Jennifer Williams
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INT. OFFICE LOBBY – DAY
James exits the elevator and heads to the door where MICHAEL LEE, 40s, dressed in a power suit, looks like the high-powered executive he is.
They greet each other with a dap.
JAMES
Hello, my brother. Happy you were free for lunch.
MICHAEL
Glad you called. I wanted someone to go to Grand Market with me. They have this new Jamaican spot I want to try.
EXT. GRAND AVENUE – DAY
The two walked briskly to Grand Market.
INT. GRAND MARKET – DAY
Michael picked up his food, popped the cap on his Ginger Beer, and took a long swig. He glances around the market.
James picks up his food but skips the ginger beer. James finds an empty table near the back of the restaurant.
MICHAEL (CONT’D)
Aah, that’s good.
JAMES
How’s that beautiful wife of yours? You know, all the guys still talk about is how they can’t believe you got her to marry you.
MICHAEL
You all got jokes, but I’ve been happily married for five years, and you are all still single. She’s doing well, and I keep her happy.
JAMES
You’re right. But I want to get there.
MICHAEL
What’s so urgent that you needed to meet right away?
JAMES
You remember I told you about Delores Chaney, the Chief of our Marketing Department? We’ve known each other for more than five years, but we’ve been dating for a few months, and I’m feeling her but getting mixed messages. I’m not sure how to move forward.
MICHAEL
Yes, I remember. She’s the one you took on the picnic, right? Sounds like it’s more than feeling her.
JAMES
Yes, that’s the one.
MICHAEL
You’ve never been uncertain of any of the women you’ve dated in the past.
JAMES
It’s not like that. I see us as being that ‘Power Couple.’ You know, she fits the business world.
MICHAEL
You know that’s not how relationships work, right?
JAMES
Michael, man, what do I need to do? I want to have what you and Carol have with Delores.
MICHAEL
James, you know what to do; you just have to make sure she knows you want her because she’s the woman who makes you a better man. She has to feel your passion for her.
Michael grabs his plate, James follows, and they quietly head back to the office.
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ACT 2
INT. DELORES HOME – DAY
Delores and Mauri have breakfast before starting their day. Mauri pours a glass of peach juice and places the platter of bacon on the counter between them.
DELORES
Mauri, I might be late coming home today.
MAURI
Mom, you said you were going to start looking out for yourself and not working late.
DELORES
I know but I have lots to take care of since I returned from vacation.
INT. DELORES’ OFFICE – DAY
Everyone in her department has left for the day. Delores is on her computer.
Delores returns to occupying her time online, but it doesn’t serve her. Searches for Lyle online.
INT. DELORES HOME – NIGHT
Delores gets home from work and sees Mauri has gone to bed. She grabs some fruit from the refrigerator and goes to her laptop. Delores calls Kendra to share what she found online.
DELORES
Hey Kendra, sorry to call so late, but I had to share this with someone.
KENDRA
It’s fine, I’m up. What’s so urgent.
DELORES
I searched online and found a new post with pictures of Lyle, and I guess this is Cindy together at an event.
KENDRA
I thought you were going to stop looking. Let it go, Delores, you’re making yourself miserable.
DELORES
I know you’re right, but…
KENDRA
But nothing. You need to get some sleep; we have an early day tomorrow.
DELORES
I’m letting go. Go night, Kendra.
INT. GYM – DAY
Delores slowly comes out of the funk she’s been under and joins Mauri and Kendra as they prepare to go to the gym; she has a different attitude.
DELORES
I’m ready for our bike race today.
MAURI
It’s about time, but you’re still going to lose.
KENDRA
We’ll see about that I’m feeling energized this morning.
They finish their work out and Delores has scheduled them for the sauna.
MAURI
Mom, sorry, but I have to leave. I’ll take an Uber to class. See you all later.
Delores and Kendra give her a hug and then head for the sauna.
INT. GYM SAUNA – DAY
They find themselves alone in the sauna, which is perfect for Delores.
KENDRA
Spill girl. What’s up? You are usually in a hurry to get to your office.
DELORES
Nothing, I just want to take some time to cool down.
KENDRA
You’re talking to me. It’s that guy, right? James? You’re avoiding him.
DELORES
I can’t avoid him; we work for the same place, but I don’t have to see him first thing when I get in. He always meets me at the elevator, whether it’s flowers, pastries, coffee, or something.
KENDRA
And what’s wrong with that? He’s showing you he’s interested.
DELORES
I know, but it’s a lot.
KENDRA
Delores, James showed you long before Lyle he was interested and you said it was too soon after Trevor’s death. Now, Lyle has turned out wrong. James is still here.
DELORES
I know.
KENDRA
To me, James was and is the relationship you can commit. Think about it.
DELORES
I will. Let’s go so we can both get to work.
INT. DELORES HOME – NIGHT
Mauri, Delores, and Kendra are together for a movie night. Mauri places two pizzas that were delivered on the island.
MAURI
It’s two against one Mom; you have to watch the romantic comedy. We’re tired of the murder mysteries you always choose.
DELORES
Your movie is so unrealistic. I’m just saying.
KENDRA
Suck it up. You’re just mad they haven’t written the script for your life.
They all laugh. The doorbell rings, and Mauri goes to answer it.
VICKI LYNN, 19, follows behind Mauri into the living room.
VICKI LYNN
Hi, Mrs. Chaney. Hi, Ms. Perkins. I hope I’m not interrupting.
Kendra waves.
DELORES
Hello Vicki, welcome to movie night. The more, the merrier.
MAURI
Sorry, guys. I forgot Vicki, and I have a project to complete. We’ll be up in my room.
DELORES
All right, your loss.
Mauri hands Vicki two sodas, grabs one of the pizzas, and the girls head upstairs.
INT. MAURI’S ROOM – NIGHT
Both girls are on the bed eating with books and laptops.
MAURI
Thank you for coming Vicki. I need to finish this tonight because I’ll be away on the weekend.
VICKI
Oh, you’re going with your mom’s new boyfriend.
MAURI
No, he’s not her boyfriend, he’s her co-worker. But he is cute.
VICKI
Is he the guy she vacationed with?
MAURI
No. I think she was job hunting. She was thinking of moving. It’s fine with me because I will have graduated.
VICKI
At least you get to go on a weekend getaway.
MAURI
I won’t if we don’t get finished tonight. Enough about my mom’s lonely life.
Vicki can’t help but laugh and Mauri grabs her book.
INT. DELORES’ LIVING ROOM – NIGHT
Kendra brings the popcorn to the sofa and places it between them, and Delores pours two glasses of wine.
KENDRA
Okay, spill. I want to know about your lunch date with James.
DELORES
It was nothing. I told you we just discussed the camp.
KENDRA
So, you’re going.
DELORES
Mauri and I are going.
Kendra gives her the side-eye and turns up the volume on the movie.
EXT. MALIBU CREEK STATE PARK – DAY
Two buses pull into Malibu Creek State Park. The doors open, and a huge gathering of excited young people and their chaperones file out.
Delores and Mauri get off and retrieve their duffle bags, followed by James.
MAURI
Mom, this place is gorgeous. I can’t wait to hike up to the M.A.S.H. site and take pictures.
DELORES
There’s a schedule, Honey, and you’ll have to wait and follow the leaders’ directions.
JAMES
Mauri, don’t worry; that’s the first activity on the itinerary. We also have a trail ride scheduled. Can you ride?
MAURI
Awesome. Yes, I can. Thank you so much for allowing me to attend with my Mom.
JAMES
You’re welcome. We’re happy to have you in our Jr. Counselors Group.
James helped Delores and Mauri pitch their tent.
BEGIN MONTAGE
-Delores and Mauri sit around the campfire with James close as they make s’mores.
-Mauri works in Mess Tent for Breakfast and enjoys interacting with other counselors
-Group arrives at M.A.S.H site, and Mauri, Delores, and James take pictures at all the landmarks.
-Delores leads a group of campers on a trail ride. They explore the rock formations.
-The day ends around the campfire with singing.
END MONTAGE
EXT. YOUNG CAMP – DAY
James and Delores take an early morning hike on their last day of camp.
JAMES
Delores, I can’t thank you enough for assisting me with the camp.
DELORES
No thanks needed. I enjoyed it. I especially enjoyed seeing Mauri so involved and happy.
JAMES
Yes, I think I have a new friend. She’s a lovely young lady.
DELORES
Thank you, I think so.
James stops them by the lake, and they take in the view. He takes advantage of their alone time, moves closer to her, and takes her hand. To his surprise, she allows it.
JAMES
I hope you don’t mind, but I had the cook pack our breakfast.
DELORES
Good thinking. I starving after the hike up here.
James grabs the blanket from the backpack and lays out the breakfast. They sit and eat, enjoying the warmth of the sun and stunning views.
DELORES
This is the second time you’ve provided me with a feast in the wilderness. Is this your hook, Mr. Price?
JAMES
That all depends; is it working?
Delores grins, picks up her juice, and touches his in a toast.
INT. DELORES’ HOME – NIGHT
Delores sits on the sofa, opens her laptop, and ventures into the Book Lover’s Group.
Kendra comes downstairs from assisting Mauri with her project, flops down next to Delores, and catches her on the site.
KENDRA
I thought you agreed not to go into the group anymore?
DELORES
I’m checking the new book list. I also wanted to upload a couple of critiques I completed.
KENDRA
You’re looking for Lyle.
DELORES
No, I’m not.
KENDRA
I see you. You have the ‘Who’s Online’ list open. You don’t need that for critiques.
All of a sudden, a private message bubble appears. Delores freezes because she can only see the last name, Collins.
INT. DELORES KITCHEN ISLAND – NIGHT
Kendra gets up, heads to the kitchen, grabs two glasses and pours them some wine.
Delores picks up the laptop and follows Kendra into the kitchen.
KENDRA (Cont’d)
Are you going to respond? Maybe he’s ready to talk.
Delores clicks on the bubble, and an audio message appears. She pushes play. A woman’s voice is heard.
AUDIO MESSAGE
You still looking for my husband? I told you, we’re back together. You’d be wise to go about your business!
Delores was stunned. She quickly exited the group.
KENDRA
OMG! Delores, she is a stalker!
DELORES
This is over for me. I’m not going to deal with her. I don’t even know this woman. I only spoke to her that night and haven’t had any other contact. Why is she doing this?
A tearful Delores closes her laptop and moves to the living room.
INT. DELORES LIVING ROOM – NIGHT
Delores leaves the laptop on the island and retreats to the living room. She curls up on the sofa with her wine.
Kendra tries to console Delores.
KENDRA
Well, she won’t be able to get to you now.
Delores sits staring off into the distance. Kendra snaps her fingers in her face.
KENDRA (CONT’D)
What are you thinking?
DELORES
What did I do to deserve this? I merely responded to a gentle, kind man. At least that’s what I thought.
KENDRA
You did, but you can’t shut down.
Delores’ cell rings. She looks at the display, and it’s James.
She sends the call to voicemail.
KENDRA
Who was that?
DELORES
James.
KENDRA
Why did you answer? Girl, check the message and call him back.
Delores looks at Kendra for a moment and then at her phone as she receives a text message from James.
Message reads: Good evening Delores, I didn’t want to disturb you, but you said you’d go to the play with me tomorrow. I’d like to pick you up around 6:00 p.m. Does that work for you?
DELORES
I forgot we’re supposed to go to a play tomorrow night. I’m not going.
KENDRA
Call him, text him, whatever, but do one of them and let him know you’ll be ready.
INT. DELORES’ KITCHEN – NIGHT
Delores puts her phone down and returns to her laptop in the kitchen.
KENDRA (CONT’D)
What are you doing? Delores let it go.
Delores logs on to the site and immediately sees an audio message waiting. Kendra is looking over her shoulder.
KENDRA (CONT’D)
Don’t!
Delores searches for the link to terminate her membership and executes it.
DELORES
I wasn’t.
KENDRA
Good. Here’s your phone, now send James the message.
Delores looks at Kendra, knowing she is not going to give up. She laughs and takes the phone.
Kendra watches her type, grabs her belongings, and heads out the door.
KENDRA
See you tomorrow.
INT. THEATER LOBBY – NIGHT
Delores and James greeted several of the counselors, NATALIE EDWARDS, RHONDA GATES, AND BARRY MIMS, who were a part of the Young Camp.
Micheal Lee and his wife, CAROL, walk up and stands next to them. James shakes his hand gives Carol a hug.
JAMES
Good evening, all. Great to see you, Michael. You know Delores and the Young Camp Crew.
MICHAEL
Yes, hello, Delores. This is my wife, Carol.
