[Will Jennings]

Subject line: Will’s Credibility is Going Up!

What I learned doing this assignment is how far I have to go and how to take the correct course of action to succeed.

Unfortunately, I am rather new at writing movies and have zero credibility.

Currently, I am taking three ScreenwrittingU classes and, for the first time, learning strategies that can help me to compose scripts that will lead me to a new career.

[Will Jennings]

I am Will Jennings and I am new at this and have only written a few scripts that need massive overhauls. I hope to learn the assignment business and work to increase my credibility to get into this fascinating world of film. I have always had the dream of being a writer but until now have not found a serious course to turn my love of pictures into a reality.

[Will Jennings]

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[Will Jennings]

Subject Line: Will’s Intriguing Moments

My Vision: I will write movies that are extremely funny and entertaining and bring a sense of satisfaction and fulfillment to a world starving for true enjoyment.

What I learned from doing this assignment is how easy it is to bring out the intrigue that is already present in the outline.

Act 1

Superior position: The audience is aware that the two girls come from a fairyland castle are more powerful than humans and have a covert agenda to accomplish their mission.

Act 2

The girls find out the conspiracy that Brandi is in a crime family and start a scheme to alert the authorities.

Act 3

The girls blast back to fairyland mistaking with a human and unveil the mystery of their existence until the Queen sprinkles fairy dust and the unintended guest will never remember a thing.

Act 4

The gang enacts their covert agenda of bringing all of their thugs together to show them who is boss while the girls unleash the fairies and sprites to win the fight to the superior position of the audience.

[Will Jennings]

Subject line: Will’s Projects and Insights

An idea that you would like to create. Party Girl Sleuth. 5-10 Millon

A finished script. A British detective spoof. 1-5 Million

Tell us what you learned from the opening teleconference: An unknown world of lower-level producers who are actually willing to work with newbie script writers.

[Will Jennings]

Subject Line: Emotional Moments

My Vision: I will write movies that are extremely funny and entertaining and bring a sense of satisfaction and fulfillment to a world starving for true enjoyment.

What I learned from doing this assignment is how emotions are portrayed through the actions of the characters.

Act 1

Excitement: Abigail is excited when her impulsive and zany plan to throw a magical party for the uncool kids becomes a reality, and everyone is having a blast.

Courage: Gwendolyn must summon the courage to confront Brandi and her motorcycle gang when they threaten the party they organized for the uncool kids.

Act 2

Hidden Weakness: Abigail’s hidden weakness is revealed when she struggles to control her impulsiveness, leading to unintended consequences during their mission.

Bonding: Gwendolyn bonds with a shy and bullied girl at school, showing her kindness and helping her gain confidence.

Act 3

Emotional Dilemma: Gwendolyn faces an emotional dilemma when she has to decide whether to reveal her true identity from Fairyland to save the day or continue blending in with the Earthlings.

Success: Abigail feels a sense of success when she manages to bring muses and fairies from Fairyland to Earth, even though it comes with unexpected challenges.

Act 4

Emotional Dilemma: Brandi experiences an emotional dilemma as she starts to question her loyalty to her crime family and the consequences of her actions.

Hidden Weakness: Brandi’s hidden weakness is exposed when she realizes that she craves genuine friendship and love, which she has never truly experienced.

Distress: Brandi becomes distressed as her attempts to undermine the new girls’ efforts continue to fail, leading to frustration and anger.

[Will Jennings]

Subject Line: Will’s Reveals!

My Vision: I will write movies that are extremely funny and entertaining and bring a sense of satisfaction and fulfillment to a world starving for true enjoyment.

What I learned from doing this assignment is how to surprise and endear your audience with setups and reveals.

Question 1: What will you reveal?

For Gwendolyn:

Reveal: Gwendolyn’s true mission as an otherworldly entity sent to help Earth.

Subtext: She is not just a regular teen but a powerful being with a mission to promote kindness and empathy among Earth’s youth.

For Abigail:

Reveal: Abigail’s true mission as an otherworldly entity sent to help Earth.

Subtext: She may seem zany and impulsive, but she has a purpose to inspire people to enjoy their situations and get along with each other.

For Brandi:

Reveal: Brandi’s connection to a crime family and the extent of her influence.

Subtext: Her ruthless behavior stems from her upbringing and desire to gain respect, but she may have doubts about her actions.

Question 2: When will the reveal show up in the story?

For Gwendolyn and Abigail:

Reveal Timing: The reveal of their true mission should occur in Act 3 when they take a trip back to Fairyland to formulate a new plan. This revelation can be a turning point as they share their identities and discuss their purpose.

For Brandi:

Reveal Timing: The reveal of Brandi’s connection to the crime family should come as a major twist in the midpoint turning point of Act 2 when the girls find out about it. This revelation adds complexity to her character and the overall conflict.

Question 3: What setups need to be in place to have each reveal work?

For Gwendolyn and Abigail:

Setup: Throughout Acts 1 and 2, drop subtle hints about their unique abilities, such as their ability to bring muses and fairies from Fairyland. Show moments where their actions seem out of the ordinary or unexplainable.

For Brandi:

Setup: Foreshadow Brandi’s family background and her influence over the cool kids in Act 1. Hint at her manipulative behavior and her desire for absolute respect and control.

Question 4: Where in the story do those setups belong?

For Gwendolyn and Abigail:

Setup Placement: Hints about their true nature and abilities should be scattered throughout Act 1 and Act 2. These hints can be subtle moments of wonder or magic that go unexplained until the reveal in Act 3.

For Brandi:

Setup Placement: Foreshadow Brandi’s family background and her dominance over the cool kids in Act 1. Show instances of her manipulating others and establishing her as a formidable antagonist. The setup should culminate in the revelation in Act 2.

[Will Jennings]

Subject line: Will Jennings’ Character Action Tracks!

My Vision: I will write movies that are extremely funny and entertaining and bring a sense of satisfaction and fulfillment to a world starving for true enjoyment.

What I learned from doing this assignment is there are a myriad of actions your characters can bring to the party that make them irresistible.

Act 1: The girls are informed by their mother the Queen it is time to travel to Earth and begin the mission.

What actions could this character take here? Waving their arms about.

What actions could this character take in the future based on this beat? Laughing while waving their arms and mocking their overreaction.

Abigail PJ 1: Abigail is petrified of going to a place filled with lunatics. Gwendolyn: Camp! Are you crazy?

What actions could this character take here? Jumping up and down as two-year-olds.

What actions could this character take in the future based on this beat? Laughing while jumping around at their overreaction when Earth turns out to be not that dangerous.

PJ 2: The girls are sucked into a wormhole and whisked into space passing by stars and constellations.

What actions could this character take here? They act like they are surfing through the universe.

What actions could this character take in the future based on this beat? Act like surfing and sing a 60’s type song when they hit the beach.

Brandi AJ 1: Brandi is picked up by her mother in a Dodge Charger from a government building.

Deeper Layer: She just was released from juvenile hall for committing a series of misdemeanors.

What actions could this character take here? Brandi gets in the car and puts her feet up on the dash. Her mother instantly starts arguing.

What actions could this character take in the future based on this beat? Brandi laughing about pushing her mother’s buttons to drive her crazy.

Inciting Incident: The girls are introduced in school and a rude girl embarrasses them in front of the entire class.

What actions could this character take here? After another jibe by the mean girl, both twins flash the looser L sign and the crowd starts roaring.

What actions could this character take in the future based on this beat? People giving the loser sign behind the mean girl’s back.

Brandi AJ 2: Brandi is threatened with losing her status and just destroys and humiliates the twins to no end.

What actions could this character take here? Brandi’s cruelty is too much and the room starts booing her.

What actions could this character take in the future based on this beat? Brandi does not harass people in a large crowd again.

PJ 3: The girls realize this is not going to be a love feast and they will need to toughen up to be taken seriously.

Turning Point 1: The girls decide to throw a party for all the uncool kids and the bad girl shows up with her mother’s motorcycle gang.

What actions could this character take here? The girls freak out and ask Sir Daniel what are they supposed to do.

What actions could this character take in the future based on this beat? They ask Sir Daniel to have a defense plan ready at all times.

Brandi AJ 3: Riding on the back of a motorcycle, Brandi is hurling insults at anyone she recognizes.

What actions could this character take here? Showing her powerful membership in a motorcycle gang the uncool kids see that she is a force not to be reckoned with.

What actions could this character take in the future based on this beat? From now on Brandi wears a black leather menacing biker jacket to school to remind everyone of her status.

PJ 4: This is the final insult, and they respond by scaring off the motorcycle gang with flying drones. One has a trooper siren, another flashing cop lights, and yet another pretends to be a police helicopter.

Deeper Layer: The motorcycle gang thinks the swat team is headed their way and they thunder off to the complete delight of the uncool kids as they see that the girls controlling the drones.

What actions could this character take here? Realizing the twins came up with the zany plot to scare off the motorcycle gang using drones with sirens, has the entire party amazed at how cool they are.

What actions could this character take in the future based on this beat? They have decided to launch more get-togethers for the group to bond and become more secure against the badasses.

Act 2: The girls try contacting the authorities to assist.

Deeper Layer: The harder they try; it becomes obvious that the police and city hall are not interested in giving any protection from the gang.

What actions could this character take here? Gwendolyn’s quirky sense of humor comes up with they start calling network crime shows trying to get Brandi’s mom and her life of crime on America’s Most Wanted. They are turned down because she is not a big enough crook. Or, as they put it: strictly small potatoes.

What actions could this character take in the future based on this beat? Try selling the crime family’s history to smaller true crime shows after everything hits the fan.

Brandi and her mom: AJ 4: They begin to get reports that the twins are trying to turn up the heat and are amused at the newcomers.

What actions could this character take here? They start rewarding the informers with cases of beer, ball tickets, and bowling league invitations.

What actions could this character take in the future based on this beat? Brandi wants to try and bribe some of the uncool kids into her clique.

Turning Point 2 / Midpoint: The girls find out that Brandi’s mom is the leader of a crime family and they have put a lot of people in danger.

What actions could this character take here? They set up a 24-hour surveillance camera system around their house.

What actions could this character take in the future based on this beat? They ask for 24-hour surveillance from the jumbo tron back in Fairytale Land.

PJ 5: Sir Daniel assures them he will protect all the kids from any type of threat.

Deeper Layer: The girls find great comfort in knowing how skilled Sir Daniel is at reconnaissance and defense.

What actions could this character take here? They phone their mother and ask if they need more backup.

What actions could this character take in the future based on this beat? They demand 3 more knights and more sprites.

Act 3: They decide to take a trip back to Fairyland and figure out how to deal with this level of corruption.

PJ 6: As the girls are entertaining two school friends at their house, a pillow fight breaks out and the four of them cartwheel into the transporter room and are sucked into the one-way wormhole and blasted back to Fairytale Land.

Deeper Layer: The girls are frightened of what their mother the Queen will say when they arrive with two humans.

PJ 7: As they arrive in Fairytale Land, the Queen is waiting and sprinkles some fairy dust on the two guests so they will not remember anything of their adventure.

