TOM Stingley
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My name is Tom Stingley and I will do the class privately
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HELLO I’m Tom Stingley and have been through the ProSeries but have yet to have a script that does not need rewriting. Hope this class is the key to being more professional.
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NOT CLEAR ON WHAT YOU ARE ASKING
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Tom Stingley has learned to see beginning middle and end on one page.
MIRACLES HAPPEN
LOGLINE: A restless 22 year old black veteran is UNHAPPY with his life in America so he tried to return to Europe for a better life. After overcoming many life threatening situations, he finds hope and purpose in the USA.
One Page: Opening scene; BIRDSEYE VIEW SHOWING DESTRUCTION DAYS AFTER Watts riots caused by Dr. King’s assassination. Things have just settled down and The protagonist, Ray Benton, 22, a troubled veteran, new to California dressed in an old fatigue jacket and weathered jeans is wandering on Hollywood blvd hungry and looking for food. He pats his large Afro as entering a Pioneer Chicken outlet for some hot crunchy deep fried bird. Two plain clothes detectives come in behind him mumbling racial slurs about his hair. Ray turns to confront the two perps. Dick one shows his badge as Dick two grabs a handful of Rays jacket forcing him to face a wall and spread eagle to be searched. They cuff Ray and escort him to the back seat of their private car. The driver turns off Hollywood Blvd to a side street as Dick two badgers Ray for the obvious pleasure he derives from mistreating young black men. Ray in anger curses Dick two for violating his rights and receives a fist to his head firmly demonstrating his rights mean nothing to LAPD. They pull over and drag Ray out of the car, beat him mercilessly and drive to Van Nuys police dept. Before locking him up without charging him for anything, they stop by the dispensary conveniently located across the parking lot from the station. The doctor checks his closed eyes and bloody face for injuries and releases him for lock down.
The next day they release him apologizing for the Dicks mistaking Ray for someone else. Ray stagers to his motel wanting to kill for being beaten without cause. Unable to go to work in his condition he tells a familiar street walker that if he had a gun he would kill those two pigs. She returns to Rays room an hour later with a stub nose .38 and twelve bullets. Ray battles with the idea of violating this crime against man and God so he leaves L.A. for the Bay Area to avoid murder or the greater possibility of being murdered.
It was an early spring day in 1969 when Ray decided to quit his job at Montgomery Wards. Fed up with America, the rumors of a revolution, and no future selling vacs and sewing machines he walks out the door without looking back. He packed everything that would fit into his 1969 new Chevy Malibu and left the San Francisco Bay Area heading east to New York City, aka The Big Apple. His plan was to sell his 1969 Chevy in New York then fly first class to Amsterdam, Holland.
The day he arrives in New York his 1969 Chevy Malibu with expired insurance and only 4840 miles is stolen. His passport and everything he needs to complete the trip to paradise was in that car. Now stranded with only what was in his pockets, (not much), he is flabbergasted.
Ray manages to get a job across the street from the Empire State Building. This afforded him a room at the YMCA and a drug habit. Heroin was cheap and additive. When man walked on the moon that July, 1969, Ray Benton couldn’t walk on earth. He overdosed but miraculously by the Grace of God did not die. The overdose was the last straw for living in New York, he hitches a ride to his parent’s home, a suburb of Chicago. While doing his Buddhist chanting in the basement, his Grandma Mary interrupts him and asked him why was he talking to the devil?
He leaves a nice suburban home to hitchhike to San Francisco facing many life threatening experiences on a 3 day trip that became a 3 month terrifying journey. Overcoming the many life threatening experiences proves to him that God is real, miracles happen, and America is home.
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Tom Stingley and I have written three scripts that all need rewriting. I hope to learn writing more beneath the surface and work as a professional with my producer contacts. I hope to publish my first book this year.
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Tom Stingley has read and I agree to the terms of this release form
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BTW there is a love interest in Amsterdam and in San Francisco. When Ray doesn’t make it back to Michelle in Amsterdam he reunites with Delores in SF.
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Do we reply in email or here?
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Hey Gregory, sure we can exchange feedback.