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Bill Curley’s Subtext Plots
Vision: To continually learn from this class and be accepted within the film industry.
My concept is a horror film titled ” The Bog”.
1. Scheming and Investigating.
A nefarious real estate developer desires to build on a Northwoods parcel with an old growth forest and adjoining bog. This real estate CEO has lied and manipulated his way to acquiring the land and has recieved critical assistance from a dishonest Town Board Chairman in the process. Once initial site preparation begins a 1000 year old Viking curse is unleashed on local townspeople. A local policewoman investigating the death of a surveyor becomes suspicious of events and sighting near the development. She learns of the illegal possession along with the assist by the local Chaiman.
Major Coverup
As Terror begins to reign down on a small Wisconsin community, all stemming from a Viking curse, it is realized that a cover up of the actions involving the real estate CEO and a local politician occured and is the very reason for the Nordic wrath from 1073 AD.
Superior Position
Caught and identified, the dishonest Chaiman and developer flee and hide by the bog. A policewoman in pursuit realizes both will be killed by angry Norse Gods.

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Bill Curley,s Transformational Journey.
Vision: To continue learning this trade and be vetted.
Learned: Once again AI has given my self a new perspective and insight to writing.

My Protagonist is a female 37 police officer in a small Northwoods town.Her name is Lisa Rawlins
ACT 1. Character Arc:

INT: Lisa must deal with routine, desultory affairs, typical.of her job. Maintaining the law and raising her fatherless son are priorities..
Ext: Aside from dealing with an occasional drunk or aggressive speeder, Lisa has no unusual physical challenges. She , if needed, must remove road kill in her jurisdiction.

Act 2. INT matters become convoluted
More complex. Her fatherless son has had two of his classmates brutally murdered allegedly by Vikings that stormed a bonfire in an area called by locals ad “,The Bog”. The mental questions come about when she realizes a dishonest but powerful real estate developer has unleashed a 1000 year old curse on the community
Ext Lisa is now seeing physical challenges. She must mentally and physically exert physical energies as strange sittings of giant sized forest animals are reported
Act 3 Int Lisa mind is in a whirl. Faced with challenges ever present with her 16 year old son, Lisa must also focus on solving and preventing additional deaths from rumored Viking attacks coming from the bog.
Ext. Lisa is now called to prevent Viking sorties into her town. She investigates, moves and reacts. She along with the Norse Goddes of peace, that being Freyr, must stand headmaster to a raiding Viking Cadre and forever sendcthem to the Midworld
Old Ways: Raising a kid
Routine police work
Compassionate law enforcement. New Ways: Deal with ax1000 year old Viking curse and its deadly results, all the result of a dishonest land developer, the very individual that unleashed the curse.

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Bill Curley Intro to Lead Characters
Vision: To someday soon be recognized and vetted within this industry..
Learned: Character development with emotional journals is critical. AI can be an assist in this requirement.
Protagonist: Small town USA female police office Lisa Rawlins, 37, attractive intuitive.

Unique: Street smart from her youth in crime torn Detroit, Lisa Rawlins brings forth a set of compassion coupled with a keen intuition to her role as a small community police officer.

Antagonist: Northwoods real estate magnate Jack Banister, 46, powerful, handsome is a threat to any undeveloped parcel.
Unique: Banister has a presence that overwhelms his opponents and competition. From bribes to payouts you best watch out if he shows up in your town.

Genre: Horror
Title: ” The Bog”.
Theme: A powerful, unscrupulous real estate developer illegally gains title to a beautiful but troubled parcel of Northwoods land unleashing a 1000 year old Viking curse.A local police office begins to suspect the developer,s actions and learns that his development is on the same exact location Vikings were massacred by Indians a millenia ago.
Associated Characters: Dishonest local Town Board Chairman. Local Police Chief. High school football players. Local librarian.

Subplot suggested by AI: Female police officer investigates real estate developer after weird events at construction site.

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Bill Curley

Vision: To be finally vetted within this industry.
Learned: AI has already given me keen insight to my scripts. This is both a welcome addition and a permanent assistant to all future projects.

Title: The Bog
Genre: Horror
Concept: A 1000 year old Viking curse is unleashed by a dishonest real estate developer when he illegally gains control.of a prized but troubled real estate parcel.

My character structure suggests a protagonist in concert with a handful of secondary characters
( ensemble) vs Vikings and their deadly spirits. The Protagonist is a female police officer that is the first to suspect the actions of a powerful but unscrupulous real estate magnate.

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The empowerment concept, combined with discipline and the desire to succeed is a great start. I also.need structure and time management as working full time is always a never ending distraction.

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Ai is an invaluable tool. The possibilities are endless.

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Bill,s Outline to Script Learned: Yes, I can write right after hernia surgery. The pen always wins. Seriously, I went back and indeed made changes per this lesson and the video preceeding. My screenplay ” Cane” comes out at 120 pages. I am attempting economazation by virtue of this lesson. At 100k per page it is essential to say it best and quickest. Lengthy scripts may be discarded immediately. One item lacking was my failure to introduce the Antagonist early on, say by page 11. I often refere to earlier lessons with ScreewU including this class. The late Syd Field,s book has become a quasi Bible of sorts. For my current script: Totally eliminated 4 scenes. If they do not advance either the story or a specific character, they must be removed. I made improvements to 9 scenes by following the 2 rules above. What is really interesting is the addition of 6 new scenes via economization. The script is actually 11 pages shorter

I believe by the end of this Rewrite Class “Cane” will be shorter still.