What actions could this character take here? With no worries about anyone hearing about their secret life, the girls go crazy showing all of the amazing things there are to do in this realm.

What actions could this character take in the future based on this beat? They show how to use the special toys to make fun of the mean people back on Earth.

Turning Point 3: Their new plan is to bring muses and fairies back to Earth to gather hard evidence against the bad guys and to end their reign of terror.

What actions could this character take here? The otherworldly creatures scour the city for police records or former court cases that have implications for Brandi’s crime family.

What actions could this character take in the future based on this beat? The muses and fairies are so successful that they start their own private investigation office that becomes the toast of the town.

AJ 5: The gang calls a meeting to decide how to get rid of the medaling interlopers.

The gang summons all their mobsters to the twins’ house to show them who is boss once and for all.

What actions could this character take here? Brandi sends her creeps out to toilet paper the homes of the uncool kids.

What actions could this character take in the future based on this beat? Brandi’s thugs ride around in cars pelting anyone they see walking around with eggs.

AJ 6: They decide to smash up the place.

Deeper Layer: Unknowingly, the thugs have destroyed their otherworldly toys and have left the twins defenseless.

What actions could this character take here? With the help of a time portal, the twins, the Lady, and the Knight simply reverse time, and the damage is erased. The house is as good as new.

What actions could this character take in the future based on this beat? Any intruders who enter the house are sent into suspended animation in the future.

PJ 8: With the help of Sir Daniel, a plan is formulated to attack the gang and defend their turf. A communication network is installed to direct all activities. New special otherworldly toys are ordered to be delivered from the other side.

What actions could this character take here? Everyone is briefed to expect the unexpected and be ready for anything.

What actions could this character take in the future based on this beat? Fairyland has assembled its own strike force team that is always on call and ready for action.

PJ 9: Invisible recognizance is carried out by the muses and fairies in city hall, the police station, lawyers’ offices, and the gang’s home.

Deeper Layer: The muses and fairies have collected a mountain of criminal evidence against the bad guys and delivered it to the state attorney’s office. They also hired powerful lawyers to schmooze the press.

What actions could this character take here? They manipulate the national press to the party and everything becomes a lot more tense as the local press looks like wimps and puppets to anything corrupt in the city.

What actions could this character take in the future based on this beat? Fairytale Land decides to set up a real news channel that is honest in this flea market of vultures.

Act 4 Climax: Everyone arrives at the motorcycle picnic at the same time. While in invisible mode, the muses jump on some of the bikes and ride off while everyone thinks the motorcycles are riding away with no riders. Immediately, the fairies and muses appear and disappear while punching out the bad guys until they freak out. The fairies light off so many fireworks that the entire police force shows up and arrests the gang.

Resolution: The gang is packed into a jail cell, strumming tin cups against the bars while singing blues tunes. As the gang members are pushed into the courtroom the following day, a mountain of evidence is presented, and they are charged with a ton of crimes. Brandi ends up back in reform school and gets beat up by anyone she wisecracks. The gang goes to prison and the girls are now the undisputed leaders of the new cool kids.

[Will Jennings]

Subject line: Will Jennings’ New Outline Beats!

My Vision: I will write movies that are extremely funny and entertaining and bring a sense of satisfaction and fulfillment to a world starving for true enjoyment.

What I learned from doing this assignment is how to connect cause and effect throughout the entire script.

Act 1: The girls are informed by their mother the Queen it is time to travel to Earth and begin the mission.

Abigail PJ 1: Abigail is petrified of going to a place filled with lunatics. Gwendolyn: Camp! Are you crazy?

PJ 2: The girls are sucked into a wormhole and whisked into space passing by stars and constellations.

Brandi AJ 1: Brandi is picked up by her mother in a Dodge Charger from a government building.

Deeper Layer: She just was released from juvenile hall for committing a series of misdemeanors.

Inciting Incident: The girls are introduced in school and a rude girl embarrasses them in front of the entire class.

Brandi AJ 2: Brandi is threatened with losing her status and just destroys and humiliates the twins to no end as the class is roaring.

PJ 3: The girls realize this is not going to be a love feast and they will need to toughen up to be taken seriously.

Turning Point 1: The girls decide to throw a party for all the uncool kids and the bad girl shows up with her mother’s motorcycle gang.

Brandi AJ 3: Riding on the back of a motorcycle, Brandi is hurling insults at anyone she recognizes.

PJ 4: This is the final insult, and they respond by scaring off the motorcycle gang with flying drones. One has a trooper siren, another flashing cop lights, and yet another pretends to be a police helicopter.

Deeper Layer: The motorcycle gang thinks the swat team is headed their way and they thunder off to the complete delight of the uncool kids as they see that the girls controlling the drones.

Act 2: The girls try contacting the authorities to assist.

Deeper Layer: The harder they try; it becomes obvious that the police and city hall are not interested in giving any protection from the gang.

Brandi and her mom: AJ 4: They begin to get reports that the twins are trying to turn up the heat and are amused at the newcomers.

Turning Point 2 / Midpoint: The girls find out that Brandi’s mom is the leader of a crime family and they have put a lot of people in danger.

PJ 5: Sir Daniel assures them he will protect all the kids from any type of threat.

Deeper Layer: The girls find great comfort in knowing how skilled Sir Daniel is at reconnaissance and defense.

Act 3: They decide to take a trip back to Fairyland and figure out how to deal with this level of corruption.

PJ 6: As the girls are entertaining two school friends at their house, a pillow fight breaks out and the four of them cartwheel into the transporter room and are sucked into the one-way wormhole and blasted back to Fairytale Land.

Deeper Layer: The girls are frightened of what their mother the Queen will say when they arrive with two humans.

PJ 7: As they arrive in Fairytale Land, the Queen is waiting and sprinkles some fairy dust on the two guests so they will not remember anything of their adventure.

Turning Point 3: Their new plan is to bring muses and fairies back to Earth to gather hard evidence against the bad guys and to end their reign of terror.

AJ 5: The gang calls a meeting to decide how to get rid of the medaling interlopers.

The gang summons all their mobsters to the twins’ house to show them who is boss once and for all.

AJ 6: They decide to smash up the place.

Deeper Layer: Unknowingly, the thugs have destroyed their otherworldly toys and have left the twins defenseless.

PJ 8: With the help of Sir Daniel, a plan is formulated to attack the gang and defend their turf. A communication network is installed to direct all activities. New special otherworldly toys are ordered to be delivered from the other side.

PJ 9: Invisible recognizance is carried out by the muses and fairies in city hall, the police station, lawyers’ offices, and the gang’s home.

Deeper Layer: The muses and fairies have collected a mountain of criminal evidence against the bad guys and delivered it to the state attorney’s office. They also hired powerful lawyers to schmooze the press.

Act 4 Climax: Everyone arrives at the motorcycle picnic at the same time. While in invisible mode, the muses jump on some of the bikes and ride off while everyone thinks the motorcycles are running with no riders. Immediately, the fairies and muses appear and disappear while punching out the bad guys until they freak out. The fairies light off so many fireworks that the entire police force show up and arrest the gang.

Resolution: The gang is packed into a jail cell, strumming tin cups against the bars while singing blues tunes. As the gang members are pushed into the courtroom the following day, the mountain of evidence is presented, and they are charged with a ton of crimes. Brandi ends up back in reform school and gets beat up by anyone she sasses. The gang goes to prison and the girls are now the undisputed leaders of the new cool kids.

[Will Jennings]

Subject line: Will Jennings’ Beat Sheet – Draft 1

My Vision: I will write movies that are extremely funny and entertaining and bring a sense of satisfaction and fulfillment to a world starving for true enjoyment.

What I learned from doing this assignment is how to bring different perspectives that make the story so much deeper and interesting.

Genre: Comedy

Act 1: The girls are informed by their mother the Queen it is time to travel to Earth and begin the mission.

Abigail PJ 1: Abigail is petrified of going to a place filled with lunatics. Gwendolyn: Camp! Are you crazy?

PJ 2: The girls are sucked into a wormhole and whisked into space passing by stars and constellations.

Brandi AJ 1: Brandi is picked up by her mother in a Dodge Charger from a government building.

Deeper Layer: She just was released from juvenile hall for committing a series of misdemeanors.

Inciting Incident: The girls are introduced in school and a rude girl embarrasses them in front of the entire class.

Brandi AJ 2: Brandi is threatened with losing her status and just destroys and humiliates the twins to no end as the class is roaring.

PJ 3: The girls realize this is not going to be a love feast and they will need to toughen up to be taken seriously.

Turning Point 1: The girls decide to throw a party for all the uncool kids and the bad girl shows up with her mother’s motorcycle gang.

Brandi AJ 3: Riding on the back of a motorcycle, Brandi is hurling insults at anyone she recognizes.

PJ 4: This is the final insult, and they respond by scaring off the motorcycle gang with flying drones. One has a trooper siren, another flashing cop lights, and yet another pretends to be a police helicopter.

Deeper Layer: The motorcycle gang thinks the swat team is headed their way and they thunder off to the complete delight of the uncool kids as they see the girls controlling the drones.

Act 2: The girls try contacting the authorities to assist.

Deeper Layer: The harder they try; it becomes obvious that the police and city hall are not interested in giving any protection from the gang.

Brandi and her mom: AJ 4: They begin to get reports that the twins are trying to turn up the heat and are amused at the newcomers.

Turning Point 2 / Midpoint: The girls find out that Brandi’s mom is the leader of a crime family and they have put a lot of people in danger.

PJ 5: Sir Daniel assures them he will protect all the kids from any type of threat.

Deeper Layer: The girls find great comfort in knowing how skilled Sir Daniel is at reconnaissance and defense.

Act 3: They decide to take a trip back to Fairyland and formulate a strategy against such fantastic odds.

PJ 6: As the girls are entertaining two school friends at their house, a pillow fight breaks out and the four of them cartwheel into the transporter room and are sucked into the one-way wormhole and blasted back to Fairytale Land.

Deeper Layer: The girls are frightened of what their mother the Queen will say when they arrive with two humans.

PJ 7: As they arrive in Fairytale land the Queen is waiting and sprinkles some fairy dust on the two guests so they will not remember anything of their adventure.

Turning Point 3: They decide to bring muses and fairies back to Earth to gather evidence against the bad guys and to end their reign of terror.

AJ 5: The gang calls a meeting to decide how to get rid of the medaling interlopers.

The gang summons all their mobsters to the twins’ house to show them who is boss once and for all.

AJ 6: They decide to smash up the place.

Deeper Layer: The thugs have destroyed their otherworldly toys and have left the twins defenseless.

Act 4 Climax: Everyone arrives back from Fairyland at the same time. Immediately, the fairies and muses appear and disappear while punching out the bad guys until they freak out and split.

Resolution: The gang goes to prison and the girls are now the undisputed leaders of the new cool kids.

[Will Jennings]

Subject line: Will Jennings’ Deeper Layer!

My Vision: I will write movies that are extremely funny and entertaining and bring a sense of satisfaction and fulfillment to a world starving for true enjoyment.

