined to leave.

AJ1- secretly meets with AJ1’s rival. They make a deal and plan to overthrow AJ2

Inciting Incident: PJ1 and AJ2
meet on the internet. AJ2 comes over to Italy to see PJ1

PJI’S boy friend is jealous. Wants her to stay away from AJ2.

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Turning Point 1: WHEN BOYFRIEND
IS AGRESSIVE WITH PJ1, SHE accidently kills him. AJ2 helps her cover it
up.

PJ1 and AJ2 leave for U.S.

AJI sees picture of PJI and is enamoored. Plots seduction of PJ1

.

Act 2

PJ1 enters hostile mob
environment. They don’t want AJ2 to marry her but he does.<i style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>AJI feigns support of PJI in effort to
seduce her

PJI BEFRIENDS AJ2’S MOTHER, WHO ACTS LIKE SHE SUFFERS FROM DEMENTIA, BUT IS AWARE OF EVERYTHING GOING ON.

Turning Point 2 / Midpoint– PJ1 is attracted to AJ1, He seduces her. AJ1 COMPLAINS TO PJI ABOUT AJ2 AND HOW TREATING HIM BADLY. Coaxes her to ENTER INTO PLOT TO kill AJ2

MOTHER WARNS PJI ABOUT GETTING INVOLVED WITH AJ1, BUT SHE IGNORES HER ADVICE

Deeper layer: AJ 1 is using PJ1 to eliminate AJ2

Act 3

AJ1 wants to kill AJ2, tries to draw PJ 1 into his plot to poison him. But PJ1 is ambivalent puts him off.

AJ2 IS KIND TO HER. Buys her expensive car.

Deeper layer: PJ1 is warming to AJ2

Turning Point 3:-
AJ2 GETS stroke, AJ1 sees chance to kill him.

PJ1 hides AJ2 from
AJ1. AJ1 LEARNS WHERE PJI IS HIDING AJ2. AJQ GOES LOOKING FOR PJI

MOTHER WARNS PJI.

PJI MEETS WITH AJ2’S RIVAL, STRKES DEAL, UNDERCUTS AJ1

.

Act 4 Climax:TO SAVE AJ2, PJ1
traps AJ1 and kills him. AJ2 EXPRESSES HIS GRATITUDE

Resolution: While AJ2
recovers from stroke he designates PJ 1 the acting head. They are a partnership<div>

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[Ron Chepesiuk]

Ron’s New Outline Beats!

VISION: I want the success and recognition of being an in demand, A-list screenwriter who writes successful films that are financially profitable, award winning and of enduring quality.

What I learned from doing this assignment is that, patiently following steps in the assignment, my script is coming together

2. Starting at the beginning of the outline, move through it to see if there are any obvious missing beats. If so, add them. If you think of any new additions as you look for missing beats, this is also a good time to add them.

A. Are there any logic jumps?
B. Is the focus on the lead character’s journey?
C. Does it feel like anything is missing?

3. When you get to the end of the outline, work backwards. With each beat, ask these questions:

A. What needed to be there for this beat to happen?
B. What could set this beat up better?

4. Go to major events (like Turning Points) and ask:

A. What has to be in place for this event to have
happened?
B. What change will this event cause in the rest of the
story?

PJ1- Lucia

AJ1- Godfather’s son

AJ2 Godfather

Beginning:

PJ1- Lucia is on the Internet dreaming of meeting a man and escaping her environment. Her mother berates her for wasting her time dreaming

AJ2—The godfather is at a party with wife celebrating his 25^th wedding anniversary.

AJ1- is in back room having sex with worker instead of minding his father’s protection

AJ2, the godfather, and wife ambushed by rival. His wife is killed. Godfather escapes, vows revenge on rival

AJ2 takes AJI off security management, angering AJ!, who vows revenge.

AJ2 kills the gangsters who kill his wife, setting up mob war.

PJ1 is beat up by abusive boyfriend, makes her more determined to leave.

AJ1- secretly meets with AJ1’s rival. They plan to overthrow AJ2

Inciting Incident: PJ1 and AJ2
meet on the internet. AJ2 comes over to Italy to see PJ1

PJI’S boy friend is jealous. Wants her to stay away from AJ2.

Turning Point 1: WHEN BOYFRIEND
IS AGRESSIVE WITH PJ1, SHE accidently kills him AJ2 helps her cover it up.

PJ1 and AJ2 leave for U.S

.

Act 2

:

PJ1 enters hostile mob
environment. They don’t want AJ2 to marry her but he does.

