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I will keep the other writer’s ideas and writing confidential and will not share this information with anyone without the express written permission of the writer/owner. I will not market or even discuss this information with anyone outside this group.
3. I also understand that many stories and ideas are similar and/or have common themes and from time to time, two or more people can independently and simultaneously generate the same concept or movie idea.
4. If I have an idea that is the same as or very similar to another group member’s idea, I’ll immediately contact Hal and present proof that I had this idea prior to the beginning of the class. If Hal deems them to be the same idea or close enough to cause harm to either party, he’ll request both parties to present another concept for the class.
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Vincent Ovalle
I agree to the terms of this release form
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As a member of this group, I agree to the following:
1. That I will keep the processes, strategies, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class confidential, and that I will NOT share any of this program either privately, with a group, posting online, writing articles, through video or computer programming, or in any other way that would make those processes, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class available to anyone who is not a member of this class.
2. That each writer’s work here is copyrighted and that writer is the sole owner of that work. That includes this program which is copyrighted by Hal Croasmun. I acknowledge that submission of an idea to this group constitutes a claim of and the recognition of ownership of that idea.
I will keep the other writer’s ideas and writing confidential and will not share this information with anyone without the express written permission of the writer/owner. I will not market or even discuss this information with anyone outside this group.
3. I also understand that many stories and ideas are similar and/or have common themes and from time to time, two or more people can independently and simultaneously generate the same concept or movie idea.
4. If I have an idea that is the same as or very similar to another group member’s idea, I’ll immediately contact Hal and present proof that I had this idea prior to the beginning of the class. If Hal deems them to be the same idea or close enough to cause harm to either party, he’ll request both parties to present another concept for the class.
5. If you don’t present proof to Hal that you have the same idea as another person, you agree that all ideas presented to this group are the sole ownership of the person who presented them and you will not write or market another group member’s ideas.
6. Finally, I agree not to bring suit against anyone in this group for any reason, unless they use a substantial portion of my copyrighted work in a manner that is public and/or that prevents me from marketing my script by shopping it to production companies, agents, managers, actors, networks, studios or any other entertainment industry organizations or people.
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LESSON 3
Traits :gentle,curious,insecure, fearful ,fragile
subtext : invisible, silent on the surface and what is feeling ,the experiences and no understanding of what’s going on
Flaw : naive ,young ,fragile
Values:Family life and School
Irony: Gentle and unpredictable, fearful and domineering, silent and talkative
Fits the Role: Ideal character a young person from the suburbs and no experience of the paranormal
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My picks:
Protagonist- Is a victim the daughter of a museum curator.
Antagonist- Evil Mesopotamian demon
Other characters: Supporting,minor ,and some background characters.
Genre- Horror
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Is the victim of a well known Mesopotamian demon.
About A skinny 13years old booknerd.
Internal: Normal to total possession.Every once and a while her sweet voice emerges thru the guttural growls when she speaks with her mother.
External: Return to normal and finish her schoolwork.
Motivation: Time pressure hope seems lost for the 13year old.
Wound: Time will tell.
Mission: Find the cure and return to join the rest of the kids at school.
Agenda: Starts in the hospital but mom has a agenda for a excorism.
Secret: All done in secret.If the community learns of the demonic possesson the girl won’t survive it even with attempts of exorcism.
Special: She could be the first possession in this neighborhood.Time will tell.
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Hello everyone, I’m new to screenwriting ,and hope the 30-Day Screenplay will give me all the tools I need to start writing proper screenplays.
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1. That I will keep the processes, strategies, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class confidential, and that I will NOT share any of this program either privately, with a group, posting online, writing articles, through video or computer programming, or in any other way that would make those processes, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class available to anyone who is not a member of this class.
2. That each writer’s work here is copyrighted and that writer is the sole owner of that work. That includes this program which is copyrighted by Hal Croasmun. I acknowledge that submission of an idea to this group constitutes a claim of and the recognition of ownership of that idea.
I will keep the other writer’s ideas and writing confidential and will not share this information with anyone without the express written permission of the writer/owner. I will not market or even discuss this information with anyone outside this group.