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Bill elevates key characters. Learned. I neglected to explained my Antagonist early in the story. This is a key lesson learned. I have now introduced my Antagonist, psychotic oil exec Robert Conley. JR. Within the first four pages. By page 6 we need to know the basic tenets of a screenplay,s story. After a severe waterspout ravages metro Miami Conley dismisses the event as ” normal” tropical weather. Protagonist Dr. Tomo Nikigami claims it is a sign of a worsening climate. Very soon in late ACT 1 we see Conley Jr. watching Dr. Nikigami after Nikigami claims the very same waterspouts in Miami as the start of the dreaded Nikigami Sequence. This will culminate in “Cane” , the greatest hurricane in 100, 000 years. Nikigami,s assertion that CO2 is the culprit sends Conley,Jr into a panic. Dr. Nikigami,s bombshell announcement could cost Conley billions in lost profits. I have heightened the acrimony between Prot. and Antg much sooner with identification of Antg Conley sooner as well. These critical changes early on help dramatize key scenes later in the script. I believe additional changes are likely before “Cane” is shopped. I also better define my secondary talent and their respective roles and dialogue .

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Bill Curley Solving Major Problems. Learned: This lesson told me a rewrite was absolutely required. Scene upgrades and changes: Opening. Protagonist Dr. Tomo Nikigami leaves a research ship with an ominous response to a ship captain,s question. Immediately thereafter a monster waterspout smashes Miami as Nikigami heads for the airport. The waterspout creates more opportunity as it sets up the Inciting Incident, one involving a cover up of Global Warming some 55 years earlier when Nikigami was a 22 year old student. Key Incident Ac1 to 2. Nikigami makes good on a bombshell announcement. This begins Nikigami,s danger zone . Antagonist psychotic oil exec Robert Conley, Jr sees the professor,s press conference. He immediately plans to silence him having recieved repeated reports from a student spy inplant. Nikigami,s revelation likely exposes those who assasinated JFK due to oil deposits discoverd of the Vientam coast with the direct help of both the CIA and an oil company owned by Conley,s very father. The bombshell press conference also endangers billions in oil industry profits by questioning the need for both the Canadian Tar Sands and Keystone pipeline projects. Midpoint and Story Twist. New scenes here. Conley has ordered a hit on Nikigami. Five assasins flown from Miami to Wisconsin smash into Nikigami,s Lake Mendota condo to kill him. Nikigami, skilled with swordsmenship learned in his youth back in Japan, grabs a Japanese Honshu sword and takes out all five would be killers one by one. Act 3 Lowpoint. More opportunities for scene improvement. The Monster hurricane called ” Cane” has destroyed Florida and ravaged the US East Coast is dying in the High Arctic. It will flip Earth,s climate to a runaway Mesozoic “Hot House” climate for the next 50 million years. Nikigami , now with the President and several others at the Pentagon are flow in to a battered but rebuilt Jacksonville,FL airport courtesy of the Navy Seabees in Air Force One. Ending: I think this final scence culminating the ending may be one of Hollywood,s classis scenes much like the ending in the 1968 classic “Planet of the Apes”. Nikigami, President Hans Bitterman, Army General Butch Majkowski and a handful of Seconday individuals exit two military Humvees. The stare southward in stunned silence and manifest horror. Severely damaged I 95 runs onto an open ocean. Florida is GONE.

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Bill’s Core Elements. Learned” This was a valuable, I dare say required lesson. I went back to my script with bountiful new notes. My pitch is more direct and informative. “Stalked by a psychotic oil exec, a research professor must outsmart assasins, warn the President of climate Armegeddon. ” “Cane” is a combination of two genres, Sci fi and thriller. …. . I added dialogue in Act 1 to introduce my Antagonist much sooner along with other key characters to best snapshot their normal or old” ways before my Inciting Incident. Character profiles are now, after review of the complete screenplay, better matched to dialogue and action. I also added missing subtext as required. This rewrite class is essential for any screenplay project.

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Bill Curley Rewrite Lesson 5 Story Lines Learned: The importance of Secondary characters cannot be ignored or underestimated. Indeed they are absolute requirements to properly advance the story. Protagonist Dr.Tomo Nikigami: Opening: Nikigami wraps up ocean based research. His conversation with a Navel Captain regarding record warm seas surface temps is a Set Up