What I learned from doing this assignment is how this exercise brings to life unrealized thoughts that would have never been dreamed up without this structure.

Surface Layer: Two British girls have arrived to challenge the cool kids for the social control of the junior high school.

Deeper Layer: The girls are on a secret mission from a mystical land to bring a little kindness to a group of kids getting kicked around by bullies.

Major Reveal: During a pillow fight at the girl’s house, the four of them cartwheel into the transporter room and are sucked into the wormhole and blasted back to Fairytale Land.

Influences Surface Story: Since the girls are so much more mature and intelligent than their classmates, they struggle to act human to avoid blowing their cover. The classmates believe their suaveness is because they are from England.

Hints: Supernatural things were constantly happening whenever the girls started playing with their cell phones or tablets. People’s hair started changing colors and the bad kids would suddenly appear in ridiculous costumes in the blink of an eye.

Changes Reality: When the twins and their two friends see each other’s worlds, they see how a small thing like simple kindness can bring so much happiness to everyone’s life.

Beginning: The girls are informed by their mother the Queen it is time to travel to Earth and begin the mission.

Inciting Incident: The girls are introduced in school and a rude girl embarrasses them in front of the entire class. They realize they are a big threat to bad-ass girl.

Turning Point 1: The girls decide to throw a party for all the uncool kids and the bad girl shows up with her mother’s motorcycle gang.

Act 2: The girls try contacting the authorities to assist.

Turning Point 2 / Midpoint: The girls find out that Brandi’s mom is the leader of a crime family and they have put a lot of people in danger.

Act 3: They take a trip back to Fairyland to formulate a new plan against such fantastic odds. During a pillow fight at the girl’s house, the four of them cartwheel into the transporter room and are sucked into the wormhole and blasted back to Fairytale Land.

Turning Point 3: They bring muses and fairies back to Earth to gather evidence against the crooks.

Act 4 Climax: The gang summons all their mobsters to the twins’ house to show them who is boss once and for all. The fairies and muses appear and disappear while punching out the bad guys until they split.

Resolution: The gang goes to prison and the girls are now the undisputed leaders of the new cool kids. When the twins and their two friends see each other’s worlds, they see how a small thing like simple kindness can bring so much happiness to everyone’s life.

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[Will Jennings]

Subject line: Will Jennings’ Character Structure

My Vision: I will write movies that are extremely funny and entertaining and bring a sense of satisfaction and fulfillment to a world starving for true enjoyment.

What I learned from doing this assignment is how the antagonist has a completely different timeline of events than the protagonist.

2. Start with the Protagonist and your source material. Create a beginning, middle, and end of the character’s story.

Dual Protagonists (The Twin Girls)

Beginning: The girls are informed by their mother the Queen; it is time to travel to Earth and begin the mission.

Middle: The girls find out that Brandi’s mom is the leader of a crime family and they have put a lot of people in danger.

End: The gang summons all their mobsters to the twins’ house to show them who is boss once and for all. The fairies and muses appear and disappear while punching out the bad guys until they split.

3. Add the rest of the structure to the characters in the script. Try to get to the point as we’ve done in the Iron Man example above.

Beginning: The girls are informed by their mother the Queen it is
time to travel to Earth and begin the mission. <div>

Inciting Incident: The girls are introduced in school
and a rude girl embarrasses them in front of the entire class.

Turning Point 1: The girls decide to throw a party
for all the uncool kids and the bad girl shows up with her mother’s
motorcycle gang.

Act 2: The girls try contacting the authorities to assist.

Turning Point 2 / Midpoint: The girls find out that
Brandi’s mom is the leader of a crime family and they have put a lot of
people in danger.

Act 3: They take a trip back to Fairyland to formulate a new plan
against such fantastic odds.

Turning Point 3: They bring muses and fairies back to Earth to
gather evidence against the crooks.

Act 4 Climax: The gang summons all their mobsters to the twins’ house to
show them who is boss once and for all. The fairies and muses appear and
disappear while punching out the bad guys until they split.
Resolution: The gang goes to prison and the girls are now the
undisputed leaders of the new cool kids.

4. Repeat the process with your Antagonist. (Brandi)

Beginning: Having grown up with the criminal element of Mom and Dad, taking advantage of ruling the school was a natural progression.

Middle: Brandi is the big girl on the junior high campus, and you better understand it or else.

End: Mom and Dad end up in the slammer while Brandi goes back to juvenile detention to cool her heels.

Beginning: Having grown up with the criminal element of Mom and Dad
ruling the school was a natural.
Inciting Incident: Having been tossed into juvenile hall for a few
transgressions, Brandi transforms into a major tough chick. </div>

Turning Point 1: Two popular twins from England enlist in their class
and they must be immediately publicly put down to show her authority.

Act 2: Brandi learns the twins are having a major bash and her
clique is not invited.

Turning Point 2 / Midpoint: Brandi is the big girl on the junior
high campus, and you better understand it or else.

Act 3: The threat of losing the most popular girl status causes
Brandi to get Mom and Dad and the gang involved to level the playing
field.

Turning Point 3: The gang shows up at the twins’ house smashes all
the out-of-this-world technical toys and leaves them defenseless.

Act 4 Climax: The gang summons all their mobsters to the twins’ house to
show them who is boss once and for all. The fairies and muses appear and
disappear while punching out the bad guys until they split.
Resolution: The gang goes to prison and the girls are now the
undisputed leaders of the new cool kids.

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[Will Jennings]

Subject Line: Will Jennings Supporting Characters

My Vision: I will write movies that are extremely funny and entertaining and bring a sense of satisfaction and fulfillment to a world starving for true enjoyment.

What I learned from doing this assignment is how the background and supporting characters bring so much fun to the party.

Tell us your background characters:

· Alisa, the head fairy

· 3 Sprites

· Miss Marion, the teacher

· Harley, the boy fairy

· Queen

· Chaz, Brandi’s boyfriend

· Uncle Wally, You don’t want to know about this guy

· Motorcycle gang members – Poison, Tequila, and Margarita

· Student 1 and 2

· Classmate 1 and 2

· Secretary

· Principal

· Jailer

· Brandi’s clique lackeys

Focusing on those supporting characters, fill in the basic profile for each.

Support 1:

Name: Evelyn a Fairyland Lady-in-Waiting

Role: Legal guardian to the twins

Main purpose: To help the girls protect their identity
and advise them on the mission.

Value: To be a big sister and an inspiration in giving
kindness and hope in a teenage world of angst.

Support 2:

Name: Sir Daniel a Fairyland Knight-in-Armor

Role: Legal guardian to the twins

Main purpose: To protect the twins from any earthly danger
on orders from the Queen.

Value: When the going gets tuff, he makes all defensive
and tactical decisions.

Support 3:

Name: Brandi’s Mom

Role: Leader of the motorcycle gang and big-time badass.

Main purpose: To corrupt everyone into doing bad things
for weird pleasure.

Value: She is the driving force that shuts down the development
of the good force.

Support 4:

Name: Brandi’s Dad

Role: A former cop who got fired for taking too many
bribes, now is a rent-a-cop.

Main purpose: To find new scams to steal money while supporting
the gang.

Value: Having criminal connections, he can influence
any public official.

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Subject Line: Will Jennings Character Profiles Part 2

My Vision: I will write movies that are extremely funny and entertaining and bring a sense of satisfaction and fulfillment to a world starving for true enjoyment.

What I learned from doing this assignment is the difficulty of bringing out the hidden feelings and emotions of your characters.

Gwendolyn

Character Profile

Role in the Story: Dual Protagonist

Age range and Description: Teens

Core Traits: Spirited, Cheerful, Loyal, Sarcastic

Motivation:

Want: To make oppressed girl’s lives better.

Need: To be everyone’s best friend.

Wound: Having strict parental control, she wonders if she can ever loosen up.

Likability: She’s nice, everyone loves her.

Relatability: They all crave her never-failing loyalty.

Empathy: Her quirky sense of humor is out there but a lot of fun.

Character Subtext: She hides behind her sarcastic wit due to her lack of confidence.

Character Intrigue: Sent on a mission to help earthlings from her Queen mother in Fairyland.

Flaw: Undervalues herself – She never sees her own attributes. She always downplays her intelligence and never claims credit and can never say “no.”

Values: She’s the ultimate team player, the one who is always ready to lend a hand.

Character Dilemma: She is the local tomboy who secretly wants to be the junior prom queen.

Abigail

Character Profile

Role in the Story: Dual Protagonist

Age range and Description: Teens

Core Traits: Meddling, Impulsive, Undisciplined, Fun-loving.

Motivation:

Want: To make oppressed girl’s lives better.

Need: To have her enchanting stardust land on everyone.

Wound: Having little parental control, her parents loved her spontaneity and let her inspire other children into mischief. Thanks a lot!

Likability: Her meddling is fun but annoying.

Relatability: Her zany antics are a riot to watch.

Empathy: A hippie chick stuck in today’s world of complete losers.

Character Subtext: She tries to hide the fact that she is completely impulsive and rarely thinks before she speaks and sometimes hurts feelings.

Character Intrigue: Sent on a mission to help earthlings from her Queen mother in Fairyland.

Flaw: She is meddling and uncontrollably drawn to interfere, regardless of the wishes of her victims.

Values: She is sincere and not conniving because it is so much easier to be honest and truthful.

Character Dilemma: She fears showing her serious and intelligent side because of her zany and crazy behavior.

Brandi

Character Profile

Role in the Story: Antagonist

Age range and Description: Teens

Core Traits: Intolerant, Short-tempered, Egotistical, Arrogant.

Motivation:

Want: To have everyone put her on a pedestal.

Need: To gain complete respect from each and every one of the lesser people or else.

Wound: I was raised by two idiots without any sense of morality and my future looks even worse. I’m doomed!

Likability: Big girl on campus and don’t you forget it.

Relatability: Follow my lead if you want to stay on top.

Empathy: She survived her parents and still made juvenile detention parole.

Character Subtext: She is constantly plotting to get things done. She sees no need to change her abrupt behavior for political correctness.

Character Intrigue: Conspiracies: She is from a family that has roots in organized crime and everyone fears them.

Flaw: Her Overconfidence turns a lot of people off. But no matter, life is too short to worry about the little people.

Values: This is a woman who is always confident and constantly knows where she is going. She comes up with a plan and makes it happen.

Character Dilemma: She thrives on accomplishing her goals and agendas and fights off any feelings of emotional guilt.

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Subject Line: Will Jennings: Character Profiles Part 1

My Vision: I will write movies that are extremely funny and entertaining and bring a sense of satisfaction and fulfillment to a world starving for true enjoyment.

What I learned from doing this assignment is developing big-time characters is a ton of work, but worth it.

Gwendolyn / Abigail

The High Concept: Two young princesses come from a Fairy Tale World to make Earth a better place. Whatever they envision on their cell phones and tablets, comes to life.

This character’s journey: Internal Journey: From scared stiff to skillful and ingenious.

External Journey: From little daughters to influential companions

The Actor Attractors for this character:

Lead Character Name: Gwendolyn

Role: Dual Protagonist

What about this role would cause an actor to want to be known for it?