DELORES
Hello, nice to meet you, Carol.
BARRY
What’s up, man? Great to see you both.
RHONDA
Hey, you two.
NATALIE
Good evening.
DELORES
Great to see you all as well. This was an outstanding performance.
All agree and start to call out different moments.
JAMES
That was my favorite scene. We are going to say good night.
James takes Delores’ hand.
JAMES
How about coffee and a little dessert?
DELORES
Sounds good.
JAMES
Michael, would you and Carol like to join us? We’re heading to Ms. Chriss Bakes Coffee and Dessert Bar.
CAROL
We’d love to. I heard that place is deletable, but Michael has an early morning meeting, and we’re going to go home.
MICHAEL
She’s right. Delores, it was a pleasure seeing you. You two enjoy.
James continues holding her hand and leads her through the crowd.
INT. COFFEE SHOP – EVENING
Delores and James are seated sipping coffee at Ms. Chriss Bakes Coffee and Dessert Bar. The WAITRESS walks up to take their order.
JAMES
I hope you like this place. I’ve had the strawberry pound cake, and it’s amazing.
DELORES
I saw that on the menu and the Peach Glazed Pound Cake, but the brownies look good as well.
WAITRESS
May I take your order?
DELORES
I’ll have a Chocolate Ganache Brownie.
JAMES
I’ll take the Peanut Butter Blondie.
DELORES
I’d also like to have a half dozen strawberry shortbread cookies to go. James, I’ll pay for those separately.
JAMES
Nonsense.
(To the Waitress)
Please put everything on my bill.
WAITRESS
I’ll be right back with your order.
DELORES
This is a lovely place. I’ll definitely come back.
JAMES
So, I’m happy you’ve recovered from the camping. I was looking forward to seeing you again without all the other people around. Did Mauri enjoy herself?
DELORES
Yes, she did. Mauri is trying to plan another trip. Thank you for including her.
JAMES
She’s a lovely young lady. I was happy to have her there to assist. The girls in her class loved her. I have a set of thank you cards from all of them for her. It’s in the car.
The waitress returns with their orders on a rolling cart with two pots of coffee.
WAITRESS
Here you are, Chocolate Ganache and Peanut Butter Blondie. I’ll place these pots of coffee here; the red top is decaf.
The waitress places everything, including their to-go order, extra napkins, water, and coffee.
DELORES
Good food and excellent service. I have to make sure I tell everyone about Ms. Chriss Bakes Coffee and Dessert Bar.
JAMES
I’d love to share some of the many hidden gems I’ve found around Los Angeles with you. Tell me what foods you like, and we can check them out.
Delores paused before responding, remembering how sharing everything she liked with a guy first didn’t play out very well.
DELORES
Tell you what, I’ll trust you to figure out the best places to explore.
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Subject line: Jennifer Williams – Act 2 TP – Midpoint
1. “What I learned doing this assignment is…?”
· I learned that it’s never too late to move events around. With this lesson, I’m moving/shifting some things from Scene 3 to Scene 4 Midpoint to have a better flow for the story.
2. Outline your Key Scene 4: The Midpoint.
• Midpoint Turning Point:
INT. DELORES’ HOME – NIGHT
· Delores sits to contemplate her next move before she exits the website.
· Delores receives a call from James immediately after this incident, and she blows him off.
· Kendra convinces her to go on a date.
· Delores terminates her account.
INT. THEATER LOBBY – NIGHT
· Enjoys the company of James, attends a stage play, and they become incredibly close.
INT. COFFEE SHOP – EVENING
· Conversation with James after play.
3. Write the Midpoint scene.
BEGINNING
INT. DELORES’ HOME – NIGHT
Delores sits staring off into the distance. Kendra snaps her fingers in her face.
KENDRA
What are you thinking?
DELORES
What did I do to deserve this? I merely responded to a gentle, kind man. At least that’s what I thought.
KENDRA
You did, but you can’t shut down.
Delores’ cell rings. She looks at the display, and it’s James.
She sends the call to voicemail.
KENDRA
Who was that?
DELORES
James.
KENDRA
Why did you answer? Girl, check the message and call him back.
Delores looks at Kendra for a moment and then at her phone as she receives a text message from James.
Message reads: Good evening Delores, I didn’t want to disturb you, but you said you’d go to the play with me tomorrow. I’d like to pick you up around 6:00 p.m. Does that work for you?
DELORES
I forgot we’re supposed to go to a play tomorrow night. I’m not going.
KENDRA
Call him, text him, whatever, but do one of them and let him know you’ll be ready.
INT. DELORES’ KITCHEN – NIGHT
Delores puts her phone down and returns to her laptop in the kitchen.
KENDRA (CONT’D)
What are you doing? Delores let it go.
Delores logs on to the site and immediately sees an audio message waiting. Kendra is looking over her shoulder.
KENDRA (CONT’D)
Don’t!
Delores searches for the link to terminate her membership and executes it.
DELORES
I wasn’t.
KENDRA
Good. Here’s your phone, now send James the message.
Delores looks at Kendra, knowing she is not going to give up. She laughs and takes the phone.
Kendra watches her type, grabs her belongings, and heads out the door.
KENDRA
See you tomorrow.
MIDDLE
INT. THEATER LOBBY – NIGHT
Delores and James greeted several of the counselors, NATALIE EDWARDS, RHONDA GATES, AND BARRY MIMS, who were a part of the Young Camp.
JAMES
Good evening all.
BARRY
What’s up, man? Great to see you both.
RHONDA
Hey, you two.
NATALIE
Good evening.
DELORES
Great to see you all as well. This was an outstanding performance.
All agree and start to call out different moments.
JAMES
That was my favorite scene. We are going to say good night.
James takes Delores’ hand. How about coffee and a little dessert?
DELORES
Sounds good.
James continues holding her hand and leads her through the crowd.
END
INT. COFFEE SHOP – EVENING
Delores and James are seated sipping coffee at Ms. Chriss Bakes Coffee and Dessert Bar. The WAITRESS walks up to take their order.
JAMES
I hope you like this place. I’ve had the strawberry pound cake, and it’s amazing.
DELORES
I saw that on the menu and the Peach Glazed Pound Cake, but the brownies look good as well.
WAITRESS
May I take your order?
DELORES
I’ll have a Chocolate Ganache Brownie.
JAMES
I’ll take the Peanut Butter Blondie.
DELORES
I’d also like to have a half dozen strawberry shortbread cookies to go. James, I’ll pay for those separately.
JAMES
Nonsense.
(To the Waitress)
Please put everything on my bill.
WAITRESS
I’ll be right back with your order.
DELORES
This is a lovely place. I’ll definitely come back.
JAMES
So, I’m happy you’ve recovered from the camping. I was looking forward to seeing you again without all the other people around. Did Mauri enjoy herself?
DELORES
Yes, she did. Mauri is trying to plan another trip. Thank you for including her.
JAMES
She’s a lovely young lady. I was happy to have her there to assist. The girls in her class loved her. I have a set of thank you cards from all of them for her. It’s in the car.
The waitress returns with their orders on a rolling cart with two pots of coffee.
WAITRESS
Here you are, Chocolate Ganache and Peanut Butter Blondie. I’ll place these pots of coffee here; the red top is decaf.
The waitress places everything, including their to-go order, extra napkins, water, and coffee.
DELORES
Good food and excellent service. I have to make sure I tell everyone about Ms. Chriss Bakes Coffee and Dessert Bar.
JAMES
I’d love to share some of the many hidden gems I’ve found around Los Angeles with you. Tell me what foods you like, and we can check them out.
Delores paused before responding, remembering how sharing everything she liked with a guy first didn’t play out very well.
DELORES
Tell you what, I’ll trust you to figure out the best places to explore.
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Subject line: Jennifer Williams – Act 2 Middle Scenes
1. “What I learned doing this assignment is…?”
· The learning curve continues to reinforce the use of the Beat Sheet and Outlining to be a great tool for the writer to breakdown the essential parts of the script.
2. Outline Key Scenes 2 & 3.
KEY SCENE 2
INT. DELORES HOME – NIGHT
· Delores gives in to Kendra’s suggestion of seeing James.
· Delores agrees to assist James with Young Camp.
· Delores gets Mauri to come along.
EXT. YOUNG CAMP – DAY
· Delores attempts to let her guard down.
· Delores interacts with camp counselors and James.
EXT. THEATER LOBBY – NIGHT
· Enjoys the company of James, attends a stage play, and they become incredibly close.
INT. COFFEE SHOP – EVENING
· Conversation with James after play
KEY SCENE 3
INT. DELORES’ HOME – NIGHT
· Delores goes online to the book lover’s online group, checks the people online, and responds to questions on critiques.
· She sits to contemplate her next move before she exits the website.
· Delores terminates her account.
3. Write Key Scene 2: Protagonist takes on a plan and executes it.
KEY SCENE 2
BEGINNING
INT. DELORES HOME – NIGHT
Mauri, Delores, and Kendra are together for a movie night.
MAURI
It’s two against one Mom; you have to watch the romantic comedy. We’re tired of the murder mysteries you always choose.
DELORES
Your movie is so unrealistic. I’m just saying.
KENDRA
Suck it up. You’re just mad they haven’t written the script for your life.
They all laugh. The doorbell rings, and Mauri goes to answer it.
VICKI LYNN, 19, follows behind Mauri into the living room.
VICKI LYNN
Hi, Mrs. Chaney. Hi Perkins. I hope I’m not interrupting.
Kendra waves.
DELORES
Hello Vicki, welcome to movie night. The more, the merrier.
MAURI
Sorry, guys. I forgot Vicki, and I have a project to complete. We’ll be up in my room.
DELORES
All right, your loss.
The girls head upstairs. Kendra brings the popcorn to the sofa and places it between them, and Delores pours two glasses of wine.
KENDRA
Okay, spill. I want to know about your lunch date with James.
DELORES
It was nothing. I told you we just discussed the camp.
KENDRA
So, you’re going.
DELORES
Mauri and I are going.
Kendra gives her the side-eye and turns up the volume on the movie.
MIDDLE
EXT. MALIBU CREEK STATE PARK – DAY
Two buses pull into Malibu Creek State Park. The doors open, and a huge gathering of excited young people and their chaperones file out.
Delores and Mauri get off and retrieve their duffle bags, followed by James.
MAURI
Mom, this place is gorgeous. I can’t wait to hike up to the M.A.S.H. site and take pictures.
DELORES
There’s a schedule, Honey, and you’ll have to wait and follow the leaders’ directions.
JAMES
Mauri, don’t worry; that’s the first activity on the itinerary. We also have a trail ride scheduled. Can you ride?
MAURI
Awesome. Yes, I can. Thank you so much for allowing me to attend with my Mom.
JAMES
You’re welcome. We’re happy to have you in our Jr. Counselors Group.
James helped Delores and Mauri pitch their tent.
BEGIN MONTAGE
-Delores and Mauri sit around the campfire with James close as they make s’mores.
-Mauri works in Mess Tent for Breakfast and enjoys interacting with other counselors
-Group arrives at M.A.S.H site, and Mauri, Delores, and James take pictures at all the landmarks.
-Delores leads a group of campers on a trail ride. They explore the rock formations.
-The day ends around the campfire with singing.
END MONTAGE
END
EXT. YOUNG CAMP – DAY
James and Delores take an early morning hike on their last day of camp.
JAMES
Delores, I can’t thank you enough for assisting me with the camp.
DELORES
No thanks needed. I enjoyed it. I especially enjoyed seeing Mauri so involved and happy.
JAMES
Yes, I think I have a new friend. She’s a lovely young lady.
DELORES
Thank you, I think so.
James stops them by the lake, and they take in the view. He takes advantage of their alone time, moves closer to her, and takes her hand. To his surprise, she allows it.
JAMES
I hope you don’t mind, but I had the cook pack our breakfast.
DELORES
Good thinking. I starving after the hike up here.
James grabs the blanket from the backpack and lays out the breakfast. They sit and eat, enjoying the warmth of the sun and stunning views.
DELORES
This is the second time you’ve provided me with a feast in the wilderness. Is this your hook, Mr. Price?
JAMES
That all depends; is it working?
Delores grins, picks up her juice, and touches his in a toast.
4. Write Key Scene 3: Not only does their plan fail, but…
KEY SCENE 3
BEGINNING
INT. DELORES’ HOME – NIGHT
Delores sits on the sofa, opens her laptop, and ventures into the Book Lover’s Group.
Kendra comes downstairs from assisting Mauri with her project, flops down next to Delores, and catches her on the site.
KENDRA
I thought you agreed not to go into the group anymore?
DELORES
I’m checking the new book list. I also wanted to upload a couple of critiques I completed.
