Tyberius Asante
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Subject line: Tyberius Finished Act 1
“What I learned doing this assignment is how to develop a fuller concept of the story putting prices together.”
FADE IN
Act 1:
INT. RACING STANDS – DAY
BEGINNING: Tiffany walks through the crowds in the racing stands to find Margot. She finds her and greets her warmly.
MIDDLE: Margot and Tiffany meet Dante in the winner’s circle at the podium
END: the three head out to celebrate and catch up.
(Turns to Tiffany)
“He’s doing great… I know he’s going to win,” Margot commenting with exuberance in her voice to Tiffany. I’m so glad you could make the race, Tiffany!
(Facing Margot)
“Me too… “It’s so hard to break away from The Bureau with so many cases on my docket,”
Margot
“You guys have always been so close… it’s going to mean the world to him that you were able to come, Margot said smiling approvingly.
Tiffany
Well, with what we been through… our experiences growing up made us close so that’s not an understatement…
Margot
No, but even more than that, the two of you always had a special bond that went beyond biology.
Tiffany
“That’s true…
Dante’s crew who working the pit stop are watching intensely as their biker takes the lead and wins the race.
Margot
(Both turning to face the track)
“Oh, here he comes,” said Margot excitedly! Let’s go meet him on the winner’s stand!
Margot, Tiffany and the whole pit crew rush over to congratulate their winner!
Dante pulls off his helmet to wave at the scores of cheering fans as he rides into the winner’s stand.
Tiffany
“I wish he wouldn’t do that! (disapprovingly)… he could still get hurt. This racing is dangerous enough… he should keep his helmet on as long as he’s on that bike!
“Oh, you know your brother… he wants to make sure he’s seen… Here he comes!
Margot runs to meet him and jumps into his arms kissing him.
Margot
“Baby that was a great race… you were TERRIFIC!
Thanks Babe…
Margot
Guess whose here… ???
Dante
(interrupting) Stop, you don’t even have to tell me… I felt it the minute she got here… my lovely sister… heeeyyyyy!!!
Tiffany
“Hey bro…
“
Tiffany stepping through the crowd of people
“That was a great race,”
she said as she embraced him tightly kissing him on the cheek
(Margot looking on)
“I’m so glad you could make it… knowing you were here gave me that extra confidence to push through that last lap and a half, extorted Dante! I could always feel when you were near!
Tiffany
“Well, this is cause for celebration,” said Tiffany. Dinner is on me!
Dante
Ha-ha, you don’t have to tell me twice… we’re outta here as soon as I get my trophy and wrap up!
Margot
Well, don’t let us stand in the way of your GLORIOUS MOMENT!
Dante steps up to the podium, accepts a trophy as tall as he is, gives a short speech thanking his racing crew, the fans and his beautiful wife and for his sister for being there.
Afterwards, the trio head out.
INT. RESTURANT – NIGHT
“What are you in the mood for Tiffany,” asked Margot? “Oh, I would kill for a good steak,” Tiffany replied! “I know just the place,” Dante chimed in. “Ooooo is Chester’s still open??? Yup, that’s the one , said Dante! We, may need reservations… said Margot. “Baby please… I’m DANTE ARAMIS VICOLI the greatest motorcyclist in the history of the sport AND now AMA Superbike Champion!” “OMG, I’m sorry… I forgot,” said Margot rolling her eyes. You forgot to mention, the MOST humble as well, chided Tiffany.
Later at Chester’s, “see I told you we wouldn’t have a problem. “Yeah, and the $100 you slipped the Matre D’ didn’t hurt none either,” added Margot! Tiffany, when we get back to the house you gotta see the engine I’m working on… its fast as a rocket and as quieter than a mouse pissing on cotton! “What makes it so quiet,” inquired Tiffany. Ahhhhhh, less moving parts! The engine combustion fires the pistons, but because they spin rather than go up and down, there’s less friction… less friction… less noise! I’m telling you, once I patton this this thing my racing days are over! Me and Margot will be rich and are going to travel the world! AND you will
be able to stop chasing serial killers or whatever the hell kind of maniacs are out there… “Hold on, just a minute,” Tiffany interrupted. I actually love my job! I enjoy bringing… yes, serial killers and maniacs… to justice so that nice law abiding MANIACS like you can live in peace, continued Tiffany. “Thats a good one,” chuckeled Margot.
Well, I never understood why you stopped racing… we could have been a great team. The first brother-sister international motorcycle champions in history! “I still love to ride, but I just dont have the time anymore,”added Tiffany. You were a great motorcyclist Tiffany… even better than me! “I had a calling Dante,” Tiffany interrupted. Its like when we were kids and I could almost feel what someone was going to do before they did it. I could recognize evil… And remember that kid we used to know in High school… who Jimmy? “Yeah, when his girlfriend disappeared and everybody thought he had something to do with it,” said Dante shaking his head. “I knew it wasnt him… something inside me knew they had the wrong guy,” recounted Tiffany. And you didnt stop until you basicallyfigured it out and told the police who you thought was really behind it. “Who the hell was it,” asked Margot??? It was the next door neighbor, added Dante.
She was kidnapped and held in the basement by this sicko who lived right next door to her. Tiffany somehow figured it out and convinced the police to check him out. When they did, that poor girl had been chained to a radiator in the basement of that guys house for weeks … she was barely alive. “Right, a sicko to us and everyone AFTERWARDS… but to the world a teacher who worked with hundreds of kids. He even ran a runaway shelter for troubled youths,” added Tiffany.
“How the hell did you ever come to suspect that guy,” asked Dante??? “Yeah, what the hell,” inquired a shocked Margot??? Truthfully speaking, I’m not even sure. I was there that day when her parents were making a statement to the press about their daughter and how they pleaded for someone… anyone to come forward with information. Well, out of the corner of my eye I saw this man. Everyone there had an expression of hurt, or concern for the missing girl… even the press… but this one man… All had was a blank stare. I dont know what about him even caught my eye, but somehow I just KNEW he had something to do with it. And that was the guy, asked Margot? “Yup…” chimed in Dante. “That’s right,” said Tiffany. “That’s crazy, girl… you got some gift” said Margot.
Yeah, so I felt this calling to go into law enforcement to get sickos like that off the street! “You got more guts than I’ll ever have girlfriend,” said Margot! “My sis has never been afraid of anything… especially when she’s on a mission,” added Dante. “Taking that track at 200+mph on two wheels makes you pretty fearless yourself, Dante” said Tiffany. “Well, I guess fearless runs in our family, doesn’t it,” Dante says with pride. “Yeah, but not smarts… what the hell were you doing out there today, taking a victory lap WITHOUT your helmet,” Demanded Tiffany! Oh Tiffy please… “Tiffy please, my ass… how many times I have to tell you to stop doing stupid stuff like that Dante… You only have ONE head and as big as it is it can still be broken,” Tiffany sternly
interrupted. “Haha… as the old saying goes, “the bigger it is the harder it falls,”” chimed in Margot. “I wish I could laugh, but it won’t be funny if he gets hurt… you’re going to have to take care of him… I’ve seen too many guys get hurt …. seriously hurt that was avoidable” scolded Tiffany. “Look Sis, when it’s my time it’s my time… a helmet won’t save me anymore than a bullet proof vest will save you when it’s your time, added Dante. “Okay, you two… I heard enough about either of you getting hurt,” interrupted Margot. “Okay, fine you’re the one whose going to be wiping his ass when he can no longer do it… I’ll be just coming to visit,” added Tiffany.
I guess this is a good time to get the check, added Dante. “No, I got it,” said Tiffany. “Beat you both to it,” said Margot! I cant deal with the viscious fight that ALWAYS ensues every single time we go out together… goodness gracious!
They all laugh as they pack up to head back home. I dont want to put you guys out, I can go to a hotel, said Tiffany. “Oh stop it aleady,” chided Dante. “We wouldn’t hear of it… the guest bedroom is already made up,” added Margot. “I’ve stayed with you guys before… I was hoping to get some sleep THIS TIME AROUND” said Tiffany as she rolled her eyes. We’ll try to keep it down for you Sis, reassured Dante. “Hmmmm… we’ll see ” murmured Margot. The trio drive home and settle in for the night.
EXT. DANTE AND MARGO’S HOME – LATE NIGHT
[Returning from the restaurant… walking up to the front of the house]
“Tiffy, I gotta show you this…” “are you kidding…This time of night,” interrupted Margot??? “WHAT Baby, it’s still early,” exclaimed Dante. “Oh I can’t… I’m going to bed,” responded Margot.