A person from another world who is the most loyal of friends and with a wide grin, she likes everyone, and the world likes her right back.

What makes this character one of the most interesting characters in your story?

She is the underdog and people empathize with her. Audiences root for her happy ending.

What are the most interesting actions the Lead could take in the script?

She uses her other-worldly tablet to fly drones to scare off a motorcycle gang. Causing the antagonist to have major car trouble that looks like a smoke bomb went off.

How can you introduce this role in a way that could sell it to an actor?

Showing her the daughter of a Queen in a magical land with sprites and fairies blasting through a wormhole toward planet Earth.

What could be this character’s emotional range?

An optimist who urges everyone on to victory. She is cooperative and a true team player. Using her sarcastic wit, no matter what predicament she encounters, she always finds something to laugh about.

What subtext can the actor play?

She is clearly much more intelligent than her earthly counterparts and uses persuasion to enable them to follow her inspiration.

What’s the most interesting relationships this character can have?

Her bond with her twin sister is a real us against the world scenario. Using her paranormal powers against the antagonist is a hoot in the hopes of reforming this egomaniac.

How will this character’s unique voice be presented?

She believes in being upbeat, although has too sharp a tongue, and is always going for the gusto in life. She helps her friends but does not stop living for their sake especially if they are undeserving.

What could make this character special and unique?

Always quick with a sarcastic joke, she’s the life of the party and can pull anyone out of a downer mood.

Lead Character Name: Abigail

Role: Dual Protagonist

The Actor Attractors for this character:

What about this role would cause an actor to want to be known for it?

A fun-loving person who only makes decisions with her emotions that have nothing to do with logic.

What makes this character one of the most interesting characters in your story?

She makes the experience worthwhile in her zany, high-spirited way.

What are the most interesting actions the Lead could take in the script?

Traveling through the universe with planets, stars, and galaxies flying past. She uses her supernatural toys to help the oppressed while defeating the cruel people.

How can you introduce this role in a way that could sell it to an actor?

Showing her the daughter of a Queen in a magical land with sprites and fairies blasting through a wormhole toward planet Earth.

What could be this character’s emotional range?

Highly emotional, wild, and zany and never thinks before she acts. If you don’t jump on her bandwagon, she will tell you to your face you are a fuddy-duddy.

What subtext can the actor play?

She is clearly much more intelligent than her earthly counterparts and uses persuasion to enable them to follow her inspiration.

What’s the most interesting relationships this character can have?

Her bond with her twin sister is a real us against the world scenario. Always conjuring wild schemes to overcome the actions of the antagonist.

How will this character’s unique voice be presented?

Wild thoughts that come out of nowhere. Amazing insights that are astonishing.

What could make this character special and unique?

She is a trendsetter and is slightly eccentric. She is inclined to exaggerate.

Lead Character Name: Brandi

Role: Antagonist

The Actor Attractors for this character:

What about this role would cause an actor to want to be known for it?

The love of playing the bad guy who attempts to steal the show from the protagonists.

What makes this character one of the most interesting characters in your story?

She is a workaholic to promote her agenda. She is very arrogant and is always right, just ask her.

What are the most interesting actions the Lead could take in the script?

She has a frightening stare that demands fear and respect. She is constantly telling people what to do and will lose her marbles if they do not obey.

How can you introduce this role in a way that could sell it to an actor?

When the twins are introduced before the classroom for the first time, she cracks British royalty jokes that have the entire class roaring with laughter.

What could be this character’s emotional range?

Mean, self-righteous, abusive, manipulative, and narcissistic.

What subtext can the actor play?

A tone of voice and a look that says, Get with the program or you be out of the cool group pronto.

What’s the most interesting relationships this character can have?

Her dominance over the girls in the clique she controls. Her absolute war with the goody-goody twins that are new at the school.

How will this character’s unique voice be presented?

Cold-hearted barbs that hit like a bucket of ice water in the face.

What could make this character special and unique?

No one in the tri-state area demands this much attention and with her supremacy gets it.

Gwendolyn

Role in the Story: Dual Protagonist

Age range and Description: Teens

Core Traits: Spirited, Cheerful, Loyal, Sarcastic

Motivation; Want/Need:

Want: To make oppressed girl’s lives better.

Need: To be everyone’s best friend.

Wound: Having strict parental control, she wonders if she can ever loosen up.

Likability, Relatability, Empathy:

Likability: She’s nice, everyone loves her.

Relatability: They all crave her never-failing loyalty.

Empathy: Her quirky sense of humor is out there but a lot of fun.

Abigail

Role in the Story: Dual Protagonist

Age range and Description: Teens

Core Traits: Meddling, Impulsive, Undisciplined, Fun-loving.

Motivation; Want/Need:

Want: To make oppressed girl’s lives better.

Need: To have her enchanting stardust land on everyone.

Wound: Having little parental control, her parents loved her spontaneity and let her inspire other children into mischief. Thanks a lot!

Likability, Relatability, Empathy:

Likability: Her meddling is fun but annoying.

Relatability: Her zany antics are a riot to watch.

Empathy: A hippie chick stuck in today’s world of baloney sandwiches.

Brandi

Role in the Story: Antagonist

Age range and Description: Teens

Core Traits: Intolerant, Short-tempered, Egotistical, Arrogant.

Motivation; Want/Need:

Want: To have everyone idealize her.

Need: To gain complete respect from each and every one of the lesser people or else.

Wound: I was raised by two idiots without any sense of morality and my future looks even worse. I’m doomed!

Likability, Relatability, Empathy:

Likability: Big girl on campus and don’t you forget it.

Relatability: Follow my lead if you want to stay on top.

Empathy: She survived her parents and still made juvenile detention parole.

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Will Jennings: Likability/Relatability/Empathy

My Vision: I will write movies that are extremely funny and entertaining that bring a sense of satisfaction and fulfillment to a world starving for true enjoyment.

What I learned from doing this assignment is how to fool the audience into believing your characters are somewhat likable when in reality they are trash.

Brainstorm one or more ways you can present your Protagonist through each of these:

Likability:
The protagonist cheers up a kid who was chastised and humiliated by a cool
clique member. Within a few minutes, the protagonist transforms a sad teen
into laughter and happiness. <div>

Relatability:
As a motorcycle gang invades their neighborhood party, they use drones that
sound like police helicopters to force the gang to speed away to the
delight of the party members.

Empathy:
The twins march into the school principal’s office and demand the abusive
actions of the cool clique be stopped. The principal and secretary laugh
at their request and shove them out the door.

Just to get the experience, give us one or more ways that your Antagonist could be presented through each of these:

Likability:
The bad girl relentlessly mocks the nerdy kids to the amusement of the
cool clique.
Relatability:
To keep their status in the cool clique, the members fall in line with
undying respect for their leader. </div>

Empathy:
Seeing that the antagonist grew up with some seriously damaged parents, the
clique members realize they are damaged goods themselves and can only hope
their lives don’t end in complete and total tragedy.

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Will Jennings: Character Intrigue

My Vision: I will write movies that are extremely funny and entertaining that bring a sense of satisfaction and fulfillment to a world starving for true enjoyment.

What I learned from doing this assignment is how to bring out their hidden personality traits to develop the characters’ depth.

Character Name: Gwendolyn

Role: Dual Protagonist

Hidden agendas: Sent on a mission to help earthlings from her Queen mother in Fairyland.

Secret Identity: An otherworldly entity that is from a world that is far more advanced than Earth.

Character Name: Abigail

Role: Dual Protagonist

Hidden agendas: Sent on a mission to help earthlings from her Queen mother in Fairyland.

Secret Identity: An otherworldly entity that is from a world that is far more advanced than Earth.

Character Name: Brandi

Role: Antagonist

Conspiracies: She is from a family that has roots in organized crime and everyone fears them.

Unspoken Wound: Having been raised by two pathetic people, she is demonstrating narcissistic tendencies that will inflict deep emotional pain on all around her for the rest of their lives.

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Will Jennings: Subtext Characters

My Vision: I will write movies that are extremely funny and entertaining that bring a sense of satisfaction and fulfillment to a world starving for true enjoyment.

What I learned from doing this assignment is how to see the real person who is hiding in the background.

With your example movie, give us the following answers for the character with the most subtext:

Movie Title: Something’s Gotta Give

Character Name: Erica Barry

Subtext Identity: A playwright who is finally comfortable being divorced after a few years.

Subtext Trait: Insecure, desperate for love

Subtext Logline: Erica is a highly successful writer who secretly aches to be married again.

Possible Areas of Subtext: Why she wears turtlenecks in summer? How does she get herself into a Zen Place? Why does she think her sex life is in the rearview mirror? Will she ever find true love again? Is this young doctor really interested in me? Wondering why is Harry continuing to date young women after our relationship.

Movie Title: Something’s Gotta Give

Character Name: Harry Sanborn

Subtext Identity: A sixty-year-old lifetime womanizer who delights in pursuing beautiful gals under thirty.

Subtext Trait: Charming, afraid of aging

Subtext Logline: Harry is a womanizer who falls for the mother of his latest 20-something fling.

Possible Areas of Subtext: Trying to lead everyone. Afraid of dying for the first time in his life. Wondering if he is too old for the young ladies. After having a heart attack, assures everyone he does not need a daytime nurse.

For your three leads, brainstorm these answers:

Character Name: Gwendolyn

Subtext Identity: A teen from Fairyland who is on a mission to help young people on Earth.

Subtext Trait: Optimistic, laughs about everything.

Subtext Logline: A daughter following orders to help earthlings become kind to one another.

Possible Areas of Subtext: Attempting to see the bright side. Wondering when she will ever go home. Wondering if these people will ever get the message.

Character Name: Abigail

Subtext Identity: A teen from Fairyland who is on a mission to help young people on Earth.

Subtext Trait: Wild, zany, acts then thinks.

Subtext Logline: A daughter following orders to get people to enjoy their situation and get along with each other.

Possible Areas of Subtext: Why don’t they follow my magnificent inspiration? How simple can I make the obvious? Don’t they like to have a good time and get along?

Character Name: Brandi

Subtext Identity: The popular girl who rules her little world of teenage cool kids.

Subtext Trait: Mean, self-righteous, abusive, manipulative, and narcissistic.

Subtext Logline: Brandi is the daughter of a crime family that rules her junior high school, cool kids.

Possible Areas of Subtext: Living up to her parent’s bad intentions. Wondering why everyone doesn’t respect her authority. When will the two new girls fall to her attacks? Wondering if I am really a bad person.

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Will Jennings: Actor attractors!

My Vision: I will write movies that are extremely funny and entertaining that bring a sense of satisfaction and fulfillment to a world starving for true enjoyment.

What I learned from doing this assignment is how to differentiate between roles to make them truly exclusive.

Lead Character Name: Gwendolyn

Role: Dual Protagonist

What about this role would cause an actor to want to be known for it?

A person from another world who is the most loyal of friends and with a wide grin, she likes everyone, and the world likes her right back.

What makes this character one of the most interesting characters in your story?

