Will Pirkey
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Reply to Margaret’s Outline
The Roman soldier’s question of faith may better be expressed through his response to the Christians who willingly suffer death at the Roman’s hands because they believe.
St. Patrick’s letter is placed in better context: “I have a part with those whom God called and destined to preach the gospel, even in persecutions which are no small matter, to the very ends of the earth.”
In other words, your hero as a trained soldier is torn between becoming a Christian and preach the gospel thus suffering the possibility of death or hide his faith and wander soulless through eternity.
His strength is how far will he go to abstain from violence by acting to convince others to stop violence and follow the word of God. That strength can turn violent hearts of the other Roman soldiers to support your hero.
The villain is the Roman General who is willing to destroy everything, his family who have become believers, his own troops who question his mania and the Roman citizens under his control who want peace and stability.
The climax is the final battle when faith meets paganism and the redeeming word of God convinces the Romans they have lost their old gods and must give up their old ways and lay down their arms.
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Reply to Roscoe’s Outline
Your hero is trying to save his family lost to drugs and thus the need for action. His special skill needs to be more than just being an ex-sniper. Maybe he was captured in Iraq or Afghanistan and tortured. He survived because of his thoughts of his family back home. Now, he sees his family being torn apart. His determination is to re-establish that family that saved him once and may save him and the rest of us again.
The villain is the drug lord, not the cop’s ex-wife. She is a victim and needs to be saved along with their daughter.
If your cop doesn’t stop the drug trade his entire family, his friends and the small town he lives in will be destroyed if not the USA. This means he will have to confront the powers in charge as he moves up the food chain to confront the drug boss.
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Reply to Madeleine’s Outline
Opening: Should relate to the story. Hopi masks are sacred as Christian relics. You might consider using the contested sale of Hopi Masks at a Paris auction in Dec. 2013 as a guide.
If you start with the auction where the presenter with the gavel describes how religiously valuable these masks are, comparable to the Christian grail, you’ve established a connection.
Your hero needs more than just an FBI agent. What about her makes her special? She can shoot better than men? Or she has intuition, a second sense, something special. Remember “Silence of the Lambs”.
Your villain is not defined. A group of mercenaries is not a villain but the extension of one. Your villain maybe be a collector of religious artifacts that will go to any length to get her hands on them, including murder. Maybe she sees these items as a path to her own salvation or as way to her dominance and vengeance due to her loss of faith by threatening to destroy her collection.
The need for action is the need to retrieve these religious symbols that if lost forever could result in loss of faith.
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