Inciting Incident: Nikigami summons two of his trusted grad students. He confides to both of a 55 year old cover up of Global Warming. He will announce this during what will look like a routine lecture. Key Incident: Nikigami makes the announcement in a bombshell format. Midpoint: Five hired killers sent to Nikigami,s lake front condo to kill him by psychotic oil CEO Robert Conley,Jr are dismembered by Nikigami when he uses a Japanese Ninja sword. ACT 3 Low Point Nikigami is now stalked by Conley. The Monster storm warned by him is now heading to Florida. Survive Conley’s attacks and warn the President are two vital “musts”. Ending: Antagonist Conley,s dies during the height of the “Cane” mega hurricane. Antagonist:Psychotic oil CEO Robert Conley Jr Opening: A few pages into script Conley watches former Pres Trump blast climate scientists on TV. He calls the worsening threats of climate extremism a ” hoax from China,”. Shortly thereafter a monster water-polo roars down Collins Ave. Inciting Incident: A university campus spy informs Conley of Nikigami,s alarmist lecture at Southern Wisconsin State University. Key Incident: After Nikigami,s bombshell announcement of a massive climate cover up Conley makes Nikigami for murder. The professor must be silenced, otherwise Conley Oil CEO will lose billions. Midpoint: Conley sends a five ninja assasination squad to Nikigami,s Madison,WI Lake Mendota condo. Act 3 low point: Conley,s attempts to silence Nikigami fail when Secret Service personal ordered by the President keep Nikigami alive. Conley then is eaten alive by a gator when he slides into a retention pond during the height of the “Cane” storm. Supporting Actress AP reporter Robin Sotomaya. Opening: Sotomayor talks shop at her office. It appears to be a normal day of work. Key Incident: During Nikigami,s bombshell announcement AP reporter Robin Sotomaya ,a fellow Japanese by race, grills Nakigami with several critical questions. They form a romantic friendship throughout the remainder of the script. Midpoint: While entertained by Nikigami at a romantic dinner at his condo Sotomaya and Nikigami are both attacked by invading Ninjas hired by Miami based Conley, Jr. Ending: Sotomaya and several others exit military Humvees. She stares into an open ocean just 20 miles south of Jacksonville,FL. Supporting actress grad student Amy Hollis. Opening: After leaving a Navy research ship Nikigami phones one of his grad students Amy Hollis from Miami immediately after several waterspouts smash the Miami Beach area. Midpoint: After an attack at his lakeside condo Nikigami informs Hollis they are being watched by a psychotic oil exec. Their lives may be in danger. Act 3 low point. On a charter fishing boat with her grandparents, Hollis is informed by fellow grad student Conner O,Corley of Ireland that the “Cane” super storm is rapidly worsening. The mega storm is heading right towards them. End: After barely surviving the storm by hunkering down deep inside Fort St Augustine Hollis and several others are intercepted by two military Humveers moving south along a severely damaged I 95 freeway. Riding in one of the vehicles they all stop atop a 100 foot sand dune. She exits as do others including Nikigami, the President and Army General ” Butch” Majkowski. She along with everyone else stare looking south mesmorized. I 95 runs into an open ocean. Florida is destroyed!

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Bill Curley Rewrite Lesson 4. Name: Protagonist Dr. Tomo Nikigami. Role: Climatology Professor Core Traits: Intelligent/Sincere/ Perceptive Want/ Need: To avenge a cover up of Global Warming 50 plus years ago. Flaw/ Wound: Loss of wife to cancer. Secret Agenda: To expose the CIA and oil industry. Internal Delema: Should he expose a life threatening lie and risk his life doing so. Why Role: Dr. Nikigami was muzzled years ago. He now has a score to settle and, in addition, must warn the President of a monster hurricane called “Cane”. Name: Antagonist Robert Conley, Jr. Role: Psychotic oil exec. Traits: Manipulator/ Explosive/Dishonest Want/Need: To dominate oil industry with billions made the result. Flaw/ Wound Loss of only son in a FL. shark attack. Secret/Agenda: To discredit climate crisis scientists. Internal Delema: To ignore a pesky climate scientist or have him eliminated. Role: Conley and Nikigami are Polar opposites. Both provide conflict, controversy and intolerance for each other.

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Bill Curley. Lesson 3 Learned: I was really encouraged by incorporating this lesson with the newly learned 4 Act structure. That was a real breakthrough. All these lessons and insights are now better understood and performed with the 4 Act paradigm. Title: “Cane” Concept: A true Sci Fi climate disaster story with a mixture of the Thriller genre , a condition that adds excitement. Genre: Primarily Sci Fi with elements of the Thriller genre. Main Conflict: A university professor must outwit a psychotic oil CEO and warn the US President of a mammoth hurricane. Purpose: A professor,s prediction of climate disasters made 55 years ago is now happening. While attempting to convince high level authorities of the likelyhood of a monster hurricane, the prof must outwit assasins hired to kill him by a Miami based oil exec. Demand: The professor, Dr. Tomo Nikigami, must without fail appeal and convince the US President, Hans Bitterman, that action must take place now, principally the complete evacuation of Florida. Mission: To survive a ninja attack at his lakeside condo and continue to sound the alarm. Escalating Action: The oil exec is determined to silence the prof. At the same time indications in the Atlantic suggest the development of a Biblical type storm system. It is the feared super hurricane ” Cane”. Hero: Climatology Professor at Southern Wisconsin State University, Dr. Tomo Nikigami. Antagonist: Mr. Robert Conley of Conley Oil LMT. Conley is a psychotic oil CEO whose late father was accused of rising CO2 levels by an exchange student from Japan back in the mid 1960,s. That student, incredibly, was Tomo Nikigami. Now oin 2025 Professor Nikigami threatens Conley,s oil empire. Structure: Inciting Incident. A secret meeting between Nikigami and two grad students will lead to a bombshell announcement of a massive cover up of Global Warming in 1966. The parties responsible were involved with JFK,s assisination due to oil discovered off the coast of South Vietnam. A student spy in Nikigami,s class, one placed there by Conley to monitor liberal climate change professors like Dr. Nikigamial, reports to her boss, that being Robery Conley. Midpoint Twist. Conley ups the ante. He sends five trained assasins to Nikigami,s Madison. WI lakeside condo to murder him. Act 3 to 4 low point: Nikigami is now tailed by informants to set up another kill op. The storm he feared is now rapidly developing in the western Atlantic Basin. He, Nikigami, is rescued in a college football stadium from danger by a military chopper via Presidential decree and is wisked to the Pentagon War Room to assist President Hans Bitterman as the ” Cane” megastorm is about to destroy Florida. Act 4. A Biblical disaster unfolds. The massive hurricane is at peak. As it moves and ultimately dies in the High Arctic the planet,s current climate is rapidly flipped to a Mesozoic Hot House climate not seen I 70 million years. Final scene Act 4: All the main characters stand next to a couple military Humvees just south of Jacksonville, FL. I 95, severely damaged and unrecognizable, runs straight into an open ocean. Florida is GONE.