She is the underdog and people empathize with her. Audiences root for her happy ending.

What are the most interesting actions the Lead could take in the script?

Using her other-worldly tablet to fly drones to scare off a motorcycle gang. Causing the antagonist to have major car trouble that looks like a smoke bomb went off.

How can you introduce this role in a way that could sell it to an actor?

Showing her the daughter of a Queen in a magical land with sprites and fairies blasting through a wormhole toward planet Earth.

What could be this character’s emotional range?

An optimist that urges everyone on to victory. She is cooperative and a true team player. Using her sarcastic wit, no matter what predicament she encounters, she always finds something to laugh about.

What subtext can the actor play?

She is clearly much more intelligent than her earthly counterparts and uses persuasion to enable them to follow her inspiration.

What’s the most interesting relationships this character can have?

Her bond with her twin sister is a real us against the world scenario. Using her paranormal powers against the antagonist is a hoot in the hopes of reforming this egomaniac.

How will this character’s unique voice be presented?

She believes in being upbeat, although has too sharp a tongue, and is always going for the gusto in life. She helps her friends but does not stop living for their sake especially if they are undeserving.

What could make this character special and unique?

Always quick with a sarcastic joke, she’s the life of the party and can pull anyone out of a downer mood.

Lead Character Name: Abigail

Role: Dual Protagonist

What about this role would cause an actor to want to be known for it?

A fun-loving person who only makes decisions with her emotions that have nothing to do with logic.

What makes this character one of the most interesting characters in your story?

She makes the experience worthwhile in her zany, high-spirited way.

What are the most interesting actions the Lead could take in the script?

Traveling through the universe with planets, stars, and galaxies flying past. Using her supernatural toys to help the oppressed while defeating the cruel people.

How can you introduce this role in a way that could sell it to an actor?

Showing her the daughter of a Queen in a magical land with sprites and fairies blasting through a wormhole toward planet Earth.

What could be this character’s emotional range?

Highly emotional, wild, and zany and never thinks before she acts. If you don’t jump on her bandwagon, she will tell you to your face you are a fuddy-duddy.

What subtext can the actor play?

She is clearly much more intelligent than her earthly counterparts and uses persuasion to enable them to follow her inspiration.

What’s the most interesting relationships this character can have?

Her bond with her twin sister is a real us against the world scenario. Always conjuring wild schemes to overcome the actions of the antagonist.

How will this character’s unique voice be presented?

Wild thoughts that come out of nowhere. Amazing insights that are astonishing.

What could make this character special and unique?

She is a trendsetter and is slightly eccentric. She is inclined to exaggerate.

Lead Character Name: Brandi

Role: Antagonist

What about this role would cause an actor to want to be known for it?

The love of playing the bad guy who attempts to steal the show from the protagonists.

What makes this character one of the most interesting characters in your story?

She is a workaholic to promote her agenda. She is very arrogant and is always right, just ask her.

What are the most interesting actions the Lead could take in the script?

She has a frighting stare that demands fear and respect. She is constantly telling people what to do and will lose her marbles if they do not obey.

How can you introduce this role in a way that could sell it to an actor?

When the twins are introduced before the classroom for the first time, she cracks British royalty jokes that have the entire class roaring with laughter.

What could be this character’s emotional range?

Mean, self-righteous, abusive, manipulative, and narcissistic.

What subtext can the actor play?

A tone of voice and a look that says, get with the program or you be out of the cool group pronto.

What’s the most interesting relationships this character can have?

Her dominance over the girls in the clique she controls. Her absolute war with the goody-goody twins that are new at the school.

How will this character’s unique voice be presented?

Cold-hearted barbs that hit like a bucket of ice water in the face.

What could make this character special and unique?

No one in the tri-state area demands this much attention and with her supremacy gets it.

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Will Jennings Actor attractors for Something’s Gotta Give

My Vision: I will write movies that are extremely funny and entertaining that bring a sense of satisfaction and fulfillment to a world starving for true enjoyment.

What I learned from doing this assignment is the depth of emotion an actor wishes to feel in a role.

ACTOR ATTRACTORS Template

Movie Title: Something’s Gotta Give

Lead Character Name: Jack Nicholson / Harry Sanborn

1. Why would an actor WANT to be known for this role? In real life, having dated such women like Carly Simon, Candice Bergen, Joni Mitchell, the “Hollywood Madam” and on and on…he would delight in playing the role of a womanizer.

2. What makes this character one of the most interesting characters in the movie? A man in his 60s dates the most beautiful women in their 20s. He is a man women gravitate to and find irresistible. He drives a cool sports car and has a limo.

3. What are the most interesting actions the Lead takes in the movie? Successful owner of ten companies, only dating women under 30, is a legend in the recording industry. Had a magazine article written about him as a Don Juan titled: The Escape Artist.

4. How is this character introduced that could sell it to an actor? He does a voice-over announcing himself as a man who has dated younger women for 40 years. A montage of supermodels are shown arriving at clubs, bars, and restaurants.

5. What is this character’s emotional range? From the male chauvinistic pig to a weeping man happy to be alive. In the end, he contacts numerous old flings to find out why he hurt so many women’s feelings.

6. What subtext can the actor play? As a chauvinist, he is thinking about what the woman can do for him. As an emerging sensitive person, how can I not hurt this person?

7. What’s the most interesting relationships this character has? His 20-something fling with Marin, his fling with her mother Erica who is over 50. His love triangle with the doctor who saved his life, Julian Mercer.

8. How is this character’s unique voice presented? He is an old-school man that doesn’t have a sense of a women’s feelings. He is arrogant, self-righteous, condescending yet loveable.

9. What makes this character special and unique? He is a man’s man who is trusted into a women’s world and finds that he must adapt to achieve the happiness he is ultimately looking for.

10. (Fill in a scene that shows the character fulfilling much of the Actor Attractor model.) After having a fling with Erica, he runs into her at a restaurant while dating a much younger woman. Erica dissolves into tears at the rejection and Harry ends up at the hospital with chest pains. The doctor informs him he is having a stress reaction and he needs to decompress. This begins his journey of becoming a sensitive person to women.

ACTOR ATTRACTORS Template

Movie Title: Something’s Gotta Give

Lead Character Name: Diane Keaton / Erica Barry

1. Why would an actor WANT to be known for this role? A rom-com for a 50s woman who is a successful playwright who writes the best Broadway play of her life about the antagonist after being dumped by the lousy womanizer. World-league revenge.

2. What makes this character one of the most interesting characters in the movie? All she wants to do is be left alone and write and she becomes the center of everyone’s life.

3. What are the most interesting actions the Lead takes in the movie? A major big-time writer is forced to babysit a heart attack victim in her own home. A woman who despises a man becomes his lover then his former lover.

4. How is this character introduced that could sell it to an actor? She finds an older man in her magnificent beach house and calls the cops. She discovers he is dating her daughter and is appalled he is such a jerk.

5. What is this character’s emotional range? She lives in a state of anxiety always on the defensive. When relaxed she is loving and very helpful to everyone.

6. What subtext can the actor play? You can feel the frustration when she is diverted from her plans.

7. What’s the most interesting relationships this character has? A loving mother to Marin, a woman that hasn’t dated for 30 years and has a tryst with Harry. An admirer doctor that is very interested in her.

8. How is this character’s unique voice presented? In a world of panic, she finds a way to rise to the top and win in the end.

9. What makes this character special and unique? A divorced woman falls in love with a cad and turns the tragic story into a smash Broadway play.

10. (Fill in a scene that shows the character fulfilling much of the Actor Attractor model.)

Harry walks into a play rehearsal to realize he is the person being satirized on Broadway. She tells him he messed with the heroin and that it is OK if he doesn’t want to remain friends. She goes from being completely devastated to incredibly powerful.

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Will Jennings: Genre Conventions

My Vision: I will write movies that are extremely funny and entertaining that bring a sense of satisfaction and fulfillment to a world starving for true enjoyment.

What I learned from doing this assignment is how spicing up the humor brings the fun alive.

Title: True Fairy Tales

Concept: Two young princesses come from a Fairy Tale World to try and make Earth a better place. Whatever they envision on their cell phones and tablets, comes to life.

Genre: Comedy

Act 1:

Opening: In a fairyland castle, the Queen’s twin daughters are being sent to planet Earth to help make it a better place.

Inciting Incident: The girls are introduced in school and a rude girl embarrasses them in front of the entire class. The twins realize their mission will be difficult. Game on.

Turning Point: The girls decide to throw a party for all the uncool kids and the bad girl shows up with her mother’s motorcycle gang. The girls scare off the motorcycle gang with drones. One has a trooper siren, another flashing cop lights, and yet another pretends to be a police helicopter.

Act 2:

New plan: The girls try contacting the authorities to assist.

Plan in action: The harder they try, it becomes obvious that the police and city hall are not interested in giving any protection from the gang. They create a briefcase with counterfeit money and try their hand at bribing. They are shocked to find out every public official they hit on wants a piece of the pie.

Midpoint Turning Point: The girls find out that Brandi’s mom is the leader of a crime family and they have put a lot of people in danger. They call Hollywood producers in an attempt to get Brandi’s mom on America’s Most Wanted. After every rejection, they do Cagney saying, “You dirty rat.”

Act 3:

Rethink everything: They take a trip back to Fairyland to formulate a new plan against such fantastic odds. At the Saturday Night Royal Gala, everyone says how much they love watching them on the Earth jumbotron. They are just a hysterical riot trying to reform corrupt earthlings.

New plan: They suggest bringing muses and fairies back to Earth to gather evidence against the crooks. Immediately, the muses and fairies go into kickbox training while music like “Kung Fu Fighting” is playing.

Turning Point: Huge failure / Major shift: Goons break in and destroy all the electronic equipment that they brought from Fairyland. They can no longer defend themselves from the gang.

Act 4:

Climax/Ultimate expression of the conflict: The gang summons all of their mobsters to the twins’ house to show them who is boss once and for all. While in invisible mode, the muses jump on some of the bikes and ride off while everyone thinks the motorcycles are running with no riders. The fairies and muses appear and disappear while punching out the bad guys until they split.

Resolution: The state’s attorney uses the evidence to send mom and the gang to prison and the girls are now the undisputed leaders of the new cool kids. The entire gang is packed into a jail cell, strumming tin cups against the bars while singing blues tunes.

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Will Jennings: 4-Act Transformational Structure

My Vision: I will write movies that are extremely funny and entertaining that bring a sense of satisfaction and fulfillment to a world starving for true enjoyment.

What I learned from doing this assignment is it is amazing to see the entire picture in four short paragraphs.

Concept Two young princesses come from a Fairy Tale World to try and make Earth a better place. Whatever they envision on their cell phones and tablets, comes to life.

Main Conflict The leader of the cool kids’ clique is threatened by two new classmates and attempts to ridicule and disgrace them. To succeed in their mission, the girls challenge the leader at every turn.

Old Ways: Sniffling and cowardly.

Refusing to compare the real world to going to a camp.

Totally nervous in the portal transportation room.

Naïve in the local school’s customs.

New Ways: Can lift the spirits of depressed children.