PJI BEFRIENDS AJ2’S MOTHER, WHO ACTS LIKE SHE SUFFRER FROM DEMENTIA

Turning Point 2 / Midpoint– PJ1 is attracted to AJ1, He seduces her. AJ1 COMPLAINS TO PJI ABOUT AJ2 AND HOW TREATING HIM BADLY. Coaxes her to ENTER INTO PLOT TO kill AJ2

MOTHER WARNS PJI ABOUT GETTING INVOLVED WITH AJ1, BUT SHE IGNORES HER ADVICE

Deeper layer: AJ 1 is using PJ1 to eliminate AJ2

Act 3

AJ1 wants to kill AJ2, tries to draw PJ 1 into his plot but PJ1 puts him off. AJ2 IS KIND TO HER

Deeper layer: PJ1 is warming to AJ2

Turning Point 3:-
AJ2 GETS stroke, AJ1 sees chance to kill him. PJ1 hides AJ2 from AJ1. AJ1
LEARNS WHERE PJI IS HIDING AJ2. AJQ GOES LOOKING FOR PJI

MOTHER WARNS PJI.

PJI MEETS WITH AJ2’S RIVAL, STRKES DEAL, UNDERCUTS AJ1

.

Act 4 Climax:TO SAVE AJ2, PJ1
traps AJ1 and kills him. AJ2 EXPRESSES HIS GRATITUDE

Resolution: While AJ2
recovers from stroke he designates PJ 1 the acting head. They are a partnership

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[Ron Chepesiuk]

PJ1- Lucia

AJ1- Godfather’s son

AJ2 Godfather

Beginning:

PJ1- Lucia is on the Internet dreaming of meeting a man and escaping her environment. Her mother berates her for wasting her time dreaming

AJ2—The godfather is at a party with wife celebrating his 25^th wedding anniversary.

AJ1- is in back room having sex with worker instead of minding his father’s protection

AJ2, the godfather, and wife ambushed by rival. His wife is killed. Godfather escapes, vows revenge on rival

AJ2 takes AJI off security management, angering AJ!, who vows revenge.

AJ2 kills the gangsters who kill his wife, setting up mob war.

AJ1- secretly meets with AJ1’s rival. They plan to overthrow AJ2

PJ1 is beat up by abusive boyfriend, makes her more determined to leave.

Inciting Incident: PJ1 and AJ2
meet on the internet. AJ2 comes over to Italy to see PJ1 <div>

Turning Point 1: PJ1 accidently
kills abusive boyfriend AJ2 helps her cover it up.

PJ! and AJ2 leave for U.S

.

Act 2

:

PJ1 enters hostile mob
environment. They don’t want AJ2 to marry her but he does

Turning Point 2 / Midpoint– PJ1 is attracted to AJ1, He seduces her. Coaxes her to kill AJ2

Deeper layer: AJ 1 is using PJ1 to eliminate AJ2

:Act 3

AJ1 wants to kill AJ2, tries to draw PJ 1 into his plot but PJ1 puts him off

Deeper layer: PJ1 is warming to AJ2

Turning Point 3:- AJ2 GETS
stroke, AJ1 sees chance to kill him. PJ1 hides AJ2 from AJ1

Act 4 Climax:PJ1 traps AJ1 and
kills him

Resolution: While AJ2
recovers from stroke,, he designates PJ 1 the acting head. They are a
partnership

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[Ron Chepesiuk]

Ron’s Deeper Layer!

Vision: I want the success and recognition of being an in demand, A-list screenwriter who writes successful films that are financially profitable, award winning and of enduring quality.

“What I learned from doing this assignment is that this exercise helps me to coherently re-think my structure while putting the pieces together.

2. As we did above with The Sixth Sense, create each piece of this “Deeper Layer” puzzle.

Surface Layer: Lucia is an ambitious but unhappy woman
who is looking for a husband via the Internet to escape her environment in
Italy. Abused by mother and boyfriend, she lacks confidence and is in a
secure, but is determined do anything to achieve her goal. <div>

Deeper Layer: She warms to her suitor, a mafia
godfather, and comes to have doubts about helping her lover, his ruthless
son, kill him

Major Reveal: When her suitor is most vulnerable to an
assassination, she botches a murder attempt thus reneging on killing him

Influences Surface Story: Carlo is kind to Lucia
melting her heart. Carlo protects her against his mafia members, Lucia is
conflicted in her love for the son and loyalty to the godfather. Carlo
confides in Lucia, which, which builds her confidence

Hints: Lucia postpones killing her husband, holds off
son, her lover, takes care of Carlo who had a stroke

Changes Reality: Lucia realizes she must stand up to
the son, her lover, to be true to herself

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3. Add the rest of the structure to the characters to the script. Try to get to the point as we’ve done in the Iron Man example above.

Beginning: God father’s
wife is killed by rival gang member as they celebrate their 25^th
wedding anniversary. Godfather is devastated

Inciting Incident: Godfather goes to Italy to meet
Lucia whom he meets on Internet
Turning Point 1: Lucia accidently kills abusive
boyfriend, Godfather covers it up and takes her to America where he
marries her

Act 2:
Turning Point 2 / Midpoint: Lucia fall in love with Godfather’s
son, and he recruits her to kill the godfather

Act 3:
Turning Point 3: Lucia reneges on killing the godfather
and must go in hiding to escape the son’s revenge. She takes the godfather
with her, who has suffered a stroke

Act 4 Climax: Son hunts Lucia, but she manages to kill
him in a confrontation.
Resolution: The godfather recovers, but he is too weak
to rule the mafia and puts Lucia in charge. She is the only person he
trusts.