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Bill Curley LessGone. Learned: Proper, correct structure makes for a great story and script. Genre: Sci Fi and Thriller. Title: “Cane”. High Concept: The story revolves around a university professor,s announcement of a massive cover up of Global Warming 55 years ago. ……… .. …. Opening; A Navy captain asks a prof what he learned performing open ocean research. The reply is foreboding. Record warm ocean temps spell imminent doom. … Inciting Incident: The prof calls his two graduate students to a sudden meeting on campus. He will announce a bombshell. Key Incident: Prof gathers all at what looks like a routine lecture. It is not. Prof announces a cover up of Global Warming and the possibility of a massive hurricane. Key Incident: The announcement is made. A deranged oil exec plans prof,s death. Midpoint: While disclosing a climate cover up with a reporter, prof,s condo is smashed by five assasins. Act 3 to 4. Low Point. The prof just survived a murder attempt on his life. Now stalked. Storm has developed as suspected. 17 hours to evacuate FL. Act 4. “Cane” has come and departed. The climate is now flipping to a Mesozoic ” hot house” not seen on planet Earth in 70 million years. Resolution: All characters stand next to a couple military Humvees on a devastated I 95. They stare in horror. The freeway runs into an open ocean. Florida is gone.

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Genre: Sci Fi/ Thriller. Title: “Cane”. High Concept: This is a climate disaster film that takes us to a Mesozoic Hot House film,s end. Great demographics and original story. Main Conflict: A professor must warn the President of a massive, destructive hurricane while his life is in danger. Journey: A professor must expose a massive cover up of Global Warming. He travels from depressed indifference to dynamically exposing the cover up with his life now at stake. Opposition: A psychotic oil CEO attempts to murder a climate Scientist after exposing a massive cover up all the while a huge hurricane is forming. Pitch: ” “Mr President, you,sir, have 19 hours to evacuate Florida.” Imortant scenes: Opening Scene: EXT Open Ocean Day A Super quotes Scripture foreboding an upcoming natural disaster.”Woe to you oh Earth and Sea for the devil is near and his time is short”. Next scene in Opening: EXT USNR “Lapham” Forward Deck Day A ship s captain inquires to the research done by a climate scientist/ professor. The answer is chilling and foreboding of things to come. Inciting Incident: INT Lecture Hall Day A professor elaborates re his research at sea aboard a US ship. He announces a huge cover up. After a student spy reports to her boss, a psychotic oil CEO, a professor,s life is marked for murder. Midpoint: INT Condo Study Night. A professor and female guest are violent interrupted by five Ninjas assigned to kill him. The professor gets the upper hand when he uses a sword to kill all five attackers, people sent by a murderous oil exec. Act 2 to 3 (low point) INT Pentagon War Room Day The professor, now safe, must deal with a rapidly developing mega hurricane. A P3 Orion is lost in the storm,s eye. Florida is under seige. A massive, irreversible climate shift is happening. Act 4. EXT Damaged I 95 Day. Cane is now in the High Arctic. The damage is profound. A boat full of survivors met two Humvees touring a ravaged Florida. End Scene: EXT Stub End of I 95 Day. Several people in two Humvees stare at a severely damaged I 95. The freeway runs into an open ocean . Florida is Gone

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Bill Curley. Four scripts completed. I hope to vastly improve my writing skills

I am nearly 70 years old and still writing like a crazed college Freshman.

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William Curley 4 done. I want to continue learning. Special: I will be 70 in Feb.

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Hello all gifted writers. My name: William Curley of Milwaukee. Four scripts done. Hope to vastly improve my writing. I will be 70 this Feb.