Willing to confront school authority for the greater good.

Can act as matchmakers to their elders.

Fantastic party planners.

Act 1:

Opening: In a fairyland castle, the Queen’s twin daughters are being sent to planet Earth to help make it a better place.

Inciting Incident: The girls are introduced in school and a rude girl embarrasses them in front of the entire class. The twins realize their mission will be difficult. Game on.

Turning Point: The girls decide to throw a party for all the uncool kids and the bad girl shows up with her mother’s motorcycle gang.

Act 2:

New plan: The girls try contacting the authorities to assist.

Plan in action: The harder they try, it becomes obvious that the police and city hall are not interested in giving any protection from the gang.

Midpoint Turning Point: The girls find out that Brandi’s mom is the leader of a crime family and they have put a lot of people in danger.

Act 3:

Rethink everything: They take a trip back to Fairyland to formulate a new plan against such fantastic odds.

New plan: They bring muses and fairies back to Earth to gather evidence against the crooks.

Turning Point: Huge failure / Major shift: Goons break in and destroy all the electronic equipment that they brought from Fairyland. They can no longer defend themselves from the gang.

Act 4:

Climax/Ultimate expression of the conflict: The gang summons all of their mobsters to the twins’ house to show them who is boss once and for all. The fairies and muses appear and disappear while punching out the bad guys until they split.

Resolution: The state’s attorney uses the evidence to send mom and the gang to prison and the girls are now the undisputed leaders of the new cool kids.

[Will Jennings]

Will Jennings: Subtext Plot

My Vision: I will write movies that are extremely funny and entertaining that bring a sense of satisfaction and fulfillment to a world starving for true enjoyment.

What I learned from doing this assignment is a lot is going on under the surface. The audience will love their very superior position.

Concept: Two young princesses come from a Fairy Tale World to try and make Earth a better place. Whatever they envision on their cell phones and tablets, comes to life.

Superior Position: Both the audience and the twins know they are from Fairyland since they are shown being transported through a wormhole from the control room that doubles as a jumbotron so the inhabitants can watch the girls’ escapades on Earth.

The Fish Out of Water: Two royal princesses are commanded by their mother the Queen to go to Earth to try and help junior high kids that run the scope from painfully shy to horribly arrogant. The mother was worried the daughters would end up like Julia Roberts in Mirror Mirror.

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Will Jennings: Transformational Journey

My Vision: I will write movies that are extremely funny and entertaining that bring a sense of satisfaction and fulfillment to a world starving for true enjoyment.

What I learned from doing this assignment is how to select the psychical and psychological aspects that make a character develop.

Arc Beginning: Completely fearful of going to an untamed plant of complete lunatics.

Arc Ending: Very sophisticated in influencing classmates to their point of view.

Internal Journey: From scared stiff to skillful and ingenious.

External Journey: From little daughters to influential companions.

Old Ways: Sniffling and cowardly.

Refusing to compare the real world to going to a camp.

Totally nervous in the portal transportation room.

Naïve in the local school’s customs.

New Ways: Can lift the spirits of depressed children.

Willing to confront school authority for the greater good.

Can act as matchmakers to their elders.

Fantastic
party planners.

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Will Jennings: Intentional Lead Characters

My Vision: I will write movies that are extremely funny and entertaining that bring a sense of satisfaction and fulfillment to a world starving for true enjoyment.

What I learned from doing this assignment is finding the right attributes to make the characters very different.

Character: Gwendolyn

Logline: Gwendolyn (dual protagonist) is the spunky kid who has moxie and is loyal to the end and is not one to give in or give up.

Unique: She hides behind her sarcastic wit.

Character: Abigail

Logline: Abigail (dual protagonist) is a free spirit who is fun-loving, energetic, and makes decisions with her emotions and only interferes in people’s lives with the best of intentions.

Unique: She makes the experience worthwhile in her zany, high-spirited way.

Character: Brandi

Logline: Brandi (antagonist) is the boss of the local junior high cool clique whose goals are far more important than anyone’s hurt feelings and is unconcerned when she ruffles a few feathers or steps on some toes.

Unique: If someone gets in her path, she will be blunt and brash and mow down anyone to obtain her goal.

[Will Jennings]

Will Jennings’ Title, Concept, and Character Structure!

The Title is: True Fairy Tales

Concept: Two young princesses come from a Fairy Tale World to try and make Earth a better place. Whatever they envision on their cell phones and tablets, comes to life.

The Character Structure is Protagonist versus Antagonist.

My Vision: I will write movies that are extremely funny and entertaining that bring a sense of satisfaction and fulfillment to a world starving for true enjoyment.

What I learned from doing this assignment is the very beginning of an outline.

[Will Jennings]

My name is Will Jennings and I live in one of the fly-over states that no one cares about. I have written a children’s TV pilot and a few scripts that need some serious work. When I take writing courses, I quickly come to the relation that I am making a ton of mistakes and head back to the drawing board. I am hoping this class is a big help in that department. I am a lifetime rom-com and comedy junkie and believe movies were much funnier and more enjoyable in my childhood than later in life. Like most people that took up movie writing, after I watch a flick, all I can think is — I can do way better than that piece of rubbish!

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[Will Jennings]

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1. That I will keep the processes, strategies, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class confidential, and that I will NOT share any of this program either privately, with a group, posting online, writing articles, through video or computer programming, or in any other way that would make those processes, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class available to anyone who is not a member of this class.

2. That each writer’s work here is copyrighted and that writer is the sole owner of that work. That includes this program which is copyrighted by Hal Croasmun. I acknowledge that submission of an idea to this group constitutes a claim of and the recognition of ownership of that idea.

I will keep the other writer’s ideas and writing confidential and will not share this information with anyone without the express written permission of the writer/owner. I will not market or even discuss this information with anyone outside this group.

3. I also understand that many stories and ideas are similar and/or have common themes and from time to time, two or more people can independently and simultaneously generate the same concept or movie idea.

4. If I have an idea that is the same as or very similar to another group member’s idea, I’ll immediately contact Hal and present proof that I had this idea prior to the beginning of the class. If Hal deems them to be the same idea or close enough to cause harm to either party, he’ll request both parties to present another concept for the class.

5. If you don’t present proof to Hal that you have the same idea as another person, you agree that all ideas presented to this group are the sole ownership of the person who presented them and you will not write or market another group member’s ideas.

6. Finally, I agree not to bring suit against anyone in this group for any reason, unless they use a substantial portion of my copyrighted work in a manner that is public and/or that prevents me from marketing my script by shopping it to production companies, agents, managers, actors, networks, studios or any other entertainment industry organizations or people.

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INT. CHARLES’ BEDROOM – NIGHT

After meeting each other on meatmarket.com, two damaged individuals are playing games of sexual manipulation to see who is in charge. CHARLES, 26, believes he is the smartest and best-looking person on the planet. Most people find him a tad on the egotistical side. ANNA, 29, suffers from the incurable mental disorder of narcissism. She is cunning, and attractive, and displays plenty of cleavage to lure unsuspecting prey.

ANNA

I know how we can kick things off. I just happen to have some very sexy lingerie in my bag, and I wonder how it would look on you.

CHARLES

No way! If you think I am going to put that stuff on, you’re crazy.

ANNA

You mean you have never tried on some hot women’s undies? I find that hard to believe. I thought you were a player.

CHARLES

Are you saying a lot of guys do that?

ANNA

Of course, I once was on a cruise ship and all the men had to wear their partners’ sexy underwear and parade around the deck. It was hysterical. Everyone had a riot.

CHARLES

I don’t know. I don’t see myself as a crossdresser.

ANNA

Oh, do it for me, baby. I just want to see your good looks in some hot lace. It is such a turn-on.

CHARLES

Well, I never thought of it like that. OK, give me a few minutes while I slip into some more comfortable.

In the bathroom, Charles changes into a matching bra and panties set and wonders how manly he is while flexing muscles and checking out his physique in the mirror.

CHARLES

(shaking his head)

Talk about getting in touch with your feminine side.

He walks out wearing towels around his body.

ANNA

OK, hot stuff. Start flinging around those towels and show me the goods. I’m starting to get super hot.

Charles starts to do a little dance while losing the laundry. She turns on a radio playing top 40 hits.

ANNA

Wow, I would never have thought a man could look so good in women’s undies. Hey baby, you could be a runway model! Try on this pair of size 13 high heels.

CHARLES

I do feel kind of sexy. How does my ass look?

ANNA

Marvelous. I just remembered I happen to have my 35-millimeter digital camera in my bag.

She snaps pictures of him parading back and forth. She incites him to get into his modeling,

ANNA

Work it, work it. Oh, yeah. You are so smoking hot. These pics are definitely going viral. People will be roaring at these pics all around the planet. I will make a fortune on social media.

Charles is now in full modeling mode shaking his booty to the music.

CHARLES

I am really getting into this. I must look fantastic.

ANNA

(she snickers)

Oh, you do totally. I just had a fantastic idea. How about going to the karaoke bar and showing everyone your act?

CHARLES

I don’t know if I am up for that.

ANNA

It would be great. You will feel so liberated and free as a person.

CHARLES

I guess so. OK, let’s do it. I feel like I am a member of the Village People. YMCA, YMCA.

INT. KARAOKE BAR – NIGHT

In a packed club, Charles sits at a table sporting a plush plaid maroon kimono robe while watching the contestants on stage attempting to carry a tune. Anna sits next to him, with a fiendish smile, tossing back shots of upscale Russian Vodka from a bottle.

ANNA

I am so proud of you for finally agreeing to shave your legs, and chest hair, and slipping on a pair of nylons with garters.

CHARLES

This whole thing has made me feel a little tingly down there if you know what I mean. Do you think I need a woman’s wig?

An idiot is on stage singing like a dog howling at the moon. The audience is in full boo mode.

ANNA

You look tingly all over baby. You don’t need a wig, that military buzz cut is so manly. Do a couple of more shots, you are up right after this no-talent clown.

CHARLES

I just don’t know when I have ever been this nervous.

He slams two quick shots followed by a head-shiver chaser.

CHARLES

That one really burned. I think I am ready to perform my act. What is the name of the song you chose for me?

ANNA

It’s called “I Am Woman” by Helen Reddy. Don’t worry about the title, she was a real bra burner, definitely not your type.

CHARLES

Why would she do that?

ANNA

It was just after the wild 60s when the young people thought they were changing the world and becoming free. They felt if they dropped out, doped up, and had a love in, everything would be great.

CHARLES

Did it happen?

ANNA

No chance. They all got addicted to everything, and I mean everything. Drugs, sex, paganism, you name it. In reality, they didn’t get free of anything.

CHARLES

So why did Helen burn her bra?

ANNA

She was trying to be free of some made-up stereotype. It was a very confusing time with no logic and tons of baloney everywhere. It was similar to today’s nonstop bull crap.

CHARLES

Well if it’s any consolation, I have no intention of burning your bra, Anna.

ANNA

(rolling her eyes)

Thanks, Charley, that is so touching.

The emcee walks to the microphone on stage and attempts to restore order.