Are you tired Tiffy? We could do this tomorrow of you want… “No, I’m fine… far be it from me to dampen the enthusiasm! I want to see this new engine that’s going to make you a millionaire,” Tiffany responded. You think I’m playing, but I’m serious as a heart attack! “Oh, I know you dear brother and I know you are not playing at all,” responded Tiffany. C’mon it’s right in the garage… waved Dante… [Tiffany’s cell phone rings]
Oh, wait… let me take this… “Hey Babe… yeah, I’m good… missing you too…” [Dante overhears with eyebrows raised]… haha… yeah of course…
yeah we had a good time… he won the race! Yeah, it was great!what are you doing… hmmmmmm… that sounds like fun… we need to talk about that when I get back…. no, I’ll be back on Monday…. Oh I’m sure you’ll live… WHATEVER… okay, call you from the airport…. cant wait to see you too… miss you too… okay, babe… yeah, of course… no, you’re crazy! [Tiffany walks into the garage where Dante is] Okay, let me go… my brother needs to show me something he’s working on… yeah, I’m SURE he wants to meet you too… [Tiffany smiling at Dante… Dante eyes widened] … yeah, we can do that… we can make that happen… missing you too… haha… okay, let me call you back then… yeah, I’ll call you when I’m settled in for the night… okay, I promise… you’re so crazy! Okay, bye… love you too…[Tiffany hangs up the phone]
“WHO WAS THAT,” inquired Dante??? Oh that was Michael… this guy I’ve been seeing… “Sounds serious,” probed Dante. “Never-u-mind,” stifled Tiffany… what’s this contraption you need to show me that’s going to make us rich??? Okay, look at this [Dante starting the engine] …
“Wow, exclaimed Tiffany, I could barely hear it and I’m standing right here!” Isn’t it incredible??? “But what about safety, questioned Tiffany. “What do you mean… it’s totally safe… steady…” No, interjected Tiffany, “what I’m saying is that some bikers rely on the bikes NOISE to alert the traffic around them that they are there. Wouldn’t a nearly silent bike engine heighten the risk of being hit by a car or truck that didnt SEE or HEAR it coming, inquired Tiffany? Well, I’m not saying that it would be practical or even desired in all situations, but for those who desire… maybe law enforcement for example… who didnt want perps to be alerted … I dont know all of the possible uses… all I’m saying is that this prototype is a revolutionary technology and I’ll let the BUYER’S figure out how it would be used. I just want to get it patented and get it to market, said Dante. “Okay, I see your point… true… its definitely revolutionary,” added Tiffany. Tomorrow I’ll let you take it for a spin… you need to see how it handles, offered Dante. “Cool… let’s do it,” replied Tiffany. Okay, I’ll let you settle in, replied Dante. Yeah, that would be good… I’m a little tired. I know Michael’s waiting for his good
night kiss… lol, chided Dante. “Oh WHATever [eyes rolling]” replied Tiffany.
[Both walking back into the house when Tiffany notices an open basement window]
“Dante, have you noticed that window open like that,” inquired Tiffany??? What window??? That window right there leading to your basement… it’s open, exclaimed Tiffany! Hmmm… no, I never noticed, Dante replied. I’ll get it fixed… “You really should have that checked out,” demandedTiffany. Have you had any break-ins… anything gone missing, inquired Tiffany. “No, nothing… never… “said Dante.
INT. LIVING ROOM – LATE NIGHT
[Both are in the house now]
You need to be more careful… maybe put an alarm system in. Oh, sis you’re paranoid as usual…. what they hell would I need an alarm system??? “You take too many chances Dante! If not for you then for your wife,” scolded Tiffany! “Okay, okay, what the hell… I’ll look into it… I promise… you happy,” Dante asked sarcastically. I’m going to bed you coming up, asked Dante.
“No, I’ll be up in a while… let me make my call.” “Yes, you promised… lol…”chided Dante!
[A few hours later… Tiffany lying on the sofa still on the main floor of the house about 2am]
Yeah, babe love you too… yeah, miss you too… my phone is dying… yeah, I’m going to bed… [Tiffany hears a strange noise, but not sure where it came from] wait, babe… no, I thought I heard something… [Tiffany realizes it’s coming from upstairs] laughing… no, it’s just my hyper-sexual brother and his poor wife… what DO I MEAN…. the poor girl never gets a good nights rest….I see why shes always so tired …. oh, I’m sure you dont agree… whatever…LOL… I’ll call you tomorrow my phone is dying… okay… okay… love you too… sweet dreams… okay bye.
CUT TO – STAIRS LEADING TO SPARE BEDROOM – NIGHT
[Tiffany hangs up the phone, but still feels uneasy] She grabs her shoulder bad with her semi-automatic 9mm pistol in it and slowly walks upstairs towards the spare bedroom. Once in the room she undresses and puts on her bathrobe. She gathers her shower bag and towel and heads for the shower down the hall. She still has an uneasy feeling and returns to the room to get her shoulder bag… with her handgun in it. Maybe I really am paranoid, she says to herself… oh what the hell… and she takes it anyway and walks down the hall to the shower.
CUT TO – UPSTAIRS BATHROOM – NIGHT
[Tiffany in the shower… continues to hear strange noises that seem NOT to emanate from Dante’s bedroom] She finishes up in the shower, put on her bathrobe and takes the handgun out of her bag and places it in the pocket of her terry cloth robe. She opens the door and hears noises coming from the main floor. She slowly walks down the stairs listening intently as the creaking of the floor seems to be more distinct as she reaches the bottom of the stairs. Only the faint illumination of the kitchen night light fills the room. Tiffany now pulls the firearm out of her robe pocket and slowly walks towards the kitchen. Someone is there… I know it… Tiffany thinks to herself… probably some neighborhood kids breaking in on some type of prank. Dante better get that alarm ASAP! Tiffany now right outside the kitchen can hear audible gasps… she
CUT TO – STAIRCASE TO MAIN FLOOR – NIGHT
listens closely…What the hell, Tiffany said to herself in a whispered voice… “Oh Dante… not so loud… we are going to wake up your sister,” said Margot in a hushed voice on the kitchen counter. She’s in the shower… she’ll be in there at least an hour if I know her! “Oh, I cant with these two… [Tiffany rolling her eyes] I’m going to bed,” she exclaimed! [Tiffany turns slowly as not to be seen and walks back to her room upstairs and closes the door].
INT. KITCHEN – MORNING
[Tiffany coming in from an early morning run] Good morning Sis… I see you still get up early to run, said Dante! “
Good morning brother dear… yeah, I try to keep up my routine no matter what,” replied Tiffany. Where’s Margot? “Oh, shes still sleeping… I don’t know why she always sleeps so late some days… “
Maybe because the poor girl cant sleep through the night,” chided Tiffany.
“What do you mean,” asked Dante dumbfounded?
“I cant with you… Nevermind… let me take a shower and maybe by then we can go out for breakfast,” suggests Tiffany.
[As Tiffany goes up the stairs, she passes Margot coming down the stairs] Good morning Tiffany… how did you sleep, yawned Margot.
Mooornin… I’m good girl… trust me a lot better that you, laughed Tiffany! “Oh gosh, were we THAT loud,” asked Margot embarrassingly?
“Don’t worry about it… I’m looking forward to lots of neices and nephews,” laughed Tiffany as she reached the top of the stairs.
I’m going to take a shower and suggested to ‘D’ that we all go out for breakfast… Tiffany continued. “Oh, I would have loved to make you something here at home if I could have gotten up a little earlier,” interrupted Margot.
“Oh girl please, you need a break and besides I still have another day so you can whip something up tomorrow if you like, Tiffany responded.
“Okay, you got a deal,” Margo said smiling widely.
[Margot comes into view of Dante at the bottom of the stairs] Good morning… how did you sleep, my love, said Dante as he wrapped his arms
around his wife kissing her passionately. “Mmmm… wonderful darling,” replied Margot smiling.
Sis had a great idea for us to go out for breakfast and I know just the place… I’m going up to get ready! Okay, I’ll be up in a few minutes to finish getting dressed… what do you want to do today after breakfast , inquired Margot? I dont know… we can just play it by ear, said Dante.
[Margot noticing the front door was open and walked over to close it] “Babe,” Margot called out to Dante… “Why didnt you close the frint door? Dante, not hearing his wife went into the bedroom to get dressed to go out.
Upon reaching the door, Margot is startled by the mailman standing at the door. She exchanges pleasantries with the mailman and closes the door.
[Dante, Margot and Tiffany are out at the cruise boat buffet where they have brunch] I almost forgot how beautiful this view is, observed Tiffany!
Oh, I love it out here… wonderful choice Babe, said Margot kissing her husband. “You two have such a great relationship,” said Tiffany. “I have always wondered who in the world could put up with my psychotic brother,” Tiffany continued. Heeeeyyy what do you mean, I’m a great guy, said Dante proudly. Oh, I didn’t mean to imply your weren’t a “great guy” brother dear… only that you’re also certifiably CRAZY as well,” shot back Tiffany! [They all begin laughing] “But you know I love you,” added Tiffany. “I love you too Sis,” replied Dante.
EXT. OUTSIDE HOME – MORNING
PLACEHOLDER: They take Tiffany to breakfast. Tiffany continues to caution Dante about his reckless attitude towards basic safety. She tells him that he us not as invincible as he thinks.
[They begin leaving the brunch cruise when Tiffany’s cell phone rings]
“You are going to love where we are going next,” said Margot.
“Hello… yes, this is she… [VOICE ON THE OTHER END: Agent Vicoli…. Division Chief DuPont here…we got a break in your case and we need you back here right away. I know you took a few
personal days… and I feel terrible about interrupting, but this may be our only chance to crack this case! How how fast can you get back here?] You’re kidding! Oh crap… okay, okay… give me a few hours and I’ll catch the first flight back.
[Both Dante and Margot overhearing show immediate disappointment] Oh Tiffany dont tell me, said Margot disappointingly… “Sis, are you kidding me, how can they do that,” asked Dante annoyed? Look guys, I know… but they woukd not have reacehd out to me unless it was absolutely imperative, explained Tiffany. Im so sorry guys… D, Im going to need to pack and get me to the airport asap, pleaded Tiffany. “Okay, okay, but you owe us BIG TIME for the holidays,” chided Dante. I promise I’ll make it up to you guys, said Tiffany apologetically.