KENDRA
You’re looking for Lyle.
DELORES
No, I’m not.
KENDRA
I see you. You have the ‘Who’s Online’ list open. You don’t need that for critiques.
All of a sudden, a private message bubble appears. Delores freezes because she can only see the last name, Collins.
MIDDLE
INT. DELORES KITCHEN ISLAND – NIGHT
Kendra gets up, heads to the kitchen, grabs two glasses and pours them some wine.
Delores picks up the laptop and follows Kendra into the kitchen.
KENDRA (Cont’d)
Are you going to respond? Maybe he’s ready to talk.
Delores clicks on the bubble, and an audio message appears. She pushes play. A woman’s voice is heard.
AUDIO MESSAGE
You still looking for my husband? I told you, we’re back together. You’d be wise to go about your business!
Delores was stunned. She quickly exited the group.
KENDRA
OMG! Delores, she is a stalker!
DELORES
This is over for me. I’m not going to deal with her. I don’t even know this woman. I only spoke to her that night and haven’t had any other contact. Why is she doing this?
A tearful Delores terminated her membership to the group and closed her laptop.
END
INT. DELORES LIVING ROOM – NIGHT
Delores leaves the laptop on the island and retreats to the living room. She curls up on the sofa with her wine.
Kendra tries to console Delores.
KENDRA
Well, she won’t be able to get to you now.
NOTE: Consider Delores receiving a telephone call from James immediately after this incident, and she blows him off in her state of mind. Maybe they have a date, and she doesn’t show; doesn’t answer the door &/or call.
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Subject line: Jennifer Williams – Act 2 Reaction to TP 1
1. What I learned doing this assignment is…?”
· I learned that what happens in Act 1 must be in the proper sequence or Act 2 can’t proceed as it should to move the story forward with the character reacting to the turning point.
2. Using your Beat Sheet, outline Key Scene 1.
BEAT SHEET
Act 2:
• New plan:
· Delores retreats to old ways, spending late days in the office.
· Unbeknownst to Delores, Cindy posted photos on the Internet that made it seem like she had reconciled with her Lyle, Ex-husband.
· Delores decides to move on from Lyle.
· Kendra talks Delores into going out with her James.
3. Write the “Reaction to the Turning Point” scene.
BEGINNING
INT. DELORES HOME – DAY
Delores and Mauri have breakfast before starting their day.
DELORES
Mauri, I might be late coming home today.
MAURI
Mom, you said you were going to start looking out for yourself and not working late.
DELORES
I know but I have lots to take care of since I returned from vacation.
INT. DELORES’ OFFICE – DAY
Everyone in her department has left for the day. Delores is on her computer.
Delores returns to occupying her time online, but it doesn’t serve her. Searches for Lyle online.
MIDDLE
INT. DELORES HOME – NIGHT
Delores gets home from work and sees Mauri has gone to bed. She grabs some fruit from the refrigetaor and goes to her laptop. Delores calls Kendra to share what she found online.
DELORES
Hey Kendra, sorry to call so late, but I had to share this with someone.
KENDRA
It’s fine, I’m up. What’s so urgent.
DELORES
I searched online and found a new post with pictures of Lyle, and I guess this is Cindy together at an event.
KENDRA
I thought you were going to stop looking. Let it go, Delores, you’re making yourself miserable.
DELORES
I know you’re right, but…
KENDRA
But nothing. You need to get some sleep; we have an early day tomorrow.
DELORES
I’m letting go. Go night, Kendra.
END
INT. GYM – DAY
Delores slowly comes out of the funk she’s been under and joins Mauri and Kendra as they prepare to go to the gym; she has a different attitude.
DELORES
I’m ready for our bike race today.
MAURI
It’s about time, but you’re still going to lose.
KENDRA
We’ll see about that I’m feeling energized this morning.
They finish their work out and Delores has scheduled them for the sauna.
MAURI
Mom, sorry, but I have to leave. I’ll take an Uber to class. See you all later.
Delores and Kendra give her a hug and then head for the sauna.
INT. GYM SAUNA – DAY
They find themselves alone in the sauna, which is perfect for Delores.
KENDRA
Spill girl. What’s up? You are usually in a hurry to get to your office.
DELORES
Nothing, I just want to take some time to cool down.
KENDRA
You’re talking to me. It’s that guy right? James? You’re avoiding him.
DELORES
I can’t avoid him; we work for the same place, but I don’t have to see him first thing when I get in. He always meets me at the elevator, whether it’s flowers, pastries, coffee, or something.
KENDRA
And what’s wrong with that? He’s showing you he’s interested.
DELORES
I know, but it’s a lot.
KENDRA
Delores, James showed you long before Lyle he was interested and you said it was too soon after Trevor’s death. Now, Lyle has turned out wrong. James is still here.
DELORES
I know.
KENDRA
To me, James was and is the relationship you can commit. Think about it.
DELORES
I will. Let’s go so we can both get to work.
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Subject line: Jennifer Williams – Finished Act 1
1. “What I learned doing this assignment is…?”
· What I learned doing this assignment is how easy it was to complete Act 1 and see the holes in the story. I was able to see also if a character was lost or needed in the scene. I’m continuing to see the sequence of the scenes as the story unfolds.
2. Outline any other scenes left to write in Act 1.
3. Write a 20% draft of those scenes.
4. With those scenes done, do a quick read of Act 1 and add/improve anything you’d like. No wordsmithing!
ACT 1
• OPENING:
FADE IN:
INT. CHURCH – DAY
In the church’s vestibule, DELORES SELENÁE CHANEY, 40s, is distressed as she prepares to walk down the aisle. PAUL SMITH, 60s, a debonaire gentleman who exudes confidence and style, Delores’ father, takes her to the side to determine their next move.
INT. CHURCH – DAY
With tears in her eyes, Paul sees his daughter in distress.
PAUL
Baby Girl, if you have doubts, I can call this wedding off.
DELORES
No, Dad, I don’t have doubts. I just remember the first time and never thought I would do this again.
INT. CHURCH – DAY
KENDRA PERKINS, 40s, Delores’ best friend and Maid of Honor, enters the lobby with MAURI CHANEY, 19, preparing to march into the church.
Kendra notices Mr. Smith uses his handkerchief to dab Delores’ eyes. She quietly walks over to them.
KENDRA
Girl, what’s going on? We can end this now if you want.
DELORES
You sound just like Daddy. No, I’m fine.
Mr. Smith and Kendra exchange a look.
INT. CHURCH – DAY
The church doors open, and the music begins to play; Mauri walks down the aisle.
Kendra takes her place and follows.
Paul and Delores step up, and the music stops. The congregation turns toward the altar, but we don’t see the groom.
TITLE CARD: ONE YEAR EARLIER
INT. DELORES HOME – DAY
Delores waits for Mauri to come downstairs so they can go to the gym. She stares at the picture of herself and her husband, TREVOR CHANEY, who passed away, on the mantle.
DELORES
Mauri, your aunt will be here soon. Don’t take too long.
The doorbell rings, and Kendra, her best friend, enters.
Based on the look on Delores’ face, Kendra can tell she is thinking of her late husband. Kendra tries to assure her that since it’s been more than a year since his passing it’s all right to move on with her life.
END
INT. GYM – DAY
Delores, Mauri, and Kendra enter the gym, passing several workout areas, and a man attempts to talk with Delores. Delores speaks but ignores his advance. Kendra calls her on it. The three work out and, after 90 minutes, end their workout. Kendra has set up a not-so-chance meeting with NICK OLIVER, 40s. Nick invites Delores for coffee afterward, but she politely declines, citing a work meeting.
BEGINNING
INT. DELORES’ OFFICE – DAY
Delores gets to work, and her Co-Worker, JAMES PRICE, 40s, Chief Operations Officer, who has been trying to get to know her on a non-work level, creates a reason for them to have lunch together.
EXT. HALLWAY – DAY
James is standing in the hallway on his cell phone.
JAMES
I’m actually outside your office. May I come in?
INT. DELORES’ OFFICE – DAY
Delores picks of her phone to hear James on the other end. She tries to get out of lunch.
DELORES
James you know I have so many things to take care of, can I get a rain check?
JAMES
I’ll make it quick: I want to discuss the Young Entrepreneurs Retreat with you.
James reminds her of the Young Retreat she assisted him with and lets her know he wants to discuss the upcoming event.
He also reminds her of the times in the past they spent together.
Delores feels things going further than she’s ready for.
DELORES
That’s great, and I want to participate, but let’s table this until later.
She turns her attention to her computer to indicate something came up.
makes an excuse and gets out of lunch.
DELORES (CONT’D)
I just received a message from the Chief’s secretary. I’ll have to make it another time.
Delores stands and walks around her desk to the door.
James leaves feeling rejected but still hopeful.
INT. DELORES’ OFFICE – DAY
Delores is in the office late and meets up with LYLE COLLINS, 40s, the online gentleman she’s been communicating with for several months, in an online specialty book lover’s room, and they engage in delightful banter.
INT. DELORES’ OFFICE – DAY
Totally out of character, Lyle convinces her to meet him for dinner since he is in Los Angeles for the evening. They exchange personal information via email.
INT. RESTAURANT – NIGHT
James has the waiter bring champagne.
Delores questions the occasion for the champagne, and he lets her know that it is because they are finally sharing more than just online communication.
INT. GYM – DAY
Delores is unusually giddy at the gym. Mauri tells her she has not seen her smile like that in a long time. Kendra pulls her to the side and tells her she wants to know details about dinner.
INT. DELORES’ OFFICE – DAY
It’s finally the end of the day, and Delores cleans her desk, preparing for her phone time with Lyle. In this conversation, Lyle invites Delores to Seattle for the vacation of her life. He tells her to just pack, and he’ll handle all the details. Delores places a red circle around the date on the calendar.
INT. DELORES OFFICE – DAY
A week has passed and the date on the calendar is in red.
Chaos in the office, but she tries to ignore it.
James pays her a visit, and she cuts it short and leaves work early.
INT. SALON – DAY
Delores finally leaves the office and goes to the salon getting ready for the trip.
INT. VICTORIA’S SECRET STORE – DAY
Delores goes on a spending spree, purchasing the right garments to enhance her trip.
INT. DELORES’ HOUSE – DAY
Kendra meets her at the house to make sure she gets off all right and takes Mauri to her grandmother’s house.
KENDRA
So, what’s the reason you’re stayng so long?
DELORES
I told you I’ve applied for a few jobs in that area, and I’m going to set up the interviews. This will be a great move for me.
KENDRA
That’s what you told Mauri; she even knows that’s a lie. Are you staying with Lyle or in a hotel?
DELORES
Straight to the point. Yes, I’m staying with Lyle. I’ll be fine. He’s safe.
KENDRA
Delores, I met him, and yes, he seems like a good guy, but you need to send me all the details. We need to know where you are for no other reason in case we need you here.
Kendra pulls out her phone and Delores texts her all the details.
Mauri comes downstairs, hugs and kisses her mother, and then she and Kendra leave.
Delores cell phone rings, it’s Lyle.
They discuss her arrival.
Establishing shot of Seattle skyline and a view of the Pugent Sound.
Lyle’s office in downtown Seattle has a view of the Space Needle.
INT. LYLE’S OUTER OFFICE SEATTLE – DAY
CINDY COLLINS, 30s, Lyle’s ex-wife and former model/actress, enters the office with their son, MATTHEW COLLINS, 7, while CLARA LATHAM, the Office Manager, is seated at her desk answering a call.
Ms. Latham tries to stop her; she overhears part of the conversation that LYLE COLLINS, 40s, is having with Selenáe.
NT. LYLE’S OFFICE SEATTLE – DAY
CLARA is seated at her desk, answering a call when CINDY and MATTHEW enter the office.
Clara jumps up to stop her from entering Lyle’s office.
CINDY
Get out of my way.
Cindy yells, pushes through the door, dragging Matthew.
Lyle ends his call before she is heard by Selenáe.
Matthew runs and jumps into his father’s arms. Cindy begins to question Lyle about who he was speaking with.
CINDY (CONT’D)
Who was that you’re rushing off the phone? Your new girlfriend?
LYLE
Hey Bud! I’ve missed you. Come on, let’s see what we can find in the break room.
Lyle avoids Cindy’s questioning and leaves the room with Matthew.
INT. LYLE’S OFFICE SEATTLE – DAY
Cindy walks around the desk, sees the website on the computer, and looks at the paper on his desk where she sees doodles with Selenáe’s screenname, the printed email with her email address and phone number, as well as Lyle’s plans for a vacation for the two of them. She hears him returning and quickly moves back in front of the desk.