3. I also understand that many stories and ideas are similar and/or have common themes and from time to time, two or more people can independently and simultaneously generate the same concept or movie idea.
4. If I have an idea that is the same as or very similar to another group member’s idea, I’ll immediately contact Hal and present proof that I had this idea prior to the beginning of the class. If Hal deems them to be the same idea or close enough to cause harm to either party, he’ll request both parties to present another concept for the class.
5. If you don’t present proof to Hal that you have the same idea as another person, you agree that all ideas presented to this group are the sole ownership of the person who presented them and you will not write or market another group member’s ideas.
6. Finally, I agree not to bring suit against anyone in this group for any reason, unless they use a substantial portion of my copyrighted work in a manner that is public and/or that prevents me from marketing my script by shopping it to production companies, agents, managers, actors, networks, studios or any other entertainment industry organizations or people.
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Vincent Ovalle
I agree to the terms of this release form July 17, 2023
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Week 3 Day 4 – Visual Reveals — BREAKING BAD
The scene plays out on a isolated road.The conflict is all internal and demands some dialogue.The entertainment value is the intrigue of what happened and what is going happen next?
What makes this scene great it’s a study in non-verbal visuals hooks.
The nine visuals revealed non verbally:
1-Where are we?
2-Why is a pair of pants ascending from the sky?
3-Who’s driving the out of control camper?
4-Why is he wearing a gas mask?
5-Why is he so nervous and driving erratic?
6-The anguished character just crashed What happens now?
7-After putting on his shirt what is he going to do?
8-Is the woman lying unconscious amid the tossed items inside the camper dead?
9-Why did he grab a weapon what is he getting ready for?
The confession.
To clear up all the guessing as you watch the scene we need more information.
Some of the reveals answered some questions and created new ones with the experience of watching the scene.As you wached the scene you are putting two and two together to find out the pair of pants were his,the gas mask has to do with their emotional condition that explains why he’s driving erratic and crashed.He’s running from something law enforcement.He could be a criminal.
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Week 3 Day 3: Take it to an Extreme – BRIDESMAIDS
The scene takes place in a bridal dress shop.The situation the ladies are going to pick the best dress for the wedding and bridesmaids.Eveything is normal as they entered the spacious shop,and greeted the shop owner.Except one of the girls expressed some body discomfort with a burp.They saw the first dress they all liked,but kept looking at others when they saw the price tag of eight hundred dollars.When they saw the second dress they described as pretty and sweet they became conscious of the heat.As the character first tried to carry the heavy sofa she then dropped down in exhaustion. Moment later she joined the others and disrupted the conversation with a series of violent vomit noises.The others looked on with concerned.She tried to explain by saying her stomach hurts.This is the main cause and effect chain reaction to the climax.On reflection one of the girls deduced it’s food poisoning from the chicken they ate..She denied it but released a loud fart .The shop owner freaked out and said everyone off the carpet.The first two made a mad dash to bathroom where one launched vomit directly in the toilet as the other climbed on the sink and relieved herself on the sink.Soon after another girl made a urgent trip to the bathroom and launched above the first girl who was face down on the toilet.The climax of the scene that introduced danger was the girl who had on a white dress and walked outside just as she could’nt control herself any longer, and gently laid down in the middle of the street and went to the bathroom as cars beeped.
What made this scene great was it was funny and had the structure of cause and effect in the main conflict .The escalation from normal to the extreme was when they introduced danger.Although they did’nt realize it at the moment they were all about to lose body function as they picked wedding dresses.How they expressed character on the edge was their inhibition to relieve themselves everywhere even with the threat of danger.
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Week 3 Day 2: Twists — THE MATRIX
The scene set-up .They are in a interview room two interrogators vs. the protagonist.
The scene goal they want information on a criminal mastermind by the code word Morpheus.So they can bring him to justice.