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[Ron Chepesiuk]

I POSTED THIS ONCE ALREADY!

Ron’s Character Structure

Vision: I want the success and recognition of being an in demand, A-list screenwriter who writes successful films that are financially profitable, award winning and of enduring quality.

What I learned from doing this assignment is that I have an exciting new way of structuring my screenplays.

Lucia, Protagonist

Beginning:
We see her in her home environment, unhappy eager to escape
Inciting
Incident: She hits it off with Carlo, Mafia godfather, via the Internet
Turning
Point 1: accidently kill her abusive boyfriend and leaves for U.S. with
Carlo, the godfather
Act
2:
Turning
Point 2 / Midpoint: After falllng for Stefano, she agrees to his plan kill
the godfather, her husband so he can take over the crime family
Act
3:
Turning
Point 3: Botches plan to kill husband after second thoughts and goes on
the run after she is blamed for trying to kill him
Act
4 Climax: Showdown with Stefano
Resolution:
Lucia becomes acting godmother of Mafia after she nurses Carlo to
recovery

Stefano, antagonist

Beginning:
Stefano having sex with girl and ignores his security detail
responsibility for godfather
Inciting
Incident: Wife of godfather is killed and Stefano blamed
Turning
Point 1: Makes Lucia his paramour and recruits her for plan to kill
godfather
Act
2:
Turning
Point 2 / Midpoint: Lucia reneges on murder plot and he seeks to kill her
Act
3:
Turning
Point 3 Stefano goes hunting for her but she is in hiding:

.Act 4 Climax: confrontation with Lucia

Resolution: He is dead

Carlo, bridge character

Beginning:
Wife is killed. He is despondent
Inciting
Incident: He goes to meet Lucia in Italy
Turning
Point 1: He covers up Lucia’s killing of abusive boyfriend and takes her
to America with him
Act
2:
Turning
Point 2 / Midpoint: Attempted botched murder attempt of him by Lucia
Act
3:
Turning
Point 3: put into hiding by Lucia
Act
4 Climax: Survives another assassination attempt by Stefano
Resolution:
Nursing back to health and more in love than ever with Lucia, whom he makes
acting godmother

[Ron Chepesiuk]

Ron’s Character Structure

Vision: I want the success and recognition of being an in demand, A-list screenwriter who writes successful films that are financially profitable, award winning and of enduring quality.

What I learned from doing this assignment is that I have an exciting new way of structuring my screenplays.

Lucia, Protagonist

Beginning: We see her in her home environment, unhappy
eager to escape

Inciting Incident: She hits it off with Carlo, Mafia
godfather, via the Internet

Turning Point 1: accidently kill her abusive boyfriend
and leaves for U.S. with Carlo, the godfather

Act 2:
Turning Point 2 / Midpoint:

After falllng for Stefano,
she agrees to his plan kill the godfather, her husband so he can take over
the crime family

Act 3:
Turning Point 3: Botches plan to kill husband after
second thoughts and goes on the run after she is blamed for trying to kill
him

Act 4 Climax: Showdown with Stefano
Resolution: Lucia becomes acting godmother of Mafia
after she nurses Carlo to recovery

Stefano, antagonist

Beginning: Stefano having sex with girl and ignores his
security detail responsibility for godfather

Inciting Incident: Wife of godfather is killed and Stefano
blamed

Turning Point 1: Makes Lucia his paramour and recruits
her for plan to kill godfather

Act 2:

Turning Point 2 / Midpoint: Lucia reneges on murder
plot and he seeks to kill her

Act 3:

Turning Point 3 Stefano goes hunting for her but she is
in hiding:

.Act 4 Climax: confrontation with Lucia

Resolution: He is dead

Carlo, bridge character

Beginning:
Wife is killed. He is despondent
Inciting
Incident: He goes to meet Lucia in Italy
Turning
Point 1: He covers up Lucia’s killing of abusive boyfriend and takes her
to America with him

Act
2:

Turning
Point 2 / Midpoint: Attempted botched murder attempt of him by Lucia

Act
3:
Turning
Point 3: put into hiding by Lucia

Act
4 Climax: Survives another assassination attempt by Stefano

Resolution: Nursing back to health and more in love than ever with
Lucia, whom he makes acting godmother

Resolution:
Nursing back to health and more in love than ever with Lucia, whom he makes
acting godmother

[Ron Chepesiuk]

RON’S ChARACTER SUBTEXT

Vision: I want the success and recognition of being an in demand, A-list screenwriter who writes successful films that are financially profitable, award winning and of enduring quality

What I learned from doing this assignment is that I like this systematic and thoughtful approach we are taking in this course toward writing a screenplay…

Ron’s supporting characters

Support 1:

Name Rosa:
Role: mother of Lucia
Main purpose: Abusive mother. Reason Lucia wants to
escape her home environment
Value: helps set up the change that Rosa undergoes on
her journey