LYLE
Why are you here Cindy? This is your two weeks and I deposited the funds already.
CINDY
Matthew wanted to see his Dad.
LYLE
Well, I have to get back to work.
CINDY
I’m sure you do. Give your Dad a hug, Sweetie we have to go.
MATTHEW
Bye Daddy.
CINDY
(Sotto)
I’ll have to check on that work.
EXT. LYLE’S HOME – DAY
Delores arrives and is taken aback by the beautiful landscaping. They had many talks about gardens. The LIMO DRIVER, escorts her to the door with her bags.
DELORES
This looks like something out of my House and Garden magazine.
Lyle comes out of the house and greets Delores with a bear hug.
LYLE
I’m so happy you’re here. I have so many plans for us.
DELORES
Your yard is gorgeous.
LYLE
I wanted it to be what you liked.
INT. LYLE’S HOME – DAY
Delores entered the foyer and was totally mesmerized. Vaulted ceilings, staircase leading to second floor visible landing, and open concept kitchen.
DELORES
Lyle this is amazing. I can see from the front door to the back deck.
LYLE
I guess you can.
Lyle was pleased with himself.
INT. KITCHEN ISLAND – NIGHT
Lyle prepared dinner and they ate at the island on Delores insistence.
EXT. TERRACE – DAY
Lyle served Selenae breakfast on the terrace the next morning. He reviewed there itinerary.
DELORES
The weather is a little cooler than I expected.
LYLE
I’ll see if I can get my assistant Tina to assist you if you need to shop for warmer clothes before we set out on our adventure.
BEGIN MONTAGE:
-Tina takes Delores shopping
-Lyle packs a go bag.
-They arrive at Oswego Hotel in Victoria, Canada
-Tour the Botanic Gardens
-Have Queens Tea
-Return to Lyle’s Condo in the Pugent Sound
END MONTAGE
INT. LYLE’S CONDO – DAY
Delores was astonished because the condo was a miniature version of the house. After a few days of exploring Seattle together, Lyle serves Selenáe breakfast in bed.
DELORES
A girl could get used to this.
LYLE
That’s my plan.
DELORES
So you’re saying you’d do this every day?
LYLE
Not everyday but enough that you know you’re special.
Lyle’s phone rings, and he takes the call in the other room.
Lyle leaves Selenáe at his home while he goes out to handle unexpected business.
Delores receives a telephone call from Lyle while he’s on his way.
To her surprise he expresses his excitement over their physical relationship, rather than professing his undying love.
INT. LYLE’S CONDO – DAY
Delores Selenáe starts to pack her things, not sure she could handle being there when Lyle returns. The telephone next to her rings, and she answers without thinking.
DELORES
Hello.
CINDY
Hello. Tina, is that you? Where’s Lyle?
DELORES
No, this is not Tina. I’m sorry, Lyle stepped out. May I take a message?
Delores realizes she has made a mistake by answering as soon as she hears the woman’s voice.
CINDY
Who is this?
DLEORES
I’m a friend of Lyle’s. Would you like to leave a message for him?
CINDY
Oh, you’re a friend with permission to answer his phone? Well! This is Cindy, his wife!
DELORES
Oh, you’re his ex-wife. Well. I’ll let him know you called.
CINDY
Oh no, Dear! You got it all wrong. I’ll only be his ex- for a few more weeks. He didn’t tell you we were reconciling? I’m sorry. Maybe he was going to mention it after he slept with you! He likes to get in all he can before we officially return to our holy matrimony.
Delores felt a sharp pain and grabbed her stomach. Attempts to compose herself.
DELORES
No. No, he never mentioned your reconciliation. However, as I stated, I am just a friend; we don’t sleep together.
CINDY
Whatever you say, dear. Anyway, I’ll call him back later. You have a nice visit, friend!
Delores hangs up the phone.
Cindy looks at the phone and starts to laugh.
INT. LYLE’S HOME – NIGHT
Delores calls for a taxi to the airport, and she leaves Lyle’s home with just a note on his phone.
Lyle returns home to find Selenáe has left. He gets a phone call from Cindy. They argue after he learns what she has done.
INT. LYLE’S HOME – NIGHT
Lyle calls Selenáe, leaves a voicemail, and texts her to no avail. He receives a call from Cindy and learns what transpired between her and Selenáe.
EXT./INT. LYLE’S CAR – NIGHT
Lyle takes off for the airport to try and stop Selenáe.
EXT./INT. LYLE’S CAR – NIGHT
Lyle calls Karen to share that he plans to propose to Selenáe, but is involved in an accident.
INT. DELORES’ HOME – NIGHT
Ignoring the messages from Lyle, after crying all the way home on the two-hour flight and the car ride home, she decides to be alone, not contacting Mauri, due to her state of mind.
INT. GYM – DAY
Delores tries to work out with Mauri and Kendra as usual but finds it difficult.
Kendra tries to snap her out of the fog she’s in, but it doesn’t work.
INT. JAMES’ OFFICE – DAY
James decides he needs to be more aggressive with his pursuit of Delores and elicits the guidance of Michael. James’ fraternity brother, MICHAEL LEE, 40s, meets him for lunch. Michael tells him to drop the business angle and to show her his passion, romance her.
MONTH LATER…
INT. GYM – DAY
Delores, Kendra, and Mauri continue their workout routine. A month has passed, but Delores has not heard from Lyle since his message the night she left. However, James has begun enthusiastically pursuing her. Receives a delivery of yellow roses from James.
INT. DELORES’ HOME – DAY
Kendra comes to the house at Delores’ request and shares the highlights of her trip to Seattle and that he’ll be reconciling per his ex-wife. Delores tells Kendra she’s done with getting her heart broken. Kendra first asks if she had met the ex-wife or if she saw her at all. She then asks if there were any signs of the woman being there or evidence of her in the house. Delores thought for a second but dismissed that things were probably hidden. Then Kendra asks about the roses. Kendra reminds her that she and James have always been the relationship she should commit.
INT. DELORES’ OFFICE – NIGHT
Delores retreats to old ways, spending late days in the office.
INT. DELORES HOME – NIGHT
Delores returns to occupying her time online, but it doesn’t serve her.
Unbeknownst to Delores, Cindy posted photos on the Internet that made it seem like she had reconciled with her Lyle, Ex-husband.
Kendra talks Delores into going out with her James.
Delores decides to move on from Lyle.
END ACT 1
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Subject line: Jennifer Williams – Turning Point 1 Scenes
1. “What I learned doing this assignment is…?”
· What I learned doing this assignment is to honestly recognize the connection between the inciting incident and the turning point. In addition, understand how important it is to outline your ideas first and then break them down using beginning, middle, and end sections; this way, you see the scenes unfold. Most importantly, I learned that this method allows you to see what sequence of events works and what doesn’t. I can quickly move scenes and/or change them.
2. Outline your Act 1 Turning Point.
ACT 1
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>TURNING POINT
BEGINNING
INT. LYLE’S HOME – NIGHT
Lyle tries to contact Selenáe. He learns of Cindy’s interference.
MIDDLE
EXT./INT. LYLE’S CAR – NIGHT
Lyle goes to the airport.
END
EXT./INT. LYLE’S CAR – NIGHT
Lyle contacts Karen to share his plans.
BEGINNING
INT. DELORES’ HOME – NIGHT
Ignores the messages from Lyle and cries all the way home.
MIDDLE
INT. GYM – DAY
MONTH LATER…
Delores, Kendra, and Mauri continue their workout routine. Delores has not heard from Lyle, but James makes his interest known.
END
INT. DELORES’ HOME – NIGHT
Delores confesses to Kendra she’s been reaching out to Lyle. Kendra reminds her James is there for her.
3. Write your Act 1 Turning Point.
BEGINNING
INT. LYLE’S HOME – NIGHT
Lyle calls Selenáe, leaves a voicemail, and texts her to no avail. He receives a call from Cindy and learns what transpired between her and Selenáe.
MIDDLE
EXT./INT. LYLE’S CAR – NIGHT
Lyle takes off for the airport to try and stop Selenáe.
END
EXT./INT. LYLE’S CAR – NIGHT
Lyle calls Karen to share that he plans to propose to Selenáe, but is involved in an accident.
BEGINNING
INT. DELORES’ HOME – NIGHT
Ignoring the messages from Lyle, after crying all the way home on the two-hour flight and the car ride home, she decides to be alone, not contacting Mauri, due to her state of mind.
MIDDLE
INT. GYM – DAY
MONTH LATER…
Delores, Kendra, and Mauri continue their workout routine. A month has passed, but Delores has not heard from Lyle since his message the night she left. However, James has begun enthusiastically pursuing her.
END
INT. DELORES’ HOME – NIGHT
Delores confesses to Kendra that she has tried contacting Lyle but has not responded. Kendra reminds her that she and James have always been the relationship she should commit.
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Subject line: Jennifer Williams – Inciting Incident
1. “What I learned doing this assignment is…?”
· I learned the importance of using this process to organize your story and ensure things are happening in a proper sequence that moves the story forward and draws the audience in to follow along with the characters.
2. Outline Key Scenes 2 & 3 for Act 1.
ACT 1
• OPENING:
BEGINNING
FADE IN:
INT. CHURCH – DAY
In the church’s vestibule, DELORES SELENÁE CHANEY, 40s, is distressed as she prepares to walk down the aisle. PAUL SMITH, 60s, a debonaire gentleman who exudes confidence and style, Delores’ father, takes her to the side to determine their next move.
MIDDLE
INT. CHURCH – DAY
KENDRA PERKINS, 40s, Delores’ best friend and Maid of Honor, enters the lobby with MAURI CHANEY, 19, preparing to march into the church. Kendra notices Mr. Smith uses his handkerchief to dab Delores’ eyes. She quietly walks over to her to tell her it’s not too late to call it off.
END
INT. CHURCH – DAY
The church doors open, and the music begins to play; Mauri walks down the aisle, followed by Kendra. Paul and Delores step up, and the music stops. The congregation turns toward the altar, but we don’t know the groom.
BEGINNING
TITLE CARD: ONE YEAR EARLIER
INT. DELORES HOME – DAY
Delores waits for Mauri to come downstairs so they can go to the gym. She stares at the picture of herself and her husband, TREVOR CHANEY, who passed away, on the mantle. The doorbell rings, and Kendra, her best friend, enters.
MIDDLE
Based on the look on Delores’ face, Kendra can tell she is thinking of her late husband. Kendra tries to assure her that since it’s been more than a year since his passing it’s all right to move on with her life.
END
INT. GYM – DAY
Delores, Mauri, and Kendra enter the gym, passing several workout areas, and a man attempts to talk with Delores. Delores speaks but ignores his advance. Kendra calls her on it. The three work out and, after 90 minutes, end their workout. Kendra has set up a not-so-chance meeting with NICK OLIVER, 40s. Nick invites Delores for coffee afterward, but she politely declines, citing a work meeting.
BEGINNING
INT. DELORES’ OFFICE – DAY
Delores gets to work, and her Co-Worker, JAMES PRICE, 40s, Chief Operations Officer, who has been trying to get to know her on a non-work level, creates a reason for them to have lunch together. She accepts the invitation but aat the last minute declines.
MIDDLE
INT. DELORES’ OFFICE – DAY
Delores is in the office late and meets up with LYLE COLLINS, 40s, the online gentleman she’s been communicating with for several months, in an online specialty book lover’s room, and they engage in delightful banter.
END
INT. DELORES’ OFFICE – DAY
Totally out of character, Lyle convinces her to meet him for dinner since he is in Los Angeles for the evening. They exchange personal information via email.
ANTAGONIST INTRODUCTION
BEGINNING
INT. LYLE’S OFFICE SEATTLE – DAY
CINDY COLLINS, 30s, Lyle’s ex-wife and former model/actress, enters the office with their son, MATTHEW COLLINS, 7, while CLARA LATHAM, the Office Manager, tries to stop her; she overhears part of the conversation that LYLE COLLINS, 40s, is having with Selenáe.
MIDDLE
INT. LYLE’S OFFICE SEATTLE – DAY
Cindy yells at Clara and pushes through the door, dragging Matthew. Lyle ends his call before she is heard by Selenáe. Matthew runs and jumps into his father’s arms. Cindy begins to question Lyle about who he was speaking with.
Lyle avoids Cindy’s questioning by leaving the room with Matthew to get him a snack from their breakroom.
END
INT. LYLE’S OFFICE SEATTLE – DAY
Cindy walks around the desk, sees the website on the computer, and looks at the paper on his desk where she sees doodles with Selenáe’s screenname, Selenáe, the printed email with her email address and phone number, as well as Lyle’s plans for a vacation for the two of them. She hears him returning and quickly moves back in front of the desk.