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Bill Curley Scary As Hell. Learned: The combination of this lesson with skilled placement of emotions gives rise to a potentially superb horror script. I have improved my story immensely. INT – Police Car – Day. Two Three Lakes Police Officers rush to a distress call placed by thier Chief, AL Verbel. Officers Lisa Rawlins and Isia Loomis head to a construction site next to a reputed Indian burial ground. RAWLINS Chief said there were reports of giant sized forest creatures in a near by woods. Wanted us as backup. LOOMIS. What! That,s absurd. RAWLINS. I know. Sounds preposterous. Isiah, those were his very words. Suddenly a radio call. VERBAL ( O.C.) Lisa, over? RAWLINS. Go ahead, Chief. VERBEL (O.C.) They retreated back into the woods.Your 20? RAWLINS. Coming to you. Five minutes out. VERBAL (O.C.) 10 4. RAWLINS. He actually saw those things. LOOMIS. What things? What did he see? RAWLINS. Giant porcupines. Raccoons. Both bigger than a black bear. LOOMIS. Fucking Insane. RAWLINS. I think that Indian burial ground is connected. My boyfriend is into Native American stuff. Said there are legends about monsters. Bam! Another radio call. VERBAL ( O.C.) Lisa, there,s something else coming out of the woods behind the trailer. OMG These things are God damn monsters. Half man, half animal. Beat No. No. They,re coming straight for me. RAWLINS. Chief, were almost on top of you. VERBEL ( O.C.) I..I can,t stop them. Thier fucking ugly. Someone opened the gates to hell. Gunfire heard. More shots. .VERBEL ( O. C.) They won,t stop. It,s that bog. They,re coming from the forest. No. O,God, no. The 2 cops arrive a minute later. Find a half devoured chief. RAWLINS. Fuck . Fuck me. The Monsters remain. Assemble. Ready for another attack.

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Bill Curley Scares, Releases and Creepy Times Learned: This latest lesson will allow me to further articulate my script. EXT – Construction Trailer -Day. A Chevy Tahoe with a placard stating ” Three Lakes Police” stops at a construction site. Town Chairman Ed Lederman exits. Greets site boss Jim Banister. Lederman. Morning boss. Getting ready to grade. Banister. You bet. Surveying the 47 plots starts next week. Got your site all picked out. It overlooks the bog soon to be a lake. Lederman. Not a word to anyone. Banister. Lips are sealed with Gorilla Glue.I could not do this project , Ed, without you help. Both men walk to a tree line. Lederman hears a rustling in the woods. Lederman. Jim, did you hear that? Banister. No. Lederman points. Lederman. Over hear. Might be a huge black bear watching us. Suddenly a huge doe bolts past. Bannister. Damn thing was in a hurry. Probably chased by a horny buck. Lederman. Yep. Giannis when he wants sex. Both laugh loudly. Banister. Good one, Ed. Putting you on SNL. They progress to an old growth forest. Enter. Reach an overlook a few minutes later. Banister. Viola. Here,s your site . Nice 3000 Sq ft 4 seasons Northwoods retreat. Lederman Fantastic. Suddenly more noise. Branches break. Ledderman. Press following us. Banister. No. There are still in the dark. Maybe that horney buck . Those 2 deer should get a room in town. Men gaze over a bog, one formed in the last Ice Age. Banister. Lake will be fairly shallow. No more than.. Again more noise. Louder. Closer. Lederman. Jim., what the hell is back there? Both startled. Stare. Banister. Whatever it is it,s closing in. Lederman. Fuck me. See it. Banister. I don,t belive my own two eyes. It s …a monster porcupine. Look at those quils. It eyes the men Starts coming at them Banister. Run. Get inside the trailer.

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Bill Curley Scares, Releases and Creepy Moments Learned: This latest writing lesson will provide refinement to my horror script. I seea definite improvement in my writing. EXT – Construction Trailer – Day A Chevy Equinox with a decal “Three Lakes Police “

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Bill Curley Scares,Releases and Creepy Moments Learned This Lesson 14 further helps define and articulate my ideas for a horror screenplay. I am.learning in this class. EXT – Construction Trailer – Day

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Bill Curley Level 3 Horror Emotions Learned. This last lesson provides the ultimate scene, dialogue,etc for a credible horror movie. EXT- Northwoods Road -Day. Three Lakes Police Chief Al Verbel and office Lisa Rawlins race to a construction trailer after receiving a panic stricken call. CAMERA pans over head displaying a tall pine forest and azure blue lakes. INT- Police Car – Day. Rawlins. Chief, what went down in this trailer? Verbel. That is exactly what we,re going to find out. Someone called us. Commotion. Hysterical. Said ” they,re all dead”. Rawlins. Dead? Verbel. Then this person screamed,” help us, please help us”. Rawlins. Oh, my God! EXT -Construction Trailer -Day. The police car sreames to a stop. Dust. Verbel. Lisa, draw your Glock We don,t know what or who is near. Rawlins. What? Verbel. This sounds like a black bear attack. Rawlins. Chief, here,s my little secret. I don,t like this. Verbel. 10 4. They approach the trailer. Door ajar Blood spurts everywhere. Verbel. My worst fears are coming true. INT – Construction Trailer – Day Grotesque carnage. Deaths. Dripping blood. Shredded body parts. Rawlins screams. Vebel looses his recent lunch. Rawlins. Dear God. What possible caused this. Verbel. It,s that damn bog. I had a bad felling about that place. Rawlins. What do you mean? Verbel. No more than two weeks ago we found a surveyor at a place called ” the overlook”. It,s part of this bog project. The guy had giant six feet long porcupine quils rimmed into his body. Rawlins. No! Movement. They are not alone. A repugnant looking monster takes aim at Verbel. Rawlins. Al, it,s behind you. Verbel attempts escape. Hopeless. The Wendigo pounces on the Chief. Rawlins empties her Glock. No use. Verbel. Lisa, run. You can,t help me. Rawlins screams. Verbel is devoured live.