All the conflicts in this scene are internal.He must make a decision.The first is to cooperate in bringing a known terrorist to justice ,and they will wipe his slate clean and be given a fresh start.Thomas refused the deal ,and became combative,and offered his response he will give them the finger,and get a phone call.The boss put on his glasses and considered the deal. He told him he’s disappointed and asked”what good is a phone call if you are unable to speak?”The unexpected twist Thomas underwent a facial transformation that removed his mouth.He freaked out and stood up and flew into the corner in shock.Two henchman grabbed him and slammed him back on the table.As all three menacing characters stared down on him.The boss threatened him he will help them,and then put a metal scorpion on his chest that disappeared into his belly button.Then the twist it was all a dream Thomas woke up touched his mouth and dropped down on his bed as a phone call rang.
this scene is great in highlighting internal conflicts.The twist was set up by starting the scene in the middle of action.Snapped back into reality he touched his mouth and received a phone call.The twist changed the direction and meaning of the scene ,because he did’nt turn and kept the movie playing.I think the scene had interesting action and dialogue because of the interesting graphics.I never seen a mouth disappear on the face.
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Week 3 Day 1: Suspense — JAWS
Before the provocation the three sailors get in position.Then Hooper started to chum the waters with bloody,foul smelling fish.His temper lead to frustration and distracted that made him vulnerable to the shark.Moments later the massive shark appeared and swam very close to the boat.Hooper freaked and became dazed,but soon perked up,and told the captain inside the tiny cabin.The captain took a few steps to the front of the boat to see for himself.The movements of the waters soon exposed the shark.As it swam towards the boat.The captain quickly ordered the other salior to shut down the engines.This is the main confrontation of the scene.The sailor turned off the engines then climbed above to get a birdseye view of the situation,and when he saw the shark he went to the deck and yelled a twenty footer,but was quickly corrected by the captain as a twenty-five footer.This is the set-up for the climax.The excitement began as Hooper and the other character argue in disaray at the front of the boat.The captain put his plan in motion as the massive creature kept circling around the boat.the captain went inside the cabin to prepare the industrial strength spear gun to kill the shark,but was interrupted with a C.B. communication.As he started chatting away the threat of the shark grew stronger,and he became more distracted and withdrew further as started to lie.The other two sailors evacuated the front of the boat by walking down on a slight ledge by the side of the boat. The captain finished the call and loaded the spear gun and went to the front of the boat to confront the massive shark.As soon as they located the shark the captain ordered hooper to attach the end of the rope on the spear tip to a stacked column of heavy barrels.This is the exit hook.The shark exposed himself and the captain shot it and connected.the rope extended and released one of the heavy barrel at the end of the rope.The wounded shark disappeared in the water.
The excitement of the action made this scene emotional tense and suspenseful.From the moment they chummed the waters to attract the three ton shark it was filled with excitment from the raised questions.What will happen next? Will there be a accident and add another victim? Will the characters lose focus and become vulnerable to a surprise attack?Will the captain’s plan work? Will the little boat be able to take a hit from the three ton shark? I thought the scene was good because of the division among the characters to cause distractions ,uncertainty,vulnerabilities,and tense moments waiting for the response.This make them all vulnerable to a attack.The pay off could be the premise that a group of hunters set to find the killer shark that claimed two bodies,and no end in sight.Just wounded the creature.
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Week 2: Day 5 – Protag/Antag Relationship Scene — THE DARK KNIGHT
The scene plays out in a interview room behind a hidden mirror with other law enforcement on the other side of the hidden mirror. The battle of witss tarts Batman is trying to get the whereabouts of two lndiviuals as theJoker tried to recruit Batman .This is the scene arc can the joker recruit Batman to join forces against a powerful organization? The showdown continued. The Joker started by immediately trying to slowdown Batman’s physical assault by interjecting commentary on his strong tactics(that’s cold).Batmans goal is for specific information of the two he two indivuals.The Joker expanded Batman’s worldview by pitting Batman against the powerful organization .He told him their motivations. They wanted Batman gone so they can return to the way things use to be.This is the theme of the scene in life as one gets older and notice all the changes in society we all long to return to a simpler ,easier time.Batman revealed his one rule, but every chance the Joker gets to ridicule Batman he does it with his laughter. Batman then accused the Joker with the question Why do you want to kill me? “The joker objected, and continued his con by downplaying the differences and instead appeared to be more similar than different. The Batman andthe Joker against the world. A defiant Batman called him garbage and explains why the he killed for money. The Joker responded with the organization opinion of him as a freak. This is the climax of the scene. The Joker pitched to Batman and said” I need you right now”, and added the organization will cast him out like a leper. The then the Joker interjected morality and code to the conversation to appear regulated, and gave Batman a glimpse into the strategy they can used against the org’s vulnerability.”They are only as good as the world lets them be.”He handled any objections with the prediction of the outcome.” When chips are down” the powerful organization will eat each other . This is the (the oldest trick in the book to divide and conquer .After the pitch and glimpse of the strategy the Joker started to downplay himself to appear in a better light.He told Batman “I’m just ahead of the cuvre” This is the cliffhanger Batman is about to explode into a brutal assault with all the tremendous amount of built- up anger , but the Joker kept interrupting him with visions of the truth,but Batman continued his brutal assault. Now from this point on we have subtext every time Batman answered.For example when Batman answered “I’m considering it ” it could mean this current question and the Joker’s efforts. The exit cliffhanger at the end of the scene is when the Joker gave Batman the whereabouts of the two individuals (batman’s goal) ,and the ultimatum”you have to choose”.