INCITING INCIDENT
BEGINNING
INT. LYLE’S HOME – DAY
After a few days of exploring Seattle together, Lyle serves Selenáe breakfast in bed. Lyle leaves Selenáe at his home while he goes out to handle unexpected business.
MIDDLE
INT. LYLE’S HOME – DAY
Delores’ phone indicator goes off, showing a new text message. The message just states he’s lying. Cindy turns up the harassment with a telephone call to the house, and Selenáe answers, thinking it is Lyle, only to hear Cindy’s voice. She tells Delores that she is reconciling with Lyle.
END
INT. LYLE’S HOME – NIGHT
Delores calls for a taxi to the airport, and she leaves Lyle’s home with just a note on his phone. Lyle returns home to find Selenáe has left. He gets a phone call from Cindy. They argue after he learns what she has done.
BEGINNING
INT. JAMES’ OFFICE – DAY
James decides he needs to be more aggressive with his pursuit of Delores and elicits the guidance of Michael. James’ fraternity brother, MICHAEL LEE, 40s, meets him for lunch. Michael tells him to drop the business angle and to show her his passion, romance her.
MIDDLE
INT. DELORES’ HOME – DAY
Delores arrives home and listens to the messages left on her phone by Cindy and deletes them. Receives a delivery of yellow roses from James.
END
INT. DELORES’ HOME – DAY
Kendra comes to the house at Delores’ request and shares the highlights of her trip to Seattle and the fact that he’ll be reconciling per his ex-wife. Delores tells Kendra she’s done with getting her heart broken. Kendra ask about the roses.
3. Write your Inciting Incident scene.
INCITING INCIDENT SCENE
INT. LYLE’S HOME – NIGHT
Delores Selenáe starts to pack her things, wondering what is taking Lyle so long; when the telephone rings, she answers without thinking.
DELORES
Hello.
CINDY
Hello. Tina, is that you? Where’s Lyle?
DELORES
No, this is not Tina. I’m sorry, Lyle stepped out. May I take a message?
Delores realizes she has made a mistake by answering as soon as she hears the woman’s voice.
CINDY
Who is this?
DLEORES
I’m a friend of Lyle’s. Would you like to leave a message for him?
CIINDY
Oh, you’re a friend with permission to answer his phone? Well! This is Cindy, his wife!
DELORES
Oh, you’re his ex-wife. Well. I’ll let him know you called.
CINDY
Oh no, Dear! You got it all wrong. I’ll only be his ex- for a few more weeks. He didn’t tell you we were reconciling? I’m sorry. Maybe he was going to mention it after he slept with you! He likes to get in all he can before we officially return to our holy matrimony.
Delores felt a sharp pain and grabbed her stomach. Attempts to compose herself.
DELORES
No. No, he never mentioned your reconciliation. However, as I stated, I am just a friend; we don’t sleep together.
CINDY
Whatever you say, dear. Anyway, I’ll call him back later. You have a nice visit, friend!
Delores hangs up the phone.
Cindy looks at the phone and starts to laugh.
4. Write the scene for the Reaction to the Inciting Incident.
BEGINNING
INT. LYLE’S HOME – NIGHT
Delores calls for a taxi to the airport, and she leaves Lyle’s home with just a note on his phone. Lyle returns home to find Selenáe has left. He gets a phone call from Cindy. They argue after he learns what she has done.
MIDDLE
INT. DELORES’ HOME – DAY
Delores arrives home and listens to the messages left on her phone by Cindy and deletes them. Receives a delivery of yellow roses from James.
END
INT. DELORES’ HOME – DAY
Kendra comes to the house
at Delores’ request and shares the highlights of her trip to Seattle and the
fact that he’ll be reconciling per his ex-wife. Delores tells Kendra she’s done
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Subject line: Jennifer Williams – Act 1: Opening Scenes
1. “What I learned doing this assignment is…?”
· I learned how to break down a scene to make sure it has a beginning, middle, and end with a twist.
2. Go to your Beat Sheet and find the opening scene and a second lead character introduction. Create a simple outline those scenes for those two scenes.
3. Write your Opening scene that introduces a lead character, either your Protagonist or Antagonist.
4. Write the scene that introduces the other lead character.
• OPENING SCENE:
BEGINNING
FADE IN:
INT. CHURCH – DAY
In the church’s vestibule, DELORES SELENÁE CHANEY, 40s, is distressed as she prepares to walk down the aisle. PAUL SMITH, 60s, a debonaire gentleman who exudes confidence and style, Delores’ father, takes her to the side to determine their next move.
MIDDLE
INT. CHURCH – DAY
KENDRA PERKINS, 40s, Delores’ best friend and Maid of Honor, enters the lobby with MAURI CHANEY, 19, preparing to march into the church. Kendra notices Mr. Smith uses his handkerchief to dab Delores’ eyes. She quietly walks over to her to tell her it’s not too late to call it off.
END
INT. CHURCH – DAY
The church doors open, and the music begins to play; Mauri walks down the aisle, followed by Kendra. Paul and Delores step up, and the music stops. The congregation turns toward the altar, but we don’t know the groom.
BEGINNING
TITLE CARD: ONE YEAR EARLIER
INT. DELORES HOME – DAY
Delores waits for Mauri to come downstairs so they can go to the gym. She stares at the picture of herself and her husband, TREVOR CHANEY, who passed away, on the mantle. The doorbell rings, and Kendra, her best friend, enters.
MIDDLE
Based on the look on Delores’ face, Kendra can tell she is thinking of her late husband. Kendra tries to assure her that since it’s been more than a year since his passing it’s all right to move on with her life.
END
INT. GYM – DAY
Delores, Mauri, and Kendra enter the gym, passing several workout areas, and a man attempts to talk with Delores. Delores speaks but ignores his advance. Kendra calls her on it. The three work out and, after 90 minutes, end their workout. Kendra has set up a not-so-chance meeting with NICK OLIVER, 40s. Nick invites Delores for coffee afterward, but she politely declines, citing a work meeting.
BEGINNING
INT. DELORES’ OFFICE – DAY
Delores gets to work, and her Co-Worker, JAMES PRICE, 40s, Chief Operations Officer, who has been trying to get to know her on a non-work level, creates a reason for them to have lunch together. She accepts the invitation but makes excuses to cut the lunch short.
MIDDLE
INT. DELORES’ OFFICE – DAY
Delores is in the office late and meets up with LYLE COLLINS, 40s, the online gentleman she’s been communicating with for several months, in an online specialty book lover’s room, and they engage in delightful banter.
END
INT. DELORES’ OFFICE – DAY
Totally out of character, Lyle convinces her to meet him for dinner since he is in Los Angeles for the evening. They exchange personal information via email.
ANTAGONIST INTRODUCTION
BEGINNING
INT. LYLE’S OFFICE SEATTLE – DAY
CINDY COLLINS, 30s, Lyle’s ex-wife, former model/actress, enters the office with their son, MATTHEW COLLINS, 7, while CLARA LATHAM, the Office Manager, tries to stop her; she overhears part of the conversation that LYLE COLLINS, 40s, is having with Selenae.
MIDDLE
INT. LYLE’S OFFICE SEATTLE – DAY
Cindy yells at Clara and pushes through the door, dragging Matthew. Lyle ends his call before she is heard by Selenáe. Matthew runs and jumps into his father’s arms. Cindy begins to question Lyle about who he was speaking with.
Lyle avoids Cindy’s questioning by leaving the room with Matthew to get him a snack from their breakroom.
END
INT. LYLE’S OFFICE SEATTLE – DAY
Cindy walks around the desk, sees the website on the computer, and looks at the paper on his desk where she sees doodles with Selenáe’s screenname, Selenáe, the printed email with her email address and phone number, as well as Lyle’s plans for a vacation for the two of them. She hears him returning and quickly moves back in front of the desk.
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Subject line: Jennifer Williams – Beat Sheet Draft 2
1. “What I learned doing this assignment is…?”
· I learned with this process how to see holes in the story, make it more straightforward, and ensure each character is fulfilling their purpose in the story.
2. Use the High-Speed Writing Rules as you do today’s assignment.
• Rule 1: Understand writing in drafts.
• Rule 2: Choose speed over quality for EARLY drafts.
• Rule 3: Allow yourself to start (and continue) without all the answers.
• Rule 4: Use empowering self-talk. Cheer yourself on.
• Rule 5: Give yourself freedom to write without criticism.
• Rule 6: Keep moving. Don’t allow yourself to ever stall out.
• Rule 7: if it doesn’t come to you, give it to your creative mind to process.
3. Do Pass 1: Interweave theme throughout the beat sheet.
4. Do Pass 2 : Build in the Antagonist Journey.
Main Characters:
Protagonist – Delores Selenae; Antagonist – Cindy; BFF – Kendra; Internet Gentleman – Lyle; Co-Worker – James; Daughter – Mauri; Lyle’s Sister – Karen Stevens; Lyle’s Executive Secretary – Clara Latham; Lyle’s Son – Matthew Collins
Act 1:
• Opening:
INT: CHURCH – DAY
· Delores is in a wedding gown in the church’s vestibule, waiting with her father for the doors to open and walk down the aisle.
INT. SEATTLE HOSPITAL ROOM – DAY
· A nurse enters a hospital room with life support equipment and the sounds of the machines. She checks the monitors and then exits.
INT: CHURCH – DAY
· The music begins to play, the doors open, they step up, and the music stops.
· The congregation turns toward the altar, but we don’t know the groom.
· End scene
TITLE CARD: ONE YEAR EARLIER
INT. DELORES HOME – DAY
· Delores waits for her daughter, Mauri, to come downstairs so they can go to the gym. She stares at the picture of herself and her husband on the mantle.
· The doorbell rings, and Kendra, her best friend, enters.
· Based on the look on her face, Kendra can tell Delores was thinking of her husband. Tries to assure her that since it’s been more than a year since his passing it’s all right to move on with her life.
INT. GYM – DAY
· Loud music plays as they enter the gym, which is usual, even in the early morning as it currently is.
· Delores, Mauri, and Kendra enter the gym, passing several workout areas, and a man attempts to talk with Delores.
· Delores speaks but ignores his advance.
· Kendra calls her on it. The three work out and, after 90 minutes, end their workout.
· Delores is sitting on a bench, lost in thought. Mauri realizes her mother has fallen into sad mode and is thinking of her husband, who passed away.
· Delores sends Mauri to another area in the gym while Kendra comes over to be a listening ear.
· Delores shares with Kendra her fears.
· Delores assures Mauri that she is happy in her current state.
· Delores learns Kendra has set up a not-so-chance meeting with a guy. He invites Delores for coffee afterward, but Delores politely declines, citing a work meeting.
INT. WORK OFFICE – DAY
· Delores gets to work, and her Co-Worker, James, who has been trying to get to know her on a non-work level, creates a reason for them to have lunch together.
· Delores is in the office late and meets up with Lyle, the online gentleman she’s been communicating with for several months, in an online specialty book lover’s room, and they engage in delightful banter.
· Totally out of character, Lyle convinces her to meet him for dinner.
· They exchange personal information via email.
INT. LYLE’S OFFICE SEATTLE – DAY
· Cindy Collins, Lyle’s ex-wife, enters the office with their son, Matthew, while Clara, the Office Manager, tries to stop her; she overhears part of the conversation.
· Cindy yells at Clara and pushes through the door, dragging Matthew.
· Lyle hangs up the phone before she is heard by Delores. Matthew runs and jumps into his father’s arms.
· Cindy begins to question Lyle about who he was speaking with.
· Lyle avoids Cindy’s questioning by leaving the room with Matthew to get him a snack from their breakroom.
· Cindy walks around the desk, sees the website on the computer, and looks at the paper on his desk where she sees doodles with Delores’ screenname, Selenae, the printed email with her email address and phone number, as well as, Lyle’s plans for a vacation for the two of them. She hears him returning and quickly moves back in front of the desk.
INT. DELORES’ HOME – NIGHT
· To Delores’ surprise, she’s excited but keeps it a secret from Mauri.
· Kendra arrives for their weekly book discussion before their actual meeting the next day, but Delores chooses to share information about her upcoming trip.
INT. SEATTLE MALL – DAY
· Delores and Kendra go to Victoria Secret to shop for items for the trip.
· They both leave the mall and head to the salon for pampering.
INT. LYLE’S OFFICE SEATTLE – DAY
Lyle makes arrangements to meet his business partner and takes a meeting regarding renovations to the house before Selenae’s arrival.
Lyle leaves the office.