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Bill Curley Level 2 Horror Emotions Learned: I know can see how and why horror must be a rising crescendo, a pattern of ever increasing angst. EXT- Construction Site- Day Three Lakes, WI. Police Chief AL Verbel, 57, stocky exits a police car. He questions Nortwoods Development owner Jack Banister, 53, pudgy and his site Forman Jim Sebieski,31, toned regarding a missing employee. Verbel Jim, can you tell me just exactly what went down here? Banister Yes, Chief. Tim Workman, one of our surveyors went out to our site 24 hours ago. We are plotting our site for high end homes. Verbal The Bog? Banister Yes. This includes the old growth forest that survived the lumber barons. It survived. Rumor has it lumberjacks were murdered when they tried to log out the site. Workman went to a place called ” The Overlook “. Verbel Go on. Senieski Tim went to this Overlook site. He called me. Said something was stalking him. Verbel What? Was he being followed. Sebieski Yes. He was certain of it. Verbel What happened next? Sebieski He gazed into the woods. Saw a monster sized porcupine. Verbal Monster sized? Sebieski Absolutely. He was sized up. The beast then charged him. He was screaming via walkie talkie. Hysterical. Verbal And? Sebieski Said he had giant quils shot into his body. Verbal Jesus, Mary and Joseph. All three men become anxious. Fear creeps. Verbel. I want to see this Overlook. Banister It,s close. 12 minute walk. Verbel. Let s go. I want to investigate this site. All begin a trek.Sebieski This way. 10 min later. They arrive. Gets ugly fast. Banister. Jesus Christ. There s blood everywhere. Verbel studies. Verbel This is a crime scene. Sebieski heaves. Collapses . Oh,God. No! Banister, Verbal rush over. Banister Christ, it,s Workman Verbal Or what,s left of him. Verbal What the hell..these quils are stuck in his torso. Sebieski What was that? Movement in the Woods. It gets louder. Banister There,s something out there. Verbal pulls out his Glock. It,s right in front of us. Banister I don,t like this. Verbel That,s a big 10 4. The rustling increases. Sebieski What the fuck ws that? Verbal What did you see? AL, it was fucking huge. Waddling. Sebieski Time for stage left! Suddenly it appears. A monster porcupine lager than a male bear. It charges all three men. Verbel Got the fuck out of here. Verbel empties his Glock. It only stuns the aggressive beast.

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Bill Curley Level 2 Horror Emotions Learned: This lesson is a great guide to elevating and articulating my script. The key to all our projects:

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Bill Curley Horror Emotion Scene. Learned: These next three lessons will form the progressive patina of my screenplay. The crescendo of terrifing emotions will create a great , credible story. I am using my Inciting Incident for this lesson 10. EXT – Construction Site – Day. Forman Jim Sebieski, 31, toned and surveyor Tim Workman, 22, youthful talk outside next to a project trailer. SEBIESKI. Tim, we need these final figures to insure Plot accuracy. State is constantly on us. WORKMAN. You,d think Madison would have better things to do. Heading to the overlook for referencing. Workman walks briskly. Enters an old growth forest. SOBIESKI Tim, your walkie talkie. WORKMAN. Jeez, thanks boss. EXT-Thick Forrest- Day. Workman process to an overlook. A vast, ancient bog lies before him. He HEARS a slight rustling. WORKMAN Ah, who,s there? Damn <font face=”inherit”>chipmunks. Now silence. Set, s up transit. It happens again. This time closer and louder. WORKMAN. What the fuck. Who,s behind those birch trees? He looks around again. Listens. Continues survey. WORKMAN ( solo voce) Let,s see. Due north is.. Now a scary grunt. A huge animal perhaps. WORKMAN Stop fucking around . Show yourself you asshole. Grabs his walkie talkie. WORKMAN. Jim. do you copy? SIEBIESKI (O.C.) Go ahead, Tim. WORKMAN. There’s something out here stalking me. SOBIESKI. Tim, what are you talking about. Who,s out there watching you? Suddenly it appears. It,s a monster sized porcupine aiming at Workman. WORKMAN. Oh, fuck. God what is this thing? SOBIESKI. What the hell. What,s going on? WORKMAN. Christ, it,s a monster porcupine. …no. No! The beast rolls atop Workman. Huge quils </font>lance<font face=”inherit”> his body. He struggles. Thrashes about. SEBIESKI (O.C.) Tim! Tim! Only silence.</font>