EXT. OUTSIDE HOME – DAY
PLACEHOLDER: Tiffany gets a call from her Special Agent in Charge (SAC) and must fly back early due to a break in the case she was overseeing. Dante gets her to the airport on the back of his motorcycle.
[Tiffany now packed and ready to head out to the airport] Dante, traffic is going to be a mess this time of day, said Margot. CRAP you’re right, said Tiffany and the next flight is less than an hour away she continued.
And if I was anything less than the greatest motorcyclist in the history of the world, that MIGHT be a problem, replied Dante walking outside and jumping on his custom Harley cruiser. Are you sure you want to do this, asked Margot to Tiffany. “Oh what the hell… lets go,” replied Tiffany! Just get there and back SAFELY, Margot exclaimed!
[Tiffany jumps on the back of Dante’s bike and they take off]
Zipping through traffic like a hot knife through butter, Dante gets Tiffany to the airport in record time. “Thanks brother… call you when I land.” “Okay, sis… you watch your ass out there,” advised Dante. “You know I will… be safe getting home,” Tiffany responded.
Tiffany shows her badge as airport security waive her through to board her flight.
INT. HOUSE GARAGE – DAY
Key Scene 2: Inciting Incident propels the protagonist onto the journey!
BEGINNING: Dante leaves for an important meeting with racing team and rushes out without his helmet.
MIDDLE: Dante decides to take a faster route on the freeway to avoid traffic on the local roads. Because he is now traveling at a higher rate of speed, he is in greater danger without his helmet.
END: Dante crashes trying to avoid the debris of a truck tire blowout just ahead of him.
INT. LIVING ROOM – DAY
Key Scene 3: The protagonist reacts emotionally to the Inciting Incident.
BEGINNING: Tiffany phones to let Dante know she landed okay. Margot is home about to start dinner. Margot is at home preparing dinner when the phone rings. Margot is notified by police that Dante was in serious accident.
MIDDLE: Margot is joined by the other racing teammates as they are notified by Margot about what happened.
END: Margot is devasted with the prospect that Dante may not survive. She cannot bear the thought of her perfect life being turned upside down. She feels like she has entered a nightmare.
[Tiffany’s plane lands in Florida from her flight from L.A. she calls her brother on their home phone… Margot answers]
Hey, Margot… just touched down. Yeah, I’m good. A little tired, but going to head straight to the office to see what they have for me on this case… no, no point in going home first… better to just get started and maybe I can get decent nights sleep tonight. Is my brother there?
“He’s out in the garage working on his bike, you want me to call him,” asked Margot?
No, just let him know Im okay and I’ll give him a call in a few days.
“Okay, be careful,” said Margot as she ended the call.
INT. HOSPITAL – DAY
Beginning: Margot arrives at the hospital after hearing that he was involved in a motorcycle accident.
Middle: Margot informs Tiffany and the racing teammates with the assistance of the hospital social worker.
End: Tiffany arrives back in Illinois and stays the night with Margot in the hospital.
Margot rushes into the hospital Emergency Room through the front doors up to the front receptionist desk frantically asking where her husband is. Hospital is very busy with many people in the waiting area as other medical cases are being attended to.
Margot
(hysterical)
Please, please… somebody… I got a call that my husband was in an accident…
Nurse
Please ma’am try to calm down… what is his name?
Margot
Dante… Dante Vicoli… please tell me what happened… can someone tell me what happened???
Nurse
Okay, please take these forms and fill out what you can…
Margot
(interrupts) Forms??? I need to know what happened to my husband now!!!!
Nurse
Okay ma’am… let me see if I can get a doctor to speak with you, but you will have to try to remain calm.
Margot
Please, just tell me what happened!
Please wait here… have a seat. I’m going to page the doctor.
The nurse shaking her head picks up the phone and pages the doctor.
Nurse
Doctor Elijah Haskins… please come to the front desk… Doctor Elijah Haskins, please come to the front desk…
Margot waits near the desk with papers still in her hands. She is looking around frantically not knowing what to do.
A few minutes pass and the Dr. Elijah Haskins, the neurosurgeon attending Dante walks up to the front desk and the receptionist points to Margot. Dr Haskins walks over to Margot.
[Dr. Elijah Haskins is a tall, fit, African American man about 60 years of age]
Mrs. Vicoli?
Margot
(Still frantic… turning towards the Doctor)
Yes, that’s me… what happened to my husband???
Try to remain calm Mrs. Vicoli… your husband is receiving the best care possible.
Margot
Okay, please tell me what happened…
Your husband suffered a traumatic brain injury from a motorcycle accident. He was brough in just a little while ago. He is stable, but not out of the woods yet. We have him into a medically induced coma for his own protection…
(Interrupting … staring to cry) Oh my God… nooooo…
I can assure you this is the best thing for him right now. We need to minimize the risk of swelling and inflammation of the brain tissue… he suffered a terrible trauma to the front and left side of his brain.
Margot
(Interrupting… crying ) Oh my God…
We are doing everything we can for him… is there anyone you can call?
(sobbing ) I… I … I don’t know…
(turning back to the front desk)
Okay, let me get you someone who can help… Jenny, page the social worker, Mrs. Holloway for Mrs. Vicoli, please?
Jenny
(receptionist – white woman in her 40’s)
Sure thing doctor…
[Jenny picks up the phone and pages Mrs. Holloway]
Jenny
Paging Mrs. Holloway to the front desk
Dr. Haskins
[motioning for Margot to sit in the nearby waiting area a few feet away.]
Please Mrs. Vicoli… sit over here… Mrs. Holloway is one of our best. She will be here in a few minutes. Just be patient… we’re doing Everything we can… please… I have to get back now… just be patient
(still sobbing) okay, thank you doctor
[Dr. Haskins walks away.]
Margot sits alone and looks around at all the other people there who area los waiting for news. Her mind goes back to when she last saw Dante leave… so full of life and hope. Now their lives are so uncertain. Severi minutes pass as Mrs. Holloway walks up to Margot.
Mrs. Vicoli?
Margot looking up at her. Somewhat calmer than before.
Yes, I’m Mrs. Vicoli… um, please call me Margot…
Mrs. Holloway reaching out her hand to shake Margot’s taking a seat next to her. Mrs. Holloway places her hand on her sholder as she sits down.
Margot… okay fine… I’m Janine… Let me say, I’m terribly sorry for what happened to your husband. We are going to do everything we can to support you through this crisis, but just know he will be receiving the best of care.
Margot
Thank you…
Okay, now first thing is there anyone you need to call? A family member, maybe?
[Janine opens a pad and pulls out her pen atgtached to the pad to take notes.]
I dont know… my husbands sister… her name is Tiffany
Okay, do you have a number for Tiffany?
Margot
Yes, I think so… here in my cell phone… yes, its here… 555-1789
Mrs. Holloway
Is that a local number?
No, she’s in Florida… area code 305
Okay, good… can you think of anyone else?
Well, mabe the his team from the racing track… he was on his way to meet with them. They would be worried by now.
Who should I reach out to? Is there a main contact?
Margot
Yes, um… Joey… well Joe… we all call him Joey
Mrs. Holloway
Okay, good… got it… and do you have a number for him?
Margot
Yes, I have it here somewhere… okay here… 555-5531
And thats local, right?
Yes, the track is a few liles from here… I just cant believe this…
Okay, we’re going to get through this. Let me makes these calls and I’ll be right back… can I get you anything? Coffee? Water?
Margot
No, nothing… i just cant believe this…
Mrs. Holloway
Okay, I’’l be right back… hand in there okay?
[Mrs. Halloway gets up and walks away.]
Margot sits there alone with tears streaming down her face. Shot widens to encompass the chaos that surrounds her as she sits there alone staring into nothingness.
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Tyberius Asante’s Turning Point 1 Scene
“What I learned doing this assignment is how to think about the story from the viewpoint of turning points. The turning points drive the characters through the development arc and this need to have a purpose and the desired outcome that makes sense.”
Inciting Incident: Dante suffers a traumatic brain injury after a motorcycle accident leaving Margot to reimagine what her life will be like taking on the role of caretaker to her brain-damaged husband.
Turning Point 1: Margot’s world has been turned upside down due to Dante’s accident. She does not know how to navigate the uncertainty of what her life will be like. She reaches out for help but is unable to find any. She is alone.
INT. LIVING ROOM – DAY
Key Scene 3: The protagonist reacts emotionally to the Inciting Incident.
BEGINNING: Margot is at home preparing dinner when the phone rings. Margot is notified by police that Dante was in a serious accident.
MIDDLE: Margot is joined by the other racing teammates as they are notified by Margot about what happened.
END: Margot is devasted with the prospect that Dante may not survive. She cannot bear the thought of her perfect life being turned upside down. She feels like she has entered a nightmare.
INT. HOSPITAL – DAY
Beginning: Margot arrives at the hospital after hearing that he was involved in a motorcycle accident.
Middle: Margot informs Tiffany and the racing teammates with the assistance of the hospital social worker.
End: Tiffany arrives back in Illinois and stays the night with Margot in the hospital.
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Tyberius Asante’s Inciting Incident
What I learned doing this assignment is creating a more detailed picture of the characters such as where they live, neighborhood, laws of the state pertaining to the story, etc.
Key Scene 2: Inciting Incident propels the protagonist onto the journey!
