I’m late with my final outline, but I am working on it. When you have yours, I’d love to do a swap. Let me know.

Debbie’s Scary as Hell Moments

I learned how to plan a scene’s progression. Although I had already written this scene, I will now rewrite it, adding a few things I didn’t do the first time.

EXT. RIVERBOAT PADDLE WHEEL – DAY

Horror Situation: Establishes an Atmosphere of Horror – A CREWMAN tasked to remove a strange seaweed from the… Read more

Debbie’s Horror Scare, Release and Creep.

I posted the same scene as my last lesson, with a little rewrite, because I realized that I had most of what this assignment is about in that. A added a scare and release at the very beginning. What I learned from this lesson is that if you are paying attention to all the lessons that came before,… Read more

Debbie’s Level 3 Horror Emotions

Wow, this was fun to write. I learned to take my time to build up to the three different emotions here and to lay in some groundwork that would pay off later in the scene. I don't think doing this is easy–it's not. It really takes intense focus. But it certainly is fun, especially if you love… Read more

Debbie’s Horror Emotions II

I had so much fun writing this scene because these are the emotions I like working with most. The scene comes after we've already seen some versions of the monster but know the entire thing. It has murdered an entire room of men and one of Lilith's dancing girls.

I learned to take my time to build suspense in… Read more

Debbie’s Horror Emotions

I learned to really pay attention to which emotions I'm evoking in my story, and where I'm failing. I chose to write the first scene (the prologue) as I think it displays the 3 emotions of this lesson. It was interesting to stop and thinking about the scene from the point of view of emotions and helped to build a… Read more

I know I’m late to the party, but if you’d like to swap scripts, please reach me at dls3001@msn.com

Debbie’s Readable Outline V.1

This outline still has some gaps. Cassius virtually disappears and I’ll have to address that. But the basic idea is here in a structure that I think works. But it really needs some fleshing out.
What do you… Read more

Debbie’s Character Journey

I learned how the journeys weave in and out of each others and how they generate the plot of the story.

Character Journey – Lillith
Character Intro
Lillith and her girls arrive at the Riverboat. Cassius welcomes them. Quinn ogles them and Lillith puts him in his place.
Denial
Lilith has a growing sense of… Read more

Debbie’s Monster Reveal Track

I learned to go even deeper into my monster to give her some depth and interesting behaviors that will lead to red herrings and real terror.

The Revenant Queen

Powers:
1. Drowning Aura – Creates an oppressive, supernatural force that makes breathing difficult, as if victims are underwater even when they… Read more

I really loved “Presence”, David. First of all, I loved the retro feel to the way it was filmed. I also like the twist on the ghost story. There were so many ways to interpret what the presence really is.