The battle of wits was entertaining to watch as well as revealing a unknown aspect of both Batman and the Joker as they tried to outdo each other .Both are similar and different,but the scene goals were more important .I have to say Batman’s action was shocking to me I never saw Batman as brutal.
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Week 2 Day 4: Character Reveal – SPIDER-MAN
The scene plays out in the school’s cafeteria. Peter Parker sits alone at his table while the cafeteria full of students provided the backdrop. As Peter ate his lunch he started to experience weird phenomenon. His left hand magnetically picked up the fork. Perplexed he gave lite shake to throw the fork down ,but when that failed he streched away the fork away with his right hand the sticky spider web attached to it send the tray up in the air and landed on another tray in front of him. He desperately gave it a hard pull to bring back his tray,but the tray flew over him to hit the big guy Flash on his back. Peter turned around and saw the food all over the big guy’s clothes. As fash turned back to figure out what happened the entire cafeteria was focused on the accident. Peter made a fast dash to the door ,but with the tray attached to the web the big guy put two and two together and angrily followed Peter outside . Peter walked to his locker room in amazement of this strange power. The main confrontation is a physical fight.Other students in the hallway tried to explain to Flash that it was a accident as Peter stood in front of his locker and tried to avoid the fight, but the big guy put up his dukes and started to pace Peter’s movements .Then he threw a flurry of jabs that missed ,but the third jab missed Peter by a hair. Peter looked surprised and concerned. Then the big guy moved all the way back to the locker , and lunged at Peter with a whopping right hand Peter awakwardly folded his body backwards Flash missed and landed on the other side of the hall to switch places with Peter. The other students who looked on again pleaded to stop the fight, but with Flash’s next punch Peter performed a supernatural double backflip and when Peter both feet landed he was in control of his powers. This is the scene’s arc. In the beginning Peter didn’t understand his powers and now he does and is iin control. Peter now raised his dukes to defend himself. Flash threw one last punch and missed Peter grabbed his arm in fury and hit Flash with a short punch that send Flash back to the other side of the hall to end the fight. Everybody looked on in disbelief.
The powers was manifested as they ate lunch and Peter held on to his tray.The fight was the action that revealed to Peter he had supernatural powers that he did’nt control or understand at this moment. Peter and the students did’nt understand the supernatural powers ,but thru the fight only Peter gained that realization he can control the powers . The student still did’nt understand what was going on when they called Peter a weirdo and freak.
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Week 2 Day 3: Character Subtext #1 – GET OUT
The scene opens at a garden party. Chris and Rose start to meet the guest. Through a series of introductions Chris started to feel different and isolated from the other guests.The introductions were the confrontations. As they communicated they all used subtext weather they realized it or not through their facial expressions, behaviors,and physical behaviors. To totally conceal their attitudes,differences ,and likes and dislikes of way the other side communicated, or they can reveal it non-verbally.
Human emotions drives a person’s style of communicating.To outright communicated or use of non-confrontational methods. The shock value of the message also elicits subtext. This was a great scene to analyze because it exposed people’s worldview that opens them up to judgement.