Key Scene 3: The protagonist reacts emotionally to the Inciting Incident.
INT. RESTAURANT – NIGHT
BEGINNING: Dante, Margot, and Tiffany enter the restaurant to celebrate Dante’s win and to catch up.
MIDDLE: Dante talks about Tiffany’s innate ability to catch criminals since they were kids.
END: Margot speaks judgmentally of her mother and blamed her for her father’s drinking problem. Tiffany listens intently.
INT. DANTE AND MARGO’S HOME – LATE NIGHT
BEGINNING: Dante talks to Tiffany about the latest developments being made on his revolutionary motorcycle engine. Margot pressures Dante to get the home security system fixed.
MIDDLE: Tiffany settles in for the night, but hears a noise coming from the lower part of the house. Believing Dante and Margot have retired for the night, she investigates.
END: Dante and Margo make love in the kitchen… Tiffany believes that was the noise.
EXT. OUTSIDE HOME – MORNING
BEGINNING: The trio leave to head out for breakfast and a day of sightseeing. They take Tiffany to breakfast. Tiffany continues to caution Dante about his reckless attitude towards basic safety. She tells him that he is not as invincible as he thinks.
MIDDLE: Tiffany receives an urgent call that she must return as there has been a break on one of her cases
END: The trio return from brunch, but Tiffany has to catch the next flight back home. Dante rushes her to the airport.
EXT. OUTSIDE HOME – DAY
BEGINNING: Dante returns from taking Tiffany to the airport.
MIDDLE: Dante arrives at the airport and exchanged goodbyes with his sister.
END: Dante returns home, but remembers he had a meeting with the team to discuss buyers for the new engine.
INT. HOUSE GARAGE – DAY
Key Scene 2: Inciting Incident propels the protagonist onto the journey!
BEGINNING: Dante leaves for an important meeting with the racing team and rushes out without his helmet.
MIDDLE: Dante decides to take a faster route on the freeway to avoid traffic on the local roads. Because he is now traveling at a higher rate of speed, he is in greater danger without his helmet.
END: Dante crashes trying to avoid the debris of a truck tire blowout just ahead of him.
INT. LIVING ROOM – DAY
Key Scene 3: The protagonist reacts emotionally to the Inciting Incident.
BEGINNING: Margot is at home preparing dinner when the phone rings. Margot is notified by police that Dante was in a serious accident.
MIDDLE: Margot is joined by the other racing teammates as they are notified by Margot about what happened.
END: Margot is devasted with the prospect that Dante may not survive. She cannot bear the thought of her perfect life being turned upside down. She feels like she has entered a nightmare.
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Tyberius Asante’s Act 1: Opening Scenes
“What I learned doing this assignment is how to compose a first draft”
Act 1:
INT. RACING STANDS – DAY
BEGINNING: Tiffany walks through the crowds in the racing stands to find Margot. She finds her and greets her warmly.
MIDDLE: Margot and Tiffany meet Dante in the winner’s circle at the podium
END: the three head out to celebrate and catch up.
(Turns to Tiffany)
“He’s doing great… I know he’s going to win,” Margot commenting with exuberance in her voice to Tiffany. I’m so glad you could make the race, Tiffany!
(Facing Margot)
“Me too… “Its so hard to break away from The Bureau with so many cases on my docket,”
Margot
“You guys have always been so close… it’s going to mean the world to him that you were able to come, Margot said smiling approvingly.
Tiffany
Well, with what we been through… our experiences growing up made us close so that’s not an understatement…
No, but even more than that, the two of you always had a special bond that went beyond biology.
Tiffany
“That’s true…
Dante’s crew who working the pit stop are watching intensely as their biker takes the lead and wins the race.
Margot
(Both turning to face the track)
“Oh, here he comes,” said Margot excitedly! Let’s go meet him on the winner’s stand!
Margot, Tiffany, and the whole pit crew rush over to congratulate their winner!
Dante pulls off his helmet to wave at the scores of cheering fans as he rides into the winner’s stand.
Tiffany
“I wish he wouldn’t do that! (disapprovingly)… he could still get hurt. This racing is dangerous enough… he should keep his helmet on as long as he’s on that bike!
“Oh, you know your brother… he wants to make sure he’s seen… Here he comes!
Margot runs to meet him and jumps into his arms kissing him.
Margot
“Baby that was a great race… you were TERRIFIC!
Thanks, Babe…
Margot
Guess who’s here… ???
Dante
(interrupting) Stop, you don’t even have to tell me… I felt it the minute she got here… my lovely sister!!!
Tiffany
“Hey bro…”
stepped through the crowd.
“That was a great race,”
she said as she embraced him tightly kissing him on the cheek
(Margot looking on)
“I’m so glad you could make it… knowing you were here gave me that extra confidence to push through that last lap and a half, extorted Dante! I could always feel it when you were near!
Tiffany
“Well, this is cause for celebration,” said Tiffany. Dinner is on me!
Dante
Ha-ha, you don’t have to tell me twice… we’re outta here as soon as I get my trophy and wrap up!
Margot
Well, don’t let us stand in the way of your GLORIOUS MOMENT!
Dante steps up to the podium, gives a short speech thanking his racing crew, the fans, and his beautiful wife, and his sister for being there.
Afterward, the trio head out.
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Tyberius’ Beat Sheet Draft 2
What I learned doing this assignment is how to create a theme and weave it through the story.
Act 1:
EXT. RACING PITS – DAY
Opening
Dante
wins another motorcycle race. His sister Tiffany flies in but only
catches the winning lap. She joins Margot and Dante in the winner’s
circle as they all congratulate him on the win.
Dante
is happy his sister Tiffany was able to come see him win. Tiffany notices
that Dante doesn’t wear his helmet all the time and takes unnecessary
chances that puts him in danger.INT. RESTURANT – NIGHT
PLACEHOLDER: All three go out together to catch up and celebrate. Dante puts on his normal bravado for his sister and wife at dinner. Dante feels the world is in the palm of his hands. He feels able to accomplish anything and nothing can stop him.
§ Transformational Event (1): She hears Tiffany discussing how dangerous motorcycling can be and feels apprehensive about Dante continuing to race. Margot had not to full considered the possibility of Dante getting hurt and how that would change their lives.
o Tiffany asks about Margot’s past as she does not know her that well. Margot’s speaks frankly and negatively about her upbringing and how her mother’s unfaithfulness drove her father to drink. She is very judgmental of her mother and says she will do a better job with her husband. Tiffany listens intently.
INT. DANTE AND MARGO’S HOME – LATE NIGHT
PLACEHOLDER: Tiffany stays the night in the spare bedroom. Dante and Margo make love in the kitchen. Dante and Margo are trying for a baby. He wants to make Margot happy as she has been after him about starting a family.
EXT. OUTSIDE HOME – MORNING
PLACEHOLDER: They take Tiffany to breakfast. Tiffany continues to caution Dante about his reckless attitude towards basic safety. She tells him that he us not as invincible as he thinks.
EXT. OUTSIDE HOME – DAY
PLACEHOLDER: Tiffany gets a call from her Special Agent in Charge (SAC) and must fly back early due to a break in the case she was overseeing. Dante gets her to the airport on the back of his motorcycle.
INT. HOUSE GARAGE – DAY
PLACEHOLDER: Tiffany having to return early causes Dante to forget an important meeting with racing team and rushes out after dropping off Tiffany to airport.
Inciting
IncidentDante
rushes out without his helmet and has a terrible motorcycle accident
during on his way to a routine meeting with his racing team.INT. LIVING ROOM – DAY
PLACEHOLDER: Margot is notified by police that Dante was in serious accident. She rushes to the hospital. Margot is devastated.
INT. HOSPITAL – DAY
PLACEHOLDER: Dr’s inform Margot that prognosis is grim. She tries to notify Tiffany but can’t get her. She is able to place a call to the racing team and they arrive. One of the team members, Jay Berlusconi, who secretly liked Margot is quick to give aid and comfort.
Turning
PointMargot
is devastated at the possibility that Dante may not survive. Dante pulls
through, but the prognosis is bleak. Doctors do not believe he will
regain much of his previous cognitive ability.Act 2:
INT. HOSPITAL – DAY
PLACEHOLDER: Margot spends the night in the hospital. Dante is in a coma.
New
planMargot
notifies Tiffany of the terrible accident, and she flies back out for
support but cannot stay longer than a day.
Doctors
recommend extensive physical rehabilitation and advises that Dante’s type
of brain trauma may cause him to exhibit a number of symptoms such as severe
mood swings and a lack emotional control.
Margot
falls apart as she cannot imagine taking care of Dante. She doesn’t
handle any of this well. Margot’s world is falling apart.
Tiffany
does not like the attention Jay pays to Margot who seems to offer more
than friendly support.
Margot
does not know what to do and seems like everything she tries just makes
things worse.
Dante
is conscious and very temperamental, angry and verbally abusive to Margot.
He doesn’t sleep through the night but wanders the house at night
rearranging furniture, urinating on the floor and eating out of the
garbage.§ Transformational Event (2): Dante’s Accident forces her to accept a new version of her family. She goes from being taken care of to caretaker overnight.
INT. HOSPITAL – MORNING
PLACEHOLDER: Doctors inform her that Dante will pull through but has a long road to recovery… if at all.
INT. HOSPITAL – DAY
PLACEHOLDER: Dante spends two weeks in the hospital. Margot comes to see him and spends most days there. Visitors are few, but Jay shows up to spend time with Margot and offers continued support for her. She is drawn to him and appreciates him being there for her.