EMCEE

OK, folks let’s settle down. I know the last contestant was not the greatest singer… but now for a complete change of pace… Here is Charles singing… really?… I Am Woman. OK, take it away Charles.

Charles takes the stage as the song begins to play, and lets his robe drop to reveal his feminine attire. The crowd explodes into raucous laughter. Anna has placed a Go Pro HD video camera on a mini tripod on the table and is snapping pictures with her digital camera nonstop. Holding a page with the lyrics, he begins to sing with the music.

CHARLES

I am woman, hear me roar

In numbers too big to ignore

The crowd’s laughter sounds like thunder.

CHARLES

And I know too much to go back an’ pretend

‘Cause I’ve heard it all before

I am strong

AUDIENCE

Strong

CHARLES

I am invincible

AUDIENCE

Invincible

CHARLES

I am woman

The crowd gives him a standing ovation as he finishes the song. Anna looks extremely angry.

[Will Jennings]

What I learned… the more you commit to brainstorming, the more hysterical it gets.

1 Start with your comic situation outline.

Scene Outline:

Goal: Charles wants his new conquest to fall for his arrogant games. Anna wants him to obey her ridiculous demands so she has complete control over him.

Activity: Charles uses his seductive tricks on her and she leads him to believe they are actually working although she has no intention of doing what he wants.

Complication: A former boyfriend of Anna’s tells Charles she is a complete nut job and to run for his life. He doesn’t believe him and is convinced she is seriously attracted to him.

2 Write down the main area of incongruence for your story.

Two damaged individuals are attempting to psychologically control each other under the guise of a romantic relationship.

3 Notice which actions/props are already in the scene and brainstorm others that might work for it.

Props: Bra and panties, grapefruit and lemons, enormous high heels, 35-millimeter digital camera.

Physical action: manipulating him to parade around as a lingerie model so she can plaster the pictures all over social media and delight in making a fool of him.

She gets him to shave his legs and chest and to wear nylons with garters.

The egotist is so fascinated with himself, that he agrees to take his modeling gig to a karaoke bar.

She choose the song “I am Women” for his debut followed by “Walk on the wild side.”

At first, the crowd roars with outrageous laughter, then turns into a heckling mob tossing insults, lemon slices, ice cubes, and empty beer cans. She can’t help showing her delight at the mockery.

Security guards pop up and get the crowd under control. They escort the cross-dresser and friend out the back door of the tavern and make sure they drive off the property.

4 Rewrite the outline of the scene, including yesterday’s toppers and today’s best physical actions/props.

Manipulating a male egotist to model women’s lingerie in his own bedroom.

I just happen to have my 35-millimeter digital camera in my bag.

She incites him to get into his modeling, work it, work it. Oh, yeah.

These pics are definitely going viral. People will be roaring at these pics all around the planet.

She gets him to shave his legs and chest and to wear nylons with garters.

The egotist is so fascinated with himself, that he agrees to take his modeling gig to a karaoke bar.

At the bar, she has the DJ play the song “I am Women” for his debut, followed by “Walk on the Wild Side” by Lou Reed.

At first, the crowd roars with raucous laughter, he decides to dance about like a stripper. Then they turn into a heckling mob hurling insults, lemon slices, ice cubes, and empty beer cans. She can’t help showing her delight at the mockery.

Security guards pop up and get the crowd under control.

They escort the cross-dresser and friend out the back door of the tavern and make sure they drive off the property unscathed by the ugly mob.

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[Will Jennings]

What I learned? Brainstorming is just a code word for let’s get funny. Big time.

Best moments:

Manipulating a male egotist to model women’s lingerie in his own bedroom.

A mocking narcissistic woman berating an egomaniac’s super fragile ego until he is at the point of a little girl’s tears.

Best punchlines:

Have you ever seen a bigger fool than this idiot? Forrest Gump was a genius next to this guy.

If he had the money, in only 20 years of therapy, this moron could advance to being a complete idiot. I sure hope I never meet his mother. She must be really screwed up.

Hey baby, stuff your bra with these grapefruits and put these lemons in your panties.

I just happen to have my 35-millimeter digital camera in my bag.

Work it, work it. Oh, yeah. These pics are definitely going viral.

People will be roaring at these pics all around the planet.

These will make me a fortune on social hate media. Isn’t technology great!

[Will Jennings]

What I learned is that the more techniques you incorporate into the assignment, your imagination jumps by leaps and bounds.

Comedy situation: An arrogant guy falls for a narcissistic woman who treats him worse than he usually treats his women. She pretends to be hot to trot but never puts out.

Comedy Characters and their loglines: Charles believes he is the smartest and best-looking man and has no idea everyone considers him to be absorbed with self-adoration.

Anna, an attractive woman, needs to control everyone around her and is constantly on the lookout for her next patsy to feed her unquenchable appetite.

Possible funny moments: The man makes a move and she leads him to believe it is working. The woman demands he try on some of her lingerie. He tries to set up a second date but she is always busy. She gets him aroused and remembers an appointment she must leave for immediately. He tries to get her to say how attractive she thinks he is. She goes to bed with his best friend just to bruise his ego. He tries to break up with her only to have her promise a hot rendezvous on their next date.

Scene Outline:

Goal: Charles wants his new conquest to fall for his arrogant games. Anna wants him to obey her ridiculous demands so she has complete control over him.

Activity: Charles uses his seductive tricks on her and she leads him to believe they are actually working although she has no intention of doing what he wants.

Complication: A former boyfriend of Anna’s tells Charles she is a complete nut job and to run for his life. He doesn’t believe him and is convinced she is seriously attracted to him.

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[Will Jennings]

What I learned: There’s a lot of ways to interject a punch line.

INT. MONACO – RUN-DOWN APARTMENT BUILDING – DAY

A rich playboy with plenty of sparkle and glitz, STEFAN ASTOR, age 32, has been tossed out of his high-class condo due to one wild party. He is being shown this suite by the lovely JULIETTE, age 28, a chic and successful realtor.

JULIETTE

What do you think of this place monsieur?

STEFAN

I believe this is just a tad bit below my standards. This place reminds me of a fraternity house after a rush party in the year 1880.

JULIETTE

Oui, it is in a state of complete disrepair. Although, this could be a real fixer-upper. You could flip it and possibly make a fortune.

STEFAN

I get the vibe I would spend a fortune trying to fix it and then lose a fortune when I tried to sell it. No way, this is definitely not happening. Look, I’m just looking to buy a suite not an entire 17 century Louis XV broken-down pile of rubble building.

JULIETTE

Ah Oui, I just thought I would give it a shot. This may have been quite fantastic and you might have drowned in Euros on this project.

STEFAN

Oh yeah, I would have drowned all right… all the way to the bottom of the Mediterranean.

Juliette opens her laptop and shows Stefan tons of pictures of various suites that are currently available in the Principality.

STEFAN

Well, now we are getting somewhere. These don’t look like French Revolution con jobs.

(EXAGGERATION)

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What I learned: A party animal just wants to have a good old time and is constantly put in situations that prevent it from happening.

INT. CHIC MONACO APARTMENT BUILDING – NIGHT

A wild party is happening on the 12th floor in a plush suite overlooking the French Rivera. Music is playing and the guests are having a great time tossing back drinks. A rich tanked-up playboy, the debonair host STEFAN ASTOR, age 32, is busy charming the women. He is talking to a cover girl named JANICE who has big eyes and a warm smile for him.

JANICE

So, what brings you to Monaco business or pleasure?

STEFAN

Quite definitely pleasure and plenty of it. I just came over from New York and I need some rest and relaxation after being trashed time and again by the tabloids.

JANICE

What were they saying about you? Maybe I have heard of some of the stories?

STEFAN

The usual… your basic fun-loving drunken antics. Just trying to have a good time and all of these killjoys and spoilsports were constantly popping up with their flashing cameras. I needed to get out of there before I went insane. It was just horrible.

A couple of nicely dressed women, ELOISE and NICOLETTE, both 28, walk into the circle and are laughing at his poor predicament.

ELOISE

(laughing)

C’est dommage. How do you say? It sounds like a real bummer.

NICOLETTE

Fortunately for you, the police in this city do not allow the paparazzi to follow and harass everyone as they do in Paris.

STEFAN

Finally, a police force that does what they are supposed to do!

There is loud knocking at the door and three members of the Public Security of Monaco dressed in uniform step inside the apartment.

SECURITY OFFICER #1

Who is the host of this soiree?

Some people point to Stefan as the officers walk over to him.

SECURITY OFFICER #2

We have had a loud noise complaint and it is time to shut down this wild party.

STEFAN

You call this wild. It’s like an old folk home with cocktails and polka music.

SECURITY OFFICER #1

I wish my grandparents lived in a home like this.

Two ELDERLY WOMEN walk in and stand next to the officers.

ELDERLY WOMEN #1

What in the world is going on here? Who is responsible for this debauchery?

STEFAN

That would be me. I am Stefan and the president of the debauchery committee.

ELDERLY WOMEN #2

Well monsieur, I am happy to inform you that this building is the world headquarters of Sober Anonymous and you are being evicted from this apartment tomorrow.

STEFAN

Just for having a few friends over. That sounds quite ridiculous. I thought that Frenchy had a love affair with their wine?

SECURITY OFFICER #2

You sure picked the wrong building to party down.

STEFAN

Oh no, this place is worse than New York!

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INT. THE WORLD IS ENDING IN 15 MINUTES CONFERENCE – DAY

The great-granddaughter of a Bolshevik and the daughter of a Marxist convince their only daughter, GREENA their little angel, that she must inform the world to follow orders, or they are complete toast. She addresses the World Conference with guns blazing. (Note: Forced union of incompatibles – A wacko nut job against people that believe the opposite.)

GREENA

You challenge ME. I should be back in Slovakia in the back seat of a Volvo getting some. This is all your fault. Don’t you feel ashamed? Is this working or not?

The dignitaries applaud wildly to her abusive mocking of everyone, including themselves.

INT. TELEVISION STATION – NIGHT

Going live with raw network feed, the anchor, CHET THOMAS, recaps the daily events of a little girl who tells the world they are toast unless the get on their knees and do as she demands – pronto.

CHET THOMAS

Well, folks, you heard it here first. Unless we kneel and bow to this mixed-up teenager, the world will die in a matter of minutes. oh, my… gee wiz. When I was in school, I was never even close to being this screwed up.

SUSIE ATKINS

Can you image anyone sending a brainwashed child to shame the world into such ridiculous ideas? How could anyone be this self-righteous and corrupt?

CHET THOMAS

I would start with their parents and move to any organization that would pay money to bring her to this country and pretend she is actually saving the world. Somebody definitely has a screw loose.

EXT. CITY PARK – DAY

The non-stop network cameras are rolling in another attempt to fool the audience into falling for a pile of bologna sandwiches. As it turns out, Greena has been led to the wrong venue and is addressing a crowd of right-wingers that find her non-stop lies totally laughable. The screaming lunatic is demanding the world do as they’re told, or else. (Note: Embarrassment)

GREENA

Are we going to let the world die in an environmental holocaust?