Karen arrives at the office missing Lyle but converses with Clara, who then shares about Cindy’s behavior.
• Inciting Incident:
INT. CINDY’S CONDO SEATTLE – DAY
· Cindy calls Selenae, but does not receive an answer and leaves a voicemail that Selenae should be careful about the men she meets; they have secrets, but she does not call her by name nor leave her name.
EXT. OUTSIDE SEATAC AIRPORT – DAY
· Once Delores committed to a trip away with Lyle; sees the missed call notification on her phone but doesn’t recognize the number. Listens to the voicemail but convinces herself it is a wrong number.
· Meets limo driver, who takes her bags, and then she sees Lyle.
EXT. BOTANIC GARDEN – DAY
· Touring the gardens with Lyle.
· Stop for lunch and drinks at the outdoor café overlooking the garden.
INT. HOTEL ROOM – NIGHT
· Cindy sends more text messages and voicemails to intimidate Selenae.
• Turning Point:
INT. LYLE’S HOME SEATTLE – DAY
· Delores is feeling great after Lyle fixing her breakfast in bed.
· Lyle leaves Selenae at his home while he goes out to handle unexpected business.
· Delores’ phone indicator goes off, showing a new text message. This message and Lyle leaving the house make her believe there are secrets; this feeds her insecurities.
· Cindy turns up the harassment with a telephone call to the house, and Selenae answers without thinking.
INT. LYLE’S HOME – NIGHT
· Delores calls for a taxi to the airport, and she leaves Lyle’s home with just a note on his phone.
· Lyle returns home to find Selenae has left. He gets a phone call from Cindy. They argue after he learns what she has done.
· Lyle takes off to the airport in a rainstorm. Calls Karen on his way.
· Lyle looks at the special gift he purchased and looks down quickly but hits a deep poodle and then is hit by another car. Karen hears the accident over the phone.
Act 2:
• New plan:
INT. DELORES’ OFFICE – NIGHT
· Delores retreats to old ways, spending late days in the office.
INT. DELORES HOME – NIGHT
· Delores returns to occupying her time online, but it doesn’t serve her.
· Unbeknownst to Delores, Cindy posted photos on the Internet that made it seem like she had reconciled with her Lyle, Ex-husband.
· Kendra talks Delores into going out with her James.
· Delores decides to move on from Lyle.
• Plan in action:
EXT. YOUNG CAMP – DAY
· Delores attempts to let her guard down.
· Delores interacts with camp counselors and James.
EXT. THEATER LOBBY – NIGHT
· Enjoys the company of James, attends a stage play, and they become incredibly close.
INT. COFFEE SHOP – EVENING
· Conversation with James after play.
• Midpoint Turning Point:
INT. DELORES’ HOME – NIGHT
· Delores goes online to the book lover’s room, checks the people online, and responds to questions on critiques.
· She sits to contemplate her next move before she exits the website.
· Delores terminates her account.
Act 3:
• Rethink everything:
INT. GYM – DAY
· After realizing Lyle would not return, she decides to move on.
· Delores has a push in the gym in a competitive stationary bike race with Mauri and Kendra.
INT. DELORES’ HOME – DAY
· Delores has a hard-to-hard with her mother, Kendra, and receives urging from Mauri to start getting herself back on the dating scene.
· Delores understands that she can’t control unexpected medical issues.
· Delores stopped working late.
• New plan:
EXT. RESTAURANT – DAY
· Delores starts to step up her social agenda.
· Delores has lunch with a person Kendra introduced her to.
· Dates a few people but finds that James is her best choice.
INT. DELORES’ OFFICE – DAY
· Changes her mind about moving out of the state for a new career.
· Begins to see James exclusively.
• Turning Point: Huge failure / Major shift:
INT. COMPANY AWARDS DINNER – NIGHT
· Delores overhears James’ best friend discussing their past womanizing, but she believes it is James’ current status.
· Feels betrayed again and retreats.
INT. DELORES’ OFFICE – DAY
· Delores attempts to contact Lyle one last time only to encounter Cindy.
Act 4:
• Climax/Ultimate expression of the conflict:
INT. LYLE’S OFFICE SEATTLE – DAY
· Lyle’s sister confronts Cindy.
· We learn that Lyle is in the hospital and has not reconciled with Cindy.
· Lyle’s family tries to contact Delores but has no luck.
EXT. OUTDOOR CAFÉ – DAY
· James learns of the misunderstanding and clears it up with Delores. James assures her that he is only interested in her.
• Resolution:
TITLE CARD: Six Months Later:
INT. PARK – DAY
· Delores and James start to see each other out in the open.
INT. DELORES DINING ROOM – NIGHT
· He made his presence and intentions known to Mauri and Kendra.
· James asks Delores’ father for her hand in marriage.
INT. RESTAURANT – NIGHT
· James proposes to Delores.
INT. SEATTLE HOSPITAL ROOM – DAY
· We see a hospital bed with Lyle in it, in a coma.
· Lyle’s sister finds out who Delores is and tries to send her a message; however, the Protagonist has disabled her account.
INT: CHURCH – DAY
· Delores is in a wedding gown in the church’s vestibule, waiting with her father for the doors to open for her to walk down the aisle.
· The music begins to play, the doors open, they step up, and the music stops.
· We see the congregation, and James comes into view, standing next to the minister.
· Delores appears happy on her wedding day.
THE END.
FADE TO BLACK.
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Subject line: Jennifer Williams – High-Speed Beat Sheet
1. What I learned doing this assignment is…?”
· I learned that combining the previous lessons with this lesson has allowed me to be more flexible and released in the creative process to tell the story in my head.
2. Decide to intentionally use the High-Speed Writing Rules throughout the rest of this program.
• Rule 1: Understand writing in drafts.
• Rule 2: Choose speed over quality for EARLY drafts.
• Rule 3: Allow yourself to start (and continue) without all the answers.
• Rule 4: Use empowering self-talk. Cheer yourself on.
• Rule 5: Give yourself freedom to write without criticism.
• Rule 6: Keep moving. Don’t allow yourself to ever stall out.
• Rule 7: if it doesn’t come to you, give it to your creative mind to process.
3. Use the High Speed Writing Rules as you create your Beat Sheet.
• Pass 1: Organize your Structure and Transformational Events.
• Pass 2: Add slug lines.
• Pass 3: Add placeholders and additional scenes.
Main Characters:
Protagonist – Delores; Antagonist – Cindy; BFF – Kendra; Internet Gentleman – Lyle; Co-Worker – James; Daughter – Mauri
• Concept: After losing the love of her life, a middle-aged mother harbors a deep fear of never finding love again, but her world is turned upside down when her passionate fantasies lead her into a perilous love triangle.
• Main Conflict: Cindy is on a mission to ensure the relationship that Delores wants to work ends. She sends a barrage of threatening texts and phone calls to Delores. Cindy tries to make sure the memorable weekend getaway Lyle has planned ends as the trip to hell.
• Delores’ Old Ways:
1. Suffers from fear of unexpected loss.
2. Spends a lot of time alone.
3. Spends long days at work.
4. Resigns herself to seeking companionship on the Internet.
5. Never going out socially.
6. Never dates.
• Delores’ New Ways:
1. Learned to have a work-life balance.
2. Limits her Internet activity.
3. Overcomes fear of unexpected events in life.
4. Opened herself to attending more social activities.
5. Began dating.
Act 1:
• Opening:
INT: CHURCH – DAY
ü Delores is in a wedding gown in the church’s vestibule, waiting with her father for the doors to open for her to walk down the aisle.
INT. SEATTLE HOSPITAL ROOM – DAY
ü We see a hospital room with life support equipment and the sounds of the machines monitoring the patient.
INT: CHURCH – DAY
ü The music begins to play, the doors open, they step up, and the music stops.
ü The congregation turns toward the altar, but we don’t know the groom.
ü End scene
TITLE CARD: ONE YEAR EARLIER
INT. GYM – DAY
ü Delores is at the gym with her daughter, Mauri, and her BFF, Kendra, ending their workout.
ü Delores is sitting on a bench lost in thought. Mauri realizes her mother has fallen into sad mode and is thinking of her husband, who passed away.
ü Delores sends Mauri to another area in the gym while Kendra comes over to be a listening ear.
ü The Protagonist shares with BFF her fears.
ü The Protagonist assures her daughter that she is happy in her current state.
ü Delores learns Kendra has set up a not-so-chance meeting with a guy. He invites Delores for coffee afterward, but Delores politely declines, citing a work meeting.
INT. WORK OFFICE – DAY
ü Delores gets to work, and her Co-Worker, James, who has been trying to get to know her on a non-work level, creates a reason for them to have lunch together.
ü Delores is in the office late and meets up with Lyle, the online gentleman she’s been communicating with for several months, in an online specialty book lover’s room, and they engage in delightful banter.
ü Totally out of character, Lyle convinces her to meet him for dinner.
INT. DELORES’ HOME – NIGHT
ü They exchange personal information via email. To her surprise, she’s excited but keeps it a secret from her Kendra and Mauri.
• Inciting Incident:
EXT. OUTSIDE SEATAC AIRPORT – DAY
ü Once Delores committed to a trip away with Lyle.
EXT. BOTANIC GARDEN – DAY
ü Touring the gardens with Lyle.
INT. HOTEL ROOM – NIGHT
ü Cindy began sending text messages and voicemails to intimidate her.
• Turning Point:
INT. LYLE’S HOME SEATTLE – DAY
ü Delores takes the trip with Lyle only to learn that there are secrets that feed her insecurities.
ü Cindy turns up the harassment.
INT. DELORES’ OFFICE – NIGHT
ü Delores retreats to old ways, spending late days in the office.
Act 2:
• New plan:
INT. DELORES HOME – NIGHT
ü Delores returns to occupying her time online, but it doesn’t serve her.
ü Unbeknownst to Delores, Cindy posted photos on the Internet that made it seem like she had reconciled with her Lyle, Ex-husband.
ü Kendra talks Delores into going out with her James.
ü Delores decides to move on from Lyle.
• Plan in action:
EXT. YOUNG CAMP – DAY
ü Delores attempts to let her guard down.
ü Delores interacts with camp counselors and James.
EXT. THEATER LOBBY – NIGHT
ü Enjoys the company of James, attends a stage play, and they become incredibly close.
INT. COFFEE SHOP – EVENING
ü Conversation with James after play.
• Midpoint Turning Point:
INT. DELORES’ HOME – NIGHT
ü Delores goes online to the book lover’s room, checks the people online, and responds to questions on critiques.
ü She sits to contemplate her next move before she exits website.
ü Delores terminates her account.
Act 3:
• Rethink everything:
INT. GYM – DAY
ü After realizing Lyle would not return, she decides to move on.
ü Delores has a push in the gym in a competitive stationary bike race with Mauri and Kendra.
INT. DELORES’ HOME – DAY
ü Delores has a hard-to-hard with her mother, Kendra, and receives urging from Mauri to start getting herself back on the dating scene.
ü Delores understands that she can’t control unexpected medical issues.
ü Delores stopped working late.
• New plan:
EXT. RESTAURANT – DAY
ü Delores starts to step up her social agenda.
ü Delores has lunch with a person Kendra introduced her to.
ü Dates a few people but finds that James is her best choice.
INT. DELORES’ OFFICE – DAY
ü Changes her mind about moving out of the state for a new career.
ü Begins to see James exclusively.
• Turning Point: Huge failure / Major shift:
INT. COMPANY AWARDS DINNER – NIGHT
ü Delores overhears James’ best friend discussing their past womanizing, but she believes it is James’ current status.
ü Feels betrayed again and retreats.
INT. DELORES’ OFFICE – DAY
ü Delores attempts to contact Lyle one last time only to encounter Cindy.
Act 4:
• Climax/Ultimate expression of the conflict:
INT. LYLE’S OFFICE SEATTLE – DAY
ü Lyle’s sister confronts Cindy.
ü We learn that Lyle did not reconcile with Cindy, but is in the hospital.
ü Lyle’s family tries to contact Delores but has no luck.
EXT. OUTDOOR CAFÉ – DAY
ü James learns of the misunderstanding and clears it up with Delores. James assures her that he is only interested in her.
• Resolution:
TITLE CARD: Six Months Later:
INT. PARK – DAY
ü The Protagonist Co-worker and she started to see each other out in the open.
INT. DELORES DINING ROOM – NIGHT
ü He made his presence and intentions known to Mauri and Kendra.
ü James asks Delores’ father for her hand in marriage.
INT. RESTAURANT – NIGHT
ü James proposes to Delores.
INT. SEATTLE HOSPITAL ROOM – DAY
ü We see a hospital bed with Lyle in it, in a coma.