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Bill Curley Outline Readible. Learned: The combination of our previous lessons now gives us a developing outline for a possible horror film. Opening Scene: EXT-Woods-Day. A muscular Indian warrior,32, and his nine year old son stop at an overlook. They dismount horses looking at a vast bog before them. WARRIOR. Son, I have brought you to our sacred land, this woods and the bog before you. This is our sacred burial site since the ice melted. You must never enter this area unless the spirits allow it. SON. But why, father? WARRIOR. It is our culture. Our legacy. Only the spirits allow. No one else. Suddenly two giant forest creatures, a porcupine and raccoon amble in. They stop. This shocks the youth. SON. Father, look. Giant beasts! WARRIOR. Son, do not fear these creatures. They will not hurt you. SON. But father.. WARRIOR. They are the guardians. They will forever protect our sacred land. The bog and the woods we stand in. Situation: A warrior and son enter a very sacred area. Horror Situation Two monster sized forest animals suddenly appear. A nine year old youth is startled, then calmed. Reaction. The youth is calmed by his warrior father. Denial. Son cannot believe size.

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Bill Curley Character Journey Track What I Learned: Just we earlier saw the various tracks to a horror script, the character component helps us construct the overall story. When the tracks are overlaid a great movie is the likely result. Main Character Tracks Thus Far. Jack Banister Role: Construction Co. owner and CEO Traits: 53, Alpha male. No nonsense. Prejudiced. Jim Sobieski 31. Construction site foreman. Traits: Straight shooter. Fears. Issues at workplace. Wants: . Adulation from boss. Likable Yes. Other characters on early development; Three Lakes,WI. Chairman Ed Ledbetter. Conspires with Jack Banister to ignore dire warnings from the bog. Al Verbel. Town police chief. Skeptical of warnings from.witnesses re bog oddities. Gets eaten alive by bog snake. Tim Workman: Laborer. Sees horrors first hand. Called a ” lunatic” after reporting sightings of giant sized forest creatures. Lisa Rawlins. 27. Police officer. Begins to believe horrors of the bog before others. Bill Sommers. Boyfriend of office Rawlins. Jealous of other male suites to girlfriend Rawlins. Becomes to believe of bog horrors. Debbie Conners: A Supervisor with the town gov. Begins to suspect Ledbetter,s role in bog deaths. Nagawicka: Native Anerican squaw that mysteriously appears in Act 3. She reverses deaths from Indian lore. Additional traits and roles all characters on going through class.

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Bill Curley Monster Reveal Track. What I Learned: “The Thing” really opened my eyes after watching it. Having seen this film and the original I now know how skillfully our lesson 7 was imbeded within the story. My monsters are actually two tiered within the story. Initially we see giant sized normally seen firest animals. The Monster size is dramatized to show that they are ” guardians” of an ancient sacred burial grounds for Native Americans. Later as my story unfolds the monsters become alien like and infinitely more deadly i.e. the ” Wendigos”, terrifying beasts of Indian lore. Opening Scene: Demand: Giant sized raccoons and porcupines accompany an Indian warrior and his son to a sacred burial site off limits until entry is approved by the “spirits. The father instructs his son of the importance of this bog and adjoining old growth forest. A warning is given. The large beasts are ” guardians” of ghis primal area. Reveal: The huge creatures appear and walk with both Native Americans. Inciting Incident in Act 1. Demand: Why has a surveyor not returned to a construction trailer after entering an ancient burial ground. Reveal: The young man has several huge porcupine quils slicing through his body. A last minute frantic description only heightens the intrigue. Key Incident Act 1 to Act 2. Several.members of a construction crew are found torn apart limb to limb in a sacred Indian burial site destined to be a Northwoods real estate development. Demand: Several members of a construction crew have gone missing. Reveal: Their remains are found in a bloodied pit of shredded body parts. Midpoint: Demand: Scary, alleged sightings of grotesque looking creatures. Reveal: Terrifing Indian lore monsters aka The ” Wendigos” exit an ancient burial site and surround a workplace trailer. Act 3. Demand. Townspeople hear a commotion and sounds of panic. Reveal: Horrifying beasts resembling a deer, devil and small dinosaur attack a small Wisconsin Northwoods community as an ancient Native American burial site was desecrated repeatedly despite a crescendo of warnings. End: Demand. Wholesale carnage is all that remains of a peaceful community. Reveal. National Guardsmen walk about a disaster area of dead bodies, exterminated monsters. The fight is over but with a huge cost. A lesson is sadly learned.

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Bill Curley Character Death Track L 6. What I Learned : Characters don,t die without a reason and sequence. The pattern of death and who actually dies aids the overall structure and flow of a horror script. This lesson 6 is very informative. Character Death One. Surveyor Why: Unknowingly violated sacred burial area.How: Fatal encounter with a huge porcupine guarding sacred area. Character Death Two Investigative Reporter. Why: This individual mocks the sacred area. How: Reporter is pulled into ground by a moss monster. Character Death Three: Forman Why. Man intentionally challenges sacred burial site. How. A monster sized racoon eats man alive. Character Death Four. Police Officers Why. All have invaded the bog and old growth forest area. How. Stalking Wendigo Grotesque bodily attacks. Character Death Five Salesperson Why. Young woman innocently enters sacred area. How. Standing by the bog victim is overwhelmed by giant blood suckers from the bog. Character Death Six Store Owner Why. Defies all warnings re bog. Enters. How. Body parts everywhere. Wendigos. Character Death Seven Seven Local Sheriff. Why. Entered sacred area sacred area to warn. Saves lives. How. Several Wendigos feast on body. Survivor. Indian Squaw Nagawicka. She ultimately stops the attacks. Sacred area forever left undeveloped. A sobering lesson learned from Native American lore.