INT. REHABILITATION FACILITY – NIGHT
PLACEHOLDER: Several weeks go by until Dante is transferred to a rehab facility. Dante is very moody and shows frustration and anger about his situation.
INT. LIVING ROOM – DAY
PLACEHOLDER: Dante comes home can walk but is despondent at time and has mood swings. Margot tries to speak with him and be loving as before but he is mostly unresponsive.
Plan
in actiono Margo reaches out to Tiffany but cannot reach her. Tiffany is traveling on an important case she is trying to crack.
o Jay comes by the house and brings flowers. Margot is so enamored with the much needed attention that she doesn’t consider Jay’s motives.
EXT. OUTSIDE FRONT OF HOUSE – NIGHT
o Neighbors begin to complain about Dante’s wanderings outside naked in the middle of the night and suspect substance abuse.
§ Transformational Event (3): Margot fails at trying to physically care for Dante.
INT. FRONT OF HOUSE – DAY
PLACEHOLDER: One of the neighbors stops by the next day to speak with Margot. She recommends a full-time live-in nurse/helper to alleviate the burden on Margot as her sister went through a similar situation with an autistic child.
Margot hires a male
nurse through agency recommended by Mrs. Eva Cardoso, the neighbor.Middle aged, 50’s, graying hair,
conservatively dressed, slight build.INT. LOCATION – DAY
PLACEHOLDER: Margot calls the agency and they send someone out next day.
Midpoint
Turning PointStressed
out and a nervous wreck, Margot hopes that the new nurse will allow her
to get some sleep.INT. BEDROOM – NIGHT
She
goes to bed only to be attacked in the middle of the night and raped. She
doesn’t know what to do now. It seems that Dante has become violent in
addition to strange behaviors. She says nothing to anyone about what she
experienced. She suffers in silence.§ Transformational Event (4): Margot is beaten and raped in the night.
Act 3:
INT. LIVING ROOM – NIGHT
PLACEHOLDER
Rethink
everythingJay
stops by to see Margot. She offers him something to drink. Jay notices
bruises on her neck and shoulders. The sit in the living room talking.
Margot
reflects back on how she grew up with jay and wonders if she was destined
to live a life of pain and anguish. She cannot escape her past or her
present.
Jay
moves on Margot, they kiss, but Margot quickly moves away. Jay leaves.INT. BATHROPOM – NIGHT
The
violence against her continues… mostly at night when she cannot see who
it is.
She
is assaulted and nearly drowned in the bathtub. Margot feels unsafe in
her own home. She feels guilty for hating what her husband has become
while acknowledging it’s not his fault. Margot is riddled with guilt and
remorse… cries hysterically.§ Transformational Event (5): Margot is assaulted again and is nearly drowned.
INT. BEDROOM – NIGHT
New
planExhausted
and suffering from PTSD, Margot now sleeps in a locked room at night
fearful of leaving it. The door has been reinforced, but it doesn’t last
long. The room is broken into, and Margot flees for her life into another
part of the house.INT. RUNNING THROUGH THE HOUSE /BASEMENT– NIGHT
As
she hides in the basement seeking safety, she is overcome by a terrible
odor and finds the dead body of the male nurse, Tommy and Dante’s
teammate Jay mutilated bodies hidden in different parts of the basement.EXT. BASEMENT – NIGHT
Margot screams in terror and runs out of the house through a basement window.
§ Transformational Event (6): Attempting to flee the home he finds the caretaker’s mutilated body and the bodies of two other people in her basement.
EXT. FRONT OF HOUSE – NIGHT
Turning
Point: Huge failure / Major shiftThe
police arrive and have Dante committed to a psychiatric hospital.INT. HOSPITAL – NIGHT
Margot
checks into the hospital herself to deal with abdominal pains that
persist after the near drowning incident.
Margot
was eight weeks pregnant but suffers a miscarriage. She is at her lowest
point now bordering on nervous breakdown.Act 4:
INT. OUTPATIENT FACILITY – DAY
Climax/Ultimate
expression of the conflictMargot
receives counseling while she is in the hospital and is discharged to
home in a few days.INT. KITCHEN – NIGHT
She
plans on following up with additional counseling once she settles in. The
phone rings… its Tiffany returning her call asking a what happened to her
brother.
Margot
is resentful towards Tiffany for not staying in touch and recounts
everything she has lost.
Tiffany
is unbelieving that her brother could be responsible for the things
Margot says and Margot is furious at the accusation she is making it up…
She has been the one to go through hell because of Dante; not her!INT. TIFFANY’S CONDO BEDROOM – DAY
Upon
hearing that Dante has been committed to a psychiatric facility for the
criminally insane, Tiffany flies out to see her brother and find out what
is going on.INT. LIVING ROOM – LATE DAY
Resolution
Upon
release from the hospital, Margot calls in a professional cleaning
service to get the house in order. Three cleaning people arrive. One male
and two women.INT. BATHROOM BATHTUB – NIGHT
Later,
she goes to take a hot bath to relax.§ Transformational Event (8): Dante is removed from the home, but the cleaning people are found dead. Now for the first time she fights back unrestrained by sympathy, she would have for her husband.
INT. PSYCHIATRIC HOSPITAL – DAY
PLACEHOLDER: Meanwhile, Tiffany arrives to see her brother and speaks to him. Dante is handcuffed to the bed and heavily sedated but recognizes Tiffany and is glad to see her. Tiffany asks her brother how he is feeling. Dante drifts in and out but tells Tiffany that she has to help Margot… she is not alone in the house!
INT. PSYCHIATRIC HOSPITAL FRONT DESK – DAY
Tiffany
rushes to get to a phone as her cell phone has no reception in the
hospital. Tiffany rushes to the front desk to call Margot.INT. KITCHEN – LATE DAY
Margot
answers and when she tries to tell her to get out of the house, Margot
still upset from the previous conversation doesn’t want to hear anything
Tiffany has to say.
She
accuses Tiffany of misplaced loyalty when she has been the victim! He
hurt her worse than she could have ever believed … she lost her baby and
innocent people are dead! She hangs up the phone on Tiffany, but as she
turns, she sees the cleaning crew dead and mutilated on the living room
floor.
As
she screams in terror, a figure grabs her and throws her against the
wall. Margot for the first time gets a clear look at the perpetrator
realizing it wasn’t Dante, but a stranger that invaded their home months
earlier… she directs her rage at him and fights the monster with
everything she has.EXT. COMMERCIAL ROAD – DUSK
PLACEHOLDER: takes a motorcycle to get to Margot faster… Tiffany arrives at the home too late?
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Tyberius Asante High-Speed Beat Sheet
Whew! What I learned doing this assignment is how to implement high-speed writing rules along with definitions and outline structural mechanics.
Act 1:
EXT. RACING PITS – DAY
<div>Opening
Dante
wins another motorcycle race. His sister Tiffany flies in but only catches the winning lap. She joins Margot and Dante in the winner’s circle as they all congratulate him on the win.
</div><div></div>
§ Transformational Event (1): She hears Tiffany discussing how dangerous motorcycling can be and feels apprehensive about Dante continuing to race. Margot had not to fully considered the possibility of Dante getting hurt and how that would change their lives.
INT. RESTAURANT – NIGHT
PLACEHOLDER: All three go out together to catch up and celebrate.
INT. DANTE AND MARGO’S HOME – LATE NIGHT
PLACEHOLDER: Tiffany stays the night… Dante and Margo make love in the kitchen
EXT. OUTSIDE HOME – MORNING
PLACEHOLDER: They take Tiffany to breakfast
EXT. OUTSIDE HOME – DAY
PLACEHOLDER: Tiffany must fly back early due to work priorities
INT. HOUSE GARAGE – DAY
PLACEHOLDER: Dante forgets an important meeting with the racing team and rushes out after dropping off Tiffany at the airport.
Inciting
IncidentDante
rushes out without his helmet and has a terrible motorcycle accident
during on his way to a routine meeting with his racing team.INT. LIVING ROOM – DAY
PLACEHOLDER: Margot is notified by police that Dante was in a serious accident. She rushes to the hospital.
INT. HOSPITAL – DAY
PLACEHOLDER: Dr. informs Margot that the prognosis is grim. She tries to notify Tiffany but can’t get her.
Turning
PointMargot
is devastated at the possibility that Dante may not survive. Dante pulls through, but the prognosis is bleak. Doctors do not believe he will regain much of his previous cognitive ability.Act 2:
INT. HOSPITAL – DAY
PLACEHOLDER: Margot spends the night in the hospital. Doctors informed her that Dante will pull through but has a long road to recovery… if at all.
<div>New
planMargot
notifies Tiffany of the terrible accident, and she flies back out for support but cannot stay longer than a day. Doctors recommend extensive physical rehabilitation. Margot falls apart as she cannot handle the added burden of taking care of Dante. She doesn’t handle anything well.
She doesn’t know what to do and seems like everything she tries just makes things worse. Dante is conscious and very temperamental. He doesn’t sleep through the night but wanders the house at night rearranging furniture and eating out of the garbage.
</div><div></div>
§ Transformational Event (2): Dante’s Accident forces her to accept a new version of her family. She goes from being taken care of to caretaker overnight.
INT. REHABILITATION FACILITY – NIGHT
PLACEHOLDER: Several weeks go by as Dante is transferred to a rehab facility.