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Week 2 Day 2: Characterization Scene — WHEN HARRY MET SALLY
The start of the scene are two long -time friends who meet up for a lunch date. A stare down triggers a what could’ve been moment. Her visualizations surface as she wonders if he ‘s still a womanizer,and regresses when she tells him she has no regrets, because she would’ve been processed as another score, but it’s obvious she still has some feelings for him, because she is visibly upset. She probes his state of mind and the possibility if she can change his ways to start a relationship with him, because she uses quantifiers all men and all woman type of statements. He makes his attitutes towards woman clear by commenting there is no reason to change because there is no complains with his performance. This is the main confrontation of the scene .The blanket statement that most woman have faked it leads to the demostration of faking it .He confidently response as the exception to the statement.This leads to a soft arugment.Subtext moves closer to the surface with half sentences and hand gesters to mean organism. She perceived something positive when she has a moment of forgetfulness.Then got the idea to convince him with the demonstration of a faked organism when she hesitated. She stopped talking and eating to demonstrated the faked organism. Her sounds and bodily touching draws the full attention of the patrons who look on in amazment.After the demostration she returns to eating her lunch, and as she waits for his response the onlookers continue to stare at them, and what can be considered a lite moment as the waiters takes one of the patron’s order she remarks “I’ll have what she is having.”
I think this was a great scene because it showed the interplay between the unconscious and conscience surfacing in the conversation as visualization, hidden desires, and possibilties probing.She was making efforts to test for any possibility for a future with him that characterized the way she communicated Her word choice and facial expressions.By all accounts it was entertaining and memorable scene to watch.
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Reply to Week 2 Day 1: Character Intros That Sell Actors — LOST intro of Jack.
We first see the lead on the scene hurt and confused without a idea what happened, but he continued to move with purpose. As the the view expanded we started to get the picture it was a plane crash. Some dead and many injured the lead ignored their screams for help along with warnings to don’t proceed any further. The lead without any concern for his well being moved closer to ground zero of the crash to help a man pinned down by one of the plane’s wheel. A frantic yell for help was heard in the background he immediately rushed to the woman’s side to learn she was in contractions .He showed medical training and leadership skills by delegating Her situation to someone else, and command a course of action in case the contraction were more than three minutes apart.Focused on the man trapped under the wheel .As he arrived he noticed one of the plane engine was running at full blast. As he was about to make a decision another man was pulled in by the powerful wind tunnel of the engine to produce a spectacular explosion.As everyone ducked for cover from the falling balls of fire the lead was asked what’s your name? Then we learned his name is Jack.
This scene was great because it introduced the lucky lead character in the mist of crisis. That characterized the lead under pressure so we get a sense of who he is.While hurt he ignored his condition for the greater good to help the others. It showed him as a cool character able to take command of others in time of crisis. He demonstrate his first aid training and leadership by delagating and recruiting others in the rescues. To end with a memorable line of dialogue when asked what’s his name in middle of a explosion .We learn it’s Jack.
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In the middle of the desert the mc (Morgan’s character), the defective (Brad’s character), and the prisoner (Keven’s character) are about to playout the climax . The mc walked closer to a mysterious box and opened and saw lots of blood.He ran in panic to the detective to warn don’t come near the box, and interrupted a stand- off at gunpoint between the detective and prisoner. The prisoner confessed that he entered his house and tried to perform a enactment that failed and ended in the taking of his wife’s head. With the warnings of the box and the confession the detective became distraught and repeated chants of denial He ignored his surroundings in deep thought.Still at gun point the prisoner murmured to himself as he observed the mc and the detective and in his final taunts revealed he killed the wife and a baby. This put the detective over the top ,and he killed and then emptied the gun on his head. To end in what some might call a satisfying ending.
The conclusion ended in irony with what the prisoner did to his family the detective ended the film with .In what some might say is a satisfying ending. The final line of dialogue is what triggered the detective over the top. Although it was pay- back it also showed the new status quo with the detective must now enter the court system and stand trial. The verdict will define what label he will have.
When writing screenplay you can insert irony, biblical references to make it a good read.