Support 2:

Name:Carmen
Role: Mother
Main purpose: The mob think she is senile, but she is
well aware of her surroundings and know what’s going on
Value: Likes Lucia and helps her escape Sylvio’s
murderous intentions

Support 3:

Name :Max Wise
Role: police detective who investigates: the war going
on between Sylvio and Mateo
Value: His
investigation increases the tension and spurs plot

Support 4:

Name: Bruno

Role :consigliere to Syilvio

Main purpose: :sounding board for Sylvio
Value: He will run into conflict with Sylvio as he
tries to kill his father

Support 6:

Name:Mateo Kelmendi
Role: Albanian crime boss
Main purpose:chief rival of Sylvio.
Value: Facilitates conflict and plays a role in Lucia
escaping the clutches of Sylvio:

Background characters:
consiglieres, street soldiers, cops, restaurant workers

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/ Ron’s Character Profiles Part 2

Vision: I want the success and recognition of being an in demand, A-list screenwriter who writes successful films that are financially profitable, award winning and of enduring quality

What I learned from doing this assignment is that I like the slow and steady way we are approaching the writing of the screenplay in this class. Slow and steady wins the race/

With each of your lead characters, first tell us the following

A. Lisa, protagonist

. The High Concept. After the son of
a powerful Mafia godfather convinces the godfather’s mail order bride to
kill the godfather and take over his criminal empire, she has second
thoughts and must find a way to extricate herself from this treacherous
plot.

B: Antagonist: Stefano, son

B. This character’s journey. Abused by mother and boyfriend, the
beautiful but vulnerable Lucia dreams of escaping her dreary environment
in Italy. The day comes when she
meets a kind and powerful mafia godfather through the Internet, who takes
her back home from Italy. Lucia falls for the godfather’s son and, when he
tries to recruit her to kill her husband, she must maneuver herself in
the cut throat world of the mafia to survive

B. The Actor Attractors for this character. Lucia is vulnerable but must grow to survive in the mafia world. She learns to adopt many of tools and devices of the mafia to grow. She falls in love with the godfathers’ son, then must survive his wrath when she betrays him:

Brainstorm these profile components for each character.

7. Character Subtext: Can she
help kill her husband?
8. Character Intrigue: Can she
extricate herself from abusive relationship
and then escape the powerful hold of her lover?
9. Flaw: Easily manipulated

10. Values: Family, respect for
mother
11. Character Dilemma: Can she help
kill the man who is her husband?

2 Stefano, Antagonist, son

. A. The High Concept. After the son of a powerful Mafia godfather convinces the godfather’s mail order bride to kill the godfather and take over his criminal empire, she has second thoughts and must find a way to extricate herself from this treacherous plot.

B. This character’s journey.
Humiliated by his father, the son schemes to overthrow, Carlo, the
godfather. Manipulates Lucia into betraying father. Lucia turns on Serfano.
He sets up for Lucia for murder of godfather.

C.The Actor Attractors for this character. Rocky relationship with his father. A manipulator, lady’s man, driven by ambition to replace his father

Brainstorm these profile components for each character.

7. Character Subtext: Driven by
his father’s lack of respect and confidence in him
8. Character Intrigue: Can he
manipulate Lisa into helping him murder his father?
9. Flaw: Arrogant. Thinks he’s
actually smarter than anyone

10. Values: He thinks of
nothing but himself

11. Character Dilemma: Will mob
family follow him as leader if he eliminates his father?

C. Carlo, father, bridge

Carlo, godfather Bridge character

A. The High Concept. .
After the son of a powerful Mafia godfather convinces the godfather’s mail
order bride to kill the godfather and take over his criminal empire, she
has second thoughts and must find a way to extricate herself from this treacherous
plot

B. This character’s journey. Marries Lucia, betrayed by Sylvio, killed by Sylvio

C. The Actor Attractors for
this character: powerful mobster.
Loves opera, romantic betrayed by son. Underestimates son, Must deal with
stroke

Brainstorm these profile components for each character.

7. Character Subtext: Feels
guilt at having an affair
8. Character Intrigue: Will his
marriage to Lucia workout
9. Flaw: Romantic. Often thinks
with his heart and not his mind
10. Values: Being a mob boss.
Respect towards spouse
11. Character Dilemma: Should
son be his heir?:

4. Add those to your Character Profile from Lesson 6.

I HAVE DONE THIS.

[Ron Chepesiuk]

Ron’s Characte r Profiles Part 1

Vision: I want the success and recognition of being an in demand, A-list screenwriter who writes successful films that are financially profitable, award winning and of enduring quality

1.

5. Under your vision, answer the question, “What I learned from doing this assignment is that if you follow and complete the assignments in this class you are well on your way to writing a well structured screenplay.

1. With each of your lead characters, first tell us the following:

A: Lucia:Protagonist

A. The High Concept. After the son of
a powerful Mafia godfather convinces the godfather’s mail order bride to
kill the godfather and take over his criminal empire, she has second
thoughts and must find a way to extricate herself from this treacherous
plot.