INT. LIVING ROOM – DAY
PLACEHOLDER: Dante comes home can walk but is despondent. Margot tries to speak with him, but he has no response.
Plan
in actiono Margo reaches out to Tiffany but cannot reach her. Tiffany is traveling on an important case she is trying to crack.
EXT. OUTSIDE FRONT OF HOUSE – NIGHT
o Neighbors begin to complain about Dante’s wanderings outside naked. One of the neighbors recommends a full-time live-in nurse/helper to alleviate the burden on Margot.
§ Transformational Event (3): Margot fails at trying to physically care for Dante.
INT. LOCATION – DAY
PLACEHOLDER: Margot speaks to a neighbor and they recommend a live-in male nurse to help
Midpoint
Turning PointStressed
out and a nervous wreck, Margot hopes that the new nurse will allow her
to get some sleep.INT. BEDROOM – NIGHT
She
goes to bed only to be attacked in the middle of the night and raped. She doesn’t know what to do now. It seems that Dante has become violent in addition to strange behaviors. She says nothing to anyone about what she experienced. She suffers in silence.§ Transformational Event (4): Margot is beaten and raped in the night.
Act 3:
INT. LIVING ROOM – NIGHT
Rethink
everythingMargot
reflects back on how she grew up and wonders if she was destined to live a life of pain and anguish. She cannot escape her past or her present.
The violence against her continues… mostly at night when she cannot see who it is.INT. BATHROOM – NIGHT
She
is assaulted and nearly drowned in the bathtub. Margot feels unsafe in her own home. She feels guilty for hating what her husband has become while acknowledging it’s not his fault. Margot is riddled with guilt and remorse… cries hysterically.§ Transformational Event (5): Margot is assaulted again and is nearly drowned.
INT. BEDROOM – NIGHT
New
planExhausted
and suffering from PTSD, Margot now sleeps in a locked room at night fearful of leaving it. The door has been reinforced, but it doesn’t last long. The room is broken into, and Margot flees for her life into another part of the house.INT. RUNNING THROUGH THE HOUSE /BASEMENT– NIGHT
As
she hides in the basement seeking safety, she is overcome by a terrible
odor and finds the dead body of the male nurse and two other dead
mutilated bodies were hidden in different parts of the basement.EXT. BASEMENT – NIGHT
Margot screams in terror and runs out of the house through a basement window
§ Transformational Event (6): Attempting to flee the home he finds the caretaker’s mutilated body and the bodies of two other people in her basement.
EXT. FRONT OF HOUSE – NIGHT
Turning
Point: Huge failure / Major shiftThe
police arrive and have Dante committed to a psychiatric hospital.INT. HOSPITAL – NIGHT
Margot
checks into the hospital herself to deal with abdominal pains that persist after the incident. Margot was eight weeks pregnant but suffers a
miscarriage. She is at her lowest point now bordering on a nervous breakdown.Act 4:
INT. OUTPATIENT FACILITY – DAY
Climax/Ultimate
expression of the conflictMargot
receives counseling while she is in the hospital and is discharged to
home in a few days.INT. KITCHEN – NIGHT
She
plans on following up with additional counseling once she settles in. The
the phone rings… it is Tiffany returning her call asking what happened to her
brother.
Margot
is resentful towards Tiffany for not staying in touch and recounts everything
she has lost. Tiffany is unbelieving that her brother could be
responsible for the things Margot says and Margot is furious at the
accusation she is making it up… She has been the one to go through hell
because of Dante; not her!INT. TIFFANY’S CONDO BEDROOM – DAY
Upon
hearing that Dante has been committed to a psychiatric facility for the
criminally insane, Tiffany flies out to see her brother and find out what
is going on.INT. LIVING ROOM – LATE DAY
Resolution
Upon
release from the hospital, Margot calls in a professional cleaning service to get the house in order.INT. BATHROOM BATHTUB – NIGHT
Later,
she goes to take a hot bath to relax.§ Transformational Event (8): Dante is removed from the home, but the cleaning people are found dead. Now for the first time she fights back unrestrained by sympathy, she would have for her husband.
INT. PSYCHIATRIC HOSPITAL – DAY
PLACEHOLDER: Meanwhile, Tiffany arrives to see her brother and speaks to him. Dante is heavily sedated but recognizes Tiffany and is glad to see her. Tiffany asks her brother how he is feeling. Dante drifts in and out but tells Tiffany that she has to help Margot… she is not alone in the house!
INT. PSYCHIATRIC HOSPITAL FRONT DESK – DAY
Tiffany
rushes to get to a phone as her cell phone has no reception in the hospital. Tiffany rushes to the front desk to call Margot.INT. KITCHEN – LATE DAY
Margot
answers and when she tries to tell her to get out of the house, Margot
still upset from the previous conversation doesn’t want to hear Tiffany’s
defenses of Dante anymore. He hurt her worse than she could have ever
believed … she lost her baby and innocent people are dead! She hangs up
the phone on Tiffany, but as she turns, she sees the cleaning crew dead
and mutilated on the living room floor.
As
she screams in terror, a figure grabs her and throws her against the wall. Margot for the first time gets a clear look at the perpetrator realizing it wasn’t Dante, but a stranger that invaded their home months earlier… she directs her rage at him and fights the monster with everything she has.EXT. COMMERCIAL ROAD – DUSK
PLACEHOLDER: takes a motorcycle to get to Margot faster… Tiffany arrives at the home too late?
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Tyberius Asante Transformational Events
What I learned doing this assignment is to begin to brainstorm different transformational events that will take the character through their character arc.
2. Start with the Character Arc and the list of Old Ways and New Ways.
Old Ways
* Loving, attentive wife, idealistic
* Romantic, strong desire to please her husband
* Sense of humor
* Shy and lighthearted
* Unsure of herself
New Ways
– Broken and disillusioned
– Realist, strong desire to survive and salvage some semblance of life as he knew it
– Traumatized
– Outspoken, willing to stand up for herself.
– Fearless will fight to survive.
3. Make a list of 6 – 8 changes or steps that need to happen for that character to go from who they are at the beginning (Old Ways) to who they are in the ending (New Ways).
· She hears Tiffany discussing how dangerous motorcycling can be and feels apprehensive about Dante continuing to race. Margot had not to full considered the possibility of Dante getting hurt and how that would change their lives.
· Dante’s Accident forces her to accept a new version of her family. She goes from being taken care of to caretaker overnight.
· Margot fails at trying to physically care for Dante.
· Margot is beaten and raped.
· Margot hires a caretaker to assist with Dante.
· Margot is assaulted again and is nearly drowned.
· Attempting to flee the home he finds the caretaker’s mutilated body and the bodies of two other people in her basement.
· Dante is removed from the home, but the cleaning people are found dead. Now for the first time she fights back unrestrained by sympathy, she would have for her husband.
4. Sequence the steps from easiest to most difficult. This will imply the journey the character takes. DONE
5. Brainstorm dramatic events or tests that could cause those changes for the character. DONE
6. Add these transformational events to your four-act structure. DONE
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Tyberius Asante – Lesson 5 – 4 Act Transformational Structure
“What I learned doing this assignment is how to weave the journey for the characters through the story showing their transformation.”
1. Give us the following:
<div>Concept
After her husband’s traumatic brain injury, Margot must adjust to the loss of her dreams and find a path forward. She is completely
terrorized within an inch of her sanity.Main Conflict
While Margot is trying to find a way to adjust from being
a “princess wife” to her husband’s primary caretaker she doubts her
ability to take on the role while witnessing her husband’s terrifying and
brutal transformation.
</div><div>Old Ways
Loving wife
Romantic
Sense of humor
Shy and lighthearted
Unsure of herselfNew Ways
Broken and disillusioned
Realist
Traumatized
Outspoken
Fearless – nothing left to lose.</div><div>
</div>
2. Fill in each of these with the answers you have right now.
Act 1:
<div>Opening
Dante wins another motorcycle race. His sister Tiffany flies in but only catches the winning lap. She joins Margot and Dante in the winner’s circle as they all congratulate him on the win. All three go out
together to catch up and celebrate.
</div><div>Inciting Incident
Dante rushes out without his helmet and has a terrible
motorcycle accident on his way to a routine meeting with his racing
team.Turning Point
Margot is devastated at the possibility that Dante may not survive. Dante pulls through, but the prognosis is bleak. Doctors do
not believe he will regain much of his previous cognitive ability.</div>
Act 2:
<div>New plan
Margot notifies Tiffany of the terrible accident, and she flies back out for support but cannot stay longer than a day. Doctors recommend extensive physical rehabilitation. Margot falls apart as she cannot handle the added burden of taking care of Dante. She doesn’t handle anything well. She doesn’t know what to do and seems like everything she tries just makes things worse. Dante is conscious and very temperamental.
He doesn’t sleep through the night but wanders the house at night rearranging furniture and eating out of the garbage.
</div><div>Plan in action
Margo reaches out to Tiffany but cannot reach her.
Tiffany is traveling on an important case she is trying to crack. Neighbors begin to complain about Dante’s wanderings outside naked. One of the
neighbors recommend a full-time live-in nurse/helper to alleviate the
the burden on Margot.Midpoint Turning Point
Stressed out and a nervous wreck, Margot hopes that the new nurse will allow her to get some sleep. She goes to bed only to be attacked in the middle of the night and raped. She doesn’t know what to do now. It seems that Dante has become violent in addition to strange behaviors.