CROWD

Yes, yes, yes!

GREENA

What, are you people mad?

CROWD

Ha, Ha, Ha. What a loser! Loser! Loser!

The entire crowd is flashing the loser sign and laughing hysterically. The little girl is rushed off the stage and whisked away in a super-duper carbon footprint limo.

INT. TELEVISION STATION – NIGHT

Once again the news anchors are telling the sad story of how a brainwashed child is attempting to shame the world into absurd wacko ideas. (Note: Comedic tragedy)

CHET THOMAS

What started as a barrel of laughs, has suddenly turned into the reality that this child needs a great deal of psychotherapy. I hope she knows someone willing to give her the help she needs.

SUSIE ATKINS

Yes, ladies and gentlemen, a website has been formed for you to donate money for Greena to get a shrink to check out that totally screwed up mind. The site is http://www.greena-needs-help.com

CHET THOMAS

This just in, an Evangelical Preacher believes Greena’s hysterics are so wild and outlandish, that she like totally needs an exorcism. A once bright lovely girl has now hit rock bottom.

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[Will Jennings]

WWII Flyers Crash and Burn: Will – Funny situations

What I learned from this assignment is how to set up hilarious situations of comedy.

Six young and very naive American WWII flyers walk off an elevator on the twelfth floor of a hotel looking for room number 1213. The leader of the troop, LIEUTENANT FLYNN has been given an invitation to meet some British showgirls at an after-hours party and he has been told to bring his buddies.

INT. SWANKY HOTEL – TWELFTH FLOOR – NIGHT

SERGEANT MORGAN

Do you think we should just knock?

LIEUTENANT FLYNN

Well, why not?

INT. SWANKY HOTEL Room – NIGHT

Hearing loud music inside, the rest of the fellers just barge in the door and see a bevy of beauties looking surprised that they have finally arrived. A smiling face walks up, grab one Airman by the arm, and leads him to the dance floor.

LIEUTENANT FLYNN

Well boys, congratulations we have made it to the right place.

SARGENT MORGAN

Are you sure we are supposed to be here? These dames look way out of our league.

LIEUTENANT FLYNN

Oh, yeah! We have definitely arrived.

The star of the show, Fiona, slinks up to the men in uniform.

FIONA

It’s about time you fellers came to the party. What took you so long?

SERGEANT MORGAN

We had to bomb some German ammunition plants. We’re lucky to be here at all.

FIONA

I’m glad to see you are all in one piece and ready for some action!

The soldiers look confused by her remark. (Note Misinterpretation)

AIRMAN REILLY

What do you think she meant by that?

AIRMAN FIRST CLASS O’BRIEN

She sure is spooky. These dames could use a lot more clothes.

AIRMAN REILLY

And how!

FIONA

Can I introduce you boys to the lovely ladies in the show?

BOYS

Well… I guess.

As she acquaints the showgirls with the flyers, the women start foundling their very impressive uniforms. Some of the men step back to resist their attention. The ladies giggle at their shyness.

LIEUTENANT FLYNN

I have never encountered such aggressive skirts before.

SERGEANT MORGAN

Do you think they are going to ask for money?

LIEUTENANT FLYNN

I think they are going to ask for a lot of moola. These broads are looking for a sugar daddy.

SERGEANT MORGAN

Or maybe Howard Hughes.

One of the girls, DAPHNE, walks up to Lieutenant Flynn and starts dancing with him.

DAPHNE

My, aren’t you good-looking? Have you had a lot of experience with the ladies?

LIEUTENANT FLYNN

Ah, well… they call me the lone wolf back in Pottstown, PA. Note: (Comedic Surprise)

DAPHNE

(giggling)

I’m sure they do. You must have broken your share of hearts.

LIEUTENANT FLYNN

You know… if you got it, you really got it.

DAPHNE

I find myself being very attracted to you. Would you like to follow me to the back bedroom for some hand-to-hand combat?

LIEUTENANT FLYNN

Aren’t we supposed to be married for that type of debauchery?

LIEUTENANT FLYNN

(yelling to the boys)

Come on, guys. These broads are a bunch of vampires! Note: Wildly (Inappropriate Response)

SERGEANT MORGAN

Sorry, we don’t pay for women’s affections.

AIRMAN FIRST CLASS O’BRIEN

Hey, ladies do any of you know where a guy can find a nice girl?

AIRMAN REILLY

I don’t think any one of them ever went to a nunnery.

The girls are heard roaring with laughter. The boys bolt out of the room and run down twelve flights of stairs to safety far away from the jezebels.

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[Will Jennings]

Will’s Comedy plot

Premise: American WWII flyers meet British showgirls.

Fish out of water

Ace flyers in uniform at an after-hours party with a dozen very available beauties who are lusting after them.

Incongruent pairings

American country bumpkins with a harem of harlots. Gee, what’s a boy to do?

Hilarious purpose

The fellers thought they had seen danger in the skies over England, France, and Germany until they met their match in the boudoir.

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[Will Jennings]

“What I learned from this assignment is…?”

How to setup a joke for big time payoff.

SOMETHING’S GOTTA GIVE: (Will Jennings) Funny Scene!

Jack Nicholson as Harry; Amanda Peet as Marin

A LONG STRETCH OF PRISTINE COUNTRY ROAD – THE HAMPTONS – DAY

A Silver Mercedes convertible bursts into FRAME. Harry’s

behind the wheel, shades, smoking a cigar, livin’ large. Next

to him sits a thoroughbred of a girl. An “IT” Girl. Smart,

sexy and built for fun. She has perfected flirting to an art.

Her hand rests on Harry’s neck. There’s a good thirty year

age difference between them. Her name is MARIN. She SINGS

along with Ja Rule, now coming from a CD.

Setup: Harry is a chic magnet.

MARIN

( singing)

To all my thugs that be livin’ it

up, we say, what I do. To all my…

(stops)

Oh! This is it. Make a right.

HARRY

(admiring the

neighborhood)

So baby, you’re rich… .

MARIN

Well, my mother is, sort of. Not

really…

HARRY

If she lives within a mile of here, she’s

rich.

MARIN

I guess a hit play will buy you a house

in The Hamptons.

HARRY

I’d like to meet your mother.

MARIN

No you wouldn’t. I mean, she’s

great. She’s totally brilliant, but

she’s not your type.

Setup

HARRY

You’re overlooking one of the great

things about me. I don’t have a type.

MARIN

(very directly)

She’s over thirty.

Harry looks to Marin, feigning hurt.

MARIN

Oh, what?! Like you don’t know you

have a slight reputation for…

HARRY

— For what?

MARIN

For never dating anyone over 30.

Don’t look at me like that.

HARRY

It’s just not true.

MARIN

Okay. Sorry. Over 31?

HARRY

Oh, so you wait ’til we get out to The

Hamptons to let me know you’re a wise

ass.

Setup

(then to Marin)

It just so happens, my dear, that women

of a certain age, don’t date me. You ever

think of it that way? No, it’s always me.

You dames are all alike.

Payoff

Hey…

MARIN

(amused, to herself)

Dames…

Marin continues singing along with Ja Rule as Harry

confidently slips his hand onto her thigh.

MARIN

(all business)

Make a right, left at the second

fence.

Marin turns up the CD, getting herself out of whatever just

came over her, looks out the window.

HARRY

Setup

Have I mentioned how gorgeous your

breasts look in this sweater?

MARIN

(blushing)

Yes you have actually.

HARRY

So it would be too much to mention it

again. . .

Payoff

Marin laughs, softening, as Harry turns down a dirt driveway,

driving toward a DREAM BEACH HOUSE.

HARRY

Wow. It’s the perfect beach house.

MARIN

I know. My mother doesn’t know how

to do things that aren’t perfect.

HARRY

Which explains you.

That got her. Harry parks. She looks over at him but he’s

grabbing some cigars for his shirt pocket, then looks up at

her with an innocent look that suggests he did not just say

such a lovely thought.

MARIN

(trying to keep up with

him)

Yeah, okay, right…

They both grab their overnight bags and step out of the car.

HARRY

So, what are we gonna do out here,

just the two of us, for two whole

days?

Setup

Marin sets her bag down, walks to Harry, wraps her arms

around his neck.

MARIN

Tell me the truth, are you at all

glad we waited?

HARRY

I’m incredibly glad we’re finally

going to do it.

Payoff

(she’s a bit disappointed)

If that’s the same as being glad we

waited, then baby doll, I’m ecstatic.

Marin smiles then kisses him. He’s one of those guys that

lets you kiss them.

HARRY

(slaps her tush)

Let’s go for a swim, how long will

it take you to change?

MARIN

Setup

Two minutes.

Marin starts UNBUTTONING HER SWEATER as she dances

seductively toward the front door, then notices Harry’s

cigars.

MARIN

Oh Har… No smoking in the house. My

Mom doesn’t allow it.

HARRY

But she allows you to strip in the

front yard and bring men you’re

dating here to…

MARIN

She doesn’t know everything I do…Or

when I do it.. or where I do it.

She SLIPS OFF her sweater and DROPS IT ON HARRY’S HEAD.

INT. HOUSE

It’s one of those great Beach Houses. Light filled and warm

with spectacular views of the sandy landscape wrapping around

the rear of the house. Marin, now in a tight tank, tight

pants, gives Harry the grand tour as she continues to

undress.

MARIN

(TAKING OFF her belt)

The fabulous living room, perfect for

entertaining an intimate group of friends

or that special someone.

(DROPS her belt then

UNBUTTONS Harry’s shirt)

Behind me, the requisite Hampton’s deck

complete with pool and ocean view.

MARIN (CONT’D)

(UNBUCKLES Harry’s belt)

Your pants, please…

HARRY

Ladies first.

Marin provocatively UNZIPS her pants and wriggles out of

them. She’s now in a TINY TANK AND BIKINI PANTIES.

MARIN

Gourmet kitchen’s to your left

where tonight I will whip you up a

culinary feast of Mac and Cheese.

Marin HEARS Harry’s ZIPPER UNZIP. She turns, her EYES

WIDENING as Harry’s PANTS land on a chair. Harry is now down

to his Boxers, an Open Shirt and a fearless smile.

MARIN

(smiling)

.. O-kay, going quickly now…

Master bedroom is that away…

They arrive in a warmly decorated GUEST BEDROOM.

MARIN

And this as they say on ‘Cribs’,

your favorite show, is where the

magic happens. Do we like it? Going

once, going twice …

HARRY

Sold.

Payoff

[Will Jennings]

I’m Will and I am relatively new at this. I have written a kid’s TV show and a feature that needs oodles and oodles of rewrites. I hope to learn numerous technics for writing fall-down funny scripts to make a bundle. As a kid, I was always the class clown and I think it is time for that to pay off in the entertainment industry. I remember in the second grade we were forced to give our teacher a Christmas gift. I found myself in a hardware store and convinced my mother to buy my teacher a nightgown. When she opened the box she turned red and I yelled from the back row, “try it on.” The classroom erupted into laughter. I often wondered if my teacher got some serious action in that hardware lingerie or if she took it home and burned it.

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