B. This character’s journey.

Abused by mother and boyfriend, the beautiful but vulnerable Lucia dreams of escaping her dreary environment in Italy. The day comes when she meets a kind and powerful mafia godfather who takes her back home from Italy. Lucia fralls for the godfather’s son and must maneuver herself in the cut throat world of the mafia to survive

C. The Actor Attractors for this character. Lucia is
vulnerable but must grow to survive in the mafia world. She learns to
adopt many of tools and devices of the mafia to grow. She falls in love
with the godfathers’ son, then must survive his wrap when she betrays him

Brainstorm the first 6 parts of the profile for each of your lead characters.

1 Likability, Relatability, Empathy:

Likability: She respects her
mom even though the respect is not reciprocated
Relatability: She is trapped in
a situation it is difficult to get out of.
Empathy: she is bullied by her
boyfriend who mistreats her

2 Role in the Story: Central figure marries the godfather, then must maneuver in his ruthless world to achieve her goals

3Age range and Description: Age Range and description; She is in her early 30s, which makes her a little more eager to escape her environment. Stiunningly beautiful, remarkable resemblance to godfather’s dead wife

4 Core Traits: ambitious, resourceful, a little naïve, appears vulnerable, but underneath tough as nails.

5 Motivation; Want/ to marry well to escape her environment

Need: Love, security

6Wound: Constantly abused, she has a low sense of worth

B: Antagonist: Stefano, son

2.Tell us the following:

A. The High Concept. After the son of
a powerful Mafia godfather convinces the godfather’s mail order bride to
kill the godfather and take over his criminal empire, she has second
thoughts and must find a way to extricate herself from this treacherous
plot.

B. This character’s journey.
Humiliated the his father, the son schemes to overthrow, Carlo, the
godfather. Manipulates Lucia into betraying father. Lucia turns on Sefano.
He sets up for Lucia for muder of godfather
C. The Actor Attractors for
this character. Rocky relationship wrth his father. A manipulator, lady’s
man, driven by ambition to replace
his father

3. Brainstorm the first 6 parts of the profile for each of your lead characters.

1. Role in the Story: Love interest of Lucia, the bride, and betrayer of his father, the Godfather:

2. Age range and Description: mid 30s, handsome, charismatic,

3. Core Traits: vengeful, ruthless, wreckless, manipulative

4. Motivation; to take over his father’s criminal empire

5. The power and wealth of his father’s criminal empire

6. Need: respect from father

7. Wound: feels his father does not respect him. Motivated to prove himself to father:

Likability, Relatability,
Empathy:
Likability: charming, handsome,
charismatic
Relatability: He is
disrespected by his father who mal treats him
Empathy: Struggles to gain
respect from father

: Carlo, godfather and husband

2. With each of your lead characters, first tell us the following:

A. The High Concept. After the son of
a powerful Mafia godfather convinces the godfather’s mail order bride to
kill the godfather and take over his criminal empire, she has second
thoughts and must find a way to extricate herself from this treacherous
plot.

B. This character’s journey:
laments his wife’s death, marries mail order bride who appears to be
backstabbing him. Ultimately betrayed by son.
C. The Actor Attractors for
this character.

3. Brainstorm the first 6 parts of the profile for each of your lead characters.

1. Role in the Story: son of the godfather. Schemes to take over the mafia

2. Age range and Description: 35, handsome, lady’s man, charismatic

Core Traits

3. Motivation; Prove his father has underestimated him

4. /Need: Want to head the mafia

5. Wound: inferior complex. Wants to prove he can lead mafia

6. Likability, Relatability, Empathy:

: Likability: charming,
handsome, charismatic
Relatability: He is disrespected
by his father who mal treats him
Empathy: Struggles to gain
respect from father

C Carlo, godfather Bridge character

A. The High Concept. .
After the son of a powerful Mafia godfather convinces the godfather’s mail
order bride to kill the godfather and take over his criminal empire, she
has second thoughts and must find a way to extricate herself from this
treacherous plot
B. This character’s journey.Marries
Lucia, btrayed by Sylvio, killed by Sylvio
C. The Actor Attractors for
this character:.powerful mobster. Loves opera, romantic betrayed by son.
Must deal with stroke

. Brainstorm the first 6 parts of the profile for each of your lead characters.

1. Role in the Story: Marries Lucia, part of plot to assassinate godfather

2. Age range and Description:mid 50s, handsome, ruthless, had a stroke, romantic, in deep love with Lucia

3. Core Traits: romantic, ruthless when has to be, loving of Lucia, vengeful

4. Motivation; Want/ to make Lucia happy while surviving as a mobster

5. Need:seek revenge for dead wife

6. Wound: Feels little guilty marrying Lucia

7. Likability, treats Lucia like a queen

Relatability, death of wife

Empathy:Being betrayed by son

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Subject Line: Ron’s Likability/Relatability/Empathy

Vision: I want the success and recognition of being an in demand, A-list screenwriter who writes successful films that are financially profitable, award winning and of enduring quality

“What I learned from doing this assignment is that these are key components of character development that I am now aware of.