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I chose the 3:10 to Yuma Climax — Running to the train and final gunfight! scene.
As the authority were transporting the prisoner to Yuma.The prisioner’s helpers were in wait for a ambush. The train arrived the shootpout begun and the conflict escalated with the released of the cattle .In the mist of the confusion they managed to kill the guard and release the prisioner.The guard’s teenaged son looked on in disbelief.The prisoner was handed a gun. The mission accomplished the team expected to leave ,but the prisioner’s facial expression of disgust turned to anger signaled a different outcome. He flipped and killed his helpers. During the silence of the aftermath the son comes over to his dad’s body and listened to his dad’s final words. Inspired and full of anger the soncreated a surprised stand off with the prisioner that ends in the prisoner’s escape on the train.
What I’m learning is first of all the scene structure scene arc ,situation ,conflict ,pay off and set up and the emotional roller coaster is key for writing all the scenes.The battle in the third act is the highest peak.There must be lots of action as well as twists and turns. I noticed the logic and importance of showng the facial expression to convey the character’s emotions that leads to immediate and often surprising actions. Adding any dialogue that comes out of the action can also be used be used to swing the emotional roller coaster ride ,or continue the action.
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I chosed Act 2 TP: Rose refuses to give Chris the keys.
This is a good example for the turing point because it’s exciting. They reduce the protagonist to his lowest point with circumstances and provacations: his dog sick ,physical conflict with the brother ,rose control issues he becomes very emotional.Until he start to experience a manic depression moment ,and physically longues at the bro and falls down hard. Mom aggravates the situation with a conditioned hypnotic cue. Literally sends him to the lowest point.Now he must learn the lesson from act 1 to complete the change in the character arc, and then test iwhat he learned in the big confrontation of the climax.
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To create a inciting moment that propels us forward and delays the resolution until act 3 of the story we must set up the scene’s goal within the story’s goal. Start with the scene’s situation of eleven jurors trying to convince the one objection. Then do the action and dialogue in a chain reaction. From a simple argument that intensifies to a heated argument where jurors veer off the facts of the case and insert their own beliefs and attitudes and expose a flaw.Everything sets up the scene’s climax ,and raises the question and curiosity of the second vote. Did anyone’s initial decision change? Did it create any division among the jurors? Always end the scene in a cliffhanger that creates excitement of the next scene.
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Hello everyone my name is Vincent Ovalle ,and I hope I can learn enough in this Scene Mastery course to be able to write short films. I think I have a fun and exciting point of view that can help me write interesting screenplays. I’m eager to write my first screenplay.
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I learned to hook the viewer by starting the scene with interesting action. When they demonstrating their dangerous skills (zipline),and it raisied a couple of questions. Who are these guys dressed in (mask)?,and what are they doing? Then after the opening images set up the big confrontation in the middle of the scene by characterizing the antagonist as a evil person. The middle of the scene starts the main confrontation. The bad guys entered the bank and set the tone with guns blazing ,and with no regard for life. Expand the conflict on two fronts. The heists and the consolation of controlof the leader .Through crosses and double crosses the leader started emerge. We immersed deeper with the counter measures of the bank vault. Will they breach it? Are the y smart enough?
Intensify the big confrontation .The bank employee moved forward with no fear and shot back. Foreshadow with dialogue.The employee suggested a hidden organizations. When he said “do you have any idea who we are”?Now the climax of the scene. The bad guys are successful with the scene goal.As they wait to make their escape the unknown leader triple cross the third team member.The school bus crashed through wall ,and they started to load the bags of money.The team mate questioned the leader when he asked”what happened where are the rest of the guys”? Then the unknown leader took off the mask to reveal what we suspected all along with the sound of his voice that it’s theJoker.He completed the job by finishing off the fearless bank employee in spectacular fashion.
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Very comprehensive. I’m impressed
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All those ingredients were in the scene seamlessly.
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I agree the characterization and tone was really good.
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That’s good observations.
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The need has to be tied with the story goal journey. Both are in play.
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Like a non linear story where the viewer does ‘nt know who is the protagonist?
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Isn’t the first act about the premise of story, and raising the stakes is in the try and fails of act 2?