ü Lyle’s sister finds out who Delores is and tries to send her a message; however, the Protagonist has disabled her account.
INT: CHURCH – DAY
ü Delores is in a wedding gown in the church’s vestibule, waiting with her father for the doors to open for her to walk down the aisle.
ü The music begins to play, the doors open, they step up, and the music stops.
ü We see the congregation, and James comes into view, standing next to the minister.
ü Delores appears happy on her wedding day.
THE END.
FADE TO BLACK.
4. When you post this assignment, commit to the group that you will use these High-Speed Writing Rules to get your script done at record speed.
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Subject line: Jennifer Williams – Transformational Events
1. “What I learned doing this assignment is…?”
– This lesson showed me how to peer into the possible chain of events that can happen to the character taking them from the beginning of the journey to their final desired outcome.
2. Start with the Character Arc and the list of Old Ways and New Ways.
Arc Beginning: The Protagonist starts as a closed-off woman, hiding behind her job, unwilling to trust life or fall in love.
Arc Ending: Learns even with life’s uncertainty, she can live freely, trust life, and love again.
Old Ways:
· Suffers from fear of unexpected loss.
· Spends a lot of time alone.
· Spends long days at work.
· Resigns herself to seeking companionship on the Internet.
· Never going out socially.
· Never dates.
New Ways:
· Learned to have a work-life balance.
· Limits her Internet activity.
· Overcomes fear of unexpected events in life.
· Opened herself to attending more social activities.
· Began dating.
3. Make a list of 6 – 8 changes or steps that need to happen for that character to go from who they are in the beginning (Old Ways) to who they are in the ending (New Ways).
· The Protagonist understands that she can’t control unexpected medical issues.
· The Protagonist shares with BFF her fears.
· The Protagonist assures her daughter that she is happy in her current state.
· The Protagonist stops working late.
· The Protagonist plans a holiday getaway with Internet Gentleman.
· The Protagonist confronts the Antagonist and reclaims her life.
· The Protagonist moves forward.
· The Protagonist gets marries again.
4. Sequence the steps from easiest to most difficult. This will imply the journey the character takes.
· The Protagonist shares with BFF her fears.
· The Protagonist assures her daughter that she is happy in her current state.
· The Protagonist understands that she can’t control unexpected medical issues.
· The Protagonist stops working late.
· The Protagonist plans a holiday getaway with Internet Gentleman.
· The Protagonist confronts the Antagonist and reclaims her life.
· The Protagonist moves forward.
· The Protagonist marries again.
5. Brainstorm dramatic events or tests that could cause those changes for the character.
· The Protagonist’s BFF challenges her and sets her up on a blind date.
· Mother sets the Protagonist up on a blind date.
· The Protagonist is forced to move her online communications with the Internet Gentleman to face-to-face interactions.
· The Protagonist’s daughter takes her shopping and asks about her father and how she is moving forward. /they have a conversation about her not being around to assist her in activities because she’s always working late.
· The Protagonist finds her confidence and confronts the Antagonist.
· The Protagonist moves forward from the relationship she thought she wanted to see the real relationship in front of her.
· The Protagonist gives herself permission to relax and start to see the potential in a relationship with her Co-Worker.
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ASSIGNMENT
Subject: Jennifer Williams – 4 Act Transformational Structure
1. “What I learned doing this assignment is…?” I learned a different way to create an outline.
Create a first draft of your 4 Act Transformational Structure.
2. Give us the following:
• Concept: After losing the love of her life, a middle-aged mother harbors a deep fear of never finding love again, but her world is turned upside down when her passionate fantasies lead her into a perilous love triangle.
• Main Conflict: The Antagonist is on a mission to ensure the relationship the Protagonist wants to work ends. She sends a barrage of threatening texts and phone calls. Make sure the memorable weekend getaway ends as a trip to hell.
• Protagonist Old Ways:
1. Old Identity- Workaholic, spends long days at work.
2. Does not like being set up on dates.
3. Finds social life by communicating in online Special Groups.
• Protagonist New Ways:
1. Began changing her habits at work with more of a balance.
2. Gives in to dating and not just one person but two.
3. Fill in each of these with the answers you have right now.
Act 1:
• Opening:
ü Protagonist is at the gym with her daughter and BFF, ending their workout. BFF tries to introduce the Protagonist to a friend she made sure was at the gym simultaneously. He invites the Protagonist for coffee afterward, but she politely declines, citing a work meeting.
ü The Protagonist gets to work and her Co-Worker who has been trying to get to know her on a non-work level creates a reason for them to have lunch together.
ü The Protagonist is in the office late and meets up with the Online Gentleman she’s been communicating with for several months in an online specialty book lover’s room, and they engage in delightful banter.
ü Totally out of character, this man convinces her to meet him for dinner.
ü They exchange personal information via email. To her surprise, she’s excited but keeps it a secret from her BFF and daughter.
• Inciting Incident:
ü Once the Protagonist committed to a trip away with the gentleman online, the Antagonist began sending text messages and voicemails to intimidate her.
• Turning Point:
ü The Protagonist takes the trip with the Online Gentleman only to learn that there are secrets that feed her insecurities.
ü The Antagonist turns up the harassment.
ü The Protagonist retreats to old ways, spending late days in the office.
Act 2:
• New plan:
ü The Protagonist returns to occupying her time online, but it doesn’t serve her.
ü BFF talks her into going out with her Co-Worker.
ü Unbeknownst to the Protagonist, the Antagonist posted photos on the internet that made it seem like she had reconciled with her Ex-husband.
ü The Protagonist decides to move on from the gentleman online.
• Plan in action:
ü The Protagonist attempts to let her guard down.
ü Enjoys the company of her Co-Worker, and they become close.
• Midpoint Turning Point:
ü The Protagonist goes online to the book lover’s room, checks the people online, and responds to questions on critiques.
ü She sits to contemplate her next move before she exits.
ü The Protagonist terminates her account.
Act 3:
• Rethink everything:
ü After realizing the gentleman online would not return, she decided to move on.
ü The Protagonist has a hard-to-hard with her mother, BFF, and received urging from her daughter to start getting herself out into the dating scene.
• New plan:
ü The Protagonist starts to step up her social agenda.
ü Dates a few people but finds that her Co-Worker is her best choice.
ü Changes her mind about moving out of the state for a new career.
ü Begins to see her co-worker exclusively.
• Turning Point: Huge failure / Major shift:
ü The Protagonist overhears her Co-Worker’s best friend discussing their past womanizing, but she believes it is his current status.
ü Feels betrayed again and retreats.
ü The Protagonist attempts to contact the online gentleman one last time only to encounter the Antagonist.
Act 4:
• Climax/Ultimate expression of the conflict:
ü We learn that the Online Gentleman did not reconcile with his Ex-wife, but is in the hospital.
ü The Online Gentleman’s family is trying to contact the Protagonist but has no luck.
ü The Co-Worker learns of the misunderstanding and clears it up with the Protagonist. He assures her that he is only interested in her.
• Resolution:
ü Six Months Later:
ü The Protagonist Co-worker and she started to see each other out in the open.
ü He made his presence and intentions known to the Protagonist daughter and BFF.
ü The Co-worker proposes to the Protagonist.
ü The Protagonist is marrying her co-worker.
ü The Protagonist appears happy on her wedding day.
ü The Online Gentleman’s sister just finds out who the Protagonist is and tries to send her a message, however, the Protagonist has disabled that account.
ü Fade to Black.
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Jennifer Williams – Character Interviews
ASSIGNMENT
1. “What I learned doing this assignment is…?” – The use of the interview process is an excellent way to see your characters as three-dimensional. They will talk to you and share things you weren’t aware. This process also adds substance to the story and shows you areas of relatability to the audience.
2. Pull out the character profiles for your protagonist and antagonist.
3. Then, interview each character, knowing they will answer any questions you ask. As you interview them, allow them to tell you their experience.
PROTAGONIST
Tell me about yourself.
–- I just turned 40, so I guess you would consider me middle-aged. I’m a college graduate who completed my Master’s in Business Finance at USC. I’m a single Mom due to losing my husband to cancer. He was the love of my life. We went through high school and college together and made plans for a great life: raising our daughter, traveling, and opening our own business. We also had plans to have more children, but I had complications initially, but we were blessed with our daughter. We had just come to terms with trying again, going to a fertility clinic, or adopting. We went to get our physicals, and that’s when we found ourselves on a different path. We thought we had time. I work as a Marketing Director for a major corporation and learned there that I am capable of doing a lot more. I turned the department around and set them on the winning track. However, I’m not happy there, and I’m seeking other employment. I’ve also considered moving out of state, upstate Washington, as a matter of fact. I’ve also thought maybe this is a great time to open my business. Follow the dreams my husband and I had together.
Why do you think you were called
to this journey?— I believe it is the right time for me because I have much to consider when making changes in my life. My daughter has just graduated from high school and considering colleges, and I need to be that role model. If I can’t decide about my life, how will she know she can trust me when she needs to make a decision as a young adult. Why you? – I’ve endured so much that I know I’m the person to provide the insight required for everyone to understand what really happened.
You are up against .
-– Family and my best friend seem to think I need to start dating again. Even my daughter thinks that. They say I should get back out there; I don’t need to be alone. And then there’s this guy I work with inviting me out. I did go out with him on a lunch date and then once to dinner. I had a very nice time, but he’s not my husband. It was a distraction from what I need to focus on. We even had a great weekend chaperoning youth on a camping trip, and it reminded me of my daughter growing up. My husband and I were king and queen of volunteering parents for all the activities, and we managed to work it into our schedules. But I’m focused on my career and desire to start my business and get it going.
What is it about them that makes this journey even more difficult for you?
–- They are always trying to set me up. My mother tries to have me meet her friend’s sons and nephews. I try to be nice; I’m always nice and appease them, but I don’t want to. I think the choice I’m making now will please them, and they’ll be happy. It might not be the person I should or who I will be completely happy with, but I’ll be able to move forward with my life without them all butting in.
In order to survive or accomplish
this, you are going to have to step way outside of your box. What changes
do you expect to make and which of them will be the most difficult?-– I guess I will have to really consider the right person for my life. Truth be told, I am lonely at times. I miss having companionship, but when the man I thought I should be with turned out to have so much baggage, it put me in the same space. Maybe I felt for the wrong person. Maybe the other guy is who I should be with. So what, the one I wanted was interested in my dreams and desires to open my business and taught me things because he is a successful businessman, but that Ex-wife…Man, I don’t want to fight someone daily. They have a son together; that part doesn’t bother me. He’s a delightful young man, but that woman is unbearable. In fact, having another child to help raise was appealing, but the fights, name-calling, and threats were just too much to bear. So, maybe settling for the other guy won’t be so bad. Perhaps eventually, he’ll see that working for corporate America isn’t the only way to make a living. Having your own service-related business that can assist others in making it is not bad. I won’t hold that against him, and I can wait.
What habits or ways of thinking
do you think will be the most difficult to let go of?–- Possibly doing things for myself and not asking for help. Not depending on anyone else to obtain the things I need and want, including my career goals. I’m used to being alone. I keep a lot of my life to myself. I don’t even share some things with my bestie, but I don’t want my daughter to ever worry about me or how we will make it.
What fears, insecurities and
wounds have held you back?-– If I let someone else get too close, what guarantees do I have that I won’t lose them too soon. I don’t ever want to have that feeling again. It was hard. I felt so alone and helpless. I feel alone and helpless now sometimes.
What skills, background or
expertise makes you well-suited to face this conflict or antagonist?-– All the leadership classes and supervisor conflict, dealing with difficult employee training that I’ve had gives me some insight, but being a responsible adult trumps all the training. I can go toe-to-toe with her if I choose. My education far exceeds that phony celebrity act she tries to embody, and then there’s also my little-known ability; I have some street wisdom.
What are you hiding from the
other characters?-– I’m hiding my true feelings about being in a relationship. I don’t want them to know that I was hurt again by the loss of love by not following my convictions. What don’t you want them to know?
-– I want them to know that whether I’m in a relationship or not, I’ll be all right. I will be able to take care of myself and my daughter.
What do you think of ?
-– I want to believe that he did not set out to intentionally hurt me. We talked too much about things that mattered, but I don’t know why he didn’t feel he needed to explain at the end.
Tell me your side of this whole
conflict / story.-– I am not the problem in this situation. I value honesty and don’t believe the man I wanted to be with was completely honest about his situation. I had no idea he and his ex-wife were trying to reconcile. Once the Ex-wife shared the information, I could do nothing; they have a child. I believe you do everything for the best interest of your children and family. I also realized that just because something looks good, it is not necessarily good for you. I’ve learned that I need to seek counsel from qualified people to help me sort out my own needs and desires that work in my best interest. My decision to move in the opposite direction is justified. Understand she did not turn me away. I was willing to hear his side of the story but when he never called me back or reached out, I took his ghosting as he was just in it for the moment. Lesson learned.