2. Brainstorm one or more ways you can present your Protagonist through each of these:

Lucia: Protagonist

Likability: She respects her
mom even though the respect is not reciprocated
Relatability: She is trapped in
a situation it is difficult to get out of.
Empathy: she is bullied by her
boyfriend who mistreats her

3. Just to get the experience, give us one or more ways that your Antagonist could be presented through each of these:

Likability: charming, handsome,
charismatic
Relatability: He is disrespected
by his father who mal treats him
Empathy: He futally tries to
gain the respect of his father who has written him off as a loser

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Ron’s subtext characters

Vision: I want the success and recognition of being an in demand, A-list screenwriter who writes successful films that are financially profitable, award winning and of enduring quality

What I learned from doing this assignment is that this exercise has helped me focus on my character in a whole new exciting way”

2. With your example movie, give us the following answers for the character with the most subtext:

Movie Title: Casablanca
Character Name: Rick Blaine <div>

Subtext Identity: Hard shell of indifference and
cynicism:

Subtext Trait: covered by seeming toughness
indifference to things around him
Subtext Logline: Still suffering from the hurt of a
failed relationship, he covers by seeming indifference to things around
him

Possible Areas of Subtext: relationship to LLsa,: refuses to accept
drinks from customers, treats his lover Yvonne without affection or
respect, and seems not to care that a war is being waged around him or
that desperate refugees have flocked to Casablanca. He makes a point of
broadcasting his aloofness, stating on several occasions, “I stick my
neck out for nobody.”

A. Character Name:Lucia
Subtext Identity: Her insecurity and lack of confidence
allows her to be controlled by those around her

Subtext Trait: Allows people to influence her even
though she realizes it is often not in her best interest and goes against
her wishes

Subtext Logline:Lucia is a insecure, fragile women who
must summon the strength to operate in the violent and vicious world of the
mafia
Possible

Areas of Subtext:accidently kills brutal
boyfriend, flees with and marries mafia boss, manipulated by Sylvio,
decides not to kill husband, schemes to maneuver in mafia world

B: Character

Name:Stefano Albano
Subtext

Identity: chip on his shoulder because he feels
father doesn’t respect him

Subtext Trait: Brutal toward people whom he believes
don’t respect him

Subtext Logline: Sylvio is a violent mobster who is
driven by his feeling that he is disrepected

Possible Areas of Subtext plots to over take criminal organization, seduces Lucia, convinces to
plot against her husband, kills husband,, goes after Lucia when he believes
has betrayed him.

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[Ron Chepesiuk]

Lead Character

Name: Stefano Albino

Role: Antagonist

1. What about this role would cause an actor to want to be known for it?

Hot headed, but a charming young man who is calculating and ruthless

2. What makes this character one of the most interesting characters in your story?

He has a volatile relationship with the godfather, but he is willing to challenge the status quo Fails to prevent killing of Godfather’s wife, seduces and manipulates Lucia, seduces her into a relationship to kill Godfather, tries to kill Lucia, fails to estimate Lucia

3. What are the most interesting actions the Lead could take in the script?

Seduce Lucia and try to kill her husband, The Godfather

4. How can you introduce this role in a way that could sell it to an actor?

As a charming seemingly incompetent Mafioso who is willing to challenge the status quo

5. What could be this character’s emotional range

From seemingly volatile and
immature to calculating and ruthless.<div>

AFTER 45 MINUTES OF TRYING, THIIS AS FAR AS i COULD PASTE ON THIS SCREWED UP SYSTEM!

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[Ron Chepesiuk]

.Ron’s Actor attractors for Casablanca

Vision: I want the success and recognition of being an in demand, A-list screenwriter who writes successful films that are financially profitable, award winning and of enduring quality

, “What I learned from doing this assignment is that watching a movie with this lesson in mind, I now have a better understanding of what it takes will take to attract top tier actors to my movie

Movie Title: Casablanca

Lead Character Name:Rick Blaine

1. Why would an actor WANT to be known for this role? Complicated character Tough exterior, sensitive inside

2. What makes this
character one of the most interesting characters in the movie? Looks to be self
centered, selfish until Ingrid Bergman’s character shows up.

3. What are the most interesting actions the Lead takes in the movie? Although Rick maintains his aloofness from the war, we learn he ran guns to Ethiopia against Mussolini and fought on the Republican side in the Spanish Civil War, doesn’t sell letters of transit to Laslo, allows house band to play Marseillaise, refuses to give letters of transit to Llisa, agrees to help Llisa, lets her believe he will stay with her when Laslo leaves, tricks Captain Renault, fools Llisa, shoots Strasser, allows Laszlo to escape.