She says nothing to anyone about what she experienced. She suffers in silence.</div>
Act 3:
<div>Rethink everything
Margot reflects back on how she grew up and wonders if she was destined to live a life of pain and anguish. She cannot escape her past or her present. The violence against her continues… mostly at night when she cannot see who it is. She feels guilty for hating what her husband has become while acknowledging it’s not his fault. Margot is riddled
with guilt and remorse.
</div><div>New plan
Exhausted and suffering from PTSD, Margot now sleeps in a locked room at night fearful of leaving it. The door has been reinforced, but it doesn’t last long. The room is broken into, and Margot flees for her life into another part of the house. As she hides in the
basement seeking safety, she is overcome by a terrible odor and finds the
dead body of the male nurse and two other dead mutilated bodies hidden in
different parts of the basement. Margot screams in terror and runs out of
the house.Turning Point: Huge failure / Major shift
The police arrive and have Dante committed to a psychiatric hospital. Margot checks into the hospital herself to deal with abdominal pains that persist after the incident. Margot was eight weeks pregnant but suffers a miscarriage. She is at her lowest point now bordering on
nervous breakdown.</div>
Act 4:
<div>Climax/Ultimate expression of the conflict
Margot receives counseling while she is in the hospital and is discharged home in a few days. She plans on following up with additional counseling once she settles in. The phone rings… its
Tiffany returning her call asking what happened to her brother. Margot is resentful towards Tiffany for not staying in touch and recounts everything she has lost. Tiffany is unbelieving that her brother could be responsible
for the things Margot says and Margot is furious at the accusation she is
making it up… She has been the one to go through hell because of Dante;
not her!. Upon hearing that Dante has been committed to a psychiatric
facility for the criminally insane, Tiffany flies out to see her brother.
</div><div>Resolution
Margot calls in a professional cleaning service to get the house in order. Later, she goes to take a hot bath to relax. Tiffany arrives to see her brother and speaks to him. Dante is heavily sedated but recognizes Tiffany and is glad to see her. Tiffany asks her brother how he is feeling. Dante drifts in and out but tells Tiffany that she has
to help Margot… she is not alone in the house!Tiffany rushes to get to a phone as her cell phone has no reception in the hospital. Tiffany rushes to the front desk to call
Margot. Margot answers and when she tries to tell her to get out of the house,
Margot still upset from the previous conversation doesn’t want to hear
Tiffany’s defenses of Dante anymore. He hurt her worse than she could have ever believed … she lost her baby and innocent people are dead! She hangs up the phone on Tiffany, but as she turns, she sees the cleaning crew dead and mutilated on the living room floor. As she screams in terror, a figure grabs her and throws her against the wall. Margot for
the first time gets a clear look at the perpetrator realizing it wasn’t Dante,
but a stranger that invaded their home months earlier… she directs her
rage at him and fights the monster with everything she has.</div>
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Tyberius Asante Character Interviews
What I learned doing this assignment is the ability to go deep inside the mind of the characters and understand what motivates them to do what they do and how they see the world. Even people that make the same decisions can do so for very different reasons. In some ways, both characters are fighting for their lives. The life being thrust upon them creates the conflict that puts them at odds.
QUESTIONS FOR YOUR PROTAGONIST
Hello Margot, thank you for speaking with me today…
Tell me about yourself.
a) Not much to tell really. I’m just a girl from a small town out west. I love my husband and want to make him the happiest man alive. You get out of a marriage what you put into it, right?
Why do you think you were called to this journey? Why you?
a) I mean life is a journey for everyone, right? Isn’t all life a journey?
You are up against <the antagonist=””>your husbands’ transformation from a man you loved dearly to something unrecognizable.
What is it about them that makes this journey even more difficult for you?</the>a) Yes, my husband’s accident has turned my life upside down. We had so many hopes and dreams. We would spend nights after… well, um… making love talking about all the things we wanted to do… Places we wanted to travel and all the children we wanted to have…all of that is … just gone.
In order to survive or accomplish this, you are going to have to step way outside of your box.
What changes do you expect to make and which of them will be the most difficult?a) I don’t really know how to answer that. How could anyone know what they would need to do to survive… they just fight to live. When my husband went through the accident and subsequent change it was like a part of me died. All of our hopes and dreams died when that happened. Sometimes you hear of tragic accidents that change people’s lives, but you never hear “how” they managed to pick up the pieces and try to put them back together. I think it is different for everyone. What was hardest for me was finding a REASON to live when all I wanted to do was die.
What habits or ways of thinking
do you think will be the most difficult to let go of?a) My reason for living and being was my husband and what we could accomplish together. That’s all gone now. It’s hard letting go of the dreams and hopes we both shared.
What fears, insecurities and
wounds have held you back?a) I didn’t grow up in a good household. My father drank a lot and I used to blame my mother for that. This situation has shown me that sometimes bad things can happen to people and all they can do is try to get through it until they learn a way to live again. I don’t blame my mother for my father’s poor choices and I learned to forgive my dad. He just couldn’t deal with the situation and turn to alcohol. I learned to forgive them both.
What skills, background or
expertise makes you well-suited to face this conflict or antagonist?a) A year ago, I would have said nothing! What skills do I need to survive a nightmare? NOTHING! I did what I had to do and that’s it! I’m still just surviving.
What are you hiding from the other characters? What don’t you want them to know?
a) I lost the love I had for my husband. I believe he hurt me worse than I ever thought I could be hurt. I didn’t want to ever believe that was possible. I was stubborn in my love, but even more so stubborn to relinquish the dreams I had for making a life with him. I couldn’t admit that to anyone… not Tiffany… she was so steadfast in loyalty to her brother, but she has no idea the hell of what I’ve endured. I envy her loyalty. I couldn’t afford loyalty when my sanity was slipping away from me.
What do you think of <the antagonist=””>Dante
now?</the>a) I realize he was more like my father than I ever realized. A victim of the choices he made, while unwittingly disintegrating the lives of those around him.
Tell me your side of this whole
conflict / story.a) What’s to tell? I found myself in an impossible situation where I had to fight to survive. It was not a day-to-day survival… it was minute to minute.
What does it do for your life if
you succeed here?a) It gives me a sense of purpose. A renewed sense of purpose and reason for living. I’m still piecing things together, but I hope to have a positive outlook on the future again. I hope…
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Ask any other questions about their character profile that will help you.
</div><div>QUESTIONS FOR YOUR
ANTAGONIST</div>
Hello Dante, thank you for coming in to speak with me today…
Tell me about yourself.
a) I am Dante Aramis Vicoli, the greatest motorcyclist in the history of the sport! No one has set the records that I have… check for yourself! You’re looking at the world record holder for fastest speed on a conventional motorcycle, boy… AND the Vicoli SC 1000, holds the world speed record for production supercharged motorcycles under 1000cc. They said the previous record-holder Bill Warner’s record of 300m/ph. “couldn’t be beaten in our lifetime,” but I knew it could be done and I PROVED it could be done! No one should ever say what can’t be done. Whenever I heard that it just pisses me off! It makes me want to FIND a way… and when I do, I want to see the look on their faces when I do what they thought couldn’t be done! No one better not ever tell me what can’t be done. I’ll be the first to make you look like an idiot when I do it!
Having to do with this journey,
what are your strengths and weaknesses?a) Weaknesses? All I have are strengths boy! I have a superior mind and superior attitude and that all I need to accomplish anything I put my mind to. No one can stop me! Life is a journey all right… I agree with that! Life is a mountain that we climb! And you want to know what we climb it? No, no, no… not because it’s there! Because we can!
Why are you committed to making the Protagonist fail? Or for a relationship movie, why are you committed
to making them change?a) This is a hard question for me. It breaks my heart that my sweet Margot had to deal with all of this. It’s not how I planned things…not what we planned for our lives. I didn’t want things to go like this. I wanted the best for her. This just kind of happened, you know? It wasn’t my fault!
What do you get out of winning
this fight / succeeding in your plan / taking down your competition?a) I don’t see it like that. What’s the matter with you asking me a question like that??? This isn’t about winning. She’s trying to survive and… in many ways, I’m fighting to survive. The accident did something to me. I don’t see things the way I used to. I don’t think so clearly. My body is reacting to the stuff coming in and out of my head, you understand? You get what I’m saying? It’s NOT about winning… it’s just about SURVIVAL. She is trying to survive and I’m trying to survive this thing. My head just doesn’t work so good anymore. My thoughts create a drive in me that I have to do this or that… no matter what this or that is, you know? I can’t stop myself… I have to do it… I have to succeed.
What drives you toward your mission/agenda, even in the face of danger, ruin, or death?
a) What is death? What is life? Life is death and death is just the way we succeed at life! Don’t you get it??? If you do something and are afraid of dying in the process, you’ll never succeed at anything! My mission is to succeed and if that means death, so be it! Life is nothing unless you achieve your purpose, and you don’t succeed by being a pussy! If something gets in your way, you go through it… a straight line beats a curve any day of the week and twice on Sunday, man! Go through… GO STRAIGHT THROUGH!!!!
What secrets must you keep to succeed? What other secrets do you keep out of fear/insecurity?
a) Well, sure everyone has secrets… yeah, I know everyone has them. Only my sister Tiffany knows about mine. That all happened a long time ago. It made me strong though. It made me very strong. And it made me want to make something of myself. I had to channel all that anger and hate into something positive. But where could all that hate and anger go after my accident? I cant ride again… my coordination is off, you see? I couldn’t even hold my bike up let alone ride it. I still have a lot of anger though… where can it go? It has to go someplace. My head feels like it’s going to explode.