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Bill Curley Horror Situation Track. What I Learned. There now exists a myriad of combinations to express horror in my script. I feel like a painter with 50 new colors to choose from. While still constructing my screenplay here are a few possibilities. Opening Scene: Isolated. Warning. An Indian warrior and son approach a sacred burial site in 1674 Wisconsin. The father warns his son never to violate this large old growth forest and attached bog. Suddenly two giant size forest creatures appear. They are ” the guardians”. Inciting Incident: Isolated/ Attacked. A surveyor violates the ancient sacred area for a real estate development. He is Isolated and then attacked by a monster sized porcupine.When he staggers back to a construction trailer: Spooky/Monster. Several fellow workers see a man with giant quils lanced in his torso. This immediately creates Paronioa. Act 3i.e low point. Countless Wendigos, monsters of Native American lore invade a small Wisconsin town in revenge. Torture/ Witness Death. Spooky/ Monsters visible. My horror script ” The Bog” should have multiple combinations of what is seen in this lesson.

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Bill Curley My Concept Group: My group consists of both professionals in the construction and real estate profession and local politicians. All play active roles in the screenplay “The Bog”. Dying Pattern: My dying pattern consists of several people, professionasl and laborers. Many in both groups recieve hidious deaths when intentionally violating an ancient Native American Barial ground in the Wisconsin Northwoods. A showdown comes about at script,s end. Leader: A real estate development firm and its CEO insist on violating sacred burial grounds to build luxury homes in an ancient bog rimmed by old growth forests protected for centuries. Rescue: Nagawicka. This beautiful Indian squaw reverses the pattern of horrific deaths and preserves an ancient area of forest from developent. Any individual in violation will experience an agonizing death by any one of asorted Wendigos, horrific monsters of Indian lore. Innocent: Several workers of a land development firm recieve gruesome deaths while performing thier jobs. Deaths occur when giant porcupines and assorted woodland animals become giant sized via Indian spirits. Complainer: A construction worker begins a trend of constant bickering and decension when questioning the merit of the very project he is working on. Moral One: One of the employees openly questions the role of his boss in invading sacred burial grounds. Monsters spare his life. Monster Bait: A local real estate agent attempts to communicate with monsters deep inside a burial ground. This individual merely seals he own fate. Note: Other characters will be placed as needed. What I learned: Every horror movie has succesful templates of which to construct a viable screenplay. I now have an excellent framework by which I can develop my unique story.

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Bill Curley Terrifing Monster Lesson 2 My monster is the horrifying representation of ancient Native American angst, the sucking Wendigo. Terror: The Wendigo appears in several forms, all grotesque, sly, vengeful and very intelligent. Mystery: The wrath of Native American lore, the Wendigo, will not manifest itself unless summoned by Native American spirits. Should it suddenly appear prepare for a living hell. Appearence: The Wendigo has variations in stature, appearance and intent. All posess deadly spikes, maiming claws and a beyond repulsive look. Imagine a buck, human and crab in one Visage. Rules: The Wendigo has no rules. Stealth, cunning, purpose and domination are but a few characteristics. The ancient forests of sacred Indian burial grounds represent thier unchallenged domain. Mythology: Called upon only when wronged, the Wendigo is borne in legend and secrecy. It is a direct function of Native American spirits when those same spirits are violated. Learned: The mere notion of a monster or even several of them denotes sophisticated in a given film not realized by a viewer. With the usage of this lesson I can now construct a viable monster, one guaranteed to terrorize all.

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Lesson 1: Horror Conventions. Movie Title: ” The Monster” Terrorized Characters: Mother. Estranged Daughter. Tow Truck Driver. Isolation: All three characters find themselves on a desolate, remote Wisconsin backroad nestled in a thick woods. Note: Filmed in Ontario. The mother and daughter are terrorized when thier car becomes disabled after attempting to avoid hitting a deer. A tow truck driver, while hooking up thier car for tow is attacked by a hideous looking monster, one lurking in a roadside woods watching . The unfortunate man is ripped apart with one of his severed limbs landing on the mother,s windshield. Monster: An ugly, horrifying Vvisage with a gorilla type body. 90 % of the face is a massive set of gnarling, menacing teeth. Yes, this Monster was quite fearful. High Tension: Mother and estranged daughter become stranded after avoiding hitting a deer. The must now wait seemingly forever for a tow truck. While waiting ominous sounds and movements are seen in a wooded area adjacent to a disabled 4 door vehicle. The situation with a stranded car, scary surroundings and the horrifying death of the tow truck driver catapults the location to surreal disreality. Moral Statement: Prior to thier road trip mother and daughter had an estranged relationship. Fighting and bickering were both the norm at home, in the family car, etc. The horrifying experience both had required support and protection from.one to another. A deadly, ravaging monster reunited an internecine mother/ daughter relationship. What I Learned: The horrifying movie readily fit our class model, a realization I made only after looking at our class parameters.

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