4. How is this character introduced that could sell it to an actor? Takes letter of transit from Peter Lorre’s character putting him in danger with German occupation force

5. What is this character’s emotional range? Cold and calculating to emotionally involved

6. What subtext can the actor play? His love and conflicting emotions toward Llisa and Laszlo

7. What’s the most interesting relationships this character has? With corrupt Captain Renault, patriot Laszlo, former lover Llisa

8. How is this character’s unique voice presented? His words portray as detached, cold individual, but his actions contradict his words

9. What makes this character special and unique? Really complex. As movie progresses we learn more and more about Rick, making him increasingly sympathetic

10. (Fill in a scene that shows the character fulfilling much of the
Actor Attractor model.)

Powerful conclusion. Surprise ending. When Renault tries to arrest Laszlo as arranged, Rick forces him at gunpoint to assist in their escape. At the last moment, Rick makes Ilsa board the plane to Lisbon with Laszlo, telling her that she would regret it if she stayed.

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Ron’s Genre Conventions

Vision: I want the success and recognition of being an in demand, A-list screenwriter who writes successful films that are financially profitable, award winning and of enduring quality

What I learned doing this assignment is that slow and steady wins the race as I systematically create the story for my script.

Title: Mail Order Godmother

Concept: After the son of a powerful Mafia godfather convinces the godfather’s mail order bride to kill the godfather and take over his criminal empire, she has second thoughts and must find a way to extricate herself from this treacherous and dangerous plot.

Genre: Drama

3. Make a list of the conventions for your chosen genre, like this:

Drama:conventions:

:—Emotional and interpersonal high stakes

–Character driven journey their internal journey drives the film’s events and progression.

–High stakes come from within

–The struggles, obstacles, and stakes comes from within more than from external pressures

–Emotionally charged.

–Drama stories are grounded in reality

4. Brainstorm ways to deliver the conventions more effectively and build those parts into your 4-Act Structure.

5. List your structure from Lesson 6 along with the improvements that come from the Genre Conventions, like I did above.

CHANGES ARE IN ITALICS

Act 1:

Opening: The wife of Sylvio, the Mafia godfather, is
murdered in an ambush. The godfather is devastated

We see Lucia’s everyday life in
Italy-Bullying boyfriend, nagging mother, dreams of escaping.

Sylvio blames his son, Stefano,
for lapse of security. We can see tension between father and son Father
humiliatse son in front of men and takes son’s job of protecting father
away.

Sylvio kills the men who killed
his wife, but still despondent.

Inciting Incident–
Discovers Lucia on an Internet mail order site, enthralled. Lucia reminds Sylvio of his late wife.
He goes to meet her in Italy

Boyfriend discovers Lucia’s is
on the Internet talking with men, beats her

Turning Point: The abusive boyfriend of Lucia is thrown
off the building to his death, and
the godfather takes Lucia to the U.S. to marry her

Act 2:

New plan: Lucia falls for Silvio, the Mafia don’s son, who
hates his father and seeks revenge.

Son is using Lucia. He brings her into plan to kill the mafia don and
become the new don

Plan in action Lucia
prepares to kill husband, but comes to like him. Sylvio is kind and
generous toward her.

Midpoint Turning Point Lucia reneges on the plan to poison
her husband, the mafia godfather, but son goes ahead and kills the mafia
godfather.

Act 3:

Rethink everything—The
godfather is poisoned. The dead Godfather’s crime family is suspicious
and believe Lucia has killed husband. Lucia is now vulnerable. She must
seek a way out.

New plan: She goes to the chief rival of her dead
husband, the mafia godfather, to set up a plan to kill the son

Turning Point: But the son finds out, averts getting
killed and goes looking to kill Lucia. She flees the crime family and goes
into hiding.

Lucia and the son, her former lover who is hunting her,
meet. Lucia figures out how to kills him..

Act 4 Resolution Lucia gains the respect of her dead husband’s mafia when they learn what she has done and who was responsiible for the Godfather’s death. .

· She becomes the new interim godmother of her dead husband’s mafia while the crime family looks for a successor to the dead don.

But she is already scheming to be kept the
godmother.

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[Ron Chepesiuk]

Ron’s 4 Act Transformational Structure

Vision: I want the success and recognition of being an in demand, A-list screenwriter who writes successful films that are financially profitable, award winning and of enduring quality

What I learned doing this assignment is that lesson provides an unique plan that allows me, with confidence, to devise a workable structure for my screenplay

Concept: After the son of a powerful Mafia godfather convinces the godfather’s mail order bride to kill the godfather and take over his criminal empire, she has second thoughts and must find a way to extricate herself from this treacherous and dangerous plot.

Main Conflict A bride of a powerful mafia don is
conflicted about whether she should help her lover, the Godfather’s son,
kill her husband

Old Ways poor woman living in Italy, ambitious, selfish
(only think of herself), wants to change her life and do anything to do
it.