Compared to other people like
you, what makes you special?a) I was born special, Jack! Wasn’t you listening to me??? I told you all that before! I’m Dante Aramis Vicoli… a legendary motorcyclist… the best in the world… the holder of not ONE, but TWO world records. And I was set to do third… when all of this happened. It’s not fair. Me and Margo had plans, man! Now what?
What do you think of <the protagonist=””>Margot?</the>
a) That’s my girl… we were made for each other. We had big dreams and the means to make it all happen. Why didn’t I wear my helmet that day? I blew it, man! I let her down. I killed our future!
Tell me your side of this whole
conflict / story.a) I’m done with this, man… this is bullshit! You just keep asking me these textbook questions. This isn’t a textbook… this is my life! My side… her side… what difference does it make, huh? Tell me that… what the hell difference does it make! I screwed up! Tiffany wasn’t there to save me this time. She couldn’t… nobody could.
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Tyberius Asante’s
PART 2 CHARACTER
PROFILE COMPONENTS“What I learned doing this assignment is think deeply about the characters and what makes them tick. I can better write their actions throughout the story by understanding their underlying motivations and flaws. The words and actions now have a more defined purpose.”
2. Fill in Part 2 of the character Profile for your two lead characters.
Margo Camilla Vicoli
What draws us to this character? Beautiful, young sweet Italian
American girl trying to escape a hurtful past. All she wanted was a loving husband and a chance to make a life for herself and create the family she never had.
Traits: Caring, loving, but insecure and needy desiring not to make the mistakes she believes her mother had that drove her father to alcoholism.
Subtext: Everything she does she tries to be the “perfect wife”
but she learns that there is no such thing and has to re-prioritize to find a new purpose in life.
Flaw: Insecurity. Seeing life in terms of black and white. Immature in wanting to blame someone or something for what happened to her parents.
There are no perfect people and villains, and heroes are often simply different sides of the same coin.
Values: Loyalty, family, love, nurturing spirit, stubbornness.Irony: Her husband’s qualities of determination and strong desire
to succeed are things that most attracted her becomes the thing she must
overcome in order to survive.· What makes this the right character for this role? She matures and learns how to become her best self through life-shattering adversity. The girl that blamed her parents for not being perfect finds out there is no such thing, but rather people who make choices given their life circumstances. She did everything she could to make the perfect life only to find that life turn into her worst nightmare and there was no one to blame. Life just happens and she has to make the best of it.
Dante Aramis Vicoli
What draws us to this character? Handsome, fun, witty, hardworking,
creative, and romantic. Dante has all the talent and drives to make it in any field, but he chose one of the most daring. He has the raw talent to become the best motorcyclist in the world as he is one with the machine.
He applies his creativity to everything he does, which what makes him an incurable romantic.
Traits: Sense of humor, creativity, and determination to prove he can be the best.· Subtext: Behind the bravado, he carries a secret fear of failure that drives him harder to make himself a success. Fear of failure is hidden by his need to take unnecessary chances.
Flaw: Careless and sometimes foolhardy to prove to everyone he is the best at what he does. He needs to prove to everyone what he doubts about himself. Cares about what everyone thinks.
Values: Hard-working, devoted to his wife and his dreams of
winning a racing title and revolutionizing the sport through a
technologically advanced engine.
Irony: The same determination he showed before his accident guided by his good nature, made him a relentless monster once unrestrained by morality,
love, and empathy.· What makes this the right character for this role? We have seen great intelligence and creativity used in a positive way. But when misused by the immoral becomes something terrible. Dante’s good nature seemingly disappeared after the accident leaving the evil genius to emerge and become the dominating force to be reckoned with.
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Tyberius Asante – Lesson 2 Character Profiles Part 1
“What
I learned doing this assignment is learning how to clearly define the main characters
and how to weave their journey into how the story takes shape.”2. Pick the type of role your Protagonist will play and give us a few sentences on how they will fulfill that role.
· Victim /Fighter: Margo is both victimized by the situation of her beloved husband’s brain trauma and the monster he seemingly becomes. She fights for not only her life but her sanity as her perfect world disintegrates before her eyes.
3. Pick the type of role your Antagonist will play and give us a few sentences on how they will fulfill that role.
· Predator: Dante Vicoli, suffers a brain trauma in a motorcycle accident and changes.
4. What other characters might be necessary?
· Minor roles: Tiffany Vicoli, FBI agent and sister-in-law to Margo, Dante’s older sister.
5. Pick your genre.
· Horror
6. Fill in whatever answers come to you about your lead character profiles.
Margo Camilla Vicoli
· Role in the story: Naïve, loving, devoted wife to Dante Aramis Vicoli who has made a life that revolves around her husband because that is what she believes will make a perfect marriage and family life.
· Age range and Description: mid 20’s, a beautiful Italian woman from a broken alcoholic family. Seeks normalcy through her husband and stable family life. Family means everything to her because she never had it, but she also doesn’t know how to create it. She sees her husband as a way to fill the longing for love and belonging to something greater than herself.
· Internal Journey: from being an idealistic romantic woman to a broken and shattered person that learns how to survive.
· External Journey: Beautiful idealistic housewife who is so beaten, broken, and disillusioned she will do everything she can to survive an impossible ordeal. In the end, she fights as hard for her life as she does her sanity.
· Motivation: Margo sees her marriage to Dante as an escape from the horrors she left behind growing up with an alcoholic father that abused her mother. She desperately tries to find normalcy with a loving husband in Dante (in which she does not even allow him to drink, but he doesn’t mind it to support her), which fulfilled all of her dreams… until his accident. What was once the man of her dreams now becoming something that makes her father look like Ronald McDonald.
· Wound: She witnessed the terrible abuse her mother endured for years and was determined to make a better life for herself.
· Mission/Agenda: Create a family with many children with her loving husband.
· Secret: she blamed her mother for her father’s alcoholism. Margo believed her father was a decent man that turned to alcohol because of her mother’s infidelity. It was the other way around. Margo comes to face the truth she blocked out through surviving her own ordeal.
· What makes them special? Her ability to adapt into a survivor while her world collapses.
Dante Aramis Vicoli
· Role in the story: Determined, creative, incurable romantic husband to Margo and professional motorcyclist. He desires to be the best to give himself and Margo everything they both want and deserve.
· Age range and Description: Late 20’s, handsome, physically fit Italian man also from a broken family due to domestic abuse. Remarkably close with his sister Tiffany as they both used their love of motorcycles and mechanics to escape their tragic home life. Dante also desires a loving family with lots of children. Margo is the love of his life and what he’d been searching for.
· Internal Journey: Competitive and string will win, but sometimes overzealous and careless. Places too much faith in his talent believing his life is charmed and nothing bad can happen to him.
· External Journey: From top motorcyclist in the world to something indescribable and horrifying.
· Motivation: Dante wants to make history by creating an engine that runs on less fuel but has twice the combustible power of regular motorcycle engines.
· Wound: He uses overconfidence and bravado to hide the insecurity he feels. He was physically abused as a child.
· Mission/Agenda: Show the world he’s the best at what he does and revolutionize the sport of professional motorcycling.
· Secret: Dante was sexually abused as a child before being placed in foster care with his sister Tiffany. It’s the only time his sister was not there to protect him.
· What makes them special? His inability to stop the transformation he loathes due to his brain trauma. He sees what is happening but is powerless to stop the victimization of Margo. Dante becomes a virtual prisoner of his body and mind.
Tiffany Allegra Vicoli
· Role in the story: Ambitious, smart, overly protective sister of Dante
· Age range and Description: Late 20’s, green eyes, beautiful, athletic Italian woman also from a broken family due to domestic abuse. Remarkably close with her younger brother. Tiffany has not been able to find the man of her dreams but meets someone during the course of the story.
· Internal Journey: Self-assured while externally reserved to externally outspoken in defense of her brother.
· External Journey: From solving FBI cases to solving a personal mystery of how the brother she knows and loves can become something unrecognizable to her.
· Motivation: Save the world from monsters.
· Wound: Unlike her brother who is secretly insecure but uses outward bravado to hide it. Tiffany is self-assured but is outwardly reticent in her interactions with people.
· Mission/Agenda: She also desires to protect people in ways she could not protect her brother. Her motivation to go into law enforcement was a fulfillment of this goal.
· Secret: Tiffany harbors deep guilt over not being there to protect her brother from being violated
· What makes them special? She has a keen perception of a person’s character and a deep sense of someone’s truthfulness. She can spot a liar a mile away.
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Tyberius Asante
Never completed a script
a completed script
Learn how to write a script and it is good enough to be sold and made into a movie.
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Tyberius Asante’s Transformational Journey
Who is your Hero and what is their Character Arc that represents a transformation?
Margo
Internal Journey: from being an idealistic romantic woman to a broken and shattered person desperate to survive.
External Journey: Beautiful idealistic housewife who is so beaten, broken, and disillusioned she will do anything she can to survive an impossible ordeal.
What are the Old Ways and New Ways?
Old Ways
Loving wife
Romantic
Sense of humor
Shy and lighthearted
Unsure of herself
New Ways
Broken and disillusioned
Realist
Traumatized
Outspoken
Fearless survivor