What does it do for your life if
you succeed here?-– I can focus on what’s next and find happiness in a different situation. Some things will take a backseat, but I will not have to deal with as much conflict as the other case would have presented.
Ask any other questions about
their character profile that will help you.ANTAGONIST
Tell me about yourself.
–- I’m an actress and model who was on the way to supermodel status when I met my husband. He was a charmer and charmed me right into marriage. I think he was really excited that I was younger than him and showed him a good time that those stuffy, over-educated women he was used to dating, were not interested in. He was worth it; he had plenty of money, and I thought, well, we’ll travel a while, and then I’ll get back to the runway. Needless to say, that never happened. I was in college when I was discovered by a talent scout looking for talent for a New York Fashion Week SShow for an up-and-coming designer. It was me and a few other girls in my Sorority, so we thought it was great. After that show, I signed with a top agency in New York, traveled everywhere for a few years, and then met my husband. It only took six months before the honeymoon was over, at least for me, because I was pregnant. Don’t get me wrong, he was ecstatic and showered me with the best of everything. Our son was born and became the center of our world, but when he reached nine months I was ready to return to my career. I missed the limelight and the travel. I missed the stage and the applause. We disagreed on that fact. I also had to get my body back to runway shape. I need to be camera-ready, ready for stage and screen. Lately, I haven’t been able to get any good leads for jobs, my agent dropped me, and it’s his fault.
Having to do with this journey,
what are your strengths and weaknesses?-– My strengths are in my looks. I’m a 10 by all standards, and any agency will be lucky to have me on their roster. If I didn’t have to fight my husband constantly in court, I could start my career again.
Why are you committed to making
the Protagonist fail? Or for a relationship movie, why are you committed
to making them change?-– I can’t allow my ex-husband to get with the Protagonist because that would cut me out completely. I want him back. I had a good life. If I can’t work on the runway, stage, or screen, he needs to support me and ensure I can maintain that high-society lifestyle. If he’s with someone else, that limits the money I’ll have access to. Besides, I look better than her. He needs to be concerned About my well-being and not anyone else.
What do you get out of winning
this fight / succeeding in your plan / taking down your competition?-– I get my husband back and all his money for me. I return to my rightful status in his life. His family will accept me then, especially his sister. We know each other. We weren’t friends but had developed a respectful and working relationship. We were sometimes in some of the same circle due to my modeling career.
What drives you toward your
mission / agenda, even in the face of danger, ruin, or death?-– The most crucial thing in life is money. People will look up to me. My Ex-husband’s status in the community opens doors in all the right places, and I’ll be able to walk through them again. People will like me again. Also, have that big house and my Mercedes.
What secrets must you keep to
succeed?-– My Ex-husband can never find out that I lied to his new girlfriend about us getting back together to get her to leave him.
What other secrets do you keep out of fear / insecurity?
-– I love my son, but I didn’t want any children, at least not when I had him. I want to be free to live a carefree life for at least 10 more years.
Compared to other people like
you, what makes you special? -– I’m beautiful, confident, and don’t give
up easily. When I set my mind to something, I don’t give up until I get
what I want.What do you think of ?
— Everyone has finally gotten the message that I’m not to be messed with, and I desire to have the best of everything.
Tell me your side of this whole
conflict / story.-– My side of the story is that I’m the only Mrs. my Ex-husband needs in his life, and I should reap the benefits of the accumulation of wealth he has amassed. That other woman had no business trying to get in the middle. He might have been upset initially, but give him some time; he’ll come around, and our lives will be back where it left off. I think I was justified in what I told his little want-to-be girlfriend. I’m sure it helped in her moving on and leaving us to have a life together as it should be.
4. Add any new info to your Character Profiles and share with us what discovered about the characters.
-– I added quite a bit of new information. I learned that my Protagonist desires to open her own business and that she was being set up on dates by family and friends. I learned that the Antagonist is an actress, model, and younger than her Ex-husband. She’s all right about being a mother, but she really didn’t want to at this time.
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Jennifer Williams – Character Profile Part 2
ASSIGNMENT
1. What I learned doing this assignment is…?”
I learned to focus on the information that draws an audience’s interest in a character.
2. Fill in Part 2 of the character Profile for your two lead characters.
Protagonist
· What draws us to this character? She’s a loving, caring person who has been through the unthinkable and is trying to create a better life for herself and her daughter. You want her to find love in her life and not be alone.
· Traits: Determined, intelligent, caring, organized, kind.
· Subtext: Changes the subject and avoidance. Hides behind her work.
· Flaw: Insecure, does not trust her ability to love.
· Values: Honesty, confidence, and people who know what they want from life.
· Irony: She finds solace in internet conversations and becomes involved in a relationship she has been trying hard to avoid.
What makes this the right character for this role? What makes her right is the same thing that draws you to her: she’s kind and weathered a devastating loss in her life. She deserves to be loved and happy.
Antagonist
· What draws us to this character? She’s very good at being bad.
· Traits: Cruel, vengeful, desperate, selfish, unkind
· Subtext: Sarcarasm never gives a straight answer.
· Flaw: She is mean and has an abusive personality.
· Values: Being in control and manipulating others.
· Irony: She is a good mother and wants an everyday family life.
What makes this the right character for this role? She relishes all opportunities to hurt people to take advantage of them whenever possible.
3. Make any improvements you think of to your Part 1 profile and bring the two parts together. – I don’t see anything at this time.
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Jennifer Williams – Character Profiles Part 1
1. “What I learned doing this assignment is…?” I learned that using these prompts, step-by-step assists you in understanding the characters and what part of the puzzle they play.
SELECTING LEAD CHARACTERS:
2. Pick the type of role your Protagonist will play and give us a few sentences on how they will fulfill that role.
• Runner/Dreamer: The Protagonist is running away from anyone who tries to come close to her, pushing them away, all while dreaming about the life, love, and relationship she won’t allow to happen.
3. Pick the type of role your Antagonist will play and give us a few sentences on how they will fulfill that role.
• Villain: The Antagonist moves forward with lies and deceit to keep the Protagonist from experiencing her dreams.
4. What other characters might be necessary?
• Supporting characters: Two love interests, best friend, daughter, key business partner.
• Minor roles: Hairdresser, sister of love interest, office manager, mother.
• Background characters: Co-workers, office assistants, merchants, a limo driver, and dinner guests.
GENRE:
5. Pick your genre.
• Rom-Com
PART 1 OF CHARACTER PROFILES:
6. Fill in whatever answers come to you about your lead character profiles.
• Role in the story:
· The Protagonist runs away from the advances of one love interest, who is also a very interested co-worker. But her best friend tries to get her to persuade her to get involved. She sends a misdirect to her friend by meeting someone on the internet whom she thinks she’s only having discussions about careers and books, but he pursues her, determined to get closer.
· The Antagonist, is the ex-wife of the Internet love interest and learns of the existence of the Protagonist and finds ways to drive a wedge between them.
· The internet love interest finds the Protagonist one of the most exciting women he’s met and the complete opposite of his ex-wife. He decides he must do everything he can to win her love.
· The love interest, a co-worker, decides to turn up the heat and pursue the Protagonist with everything he can think of to woo her.
· The best friend is the Protagonist’s support, but she wants to push her out of the insecure space she’s inhabiting.
• Age range and Description:
· Female Protagonist, early 40s, smart with excellent leadership skills, but insecure about her body image (although fit), workaholic that finds escape in the anonymity of internet discussions.
· Female Antagonist, late 30s, high-maintenance model type who enjoys trying to make everyone as unhappy as she is.
· Male internet love interest, 40s, tall with a muscular build, business owner, who can be considered extremely handsome and wealthy with many unique skills.
· Male love interest, 40s, tall, more on the slender-side, fit, executive in the company, straight-laced nice guy, and could be considered a nerd.
· Best Friend, late 30s, adorable, perky, entrepreneur, event planner. An optimist who is up to date on all pop culture.
· Daughter, Young Adult, 19, beautiful young woman, mature for her age, smart, and ready to conquer the world.
PROTAGONIST
• Internal Journey:
· From being lost, insecure, and afraid to love to finding direction, being a confident role model for her daughter, and open to love.
• External Journey:
· From only working all the time to attending events and dating.
• Motivation:
· The fantasy life-style being played out on the internet becoming a reality.
• Wound:
· Her husband’s sudden death implies that she can’t control everything.
• Mission/Agenda:
· To live more confidently with love in her life and show her daughter that she can be happy.
• Secret:
· She had fallen in love with the internet love interest before anyone knew he was in her life.
• What makes them special?
· Her ability to function through the devasting loss of her husband while keeping her daughter on track and advancing in her career goals.
ANTAGONIST
• Internal Journey: Continuing in her selfish behavior.
• External Journey:
· Looks for ways to upset her ex-husband and the Protagonist through a series of lies and deceit.
• Motivation: To be supported by someone other than herself.
• Wound:
· Her inability to love herself due to growing up in a dysfunctional home environment.
• Mission/Agenda: To get her husband back.
• Secret: (Not yet identified)
• What makes them special? She has a son with her ex-husband.
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JENNIFER WILLIAMS – TRANSFORMATIONAL JOURNEY:
1. “What I learned doing this assignment is…?”
I learned that breaking down the story in this way allows me to keep the story front and center and see the objective of my main character and that it is a building step-by-step journey that everyone is taking together.
2. Who is your Hero and what is their Character Arc that represents a transformation?
Hero:
Protagonist, Delores Chaney, a widower and single parent
Character Arc
Arc Beginning: The protagonist starts as a closed-off woman, hiding behind her job, unwilling to trust life or fall in love.
Arc Ending: Learns even with life’s uncertainty, she can live freely, trust life, and love again.
•Internal Journey: From feeling unappreciated, unloved, and insecure to admired, loved, and confident.
•External Journey: From a lonely woman without options to an in-control woman with choices and determination.
3. What are the Old Ways and New Ways?
Old Ways: Being alone, never going out socially, not dating, workaholic.
New Ways: Learned to have a work-life balance, became a social butterfly, and began dating.
LOGLINES:
(1) After losing the love of her life to cancer, a now middle-aged woman struggles with being a good parent and her biggest fear of loving again and then finds herself in the middle of a love triangle.
(2) While struggling with raising a teenage daughter alone, a young woman tries to balance the climb up the corporate ladder but is distracted when she ends up in the middle of a love triangle; however, the fear of losing love again causes her to doubt herself.
(3) A young woman harbors a deep fear of ever loving again after losing the love of her life and ends up in the middle of a love triangle that takes a turn that feeds her anxiety.
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My name is Jennifer Williams.
I’ve written approximately eight scripts.
I hope to gain from this class the ability to take my writing to the next level and complete scripts faster.
What I feel is special and unique about me is that I’m a child of God and in love with the romance genre.
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Jennifer Williams
I agree to the terms of this release form.
GROUP RELEASE FORM
As a member of this group, I agree to the following:
1. That I will keep the processes, strategies, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class confidential, and that I will NOT share any of this program either privately, with a group, posting online, writing articles, through video, or computer programming, or in any other way that would make those processes, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class available to anyone who is not a member of this class.
2. That each writer’s work here is copyrighted, and that writer is the sole owner of that work. That includes this program, which is copyrighted by Hal Croasmun. I acknowledge that submission of an idea to this group constitutes a claim of and the recognition of ownership of that idea.
I will keep the other writer’s ideas and writing confidential and will not share this information with anyone without the express written permission of the writer/owner. I will not market or even discuss this information with anyone outside this group.
3. I also understand that many stories and ideas are similar and/or have common themes and from time to time, two or more people can independently and simultaneously generate the same concept or movie idea.
4. If I have an idea that is the same as or very similar to another group member’s idea, I’ll immediately contact Hal and present proof that I had this idea prior to the beginning of the class. If Hal deems them to be the same idea or close enough to cause harm to either party, he’ll request both parties to present another concept for the class.
5. If you don’t present proof to Hal that you have the same idea as another person, you agree that all ideas presented to this group are the sole ownership of the person who presented them, and you will not write or market another group member’s ideas.
6. Finally, I agree not to bring suit against anyone in this group for any reason, unless they use a substantial portion of my copyrighted work in a manner that is public and/or that prevents me from marketing my script by shopping it to production companies, agents, managers, actors, networks, studios or any other entertainment industry organizations or people.