New Ways sympathetic, strong willed, enterprising, clever and
creative in her effort to extricate herself from the murder plot

3. Fill in each of these with the answers you have right now.

Act 1:

Opening The wife of Mafia don is murdered in an ambush.
The don is devastated

Inciting Incident
Discovers Lucia on an Internet mail order site, enthralled and goes
to meet her in Itally

Turning Point: The abusive boyfriend of Lucia is thrown
off the building, and the Mafia don takes Lucia to the U.S. to marry her

Act 2:

New plan Lucia falls for Silvio, the Mafia don’s
son, who hates his father and seeks revenge. He brings her into plan to
kill the mafia don and become the new don

Plan in action Lucia prepares to kill husband

Midpoint Turning Point Lucia reneges on the plan to
poison her husband.

Act 3:

Rethink everything The dead don’s crime family are
suspicious and believe Lucia has killer husband. Lucia is now vulnerable.
She must seek a way out.
New plan: She goes to the chief rival of her dead
husband, the mafia don, to set up a plan to kill the son
Turning Point: But the son finds out, averts getting
killed and goes looking to kill Lucia. She flees the crime family and goes
into hiding.

Act 4:

Lucia and the son, her former lover who is hunting her,
meet. Lucia kills him him.
Resolution Lucia gains the respect of her dead
husband’s mafia when they learn what she has done. She becomes the new interim
godmother of her dead husband’s
mafia while the crime family looks for a successor to the dead don. But
she is already scheming to be kept as the godmother.

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[Ron Chepesiuk]

Subject Line: Ron’s Subtext Plot

Vision: I want the success and recognition of being an in demand, A-list screenwriter who writes successful films that are financially profitable, award winning and of enduring quality

What I learned is that writing a screenplay, and there is a certain body of knowledge I must master in order to succeed

I tweaked the concept:

Concept: After the son of a powerful Mafia godfather convinces the godfather’s mail order bride to kill the godfather and take over his criminal empire, she has second thoughts and must find a way to extricate herself from this treacherous plot.

t. Subplots chosen:

1) Layering

2) Someone who hides who they are

3) Competitive agendas

Discussion:

Lucia, the mail order bride realizes her ambition of marrying someone rich from the U.S., a mafia godfather. She has an affair with the Godfather’s son who convinces her to kill the godfather and take over his criminal empire. She has second thoughts and must extricate herself from this evil plot.

[Ron Chepesiuk]

Ron’s Transformational Journey

Vision: I want the success and recognition of being an in demand, A-list screenwriter who writes successful films that are financially profitable, award winning and of enduring quality.

What I learned from doing this assignment is that as much– or more—work must go into preparing the script as there is in writing it.

Protagonist: Lucia

Tell us the Character Arc for your Protagonist:

Arc Beginning: ambitious mail order bride who will do
anything to achieve her goal of being successful in America, even killing
her powerful godfather husband

Arc Ending: The bribe realizes that money and success
aren’t anything and thwarts her husband’s murder

. Give us their Internal/External Journey.

Internal Journey: from ruthless and ambitious to
realizing there is more to life than achieving success at any cost

External Journey: From selfish and scheming wife to caring about her husband

. Tell us their Old Ways at the beginning of the movie and their New Ways at the end.

Old Ways: selfish, ruthlessly ambitious, scheming,
manipulative, ,,

New Ways: Loving, understanding, wise, protective

[Ron Chepesiuk]

Subject Line: (Ron’s) Intentional Lead Characters

Vision: I want the success and recognition of being an in demand, A-list screenwriter who writes successful films that are financially profitable, award winning and of enduring quality.

What I learned from doing this assignment is that it is getting me to look at the development of my screenplay in a whole new way

Character: Lucia

Logline: Lucia is a
manipulative poor young Italian
woman who uses the Internet dating sites to achieve her goal of marrying
into a better life in America

Unique: The man she chooses is
an older mafia godfather with a bad heart.

Character: Silvio Albino Antagonist:

Logline:A ruthless but romantically inclined godfather who longs to find a women to replace hiss dead wife

Unique: Willing to go outside his mafia family and against the advice of his counsel to find a bride by mail order.

Character: Triangle character: Stefano Albano

Logline: The son of Albino who is the logical successor to Don Sivio but at odds with him

Unique: Stefano becomes dangerously attracted to Lucia, his step mom

[Ron Chepesiuk]

Subject Line: (Ron Chepesiuk) Title, Concept, and Character Structure!

“What I learned from doing this assignment is that creative success in screenwriting is more a matter than inspiration

Vision; VISION: I want the success and recognition of being an in demand, A-list screenwriter who writes successful films that are financially profitable, award winning and of enduring quality.

Title: Mail Order God mother

Concept: Despondent by the death of his beloved wife, A godfather believes he has found happiness with his Italian mail order bride, not realizing the bride will conspire with his son and his bitter enemy to kill him and take over his criminal empire.

Looks like I will work with Dramatic Triangle Character Structure.

[Ron Chepesiuk]

I’ll do the class privately.

[Ron Chepesiuk]

Hi there. A little late. Had problems with the technology. I’ve written 14 scripts, three of them have been optioned. I’ve been taking SU courses from 2017 .With this course I hope my writing 200 percent. I have a black belt in karate, am a Fulbright scholar, and have published 42 books. One of my books is being adapted into a TV series.

[Ron Chepesiuk]

Thanks!